Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTXTC4G3PKFEY2ESE9M9FC8

Run Details

Model:
GPT-5.2
Duration:
1m 21s
Cost:
$0.051895
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The Raven’s Nest held its breath the way old rooms did, like the walls remembered every confession and waited for the next one. The green neon sign outside bled through the front window in a weak wash, painting the glass and the bottles in a sickly tint. Inside, amber light sat low over the bar top and caught in the framed photographs—grainy men in uniform, a bridge in winter, a woman with a cigarette and a look that dared anyone to ask questions. Maps clung to the walls in uneven grids, their corners curling where years of heat and damp had worked at the glue. Aurora wiped a ring of beer off the wood with a rag that had given up pretending it was clean. Her knuckles smelled of lemon and old gin. The late crowd hadn’t rolled in yet; Soho still stood in that lull where the streets outside sounded like distant cutlery and a bus sighing at a stop. Silas moved behind her like a quiet tide. The slight drag in his left leg marked him more than the limp itself—an old injury that made him place each foot with care, as if he refused to let pain rush him. He lifted a glass, checked it for lipstick or clouding, then set it down with the rest. “Your shift ended an hour ago,” his voice carried that calm weight that made people lower their shoulders without knowing why. Rory leaned her forearms on the bar and looked at the doorway, the empty stools, the mirror with its faint foxing at the edges. The bar smelled of malt and wood polish and something metallic that lived under the floorboards. “Couldn’t sleep,” her mouth twisted. “Figured I’d earn my keep.” Silas’s silver signet ring flashed once as he turned a page in the small ledger he kept behind the till. The ring looked wrong and right at the same time, like a relic that refused to age. “Sleep.” He closed the book. “You didn’t run all the way from Cardiff to collapse in Soho for my benefit.” The name hit like a knuckle against a bruise. Rory kept her face still and reached for another glass to dry, turning it in her hands. The glass squeaked under the cloth. “Cardiff didn’t chase me,” she muttered. “I walked.” Silas watched her a moment, then looked away first, granting her the small mercy of pretending it didn’t matter. He moved down the bar, checking the beer taps, pressing a thumb to the cold metal. The door opened. The bell above it gave a small, reluctant jingle, like it resented being useful. A gust of street air rolled in, carrying cigarette smoke and rain on pavement. Rory looked up without thinking. Habit did that; delivery work taught you to clock faces and hands, decide in a breath whether someone planned to buy food or take it. A woman stood in the doorway with her hood down, hair pinned back hard from her face. She wore a coat that looked expensive in a way that didn’t ask for attention. No dangling earrings, no bright scarf, no messy curls. Her make-up sat clean and sharp, the kind you applied with a steady hand and a mirror that didn’t lie. She held herself straight, chin set, eyes scanning the room as if she catalogued exits. Then her gaze found Rory, and the mask slipped—not far, just enough for recognition to show its teeth. Rory’s fingers tightened around the glass. The cloth fell from her hand and landed on the bar in a damp heap. “Eva?” Eva’s breath caught. Her eyes stayed on Rory as if Rory might vanish if she blinked. The door swung shut behind her, muffling the outside world. “Rory,” Eva’s voice sounded lower than Rory remembered, roughened at the edges like it had scraped along too many late nights. “Jesus. That’s you.” Rory stepped from behind the bar, knees stiff from standing too long. Her trainers squeaked on the floorboards. She stopped a pace away, close enough to smell Eva’s perfume—something clean, almost clinical, with a sharp note that cut through the bar’s stale sweetness. “It’s me.” Rory’s mouth felt strange around the words. “What are you doing here?” Eva’s eyes flicked down Rory’s clothes—black T-shirt, faded jeans, a small smear of lemon from the rag on her wrist—and back up to her face. “I could ask you the same.” Eva’s laugh came out short, no warmth in it. “You used to roll your eyes at places like this.” Rory glanced past Eva, out of instinct, as if Cardiff might stroll in behind her. The room stayed the same: empty stools, low music, Silas by the taps with the patience of a man who had watched wars start over less. “I live upstairs,” Rory’s voice came out flat. “I work here. Part-time.” Eva took a step forward, then stopped herself, like she’d started to reach for a hug and remembered she didn’t do that anymore. “You look…” Eva’s gaze held Rory’s face. “You look like you, but not.” Rory lifted her left wrist without meaning to, thumb rubbing over the small crescent scar near her pulse. She dropped her hand and folded her arms instead. “You look like someone else,” Rory answered. Eva’s mouth tightened. She glanced towards the booths, the dark corners, the places that offered privacy. Her eyes landed on the bookshelf at the back wall, stacked with old paperbacks and a few hardbacks that looked too pristine. She looked away again with a quickness that didn’t match casual surprise. Silas cleared his throat. The sound carried, subtle and pointed. He moved closer, his presence filling the space without crowding it. “Evening,” his tone stayed polite, but his eyes stayed on Eva’s hands. “Can I get you something?” Eva looked at him, assessed him in a blink—the limp, the ring, the posture that belonged to authority rather than hospitality. “Vodka. Neat.” Eva’s attention snapped back to Rory. “If that’s all right.” Rory stared for a beat, then nodded once. She moved behind the bar again because the familiar actions gave her something to hold. She grabbed the bottle, poured without measuring, slid the glass across. Her fingers left a faint print in the condensation. Eva took the drink and didn’t sip. She held it like a prop, something to do with her hands. Silas lingered, then turned and walked away, giving them space but not leaving them alone. Rory caught him watching their reflection in the mirror behind the shelves of bottles. Eva slid onto a barstool. Rory stood opposite her, hands flat on the wood, as if she braced for impact. “How did you find me?” Rory asked. Eva lifted one shoulder. “You kept your name.” Rory’s jaw clenched. “Not by choice.” Eva’s eyes sharpened. “Him?” Rory didn’t answer. The bar hummed with low music and the distant sound of glasses shifting as Silas cleaned. Outside, a car horn barked and then cut off. Eva’s grip tightened on the glass. The skin over her knuckles looked taut. “I looked for you,” Eva went on. “Not at first. I told myself you needed space. That you’d ring when you settled. That you’d send a stupid postcard with a cartoon London bus on it.” Rory looked at the vodka. Clear and hard in the glass, like it didn’t care who held it. “I didn’t want you in it.” Rory’s voice stayed steady. “Any of it.” Eva let out a sound that wasn’t quite a laugh. “You didn’t get to decide what I could handle.” Eva tipped the drink back and swallowed. She didn’t flinch. “You vanished. One day you were in lectures acting like the world’s dullest law student, and the next you were gone.” Rory’s throat tightened. “You told me to go.” Eva slammed the empty glass down with a crack that turned Silas’s head. “I told you to run because you turned up at my flat with a split lip and you kept insisting you’d walked into a cupboard.” Eva’s eyes shone, but the light in them looked like anger rather than tears. “I told you to go because you looked at me like you’d already decided you deserved it.” Rory’s hands curled around the edge of the bar. The wood pressed into her palms. She didn’t look away. “I didn’t deserve it,” Rory managed. “But I stayed. Again and again. That felt like choosing it.” Eva stared at her, then looked down at the bar, at the damp ring the glass left behind. “You used to argue with lecturers for sport,” Eva muttered. “You used to dismantle people with logic and that sharp tongue. Then you let some bloke—” Rory flinched. Eva’s words hit the air like thrown objects. “Don’t,” Rory cut in. Eva’s mouth snapped shut. Her jaw worked, a muscle jumping near her temple. Rory reached for the cloth again and wiped at a spot that didn’t exist. Her hands needed movement. Stillness left too much room. “What happened to you?” Rory asked, pushing the question across the bar. “Last time I saw you, you had purple hair and you stole a traffic cone and made it a hat.” Eva’s lips pressed into a line. She opened her handbag—structured, black, no scuffs—and pulled out a slim cigarette case. She flipped it open, paused when she noticed the no-smoking sign above the spirits, then closed it with a click and slid it back inside. “I stopped being funny.” Eva’s voice came out thin. “Funny didn’t pay rent.” Rory stared. “You were never broke.” Eva’s eyes flicked up, sharp. “I was never honest with you,” Eva replied. “Not about that.” Rory felt the words land, heavy as a coin dropped into a jar. She looked at Eva’s face again, searching for the old mischief, the softness around the eyes, the friend who slept on Rory’s bed after nights out and shared hangovers like they were sacred. Eva kept her posture stiff, spine straight against the stool, hands folded now on the bar as if she attended an interview. “You look like you’ve been coached,” Rory said before she could stop herself. Eva’s nostrils flared. “And you look like you’ve been hiding.” Rory’s mouth went dry. “I deliver dumplings for a living.” “Yu-Fei’s place,” Eva shot back without hesitation. Rory froze. “How do you know that?” Eva’s gaze held. “I asked questions.” Rory leaned forward, lowering her voice. “Eva, what are you doing?” Eva’s lips parted, then closed again. Her eyes moved to Silas, then back. She reached into her coat pocket and pulled out a small folded piece of paper—creased, handled too much. She slid it across the bar with two fingers. Rory didn’t touch it at first. The paper looked ordinary, but the way Eva offered it made it feel like a blade laid flat. “What’s that?” Rory asked. Eva’s voice dropped. “An address. And a time.” Rory’s pulse thudded in her wrist, right where the scar sat like a pale moon. “I don’t do errands for you,” Rory muttered. Eva’s face tightened, anger and something like fear wrestling under her skin. “I wouldn’t come here for nothing,” Eva pushed back. “I wouldn’t come here at all if I had a choice.” Rory’s eyes narrowed. “Choice. Since when did you lose choices?” Eva’s laugh came out again, short and hard, then she leaned closer over the bar. The scent of her perfume mixed with the old alcohol and made Rory’s stomach twist. “Since I grew up,” Eva snapped. “Since I stopped having you to cover my back.” Rory’s chest tightened. The old guilt stirred, hot and sour. She picked up the paper at last, the fold biting into her thumb. She didn’t open it yet. “You came all this way to drop a bit of paper?” Rory asked. Eva’s gaze flicked to Rory’s left wrist again, to the scar, then to Rory’s face. Something softened for a beat, a crack in the hard shell, and it hurt more than the anger. “I came all this way because I owed you,” Eva murmured. “And because I needed you.” Rory’s laugh held no humour. “You didn’t need me when I begged you to answer the phone.” Eva’s shoulders pulled in, then straightened again, as if she refused to let herself shrink. “I didn’t answer because I couldn’t.” Eva swallowed. “I had someone listening. I had people watching. I had—” Her mouth shut, her teeth pressing into her lower lip until it blanched. Silas’s limp drew closer. He stopped at Rory’s side, the smell of his aftershave faint under the bar’s stale air. “Rory,” his voice stayed mild, but his eyes held a warning. “Back room. Now.” Eva’s head turned, startled. Her gaze snapped towards the bookshelf again, recognition flashing across her face like a match strike. Rory didn’t move. She kept her eyes on Eva. “You brought something with you,” Rory’s voice went quiet. Eva’s throat worked. Her hands tightened on the bar. “I brought myself.” Rory’s fingers closed around the folded paper. The crease cut into her skin. Silas shifted his weight, the signet ring catching the light as he reached out and tapped the bar once, a small, sharp sound that carried. “Rory.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags34
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Eva’s attention snapped back [back]"
1"Eva pushed back [back]"
dialogueSentences74
tagDensity0.459
leniency0.919
rawRatio0.059
effectiveRatio0.054
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2218
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
70.69% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2218
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"weight"
count2
1
word"scanning"
count1
2
word"flicked"
count3
3
word"warmth"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count2
5
word"pristine"
count1
6
word"familiar"
count1
7
word"jaw clenched"
count1
8
word"stomach"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"scanning"
2"flicked"
3"warmth"
4"pulse"
5"pristine"
6"familiar"
7"jaw clenched"
8"stomach"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences166
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences166
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"started to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences205
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2205
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions23
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions118
wordCount1744
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity3.1
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity6.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Soho1
Rory54
Silas11
Eva49
Cardiff1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Rory"
3"Silas"
4"Eva"
places
0"Soho"
1"Cardiff"
globalScore0
windowScore0
59.09% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences110
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"sounded like distant cutlery and a bus sig"
1"quite a laugh"
2"looked like anger rather than tears"
3"something like fear wrestling under her skin"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2205
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences205
matches
0"did that; delivery"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs102
mean21.62
std16.28
cv0.753
sampleLengths
0105
156
258
321
440
510
637
720
832
98
1035
1117
1244
1376
1418
1521
161
1726
1824
1943
2014
2125
2225
2341
2412
2523
2613
2727
287
2950
3021
3117
3221
3312
3443
3519
3629
3720
387
398
406
414
4228
4313
4435
4518
4613
4710
4840
498
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences166
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs332
matches(empty)
3.48% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount10
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences205
ratio0.049
matches
0"Inside, amber light sat low over the bar top and caught in the framed photographs—grainy men in uniform, a bridge in winter, a woman with a cigarette and a look that dared anyone to ask questions."
1"The late crowd hadn’t rolled in yet; Soho still stood in that lull where the streets outside sounded like distant cutlery and a bus sighing at a stop."
2"The slight drag in his left leg marked him more than the limp itself—an old injury that made him place each foot with care, as if he refused to let pain rush him."
3"Habit did that; delivery work taught you to clock faces and hands, decide in a breath whether someone planned to buy food or take it."
4"Then her gaze found Rory, and the mask slipped—not far, just enough for recognition to show its teeth."
5"She stopped a pace away, close enough to smell Eva’s perfume—something clean, almost clinical, with a sharp note that cut through the bar’s stale sweetness."
6"Eva’s eyes flicked down Rory’s clothes—black T-shirt, faded jeans, a small smear of lemon from the rag on her wrist—and back up to her face."
7"Eva looked at him, assessed him in a blink—the limp, the ring, the posture that belonged to authority rather than hospitality."
8"She opened her handbag—structured, black, no scuffs—and pulled out a slim cigarette case."
9"She reached into her coat pocket and pulled out a small folded piece of paper—creased, handled too much."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1756
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount58
adverbRatio0.03302961275626424
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.0005694760820045558
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences205
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences205
mean10.76
std7.38
cv0.687
sampleLengths
023
124
236
322
420
58
628
78
833
917
1021
1124
1216
135
145
1520
1617
175
1815
199
2017
216
226
232
2419
2516
263
2714
2814
295
3025
3117
3215
339
3420
3515
3618
376
3815
391
403
4113
4210
4321
443
4512
466
4725
489
495
42.68% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.22439024390243903
totalSentences205
uniqueOpeners46
22.08% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences151
matches
0"Then her gaze found Rory,"
ratio0.007
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount40
totalSentences151
matches
0"Her knuckles smelled of lemon"
1"He lifted a glass, checked"
2"his voice carried that calm"
3"her mouth twisted"
4"He closed the book"
5"He moved down the bar,"
6"She wore a coat that"
7"Her make-up sat clean and"
8"She held herself straight, chin"
9"Her eyes stayed on Rory"
10"Her trainers squeaked on the"
11"She stopped a pace away,"
12"She dropped her hand and"
13"She glanced towards the booths,"
14"Her eyes landed on the"
15"She looked away again with"
16"He moved closer, his presence"
17"his tone stayed polite, but"
18"She moved behind the bar"
19"She grabbed the bottle, poured"
ratio0.265
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount146
totalSentences151
matches
0"The Raven’s Nest held its"
1"The green neon sign outside"
2"Maps clung to the walls"
3"Aurora wiped a ring of"
4"Her knuckles smelled of lemon"
5"The late crowd hadn’t rolled"
6"Silas moved behind her like"
7"The slight drag in his"
8"He lifted a glass, checked"
9"his voice carried that calm"
10"Rory leaned her forearms on"
11"The bar smelled of malt"
12"her mouth twisted"
13"Silas’s silver signet ring flashed"
14"The ring looked wrong and"
15"He closed the book"
16"The name hit like a"
17"Rory kept her face still"
18"The glass squeaked under the"
19"Silas watched her a moment,"
ratio0.967
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences151
matches(empty)
ratio0
37.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences68
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"Inside, amber light sat low over the bar top and caught in the framed photographs—grainy men in uniform, a bridge in winter, a woman with a cigarette and a look…"
1"Her make-up sat clean and sharp, the kind you applied with a steady hand and a mirror that didn’t lie."
2"She held herself straight, chin set, eyes scanning the room as if she catalogued exits."
3"The room stayed the same: empty stools, low music, Silas by the taps with the patience of a man who had watched wars start over less."
4"Her eyes landed on the bookshelf at the back wall, stacked with old paperbacks and a few hardbacks that looked too pristine."
5"He moved closer, his presence filling the space without crowding it."
6"Rory stood opposite her, hands flat on the wood, as if she braced for impact."
7"She looked at Eva’s face again, searching for the old mischief, the softness around the eyes, the friend who slept on Rory’s bed after nights out and shared han…"
8"Eva kept her posture stiff, spine straight against the stool, hands folded now on the bar as if she attended an interview."
9"Silas shifted his weight, the signet ring catching the light as he reached out and tapped the bar once, a small, sharp sound that carried."
80.88% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags34
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"his tone stayed, but his eyes stayed on Eva’s hands"
1"Her mouth shut, her teeth pressing into her lower lip until it blanched"
2"his voice stayed, but his eyes held a warning"
68.92% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"Eva’s attention snapped back (snap)"
2"Eva muttered (mutter)"
3"Rory muttered (mutter)"
4"Eva snapped (snap)"
5"Eva murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences74
tagDensity0.176
leniency0.351
rawRatio0.462
effectiveRatio0.162
75.0770%