Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTXYJ8QH2APBDH7JXK7Q2NM

Run Details

Duration:
59.5s
Cost:
$0.009043
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
She reached the grove when the city was a smear of orange on the horizon, when the park's paths had emptied and the lamplight surrendered to a darker, older dark. The standing stones rose like ribs from the earth, ancient oaks wrapped around them as if protecting something small and dangerous. The air smelled of moss and something sweet and coppery that made the back of her tongue tingle. The pendant had started in her palm on the bus, a faint heat moving against her skin like a pulse. She had wrapped it in the cuff of her coat and told herself it was nothing—old metal warming from the body, nerves over a silly old thing. Then the warmth had slid like a tug, insistent, and she had gotten off two stops early. "I shouldn't have come," she said, loud enough to carve a hole in the night, and the words thudded away between trunks. She pushed through a skirt of bracken and the undergrowth gave when she stepped. Her breath came out in bright ghosts though the night had held its breath. She checked her phone; the lock screen announced a time that made no sense, minutes stretched into hours and then rewound as if the world had hiccupped. The pendant warmed again against her palm, a small core of crimson under the silver chain. It pulsed in a rhythm that wasn't hers. She frowned, fingers tightening around the chain. "Show me," she told the pendant. She clipped it over her collar and let the metal rest against her sternum. Her scar itched under the strap of her bag as if something small and patient had noticed her. She had come for a reason: the pulse in the pendant, for one, and the scrap of handwriting left in the bottom of a takeaway bag from Yu-Fei's—Isolde's grove—middle of the night—if you want to see it. Whoever had written that had crossed a bar of ink with a hand that didn't tremble. Whoever had given the pendant had left no name. The grove kept its own time. At her first step inside the circle, birds that had slept in the deeper branches woke and listened, one calling once and then quiet. The wildflowers at her feet were shining like eyes; their petals caught light she could not place and hummed faintly as if vibrating with a note beneath hearing. Something struck the edge of her vision, a slip of movement behind the closest stone. She turned fast. Nothing. The wind that wasn't there arranged the grass in a lazy wave. "Hello?" she asked, the sound small, too human, and she moved forward because she had not come to the park to stand in the dark and babble. Her foot sank slightly into the earth. The ground had the give of a place kept warm, like a bed someone had just left. The pendant throbbed, warm through her shirt, and a tiny glow behind the crimson stone leaked like reflected blood. At the far side of the circle a fox slipped between roots and vanished as if swallowed. Not a real fox: too silent, too flat in its motion. It had the wrong number of joints, the wrong angle to its head, and it left no print on the leaf-strewn floor. "You're not a fox," Rory said, and she reached down. The leaves murmured under her fingertips, cool as breath. She wanted to laugh—out loud, bright and ridiculous—and the laugh died in her mouth because there was no movement but the edges of sight kept twitching. Shadows drew themselves thin and then re-bloomed, pointing like fingers. She checked the standing stones. Carved symbols she had not noticed at the entrance crawled across the weathered faces in ink-thin relief: lines that did not belong to oak grain, words that seemed to take their time to reveal themselves. When she blinked, they weren't there. When she blinked again, the carvings lay open as if a page. "That's new," she said, and the words sounded like a dare. She ran a thumb along a line and felt heat, not from sun but from something pressing close, like a cheek against glass. The pendant answered with a single pulse, bright and quick. A sound scraped the air—too high and even to be a human voice. It didn't belong in the night. It threaded between the trunks and left an aftertaste of iron on her tongue. She turned its direction with her body, every muscle taut. There was rhythm in the grove. Tiny things kept time. Leaves shivered in perfect intervals as if someone counted them. The longer she stood, the more noises stacked, building like a score: a footfall that did not touch ground, a whisper that moved sideways around her ear, a small laughing that could have been a child or a wind. "Okay," she said. "Okay, you're clever." She moved toward the centre because she had to know. She had to be where the pendant pulled hardest. Her watch showed twenty-one minutes past. Her phone refused to light the screen. The pendant warmed, suddenly hot, and the inner glow bled through its casing until she could see a pulse within the stone, like a heart trying to speak with a broken larynx. Something shifted at the edge of the clearing—no shape, more a suggestion of movement—leaves lifting as if a hand had passed across them. When she squinted, there were faces in the bark. Not faces in the pattern of knots, but real faces, small and close, eyes closed, mouths moving as if chanting. She listened. The mouths were not making words she knew. They made clicks and sighs and the soft rasp of breath. When she tried to catch what they said with her ears her skull filled with soundless letters, a script of pressure that pushed against her teeth. "You don't need to be afraid," she said, as if comforting a child. She rubbed her wrist at the scar where she had cut herself once, hard enough to sting and make rational feeling return. She had left Evan because she had a spine. She had left because fear sharpened her. This fear required a different blade. The pendant pulsed again, harder, and a warmth spilled across her chest. Her stomach dropped like a lift. Her shadow stretched long and wrong and then doubled beside her, a second silhouette that moved a beat out of sync. She turned toward the double and found the space empty. Rope of ivy had curled away from a trunk like the tail of an offended thing. Tiny flowers that had been white when she entered were suddenly pale as bone. The year-round blooms of the grove seemed less like flowers and more like mouths closed tight. Something laughed beneath a branch—so soft it could have been the sound of damp fabric rubbing—and the laugh had layers, like a chorus sung in very small voices. She tried to speak, to demand an answer in the way you interrogated a stranger in a dark alley. Words came out clipped. "Who are you?" she asked. A breeze answered by pulling at her braid. She had not felt wind before. The hair at the nape of her neck lifted. The pendant pulsed against her sternum like a bird beating in a fist. She tucked the chain further inside and felt the heat through three layers of fabric. A shape moved across the clearing. It kept to the periphery, slipped between trunks with a dancer's glide. When it reached for the nearest stone it took on the texture of the bark and then replaced itself with the bark again. If she had reached, she would have found only rough wood. Her fingers grazed the stone and found the hidden skin of a living thing, slightly warm. "Isolde?" she called, because the grove had Isolde's name in every turn of root. Silence returned like a lid. The sound felt engineered, the hush heavy and deliberate. She expected the wind to come back and it did not. The only sound was the pulse from the pendant, and with each beat the clearing drew closer, as if time itself sucked in a breath that included her. Her own breathing sounded wrong—too loud, too wet—amplified by something that made the small noises of the night giant. A twig snapped at the edge. Her head whipped toward it. A rabbit sat there, white except for one black eye and a third dark slit where an ear should be. It did not blink. When she looked again it was gone, leaving only the quick imprint of a pad that faded into moss as though the ground had eaten it. She took two steps back, then stopped because the trees closed in like fingers, narrowing the path she had come. She had not noticed until now that the stone circle made a boundary not just of wood and rock but of expectation. Everything outside it belonged to one logic; inside, another law held. "I came because it pulsed," she said, because explanations ground her. "Because someone—" She cut herself off, because admission felt like opening a gate. She had been given the pendant and told nothing, like a stranger pressing a sealed envelope into her palm. She had taken the gift and now she was paying its price. The pendant flared. The light was not loud but it pushed at the back of her eyes. For a moment the grove inverted—stems like bones, sky the colour of old spoons; then it settled like a breath released. In that blink the flowers had turned toward her and some of the faces in the bark had opened their eyes. They were not human eyes—no pupil she recognised—but they held motion. They watched her and did not blink again. She felt watched by an arithmetic of things. Time shifted perceptibly; the watch on her wrist crawled forward then snapped back. She had not stood here long, she thought, and yet her legs hummed as if she had been in the same spot most of the night. There was a sound now, a dragging, like fabric being pulled slowly over gravel. It came from behind a stone and then from another, from two and then a dozen small sources, each at the periphery of her hearing. The noises arranged themselves into a rhythm that matched her own heartbeat. With every drag the pendant pulsed, so that the two beats harmonised and made her chest ache. She swallowed. Her voice came out steadier than she felt. "Who left you?" she asked the grove, the trees, the faces, the laughing small things. "Who gave me this?" A long breath filled the clearing. The trees inhaled together and exhaled something moist that smelled like a hearth gone out. The pendant answered with a slow, deep pulse that felt like a hand cupping her sternum. The warmth deepened, spread down her throat into her stomach. She felt dizzy, not from fear but from recollection of a memory she had never had: a room with a single chair, a man humming under his breath, a hand placing a small box on a table. Memory slid away, replaced by the sense of being inside a throat, looking outward between teeth of root. The standing stones hummed, harmonics low and clear. Somewhere, something tapped a code on wood—three taps, two, three—as though making a list and then erasing it. She stepped closer to one of the stones. Up close the carvings had become letters she almost recognised, names that blurred when she tried to pronounce them. Each time she reached to touch a name the pendant burned and her hand recoiled. "Not here," she whispered, though why she thought the pendant needed instruction she did not know. She slid her fingers into the soil, feeling for roots, for something solid. Her nails came away with a fine dust that was not earth but ash. The ash smelled faintly of seaweed and old coins. At the farthest stone something moved with the deliberation of things that had been awake a long time. The bark split like lips. A small, thin hand—or the suggestion of one—emerged, knuckles pale, tapered fingers curved like the root of a fern. It did not reach toward her. It reached toward the centre of the clearing and hovered over the spot where the earth rose slightly, a soft mound that hadn't been there moments before. The pendant screamed—no, not screamed, a sharp lighting of heat—and a pain like hunger pressed at her sternum. Her knees went almost out from under her. She had to sit. Her hands shook. The dirt under her palms was cold. "Stay," she said to herself, and the words acted like a promise. She remembered Silas' bar above her, the small flat with a kettle that took forever to boil, the friends that waited when she called. The thought steadied her, a pin at the edge of her hand. The hand at the stone withdrew, leaving the bark whole, and then the mound at the clearing's centre shifted. It uncoiled like a sleeping thing waking to find the world different. Petals opened across it, small and rapid, and the sound they made was like someone reading a page very fast. A voice rose, thin and layered and impossible to locate. It sounded like breath against the back of her neck and like an echo in a well. It did not speak words she recognised. It made other things happen: the pendant flared, the ground shivered, that small mound exhaled and the air around it rippled as if someone had thrown a stone into a pool and the pool refused to stop. She did not have a chance to ask what it meant. Something touched her arm—light, grazing, not heavy enough to lay a hand but precise enough to make the hairs along her forearm stand like a row of soldiering cilia. The pendant pulsed once, very fast, and for a breath she felt like an animal pinned to the world by a string. "Leave," she said, not as a question but as a contract. Her throat closed around the word and it sounded softer than it had in her head. She pulled at the pendant with one hand, wanting to bury it in the earth, to break the chain and let the small red stone go cold. Her fingers found the silver and the chain was warm, as if someone had been wearing it moments before. The thing at her arm pulled back as if hurt. The contact left a dampness, not quite sweat, not quite dew, and it smelled like the inside of a mouth after too much whispering. The grove leaned in. Time did something it had not done before: it folded small and concentrated. The standing stones cast shadows that stepped and repositioned themselves, arranging a corridor that pointed at her. The pendant pulsed in a fierce, steady beat, none of the shy warmth it had held at first. It tugged her toward the mound, toward the place the hand had hovered. She had come for an answer. She had thought she was alone. The night laughed that lie from her like a sleeve, and then the sound narrowed to a single, very close breathing behind her shoulder.
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native_tokens_reasoning1280
native_tokens_cached0
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num_input_audio_prompt(null)
num_media_completion0
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences17
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
80.67% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2587
totalAiIsmAdverbs10
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count3
1
adverb"suddenly"
count2
2
adverb"very"
count4
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"suddenly"
2"very"
3"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
47.82% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2587
totalAiIsms27
found
0
word"pulse"
count6
1
word"warmth"
count4
2
word"pulsed"
count7
3
word"throbbed"
count1
4
word"perfect"
count1
5
word"footfall"
count1
6
word"whisper"
count1
7
word"comforting"
count1
8
word"stomach"
count2
9
word"silence"
count1
10
word"sense of"
count1
11
word"echo"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"warmth"
2"pulsed"
3"throbbed"
4"perfect"
5"footfall"
6"whisper"
7"comforting"
8"stomach"
9"silence"
10"sense of"
11"echo"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
highlights
0"stomach dropped"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences177
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences177
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences178
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2559
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions4
wordCount2492
uniqueNames3
maxNameDensity0.08
worstName"Isolde"
maxWindowNameDensity0.5
worstWindowName"Isolde"
discoveredNames
Evan1
Isolde2
Silence1
persons
0"Evan"
1"Isolde"
2"Silence"
places(empty)
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences158
glossingSentenceCount13
matches
0"as if protecting something small and dangerous"
1"as if vibrating with a note beneath hearing"
2"words that seemed to take their time to reveal themselves"
3"sounded like a dare"
4"as if chanting"
5"as if comforting a child"
6"felt like opening a gate"
7"smelled like a hearth gone out"
8"felt like a hand cupping her sternum"
9"as though making a list and then erasing it"
10"sounded like breath against the back of he"
11"felt like an animal pinned to the world"
12"not quite sweat, not quite dew, and it smelled like the inside of a mouth after too much whispering"
13"not quite dew, and it smelled like the inside of a mouth after too much whispering"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches9
per1kWords3.517
wordCount2559
matches
0"no movement but"
1"not from sun but from something pressing close, like a cheek against glass"
2"Not faces in the pattern of knots, but real faces, small"
3"not just of wood and rock but of expectation"
4"not loud but it pushed at the back of her eyes"
5"not from fear but from recollection of a memory she had never had: a room with"
6"not earth but ash"
7"not heavy enough to lay a hand but precise enough to make the hairs along her forearm stand lik"
8"not as a question but as a contract"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences178
matches
0"laughed that lie"
63.89% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs53
mean48.28
std18.04
cv0.374
sampleLengths
069
164
222
355
431
538
662
758
831
927
1043
1150
1255
1358
1444
1543
1659
1725
1845
1952
2047
2157
2239
2356
2428
2523
265
2751
2868
2914
3053
3180
3253
3355
3478
3547
3668
3710
3819
3984
4044
4142
4252
4375
4440
4548
4651
4771
4862
4973
99.32% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences177
matches
0"was gone"
1"been given"
2"being pulled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs426
matches
0"were not making"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount22
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences17
totalSentences178
ratio0.096
matches
0"She had wrapped it in the cuff of her coat and told herself it was nothing—old metal warming from the body, nerves over a silly old thing."
1"She checked her phone; the lock screen announced a time that made no sense, minutes stretched into hours and then rewound as if the world had hiccupped."
2"She had come for a reason: the pulse in the pendant, for one, and the scrap of handwriting left in the bottom of a takeaway bag from Yu-Fei's—Isolde's grove—middle of the night—if you want to see it."
3"The wildflowers at her feet were shining like eyes; their petals caught light she could not place and hummed faintly as if vibrating with a note beneath hearing."
4"She wanted to laugh—out loud, bright and ridiculous—and the laugh died in her mouth because there was no movement but the edges of sight kept twitching."
5"A sound scraped the air—too high and even to be a human voice."
6"Something shifted at the edge of the clearing—no shape, more a suggestion of movement—leaves lifting as if a hand had passed across them."
7"Something laughed beneath a branch—so soft it could have been the sound of damp fabric rubbing—and the laugh had layers, like a chorus sung in very small voices."
8"Her own breathing sounded wrong—too loud, too wet—amplified by something that made the small noises of the night giant."
9"Everything outside it belonged to one logic; inside, another law held."
10"For a moment the grove inverted—stems like bones, sky the colour of old spoons; then it settled like a breath released."
11"They were not human eyes—no pupil she recognised—but they held motion."
12"Time shifted perceptibly; the watch on her wrist crawled forward then snapped back."
13"Somewhere, something tapped a code on wood—three taps, two, three—as though making a list and then erasing it."
14"A small, thin hand—or the suggestion of one—emerged, knuckles pale, tapered fingers curved like the root of a fern."
15"The pendant screamed—no, not screamed, a sharp lighting of heat—and a pain like hunger pressed at her sternum."
16"Something touched her arm—light, grazing, not heavy enough to lay a hand but precise enough to make the hairs along her forearm stand like a row of soldiering cilia."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2116
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount71
adverbRatio0.0335538752362949
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.006616257088846881
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences178
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences178
mean14.38
std7.97
cv0.554
sampleLengths
030
121
218
320
427
517
622
714
814
927
1016
118
127
136
1414
1518
1637
1716
189
196
2024
2128
2215
233
241
2512
2627
277
2817
2919
3017
3111
3222
3310
349
3526
3610
375
3835
396
4012
4111
4223
4310
4413
456
4614
4710
486
494
34.83% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats27
diversityRatio0.24719101123595505
totalSentences178
uniqueOpeners44
38.99% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences171
matches
0"Then the warmth had slid"
1"Somewhere, something tapped a code"
ratio0.012
30.53% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount81
totalSentences171
matches
0"She reached the grove when"
1"She had wrapped it in"
2"she said, loud enough to"
3"She pushed through a skirt"
4"Her breath came out in"
5"She checked her phone; the"
6"It pulsed in a rhythm"
7"She frowned, fingers tightening around"
8"she told the pendant"
9"She clipped it over her"
10"Her scar itched under the"
11"She had come for a"
12"She turned fast."
13"she asked, the sound small,"
14"Her foot sank slightly into"
15"It had the wrong number"
16"She wanted to laugh—out loud,"
17"She checked the standing stones."
18"she said, and the words"
19"She ran a thumb along"
ratio0.474
33.10% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount146
totalSentences171
matches
0"She reached the grove when"
1"The standing stones rose like"
2"The air smelled of moss"
3"The pendant had started in"
4"She had wrapped it in"
5"she said, loud enough to"
6"She pushed through a skirt"
7"Her breath came out in"
8"She checked her phone; the"
9"The pendant warmed again against"
10"It pulsed in a rhythm"
11"She frowned, fingers tightening around"
12"she told the pendant"
13"She clipped it over her"
14"Her scar itched under the"
15"She had come for a"
16"The grove kept its own"
17"The wildflowers at her feet"
18"Something struck the edge of"
19"She turned fast."
ratio0.854
87.72% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences171
matches
0"Whoever had written that had"
1"Whoever had given the pendant"
2"If she had reached, she"
ratio0.018
56.88% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences108
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"The standing stones rose like ribs from the earth, ancient oaks wrapped around them as if protecting something small and dangerous."
1"The air smelled of moss and something sweet and coppery that made the back of her tongue tingle."
2"Her scar itched under the strap of her bag as if something small and patient had noticed her."
3"At her first step inside the circle, birds that had slept in the deeper branches woke and listened, one calling once and then quiet."
4"The wildflowers at her feet were shining like eyes; their petals caught light she could not place and hummed faintly as if vibrating with a note beneath hearing…"
5"Carved symbols she had not noticed at the entrance crawled across the weathered faces in ink-thin relief: lines that did not belong to oak grain, words that see…"
6"Not faces in the pattern of knots, but real faces, small and close, eyes closed, mouths moving as if chanting."
7"When she tried to catch what they said with her ears her skull filled with soundless letters, a script of pressure that pushed against her teeth."
8"Her shadow stretched long and wrong and then doubled beside her, a second silhouette that moved a beat out of sync."
9"Her own breathing sounded wrong—too loud, too wet—amplified by something that made the small noises of the night giant."
10"Somewhere, something tapped a code on wood—three taps, two, three—as though making a list and then erasing it."
11"At the farthest stone something moved with the deliberation of things that had been awake a long time."
12"The standing stones cast shadows that stepped and repositioned themselves, arranging a corridor that pointed at her."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"she said, and the words sounded like a dare"
1"she said, as if comforting a child"
2"she called, because the grove had Isolde's name in every turn of root"
3"she asked, the trees, the faces, the laughing small things"
4"she said, and the words acted like a promise"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags14
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences17
tagDensity0.824
leniency1
rawRatio0.071
effectiveRatio0.071
72.4578%