Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTY3QVPQVMA4W1MD98D7JXJ

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The deadbolts clunked open one by one, each release echoing Aurora's reluctance. She hadn't ordered takeaway, and Eva wasn't due back until Tuesday. The chain lock rattled as she slid it free. "Rory." Lucien Moreau stood in the dim hallway, leaning against the doorframe with an ease that belied the tension in his jaw. His charcoal suit was immaculate, not a wrinkle in sight, while his heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one black—fixed on hers. "Lucien." Her voice remained steady, betraying none of the shock tripping her heart against her ribs. "How did you get past security?" A ghost of a smile touched his lips. "You know I have my ways. May I come in?" Aurora stepped back, allowing him entry to the cramped flat above the curry house. Books and scrolls littered every surface, teetering piles that seemed to defy gravity. Ptolemy, Eva's tabby cat, arched his back from his perch on a stack of magical theory texts. "Still living in organised chaos, I see." Lucien ran a gloved hand along the spines of several leather-bound volumes. "Some things never change." "Unlike you, who apparently changes his number without notice." Aurora closed the door, sliding all three deadbolts back into place. "What brings you to Brick Lane, Lucien?" He turned, the ivory handle of his cane catching the weak light filtering through the grimy window. "Is that how we're playing this? As if six months didn't pass?" "Five months, three weeks." She crossed her arms. "I've been counting." Lucien's amber eye softened slightly. "So have I." Ptolemy hopped down from his book tower and wound around Lucien's legs, purring loudly. The half-demon glanced down, a genuine smile transforming his features. "Still making friends with felines, I see." "They're better judges of character than most humans." Aurora gestured to the only clear chair, buried beneath what appeared to be an annotated map of supernatural ley lines. "Watch the cat." Lucien deftly moved the stack of papers to the floor before sitting. He placed his cane against the armrest, his posture perfect, controlled. Everything Aurora wasn't feeling at that moment. "You look well," he said. "Work keeps me busy." She perched on the edge of the cluttered sofa, resisting the urge to straighten the discarded research notes beside her. "Yu-Fei has me delivering across half of London these days." "Still running messages for the Golden Empress?" Lucien's black eye seemed to darken further. "I thought you'd be back in Cardiff by now. Your father's chambers are still open, from what I hear." Aurora stiffened. "You've been checking up on me?" "Concerned parties have been asking questions." His voice lowered. "Especially after what happened with Evan." Her hand instinctively touched the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist. "That's none of your concern anymore. You made that perfectly clear when you walked away." "I walked away to keep you safe, Rory." "Safe?" She stood suddenly, knocking a precarious pile of books to the floor. Ptolemy darted under the sofa. "You lied to me. About everything. About what you are, about who you work for—" "Some truths are dangerous." "More dangerous than letting someone believe they're falling in love with a man who turns out to be half-demon?" Her voice cracked. "Who uses his 'fixer' job as a cover for whatever supernatural games you're actually playing?" Lucien rose slowly, his height suddenly imposing in the small flat. "It wasn't a game. Not with you." "Then what was it?" Aurora stepped closer, the scent of his cologne—something expensive and distinctly French—invading her senses. "Because whatever it was, it stopped being real the moment you told me what you really are." "I never stopped caring." His voice was a low rumble. "Even when I had to disappear." "Then why disappear at all?" The amber in his eye seemed to glow faintly. "Because they were watching. And they would have used you to get to me." "Who?" Aurora demanded. "Who is 'they'?" Lucien reached out, his fingers hovering just shy of touching her cheek. "The same people who are looking for you now." Aurora froze. "What are you talking about?" "Your deliveries for Yu-Fei." His hand dropped back to his side. "They're not just food, are they?" "Of course they are—" "Don't lie to me, Rory." Lucien's voice hardened. "I know about the packages. The ones that don't appear on the manifest." Aurora's blood ran cold. "You've been monitoring me." "Trying to protect you." He stepped back, pacing the small space between the sofa and the wall. "You're delivering artefacts. Magical objects. You have no idea what you're handling." "I know exactly what I'm doing." Her defensive tone sounded weak even to her own ears. "Do you?" Lucien stopped directly in front of her, his gaze intense. "Then explain why the Morrigan's feather was transported in a box of prawn crackers last Tuesday." Aurora's eyes widened. "How could you possibly—" "Because I'm the one who was supposed to receive it." He gripped her shoulders, his touch sending an unwelcome shiver through her. "You're working for the wrong people, Rory. Yu-Fei isn't who she appears to be." "Let go of me." Aurora tried to pull away, but his grip tightened. "Not until you listen to me." His voice dropped to a near-whisper. "You're in danger. You've been delivering to the very faction that's hunting half-breeds like me." The air between them crackled with unresolved tension, with months of unspoken words and feelings. Despite everything—despite the lies, the danger, the supernatural revelations—Aurora felt the familiar pull toward him. "Why should I believe you?" she asked softly. "After everything?" Lucien's thumb stroked her shoulder, his touch both tender and possessive. "Because despite what I am, what I've done... I never lied about how I feel about you." The door to the flat shuddered under a heavy knock. Aurora jumped, pulling away from Lucien. "Eva's not due back until—" "It's not Eva." Lucien moved swiftly to the window, peering through the gap in the curtains. "It's them." "Who?" Aurora joined him at the window, her heart pounding. Three figures stood in the alley below, their faces obscured by shadows despite the midday sun. One looked up, directly toward the window where they stood, revealing eyes that glowed with an unnatural red light. Lucien grabbed her arm. "We need to leave. Now." "But—" "No time." He pulled his cane from where it rested against the chair. With a flick of his wrist, a thin blade slid from the ivory handle. "They found us faster than I expected." "They found us?" Aurora's voice rose. "You led them here!" "I came to warn you." Lucien stepped toward the door as another knock echoed, this one louder, more insistent. "Instead, I've brought them right to your doorstep." The doorknob began to rattle violently.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
63.01% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags26
adverbTagCount5
adverbTags
0"She stood suddenly [suddenly]"
1"He stepped back [back]"
2"Lucien stopped directly [directly]"
3"she asked softly [softly]"
4"Lucien moved swiftly [swiftly]"
dialogueSentences73
tagDensity0.356
leniency0.712
rawRatio0.192
effectiveRatio0.137
64.97% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1142
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"perfectly"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count2
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
4
adverb"really"
count1
5
adverb"very"
count1
6
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"perfectly"
2"suddenly"
3"slowly"
4"really"
5"very"
6"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
56.22% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1142
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"echoing"
count1
1
word"tension"
count2
2
word"perfect"
count1
3
word"imposing"
count1
4
word"whisper"
count1
5
word"unspoken"
count1
6
word"familiar"
count1
7
word"pounding"
count1
8
word"echoed"
count1
highlights
0"echoing"
1"tension"
2"perfect"
3"imposing"
4"whisper"
5"unspoken"
6"familiar"
7"pounding"
8"echoed"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"blood ran cold"
count1
1
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"blood ran cold"
1"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences63
matches(empty)
0.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount7
narrationSentences63
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"try to"
1"seemed to"
2"appeared to"
3"tried to"
4"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences108
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen28
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1127
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
16.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions40
wordCount630
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity2.54
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora16
Eva2
Tuesday1
Moreau1
Lucien15
Ptolemy3
French1
Three1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Eva"
2"Moreau"
3"Lucien"
4"Ptolemy"
5"French"
6"Three"
places(empty)
globalScore0.23
windowScore0.167
97.92% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences48
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"piles that seemed to defy gravity"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1127
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences108
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs58
mean19.43
std11.48
cv0.591
sampleLengths
032
11
240
322
418
544
623
727
829
911
108
1124
127
1331
1430
155
1634
1733
188
1915
2027
218
2233
234
2437
2518
2635
2716
285
2923
306
3121
327
3317
344
3521
368
3729
3816
3928
407
4136
4213
4327
4430
4510
4628
4710
4811
4918
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences63
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs111
matches
0"wasn't feeling"
63.49% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences108
ratio0.028
matches
0"His charcoal suit was immaculate, not a wrinkle in sight, while his heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one black—fixed on hers."
1"\"Then what was it?\" Aurora stepped closer, the scent of his cologne—something expensive and distinctly French—invading her senses."
2"Despite everything—despite the lies, the danger, the supernatural revelations—Aurora felt the familiar pull toward him."
91.14% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount640
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.0375
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.0234375
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences108
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences108
mean10.44
std5.78
cv0.554
sampleLengths
012
111
29
31
421
519
616
76
88
910
1014
1113
1217
1319
144
1520
167
1717
1812
198
203
215
223
2314
2410
257
2628
273
2812
2911
307
315
3224
3310
3414
3519
362
376
389
396
4012
4115
428
4313
445
4515
464
4722
4815
4911
80.56% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.5
totalSentences108
uniqueOpeners54
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences59
matches(empty)
ratio0
91.19% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount19
totalSentences59
matches
0"She hadn't ordered takeaway, and"
1"His charcoal suit was immaculate,"
2"Her voice remained steady, betraying"
3"He turned, the ivory handle"
4"She crossed her arms"
5"He placed his cane against"
6"She perched on the edge"
7"His voice lowered"
8"Her hand instinctively touched the"
9"She stood suddenly, knocking a"
10"Her voice cracked"
11"His voice was a low"
12"His hand dropped back to"
13"He stepped back, pacing the"
14"Her defensive tone sounded weak"
15"He gripped her shoulders, his"
16"His voice dropped to a"
17"she asked softly"
18"He pulled his cane from"
ratio0.322
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount55
totalSentences59
matches
0"The deadbolts clunked open one"
1"She hadn't ordered takeaway, and"
2"The chain lock rattled as"
3"Lucien Moreau stood in the"
4"His charcoal suit was immaculate,"
5"Her voice remained steady, betraying"
6"A ghost of a smile"
7"Aurora stepped back, allowing him"
8"Books and scrolls littered every"
9"Ptolemy, Eva's tabby cat, arched"
10"Lucien ran a gloved hand"
11"Aurora closed the door, sliding"
12"He turned, the ivory handle"
13"She crossed her arms"
14"Lucien's amber eye softened slightly."
15"Ptolemy hopped down from his"
16"The half-demon glanced down, a"
17"Aurora gestured to the only"
18"Lucien deftly moved the stack"
19"He placed his cane against"
ratio0.932
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences59
matches(empty)
ratio0
12.99% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences22
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Lucien Moreau stood in the dim hallway, leaning against the doorframe with an ease that belied the tension in his jaw."
1"He turned, the ivory handle of his cane catching the weak light filtering through the grimy window."
2"Lucien reached out, his fingers hovering just shy of touching her cheek."
3"One looked up, directly toward the window where they stood, revealing eyes that glowed with an unnatural red light."
48.08% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags26
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Lucien stopped directly, his gaze intense"
1"He gripped, his touch sending an unwelcome shiver through her"
2"Aurora tried, but his grip tightened"
3"Aurora joined, her heart pounding"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Aurora demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences73
tagDensity0.041
leniency0.082
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.027
71.7629%