Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTY5TN0EVNX4S4SFGK26EH6

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Duration:
51.1s
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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The glass slipped from Rory's fingers and shattered against the bartop. Not because she dropped it. Because the woman who walked through the door of The Raven's Nest wore Eva Brennan's face on a stranger's body. Same copper hair, same freckle constellation across the bridge of her nose, same habit of scanning a room left to right before committing to it. But Eva Brennan didn't wear Burberry trenches. Eva Brennan didn't carry herself like the floor owed her something. Eva Brennan had chewed her nails to the quick and worn the same battered denim jacket from sixth form until the lining disintegrated. "Christ, Rory. That's the third one this week." Silas appeared with a bar towel, sweeping the shards into a neat pile with practised efficiency. His hazel eyes tracked her gaze to the door. "Someone you know?" "Used to." Eva hadn't spotted her yet. She stood near the entrance, framed by the green neon glow bleeding through the window, and typed something into her phone with both thumbs. A diamond stud caught the light from her left ear. Just one. Eva had always said matching earrings were for people afraid of asymmetry. Rory picked a sliver of glass from her palm. A thin red line opened across the pad of her thumb. "Shall I fetch the first aid kit, or will you stand there bleeding on my mahogany?" "It's laminate, Si." "It's the principle." She wrapped a cocktail napkin around her thumb and stepped out from behind the bar. She'd been covering for Silas while he restocked the cellar, a favour she owed him for last month's rent extension. The Raven's Nest sat half-empty on a Tuesday, the usual collection of Soho regulars nursing their drinks beneath the old maps and photographs that papered the walls. A Chet Baker record crackled from the corner speaker. The air tasted like hops and furniture polish. Eva looked up from her phone. The recognition hit them both at the same moment, a kind of mutual flinch, and then Eva's mouth opened into something that wanted to be a smile but couldn't quite commit. "Rory bloody Carter." "Eva bloody Brennan." "It's Hale now, actually." The name landed between them like a coin on a counter. Rory absorbed it. Hale. She didn't know any Hales. "Married?" "Divorced. Kept the name. Kept the flat in Notting Hill too, so." Eva shrugged one shoulder, the Burberry shifting with it. "Fair trade." "Notting Hill." "Don't say it like that." "Like what?" "Like I've betrayed the revolution." Eva slid onto a barstool and set her phone face-down on the bar. "We were seventeen. The revolution was stealing cider from Tesco Metro." Silas materialised with his particular brand of silent choreography, placing a clean tumbler in front of Eva without being asked. "What can I get you?" "Hendrick's and tonic. Fever-Tree, if you have it." He did. Of course he did. Silas stocked his bar the way he'd once stocked safe houses, with meticulous attention to every possible need. He poured the gin, added the tonic, and placed a thin wheel of cucumber on the rim before retreating to the far end of the bar. His limp was worse tonight. Rain always made it worse. Eva lifted the glass. "To accidental reunions." "To accidents." Rory didn't pick up a glass. She leaned against the back counter with her arms folded, the napkin on her thumb darkening to rust. Three years. Three years since Eva had rung her at half past two in the morning and said, "Get out of Cardiff, Rory. Get out now." Three years since Rory had thrown clothes into a bin bag and driven to London with a split lip and her mother's rosary swinging from the rear-view mirror. Eva had met her at Paddington. Eva had found her the flat above this bar. Eva had sat with her on the bathroom floor while she shook and said nothing and that nothing had been the right thing, the perfect thing. Then Eva had disappeared. Not dramatically. Not with a fight or a slammed door. She'd just stopped answering texts. Stopped returning calls. The space where she'd been grew moss and Rory stopped poking at it because poking at absences only made them deeper. "You look good," Eva said. "You look expensive." Eva's laugh came out short and dry. She turned the glass on the bar, leaving wet crescents on the laminate. "I earned expensive. Took the consulting position at Deloitte. You remember, the one I said I'd rather eat my own CV than accept?" "I remember you said corporate consulting was where souls went to get laminated." "Turns out laminated souls pay off student loans in eighteen months." "So that's what happened." "What do you mean?" Rory unfolded her arms. The crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist caught the low light, a childhood souvenir she'd stopped hiding years ago. "I mean you rang me six times in October. I counted. Then five in November. Then three. Then nothing. I figured something happened." "Something did happen. Life happened. The job was eighty hours a week, Rory. I couldn't, I didn't have the bandwidth to..." "Bandwidth." Eva closed her eyes. "Don't." "You sound like a press release." "And you sound like you've been rehearsing this." Eva opened her eyes. Green, not copper. Rory had always remembered them as copper, but they were green, flecked with gold near the pupil. Memory played tricks. Memory was a liar with a flair for revision. "I'm sorry. Is that what you need? Because I am. Genuinely." The record changed. Bill Evans now, something with too much piano for the silence stretching between them. "I needed you," Rory said. "Past tense." "And now?" "Now I'm pouring pints in Soho and delivering sweet and sour chicken for a living, and I'm fine." "You were supposed to sit the bar exam." "Plans change." "Rory." "Eva." They held each other's gaze across the scuffed bartop. The neon from the window sign painted Eva's face half-green, half-shadow. Behind her, one of the old photographs on the wall showed a street in Prague circa 1987, men in overcoats crossing a bridge. Silas never explained the photographs. Rory had stopped asking. "I came here looking for someone," Eva said. She turned her phone over. The screen showed a name and a number. "A man called Silas Blackwood. Someone at work said he could help with a sensitive matter." Rory's stomach tightened. "What kind of sensitive matter?" "The kind that doesn't go through official channels." "Since when do you have matters that don't go through official channels?" Eva's jaw worked. She looked down at her Hendrick's, at the cucumber wheel floating like a small green life raft. When she spoke again, her voice had shed the Deloitte polish. Underneath sat something Rory recognised. Something from a bathroom floor at three in the morning. "Since my ex-husband's business partner turned up dead in our old flat. And the police want to talk to me about it." The Bill Evans record hit a sour note and skipped. Silas, at the far end of the bar, stopped polishing the glass in his hand. His silver signet ring caught the light as his fingers stilled. Rory looked at Eva. Eva looked at her phone. The dead man's details glowed on the screen between them, a name Rory had never seen before attached to a face she would, by morning, wish she'd never learned. "Si," Rory called, without breaking eye contact. "Think someone needs the back room." The bookshelf at the rear of the bar waited in its permanent silence, flush against the wall, holding its breath alongside every secret it had ever swallowed. Silas set down the glass. His chair scraped the floor as he stood. "Bring the bottle," he said.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.208
leniency0.415
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1304
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found
0"Evans"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
76.99% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1304
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"shattered"
count1
1
word"scanning"
count1
2
word"perfect"
count1
3
word"silence"
count2
4
word"stomach"
count1
highlights
0"shattered"
1"scanning"
2"perfect"
3"silence"
4"stomach"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences89
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences89
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences131
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen53
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1297
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
11.41% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions76
wordCount938
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity2.77
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Rory15
Raven2
Nest2
Eva26
Brennan4
Burberry2
Silas7
Tuesday1
Soho1
Chet1
Baker1
Hales1
Three3
London1
Paddington1
Green1
Evans2
Prague1
Hendrick1
Deloitte1
Bill2
persons
0"Rory"
1"Raven"
2"Nest"
3"Eva"
4"Brennan"
5"Burberry"
6"Silas"
7"Chet"
8"Baker"
9"Green"
10"Evans"
11"Hendrick"
12"Bill"
places
0"Soho"
1"Three"
2"London"
3"Paddington"
4"Prague"
globalScore0.114
windowScore0.167
57.41% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences54
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"tasted like hops and furniture polish"
1"quite commit"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1297
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences131
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs64
mean20.27
std22.02
cv1.086
sampleLengths
011
191
236
32
453
520
616
73
83
979
106
1131
123
133
144
1520
161
1723
182
195
202
2129
2220
235
248
2560
267
2726
2895
2943
305
313
3243
3313
3411
354
364
3746
3821
391
405
416
4255
4317
447
452
4618
478
482
491
97.38% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences89
matches
0"being asked"
1"been grew"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs150
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences131
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount944
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"half-green, half-shadow."
adverbCount20
adverbRatio0.0211864406779661
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.00211864406779661
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences131
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences131
mean9.9
std8.36
cv0.845
sampleLengths
011
15
220
325
47
511
623
724
89
93
102
115
1224
1310
142
1512
169
1711
1816
193
203
2115
2220
2327
249
258
266
2731
283
293
304
3111
323
331
345
351
3621
372
382
395
402
4118
4211
4320
445
458
462
474
4818
4926
60.81% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.4198473282442748
totalSentences131
uniqueOpeners55
83.33% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences80
matches
0"Of course he did."
1"Then Eva had disappeared."
ratio0.025
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount15
totalSentences80
matches
0"His hazel eyes tracked her"
1"She stood near the entrance,"
2"She wrapped a cocktail napkin"
3"She'd been covering for Silas"
4"She didn't know any Hales."
5"He poured the gin, added"
6"His limp was worse tonight."
7"She leaned against the back"
8"She'd just stopped answering texts."
9"She turned the glass on"
10"They held each other's gaze"
11"She turned her phone over."
12"She looked down at her"
13"His silver signet ring caught"
14"His chair scraped the floor"
ratio0.188
47.50% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount66
totalSentences80
matches
0"The glass slipped from Rory's"
1"Eva Brennan didn't carry herself"
2"Eva Brennan had chewed her"
3"Silas appeared with a bar"
4"His hazel eyes tracked her"
5"Eva hadn't spotted her yet."
6"She stood near the entrance,"
7"A diamond stud caught the"
8"Eva had always said matching"
9"Rory picked a sliver of"
10"A thin red line opened"
11"She wrapped a cocktail napkin"
12"She'd been covering for Silas"
13"The Raven's Nest sat half-empty"
14"A Chet Baker record crackled"
15"The air tasted like hops"
16"Eva looked up from her"
17"The recognition hit them both"
18"The name landed between them"
19"Rory absorbed it."
ratio0.825
62.50% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences80
matches
0"Because the woman who walked"
ratio0.013
79.83% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences34
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Because the woman who walked through the door of The Raven's Nest wore Eva Brennan's face on a stranger's body."
1"The Raven's Nest sat half-empty on a Tuesday, the usual collection of Soho regulars nursing their drinks beneath the old maps and photographs that papered the w…"
2"The recognition hit them both at the same moment, a kind of mutual flinch, and then Eva's mouth opened into something that wanted to be a smile but couldn't qui…"
34.09% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Eva shrugged, the Burberry shifting with it"
1"Rory called, without breaking eye contact"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Eva had (have)"
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.113
leniency0.226
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.038
86.1752%