Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTY31K12BBTNY3J9TE2JPSP

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1m 46s
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$0.004513
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OpenAI

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

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The shelf groaned, and the secret door opened with a sigh like a lung finally clearing. Rory slid through before the room could finish noticing her, the weight of a Golden Empress delivery bag nudging her hip, leather strap biting at her shoulder. The air smelled of damp leather and something sweeter—spiced tea, perhaps, or smoke that had learned to remember every face it ever met. A green neon glow lapped the corners of the room, and among the maps and black-and-white photographs, Silas Blackwood sat at a table carved from old wood and older secrets. He didn’t rise. He only watched her move across the room with that quiet, careful pace that made the floorboards sigh under him. Hazel eyes, milky with years that hadn’t softened him so much as sharpened him, studied her like a chess player counting the board before the first move. Not surprised to see you, Rory, he would have said if he spoke first. Only, he didn’t. He waited. Rory lowered the strap of the bag, felt the leather bite at her fingers. The room narrowed to a single table, a lamp throwing a pale circle over his features, the rest of the place filling in with the soft murmur of patrons outside whatever door the Nest decided to guard tonight. “Didn’t think you’d still know the door,” Silas said at last, a half-smile tugging at the corners of his mouth that didn’t quite reach his eyes. Rory’s lips tapped a quick, dry line. “If I stop knowing, they stop needing me.” Her voice kept its edge, but it wore a different coat now—calm, precise, almost ceremonial. He shifted his weight, the limp in his left leg tugging at the movement. The right hand—gloved, always the right hand—rested on the leather-bound ledger before him. The signet ring flashed with a dull brilliance as he shifted it, a silver figure in the green glow. “You’ve learned to juggle a great many things,” he said, as if commenting on the weather and not the person sitting opposite him in a chair that had learned her footsteps. The chair across from him creaked with the memory of a dozen late-night confessions that never quite happened, and Rory leaned into the memory without letting it breathe. She pulled off the delivery uniform cap and set it on the table with a quiet snap that wouldn’t have startled a child, but did something to the air around them—made it heavier, more deliberate. “Rory,” she reminded herself aloud, tasting the syllables as if they might dissolve if she didn’t claim them aloud. “Aurora Carter to you.” His gaze dropped to the bag, to the logo on the side that would be scrawled with a dozen order numbers by the end of the night. “Rory or Laila, Carter or Malphora—names sit on your skin like letters tattooed into a memory you’re still learning how to read.” She smiled, a jagged, honest thing. “You always knew how to turn a phrase that felt like a warning and a compliment at once.” He lifted a hand as if to placate a stray thought. “Time teaches different lessons to different students. You’ve learned to disappear without leaving a trace.” “Or to leave one that someone can follow.” She kept her voice even, but the weight in it—weight she hadn’t learned to misplace—gave her away. She’d learned to measure risk with the same breath she used to blow on a hot cup of tea. Quietly, she added, “I didn’t come for the past, Silas.” “Then you came for something else entirely.” He tapped the ledger with a practiced rhythm, the sort of rhythm a man uses when he is still counting on the old numbers, the old players. “What is it you need that this room can’t supply in a bottle and a tip?” The Nearest Blueprint of their past lay between them like a floorboard they both pretended not to notice—the city, the seams of their lives that had been torn and stitched so many times the stitches looked like art now. Rory’s eyes flicked to the map pinned behind him, the routes drawn in careful, decisive lines; a dozen cities, a dozen notches, a dozen names she used to know by heart. “Security,” she said, almost too softly for the room to hear. “Not your network, not your men, not your whispers. Real, honest, quiet security. The kind that doesn’t scream when you need it most.” Silas gave a slow nod, as if that word had a texture he could feel through the air. “Quiet security always costs more than loud loyalty.” He paused, letting the silence stretch, the green glow framing his features into something almost ceremonial. “You wear time like a badge, Rory. And you think it makes you untouchable.” Her breath hitched, not in anger but in something brittle and close to fear she hadn’t admitted aloud in years. “Time makes things inevitable, Silas. It doesn’t care about us, but it does want to know what we’ve become.” He pushed his chair back just enough to show the limp, the way it constrained him without breaking him, and then leaned forward, his elbows on the table, the ledger opened as if it might reveal a map of someone’s life in the margins. “If you’re here for something I can give, tell me what it is. If you’re here for someone, say it plainly, and we’ll see if I recognise the person you’ve become to survive.” The moment sizzled between them, not with electricity, but with the prickly static of years of unspoken words bothering the air where they swam. Rory’s eyes rested on his ring again, an old symbol of power and the kind of trust that wasn’t trust at all but a currency you could spend only with those who knew your price. “I’m not here for you, Silas,” she said, letting the words land in the polite, precise way she learned in the back streets of Cardiff and the brighter streets of London. “I’m here for what I can’t do alone. There’s a ledger like yours, but it’s mine to read, and I’m tired of pretending the numbers don’t mean anything when they’ve always meant everything.” Silas looked at her then, really looked—the way a man who has spent a lifetime reading people reads their breath, their heartbeat, the brief tremor at the corner of a mouth when a name is mentioned that should not be mentioned. “What name?” he asked, a thread of curiosity threading the coolness. She did not flinch. She did not blink. She drew a slow breath and let it out in a controlled, almost clinical line. “Eva. No last name needed. You’ve heard of her.” A muscle in Silas’s jaw tightened, then loosened. He did not rise, but the room shifted for a moment, as if the walls themselves recognised a long-lost friend. “Eva’s presence doesn’t walk in here on a topic you can bargain with, Rory.” Rory’s fingers tightened around the strap of the bag. She wasn’t sure if she wanted to look away from him—the way you look away from a wound you think you’ve stitched but know will reopen—but she did anyway, letting her gaze drift to the maps and the photographs that covered the walls. The Nest held the memory of every choice they had made in a city that didn’t forgive quickly and didn’t forget at all. “You left Cardiff for London because you thought you could outrun your name,” Silas went on, almost absentmindedly, as if stating an obvious fact might anchor them both back to some shared shore. “You thought time would make you smaller, quieter, easier to swallow. It didn’t.” Her jaw tightened. “Time reshapes people. It makes you careful. It makes you good at not getting caught.” She paused, a dangerous calm settling over her features. “But there are moments when the old you—whether you want it or not—peels back the skin and shows what you’ve become to survive, not to live.” He did not argue with that truth, not aloud. He simply watched, the way a hunter watches the horizon for movement that might betray an intended target. A clink of glass against wood drew their attention to the bar. A new voice rose, low and easy, a note of mischief tucked into the phrase. “Another round for the two strangers who’ve learned to talk without moving their mouths.” It was a line delivered from a habit, not a desire, the same habit Rory had learned to lean on when she needed to plaster a wound with silence. She did not rise to the bait. The back room didn’t need noise to prove it existed; it existed in the spaces between breaths and the way two people met in the same room after years of distance, as if the years hadn’t happened at all. “Eva’s name opens doors you shouldn’t open,” Silas said, now more cautious, now more grave. “If you’re here for the ledger, you’ll have to ask the right questions and—more importantly—have the right answers ready to give back.” Rory allowed a small, dry laugh. “Always the patient teacher. If I were honest, I’d tell you I’m here to see if you still believe in the old code, the one you taught me without knowing you were teaching.” Silas’s fingers tapped the ledger again, a measured drumbeat. “Code isn’t a map. It’s a weight you carry. So tell me what you want, and I’ll tell you what you’ve already chosen.” Her eyes held his. She had learned to weigh such moments with a patient precision that could pass for fearlessness. “I want to know who’s asking questions,” she said, more to the room than to him, as if the voice in the walls might answer if she listened hard enough. “I want to know why I feel every door I pass is closing behind me—even the ones I’m not supposed to walk through.” He studied her for a long breath, then slid the ledger away with a soft sigh that sounded like a sigh of relief after a long confession. “If you’re here to test old loyalties, you picked a good night. If you’re here for help, you picked a better night. And if you’re here to hide something from a man who can smell danger in a cheap perfume, you picked the wrong room.” She let the insult hang, unspoken but acknowledged in the space between them. Then she leaned forward, the chair creaking in protest, and lowered her voice to a level that felt almost intimate. “Time changes people in ways you can’t predict,” she said, “and sometimes it changes a person enough to make the truth seem like a weapon you can’t put down.” A soft, almost musical sound from the door behind them—like a muffled clockwork noise—made them both stiffen. The Nest’s ambient noises paused for a heartbeat, as if the room itself had become aware of some hidden consequence. The back room door—hidden by the bookshelf, the one that always waited—moved a fraction, a hand’s breadth, as though testing whether it would stay shut or finally yield to what was coming. Then the door to the main room opened wider, and a figure stepped into the glow cast by the green neon, a silhouette Rory would remember from a different life, one she had spent years trying to forget. The man’s coat moved with a stealthy ease, a presence that seemed to hum with danger or perhaps history. He did not greet them; he didn’t acknowledge them at all, not in the way old friends acknowledge old friends, but in the way a storm acknowledges the land—intimate, inevitable, and distinctly unwelcome. Silas didn’t rise; his hands stayed still against the table, fingers splayed as if to demonstrate that there was no immediate threat, only the constantly pressing weight of what might come next. Rory did rise, a fraction, not to greet the intruder with warmth but to measure him with the careful eye of someone who had learned to survive more than once, by more than luck. The stranger paused at the edge of their table, lifting a gloved hand in a half-slick salute that wasn’t meant for politeness but for distance. His mouth twisted into a hint of a smile that knew too much and cared for little. “Evening,” he said, soft and practiced, as if he could speak the language of danger without ever letting it speak back. “I was told this would be the place to find someone who remembers the old days.” The word “remember” hung between them like a blade. Rory’s breath quickened, then steadied. The old days had given her skills she wore like armour, but they had also given her a price she hadn’t finished paying. Silas added nothing, simply watched as if this moment with the stranger could be measured, stratified, controlled. “Who’s asking?” Rory asked, voice steady but edged with steel she kept polished for moments like this. The man looked at her and then at Silas, and his smile broadened with a chill. “A friend of a friend,” he said. “A whisper in a crowd. A name you might remember, or might pretend never to have known.” He paused, letting the words settle like currency in a room where every coin felt heavier than the last. “Rory Carter, Eva’s shadow, the girl who learned to move without making a sound. I know what you’ve become.” A prick of cold went through Rory’s hands, the kind of cold that travels through body and lands in the stomach, leaving a knot there that knows exactly what it means to be afraid and not admit it. Eva’s shadow. The phrase landed with a weight she hadn’t allowed in years. Silas’s eyes narrowed, not with fear but with something like professional interest. He spoke, finally, in a tone that was almost affectionate, the old mentor returning as if no years had happened at all. “We don’t like visitors with mysterious business. You’ve stepped into a place where trust costs more than it’s worth.” The intruder’s lips curved again, this time into something that was almost a snarl if a snarl could be careful and deliberate. “I’m not here for charm, old man. I’m here for a ledger you forgot to bury.” He glanced at Rory, and there was a glint of something colder in his eyes when they finally settled back on Silas. “You’re playing a dangerous game with a dangerous player, Silas. And I think you’ll want to reconsider who you’ve decided to align with tonight.” Rory’s breath hitched once more, not from fear but from recognition—the moment when a name released itself from the stranger’s mouth and she realised how far the years had stretched between old friends and old loyalties. Eva’s shadow. The phrase carried a meaning she would almost rather lose than admit. The room seemed to tilt, not in a violent way, but in the way a top spins and then finds the world suddenly larger than it looks from the surface. Silas stood slowly, not in threat but in readiness. He did not step away from his chair or his ledger. He did not reach for anything, at least not immediately. He simply observed, and the observer in him was a patient hunter. “Names matter here,” Silas said, voice lowering as if the room itself demanded discretion. “And debts—personal and professional—tend to replace the truth with a convenient story.” He looked at Rory, then back to the stranger. “If you’ve come for my business, you’ve come for the wrong room. If you’ve come for hers, you’ve come for the wrong woman.” The stranger glanced at Rory, a calculating glance that suggested he was weighing not just her capabilities but the layers of history that bound her to Silas, to Eva, to the choices they had made that led them to this moment. The door’s soft click—almost invisible—returned their attention to the space beyond the meeting table. The bookcase doorway didn’t groan this time; it breathed. It waited. Rory stepped closer to the edge of the circle they had formed, the delivery bag now a useless weight at her side. She spoke with a quiet, almost reckless bravery. “If Eva’s name is on anything in this city, if she’s left a footprint you can still trace, you’ll find it in the hands that have learned how to disappear, not in the words of a man who pretends to be generous with trouble.” The intruder’s eyes flicked to her, and for a brief moment, she recognised a version of herself she didn’t like. It wasn’t fear in his face; it was admiration, the kind that comes from watching someone walk through a door that should have killed them and feel no heat. “Tell Eva you’re looking for her,” Silas said, finally, and the room’s temperature seemed to drop with the weight of those words. “Tell her you’ve found nothing except two old friends who forgot the value of silence and the price of honesty.” The intruder smiled again, slower this time, as if he’d just discovered something he’d already known all along. “I’ll tell her what I know when I know it,” he replied, and his tone held a finality that suggested this wasn’t a conversation so much as a prelude. Then, as if the room itself decided to press its own hand, the back-room door—hidden in plain sight behind the shelf—flickered with a pale glimmer and shifted a fraction more. The ingress of a second figure stepped into the glow of the Nest, a presence clear enough to undress any pretense of normalcy. The newcomer’s face was not the one Rory remembered. It bore the weight of years, some of them hers. The others were his. Silas did not blink. Rory did not either. The two old friends faced the future as if it were a blade drawn across a table, the promise of blood and consequence waiting to decide who would live with the choice they just made. The stranger—new to Rory, older to Silas—moved with a quiet authority that wasn’t about power, but about necessity. He looked at Rory with a careful tenderness she had never allowed herself to show to anyone in years, then at Silas with something like apology, or perhaps apology’s cousin—regret. “This is not what you thought it would be,” the stranger said, voice soft, as if not to wake the sleeping memory that walked the walls with them. “But it’s what you have left.” Rory found herself thinking of the bench back in Cardiff, the one where she had learned to hold herself up when the world tilted. She remembered how she believed in a future that would be clean, neat, and safe—the kind of future you could map with a ruler and a pencil, the kind of future that would make you forget the ache of your own hands when you held a life you hadn’t earned. She remembered Eva’s laughter, the way Eva had claimed that the city would always tilt toward mercy if you could stand long enough to watch it fall. The older stranger—this new piece in their old chess game—took a step closer to the table, careful and quiet, and the room seemed to hold its breath as if it were listening for a truth no one was ready to tell. The last line of the chapter came on a different breath altogether. The back-room door, still half-open, jutted again as if someone—or something—breathed from the other side. The neon sign outside hummed, a soft green that seemed to drink the room’s heat and pour it back in a different shade. The two old friends, who had learned to survive by reading between the lines and not by speaking over them, stared at the new arrival as if a question they’d never asked was suddenly too loud not to answer. And then the stranger spoke again, a whisper that edged toward a threat, and Rory felt the old life she had left press into her spine, the life where a woman learned to bend, then to break, and finally to demand what she deserved. The words came in a tone designed to unnerve and command, a tone born of years spent in rooms where truth was a weapon and silence a shield. “Eva sent me,” he said, and in that one sentence laid out a path that would lead them through the door behind the shelf, through the names they wore, through the memories that refused to stay buried. The moment held, taut as a drawn bow. Then, like a shutter sliding closed, the door moved back just enough to admit the next breath of air—the next consequence—forcing Rory to make a choice she knew she could not defer any longer. She could feel the weight of time, heavy on her shoulders, pressing the skin taut and ready to split. The two old friends sat there, listening as the room waited, and the balance of their lives shifted because the past had finally found them in the middle of a room that kept its secrets close and refused to let go. The chapter ends on a shared gaze, neither one daring to blink first, the tension thick enough to pulse. The new truth hovered in the air like a knife’s shadow, and in that moment, the floor beneath them gave just a fraction—enough to let fear slip in, enough to let a single, dangerous thought take root: that this, this encounter, was only the beginning.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags28
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences56
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.78% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3651
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
3
adverb"suddenly"
count2
4
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"really"
2"quickly"
3"suddenly"
4"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
43.85% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3651
totalAiIsms41
found
0
word"weight"
count11
1
word"footsteps"
count1
2
word"flicked"
count2
3
word"could feel"
count2
4
word"silence"
count4
5
word"unspoken"
count2
6
word"desire"
count1
7
word"grave"
count1
8
word"measured"
count2
9
word"warmth"
count1
10
word"quickened"
count1
11
word"chill"
count1
12
word"whisper"
count2
13
word"stomach"
count1
14
word"charm"
count1
15
word"glint"
count1
16
word"calculating"
count1
17
word"flickered"
count1
18
word"normalcy"
count1
19
word"tenderness"
count1
20
word"tension"
count1
21
word"pulse"
count1
22
word"encounter"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"footsteps"
2"flicked"
3"could feel"
4"silence"
5"unspoken"
6"desire"
7"grave"
8"measured"
9"warmth"
10"quickened"
11"chill"
12"whisper"
13"stomach"
14"charm"
15"glint"
16"calculating"
17"flickered"
18"normalcy"
19"tenderness"
20"tension"
21"pulse"
22"encounter"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"weight of words/silence"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"the weight of those words"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells3
narrationSentences144
matches
0"t in anger"
1"r with warmth"
2"t with fear"
73.41% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences144
filterMatches
0"look think"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences172
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen51
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3602
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions34
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions64
wordCount2795
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity0.97
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Golden1
Empress1
Silas20
Blackwood1
Rory27
Nest4
Nearest1
Blueprint1
Cardiff2
London1
Eva5
persons
0"Silas"
1"Blackwood"
2"Rory"
3"Nest"
4"Eva"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"London"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences127
glossingSentenceCount9
matches
0"quite reach his eyes"
1"as if commenting on the weather and not the person sitting opposite him in a chair that had learned her footsteps"
2"looked like art now"
3"as if stating an obvious fact might anchor them both back to some shared shore"
4"sounded like a sigh of relief after a long"
5"as though testing whether it would stay shut or finally yield to what was coming"
6"presence that seemed to hum with danger or perhaps history"
7"something like professional interest"
8"something like apology, or perhaps apology’s"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches9
per1kWords2.499
wordCount3602
matches
0"not in anger but in something brittle"
1"not with electricity, but with the prickly static of years of unspoken words bothering"
2"not in the way old friends acknowledge old friends, but in the way a storm acknowledges the land"
3"not to greet the intruder with warmth but to measure him with the careful eye of someone who had learn"
4"not with fear but with something like professional interest"
5"not from fear but from recognition"
6"not in a violent way, but in the way a top spins"
7"not in threat but in readiness"
8"not just her capabilities but the layers of history"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences172
matches
0"claimed that the"
70.92% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs67
mean53.76
std21.41
cv0.398
sampleLengths
096
150
219
352
426
530
677
763
823
949
1024
1126
1254
1350
1470
1534
1656
1739
1877
1959
2064
2141
2211
2332
2442
2575
2646
2753
2827
2941
3075
3137
3239
3332
3473
3572
3662
3769
3890
3966
4079
4154
4217
4378
4451
4553
4684
4780
4842
4958
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences144
matches
0"been torn"
1"is mentioned"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs467
matches
0"was coming"
1"was weighing"
2"were listening"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount32
semicolonCount6
flaggedSentences26
totalSentences172
ratio0.151
matches
0"The air smelled of damp leather and something sweeter—spiced tea, perhaps, or smoke that had learned to remember every face it ever met."
1"“If I stop knowing, they stop needing me.” Her voice kept its edge, but it wore a different coat now—calm, precise, almost ceremonial."
2"The right hand—gloved, always the right hand—rested on the leather-bound ledger before him."
3"She pulled off the delivery uniform cap and set it on the table with a quiet snap that wouldn’t have startled a child, but did something to the air around them—made it heavier, more deliberate."
4"“Or to leave one that someone can follow.” She kept her voice even, but the weight in it—weight she hadn’t learned to misplace—gave her away."
5"The Nearest Blueprint of their past lay between them like a floorboard they both pretended not to notice—the city, the seams of their lives that had been torn and stitched so many times the stitches looked like art now."
6"Rory’s eyes flicked to the map pinned behind him, the routes drawn in careful, decisive lines; a dozen cities, a dozen notches, a dozen names she used to know by heart."
7"Silas looked at her then, really looked—the way a man who has spent a lifetime reading people reads their breath, their heartbeat, the brief tremor at the corner of a mouth when a name is mentioned that should not be mentioned."
8"She wasn’t sure if she wanted to look away from him—the way you look away from a wound you think you’ve stitched but know will reopen—but she did anyway, letting her gaze drift to the maps and the photographs that covered the walls."
9"The back room didn’t need noise to prove it existed; it existed in the spaces between breaths and the way two people met in the same room after years of distance, as if the years hadn’t happened at all."
10"A soft, almost musical sound from the door behind them—like a muffled clockwork noise—made them both stiffen."
11"The back room door—hidden by the bookshelf, the one that always waited—moved a fraction, a hand’s breadth, as though testing whether it would stay shut or finally yield to what was coming."
12"He did not greet them; he didn’t acknowledge them at all, not in the way old friends acknowledge old friends, but in the way a storm acknowledges the land—intimate, inevitable, and distinctly unwelcome."
13"Silas didn’t rise; his hands stayed still against the table, fingers splayed as if to demonstrate that there was no immediate threat, only the constantly pressing weight of what might come next."
14"Rory’s breath hitched once more, not from fear but from recognition—the moment when a name released itself from the stranger’s mouth and she realised how far the years had stretched between old friends and old loyalties."
15"The door’s soft click—almost invisible—returned their attention to the space beyond the meeting table."
16"The bookcase doorway didn’t groan this time; it breathed."
17"It wasn’t fear in his face; it was admiration, the kind that comes from watching someone walk through a door that should have killed them and feel no heat."
18"Then, as if the room itself decided to press its own hand, the back-room door—hidden in plain sight behind the shelf—flickered with a pale glimmer and shifted a fraction more."
19"The stranger—new to Rory, older to Silas—moved with a quiet authority that wasn’t about power, but about necessity."
20"He looked at Rory with a careful tenderness she had never allowed herself to show to anyone in years, then at Silas with something like apology, or perhaps apology’s cousin—regret."
21"She remembered how she believed in a future that would be clean, neat, and safe—the kind of future you could map with a ruler and a pencil, the kind of future that would make you forget the ache of your own hands when you held a life you hadn’t earned."
22"The older stranger—this new piece in their old chess game—took a step closer to the table, careful and quiet, and the room seemed to hold its breath as if it were listening for a truth no one was ready to tell."
23"The back-room door, still half-open, jutted again as if someone—or something—breathed from the other side."
24"Then, like a shutter sliding closed, the door moved back just enough to admit the next breath of air—the next consequence—forcing Rory to make a choice she knew she could not defer any longer."
25"The new truth hovered in the air like a knife’s shadow, and in that moment, the floor beneath them gave just a fraction—enough to let fear slip in, enough to let a single, dangerous thought take root: that this, this encounter, was only the beginning."
94.89% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2836
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount130
adverbRatio0.045839210155148094
lyAdverbCount28
lyAdverbRatio0.009873060648801129
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences172
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences172
mean20.94
std11.29
cv0.539
sampleLengths
016
127
223
330
43
520
627
714
83
92
1014
1138
1226
137
1423
1514
1613
1719
1831
1928
2035
2119
224
2327
2422
256
2618
2711
2815
2925
3019
3110
3234
3316
3439
3531
3611
3723
3818
3924
4014
4120
4219
4344
4433
4524
4635
4731
4833
4941
34.88% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats26
diversityRatio0.20930232558139536
totalSentences172
uniqueOpeners36
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences138
matches
0"Only, he didn’t."
1"Quietly, she added,"
2"Then she leaned forward, the"
3"Then the door to the"
4"Then, as if the room"
5"Then, like a shutter sliding"
ratio0.043
63.48% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount54
totalSentences138
matches
0"He didn’t rise."
1"He only watched her move"
2"Her voice kept its edge,"
3"He shifted his weight, the"
4"he said, as if commenting"
5"She pulled off the delivery"
6"she reminded herself aloud, tasting"
7"His gaze dropped to the"
8"She smiled, a jagged, honest"
9"He lifted a hand as"
10"She kept her voice even,"
11"She’d learned to measure risk"
12"He tapped the ledger with"
13"she said, almost too softly"
14"He paused, letting the silence"
15"Her breath hitched, not in"
16"He pushed his chair back"
17"she said, letting the words"
18"he asked, a thread of"
19"She did not flinch."
ratio0.391
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount130
totalSentences138
matches
0"The shelf groaned, and the"
1"Rory slid through before the"
2"The air smelled of damp"
3"A green neon glow lapped"
4"He didn’t rise."
5"He only watched her move"
6"Hazel eyes, milky with years"
7"Rory lowered the strap of"
8"The room narrowed to a"
9"Silas said at last, a"
10"Rory’s lips tapped a quick,"
11"Her voice kept its edge,"
12"He shifted his weight, the"
13"The right hand—gloved, always the"
14"The signet ring flashed with"
15"he said, as if commenting"
16"The chair across from him"
17"She pulled off the delivery"
18"she reminded herself aloud, tasting"
19"His gaze dropped to the"
ratio0.942
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences138
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences89
technicalSentenceCount22
matches
0"He only watched her move across the room with that quiet, careful pace that made the floorboards sigh under him."
1"She pulled off the delivery uniform cap and set it on the table with a quiet snap that wouldn’t have startled a child, but did something to the air around them—…"
2"The Nearest Blueprint of their past lay between them like a floorboard they both pretended not to notice—the city, the seams of their lives that had been torn a…"
3"He pushed his chair back just enough to show the limp, the way it constrained him without breaking him, and then leaned forward, his elbows on the table, the le…"
4"Rory’s eyes rested on his ring again, an old symbol of power and the kind of trust that wasn’t trust at all but a currency you could spend only with those who k…"
5"Silas looked at her then, really looked—the way a man who has spent a lifetime reading people reads their breath, their heartbeat, the brief tremor at the corne…"
6"He did not rise, but the room shifted for a moment, as if the walls themselves recognised a long-lost friend."
7"The Nest’s ambient noises paused for a heartbeat, as if the room itself had become aware of some hidden consequence."
8"The back room door—hidden by the bookshelf, the one that always waited—moved a fraction, a hand’s breadth, as though testing whether it would stay shut or final…"
9"Silas didn’t rise; his hands stayed still against the table, fingers splayed as if to demonstrate that there was no immediate threat, only the constantly pressi…"
10"The stranger paused at the edge of their table, lifting a gloved hand in a half-slick salute that wasn’t meant for politeness but for distance."
11"A prick of cold went through Rory’s hands, the kind of cold that travels through body and lands in the stomach, leaving a knot there that knows exactly what it …"
12"He spoke, finally, in a tone that was almost affectionate, the old mentor returning as if no years had happened at all."
13"The intruder’s lips curved again, this time into something that was almost a snarl if a snarl could be careful and deliberate."
14"The stranger glanced at Rory, a calculating glance that suggested he was weighing not just her capabilities but the layers of history that bound her to Silas, t…"
15"The intruder smiled again, slower this time, as if he’d just discovered something he’d already known all along."
16"Then, as if the room itself decided to press its own hand, the back-room door—hidden in plain sight behind the shelf—flickered with a pale glimmer and shifted a…"
17"The stranger—new to Rory, older to Silas—moved with a quiet authority that wasn’t about power, but about necessity."
18"She remembered how she believed in a future that would be clean, neat, and safe—the kind of future you could map with a ruler and a pencil, the kind of future t…"
19"The older stranger—this new piece in their old chess game—took a step closer to the table, careful and quiet, and the room seemed to hold its breath as if it we…"
20"The back-room door, still half-open, jutted again as if someone—or something—breathed from the other side."
21"The two old friends, who had learned to survive by reading between the lines and not by speaking over them, stared at the new arrival as if a question they’d ne…"
71.43% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags28
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"he said, as if commenting on the weather and not the person sitting opposite him in a chair that had learned her footsteps"
1"he asked, a thread of curiosity threading the coolness"
2"Silas said, voice lowering as if the room itself demanded discretion"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags17
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she added (add)"
dialogueSentences56
tagDensity0.304
leniency0.607
rawRatio0.059
effectiveRatio0.036
69.8216%