Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTY4ATH5FX3J7Y1QSCY07K0

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1m 11s
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$0.003960
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OpenAI

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Fantasy genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

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Rory slammed a palm against the living wall to steady herself as the chamber exhaled, a warm breath curling along the skin between her knuckles. The floor hummed, a deep, engine-like throb that sank into her bones. Shadows pooled where light should have stayed, and the air tasted faintly of copper and rain-warmed stone. Nyx’s silhouette rose from the floor, a tall, living ink that refused to stay still, their violet eyes glinting with a patient conspiracy. Isolde’s presence felt before she spoke, a cool ripple of lavender in the air, though she did not yet voice the riddles that always found their own room in her mouth. Keep close. The corridor widened into a cavernous arch, its walls unscripted and honest in their alien design. The stone looked as if it had learned to breathe, curling with a sigh that sounded like rasping velvet. Runes crawled along the archway, luminescent sigils that pulsed with a rhythm that matched the thump of Rory’s pulse. The Heartstone Pendant at her throat warmed, a small sun pressed against her chest, sparking against the silver chain with every careful step she took. Nyx drifted closer to Rory, shadow spilling across the floor in a slow, patient tide. They spoke without moving their lips, or perhaps without needing to—an impression, a whisper carried on the wind that did not touch the air. The room held their breath, and for a moment the trio forgot that eyes could exist in the dark and watch. “The Veil remembers us,” Isolde murmured, her voice a delicate chime—soft and dangerous, like a bell that did not want to toll. “If the stones answer, we must listen with more than ears.” A gate of living rock appeared ahead, not a door so much as a mouth; it opened with a sigh, and the air beyond it shimmered as if the world were still wet with dream. The chamber beyond held a different gravity, a pull that tugged at their ankles, insisting they were weightless for a breath and then suddenly not. Lilting greys and ambers wove through the air, threads of light and shadow that tangled in the hair at the back of Rory’s neck. A whisper rose from Nyx, a sound like smoke threaded through silk, and they stepped forward first, a cautious spill into the room’s otherness. The floor here was slick with a sheen that reflected more than their faces—an entire sky’s chorus of glimmering droplets hung suspended, as if the air itself had decided to hold its breath and sing at the same time. Rory moved after Nyx, lifting a hand to steady herself as the floor shifted for a heartbeat, like a ship correcting course mid-current. The Fae-Forged Blade at her hip felt cool against her palm, moonlight-coloured and unreal, a whisper of pressure against her thigh where it rested. The blade’s edge had a talent for finding its purpose, and tonight its purpose was to pry open the unfamiliar shapes the place threw at them. Isolde’s steps were quieter than the others, though no sound could travel as easily here as it did beyond the Veil’s edge. She paused before a column that looked grown, not carved—a spindly pillar of something that resembled bone and bark fused together, twisting toward a ceiling that looked more like a lattice of living roots than stone. The air around the column smelled faintly of pine and rain-damp earth, a whiff so precise it almost felt like memory. “The first thing you learn here,” Isolde said, almost to herself, “is not to fear the unfamiliar scent. It is merely a signal that you are not alone.” “Shadows don’t breathe,” Rory muttered, though the voice did not carry harshly. It carried a certainty born from years of reading people and places alike, a habit she’d developed the day she realised that fear could be mapped and measured. She stepped closer to the column, the pendant’s warmth a stubborn heartbeat at her throat. Near the column, a pool of light hovered and hovered again, unsolid and patient. It reflected their forms back at them, but the reflections moved with a delay, like watching a second movie played in reverse. Nyx crouched to study the surface, their hand rising before they touched it and then stopping just short, as if a tether prevented them from breaking the moment. A sound rose—water, but not water, a soft percussive tapping that seemed to come from the walls themselves. It was like a distant rain of glass beads hitting a hollow drum. The sound drew them deeper, and the air grew cooler, the heat of the corridor behind them fading as if they had stepped through an invisible throat into a wider jaw. Rory spoke first, her voice low and crisp, cutting through the breathing hush of the place. “If there’s a test, we’ll pass it on our terms. The pendant’s warmth says we’re near something keyed to Hel.” She glanced at Nyx, as if asking permission to trust the darkness that moved with them. Nyx nodded with a sepia smile that looked more like a half-lier’s trick than a truth. “Listen,” whispered Nyx, their words becoming almost a scent in the air. “The walls hum with a language the eyes cannot translate. We see the meaning only when the heart drums in the right rhythm.” Isolde moved closer to the pool of light, her lavender gaze reflecting in its surface as if she saw a second world mirrored within them. She spoke, but the words came out in a rhythm rather than a sentence: “Paths cross where time forgets to keep minutes. The Grove remembers; the Veil forgets; and we, for a moment, remember to listen.” A second doorway opened, not a door but a thinning of the air, a seam between two possibilities. The seam threaded through a corridor lined with arching ribs of stone, each rib etched with a different pattern of glow—sigils that smeared into one another like a living mural. The Heartstone Pendant pulsed stronger, a careful, almost polite throb that seemed to say, Do not run. We are learning you. They stepped through, and the space widened into a hall that stretched into a distance they could not measure, a gallery of strange statues that stood in patient poses as if caught mid-thought. Some were humanoid, others more elemental—figures with limbs like branches of trees, others with forms that flickered into nothingness, then snapped back into existence as if a camera’s frame had been shifted. “Are those… trees?” Rory asked, though the word felt small in a place that looked like a cathedral grown from the earth’s oldest bones. “The trees hear us too,” Isolde replied, not loudly but with an authority that didn’t demand obedience so much as attention. “They remember the first breath that named them.” The air carried a faint scent, sweet and sour at once—honeyed pollen mixed with something sharp, a metallic tang that made Rory’s tongue feel alive. The floor beneath their boots remained solid enough, but it seemed to shift here and there underfoot, as if subtle currents rearranged the mosaic of rock and mineral in real time. At the hall’s far end, a wall opened like a living mouth and revealed a chamber lit not by torches but by a field of floating, jellyfish-like orbs. They drifted without sound, or perhaps their hushes absorbed sound before it could arrive. The orbs resembled tiny moons, each one a pale blue dot with veins of silver thread that crawled along their translucent bodies. They pulsed in a slow, patient pattern, and where one orb moved, a ripple of colour followed, painting the air with before-and-after moments that felt almost like memory made visible. Rory’s eyes narrowed as she studied the orbs. The Fae-Forged Blade at her hip warmed slightly, a whisper of frost that crawled up the length of her spine in tension. The blade’s power to cut through wards—especially against demons—felt suddenly relevant, as if the place itself demanded proof of worth. “Could be a ward,” Nyx suggested softly, their voice a thread of smoke curling toward the orbs. “Or a map of notes spoken in light.” Isolde’s fingers hovered over the pendant at Rory’s throat, not touching, just hovering as if she could read the warmth in the stone’s glow. “We walk a tune it recognises,” she said, “and the air will answer in kind.” A soft chord sounded, a note not produced by any instrument Rory knew but felt as a vibration running along her teeth. The Heartstone Pendant glowed a deeper crimson in response, and a line of sigils along the floor ignited in a slow, deliberate procession, as if the hall itself had decided to show them a path rather than simply letting them wander. The trio followed the luminous line, stepping from note to note as the floor’s rune-carved surface rose and fell beneath their boots, like an ancient organ being gently played by a careful hand. The atmosphere grew cooler still, then warmer, then cooler again, a pendulum of sensation that kept time with the pendant’s pulse. The way ahead curved in a way that spoke of non-Earth geometry, the kind of space where distance is a suggestion rather than a fact. “Watch your step,” Rory warned, nodding toward a shallow trough in the floor that reflected the ceiling as if the space above were a lake you could walk across if you trusted your balance enough. “If we fall, we might not rise in the same place.” Nyx stepped onto the reflective trough with casual ease, their shadow stretching out long and thin to swim across the glassy surface, then retreating into the darkness of the nearest archway as they moved on. A soft, curious murmur rose from the walls then vanished, only to be replaced by a chorus of distant, untraceable whispers that felt like someone reciting a story just beyond the reach of understanding. Isolde paused before a cluster of standing stones that resembled young trees growing out of the earth rather than stones growing from it. Each stone bore a hole at about knee height where something should fit—a keyhole without a key. The air around the stones tasted of autumn leaves and something colder, something older than leaves, older than winter. “The Grove speaks in doors,” Isolde said, her voice a gentle riddle. “Some doors open only for those who can hear them breathe. Some doors remember the first steps that led them there.” Rory looked at the door-stone and then at the pendant. The Heartstone’s glow burned brighter, then steadied to a soft, constant warmth. The blade’s edge caught a glint of reflected sigil-light on the stone, and for a moment she could swear the blade looked different, as if it wore a thin veil of frost that hadn’t belonged to it before. The moment passed, leaving only the sharpness of the blade against her palm and the memory of someone’s breath on the back of her neck. A low, subsonic rumble rolled through the corridor, a sound not quite heard but felt—like a throat clearing in a room that did not have a throat. The floating orbs gathered into a loose circle, their blue-white light intensifying, a constellation gathering for something ominous and singular. Nyx stepped closer to Rory, their silhouette becoming a line of colder darkness. “The watchers arrive,” they murmured, their voice a hiss of wind through a hollow reed. “Not all who come here come back the same, if they come back at all.” “They’ll have to,” Rory replied, lifting the Fae blade with the ease of long practice. “We came through the Veil for a reason. If there’s a price, I’ll pay it, but I’m not letting this place swallow us whole.” Isolde’s eyes lifted to the ceiling, where the lattice of roots above formed a pattern that seemed to rearrange itself whenever one blinked. “Patience,” she warned softly. “Patience will tell us what the walls want. Fear will only push us into the next question before we’ve learned the first answer.” The hall tilted in a way that suggested gravity was a choice here, not a constant. A sound rose, not a noise but a sensation—the metronome-click of a heartbeat coming from behind the wall that had so recently become the place they were entering. Then the sound grew stronger, and a shape began to emerge from the wall itself, seeping through the stone as if the stone were no more than a canvas and someone had simply stepped behind it and begun to paint with their own essence. The figure was not a demon or a beast but a shadow given form, a tall presence that moved with the measured glide of something ancient and patient. Its eyes burned with a pale light as if two cold stars had settled themselves in a black, human face. The shadow did not speak yet; it watched, and by watching, it weighed them. Nyx shifted, their form growing a fraction larger, the air around them sharpening to a silver edge. “We have the heart’s warmth and the blade of moonlight. It’s enough to claim a moment, if not a victory.” Rory stepped forward, a quiet resolve in her movements. “We are not thieves here, not invaders. We seek passage, knowledge, and perhaps a warning if the Veil’s duty requires it.” Her gaze did not waver from the shadow-figure, and when she spoke again, her voice carried a steady, almost clinical resolve. “Identify yourself. We are listening.” The shadow’s mouth did not move, yet the air shifted, and a voice came instead from the Stone Hall itself, a chorus of murmured echoes that seemed to build into a single phrase. It spoke of time unbound, of roots that remember every footstep ever taken within the Veil’s breath, of a boundary that could not be crossed by anyone who did not come as a question rather than an answer. Isolde stepped closer to Rory, her half-Fae lineage giving her a grace that did not fear the unknown. “The truth will find its cracks and slip through them,” she murmured, almost to herself, but loud enough for the others to hear. “Solutions appear when questions are honest and bold.” The shadow-laden figure raised a hand, and the air rippled as if a curtain had been drawn back a fraction. A doorway of sorts formed in the space between shadow and stone, a narrow seam that glowed with a pale amber light. The light did not illuminate so much as it rearranged what the light touched, painting the walls with new possibilities. Rory, Nyx, and Isolde moved as one, not because they followed a single plan but because the moment demanded a decision that could not be delayed. Rory reached for the pendant, feeling its warmth surge into her chest, a bright line of courage that steadied her hands. The blade slid from its sheath with a rasp and a soft sigh, the moonlight along its edge catching the amber light and throwing it back in a cold, beautiful arc. The first step through the amber seam felt like stepping off a cliff and landing on a cloud that hummed beneath her soles. The world changed in a breath, the hall’s gravity snapping into a new pattern that made every movement feel deliberate, measured, almost ceremonial. The walls pressed closer, then receded again, as if the space itself was testing their willingness to stay. “Only those who remember the first breath are allowed to carry the last one,” Isolde intoned, her voice now a ripple in the amber light. “Ask what you must, but be ready to hear the answer you fear.” Rory’s breath caught in her throat as the room opened to reveal a vast, domed chamber. It was not a room at all but a small, contained universe: a pocket of Hel’s amber glow, a sun-like core hung suspended in the air by no visible chain. Vines of moss and living stone fell away from the dome’s interior, forming stair-like structures that spiralled upward toward the ceiling. Tiny meteoric motes drifted in the air, each one like a star caught in a slow, dreamy drift. The Heartstone Pendant’s warmth intensified, and Rory felt as though she stood at the centre of a map whose markers were her own heartbeat. The Draconic-Lyrical Alphabet of the Veil would have begged for a chant, but no chant came—only the sense that the space demanded a choice rather than a spell. Nyx moved with cautious speed, stepping onto a stair of living moss that glowed faintly at their foot. “There,” they whispered, pointing toward a vault at the dome’s far side where the amber light pooled into a concentrated pool, a small sun trapped within rock. Isolde stepped closer to Rory, their eyes reflecting the pool’s glow in silver as the light seemed to run along the edges of her iris. “The door lies in the heat we fear to name,” she said, sounding confident in the rhythm of a riddle, not in the deliverance of a truth. “What would you sacrifice to know the next step?” The answer rose on Rory’s lips before she could stop it, a clean, practical thought sharpened by years of dealing with risk and consequence. “We do not sacrifice what we cannot replace. We exchange what is already a debt.” And with that, she lifted the Heartstone Pendant higher, letting the amber glow touch the silver coolness of the blade’s edge and the blade’s own cold, quiet mercy. The amber light gathered in a single point, forming a doorway that did not pretend to be a door but rather offered a choice—step through and leave behind what you have learned, or stay and learn more, riskier, more life-altering knowledge that could bind you to the Veil forever. Nyx’s form stretched, their shadow elongating until it nearly separated from the wall and swam along the dome’s surface. They spoke, not with words but with a sensation: fear and hunger and curiosity all braided together, a coil that could tighten or loosen with the next breath. “If we go through, there is no guarantee we return as we are. If we stay, the walls teach us of themselves and what they remember. If we listen, perhaps we hear our own futures whisper back.” Rory’s mouth pressed into a firm line, and she looked at the two others, a quick, decisive glance that said: We choose now, we choose together, and we choose with purpose. She took a measured step toward the amber doorway, the blade awake at her side, the pendant glowing with a new, sharper red light, and she did not hesitate. The moment they crossed the threshold, the world tightened into a single, bright point, and all the senses leapt forward in a chorus of sound and colour and texture. The air thickened into a liquid that clung to their skin; the floor rose and fell like a slow tide; the constant hum of the previous chamber altered into a chorus of tiny bells that rang in their bones. The dome’s interior became a field of shifting geometries, a cosmos folded around them with patient, deliberate care. For a long breath, they moved as a unit, eyes wide, senses awake to the strange gravity and the scent of something both ancient and alive—like a forest that remembers every storm it has endured, every footstep that dared press into its soil. The Heartstone Pendant beat in Rory’s chest in time with the dome’s own pulse. The Fae-Forged Blade hummed faintly, a whisper against skin, an invitation to cut away fear and reveal what lay beneath. Then the amber light thickened, sculpting into a shape that did not come from any creature Rory had known. It was a herald, a being formed from the same living amber as the chamber, but it bore the marks of age beyond measurement, like a manuscript written in the language of time itself. Its voice was a chorus and a sigh at once, a sound that seemed to rustle through the very fibres of their nerves. “You have chosen passage,” it said, not with a mouth but with a resonance loud enough to fill the space between them. “The Veil holds you now as it once held your ancestors. You will carry this knowledge back into your world and your world will change because of it, and you may never speak of the exact thing you learned here, for the Veil keeps its own counsel.” Rory stepped closer, her mouth set in a line of steady resolve. “We will carry it anyway. If the price is a memory, we bear it. If the memory becomes strength, we use it.” The herald’s form blurred at the edges, dissolving into motes of amber light that drifted toward Rory, Nyx, and Isolde. A single shard of the amber light detached and drifted into Rory’s outstretched palm, warm and real, its surface smooth and like a seed waiting to sprout. The shard hummed with quiet heat, and Rory felt a soft, circular tremor pass through her wrist—the tiny warmth of the Heartstone Pendant’s pulse answering the shard’s call. Then the chamber altered again, the dome sinking away to reveal a narrow, star-bright tunnel that seemed to open onto a garden of otherworldly flora. Luminous fungi clung to black rock, their glow painting the tunnel in impossible colours. The air tasted sweet, like a fruit that had never existed on Earth, and the sense of time’s soft tug grew stronger, as if their bodies remembered to measure minutes differently here. The trio moved as a single breath, stepping into that corridor with careful purpose, every sound tuned to the odd music of this place. The seal of the amber doorway closed behind them with a sigh, and the hall they left behind seemed to contract, refusing to reveal anything except the faint echo of a distant whisper that sounded suspiciously like a name. A sudden shudder ran through the floor, a tremor that matched the pulse of the pendant and then—without warning—the air around them changed again. The path ahead widened into a vista of impossible forms: trees with leaves of glass, rivers that ran upwards, stones that sang when struck by the soft chill of Nyx’s shadow as it glided past. The walls bore reliefs of figures that resembled humans from ages past, only their features twisted in improbable ways, their expressions fixed in a moment of eternal surprise, their hands outstretched as if inviting the travellers to join them in their endless, patient listening. They pressed forward, stepping from the amber-lit corridor into the awe of the unknown. The world bent around them, the boundary between realities thinning and then widening like the breath of a creature sleeping somewhere beyond sight. The Heartstone Pendant flared with warmth against Rory’s skin, a small sun waking in a palm, and the Fae-Forged Blade’s faint glow sharpened the air, drawing lines of light along the capillaries of space. And then, without ceremony, the floor gave way to a sudden, grinding noise—stone scraping against stone, a sound so ancient and unwelcome that a part of Rory wanted to bolt back toward the exit she could not quite see. But the escape route had sealed, as if the place itself had chosen to redirect them. A crack split the dome wall, amber light leaking through the fissure like a wound that did not bleed but sang. From the crack, a form—barely recognisable as a shadow, but with a terrible depth and a hunger—pushed through, its presence curling across the air with the slow inevitability of a stormfront. The air grew heavier, laboured; Nyx’s shadow thickened and stepped closer to the breach as if the world’s breath had become theirs to borrow. The three stood their ground, the weapon, the pendant, and the profane courage of a well-timed decision ready for whatever came next. And then the shadow spoke—not with words but with a pressure in the chest as if someone had pressed a corner of the world into their sternums and demanded a response. The chapter ends on the edge of that breath, with the amber-hued door still yawning wide, with the shadow’s approach a slow, inexorable tide, and with the sense that the Veil had listened—and now, in listening, had decided to show them how small they were in the face of something both ancient and patient. The first move of the unthinkable pressed against Rory’s skin, and the Heartstone’s warmth flared once, a bright, urgent beacon. Then it steadied, calmed, and beat again with a stubborn insistence that they would not be consumed by the unknown. Not yet. Not while the blade remained at their hip and the pendant brightened at their throats like an oath sworn in a language that whispered through teeth and breath and bone. The shadow drew a slow circle around them, and the chamber’s glow intensifed, ready to unfold the next page of a story that would not bow to fear.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags22
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Nyx suggested softly [softly]"
1"she warned softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.564
leniency1
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.091
91.74% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount4238
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count2
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count2
3
adverb"gently"
count1
4
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"slightly"
2"softly"
3"gently"
4"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
41.01% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount4238
totalAiIsms50
found
0
word"throb"
count2
1
word"glinting"
count1
2
word"velvet"
count1
3
word"pulsed"
count3
4
word"pulse"
count5
5
word"whisper"
count7
6
word"shimmered"
count1
7
word"silk"
count1
8
word"measured"
count4
9
word"warmth"
count10
10
word"etched"
count1
11
word"flickered"
count1
12
word"mosaic"
count1
13
word"tension"
count1
14
word"glint"
count1
15
word"resolve"
count3
16
word"echoes"
count1
17
word"resonance"
count1
18
word"otherworldly"
count1
19
word"sense of"
count1
20
word"echo"
count1
21
word"chill"
count1
22
word"beacon"
count1
highlights
0"throb"
1"glinting"
2"velvet"
3"pulsed"
4"pulse"
5"whisper"
6"shimmered"
7"silk"
8"measured"
9"warmth"
10"etched"
11"flickered"
12"mosaic"
13"tension"
14"glint"
15"resolve"
16"echoes"
17"resonance"
18"otherworldly"
19"sense of"
20"echo"
21"chill"
22"beacon"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences162
matches
0"d with warmth"
28.22% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount11
narrationSentences162
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
2"tend to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences179
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen56
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords4189
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions41
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions112
wordCount3696
uniqueNames16
maxNameDensity0.92
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory34
Heartstone10
Pendant8
Nyx18
Fae-Forged4
Blade4
Veil5
Isolde15
Do1
Fae6
Stone1
Hall1
Hel1
Draconic-Lyrical1
Alphabet1
Earth2
persons
0"Rory"
1"Heartstone"
2"Pendant"
3"Nyx"
4"Blade"
5"Veil"
6"Isolde"
7"Hel"
places
0"Stone"
1"Hall"
2"Earth"
globalScore1
windowScore0.667
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences156
glossingSentenceCount16
matches
0"sounded like rasping velvet"
1"appeared ahead not a door so much as a mouth; it opened with a sigh, and the air beyond it shimmered as if the world were still wet with dream"
2"felt like memory"
3"tapping that seemed to come from the walls themselves"
4"as if asking permission to trust the darkness that moved with them"
5"throb that seemed to say, Do not run"
6"looked like a cathedral grown from the ea"
7"felt like someone reciting a story just"
8"not quite heard but felt—like a throat clearing in a room that did not have a throat"
9"pattern that seemed to rearrange itself whenever one blinked"
10"echoes that seemed to build into a single phrase"
11"felt like stepping off a cliff and land"
12"sound that seemed to rustle through the very fibres of their nerves"
13"tunnel that seemed to open onto a garden of otherworldly flora"
14"as if inviting the travellers to join them in their endless, patient listening"
15"not quite see"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches11
per1kWords2.626
wordCount4189
matches
0"not a door but a thinning of the air, a seam between two possibilities"
1"not loudly but with an authority"
2"not by torches but by a field of floating, jellyfish-like orbs"
3"not produced by any instrument Rory knew but felt as a vibration running along her teeth"
4"not quite heard but felt"
5"not a noise but a sensation"
6"not a demon or a beast but a shadow given form, a tall presence"
7"not a room at all but a small, contained universe: a pocket of Hel’s amber glow, a"
8"not with words but with a sensation: fear"
9"not with a mouth but with a resonance loud enough to fill the space between them"
10"not with words but with a pressure in the chest as if someone had pressed a cor"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount3
totalSentences179
matches
0"forgot that eyes"
1"realised that fear"
2"unwelcome that a"
68.52% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs67
mean62.52
std24.37
cv0.39
sampleLengths
0108
12
279
360
433
584
663
773
879
928
1055
1164
1262
1368
1435
1561
1669
1765
1824
1929
2056
2194
2250
2325
2439
2563
2679
2746
2869
2959
3033
3185
3247
3343
3439
3550
3688
3762
3837
3956
4071
4149
4262
4378
4464
4538
4685
4752
4845
4961
98.77% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences162
matches
0"been shifted"
1"been drawn"
2"being formed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs551
matches
0"were entering"
1"was testing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount24
semicolonCount7
flaggedSentences26
totalSentences179
ratio0.145
matches
0"They spoke without moving their lips, or perhaps without needing to—an impression, a whisper carried on the wind that did not touch the air."
1"“The Veil remembers us,” Isolde murmured, her voice a delicate chime—soft and dangerous, like a bell that did not want to toll."
2"A gate of living rock appeared ahead, not a door so much as a mouth; it opened with a sigh, and the air beyond it shimmered as if the world were still wet with dream."
3"The floor here was slick with a sheen that reflected more than their faces—an entire sky’s chorus of glimmering droplets hung suspended, as if the air itself had decided to hold its breath and sing at the same time."
4"She paused before a column that looked grown, not carved—a spindly pillar of something that resembled bone and bark fused together, twisting toward a ceiling that looked more like a lattice of living roots than stone."
5"A sound rose—water, but not water, a soft percussive tapping that seemed to come from the walls themselves."
6"She spoke, but the words came out in a rhythm rather than a sentence: “Paths cross where time forgets to keep minutes. The Grove remembers; the Veil forgets; and we, for a moment, remember to listen.”"
7"The seam threaded through a corridor lined with arching ribs of stone, each rib etched with a different pattern of glow—sigils that smeared into one another like a living mural."
8"Some were humanoid, others more elemental—figures with limbs like branches of trees, others with forms that flickered into nothingness, then snapped back into existence as if a camera’s frame had been shifted."
9"The air carried a faint scent, sweet and sour at once—honeyed pollen mixed with something sharp, a metallic tang that made Rory’s tongue feel alive."
10"The blade’s power to cut through wards—especially against demons—felt suddenly relevant, as if the place itself demanded proof of worth."
11"Each stone bore a hole at about knee height where something should fit—a keyhole without a key."
12"A low, subsonic rumble rolled through the corridor, a sound not quite heard but felt—like a throat clearing in a room that did not have a throat."
13"A sound rose, not a noise but a sensation—the metronome-click of a heartbeat coming from behind the wall that had so recently become the place they were entering."
14"The shadow did not speak yet; it watched, and by watching, it weighed them."
15"The Draconic-Lyrical Alphabet of the Veil would have begged for a chant, but no chant came—only the sense that the space demanded a choice rather than a spell."
16"The amber light gathered in a single point, forming a doorway that did not pretend to be a door but rather offered a choice—step through and leave behind what you have learned, or stay and learn more, riskier, more life-altering knowledge that could bind you to the Veil forever."
17"The air thickened into a liquid that clung to their skin; the floor rose and fell like a slow tide; the constant hum of the previous chamber altered into a chorus of tiny bells that rang in their bones."
18"For a long breath, they moved as a unit, eyes wide, senses awake to the strange gravity and the scent of something both ancient and alive—like a forest that remembers every storm it has endured, every footstep that dared press into its soil."
19"The shard hummed with quiet heat, and Rory felt a soft, circular tremor pass through her wrist—the tiny warmth of the Heartstone Pendant’s pulse answering the shard’s call."
20"A sudden shudder ran through the floor, a tremor that matched the pulse of the pendant and then—without warning—the air around them changed again."
21"And then, without ceremony, the floor gave way to a sudden, grinding noise—stone scraping against stone, a sound so ancient and unwelcome that a part of Rory wanted to bolt back toward the exit she could not quite see."
22"From the crack, a form—barely recognisable as a shadow, but with a terrible depth and a hunger—pushed through, its presence curling across the air with the slow inevitability of a stormfront."
23"The air grew heavier, laboured; Nyx’s shadow thickened and stepped closer to the breach as if the world’s breath had become theirs to borrow."
24"And then the shadow spoke—not with words but with a pressure in the chest as if someone had pressed a corner of the world into their sternums and demanded a response."
25"The chapter ends on the edge of that breath, with the amber-hued door still yawning wide, with the shadow’s approach a slow, inexorable tide, and with the sense that the Veil had listened—and now, in listening, had decided to show them how small they were in the face of something both ancient and patient."
76.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount3745
adjectiveStacks4
stackExamples
0"own cold, quiet mercy."
1"new, sharper red light,"
2"narrow, star-bright tunnel"
3"unthinkable pressed against Rory’s"
adverbCount127
adverbRatio0.03391188251001335
lyAdverbCount27
lyAdverbRatio0.007209612817089452
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences179
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
99.89% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences179
mean23.4
std9.35
cv0.4
sampleLengths
025
112
217
323
431
52
616
719
819
925
1015
1124
1221
1322
1411
1535
1625
1724
1824
1939
2023
2124
2226
2322
2436
2521
2628
2712
2828
2915
3014
3122
3228
3318
3413
3531
3616
3736
3816
3912
4023
4125
4236
4318
4430
4517
464
4733
4832
4924
33.80% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats29
diversityRatio0.22905027932960895
totalSentences179
uniqueOpeners41
83.86% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences159
matches
0"Then the sound grew stronger,"
1"Then the amber light thickened,"
2"Then the chamber altered again,"
3"Then it steadied, calmed, and"
ratio0.025
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences159
matches
0"They spoke without moving their"
1"She paused before a column"
2"It carried a certainty born"
3"She stepped closer to the"
4"It reflected their forms back"
5"It was like a distant"
6"She glanced at Nyx, as"
7"She spoke, but the words"
8"We are learning you."
9"They stepped through, and the"
10"They drifted without sound, or"
11"They pulsed in a slow,"
12"they murmured, their voice a"
13"she warned softly"
14"Its eyes burned with a"
15"Her gaze did not waver"
16"It spoke of time unbound,"
17"she murmured, almost to herself,"
18"It was not a room"
19"they whispered, pointing toward a"
ratio0.17
16.60% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount141
totalSentences159
matches
0"Rory slammed a palm against"
1"The floor hummed, a deep,"
2"Shadows pooled where light should"
3"Nyx’s silhouette rose from the"
4"Isolde’s presence felt before she"
5"The corridor widened into a"
6"The stone looked as if"
7"The Heartstone Pendant at her"
8"Nyx drifted closer to Rory,"
9"They spoke without moving their"
10"The room held their breath,"
11"Isolde murmured, her voice a"
12"A gate of living rock"
13"The chamber beyond held a"
14"A whisper rose from Nyx,"
15"The floor here was slick"
16"Rory moved after Nyx, lifting"
17"The Fae-Forged Blade at her"
18"The blade’s edge had a"
19"Isolde’s steps were quieter than"
ratio0.887
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences159
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences135
technicalSentenceCount49
matches
0"Nyx’s silhouette rose from the floor, a tall, living ink that refused to stay still, their violet eyes glinting with a patient conspiracy."
1"Runes crawled along the archway, luminescent sigils that pulsed with a rhythm that matched the thump of Rory’s pulse."
2"A gate of living rock appeared ahead, not a door so much as a mouth; it opened with a sigh, and the air beyond it shimmered as if the world were still wet with …"
3"The chamber beyond held a different gravity, a pull that tugged at their ankles, insisting they were weightless for a breath and then suddenly not."
4"Lilting greys and ambers wove through the air, threads of light and shadow that tangled in the hair at the back of Rory’s neck."
5"The floor here was slick with a sheen that reflected more than their faces—an entire sky’s chorus of glimmering droplets hung suspended, as if the air itself ha…"
6"She paused before a column that looked grown, not carved—a spindly pillar of something that resembled bone and bark fused together, twisting toward a ceiling th…"
7"Nyx crouched to study the surface, their hand rising before they touched it and then stopping just short, as if a tether prevented them from breaking the moment…"
8"The sound drew them deeper, and the air grew cooler, the heat of the corridor behind them fading as if they had stepped through an invisible throat into a wider…"
9"Isolde moved closer to the pool of light, her lavender gaze reflecting in its surface as if she saw a second world mirrored within them."
10"The seam threaded through a corridor lined with arching ribs of stone, each rib etched with a different pattern of glow—sigils that smeared into one another lik…"
11"The Heartstone Pendant pulsed stronger, a careful, almost polite throb that seemed to say, Do not run."
12"They stepped through, and the space widened into a hall that stretched into a distance they could not measure, a gallery of strange statues that stood in patien…"
13"Some were humanoid, others more elemental—figures with limbs like branches of trees, others with forms that flickered into nothingness, then snapped back into e…"
14"The air carried a faint scent, sweet and sour at once—honeyed pollen mixed with something sharp, a metallic tang that made Rory’s tongue feel alive."
15"The floor beneath their boots remained solid enough, but it seemed to shift here and there underfoot, as if subtle currents rearranged the mosaic of rock and mi…"
16"The orbs resembled tiny moons, each one a pale blue dot with veins of silver thread that crawled along their translucent bodies."
17"They pulsed in a slow, patient pattern, and where one orb moved, a ripple of colour followed, painting the air with before-and-after moments that felt almost li…"
18"The Fae-Forged Blade at her hip warmed slightly, a whisper of frost that crawled up the length of her spine in tension."
19"The Heartstone Pendant glowed a deeper crimson in response, and a line of sigils along the floor ignited in a slow, deliberate procession, as if the hall itself…"
20"The atmosphere grew cooler still, then warmer, then cooler again, a pendulum of sensation that kept time with the pendant’s pulse."
21"The way ahead curved in a way that spoke of non-Earth geometry, the kind of space where distance is a suggestion rather than a fact."
22"Nyx stepped onto the reflective trough with casual ease, their shadow stretching out long and thin to swim across the glassy surface, then retreating into the d…"
23"A soft, curious murmur rose from the walls then vanished, only to be replaced by a chorus of distant, untraceable whispers that felt like someone reciting a sto…"
24"Isolde paused before a cluster of standing stones that resembled young trees growing out of the earth rather than stones growing from it."
25"The blade’s edge caught a glint of reflected sigil-light on the stone, and for a moment she could swear the blade looked different, as if it wore a thin veil of…"
26"A sound rose, not a noise but a sensation—the metronome-click of a heartbeat coming from behind the wall that had so recently become the place they were enterin…"
27"Then the sound grew stronger, and a shape began to emerge from the wall itself, seeping through the stone as if the stone were no more than a canvas and someone…"
28"The figure was not a demon or a beast but a shadow given form, a tall presence that moved with the measured glide of something ancient and patient."
29"Its eyes burned with a pale light as if two cold stars had settled themselves in a black, human face."
30"Nyx shifted, their form growing a fraction larger, the air around them sharpening to a silver edge."
31"Isolde stepped closer to Rory, her half-Fae lineage giving her a grace that did not fear the unknown."
32"Rory reached for the pendant, feeling its warmth surge into her chest, a bright line of courage that steadied her hands."
33"The blade slid from its sheath with a rasp and a soft sigh, the moonlight along its edge catching the amber light and throwing it back in a cold, beautiful arc."
34"The world changed in a breath, the hall’s gravity snapping into a new pattern that made every movement feel deliberate, measured, almost ceremonial."
35"Vines of moss and living stone fell away from the dome’s interior, forming stair-like structures that spiralled upward toward the ceiling."
36"The Heartstone Pendant’s warmth intensified, and Rory felt as though she stood at the centre of a map whose markers were her own heartbeat."
37"The amber light gathered in a single point, forming a doorway that did not pretend to be a door but rather offered a choice—step through and leave behind what y…"
38"They spoke, not with words but with a sensation: fear and hunger and curiosity all braided together, a coil that could tighten or loosen with the next breath."
39"Rory’s mouth pressed into a firm line, and she looked at the two others, a quick, decisive glance that said: We choose now, we choose together, and we choose wi…"
40"The air thickened into a liquid that clung to their skin; the floor rose and fell like a slow tide; the constant hum of the previous chamber altered into a chor…"
41"For a long breath, they moved as a unit, eyes wide, senses awake to the strange gravity and the scent of something both ancient and alive—like a forest that rem…"
42"The herald’s form blurred at the edges, dissolving into motes of amber light that drifted toward Rory, Nyx, and Isolde."
43"Then the chamber altered again, the dome sinking away to reveal a narrow, star-bright tunnel that seemed to open onto a garden of otherworldly flora."
44"The air tasted sweet, like a fruit that had never existed on Earth, and the sense of time’s soft tug grew stronger, as if their bodies remembered to measure min…"
45"The seal of the amber doorway closed behind them with a sigh, and the hall they left behind seemed to contract, refusing to reveal anything except the faint ech…"
46"The path ahead widened into a vista of impossible forms: trees with leaves of glass, rivers that ran upwards, stones that sang when struck by the soft chill of …"
47"The walls bore reliefs of figures that resembled humans from ages past, only their features twisted in improbable ways, their expressions fixed in a moment of e…"
48"The shadow drew a slow circle around them, and the chamber’s glow intensifed, ready to unfold the next page of a story that would not bow to fear."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags22
uselessAdditionCount8
matches
0"Isolde said, almost to herself,"
1"She glanced, as if asking permission to trust the darkness that moved with them"
2"whispered Nyx, their words becoming almost a scent in the air"
3"She spoke, but the words came out in a rhythm rather than a sentence:"
4"Rory asked, though the word felt small in a place that looked like a cathedral grown from the earth’s oldest bones"
5"Nyx suggested softly, their voice a thread of smoke curling toward the orbs"
6"Isolde said, her voice a gentle riddle"
7"they murmured, their voice a hiss of wind through a hollow reed"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags18
fancyCount10
fancyTags
0"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
1"Rory muttered (mutter)"
2"whispered Nyx (whisper)"
3"She spoke (speak)"
4"Nyx suggested softly (suggest)"
5"Rory warned (warn)"
6"they murmured (murmur)"
7"she warned softly (warn)"
8"she murmured (murmur)"
9"they whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.462
leniency0.923
rawRatio0.556
effectiveRatio0.513
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