Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTY2TG004F41ZGE8TYWJRQC

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Duration:
22.4s
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$0.003445
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Novita

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The ancient oak standing stones rose from the earth like broken teeth. Aurora Carter checked her phone again. No signal, just as expected. Just as Eva had warned her about this place in Richmond Park. The Fae Grove. She clutched the Heartstone Pendant beneath her jumper. The deep crimson gemstone pulsed faintly, its inner glow casting a weak red light on her fingers. Warm. Too warm for the autumn night. "Right then," she whispered to herself. "In and out. Find whatever Evan left here, and leave." The wildflowers bloomed unnaturally in the moonlight, their vibrant colours a stark contrast to the dying foliage beyond the standing stones. The air hummed with electricity, or something else entirely. Something older. Rory stepped over the boundary marked by the first stone, and the world shifted. Not dramatically, but enough to make her pause. The sounds of London faded completely, replaced by an eerie silence that pressed against her eardrums. Even the breeze seemed to hold its breath. She followed the narrow path into the clearing, her trainers crunching softly on fallen leaves that shouldn't exist in October. They crunched too loudly in the silence. Something rustled in the undergrowth to her left. Rory froze, her hand instinctively flying to the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist—a childhood habit when she felt threatened. She scanned the darkness between trees, but saw nothing. Just shadows that seemed too thick, too purposeful. "Probably just a fox," she told herself, though foxes didn't typically make her feel like prey. The Heartstone Pendant grew hotter against her skin. She pulled it out, watching as its glow intensified. Near a Hel portal, the unknown benefactor had told her. That's what made it pulse. Rory pressed forward, deeper into the grove. The path narrowed, the trees closing in around her. Their branches twisted overhead, creating a canopy that blocked most of the moonlight. Only thin silver beams reached the forest floor, illuminating patches of the strange wildflowers that dotted the clearing. Another sound. A whisper of movement behind her. Rory spun around, but the path behind her was empty. Just standing stones and shadows. She was being followed. Or watched. Or worse. She broke into a jog, her breath coming in short puffs that fogged in the suddenly cold air. The map Eva had drawn showed a hollow tree at the centre of the grove. That's where Evan had hidden whatever he'd stolen from her. Something important enough to bring her here, despite the warnings. The trees thinned as she approached the centre of the clearing. There it was—a massive oak, hollowed out with age, its trunk split open like a wound. Rory approached it slowly, her senses on high alert. The Heartstone Pendant was almost burning now, its crimson light visible even through her jumper. This was definitely the place. She reached into the hollow, her fingers brushing against something smooth and cool. A small wooden box, locked. Of course it was locked. Rory pulled it out and examined the lock in the dim light. Simple enough. She reached into her pocket for the lockpicks she always carried—a habit from her brief and regrettable Pre-Law days when she'd considered becoming a barrister like her father before fleeing to London. A twig snapped nearby. Rory's head shot up. The shadows between the trees seemed to have moved closer, darker now, almost liquid in their movement. "Who's there?" she called out, her voice steadier than she felt. No answer. Just the oppressive silence that had fallen again, heavier this time. Rory turned back to the lock, her fingers working quickly despite their trembling. The first pin gave way, then the second. Almost there. Something brushed against her ankle. Rory yelped and jumped back, dropping the box. She looked down but saw nothing. Just leaves and dirt. But she'd felt it. Fingers. Cold, thin fingers. She scrambled backwards, her eyes darting around the clearing. The shadows were definitely moving now, coalescing at the edges of her vision. Figures, barely visible in the darkness, with elongated limbs and too-many joints. Rory scooped up the box and turned to run, but the path back had changed. Or rather, it was gone. The trees had rearranged themselves, closing ranks around her, trapping her in the centre of the grove. "Bugger," she whispered, backing away from the advancing shadows. The Heartstone Pendant blazed against her chest, its crimson light casting long, dancing shadows. The figures retreated from its glow, hissing in languages that hurt her ears. Rory held the pendant out like a shield, backing towards the nearest standing stone. If she could just reach the boundary... The shadows circled her, just beyond the reach of the pendant's light. Their whispers filled the air now, a cacophony of promises and threats in languages she almost understood. "Stay back," she commanded, though her voice shook. One of the figures darted forward, its hand reaching for her. Rory swung the pendant, its light searing the shadowy flesh. The creature shrieked and recoiled, its form flickering like smoke. Rory didn't wait. She ran towards the standing stone, the box clutched in one hand, the pendant held high in the other. The shadows pursued her, their cold fingers brushing against her back, her hair, her neck. She reached the stone and scrambled over it, tumbling to the other side. The world shifted again, the sounds of London rushing back in—a distant siren, the hum of traffic, normal city noise that had never sounded so welcoming. Rory lay on the grass, panting, her heart hammering against her ribs. The pendant's glow had subsided to its normal faint pulse. The shadows were gone. But as she sat up, she noticed something. The wildflowers at her feet, which had been vibrant and alive moments ago, were now withered and brown. And her phone, which she pulled from her pocket, showed a date three days later than when she'd entered the grove. The box in her hand felt suddenly heavier. Rory looked up at the ancient standing stones, now just silent sentinels in the moonlight. She had escaped. For now. But the whispering hadn't completely stopped. It followed her all the way back to the edge of Richmond Park, growing fainter with each step but never quite disappearing. And somewhere in the distance, something that wasn't quite human laughed.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags5
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences6
tagDensity0.833
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
67.04% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1062
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"completely"
count2
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count2
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
4
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"completely"
1"softly"
2"suddenly"
3"slowly"
4"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
34.09% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1062
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"pulsed"
count1
1
word"stark"
count1
2
word"silence"
count3
3
word"scanned"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count2
5
word"whisper"
count1
6
word"oppressive"
count1
7
word"dancing"
count1
8
word"cacophony"
count1
9
word"searing"
count1
10
word"sentinels"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"stark"
2"silence"
3"scanned"
4"pulse"
5"whisper"
6"oppressive"
7"dancing"
8"cacophony"
9"searing"
10"sentinels"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences105
matches(empty)
88.44% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences105
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences106
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1056
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions4
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
77.54% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions40
wordCount1035
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity1.45
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Carter1
Eva2
Richmond2
Park2
Fae1
Grove1
Heartstone4
Pendant4
London3
October1
Hel1
Evan1
Pre-Law1
One1
Rory15
persons
0"Carter"
1"Eva"
2"Pendant"
3"Evan"
4"Rory"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Fae"
3"Grove"
4"London"
5"October"
6"Hel"
7"One"
globalScore0.775
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences76
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"quite human laughed"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.947
wordCount1056
matches
0"Not dramatically, but enough to make her pause"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences106
matches(empty)
65.41% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs35
mean30.17
std11.43
cv0.379
sampleLengths
038
132
216
332
446
527
646
716
832
947
1031
1153
1236
1320
1423
1546
1625
1711
1813
1923
2031
2134
2237
239
2427
2521
2629
278
2831
2937
3039
3126
3247
3328
3439
95.24% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences105
matches
0"being followed"
1"was gone"
2"were gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs170
matches(empty)
35.04% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences106
ratio0.038
matches
0"Rory froze, her hand instinctively flying to the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist—a childhood habit when she felt threatened."
1"There it was—a massive oak, hollowed out with age, its trunk split open like a wound."
2"She reached into her pocket for the lockpicks she always carried—a habit from her brief and regrettable Pre-Law days when she'd considered becoming a barrister like her father before fleeing to London."
3"The world shifted again, the sounds of London rushing back in—a distant siren, the hum of traffic, normal city noise that had never sounded so welcoming."
82.81% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1042
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount55
adverbRatio0.052783109404990404
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.01727447216890595
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences106
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences106
mean9.96
std5.86
cv0.588
sampleLengths
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258
269
2710
285
297
309
3113
3218
332
346
3510
365
374
382
392
4018
4115
4210
4310
4411
4516
469
4715
485
4913
57.55% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.36792452830188677
totalSentences106
uniqueOpeners39
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount8
totalSentences95
matches
0"Too warm for the autumn"
1"Even the breeze seemed to"
2"Just shadows that seemed too"
3"Only thin silver beams reached"
4"Just standing stones and shadows."
5"Of course it was locked."
6"Just the oppressive silence that"
7"Just leaves and dirt."
ratio0.084
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences95
matches
0"She clutched the Heartstone Pendant"
1"she whispered to herself"
2"She followed the narrow path"
3"They crunched too loudly in"
4"She scanned the darkness between"
5"she told herself, though foxes"
6"She pulled it out, watching"
7"Their branches twisted overhead, creating"
8"She was being followed."
9"She broke into a jog,"
10"She reached into the hollow,"
11"She reached into her pocket"
12"she called out, her voice"
13"She looked down but saw"
14"She scrambled backwards, her eyes"
15"she whispered, backing away from"
16"Their whispers filled the air"
17"she commanded, though her voice"
18"She ran towards the standing"
19"She reached the stone and"
ratio0.232
81.05% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount72
totalSentences95
matches
0"The ancient oak standing stones"
1"Aurora Carter checked her phone"
2"The Fae Grove."
3"She clutched the Heartstone Pendant"
4"The deep crimson gemstone pulsed"
5"she whispered to herself"
6"The wildflowers bloomed unnaturally in"
7"The air hummed with electricity,"
8"Rory stepped over the boundary"
9"The sounds of London faded"
10"She followed the narrow path"
11"They crunched too loudly in"
12"Something rustled in the undergrowth"
13"Rory froze, her hand instinctively"
14"She scanned the darkness between"
15"she told herself, though foxes"
16"The Heartstone Pendant grew hotter"
17"She pulled it out, watching"
18"That's what made it pulse."
19"Rory pressed forward, deeper into"
ratio0.758
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences95
matches
0"Just as Eva had warned"
1"If she could just reach"
ratio0.021
53.57% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences48
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"She followed the narrow path into the clearing, her trainers crunching softly on fallen leaves that shouldn't exist in October."
1"Only thin silver beams reached the forest floor, illuminating patches of the strange wildflowers that dotted the clearing."
2"The figures retreated from its glow, hissing in languages that hurt her ears."
3"The world shifted again, the sounds of London rushing back in—a distant siren, the hum of traffic, normal city noise that had never sounded so welcoming."
4"Rory lay on the grass, panting, her heart hammering against her ribs."
5"The wildflowers at her feet, which had been vibrant and alive moments ago, were now withered and brown."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"she called out, her voice steadier than she felt"
1"she commanded, though her voice shook"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
1"she called out (call out)"
2"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences6
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0.75
effectiveRatio0.75
81.2592%