Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTY1K23KA91P2H13PFQDHSB

Run Details

Duration:
31.7s
Cost:
$0.036634
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The air clung to her skin, thick and sweet like honeyed wine, a stark contrast to the crisp autumn night she had left behind only moments ago. Ferns, impossibly large and soft as velvet, brushed against her jeans as she pushed deeper into the clearing. They left damp trails that felt unnervingly warm. This was the place. Richmond Park fell away behind a veil she couldn't see but felt as a pressure against her ears, like descending too quickly in a lift. The Fae Grove. She paused, straining to see the boundary. The ancient oak standing stones, her entry point, had vanished, swallowed by the oppressive twilight of the canopy. Above, the moon was not the familiar, friendly pearl of London's sky. It was a silver wound leaking cold light through a lattice of black, twisted branches. A sense of profound isolation settled over her, heavier than the humid air. She was an island in a place that followed no earthly map. Against her sternum, beneath her jacket, a small patch of warmth bloomed. The Heartstone Pendant. Its faint, steady pulse was a comfort, a confirmation. The deep crimson gemstone, a gift from a ghost, had led her here. Yet, its rhythmic heat was inconsistent, stuttering for a beat before resuming its steady thrum. It felt less like a beacon and more like a nervous heart. The aural landscape was the first thing to truly set her on edge. The constant, low hum of the city was gone, replaced by a silence so complete it felt manufactured. It was a waiting silence, an expectant hush that made the crunch of her own boots on the mossy ground sound like sacrilege. Then came the sound. The sharp crack of a dry twig snapping under a heavy weight. Rory froze, every muscle tensed. She held her breath, listening. A fox, perhaps. A badger. London's wildlife was bold. But the silence that rushed back in was different. Deeper. It was no longer empty; it was occupied. Something was listening with her. She slowly scanned the trees, the impenetrable darkness between their gnarled trunks. Nothing. She forced a steadying breath and moved on, her hand instinctively going to the cool silver chain at her neck. She pressed forward, aiming for the core of the grove where the influence was said to be strongest. Wildflowers bloomed on all sides, their colours obscene in the moonlight. Blues so deep they were almost black, yellows that glowed with a sickening phosphorescence, and reds the colour of fresh blood. A patch of what looked like foxgloves seemed to turn their bell-shaped heads to follow her progress. Her mind recoiled from the thought. Just a trick of the light. A breeze she couldn't feel. It happened at the edge of her vision. A flicker of movement. Something tall and spindly darting between two ancient oaks. When she snapped her head around, the space was empty. The grotesque flowers swayed. Her cool-headed nature, the very thing she prided herself on, began to fray. She rubbed the small, crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, a nervous tic from childhood she thought she had long since conquered. Her own body was betraying her calm. A whisper coiled through the air, winding around the tree trunks. It was sibilant, like the rustle of dry leaves, but it held a distinct shape. Her shape. *Malphora.* She spun, her boots digging into the soft earth. The name was alien, yet it struck a chord of discordant recognition deep within her. It was a name from a nightmare she couldn't quite recall. "Who's there?" Her voice was a ragged tear in the fabric of the silence. The only answer was the thrumming stillness. The flowers watched. The trees listened. And the pendant against her chest went suddenly, horribly cold. It was not a neutral absence of heat, but an active, biting chill, like a shard of ice pressed against her skin. It leeched the warmth from her body, a clear, unequivocal signal of wrongness. The Heartstone was supposed to glow near Fae influence, near portals. This cold felt like the opposite. An anti-portal. A trap. That was enough. This was a mistake. Whatever information she hoped to find here was not worth this primal, rising dread. She turned, intending to march straight back the way she came, using instinct as her compass. But the grove had reshaped itself. The path she had forged through the ferns was gone. The trees stood in a different configuration, a baffling, seamless wall of wood and shadow.Panic, cold and sharp, pricked her skin. She fought it down, a swimmer battling a fierce undertow. Logic. She needed to rely on logic. She had walked towards the centre. The boundary stones must be directly behind her. But every direction looked identical, a disorienting panorama of impossible geometry and predatory flora. Then she saw it. In what she supposed was the very heart of the clearing, a pool of water shimmered where only moss had been moments before. She was certain of it. It was a perfect, dark circle, its surface as smooth and black as polished jet. It did not reflect the grasping branches above, only the wounded moon and a spray of stars she did not recognise. It was a hole in the world. An inexplicable compulsion drew her forward. Her feet moved without her consent, carrying her to the edge of the still, black water. She needed to see, to understand what this place was showing her. She knelt on the damp moss, her reflection rising from the depths to meet her. Bright blue eyes, wide with a fear she refused to name. Straight, shoulder-length black hair framing a pale face. The delicate silver chain of the Heartstone visible at her throat. It was her. A perfect mirror. A wave of relief washed over her, so potent it almost made her laugh. Her mind was playing tricks on her. The stress, the strangeness of the Grove. It was all in her head. Her reflection smiled. It was a slow, stretching grin that pulled the lips back from the teeth in a predatory snarl. It was a smile of ancient hunger and malicious glee. And it did not touch the cold, calculating eyes. Rory remained kneeling, her own face a mask of frozen horror, her muscles locked. The hand in the reflection, her left hand, lifted. The small, crescent-shaped scar on its wrist was a stark white line against the pale skin. Her own hand remained clenched in the moss at her side. The reflection's fingers reached up and pressed against the underside of the water's surface. The black liquid bulged, stretching upward like a thin, dark membrane, straining to break.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags0
73.33% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1125
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"truly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
3
adverb"very"
count2
4
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"truly"
2"slowly"
3"very"
4"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1125
totalAiIsms26
found
0
word"stark"
count2
1
word"velvet"
count1
2
word"oppressive"
count1
3
word"familiar"
count1
4
word"sense of"
count1
5
word"profound"
count1
6
word"warmth"
count2
7
word"pulse"
count1
8
word"rhythmic"
count1
9
word"beacon"
count1
10
word"silence"
count4
11
word"weight"
count1
12
word"scanned"
count1
13
word"flicker"
count1
14
word"whisper"
count1
15
word"chill"
count1
16
word"shimmered"
count1
17
word"perfect"
count2
18
word"depths"
count1
19
word"calculating"
count1
highlights
0"stark"
1"velvet"
2"oppressive"
3"familiar"
4"sense of"
5"profound"
6"warmth"
7"pulse"
8"rhythmic"
9"beacon"
10"silence"
11"weight"
12"scanned"
13"flicker"
14"whisper"
15"chill"
16"shimmered"
17"perfect"
18"depths"
19"calculating"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"wave of emotion"
count1
highlights
0"A wave of relief"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences110
matches
0"A wave of relief"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences110
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences110
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen27
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords1
totalWords1120
ratio0.001
matches
0"Malphora."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions0
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions11
wordCount1118
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.27
worstName"Heartstone"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"London"
discoveredNames
Park1
Fae2
Grove2
London2
Heartstone3
Pendant1
persons(empty)
places
0"Park"
1"Fae"
2"Grove"
3"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
57.41% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences81
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"looked like foxgloves seemed to turn thei"
1"quite recall"
2"felt like the opposite"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.893
wordCount1120
matches
0"not a neutral absence of heat, but an active, biting chill, like a shard of ice pressed against"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences110
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs19
mean58.95
std29.89
cv0.507
sampleLengths
085
177
264
370
475
584
677
728
81
935
1014
1179
12119
1375
1449
1570
163
1751
1864
92.50% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences110
matches
0"was gone"
1"was said"
2"was supposed"
3"was gone"
49.34% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs177
matches
0"was listening"
1"was betraying"
2"was showing"
3"was playing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences110
ratio0.009
matches
0"It was no longer empty; it was occupied."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1123
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"small, crescent-shaped scar"
1"small, crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount39
adverbRatio0.034728406055209264
lyAdverbCount17
lyAdverbRatio0.015138023152270703
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences110
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences110
mean10.18
std6.05
cv0.594
sampleLengths
027
118
28
34
425
53
67
718
812
915
1013
1112
1212
133
149
1513
1615
1712
1813
1918
2023
214
2212
235
245
253
262
274
289
291
308
315
3212
331
3420
3518
3611
3721
3817
396
406
415
428
434
449
4510
464
4713
4822
497
37.88% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.3090909090909091
totalSentences110
uniqueOpeners34
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences102
matches
0"Then came the sound."
1"Just a trick of the"
2"Then she saw it."
3"Bright blue eyes, wide with"
ratio0.039
59.22% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount41
totalSentences102
matches
0"They left damp trails that"
1"She paused, straining to see"
2"It was a silver wound"
3"She was an island in"
4"Its faint, steady pulse was"
5"It felt less like a"
6"It was a waiting silence,"
7"She held her breath, listening."
8"It was no longer empty;"
9"She slowly scanned the trees,"
10"She forced a steadying breath"
11"She pressed forward, aiming for"
12"Her mind recoiled from the"
13"It happened at the edge"
14"Her cool-headed nature, the very"
15"She rubbed the small, crescent-shaped"
16"Her own body was betraying"
17"It was sibilant, like the"
18"She spun, her boots digging"
19"It was a name from"
ratio0.402
33.53% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount87
totalSentences102
matches
0"The air clung to her"
1"Ferns, impossibly large and soft"
2"They left damp trails that"
3"This was the place."
4"Richmond Park fell away behind"
5"The Fae Grove."
6"She paused, straining to see"
7"The ancient oak standing stones,"
8"It was a silver wound"
9"A sense of profound isolation"
10"She was an island in"
11"The Heartstone Pendant."
12"Its faint, steady pulse was"
13"The deep crimson gemstone, a"
14"It felt less like a"
15"The aural landscape was the"
16"The constant, low hum of"
17"It was a waiting silence,"
18"The sharp crack of a"
19"Rory froze, every muscle tensed."
ratio0.853
49.02% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences102
matches
0"Yet, its rhythmic heat was"
ratio0.01
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences55
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Blues so deep they were almost black, yellows that glowed with a sickening phosphorescence, and reds the colour of fresh blood."
1"It was a slow, stretching grin that pulled the lips back from the teeth in a predatory snarl."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags0
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
84.6743%