Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTY14EZAJVEEE5FVW6C4DG4

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The body hung upside down from the Camden Lock bridge, suspended by cables that shouldn't have held human weight without tearing through flesh. Detective Harlow Quinn ducked under the police tape, her worn leather watch catching on the plastic as she pushed through. The uniform at the perimeter tried to stop her. She flashed her badge without breaking stride. "Forty minutes." She stopped at the edge of the embankment, looking up at the suspended corpse. "Forty minutes since the call came in, and nobody's cut him down yet." "Forensics wanted photos first." DS Vikram Patel climbed up the slope toward her, his notebook already open. His coat was buttoned wrong. "Plus, there's something you need to see before we move anything." "I'm looking at it." "Not the body." He pointed to the ground near the water's edge. "The position." Quinn followed his gesture. From this angle, the corpse's shadow stretched across the canal path in a shape that didn't match the figure above. It fanned out like wings. "Trick of the light," Patel said. "That's what the tech team thinks. Morning fog, water reflection, all that." Quinn walked down the embankment. The mud squelched under her boots, and the smell hit her. Copper and rot. Old death, not fresh. She crouched near the shadow's edge and touched the pavement. Cold. Too cold for September. "How long has he been dead?" "ME estimates eight to ten hours. Rigor's passing, so closer to ten." "Then why's he still bleeding?" Quinn stood and pointed to the body. Fresh red drops fell from the corpse's fingertips, spattering into the canal water below. "That's active blood flow. arterial, from the look of it." Patel frowned. "The cables. They're positioned to slow circulation, maybe—" "Cables don't cause arterial spray." She pulled gloves from her pocket and snapped them on. "Someone's keeping him bleeding. On purpose." She approached the support strut where the cables anchored. Industrial grade. New. The kind used in theatre rigging or construction. No rust, no wear. She leaned closer to examine the knot work. "Someone studied macramé," she muttered. "Or sailing." Patel had followed her down. "It's a carrick bend. Sailor's knot. Holds under strain." "Sailor's knot on a bridge in Camden." Quinn traced the cable back toward the body. "Our victim have a record?" "Clean. Name's Marcus Webb, thirty-two, works in IT consulting. Family reported him missing four days ago after he didn't come home from a night out with friends." "Friends being?" "Three mates from university. We've contacted two. The third's in Italy on holiday." "Convenient." Patel shrugged. "Alibi checked out. Hotel records, credit card transactions. He flew out three days before Webb went missing." Quinn circled the anchor point. Something glinted in the mud near the base of the strut. She knelt, careful not to disturb the immediate area, and plucked the object free with tweezers. A bone disc. Small, no bigger than a coin, with symbols etched into the surface. She'd seen similar markings before. Three years ago. The night Morris died. "Find something?" "Evidence bag." She held out her hand without looking up. Patel placed one in her palm, and she sealed the disc inside. The bone was warm against the plastic. Wrong. Bone shouldn't hold heat like that. "What is it?" "Not sure yet." She slipped the bag into her jacket pocket. "Anything else unusual about the scene?" "Besides the upside-down crucifixion pose?" Patel consulted his notes. "No wallet, no phone, no identification on the body. We ID'd him through dental records on file from an old injury. And there's one more thing. The position of his hands." Quinn looked up at the corpse again. The arms hung below the head, fingers pointing toward the water. The hands were open. Palms up. "Receiving position," she said. "Someone wanted him to catch something." "Catch what?" "That's the question." She studied the surrounding area. Camden Lock at this hour meant market traders setting up stalls, early tourists, commuters cutting through to the tube. Yet nobody had reported seeing anything. A man strung up like a marionette, bleeding for hours, and not a single witness. "People see what they expect to see," Patel said, as if reading her thoughts. "He looks like an art installation. Camden's full of them. Performance artists, street performers. Someone probably walked right past and thought it was a show." "Maybe." Quinn didn't sound convinced. "But that doesn't explain why we didn't get a call until the blood started hitting the water. Look at that spray pattern." She pointed to the canal surface. The drops fell in a perfect circle, each one landing equidistant from the last. Mathematical. Precise. As if the body had been rotated at intervals to maintain the pattern. "That's ritual," she said. "That's a stretch." "Is it?" She turned to face him. "Man goes missing for four days. Shows up strung up like a puppet, bleeding on a schedule, with his shadow making shapes that shouldn't exist. And we found him how far from the nearest station?" "Chalk Farm Road's about half a mile that way." Patel pointed. "Camden Town's maybe the same distance in the other direction." "Abandoned stations." "We're not—" "There's one underneath Camden. Old tube station from the twenties. Never opened to the public." Quinn checked her watch. "The tunnels connect to the active lines. Maintenance crews use them sometimes." Patel's expression shifted. He knew something. "What?" "The phone records. Webb's mobile last pinged a tower near Camden Road station. But there's a gap in the data. Four hours where his phone seems to have gone dark, then it reappears on a different network entirely." "Which network?" "One that doesn't exist." Patel flipped a page in his notebook. "Technical team thinks it's a glitch. Roaming error. But I've seen this before, Quinn. Two other cases in the past year. Both unsolved. Both with bodies found in unusual positions near underground access points." Quinn's pulse quickened. She pulled out the evidence bag with the bone disc. The symbols seemed darker now, more pronounced than they'd been minutes ago. "This wasn't random," she said. "Webb was chosen. Positioned. Displayed. Someone wanted him found exactly like this, at exactly this time, in exactly this place." "For what purpose?" Before Quinn could answer, a shout came from above. One of the forensics techs was waving from the bridge deck. "We've got movement! He's still alive!" Quinn swore and sprinted up the embankment, mud flying from her boots. She reached the bridge just as the forensics team swarmed the body. The chest was rising. Falling. Shallow, but present. "How?" Patel arrived beside her, breathing hard. "He's been dead for—" "He wasn't dead." Quinn grabbed the nearest tech. "Get him down. Now. And call an ambulance." "We can't just cut the cables, they're part of the crime scene—" "That's a human being bleeding out over a canal. Cut him down." The tech hesitated, then pulled a knife from his kit. He sawed through the first cable. The body shifted. The shadow on the path below stretched wider. And then Quinn saw it. As the corpse swung free of the rigging, the shadow didn't move with it. The winged shape remained on the ground, dark and solid, as if it had been there long before the body arrived. She looked at the water. The blood drops had stopped falling. But the pattern they'd made was complete now. A perfect circle of red spreading outward from a centre point, and in its middle, a shape was forming. She knelt at the canal's edge, and the shape resolved into something that looked like a map. "Quinn." Patel's voice was tight. "You need to see what's in his pocket." She turned. Patel was holding a plastic evidence bag. Inside was a small brass compass, its face etched with symbols that matched the bone disc. The needle was spinning wildly, pointing in every direction at once, then settling on a single bearing. Straight down. "He was carrying this when they strung him up," Patel said. "They wanted him to have it. Wanted us to find it." "Or wanted someone else to find it." Quinn stood slowly. "Someone who knows what it means." The compass needle held steady, pointing toward the canal bed. Or the tunnels beneath it. A sound echoed from somewhere below the bridge. Metal on metal. A gate opening, perhaps. Or closing. Quinn looked at Patel. "You heard that?" "I heard it." The compass needle began to spin again. The shadow on the path rippled, though the body was still now, and no wind stirred the air. "Get forensics to process everything," Quinn said, backing toward the embankment. "And tell the ambulance crew to check for injection sites. I don't think he was meant to wake up." "Where are you going?" But she was already moving, pulling her phone from her pocket, dialling a number she hadn't used in three years. The number that had belonged to her former partner. Someone picked up on the first ring. "Detective Quinn." The voice was female, young, unfamiliar. "We've been expecting your call."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags27
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Quinn stood slowly [slowly]"
dialogueSentences79
tagDensity0.342
leniency0.684
rawRatio0.037
effectiveRatio0.025
96.70% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1514
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
60.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Marcus"
1"Patel"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
66.97% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1514
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"traced"
count1
2
word"etched"
count2
3
word"perfect"
count2
4
word"pulse"
count1
5
word"quickened"
count1
6
word"resolved"
count1
7
word"echoed"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"traced"
2"etched"
3"perfect"
4"pulse"
5"quickened"
6"resolved"
7"echoed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences118
matches(empty)
94.43% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences118
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences168
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1512
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions42
wordCount873
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.95
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
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Lock2
Harlow1
Quinn17
Vikram1
Patel16
September1
Fresh1
Morris1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Vikram"
3"Patel"
4"Morris"
places
0"Camden"
1"Lock"
globalScore0.526
windowScore0.5
70.63% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences63
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as if reading her thoughts"
1"looked like a map"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1512
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences168
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
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mean19.14
std13.47
cv0.704
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136
229
333
44
514
629
718
838
96
1012
1136
1210
1321
1432
155
1616
1720
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2013
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2219
2332
2427
252
2636
273
2817
2940
3024
3110
322
3348
3439
3527
3635
374
383
3942
4021
412
422
4331
446
451
4638
472
4845
4925
99.32% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences118
matches
0"was buttoned"
1"been rotated"
0.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs156
matches
0"was waving"
1"was rising"
2"was forming"
3"was holding"
4"was spinning"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences168
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount873
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.020618556701030927
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.003436426116838488
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences168
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences168
mean9
std6.87
cv0.763
sampleLengths
023
120
29
37
416
513
617
75
811
94
1012
112
124
1320
145
156
1612
175
1811
193
204
2110
221
234
246
2512
2612
2714
2810
292
308
3115
326
339
342
351
368
374
388
395
407
419
4215
435
4427
452
4613
471
482
4917
76.79% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.48214285714285715
totalSentences168
uniqueOpeners81
34.01% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences98
matches
0"Too cold for September."
ratio0.01
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences98
matches
0"She flashed her badge without"
1"She stopped at the edge"
2"His coat was buttoned wrong."
3"He pointed to the ground"
4"It fanned out like wings."
5"She crouched near the shadow's"
6"She pulled gloves from her"
7"She approached the support strut"
8"She leaned closer to examine"
9"She knelt, careful not to"
10"She'd seen similar markings before."
11"She held out her hand"
12"She slipped the bag into"
13"She studied the surrounding area"
14"She pointed to the canal"
15"She turned to face him"
16"He knew something."
17"She pulled out the evidence"
18"She reached the bridge just"
19"He sawed through the first"
ratio0.224
51.84% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount80
totalSentences98
matches
0"The body hung upside down"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn ducked under"
2"The uniform at the perimeter"
3"She flashed her badge without"
4"She stopped at the edge"
5"DS Vikram Patel climbed up"
6"His coat was buttoned wrong."
7"He pointed to the ground"
8"Quinn followed his gesture."
9"It fanned out like wings."
10"Quinn walked down the embankment."
11"The mud squelched under her"
12"Copper and rot."
13"She crouched near the shadow's"
14"Quinn stood and pointed to"
15"She pulled gloves from her"
16"She approached the support strut"
17"The kind used in theatre"
18"She leaned closer to examine"
19"Patel had followed her down"
ratio0.816
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences98
matches
0"As if the body had"
1"Before Quinn could answer, a"
ratio0.02
71.43% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences30
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"The body hung upside down from the Camden Lock bridge, suspended by cables that shouldn't have held human weight without tearing through flesh."
1"Inside was a small brass compass, its face etched with symbols that matched the bone disc."
2"But she was already moving, pulling her phone from her pocket, dialling a number she hadn't used in three years."
87.96% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags27
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"DS Vikram Patel climbed, his notebook already open"
1"Patel said, as if reading her thoughts"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences79
tagDensity0.101
leniency0.203
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.025
85.3361%