Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTY1C984QAA9KA8MMXSGPQT

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Duration:
57.3s
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$0.059634
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Google AI Studio

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
"Sapphire Gin. Neat. And don't bother with the lime, it just masks the cheap ethanol you undoubtedly refill these bottles with." The voice cut through the low hum of the refrigerator fan like a scalpel through dead tissue. Precise. Clinical. Utterly devoid of warmth. I didn't look up from the pint glass I was drying. My thumb traced the rim, feeling for chips, while the rag squeaked against the warm glass. "We don't refill bottles, mate. And the lime is fresh." "Rory. Please. I recognize a defiant lie when I hear one. I sat next to you in Torts for two years." The glass slipped. Just an inch. I caught it before it hit the mat, but the fumble was enough. My heart hammered a erratic rhythm against my ribs—*thump-pause-thump-thump*. I set the glass down, took a breath of stale beer and beeswax polish, and looked up. Julian Thorne. He looked like he’d been carved out of money. The charcoal three-piece suit was bespoke, leaning into the Italian cut that emphasized a waist he didn't used to have. His hair, once a unruly mop of dirty blonde that smelled of late-night library coffee and panic, was now gelled into a sleek, obedient helmet. But the eyes were the same. Pale grey. Calculating. "Julian," I said. The name tasted like ash. "You're a long way from the Inns of Court." "And you're a long way from the Dean's List." He gestured to the bar, his manicured hand sweeping over the scarred mahogany, the peeling coasters, the distinct green neon sign buzzing aggressively in the window. "Is this the grand plan? The reason you vanished in the middle of the Easter term?" "I asked for gin," he added, tapping the wood. I reached for the bottle. My hand was steady now. The crescent-shaped scar on my left wrist caught the amber light from the overheads. I saw his eyes flick to it, then away. He knew that scar. He knew the tree I’d fallen out of when I was ten. He didn't know the scars I’d picked up since. "Sapphire," I said, pouring. The liquid glugged into the heavy tumbler. "Neat. That’ll be eight quid." "On the house, surely? For old time's sake?" "Eight quid. Silas has a knee injury, not a head injury. He counts the inventory." Julian chuckled, a dry sound that didn't reach his eyes. He pulled a crisp twenty from a leather clip and slid it across the damp wood. "Keep the change. You look like you need it." I left the note where it lay. "What do you want, Julian? Soho isn't your scene. The cocaine here is cut with drywall and the whores don't take Amex." "Crude," he murmured, taking a sip. He grimaced, but not at the taste. "I'm meeting a client. In ten minutes. I saw the name above the door. *The Raven's Nest*. Reminded me of that Poe essay you were obsessed with. Thought I'd see if the universe had a sense of humor." He swirled the drink. "It does. It's a cruel one." I grabbed a rag and started wiping down the counter, purely to have something to do with my hands. "I'm working. So unless you want another drink—" "I made Junior Partner." The rag stopped. "Six months ago," he continued, studying his reflection in the mirror behind the bar. "Youngest in the firm's history. I'm handling the grand larceny cases now. The white-collar stuff. The exciting stuff." "Congratulations. Try not to defend anyone who murders their spouse." "We all do what we must to survive, Rory." He turned back to me, his face dropping the mask for a microsecond. In the harsh green glow of the neon sign, he looked older. Tired. The skin beneath his eyes was bruised with exhaustion, layered over with expensive concealer. "Your father asks about you." The air left the room. From the shadows near the back office, the floorboards creaked. Silas. He wouldn't step in unless I gave the signal, but his presence was a heavy, comforting weight, like a loaded gun on a nightstand. "Don't," I warned. "Brendan is... concerned," Julian pressed, leaning forward. The smell of sandalwood and expensive scotch rolled off him, suffocating the scent of the bar's lemons and sanitizer. "He thinks you're on drugs. Or in a cult. He has a PI on retainer, strictly for the sightings." "He has a daughter who wants to be left alone." "He has a daughter who was the brightest legal mind of her generation and threw it away to scrub counters for a cripple in a Soho dive," Julian snapped. The venom was sudden, startling. It wasn't concern. It was anger. I stared at him. Really looked at him. I saw the tremor in his left hand, the way he kept tapping the signet ring on his pinky against the glass. *Tap. Tap. Tap.* "You hate it," I said softly. Julian froze. "The firm," I clarified. "The suits. The billable hours. The moral flexibility. You hate every second of it." "Don't psychoanalyze me, drop-out." "You came in here to gloat," I said, leaning over the bar, invading his space. "To show me the suit. To show me the watch—Patek Philippe, very nice. You wanted to look at me, the barrister's daughter washing glasses, and feel superior. You wanted to validate your choice." I pointed to the glass in his hand. "But you're drinking gin at 4:00 PM on a Tuesday, and your hands are shaking." Julian slammed the glass down. Gin sloshed over the rim, darkening the wood. "You ran away," he hissed. "You left us. You left *me* with them. Do you know what it was like? Finishing that degree alone? Walking into those exams knowing the only person who actually understood the coursework was gone? You were a coward, Aurora." "I survived." "You hid." He stood up, buttoning his jacket with jagged movements. "You're hiding right now. You think this is noble? This is purgatory. You're haunting your own life." "Better to haunt my life than to sell it." I swept the twenty-pound note off the bar and shoved it into his breast pocket. "Take your money. You'll need it for the alimony." His eyes widened slightly. "No ring," I said, gesturing to his bare hand. "But a tan line on the fourth finger. Fresh. She left recently? Or did you drive her away with the 'I made Partner' speeches?" Julian stared at me, his jaw working. The polish of the high-flying solicitor cracked, revealing the scared student underneath—the one who used to cheat off my notes in Property Law because he was terrified of his father's disappointment. For a second, I wanted to reach out. To offer him a coffee. To ask him who hurt him. Then the door opened. A man stepped in. Heavy coat. scarred knuckles. Eyes that scanned the room like a predator assessing a herd. He wasn't a lawyer. He was the kind of client lawyers like Julian represented—the kind who paid in cash and silence. Julian straightened immediately, the mask slamming back into place. The terrified boy vanished; the shark returned. "That's my meeting," Julian said, his voice flat, devoid of the heat from moments ago. He downed the rest of the gin in one swallow, wincing as it hit his stomach. "Julian," I said. A warning. The man at the door was armed; I could see the bulge under the left armpit. "Walk away." "We can't all deliver takeaways, Rory." He adjusted his tie, centering the knot. "Some of us have to deal with the world as it is." He turned to leave, but stopped. He didn't look back at me, just spoke to the empty air ahead of him. "I'm giving Brendan your address." The blood roared in my ears. "Don't." "He's my Senior Partner now," Julian said, and the unspoken weight of that sentence hung between us. It wasn't a choice. It was a transaction. He was selling me to buy his own security. "Grow up, Aurora. Playtime is over." He walked toward the man at the door. They didn't shake hands. The man jerked his head toward the black sedan idling at the curb. Julian stepped out into the grey London drizzle without hesitation. I stood there, gripping the wet rag until my knuckles turned white. The door swung shut, cutting off the street noise, but the chime of the bell echoed, fading slowly into the silence of the bar. "He's going to regret that," a voice rasped from the shadows. Silas limped out of the back room. He was holding a heavy iron key in one hand and a fresh bottle of whiskey in the other. He didn't look at the door. He looked at me. "He gave me up," I whispered. "To my father." "I heard." Silas placed the whiskey on the counter. Cork popped. The smell of peat and heather filled the space between us. "Question is, what are you going to do about it?" I looked at the spot where Julian had sat. The wet ring from his glass was already drying, fading into the wood, leaving nothing behind but a sticky residue. "I'm not running this time," I said. Silas poured two glasses. He slid one across the bar. It stopped exactly at the edge, defying the momentum. "Good," he said. "Because the back room is full. And I need someone to help me count the ammunition."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags28
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"He turned back [back]"
1"I said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences62
tagDensity0.452
leniency0.903
rawRatio0.071
effectiveRatio0.065
81.04% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1582
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"utterly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
3
adverb"very"
count1
4
adverb"slightly"
count1
5
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"utterly"
1"really"
2"softly"
3"very"
4"slightly"
5"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
55.75% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1582
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"warmth"
count1
1
word"traced"
count1
2
word"calculating"
count1
3
word"sense of"
count1
4
word"comforting"
count1
5
word"weight"
count2
6
word"scanned"
count1
7
word"predator"
count1
8
word"silence"
count2
9
word"stomach"
count1
10
word"unspoken"
count1
11
word"echoed"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"traced"
2"calculating"
3"sense of"
4"comforting"
5"weight"
6"scanned"
7"predator"
8"silence"
9"stomach"
10"unspoken"
11"echoed"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"knuckles turned white"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
1"knuckles turned white"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences122
matches
0"was terrified"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences122
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences156
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords8
totalWords1572
ratio0.005
matches
0"thump-pause-thump-thump"
1"The Raven's Nest"
2"Tap. Tap. Tap."
3"me"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions22
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions23
wordCount988
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.32
worstName"Julian"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Julian"
discoveredNames
Thorne1
Italian1
Julian13
Property1
Law1
London1
Silas4
Cork1
persons
0"Thorne"
1"Julian"
2"Silas"
places
0"Italian"
1"Property"
2"London"
3"Cork"
globalScore0.842
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences67
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like he’d been carved out of money"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1572
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences156
matches
0"knew that scar"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs63
mean24.95
std17.64
cv0.707
sampleLengths
021
123
237
321
445
52
663
717
851
99
1058
1116
128
1315
1435
1529
1661
1727
184
193
2032
2110
2254
235
2435
253
2645
2710
2840
2933
306
312
3218
334
3471
3513
3644
372
3828
3933
404
4133
4257
434
4440
4516
4631
4723
4825
4921
96.64% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences122
matches
0"been carved"
1"was terrified"
2"was armed"
92.47% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs186
matches
0"was drying"
1"was selling"
2"was holding"
51.28% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences156
ratio0.032
matches
0"My heart hammered a erratic rhythm against my ribs—*thump-pause-thump-thump*."
1"The polish of the high-flying solicitor cracked, revealing the scared student underneath—the one who used to cheat off my notes in Property Law because he was terrified of his father's disappointment."
2"He was the kind of client lawyers like Julian represented—the kind who paid in cash and silence."
3"The terrified boy vanished; the shark returned."
4"The man at the door was armed; I could see the bulge under the left armpit."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount995
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.022110552763819097
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.010050251256281407
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences156
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences156
mean10.08
std8.08
cv0.802
sampleLengths
021
117
21
31
44
511
616
710
821
93
103
1113
129
1317
142
159
1620
1725
186
192
201
213
225
239
2435
2516
269
275
285
2914
309
314
3212
339
344
357
365
378
3815
3910
4016
419
427
4322
446
457
4642
476
4819
498
49.15% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats20
diversityRatio0.3717948717948718
totalSentences156
uniqueOpeners58
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences98
matches
0"Utterly devoid of warmth."
1"Just an inch."
2"Really looked at him."
3"Then the door opened."
ratio0.041
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount54
totalSentences98
matches
0"I didn't look up from"
1"My thumb traced the rim,"
2"I caught it before it"
3"My heart hammered a erratic"
4"I set the glass down,"
5"He looked like he’d been"
6"His hair, once a unruly"
7"He gestured to the bar,"
8"he added, tapping the wood"
9"I reached for the bottle."
10"My hand was steady now."
11"I saw his eyes flick"
12"He knew that scar."
13"He knew the tree I’d"
14"He didn't know the scars"
15"I said, pouring"
16"He pulled a crisp twenty"
17"I left the note where"
18"he murmured, taking a sip"
19"He grimaced, but not at"
ratio0.551
11.02% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount88
totalSentences98
matches
0"The voice cut through the"
1"I didn't look up from"
2"My thumb traced the rim,"
3"The glass slipped."
4"I caught it before it"
5"My heart hammered a erratic"
6"I set the glass down,"
7"He looked like he’d been"
8"The charcoal three-piece suit was"
9"His hair, once a unruly"
10"The name tasted like ash."
11"He gestured to the bar,"
12"he added, tapping the wood"
13"I reached for the bottle."
14"My hand was steady now."
15"The crescent-shaped scar on my"
16"I saw his eyes flick"
17"He knew that scar."
18"He knew the tree I’d"
19"He didn't know the scars"
ratio0.898
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences98
matches
0"To offer him a coffee."
1"To ask him who hurt"
ratio0.02
73.73% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences31
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"The charcoal three-piece suit was bespoke, leaning into the Italian cut that emphasized a waist he didn't used to have."
1"His hair, once a unruly mop of dirty blonde that smelled of late-night library coffee and panic, was now gelled into a sleek, obedient helmet."
2"He was the kind of client lawyers like Julian represented—the kind who paid in cash and silence."
89.29% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags28
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"He turned back, his face dropping the mask for a microsecond"
1"Julian said, his voice flat, devoid of the heat from moments ago"
4.84% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags19
fancyCount9
fancyTags
0"he added (add)"
1"he murmured (murmur)"
2"he continued (continue)"
3"I warned (warn)"
4"Julian pressed (press)"
5"Julian snapped (snap)"
6"I clarified (clarify)"
7"he hissed (hiss)"
8"I whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences62
tagDensity0.306
leniency0.613
rawRatio0.474
effectiveRatio0.29
81.2845%