Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTY5SPJWQTPS02GD9YRG4YC

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9m 19s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
"Your hair's shorter." The cloth snagged on a splinter of mahogany, and Rory's wrist twisted. Pain shot up from the crescent scar, that old souvenir from her father's garden gate in Cardiff, from the age of eight before she learned that adults could lie about safety. She did not look up immediately. The voice carried the clipped precision of the Welsh Valleys polished by Oxford elocution, a particular cadence that conjured libraries at midnight and the smell of statute books rotting with mould. "Daniel." Rory dislodged the fabric from the wood. "You always did prefer the high ground." He occupied the corner booth as though he'd grown there, a three-piece charcoal pinstripe suit tailored to his slender frame, a silk tie the colour of dried blood. Three years had etched canals beside his mouth, but his hands remained smooth, uncalloused, the nails manicured to a legal standard. The hands of a man who had never delivered drunken meals through London rain, who had never learned to identify exits in every room by instinct. "Last time I saw you, it was halfway down your back." Daniel gestured with his whisky glass, not drinking, merely positioning. "Evan preferred it long. Easier to grip, I'd imagine." Behind the bar, Silas Blackwood paused mid-motion. The distinctive green neon from the window sign sliced through his grey-streaked auburn hair, casting his hazel eyes in shadow. His right hand, heavy with the silver signet ring, resumed its circular motion across a pint glass, but slower now. Deliberate. Rory caught the shift in his weight, the slight favouring of his left leg, the old Prague injury flaring as it always did when tensions rose. Rory straightened. The scar on her left wrist itched beneath her sleeve. "If you've come to discuss hairstyles, the salon's two streets down." "I've come to discuss your disappearance." Daniel reached into his breast pocket. Not for a weapon, Silas's posture suggested he had already calculated the threat and found it wanting, but for an envelope of heavy, cream-coloured paper. "Your father's chambers are in an uproar. The Bar exams commence in three months. Brendan Carter is fielding calls from pupillage committees asking if his daughter intends to honour her acceptance, or if she's joined a travelling circus." "I deliver mapo tofu," Rory said. "For Yu-Fei Cheung. The Golden Empress, Wardour Street. Thursday nights I cover Soho. Friday mornings, Clerkenwell." "I know what you do." Daniel's voice dropped. He placed the envelope on the table. It sat there, fat and accusatory. "Last Tuesday, you argued with a taxi driver over a scratched bumper. Used Section 12 of the Road Traffic Act, 1988. Had him quoting precedent by the end of it." "Old habits." "The girl I knew could have been a judge." Daniel leaned forward. The booth's leather creaked, releasing the scent of conditioning oil and stale beer. "Now she memorises postcodes." "Safer," Rory said. "Postcodes don't hit back." Behind them, Silas moved along the back of the bar, near the bookshelf that concealed the meeting room. The black-and-white photographs covering the walls—anonymous faces from operations past—seemed to lean forward as he passed. He limped, the left knee stiff from that botched extraction in Prague, but his gaze remained fixed on Daniel's reflection in the mirror behind the optics. "You missed the Bar dinner," Daniel continued. "Your mother wept. Jennifer Ellis-Carter, weeping in public. The photographs were tragic." "Jennifer knows why I left." "Does she?" Daniel finally touched his whisky, then withdrew his hand. "Does she know about the nights in the A&E? The broken rib Evan told everyone you got from falling off a bicycle? The way he isolated you from chambers, from friends, from me?" Rory's fingers curled. The crescent scar pulsed. She remembered those nights, the fluorescent glare of Cardiff Royal Infirmary, the doctors who accepted Evan's explanations because he wore a solicitor's smile and she had learned to make her face a blank mask. "Why are you here, Daniel?" "Because he got out." The words fell between them like stones into deep water. "Six months ago. Good behaviour. Evan's out, and he's asking questions. Specifically, about you. About where the barrister's daughter with the bright blue eyes went." Rory's hand went numb. Behind the bar, Silas's knuckles whitened around the signet ring. "He knows about Malphora," Daniel said. The name hung in the air, foreign and sharp. Not Welsh, not Irish—the identity she had forged in the flat above this bar, the name she used when shadows moved wrong in the alleyways, when the deliveries took her past addresses that smelled of copper and threat. The name Silas had given her, pulling her from the Thames one night after she had walked too close to the edge, drunk and desperate. "He shouldn't know that name," Rory said. "No," Daniel agreed. "He shouldn't. Unless someone taught it to him. Or unless..." He looked at her, really looked at her, at the straight black hair and the bright blue eyes that had once wept during moot court finals. "Unless you've been leaving breadcrumbs. Leading him here." "I haven't." "Then how does he know, Aurora? How does he know to look in Soho? How does he know about the Irish barrister, and the girl with the scar?" Silas moved then. His limp was barely perceptible, controlled, but the knee injury still governed his gait when speed mattered. He reached the table in three long strides, the silver signet ring tapping a Morse of warning against the wood. "Time to leave, Mr. Whitmore," Silas said. He did not touch Daniel, did not need to. The authority of thirty years in field operations layered beneath his voice like bedrock. Daniel looked up. For a moment, the two men measured each other, the retired spymaster and the corporate lawyer, both recognising something ancient and predatory in the other's posture. "She's not your operation, Blackwood," Daniel said. "She's not yours either." Silas's hazel eyes remained steady. "Best remember that. On your way out." Daniel stood. He adjusted his cuffs, and Rory saw the watch, a gold Cartier, the same one he had worn at graduation, the same one he had checked obsessively during their final year, counting down to pupillage, to the Bar, to the life she had abandoned. "The new girl," Daniel said. "Jennifer. The one Evan's seeing now. She's in hospital. University College London. Accident, they called it. Fell down stairs." He paused at the door, beneath the green neon that cast his face in emerald shadow. "She's twenty-one. Same age you were when he started. He's coming to collect what's his, Aurora. Says Malphora can't hide forever. Says he's already found the flat." The door swung shut. The bell chimed, high and sharp. Rory stood in the sudden silence, her hand pressed against the crescent scar on her wrist, feeling her pulse hammer against the childhood memory of her father's garden gate. Above her, through the floorboards, came the sound of a floorboard cracking under weight. Then another. Footsteps, moving from the kitchen toward her bed. Silas limped to the window, watching Daniel's silhouette dissolve into the Soho night. Then he turned, moving with purpose toward the bookshelf that concealed the secret room. But Rory was already moving toward the stairs, toward the name that wasn't her name, toward the man who thought he owned her, her straight black hair swinging as she reached for the handle of the door that led up to the flat.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.462
leniency0.923
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
96.02% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1255
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
56.18% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1255
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"silk"
count1
1
word"etched"
count1
2
word"standard"
count1
3
word"weight"
count2
4
word"calculated"
count1
5
word"pulsed"
count1
6
word"measured"
count1
7
word"silence"
count1
8
word"pulse"
count1
9
word"footsteps"
count1
highlights
0"silk"
1"etched"
2"standard"
3"weight"
4"calculated"
5"pulsed"
6"measured"
7"silence"
8"pulse"
9"footsteps"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences66
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences66
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences86
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen44
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1243
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions20
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
63.09% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions55
wordCount863
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity1.74
worstName"Daniel"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Daniel"
discoveredNames
Rory12
Cardiff2
Welsh2
Valleys1
Oxford1
London1
Silas9
Blackwood1
Prague2
Daniel15
Royal1
Infirmary1
Evan1
Irish1
Thames1
Morse1
Cartier1
Bar1
Soho1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Valleys"
2"Silas"
3"Blackwood"
4"Daniel"
5"Evan"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"Oxford"
2"London"
3"Prague"
4"Thames"
5"Bar"
6"Soho"
globalScore0.631
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences44
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1243
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences86
matches
0"learned that adults"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean31.87
std22.26
cv0.698
sampleLengths
03
143
237
315
475
530
674
723
875
922
1051
112
1229
137
1460
1519
165
1744
1841
195
2039
2114
226
2372
247
2547
262
2728
2840
2930
3029
317
3216
3346
3467
3510
3653
3727
3843
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences66
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs137
matches(empty)
76.41% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences86
ratio0.023
matches
0"The black-and-white photographs covering the walls—anonymous faces from operations past—seemed to lean forward as he passed."
1"Not Welsh, not Irish—the identity she had forged in the flat above this bar, the name she used when shadows moved wrong in the alleyways, when the deliveries took her past addresses that smelled of copper and threat."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount872
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"heavy, cream-coloured paper."
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.02522935779816514
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.006880733944954129
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences86
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences86
mean14.45
std11.18
cv0.773
sampleLengths
03
112
231
36
431
58
67
728
821
926
1021
119
127
1320
1420
151
1626
172
1810
1911
2012
2125
2238
236
2416
258
267
276
2830
292
3012
3113
324
333
344
3518
3616
3726
387
3912
405
4111
4233
433
444
4534
465
4714
4825
494
65.89% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.43023255813953487
totalSentences86
uniqueOpeners37
62.89% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences53
matches
0"Then he turned, moving with"
ratio0.019
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount13
totalSentences53
matches
0"She did not look up"
1"He occupied the corner booth"
2"His right hand, heavy with"
3"He placed the envelope on"
4"It sat there, fat and"
5"He limped, the left knee"
6"She remembered those nights, the"
7"He looked at her, really"
8"His limp was barely perceptible,"
9"He reached the table in"
10"He did not touch Daniel,"
11"He adjusted his cuffs, and"
12"He paused at the door,"
ratio0.245
54.34% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount43
totalSentences53
matches
0"The cloth snagged on a"
1"Pain shot up from the"
2"She did not look up"
3"The voice carried the clipped"
4"Rory dislodged the fabric from"
5"He occupied the corner booth"
6"The hands of a man"
7"Daniel gestured with his whisky"
8"The distinctive green neon from"
9"His right hand, heavy with"
10"Rory caught the shift in"
11"The scar on her left"
12"Daniel reached into his breast"
13"Daniel's voice dropped"
14"He placed the envelope on"
15"It sat there, fat and"
16"Daniel leaned forward"
17"The booth's leather creaked, releasing"
18"The black-and-white photographs covering the"
19"He limped, the left knee"
ratio0.811
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences53
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences29
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"The voice carried the clipped precision of the Welsh Valleys polished by Oxford elocution, a particular cadence that conjured libraries at midnight and the smel…"
1"He occupied the corner booth as though he'd grown there, a three-piece charcoal pinstripe suit tailored to his slender frame, a silk tie the colour of dried blo…"
2"Behind them, Silas moved along the back of the bar, near the bookshelf that concealed the meeting room."
3"She remembered those nights, the fluorescent glare of Cardiff Royal Infirmary, the doctors who accepted Evan's explanations because he wore a solicitor's smile …"
4"Not Welsh, not Irish—the identity she had forged in the flat above this bar, the name she used when shadows moved wrong in the alleyways, when the deliveries to…"
5"Then he turned, moving with purpose toward the bookshelf that concealed the secret room."
6"But Rory was already moving toward the stairs, toward the name that wasn't her name, toward the man who thought he owned her, her straight black hair swinging a…"
97.22% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Daniel gestured, not drinking, merely positioning"
98.72% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Daniel continued (continue)"
1"Daniel agreed (agree)"
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.231
leniency0.462
rawRatio0.222
effectiveRatio0.103
85.4920%