Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTY674SW8AGR7VB5MYYFZ6Y

Run Details

Duration:
1m 9s
Cost:
$0.078100
Provider:
Anthropic

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The rain hammered London like a punishment, turning the streets of Soho into rivers of reflected neon. Detective Harlow Quinn's boots slapped against wet cobblestones as she rounded the corner onto Brewer Street, her breath coming in sharp bursts that misted in the cold November air. Thirty meters ahead, the figure in the dark hoodie glanced back. Just a flash of pale face beneath the hood before he ducked left into an alley. Quinn pushed harder, her worn leather watch catching the streetlight as she pumped her arms. Eighteen years on the force had taught her how suspects moved, how they thought. This one moved wrong. Too fluid. Too confident for someone running from a police detective. "Stop! Metropolitan Police!" The words disappeared into the rain and traffic noise. Meaningless. She hadn't expected him to comply. The alley stank of garbage and old urine. Quinn's hand found her torch, the beam cutting through the darkness to illuminate overflowing bins and a chain-link fence at the far end. The fence swung loose, recently cut. She squeezed through the gap, feeling the metal catch her jacket and tear it. Didn't matter. The suspect—Tomás Herrera, former paramedic, current person of interest in three unexplained deaths—had already cleared the fence and was sprinting across a car park toward Camden High Street. Quinn had been watching Herrera for six weeks. Following paper trails. Interviewing former colleagues. Building a picture of a man who'd thrown away a promising medical career for reasons no one could adequately explain. The official story said unauthorized treatments. The unofficial whispers she'd caught mentioned stranger things. Patients who shouldn't have survived. Patients who shouldn't have existed. She didn't believe in shouldn't have existed. She believed in evidence, procedure, and the satisfying weight of handcuffs clicking shut around guilty wrists. Herrera vaulted a low wall and disappeared into the crowd of drunk tourists spilling out of a kebab shop. Quinn followed, shoving past a group of university students who swore at her in what sounded like German. "Move!" The crowd parted reluctantly. She caught a glimpse of Herrera's dark curly hair bobbing between heads, heading toward the Tube station. No. Not the station. He veered right, toward an alley she'd never noticed before, despite having walked this stretch of Camden a hundred times during the Morris investigation. The Morris investigation. Three years cold. Her partner, found dead in circumstances that still woke her at 3 AM with her heart pounding and her sheets soaked with sweat. The coroner's report had been inconclusive. The internal investigation had been perfunctory. Everyone had wanted to forget. Quinn hadn't forgotten. She followed Herrera into the narrow passage between a tattoo parlor and a vintage clothing shop. The rain couldn't reach here; the buildings leaned together overhead like conspirators sharing secrets. Her torch beam found old brick walls covered in graffiti—symbols she didn't recognize, angular and unsettling. Ahead, Herrera had stopped. Quinn slowed, drawing her collapsible baton. Her other hand found her radio, but static crackled where her colleagues' voices should have been. The walls were doing something to the signal. "Herrera. Tomás Herrera. I just want to talk." He turned. In the harsh white light of her torch, she could see him clearly for the first time. Olive skin slicked with rain. Warm brown eyes that held an emotion she couldn't immediately identify. Not fear. Not anger. Something closer to resignation. "Detective Quinn." His accent carried traces of Spain beneath the London vowels. "You shouldn't be here." "I could say the same to you. You ran. Innocent people don't run." "Innocent people don't know what I know." His hand moved to his chest, fingers closing around something beneath his shirt. A medallion. Saint Christopher, she remembered from his file. Patron saint of travelers. "Then tell me what you know. About the deaths. About the clinic on Archer Street. About—" she hesitated, then pushed forward, "—about Detective Sergeant Morris." Something flickered across Herrera's face. Recognition. Guilt. "You're her partner. The one who lived." The words hit Quinn like a physical blow. The one who lived. As if survival had been optional. As if Morris's death had been— "How do you know about Morris?" Herrera's gaze shifted past her shoulder, toward the deeper darkness of the alley. "She came to the Market. Asking questions. Same questions you're asking now." "What market?" "The Veil Market." He said it like the words meant something. Like they should mean something to her. "I don't—" "Down there." Herrera pointed at the ground. At what Quinn had assumed was a maintenance hatch but now saw was something else entirely. The metal was older than it should have been, the surface covered in the same angular symbols she'd seen on the walls. "That's where I was going. That's where the answers are." Quinn's training screamed at her to stop. Call for backup. Secure the suspect. Follow procedure. But Morris had followed procedure. Morris had done everything right. Morris was dead. "Open it." Herrera's eyebrows rose. "Detective—" "Open the bloody hatch, Herrera. We're going down together." For a long moment, he simply stared at her. Then he reached into his pocket and produced something small and pale. It looked like a token of some kind, carved from what Quinn's rational mind refused to identify as bone. "You need this to enter. One token, one person." He held it out to her. "Take it. Go find your answers. But understand—once you see what's down there, you can't unsee it. You can't go back to the world you thought you lived in." "I stopped living in that world when Morris died." Quinn snatched the token from his hand. The bone was warm against her palm, warmer than it should have been. It seemed to pulse, like a heartbeat. Herrera knelt and gripped the edge of the hatch. The metal groaned as he lifted it, revealing a spiral staircase descending into amber light and the smell of old things—incense and dust and something else, something organic that made Quinn think of snake pits and fever dreams. "The Market moves every full moon," Herrera said. "Tonight it's beneath Camden. Tomorrow it could be anywhere. Time doesn't work the same down there. Stay too long, you might come up to find a week has passed. A month." "You expect me to believe that?" "I expect you to believe what your own eyes tell you." He gestured toward the stairs. "After you, Detective. Unless you've changed your mind." Quinn looked at the token in her hand. Looked at the stairs spiraling down into impossible light. Looked at Herrera, with his scar and his saint's medallion and his eyes that had seen things she couldn't imagine. Three years ago, DS Margaret Morris had followed a lead into the dark. She'd never come back. Quinn put her foot on the first step. The metal was cold through her wet boots. She descended, one hand on the wall for balance, her baton still gripped in the other. The light grew brighter as she went down, and the sounds of London—traffic, rain, the eternal hum of the city—faded into nothing. Herrera followed, pulling the hatch closed above them with a clang that resonated through Quinn's chest like a death knell. The staircase ended in what had once been a Tube station. Quinn could see the old tiles, the curve of the tunnel, the ghostly outlines of advertisements from decades past. But the platform itself had been transformed into something that defied description. Stalls lined both sides of the space, constructed from materials that shouldn't exist—crystal that pulsed with inner light, metal that seemed to flow like liquid, fabric that moved without wind. Figures moved between them, some human, some decidedly not. She saw a woman with scales where skin should be. A man whose shadow didn't match his body. Two children sharing a single pair of legs. Quinn's hand tightened on her baton. "Welcome to the Veil Market," Herrera said from behind her. His voice was flat, devoid of the fear she felt crawling up her own spine. "Try not to make eye contact with the vendors unless you intend to buy. And whatever you do, don't tell them your real name." "This isn't possible." "And yet." He moved past her, into the crowd. "You wanted answers about Morris. About the deaths. About what I do. The answer is the same: there's another world beneath the one you know. Morris found it. It killed her." "How? How did it kill her?" Herrera stopped at a stall selling jars of what looked like luminescent honey. The vendor—if it could be called that—was a figure wrapped in so many layers of cloth that no face was visible, only hands that had too many fingers. "Three glass tears," Herrera said to the vendor. "Payment on my account." The figure reached beneath its counter and produced three small vials filled with opalescent liquid. Herrera tucked them into his jacket. "Morris asked the wrong person the wrong question," he continued, as if the transaction hadn't happened. "She wanted to know who controlled the Market. Who ran the underground. She thought it was organized crime. She thought she could apply police logic to police problems." "And?" "And she learned that some problems aren't police problems. Some crimes aren't human crimes." Herrera turned to face her, and in the strange light of the Market, his eyes seemed older than his twenty-nine years. The scar on his left forearm—knife attack, her files had said—seemed to writhe. "I tried to save her, Detective. I tried to save all of them. That's why I lost my license. That's why I'm down here, buying glass tears and smuggling medical supplies to people the NHS doesn't know exist. Because someone has to." Quinn's training was failing her. Her rational mind kept trying to explain what she was seeing—hallucinogens in the water, elaborate practical joke, stress-induced psychosis—but her cop's instincts knew the truth. This was real. The scales, the shadows, the impossible architecture. All of it. "Who killed Morris?" "I don't know. Truly." Herrera spread his hands. "But I know who might. There's a woman who runs a bar in Soho. The Raven's Nest. Look for the green neon sign. She knows things. People talk to her. If anyone knows what happened to your partner, it's her." "Why are you telling me this?" "Because Morris was a good person. She didn't deserve what happened to her." He paused, his hand moving again to the Saint Christopher medallion at his throat. "And because you're going to need allies, Detective Quinn. You've stepped into a world that doesn't follow your rules. You can't arrest your way through it. You can't shoot the things that live down here. You can only survive by learning who to trust." "And I should trust you?" "No." A ghost of a smile crossed his face. "You shouldn't trust anyone. But I'm offering you information anyway. Make of that what you will." A sound echoed through the Market—a bell, low and sonorous, that seemed to vibrate through Quinn's bones. Around them, the vendors began covering their wares, the strange customers drifting toward the exits. "Market's closing," Herrera said. "Full moon's passing. We need to leave, or we'll be here when it moves. You don't want to find out where it goes next." He headed for a different staircase than the one they'd descended, this one leading up toward a rectangle of grey London light. Quinn followed, her mind still reeling, her hand still gripping the bone token like a talisman. At the top of the stairs, they emerged into a narrow passage behind what looked like a fish market in Billingsgate. The rain had stopped. The sky was lightening toward dawn. Quinn checked her watch. Her worn leather band was slick with moisture. Four hours. They'd been down there for four hours. It had felt like twenty minutes. When she looked up, Herrera was gone. She stood alone in the pre-dawn chill, surrounded by the mundane smells of fish and diesel, with a bone token in her pocket and a name burning in her mind. The Raven's Nest. Green neon sign. Quinn started walking. She had a bar to find.
created_at"2026-02-19T12:32:24.222Z" 2/19/2026, 12:32:24 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she hesitated then [then]"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.353
leniency0.706
rawRatio0.056
effectiveRatio0.039
95.13% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2053
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"reluctantly"
count1
1
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"reluctantly"
1"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
75.65% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2053
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"pounding"
count1
2
word"flickered"
count1
3
word"pulse"
count1
4
word"resonated"
count1
5
word"constructed"
count1
6
word"crystal"
count1
7
word"pulsed"
count1
8
word"echoed"
count1
9
word"chill"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"pounding"
2"flickered"
3"pulse"
4"resonated"
5"constructed"
6"crystal"
7"pulsed"
8"echoed"
9"chill"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences151
matches(empty)
76.63% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences151
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"think"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences185
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen44
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2034
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions84
wordCount1480
uniqueNames25
maxNameDensity1.55
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
London4
Soho1
Harlow1
Quinn23
Brewer1
Street2
November1
Tomás1
Herrera22
Camden2
High1
German1
Tube2
Morris7
Spain1
Christopher2
Detective2
Sergeant1
Like1
Margaret1
Market2
Saint2
Billingsgate1
Raven1
Nest1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Tomás"
3"Herrera"
4"Morris"
5"Christopher"
6"Sergeant"
7"Margaret"
8"Saint"
9"Raven"
places
0"London"
1"Soho"
2"Brewer"
3"Street"
4"Camden"
5"High"
6"Tube"
7"Spain"
8"Market"
9"Billingsgate"
globalScore0.723
windowScore0.667
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences100
glossingSentenceCount7
matches
0"sounded like German"
1"looked like a token of some kind, carved"
2"metal that seemed to flow like liquid, fabric that moved without wind"
3"looked like luminescent honey"
4"seemed older than his twenty-nine years"
5"looked like a fish market in Billingsgate"
6"felt like twenty minutes"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2034
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences185
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs81
mean25.11
std19.28
cv0.768
sampleLengths
046
127
244
33
416
537
644
758
823
937
101
1149
1246
133
1446
154
1630
178
1843
1916
2013
2133
2225
237
247
2524
266
2725
282
2918
302
3155
3215
3310
343
352
364
379
3840
3944
409
4127
4247
4339
446
4524
4637
4717
488
4946
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences151
matches
0"been transformed"
1"was gone"
67.20% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs251
matches
0"was sprinting"
1"were doing"
2"was failing"
3"was seeing"
4"was lightening"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount16
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences185
ratio0.065
matches
0"The suspect—Tomás Herrera, former paramedic, current person of interest in three unexplained deaths—had already cleared the fence and was sprinting across a car park toward Camden High Street."
1"The rain couldn't reach here; the buildings leaned together overhead like conspirators sharing secrets."
2"Her torch beam found old brick walls covered in graffiti—symbols she didn't recognize, angular and unsettling."
3"\"Then tell me what you know. About the deaths. About the clinic on Archer Street. About—\" she hesitated, then pushed forward, \"—about Detective Sergeant Morris.\""
4"As if Morris's death had been—"
5"The metal groaned as he lifted it, revealing a spiral staircase descending into amber light and the smell of old things—incense and dust and something else, something organic that made Quinn think of snake pits and fever dreams."
6"The light grew brighter as she went down, and the sounds of London—traffic, rain, the eternal hum of the city—faded into nothing."
7"Stalls lined both sides of the space, constructed from materials that shouldn't exist—crystal that pulsed with inner light, metal that seemed to flow like liquid, fabric that moved without wind."
8"The vendor—if it could be called that—was a figure wrapped in so many layers of cloth that no face was visible, only hands that had too many fingers."
9"The scar on his left forearm—knife attack, her files had said—seemed to writhe."
10"Her rational mind kept trying to explain what she was seeing—hallucinogens in the water, elaborate practical joke, stress-induced psychosis—but her cop's instincts knew the truth."
11"A sound echoed through the Market—a bell, low and sonorous, that seemed to vibrate through Quinn's bones."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1440
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"former paramedic, current person"
adverbCount30
adverbRatio0.020833333333333332
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.006944444444444444
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences185
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences185
mean10.99
std8.91
cv0.811
sampleLengths
017
129
211
316
415
514
64
72
89
93
109
111
126
138
1423
156
1614
172
1828
198
203
213
2220
236
248
255
265
277
2816
2919
3018
311
324
3317
341
353
3624
373
383
3923
406
416
425
433
4416
4514
4616
474
486
4916
60.90% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.41081081081081083
totalSentences185
uniqueOpeners76
72.99% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences137
matches
0"Just a flash of pale"
1"Too confident for someone running"
2"Then he reached into his"
ratio0.022
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount32
totalSentences137
matches
0"She hadn't expected him to"
1"She squeezed through the gap,"
2"She didn't believe in shouldn't"
3"She believed in evidence, procedure,"
4"She caught a glimpse of"
5"He veered right, toward an"
6"Her partner, found dead in"
7"She followed Herrera into the"
8"Her torch beam found old"
9"Her other hand found her"
10"His accent carried traces of"
11"His hand moved to his"
12"she hesitated, then pushed forward,"
13"He said it like the"
14"It looked like a token"
15"He held it out to"
16"It seemed to pulse, like"
17"He gestured toward the stairs"
18"She'd never come back."
19"She descended, one hand on"
ratio0.234
73.14% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount106
totalSentences137
matches
0"The rain hammered London like"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn's boots slapped"
2"Quinn pushed harder, her worn"
3"This one moved wrong."
4"The words disappeared into the"
5"She hadn't expected him to"
6"The alley stank of garbage"
7"Quinn's hand found her torch,"
8"The fence swung loose, recently"
9"She squeezed through the gap,"
10"The suspect—Tomás Herrera, former paramedic,"
11"Quinn had been watching Herrera"
12"The official story said unauthorized"
13"The unofficial whispers she'd caught"
14"Patients who shouldn't have survived."
15"Patients who shouldn't have existed."
16"She didn't believe in shouldn't"
17"She believed in evidence, procedure,"
18"Herrera vaulted a low wall"
19"Quinn followed, shoving past a"
ratio0.774
72.99% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences137
matches
0"As if survival had been"
1"As if Morris's death had"
ratio0.015
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences50
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Building a picture of a man who'd thrown away a promising medical career for reasons no one could adequately explain."
1"Looked at Herrera, with his scar and his saint's medallion and his eyes that had seen things she couldn't imagine."
2"Stalls lined both sides of the space, constructed from materials that shouldn't exist—crystal that pulsed with inner light, metal that seemed to flow like liqui…"
69.44% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"His hand moved, fingers closing around something beneath his shirt"
1"he continued, as if the transaction hadn't happened"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"he continued (continue)"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.118
leniency0.235
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.039
84.1580%