Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTY2VWN1P3W34C6VMPGF8F1

Run Details

Model:
GPT-5.2
Duration:
1m 25s
Cost:
$0.055310
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The green neon over The Raven’s Nest buzzed like an insect caught in a jar, washing the pavement in sour light. Aurora shoved the door with her shoulder, balancing the empty thermal bag against her hip, and stepped into warmth that smelt of spilled lager, old wood, and the lemon oil Silas used on the bar top when he got in one of his moods. Maps climbed the walls in curling layers, all those borders that had shifted while she had been busy packing boxes, changing locks, learning new postcodes. Black-and-white photographs watched from crooked frames: men in trench coats, women with cigarettes and hard mouths, a street in Prague with too much snow. A low thrum of talk moved through the room, broken by the clack of pool balls and the thin laugh of someone showing off. Aurora hooked the bag on the coat stand by the stairs that led up to her flat and rubbed her left wrist where the crescent scar cut pale through her skin. Her eyes flicked across the regulars. Few faces looked up. She liked it like that. Silas stood behind the bar, polishing a glass that already shone, his silver signet ring catching the light whenever his hand turned. His limp gave his movements a rhythm, like a metronome that refused to speed up for anyone. “You’re late,” his mouth shaped around the words without warmth, but his eyes checked her bag first. “Golden Empress ran out of duck. Yu-Fei acted like I’d personally plucked them from the river and let them go.” Silas set the glass down and tipped his chin at the bag. “Empty. Good. Sit, then. Or don’t. Up to you.” Aurora slid onto the nearest stool and leaned her forearms on the bar. The wood held a thousand nicks and rings, a record of nights that had scraped past. She took a breath through her nose, slowed her heart down to match Silas’ pace. She watched him reach for a bottle without looking at the labels; his hands remembered where everything lived. A voice rose near the back, loud enough to cut through the hum. “—told him, I’m not doing favours. Not anymore.” Aurora’s shoulders tightened. The vowels landed wrong for Soho, pulled too clean, too Cardiff. The sound hit her like the first draught through a cracked window. She turned. A woman stood by the shelf of spirits near the far wall, half-hidden behind a pair of men who looked like they’d been born in the bar and would die in it. The woman wore a dark coat with a collar that sat sharp against her jaw. Her hair lay cropped close at the sides and longer on top, brushed back like she had places to be. A small gold hoop sat in one ear. She held a glass low in her hand, fingers loose, as if the drink didn’t matter. Her face carried pieces Aurora recognised and new angles that didn’t fit. The cheeks had hollowed. The eyes had learned how to stay still. Aurora’s mouth dried. The woman’s gaze slid across the room and landed on the bar, on Silas, then on Aurora. She paused, just long enough for the old name to catch between them like a snagged thread. Aurora’s stool scraped back before she remembered to move quietly. The woman walked toward the bar without hurry. Each step looked measured, not stiff, not swaggering, just chosen. Aurora watched her hands—habit, learnt the hard way. No ring. A faint white line ran along one knuckle, as if a blade had kissed it. Up close, the change struck harder. The freckle under the left eye still sat there, stubborn as ever. The mouth looked the same when it pressed shut. Aurora’s voice came out thin. “Eva?” Eva stopped at arm’s length. Her eyes took Aurora in from hair to shoes, like she read a file and compared it to the body in front of her. “Rory.” Eva’s tongue made the nickname sound like a test. “You look… London.” Aurora gave a short laugh that didn’t belong to humour. “Is that what I look like. I thought I looked knackered.” Eva’s gaze dropped to Aurora’s hands on the bar, to the faint scar on her wrist, then back up. “You always looked knackered when you pretended you weren’t.” Silas placed two drinks on the bar: one pale beer, one whisky, neat. He didn’t ask. “You two know each other,” he noted, as if he had announced the weather. Aurora didn’t look at him. “Since we were twelve,” Aurora answered. Eva’s fingers hovered over the whisky glass, then settled around it, claiming it without lifting it. Her eyes stayed on Aurora. “Since you stole Mrs Pritchard’s hall pass and blamed me.” Aurora’s lips twitched. “You threw it out the window.” “You dared me.” “You always did what I dared you.” Eva’s laugh came out once, then died. “Not anymore.” A silence opened between them. The bar noise filled it at first, then thinned, as if the room listened. Aurora glanced at the door, half expecting Cardiff to follow Eva in, trailing damp air and the smell of chip fat. Nothing but strangers. “What are you doing here?” Aurora asked. Eva’s thumb traced the rim of the glass. Her nail looked bitten down. “I came for a drink.” Eva’s gaze slid to Silas’ ring, then to the maps on the wall. “And I found you above a bar with a retired spook.” Silas’ mouth tightened in a line that could have meant amusement or warning. “Bar owner,” he corrected, and wiped the same patch of counter again. Aurora rested her palms flat on the wood. “How did you know I was here?” Eva’s shoulders rose and fell. “I didn’t.” Her eyes hardened. “I didn’t even know you stayed in London. Last I heard, you dropped out and vanished. You stopped answering.” Aurora’s throat moved around words that felt too big. “You heard.” Eva took a sip, swallowed without a flinch. “I heard you left Cardiff like it caught fire. I heard you changed your number. I heard you weren’t coming back.” Aurora’s fingers curled. “I wasn’t.” Eva leaned in a fraction, close enough that Aurora caught a scent of rain on wool and something metallic underneath, like coins held too long. “You didn’t even come to Mum’s funeral.” Aurora’s breath snagged. The bar lights blurred for a beat, then snapped back into focus. Silas shifted at the other end of the counter, but he stayed quiet. Aurora’s voice scraped. “You didn’t tell me.” Eva’s eyes sharpened. “I sent a message.” “I didn’t get it.” Eva’s lips parted, then closed. She set the whisky down with care, as if any extra force would crack the glass. “Right. Of course you didn’t.” Aurora reached into her pocket, pulled out her phone, then stopped. The gesture looked ridiculous. Years sat between the numbers like rubble. “I’d have come,” Aurora pushed out. “If I’d known, I’d have—” Eva’s hand lifted, a quick cut in the air. “Don’t.” The word came flat. “Don’t build a version where you did the right thing. We both know you didn’t want anything that tied you back.” Aurora’s jaw tightened. “I ran because Evan—” Eva’s eyes flicked away at the name, then back, bright with something that didn’t settle into anger or pity. “I know what he did.” Eva’s voice lowered. “I came round your dad’s office. I watched your mum pretend she didn’t see the bruises. I watched you smile like you’d swallowed glass.” Aurora’s nails dug into her palms. “You watched.” Eva’s nostrils flared. “I didn’t know how to get you out.” Her mouth twisted. “I thought you’d come to me. You always came to me.” Aurora leaned back, heat rising up her neck. “I did come to you. I called you the night I left.” Eva’s stare held steady. “I worked nights at the hospital then. I slept days. You knew that.” “I didn’t know anything.” Aurora’s laugh sounded rough. “All I knew was if I stayed one more week, I’d end up with his hands round my throat. I wanted air.” Eva’s fingers flexed around the glass again. “So you took it. And I stayed.” Aurora’s eyes went to Eva’s hair, to the clipped sides, the sharp collar, the knuckle scar. She pictured Eva at nineteen with chipped nail varnish, half-drunk in Bute Park, planning a life that involved nothing worse than a parking ticket. “What happened to you?” Aurora asked, and hated how small it sounded. Eva’s mouth lifted at one corner. “You first.” Eva’s gaze dropped to Aurora’s delivery jacket folded over her arm. “You deliver food now.” Aurora pulled the jacket closer, as if it kept her together. “Part-time.” She met Eva’s eyes. “I rent upstairs. I keep my head down. I pay my bills.” Eva’s stare didn’t soften. “You used to argue cases in your sleep.” Aurora let out a breath. “I used to do lots of things.” Eva’s fingers tapped the bar once, a nervous beat she tried to hide. “And him?” Eva nodded toward Silas without looking at him. “You trust him.” Aurora’s eyes cut to Silas. He watched them both like he measured distances. “He doesn’t lie to me,” Aurora replied. Silas snorted, quiet, like a cough he swallowed. Eva’s gaze went sharp again. “People like that don’t take girls in because they like their chat.” Aurora felt the old instinct to defend, to make it neat, to iron it flat for someone else’s comfort. She kept it messy instead. “He gave me a place when I had nowhere. That’s enough.” Eva’s mouth tightened. “Always taking scraps.” Aurora’s head snapped. “At least I left.” Eva leaned closer, and the bar’s noise faded around the edge of her presence. “I didn’t leave because I had my mum. Then I had my little brother. Then I had debts.” Eva’s eyes held Aurora’s like a grip. “Then I had a job that paid enough to keep the lights on. Then Mum died and I still had my brother, and you weren’t there, and I stopped waiting for you to come back and make it better.” Aurora’s stomach turned. “You’ve got a brother?” Eva blinked, and something like surprise crossed her face, quick and ugly. “Jesus, Rory.” Eva’s laugh cracked. “Of course you didn’t know. You missed the whole bit where my life kept going.” Aurora swallowed. “What’s his name?” Eva’s gaze darted toward the back room, where the bookshelf sat flush against the wall, its spines too tidy for a bar, its dust disturbed as if hands used it. Eva’s fingers tightened on the glass. “Ben.” Eva’s voice dropped. “And he’s not a kid anymore. He got clever. He got angry. He got involved with the wrong people. I spent three years pulling him out of holes and he still kept digging.” Aurora’s lips parted. She reached out, then stopped short of touching Eva’s wrist. “You don’t have to do that alone.” Eva’s eyes flicked to Aurora’s hand, hovering. A muscle jumped in Eva’s jaw. “You don’t get to offer now.” Eva’s words came quiet, and that quiet carried weight. “You don’t get to appear in a bar like a ghost and act like we can pick up where we left off.” Aurora pulled her hand back and wrapped it around her beer, the glass cold enough to hurt. “I didn’t come looking for you,” Aurora replied. “You walked in.” Eva’s gaze didn’t move. “And you didn’t come looking for me.” Eva lifted the whisky and drank, a longer swallow this time. “Not once.” Aurora leaned in, her voice low. “I thought you hated me.” Eva’s mouth twitched. “I did.” Eva’s eyes stayed bright, unblinking. “I do. I don’t know where to put it.” Silas cleared his throat, a small sound that carried. “Back room’s free,” he offered, his gaze on Eva now. “If you need privacy.” Eva’s eyes slid to him, assessing. Aurora watched that look with a jolt; she recognised it in herself when she rode a bike through traffic, when she chose which alley to take home. Eva had learnt it somewhere hard. Eva set the whisky down and let her fingers rest on the wood. “I didn’t come here for a heart-to-heart.” Eva’s gaze returned to Aurora. “I came because someone told me Silas Blackwood kept doors open for people who paid. I needed a door.” Aurora’s pulse picked up. “A door to what?” Eva’s smile showed no teeth. “A door out.” Eva’s hand slipped into her coat pocket and came out with a folded envelope. She placed it on the bar between them like a dare. “And look. There you were. Delivering noodles in your little jacket. Living above the kind of man who knows how to disappear bodies without leaving a stain.” Silas’ ring clicked against the glass as he set it aside. His eyes stayed on the envelope. Aurora didn’t touch it. “You came to use him,” Aurora said, and the words tasted bitter. Eva’s shoulders lifted. “I came to live.” Eva’s gaze held steady. “Same as you did.” Aurora stared at the envelope, at the thick paper, at her own reflection warped in the whisky’s amber. “What’s in it?” Eva’s voice turned thin. “A name. A place. A debt.” Her fingers hovered over the envelope, then pulled back. “And a reminder that I should’ve left when you did.” Aurora’s throat tightened. “Why didn’t you?” Eva’s eyes flashed. “Because you didn’t look back.” Eva’s hand slapped the bar once, sharp enough to make Aurora’s beer jump. “Because if you looked back, you’d have seen me and you’d have—” Eva cut off, teeth clamped, breath hissing through her nose as if she’d bitten her own tongue. Aurora leaned forward, her voice rough. “I’d have what?” Eva’s gaze dropped to Aurora’s wrist again, to the crescent scar. “You’d have taken me with you,” Eva answered, and the words landed hard, ugly with want. “And you didn’t. You left me there with all that noise in my head.” Aurora’s eyes stung. She blinked it away and stared at the envelope until the room steadied. “I didn’t know you needed saving,” Aurora whispered. Eva’s laugh came out as a scoff. “Everyone needs saving at twenty.” Eva’s fingers trembled once, then stilled. “Some of us just don’t get picked.” Silas’ voice cut in, calm as a knife laid flat. “Both of you, decide.” His gaze moved from Aurora to Eva. “You want to talk, talk. You want to do business, do business. Don’t bleed all over my bar for free.” Aurora lifted her eyes to Eva. “What did you get yourself into?” Eva’s stare held hers. “You still asked questions like you could solve the world with them.” Eva nudged the envelope a fraction closer to Aurora. “Open it, then. Use that cool head. Tell me if I should trust the man behind this bar, or if I should run before he sells me to whoever keeps knocking at my door.” Aurora’s hand hovered over the paper, her fingers stiff. “And if I open it,” Aurora murmured, “what do I owe you?” Eva’s mouth pressed into a line. “Nothing.” Eva’s eyes cut sideways, then back. “You already paid.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags39
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"his mouth shaped around [around]"
1"Eva’s fingers trembled once [once]"
dialogueSentences108
tagDensity0.361
leniency0.722
rawRatio0.051
effectiveRatio0.037
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2548
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
72.53% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2548
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"warmth"
count2
1
word"flicked"
count3
2
word"measured"
count2
3
word"silence"
count1
4
word"traced"
count1
5
word"stomach"
count1
6
word"weight"
count1
7
word"pulse"
count1
8
word"reminder"
count1
9
word"trembled"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"flicked"
2"measured"
3"silence"
4"traced"
5"stomach"
6"weight"
7"pulse"
8"reminder"
9"trembled"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"let out a breath"
count1
highlights
0"let out a breath"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences176
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences176
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences248
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen44
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2540
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions150
wordCount1640
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity4.09
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity9
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Silas10
Prague1
Soho1
Cardiff2
Aurora65
Eva67
Bute1
Park1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Silas"
3"Aurora"
4"Eva"
places
0"Prague"
1"Soho"
2"Cardiff"
3"Bute"
4"Park"
globalScore0
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences110
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like they’d been born in the bar a"
1"something like surprise crossed her face, qu"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2540
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences248
matches
0"watched that look"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs172
mean14.77
std14.66
cv0.993
sampleLengths
065
173
246
339
417
520
612
79
862
913
108
1126
122
1391
1424
153
1634
1710
1843
1927
205
211
2229
2313
2410
2511
2619
279
2816
2914
305
316
3221
3310
343
356
363
377
387
392
4019
4124
427
4313
4429
4513
4612
478
487
495
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences176
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs316
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences248
ratio0.012
matches
0"She watched him reach for a bottle without looking at the labels; his hands remembered where everything lived."
1"Aurora watched her hands—habit, learnt the hard way."
2"Aurora watched that look with a jolt; she recognised it in herself when she rode a bike through traffic, when she chose which alley to take home."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount915
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount29
adverbRatio0.03169398907103825
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences248
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences248
mean10.24
std7.37
cv0.72
sampleLengths
021
144
225
324
424
531
66
74
85
922
1017
1117
1220
1312
149
1513
1616
1715
1818
1913
208
213
2211
2312
242
2532
2615
2720
288
2916
3012
314
328
333
3417
3517
3610
378
3810
398
402
4115
426
4312
449
455
461
475
4824
4910
41.53% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats21
diversityRatio0.2056451612903226
totalSentences248
uniqueOpeners51
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences167
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences167
matches
0"Her eyes flicked across the"
1"She liked it like that."
2"His limp gave his movements"
3"his mouth shaped around the"
4"She took a breath through"
5"She watched him reach for"
6"Her hair lay cropped close"
7"She held a glass low"
8"Her face carried pieces Aurora"
9"She paused, just long enough"
10"Her eyes took Aurora in"
11"He didn’t ask."
12"he noted, as if he"
13"Her eyes stayed on Aurora."
14"Her nail looked bitten down."
15"he corrected, and wiped the"
16"Her eyes hardened"
17"She set the whisky down"
18"Her mouth twisted"
19"She pictured Eva at nineteen"
ratio0.18
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount165
totalSentences167
matches
0"The green neon over The"
1"Aurora shoved the door with"
2"Maps climbed the walls in"
3"A low thrum of talk"
4"Aurora hooked the bag on"
5"Her eyes flicked across the"
6"Few faces looked up."
7"She liked it like that."
8"Silas stood behind the bar,"
9"His limp gave his movements"
10"his mouth shaped around the"
11"Silas set the glass down"
12"Aurora slid onto the nearest"
13"The wood held a thousand"
14"She took a breath through"
15"She watched him reach for"
16"A voice rose near the"
17"Aurora’s shoulders tightened."
18"The vowels landed wrong for"
19"The sound hit her like"
ratio0.988
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences167
matches(empty)
ratio0
91.84% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences56
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Maps climbed the walls in curling layers, all those borders that had shifted while she had been busy packing boxes, changing locks, learning new postcodes."
1"A woman stood by the shelf of spirits near the far wall, half-hidden behind a pair of men who looked like they’d been born in the bar and would die in it."
2"Eva’s gaze darted toward the back room, where the bookshelf sat flush against the wall, its spines too tidy for a bar, its dust disturbed as if hands used it."
3"Eva cut off, teeth clamped, breath hissing through her nose as if she’d bitten her own tongue."
73.72% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags39
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"his mouth shaped around, but his eyes checked her bag first"
1"he noted, as if he had announced the weather"
2"Aurora said, and the words tasted bitter"
3"Eva answered, and the words landed hard, ugly with want"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"he noted (note)"
1"he corrected (correct)"
2"Aurora whispered (whisper)"
3"Aurora murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences108
tagDensity0.102
leniency0.204
rawRatio0.364
effectiveRatio0.074
82.6538%