Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTY2FET1453DCP3GAPGKPGV

Run Details

Duration:
1m 14s
Cost:
$0.012377
Provider:
Moonshot AI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door didn't swing open so much as it surrendered, exhaling the November cold into the amber warmth. Rory looked up from the glass she was polishing, the rag twisting around her fingers like a tourniquet. "Laila." Only one person still called her that. Rory's hand stalled. The glass caught the light from the green neon sign above the bar, refracting it across the worn mahogany like a warning signal. "Eva." The woman in the doorway had cut her hair. The wild auburn curls Rory remembered from Cardiff, the ones that used to tangle in park swings and pub garden fences, had vanished. In their place sat a sharp, expensive bob that framed cheekbones like knife edges. She wore a camel coat that cost more than three months of Rory's rent. "You still work here," Eva said. It wasn't a question. She stepped inside, letting the door thud shut behind her. "I thought you'd have moved on by now." "Moved on to what?" "Anything." Eva approached the bar, her heels clicking a rhythm that didn't match the jazz record spinning in the corner. "You were always the clever one. The one with the plans." Rory set the glass down. It rang against the wood, a clear, high note. "Plans change." Silas emerged from the back room, his limp barely perceptible after a decade of practice. He carried himself like a man who knew exactly how much space he occupied and not an inch more. His silver signet ring glinted as he reached for a bottle of scotch. "Drink?" he asked Eva. "Large." "Same for you, Rory?" She nodded. She hadn't planned on drinking tonight, hadn't planned on anything except crawling upstairs to her flat and sleeping until her shift at the restaurant tomorrow. But plans, as she'd said, changed. Silas poured two measures with the precision of a man who had once assembled sniper rifles in the dark. He slid the glasses across the bar, his hazel eyes catching Rory's for a fraction longer than necessary. A silent question. *Do you know this woman? Is there danger?* Rory shook her head, barely perceptible. Silas retreated to his station at the far end, within earshot but outside the blast radius. Eva took the stool nearest the wall, beneath a black-and-white photograph of Prague in winter. She shrugged off the coat, revealing a silk blouse the colour of dried blood. No jewellery except a thin gold band on her left hand. Rory stared at it until her eyes burned. "You're not in Cardiff," Rory said. "I'm everywhere now. Consultancy work. Boring stuff." "You hate computers." "I hate a lot of things I didn't used to." Eva lifted her glass, examined the amber liquid against the light. "You look tired, Laila." "Don't call me that." "Why not? It's your name." "It's a ghost." Eva laughed, but the sound lacked music. It scraped against the quiet like a chair leg dragging across stone. "We were all ghosts back then. Running around that bloody university, pretending we knew what suffering meant." Rory wrapped her hand around her own glass, feeling the chill seep into her palm. The crescent scar on her left wrist peeked out from her sleeve, a pale smile against her skin. She pulled the fabric down. "You never answered my emails," Eva said. "I was busy." "For three years?" "Survival takes up a lot of bandwidth." Eva's fingers tightened on her glass. The knuckles whitened. "You could have called. After. When you got here safe." "You told me to run. I ran. What else was there to say?" "How about goodbye? How about *thank you, Eva, for the train ticket, for lying to your parents, for keeping Evan occupied while I packed*?" The jazz record hit a low, mournful note. Somewhere in the kitchen, a glass shattered. Silas didn't move from his post, but Rory saw his shoulders shift, angling toward them like antennae. "I thanked you," Rory said quietly. "In the note." "The note." Eva tossed back half her scotch. The liquid didn't seem to touch her. Her eyes remained clear, bright, and furious. "The note said *I'm safe. Don't look for me.* Like you were a prisoner escaping, not my best friend since we were six." "Maybe I was." "Maybe you were." Eva turned the glass on the bar, rotating it precisely fifteen degrees, then back again. A nervous habit Rory remembered from exams, from waiting rooms, from the night they'd sat in A&E after Rory's wrist had met the wrong end of a wine glass. "But you weren't the only one in that prison, Rory. You left me in the cell next door." Rory's breath caught. The bar seemed to tilt, the old maps on the walls shifting like tectonic plates. "You knew him before I did. You introduced us." "And I've paid for that every day since." "How? By upgrading your wardrobe? By moving to London and getting a flat in Kensington?" Rory gestured at the coat, the hair, the veneer of success. "You look like you've done well, Eva. You look like you've recovered." Eva's hand stopped turning the glass. She looked down at her lap, at the expensive wool trousers, the leather bag with its gold hardware. When she looked up, something had fractured in her face. The polish, the armour, it cracked along a fault line Rory hadn't seen until this moment. "I married him," Eva said. The words landed between them like a thrown blade. Rory's hand jerked, knocking her glass. Silas was there in an instant, his hand steadying the tumbler before a single drop spilled, but he didn't speak. His eyes remained on Eva, hard as flint. "What?" Rory's voice came from somewhere outside her body. "Three months ago. Registry office. His mother's sapphire ring." Eva touched her throat where a necklace would sit, but her fingers found only skin. "He was different after you left. Quieter. Gentler. He said you'd broken something in him. That he needed someone to help put it back together." Rory stood up. The stool scraped against the floorboards, a scream of wood on wood. "You can't be serious." "I've never been more serious." Eva's voice dropped to a whisper. She reached into her bag, her movements careful, mechanical. She withdrew a photograph and slid it across the bar. "He's looking for you, Rory. He's been looking for three years. And now I know where you are." The photograph showed the front door of the Golden Empress restaurant. Yu-Fei's calligraphy sign clearly visible. Rory's scooter parked outside. The timestamp in the corner read yesterday. "He followed me here," Eva said. "He thinks I'll lead him to you. And I will." Rory stared at the image, at the familiar red paint of the restaurant door, at the ghost of her own reflection in the glass. Behind her, she heard Silas set down his cloth. Heard the distinct click of the lock engaging on the front door. The green neon sign buzzed overhead, casting everything in a sickly, underwater light. "Why?" Rory asked. Eva finally looked at her, and in those eyes Rory saw the girl she'd shared a tent with at fourteen, the woman who'd held her hair back during freshers' week, the stranger who had just condemned her. "Because he promised to stop looking if I did," Eva said. "And I'm tired of being the one who stays behind."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Rory said quietly [quietly]"
1"Eva tossed back [back]"
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.36
leniency0.72
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.08
95.95% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1235
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"precisely"
count1
highlights
0"precisely"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
67.61% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1235
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"warmth"
count1
1
word"silk"
count1
2
word"chill"
count1
3
word"shattered"
count1
4
word"fractured"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count1
6
word"mechanical"
count1
7
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"silk"
2"chill"
3"shattered"
4"fractured"
5"whisper"
6"mechanical"
7"familiar"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences83
matches(empty)
91.22% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences83
filterMatches
0"know"
hedgeMatches
0"seem to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences116
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords33
totalWords1232
ratio0.027
matches
0"Do you know this woman? Is there danger?"
1"thank you, Eva, for the train ticket, for lying to your parents, for keeping Evan occupied while I packed"
2"I'm safe. Don't look for me."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
11.27% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions53
wordCount865
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity2.77
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
November1
Rory24
Cardiff1
Eva18
Prague1
Golden1
Empress1
Silas6
persons
0"Rory"
1"Eva"
2"Silas"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"Prague"
globalScore0.113
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences61
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1232
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences116
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs54
mean22.81
std18.43
cv0.808
sampleLengths
036
11
233
31
460
528
64
731
816
947
104
111
124
1333
1448
1522
1648
176
187
193
2025
214
225
233
2436
2538
267
273
283
297
3019
3113
3224
3332
349
3545
363
3765
3827
398
4038
4150
425
4343
449
4549
4619
4748
4827
4916
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences83
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs141
matches
0"was polishing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences116
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount881
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.024971623155505107
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.011350737797956867
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences116
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences116
mean10.62
std7.14
cv0.672
sampleLengths
018
118
21
37
43
523
61
79
823
914
1014
116
124
1310
148
154
1620
1711
185
199
202
2115
2219
2313
244
251
264
272
2825
296
3019
3118
323
335
343
356
3616
3715
3814
3911
408
416
427
433
4421
454
464
475
483
497
52.87% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.35344827586206895
totalSentences116
uniqueOpeners41
88.89% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences75
matches
0"Only one person still called"
1"Somewhere in the kitchen, a"
ratio0.027
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount17
totalSentences75
matches
0"She wore a camel coat"
1"It wasn't a question."
2"She stepped inside, letting the"
3"It rang against the wood,"
4"He carried himself like a"
5"His silver signet ring glinted"
6"he asked Eva"
7"She hadn't planned on drinking"
8"He slid the glasses across"
9"She shrugged off the coat,"
10"It scraped against the quiet"
11"She pulled the fabric down."
12"Her eyes remained clear, bright,"
13"She looked down at her"
14"His eyes remained on Eva,"
15"She reached into her bag,"
16"She withdrew a photograph and"
ratio0.227
26.67% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount65
totalSentences75
matches
0"The door didn't swing open"
1"Rory looked up from the"
2"Rory's hand stalled."
3"The glass caught the light"
4"The woman in the doorway"
5"The wild auburn curls Rory"
6"She wore a camel coat"
7"It wasn't a question."
8"She stepped inside, letting the"
9"Eva approached the bar, her"
10"Rory set the glass down."
11"It rang against the wood,"
12"Silas emerged from the back"
13"He carried himself like a"
14"His silver signet ring glinted"
15"he asked Eva"
16"She hadn't planned on drinking"
17"Silas poured two measures with"
18"He slid the glasses across"
19"A silent question."
ratio0.867
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences75
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences33
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"She wore a camel coat that cost more than three months of Rory's rent."
69.44% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Rory gestured, the hair, the veneer of success"
1"Eva touched, but her fingers found only skin"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.18
leniency0.36
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.7977%