Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTY559AEWTRYAEXN6P9Q17H

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Duration:
1m 21s
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$0.003129
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AtlasCloud

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The body lay arranged on the platform like a forgotten prop from some forgotten play. Detective Harlow Quinn crouched beside it, her trained eyes cataloguing everything and nothing at once. "Blunt force trauma to the occipital." Davies had already processed the basics, his gloved hand hovering above the victim's head. "Found by a street vendor at six this morning. No identification, no wallet, no phone." "No blood." Harlow noted the absence before she'd registered the presence. The victim's dark hair fanned across the grimy tile, almost black in the overhead lights. Almost. "Staging?" "Or they cleaned up." Davies consulted his notebook. "Forensics is sweeping, but between you and me, guv, this station's been abandoned since the seventies. Water damage, structural issues, squatters. There's nothing to clean with." Harlow leaned closer. The woman had been young, maybe late twenties. Expensive coat, poorly matched to the location. Her hands were curled at her sides, fingers extended rather than clenched. No defensive wounds. No struggle. "People don't die peacefully on abandoned tube platforms." "People don't do a lot of things." Davies shifted his weight. "Could be she came here to meet someone. Went wrong. Perpetrator panicked, fled." "Left the body?" Harlow stood, her joints protesting the cold. Forty-one years on this earth, eighteen in the job, and she still felt the chill of London in her bones. "No wallet, no phone, no keys. But they left her shoes?" The victim wore trainers. White, expensive, the kind students saved up for. Laced neatly. No scuff marks on the soles. "That's... unusual." "Unusual." Harlow walked the perimeter, her footsteps echoing in the hollow space. The station was Camden Town, or had been once. Ancient tiling, Victorian arches, the particular melancholy of London infrastructure abandoned. Graffiti artists had tagged the far wall in neon greens and pinks. Someone had tried to burn a mattress in the corner at some point. "Does the brass know about this location?" Davies' silence told her everything. "This isn't your regular CID callout, Davies. Someone above routed this to us specifically." She stopped at the edge of the platform, looking down the track. The tunnel stretched into darkness, a throat waiting to swallow. "Who found the body?" "Said he's a vendor. Sets up near the old entrance on Camden High Street. Sweet stall." "Has he been interviewed?" "Uniform's handling it." "I want him brought in." "Guv—" "Now, Davies." He left to make the call. Harlow returned to the body, circling it like a shark with a single, persistent thought. The positioning. The neatness of it. It looked almost ceremonial. She crouched again, examining the victim's hands. No calluses, no manual labour. Nails manicured, chipped polish on the left ring finger. Married, or recently removed. She checked the coat pockets empty. Something glinted beneath the victim's hip. Harlow reached for her evidence bag, sliding her hand beneath the woman's body. Metal. Cold. Small enough to fit in her palm. A compass. Brass casing, verdigris patina, face etched with symbols she didn't recognise. The needle spun lazily, not settling north. "What the hell are you?" "You find something?" Davies returned, phone still in hand. "Question is what someone was doing with this." She held it up to the light. The symbols seemed to shift under the fluorescent bulbs, or maybe that was the exhaustion. "Get this processed. And find out who she is." "Already running prints." The young woman had no ID, no wallet, no phone. But someone had taken the time to remove all of those things and arrange her body with almost religious care. Someone had left this compass pressed beneath her hip like a secret meant to be found. Harlow thought of DS Morris. Three years gone, case still open, official story a car accident in Cornwall that made no sense. She'd seen the file. Read it a hundred times. The injuries didn't match the impact. The witnesses saw nothing. The car had been found three miles from where it should have been, and the coroner had used words like "inconsistent" and "unexplained" before the case was quietly closed. Her partner had been investigating something. Something that had led him here, to this city, to the edge of whatever world existed beneath the London she knew. "Get me everything on missing persons. Female, twenties, reported last forty-eight hours." Harlow pocketed the compass, ignoring Davies' protest. "And find out who owns this station. Not Transport for London. Who really owns it." "Guv, you're not suggesting—" "I'm not suggesting anything." She walked toward the tunnel entrance, where ancient steps led up toward Camden High Street. Toward the world of street performers and vintage shops and tourists who never looked down. "Yet." The compass needle had finally stopped spinning. It pointed deeper into the tunnel, toward darkness that the station's emergency lighting couldn't touch. Something was wrong with this scene. The evidence didn't add up. And Harlow Quinn had learned, over eighteen years, to trust that feeling in her gut—the one that had kept her alive when other detectives had ended up like Morris. She descended into the dark.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Davies had already [already]"
dialogueSentences33
tagDensity0.364
leniency0.727
rawRatio0.083
effectiveRatio0.061
88.22% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount849
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"lazily"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"lazily"
1"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
52.89% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount849
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"processed"
count2
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"chill"
count1
3
word"footsteps"
count1
4
word"echoing"
count1
5
word"silence"
count1
6
word"etched"
count1
highlights
0"processed"
1"weight"
2"chill"
3"footsteps"
4"echoing"
5"silence"
6"etched"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences69
matches
0"felt the chill"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences69
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences91
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords846
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
69.09% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions29
wordCount618
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.62
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Harlow10
Quinn2
Forty-one1
London3
Camden2
Town1
Victorian1
Morris2
Cornwall1
High1
Street1
Davies4
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Victorian"
3"Morris"
4"Davies"
places
0"London"
1"Camden"
2"Town"
3"Cornwall"
4"High"
5"Street"
globalScore0.691
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences46
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount846
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences91
matches
0"trust that feeling"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs36
mean23.5
std17.61
cv0.749
sampleLengths
030
135
228
334
435
58
624
741
820
92
1064
115
1240
1316
144
153
165
171
182
1931
2031
2128
2220
235
249
2539
263
2746
2870
2927
3034
314
3235
3322
3440
355
95.09% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences69
matches
0"were curled"
1"been found"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs110
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences91
ratio0.011
matches
0"And Harlow Quinn had learned, over eighteen years, to trust that feeling in her gut—the one that had kept her alive when other detectives had ended up like Morris."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount296
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount11
adverbRatio0.037162162162162164
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.013513513513513514
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences91
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences91
mean9.3
std6.6
cv0.71
sampleLengths
015
115
220
315
411
515
61
71
88
926
103
118
127
1312
143
152
168
1711
1813
1910
2020
2111
224
238
242
256
262
2712
289
2911
3012
3113
327
335
3426
3510
364
3716
384
393
405
411
422
436
4415
452
464
474
487
495
94.51% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.6043956043956044
totalSentences91
uniqueOpeners55
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences62
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount12
totalSentences62
matches
0"Her hands were curled at"
1"She stopped at the edge"
2"He left to make the"
3"It looked almost ceremonial."
4"She crouched again, examining the"
5"She checked the coat pockets"
6"She held it up to"
7"She'd seen the file."
8"Her partner had been investigating"
9"She walked toward the tunnel"
10"It pointed deeper into the"
11"She descended into the dark."
ratio0.194
80.97% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount47
totalSentences62
matches
0"The body lay arranged on"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn crouched beside"
2"Davies had already processed the"
3"Harlow noted the absence before"
4"The victim's dark hair fanned"
5"Davies consulted his notebook"
6"Harlow leaned closer."
7"The woman had been young,"
8"Her hands were curled at"
9"Davies shifted his weight"
10"Harlow stood, her joints protesting"
11"The victim wore trainers."
12"Harlow walked the perimeter, her"
13"The station was Camden Town,"
14"Graffiti artists had tagged the"
15"Someone had tried to burn"
16"She stopped at the edge"
17"The tunnel stretched into darkness,"
18"He left to make the"
19"Harlow returned to the body,"
ratio0.758
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences62
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences21
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Davies had already, his gloved hand hovering above the victim's head"
1"Harlow stood, her joints protesting the cold"
2"Harlow walked, her footsteps echoing in the hollow space"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Harlow noted (note)"
dialogueSentences33
tagDensity0.03
leniency0.061
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.061
86.0256%