Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTXZ74MSMMV75MNPQFEB7W9

Run Details

Duration:
39.4s
Cost:
$0.009884
Provider:
Z.AI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The knock was wrong. Not the heavy, friendly thump of Silas from downstairs checking in, nor the frantic, triple-tap pattern Eva used when she’d forgotten her keys for the third time that week. This was a single, sharp rap. Polite. Imperious. A demand for entry disguised as a request. Rory put down her book, the spine still warm from her hands. The flat was quiet, except for the muffled thrum of the bar’s bass line vibrating through the floorboards, a familiar heartbeat for the building. She peered through the peephole, a distorted fisheye of the dim, grubby hallway. A wall of charcoal grey. She adjusted her position, and a face came into view. Slicked-back platinum blond hair. The pale, sharp features of a marble statue. One eye, black as a spent coal, stared directly at the peephole, as if he knew she was there. The other, a startling, predatory amber, was slightly averted. Her breath hitched. Of all the people she had exorcised from her life, he was the one ghost who had refused to stay buried. She unlocked the three deadbolts, the metallic clicks loud in the silence. She pulled the door open just enough to frame her body in the gap. "Lucien." He stood in the hallway, a slash of impossible elegance in the building’s shabby corridor. His tailored suit was immaculate, the ivory handle of his cane resting against his polished shoe. The scent of him hit her then, ozone and expensive cologne, something clean and dangerous that cut through the stale air of the stairwell. "Aurora." His voice was a low, smooth baritone, the French accent a silken caress. "May I come in?" It wasn't a question. He moved forward, and she had no choice but to step back or be walked over. He entered her flat, his cane tapping softly on the worn wooden floor. He didn't look around, not exactly, but she felt his gaze take in everything. The stack of law textbooks she kept out of stubbornness. The Golden Empress delivery uniform slung over a chair. The chipped mug on the counter, a faint rim of lipstick around the edge. He was cataloguing her new, smaller life. "Nice place," he said, the words devoid of any real opinion. "It's a roof." She closed the door, the sound final. "What do you want?" He turned to face her, and the full force of his mismatched eyes landed on her. The black one was a void, the amber one held a flicker of something ancient and hungry. It was always difficult to meet his gaze, to feel seen so completely by something so inhuman. "Is that how you greet an old friend?" he asked, a faint, mocking smile playing on his lips. "We were never friends." "No." He conceded the point with a slight tilt of his head. "I suppose we weren't." He took a slow step further into the room, his presence seeming to suck all the air out of the space. "You look well." The lie hung between them. She knew what she looked like. Tired. Worn thin at the edges. The London life she’d chosen was a constant hustle, a deliberate distraction from the mess he’d left her in. But she wouldn't give him the satisfaction of seeing it. "What do you want, Lucien?" she repeated, her voice harder this time. "I don't deal in your world anymore." "Ah, yes. Your new life." He gestured vaguely towards the window, towards the city lights. "Delivering noodles. Reading dusty books. Hiding." "I'm not hiding." "Aren't you?" He took another step. He was close now, close enough that she could see the fine weave of his suit, the way the light caught the silver cufflinks at his wrists. "People have been asking questions." Her heart gave a single, painful thud. "What kind of people?" "The usual kind. The kind that don't give up." He paused, letting the weight of his words settle. "They're looking for someone. A woman. Black hair, blue eyes. About your height. Goes by the name of Rory." Ice flooded her veins. She kept her face a mask, her hands still at her sides. She had run. She had built walls. She had become someone else. "I don't know what you're talking about." "Don't you?" He leaned in slightly, his voice dropping to a near whisper. "They started in Cardiff. Traced you to a bedsit in Shepherd's Bush. Lost you for a month, then you popped up here. Above a bar. Very clever." He knew. He knew everything. The panic she kept locked away in a deep, dark part of her soul rattled its cage. "Who are they?" she asked, the words barely audible. "They didn't give a name. But they were very interested in your ex-boyfriend. Evan." The name was a physical blow. It landed like a punch to the stomach, stealing the air from her lungs. She felt the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist begin to ache, a phantom pain from a shattered window and a promise broken. He saw it. Of course, he saw it. The flicker of terror in her eyes, the slight tremor in her hands. His expression didn't soften. If anything, the predator in his amber eye seemed to stir. "He's looking for you, Aurora. And he's not the man you ran away from. He's... acquired new friends." She swallowed hard, her throat dry. "Why are you telling me this?" "Because I am an information broker. It is what I do." He raised a hand, his fingers hovering just above her cheek, not quite touching. She could feel the heat radiating from his skin. "But information is a currency. And I am feeling rather poor tonight." She flinched back from his near-touch, her back pressing against the cold wood of the door. "I don't have any money." "I'm not asking for money." His gaze dropped to her mouth, then back to her eyes. The air crackled with a current she remembered, a dangerous, intoxicating mix of fear and attraction that had nearly destroyed her once before. "I'm offering you a deal. A protection detail. My services. In exchange for a favour." "What kind of favour?" He smiled, a genuine, chilling thing that didn't reach his eyes. "I'll let you know when I need it." The bass from the bar below seemed to fall away. The world narrowed to the space between them, to his impossible offer and the threat snapping at her heels. Trust the devil who had already broken her heart, or face the monster she had fled. Before she could answer, before she could even draw another breath, he moved. Not towards her, but to the door. He turned the deadbolt. The heavy metallic click of the first lock echoed in the small flat. Then the second. Then the third. Locked in. With him.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"He gestured vaguely [vaguely]"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.371
leniency0.743
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.057
73.82% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1146
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"completely"
count1
3
adverb"very"
count2
highlights
0"slightly"
1"softly"
2"completely"
3"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
38.92% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1146
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"marble"
count1
2
word"silence"
count1
3
word"flicker"
count2
4
word"weight"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count1
6
word"traced"
count1
7
word"stomach"
count1
8
word"shattered"
count1
9
word"predator"
count1
10
word"could feel"
count1
11
word"chilling"
count1
12
word"echoed"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"marble"
2"silence"
3"flicker"
4"weight"
5"whisper"
6"traced"
7"stomach"
8"shattered"
9"predator"
10"could feel"
11"chilling"
12"echoed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"weight of words/silence"
count1
highlights
0"the weight of his words"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences87
matches
0"The flicker of terror"
93.60% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences87
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"begin to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences108
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1142
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions8
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions7
wordCount905
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity0.11
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity0
worstWindowName(null)
discoveredNames
Silas1
Eva1
French1
Golden1
Empress1
London1
Ice1
persons
0"Silas"
1"Eva"
2"Ice"
places
0"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
69.35% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences62
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like"
1"not quite touching"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords2.627
wordCount1142
matches
0"no choice but"
1"not exactly, but she felt his gaze take in everything"
2"Not towards her, but to the door"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences108
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs41
mean27.85
std19.18
cv0.689
sampleLengths
04
145
249
355
424
526
61
755
818
987
1011
1114
1250
1318
144
1540
1646
1719
1821
193
2038
2111
2237
2328
247
2540
2622
279
2814
2944
3036
3118
3212
3346
3421
3554
364
3719
3845
3943
404
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences87
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs138
matches
0"was cataloguing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences108
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount909
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount36
adverbRatio0.039603960396039604
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.011001100110011002
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences108
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences108
mean10.57
std6.84
cv0.647
sampleLengths
04
129
26
31
41
58
612
724
813
95
1010
114
128
1319
149
153
1621
1712
1814
191
2015
2116
2224
2314
244
254
2616
2713
2814
2910
309
3114
327
3311
3410
354
3616
3717
3817
3918
404
4112
4225
433
445
456
461
475
4819
4910
56.79% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.4074074074074074
totalSentences108
uniqueOpeners44
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences81
matches
0"Of course, he saw it."
1"Then the second."
2"Then the third."
ratio0.037
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount45
totalSentences81
matches
0"She peered through the peephole,"
1"She adjusted her position, and"
2"Her breath hitched."
3"She unlocked the three deadbolts,"
4"She pulled the door open"
5"He stood in the hallway,"
6"His tailored suit was immaculate,"
7"His voice was a low,"
8"It wasn't a question."
9"He moved forward, and she"
10"He entered her flat, his"
11"He didn't look around, not"
12"He was cataloguing her new,"
13"he said, the words devoid"
14"She closed the door, the"
15"He turned to face her,"
16"It was always difficult to"
17"he asked, a faint, mocking"
18"He conceded the point with"
19"He took a slow step"
ratio0.556
40.25% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount68
totalSentences81
matches
0"The knock was wrong."
1"This was a single, sharp"
2"A demand for entry disguised"
3"Rory put down her book,"
4"The flat was quiet, except"
5"She peered through the peephole,"
6"A wall of charcoal grey."
7"She adjusted her position, and"
8"The pale, sharp features of"
9"The other, a startling, predatory"
10"Her breath hitched."
11"She unlocked the three deadbolts,"
12"She pulled the door open"
13"He stood in the hallway,"
14"His tailored suit was immaculate,"
15"The scent of him hit"
16"His voice was a low,"
17"It wasn't a question."
18"He moved forward, and she"
19"He entered her flat, his"
ratio0.84
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences81
matches
0"If anything, the predator in"
1"Before she could answer, before"
ratio0.025
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences37
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"The air crackled with a current she remembered, a dangerous, intoxicating mix of fear and attraction that had nearly destroyed her once before."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"she repeated, her voice harder this time"
1"He leaned, his voice dropping to a near whisper"
2"she asked, the words barely audible"
3"He raised, his fingers hovering just above her cheek, not quite touching"
92.86% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"He conceded (concede)"
1"she repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.143
leniency0.286
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.114
81.9862%