Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTY08KHDSYDPXT8S27SWE4D

Run Details

Duration:
36.8s
Cost:
$0.040188
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The deadbolt scraped. Then the second. The third. Rory stood in Eva's doorway wearing yesterday's Golden Empress delivery shirt, smelling of fried rice and rain. Her hair hung limp against her neck. The fifteen-hour shift clung to her like grease. Lucien Moreau leaned against the corridor wall, pristine charcoal suit unmarred by London's drizzle. His heterochromatic eyes, one amber, one black, tracked her face with unnerving precision. The ivory-handled cane rested against his thigh. "You look like shit, chérie." "Not tonight." She moved to close the door. His hand caught it. No force. Just there. "I need Eva." "She's in Prague. Manuscript authentication." "When does she return?" "Thursday." "That's unfortunate." He didn't move. Rory's fingers tightened on the door frame. The crescent scar on her left wrist caught the hall light. "Whatever information you're buying, her rate just tripled for house calls." "I'm not here for information." His gaze dropped to her wrist. To the scar he'd traced a dozen times six months ago, before Cardiff, before everything imploded. "May I come in?" "No." "Rory." "That's not my name anymore." "Your employment records at the Golden Empress say otherwise. Aurora Carter, part-time delivery, three months tenure, exemplary punctuality despite residing above a pub." He tilted his head. "Should I continue?" Her stomach twisted. "You're tracking me now?" "I've always tracked you. You simply stopped caring to notice." Ptolemy materialized between her ankles, his tabby bulk pressing against her shins. The cat regarded Lucien with aristocratic disdain, then padded directly to the Frenchman's perfectly polished shoes. Traitor. "Even your roommate's familiar prefers my company." "He's a cat, not a familiar. And he's an arsehole." She stepped back. The door swung open. "Five minutes." Lucien moved past her in a cloud of bergamot and something darker, older. Something that made her teeth ache. His demon heritage announced itself in subtle ways. The too-fluid movement. The way shadows bent toward him like iron filings to a magnet. Eva's flat looked like a library had exploded. Books covered every surface, spilled from shelves, created precarious towers on the coffee table. Research notes pinned to the walls formed a spiderweb of connections only Eva understood. A half-drunk cup of tea sat on top of a first edition Crowley. "She's redecorating, I see." "She's working on something. Don't ask." Rory crossed to the kitchenette, putting the breakfast bar between them. Distance felt important. "What do you want?" Lucien picked up a leather-bound journal, flipped it open, closed it. His fingers, long and pianist-elegant, drummed once against the cover. Rory remembered those fingers. Remembered them tracing her collarbone, threading through her hair, pressing against her mouth to muffle her gasps in the back room of that Marseille warehouse while his associates drank cognac ten meters away. She shoved the memory down. "I need a favour," he said. "No." "You haven't heard the terms." "Don't need to." He set down the journal. Crossed the room in three strides. The breakfast bar suddenly felt inadequate. "Someone is looking for you." Her pulse kicked. "Who?" "That depends." His amber eye caught the overhead light. The black one swallowed it. "Are we discussing the Cardiff authorities investigating your ex-boyfriend's unfortunate financial discrepancies? Or the Welsh solicitor who's been making inquiries about his daughter's whereabouts?" Ice flooded her veins. "My father doesn't—" "He hired a private investigator last week. Former Metropolitan Police, competent enough. I've redirected his efforts toward Edinburgh." Lucien's voice dropped. "For now." "Why?" "Because you asked me to." "That was six months ago." "I don't recall an expiration date on the request." Rory's hands curled against the countertop. The Formica felt sticky. Everything in Eva's flat felt sticky. Except Lucien. He remained impossibly pristine, impossibly composed, impossibly here in her space after months of silence. "What's the favour?" "A name." He pulled a photograph from his inner jacket pocket. Laid it on the counter between them. "This woman visited three of my clients this week. Each time, she asked about procurement services. Specifically, procurement services involving realm-transit artefacts." The photograph showed a middle-aged woman in a beige mackintosh. Unremarkable face. Unremarkable hair. The kind of person you'd pass on the tube without a second glance. "So?" "So she's lying." Lucien tapped the photo. "Her accent shifts. Manchester in Southwark, Dublin in Mayfair, Birmingham in Shoreditch. Her demeanour changes. Nervous with my Spitalfields contact, aggressive with the Kensington broker, seductive with the Camden dealer." "Professional, then." "The best ones are." He leaned forward. "But she's asking the wrong questions to the right people. Or the right questions to the wrong people. I haven't determined which." Rory studied the photograph. The woman stood outside a shop, Camden by the look of the graffiti-tagged shutters. Something about her posture niggled. Too alert. Too aware of the camera despite appearing oblivious. "You think she's police." "I think she's interested in the same artefact your flatmate has been researching." His finger moved to the spiderweb of notes on the wall. To a sketch Eva had pinned last week. A circular stone tablet covered in symbols. "The Malphora Seal." The word landed like a punch. Rory's head snapped up. "How do you—" "Because three weeks ago, a client asked me to locate it. I declined. Too dangerous, too many interested parties, too much historical bloodshed attached to one piece of carved rock." His eyes locked onto hers. "Then Eva starts investigating it. Then this woman appears. Then yesterday, someone broke into my office and stole my client files." "You think Eva—" "I think your flatmate stumbled into something considerably larger than an academic curiosity. I think this woman knows it. And I think—" He straightened. "I think you're the only person she trusts enough to tell where she actually is." The silence stretched. Ptolemy jumped onto the counter, sniffed the photograph, sneezed. "Prague's a lie," Lucien said softly. Rory's throat tightened. "She wouldn't—" "She would. She has. She's protecting you." He moved around the breakfast bar. Close enough to touch. Close enough that she could see the faint scar along his jawline from that Warsaw incident he never discussed. "Where is she, Aurora?" "Don't call me that." "Where?" His hand rose. Stopped centimetres from her face. Waiting. Always waiting for permission. Even now. Even after everything. Her mobile buzzed. Once. Twice. They both looked at it. The screen lit with a message. Unknown number. No words. Just coordinates. And a symbol that matched the sketch on Eva's wall.
created_at"2026-02-19T12:29:09.114Z" 2/19/2026, 12:29:09 PM
model"anthropic/claude-4.5-sonnet-20250929"
app_id182717
external_user(null)
streamedtrue
cancelledfalse
latency1273
moderation_latency177
generation_time36593
tokens_prompt4556
tokens_completion1841
native_tokens_prompt4656
native_tokens_completion1748
native_tokens_completion_images(null)
native_tokens_reasoning0
native_tokens_cached0
num_media_prompt(null)
num_input_audio_prompt(null)
num_media_completion0
num_search_results(null)
origin"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byokfalse
finish_reason"stop"
native_finish_reason"stop"
usage0.040188
router(null)
provider_responses
0
endpoint_id"d8bee848-f020-454a-b2be-4a7ce868f99f"
id"200aab59-fe01-49ad-917b-9c756f9f45e5"
is_byokfalse
latency1273
model_permaslug"anthropic/claude-4.5-sonnet-20250929"
provider_name"Amazon Bedrock"
status200
api_type"completions"
id"gen-1771504149-KUyFeW88OiBeI1T1QNUf"
upstream_id"200aab59-fe01-49ad-917b-9c756f9f45e5"
total_cost0.040188
cache_discount(null)
upstream_inference_cost0
provider_name"Amazon Bedrock"

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"She stepped back [back]"
1"Lucien said softly [softly]"
2"He moved around [around]"
dialogueSentences62
tagDensity0.274
leniency0.548
rawRatio0.176
effectiveRatio0.097
86.15% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1083
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"suddenly"
2"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
49.22% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1083
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"pristine"
count2
1
word"traced"
count1
2
word"stomach"
count1
3
word"familiar"
count2
4
word"tracing"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count1
6
word"silence"
count2
7
word"determined"
count1
highlights
0"pristine"
1"traced"
2"stomach"
3"familiar"
4"tracing"
5"pulse"
6"silence"
7"determined"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences97
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences97
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences142
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1073
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
87.40% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions37
wordCount639
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity1.25
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Eva6
Golden1
Empress1
Moreau1
London1
Rory8
Cardiff1
Lucien8
Frenchman1
Crowley1
Distance1
Marseille1
Formica1
Laid1
Camden1
Close2
Warsaw1
persons
0"Eva"
1"Moreau"
2"Rory"
3"Lucien"
4"Frenchman"
5"Distance"
6"Formica"
places
0"London"
1"Cardiff"
2"Marseille"
3"Close"
4"Warsaw"
globalScore0.874
windowScore1
95.65% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences46
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like a library had exploded"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1073
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences142
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs67
mean16.01
std15.47
cv0.966
sampleLengths
08
132
234
35
48
511
65
74
81
95
1029
1131
121
131
145
1530
167
1710
1829
197
2019
2142
2249
234
2424
2558
265
276
281
295
303
3122
324
3338
347
3523
361
375
385
399
4033
413
4240
4327
441
4537
462
4729
4833
494
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences97
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs108
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences142
ratio0
matches(empty)
99.84% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount647
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount26
adverbRatio0.0401854714064915
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.012364760432766615
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences142
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences142
mean7.56
std6.82
cv0.903
sampleLengths
03
13
22
317
47
58
614
713
87
95
108
114
122
132
143
155
164
171
185
197
2011
2111
2211
2316
244
251
261
275
2827
293
303
314
3210
3312
3416
351
367
3713
384
392
4013
416
428
433
4412
458
4614
4714
4813
494
68.08% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.4507042253521127
totalSentences142
uniqueOpeners64
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences80
matches
0"Then the second."
1"Too aware of the camera"
2"Always waiting for permission."
ratio0.038
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences80
matches
0"Her hair hung limp against"
1"His heterochromatic eyes, one amber,"
2"She moved to close the"
3"His hand caught it."
4"He didn't move"
5"His gaze dropped to her"
6"He tilted his head"
7"Her stomach twisted."
8"She stepped back"
9"His demon heritage announced itself"
10"His fingers, long and pianist-elegant,"
11"She shoved the memory down."
12"He set down the journal."
13"Her pulse kicked."
14"His amber eye caught the"
15"He remained impossibly pristine, impossibly"
16"He pulled a photograph from"
17"He leaned forward"
18"His finger moved to the"
19"His eyes locked onto hers"
ratio0.3
47.50% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount66
totalSentences80
matches
0"The deadbolt scraped."
1"Rory stood in Eva's doorway"
2"Her hair hung limp against"
3"The fifteen-hour shift clung to"
4"Lucien Moreau leaned against the"
5"His heterochromatic eyes, one amber,"
6"The ivory-handled cane rested against"
7"She moved to close the"
8"His hand caught it."
9"He didn't move"
10"Rory's fingers tightened on the"
11"The crescent scar on her"
12"His gaze dropped to her"
13"He tilted his head"
14"Her stomach twisted."
15"Ptolemy materialized between her ankles,"
16"The cat regarded Lucien with"
17"She stepped back"
18"The door swung open."
19"Lucien moved past her in"
ratio0.825
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences80
matches
0"To the scar he'd traced"
1"To a sketch Eva had"
2"Even after everything."
ratio0.038
74.83% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences21
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Rory stood in Eva's doorway wearing yesterday's Golden Empress delivery shirt, smelling of fried rice and rain."
1"Remembered them tracing her collarbone, threading through her hair, pressing against her mouth to muffle her gasps in the back room of that Marseille warehouse …"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences62
tagDensity0.032
leniency0.065
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.6221%