Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTY7KJZ4HABXH8656P5MN8K

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1m 60s
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$0.005450
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OpenAI

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

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Boundary stones burned my knuckles as I shoved through the gap, the grove swallowing the metallic squeal of the gate behind me. The air tasted of damp earth and something older than memory, a scent that clung to the back of my throat and wouldn’t leave. The Heartstone Pendant pressed against my chest, a quiet, stubborn warmth that steadied my grip on the silver chain. It pulsed once, twice, as if testing the night before it decided to move. I had come here for a reason. A reason that wouldn’t stay still when you tried to name it. The grove’s clearing opened up with a hesitant sigh, as though it recognised me and was calculating whether to pretend I hadn’t found it. The ancient oak stood at the centre, its bark braided with moss and memory, the boundary stones arranged in a rough circle around it like teeth closing on something sweet and dangerous. Wildflowers bloomed year-round in a riot of colours I shouldn’t have trusted; the scent of crushed petals carried on a draft I would have sworn wasn’t there a heartbeat ago. Time behaved here like a stubborn child: one moment seemed to stretch, the next snap shut, a thread being tugged from a spool and then abruptly trimmed. I stepped forward, careful not to crowd the space between the stones. The grove’s hush pressed in, thick and expectant, as if every leaf held its breath for the moment I would betray it. The pendant’s glow—a faint inner glow, a warmth that hummed in the hollow of my palm—brightened a notch. The crimson gem caught the moonlight in a way that didn’t look like light at all but a small, malevolent heartbeat beneath glass. “Not tonight,” I said, barely above a whisper, though I spoke to no one but the night. The words rose into the hush and fell away, leaving a windless void that tasted of copper and rainwater, if you could call it rain here. The grove absorbed the sound and offered nothing back except a rustle of leaves that sounded purposely casual, as if someone—or something—were strolling just beyond the edge of vision, listening for the exact moment I would blink at the wrong place. The boundary stones glowed with a pale blue sheen, not hot, not cold, simply there, like small mouths waiting to speak. I moved closer to the oak, tracing the line of its roots with my eyes while not touching them, as though the ground itself might wake and tell me a thing I wasn’t ready to hear. The Heartstone hung heavy on its chain, and I felt a corresponding heaviness in my wrists, as if my limbs remembered a debt they had once owed and now wished to forget. The pendant thrummed again, a steady heartbeat against my chest, and for a second I believed it knew where we were going better than I did. The first sound came as a soft, deliberate tapping somewhere off to my right—a rhythm that did not belong to the grove’s normal chorus. It could have been a branch striking stone, could have been a creature unseen tapping out a message I wasn’t meant to receive. I stopped, listening not with my ears alone but with something older, something that lived in the bones. The tapping stopped as quickly as it started, and the silence that followed felt heavier than the last breath I had taken. I scanned the edge of the glade where the trees pressed close and the shadows pooled. The edge gave only what it wanted to give, which was never what I expected. A shape flickered at the corner of my eye—soft, fast, here and then not here, a trick of light or something else moving at the threshold of sight. I tried to fix my gaze on it, and when I did, it dissolved into a smear of shadow behind a trunk, as if the world had shrugged and decided to blur your memory for a heartbeat. I did not blink. I did not look away. I learned long ago that appearances in The Fae Grove did not always announce themselves with a shout; they preferred a patient, creeping reveal. “Show me you’re there,” I breathed, and the grove answered with its usual, disarming politeness: nothing at all. Nothing but the quiet, the rustle, the patient hum of a world slightly out of time. There were moments when the grove reminded me of Cardiff in a memory I kept at the corner of my eye, clipped in a photograph I refused to hang on the wall. My mother’s voice would sometimes surface there, a soft insistence that I keep my head clear and my feet planted, as if fear could be measured and weighed and traded for something simpler. It didn’t help in this place. Here, fear did not bow to calculation. It multiplied, and I could hear it in the creak of the oak’s limbs, in the distant clack of something moving under the fallen leaves, in the way the wildflowers seemed to tilt their faces toward the lantern-light of the moon, as if pleading to be noticed even as they grew in the shadow of a boundary nobody should cross. The pendant warmed again, a friend’s nod in a language I recognised and pretended not to. It wasn’t just warmth; it was information carried in heat. Information that whispered when to pause, when to press forward, when to stubbornly refuse. Hel portals—those boundaries between earth and something else, something vast and patient—were not so easily navigated by a mind that still doubted its own questions. The pendant’s pulse grew into a small, steady flare, a signal that I was close to something—the kind of proximity that demanded the breath I held in my chest be released in measured, controlled exhalations. A branch above clicked, not from wind but from intention. Not mine. The grove did something strange in response to the sound: a single flower, more brilliant than the rest, unfurled on its stem and tilted toward a point I could not place. The light braided along the petals, a microcosm of the stars up there, and then the bloom closed again, leaving a faint afterimage on my retinas as if I had looked at something sacred with unwashed eyes and paid the price. Time here did not keep to any clock I recognised. An hour inside could be minutes outside, or it could be the other way round. I was not sure which I preferred to be the truth. I had learned to measure time by sensations: the quickened pulse of the pendant, the drift of the air, the change in the scent around the grass, the way the moss beneath my boots softened, then hardened, then softened again, as though the ground itself could not decide whether I belonged there or not. I pressed on, counting steps in a careful, almost ceremonial rhythm—the steps that would tell me whether the grove was listening or merely pretending. The boundary narrowed and then widened as I moved past a stand of younger trees to a clearing that glowed with the pale, unnatural luminescence of fungus and dew. The air tasted tangy, like something metallic dissolved in sweetness. My mind briefly wandered to the old city markets of Cardiff, to a stall that sold trinkets and promises, to a moment when a stranger had slipped a red gem into my hand with a warning I hadn’t understood. The Heartstone glowed faintly against the glow of the grove, answering its own questions with tiny pulses that made the chain tremble against my collar. Then I heard it. A sound that shouldn’t exist here, a whisper of something moving between the petals of a flower that didn’t belong to this world but was perfectly, horrifically at home in it. It wasn’t a voice you could fully recognise: vowels braided with a consonant-soft rustle, like paper rubbed with velvet. It made the back of my neck prickle. The whisper did not come from any single direction. It came from everywhere and nowhere, curling around the edge of the clearing, licking at the hem of my jacket, edging along the line of my thoughts and giving each one a little twist. I did not respond with bravado or bravura. I did not pretend I was unafraid. I kept walking, and every step brought a new sensation, a new seam of wrongness that opened in the air like a seam in a piece of old leather being pried apart. The grove’s rhythm changed around me: the click of the pendant, the muffled thud of my own heartbeat, the odd, almost inaudible murmur of a something pressing close enough to touch my skin if I leaned in just a fraction. “Not but a memory,” I told the grove, though it was not addressing me. It was addressing something else, something that might have thought itself clever for hiding in the edge of perception. I did not know what I believed, and that was precisely what this place thrived on: uncertainty dressed in delicate details. The Heartstone Pendant brightened a fraction, then cooled, as if listening to a different cadence inside my chest. The circular clearing opened up before me and the oak |stood| taller here, its branches stretching into a lattice that caught the stray light and rebuilt it into a map I could not yet read. On the ground, between two stones, a glyph lay etched in moss, a pattern I recognised from old pamphlets and from the time I had studied folklore instead of filing leads at the delivery desk. The glyph wasn’t a warning so much as a doorway waiting for a key. I knelt, bones and breath both careful not to disturb the night’s choreography. The glyph resembled a cross between a spiral and a rune, something that could begin or end with the same line, depending on who looked at it. I placed the pendant on the moss, intent on letting the stone do the work of deciphering. The moment the crimson gem hovered over the glyph, the air tightened, a crisp line drawn across the skin of the night, and the ground under my hands tightened as if something beneath were taking a breath. The glyph glowed, and suddenly a memory bloomed in my head that wasn’t mine to carry, a scent and a sound, a moment of a life I didn’t live but recognised all the same. A door, a corridor of roots, and a voice I could not quite place whispering a single word: Hel. It wasn’t the name of a place, but the concept of a boundary in the wrong hands and the wrong minds, something that should have remained sealed behind time’s back. The pendant’s warmth surged, a sudden, almost violent heartbeat, and the glyph’s glow intensified until the moss beneath the pendant smouldered with a pale blue flame that did not burn, only revealed. The air thickened with the chorus of half-heard voices, not speaking to me but around me, echoing off the rough bark and the stones. I had a sense of observers—watchers who preferred the moment you think you are safe to slip a blade of doubt between your ribs. “Stay still,” I whispered to the stones, not sure if I believed the instruction or only needed the act of saying it to feel more in control. The grove offered nothing in return but the soft, persistent whisper that seemed to come from all directions at once, a conversation hidden behind the rustle of leaves. Time did little to help with the task in front of me. The pendant’s glow tinted my hands with a faint red, and when I looked up, the space between the trees had shifted by inches, as if someone had tugged at the entire world’s coat sleeve and insisted it be rearranged. I pressed my lips together and kept my posture tight, shoulders drawn, eyes forward. The Fae Grove did not need to shout to make itself known; it preferred to reveal itself in the calculation of distance and perception. Then the sounds began to come in earnest, not loud, but invasive. A brilliant, precise tapping—like someone tapping a fingernail on a glass bottle—started somewhere near the old oak’s root system, right where the moss was thickest. It never repeated in the same place, always sliding as if someone—or something—moved a finger along the ground in search of a tune. It unsettlingly reminded me of a metronome in a room where the walls breathed and kept time with your pulse. I stood, lips pressed into a line and eyes fixed on the ground in front of me, listening to the grove listen back. The sounds escalated only slowly, a deliberate, patient escalation that made the blood in my veins feel newly cold. The whispering voices drifted closer, now forming words I could not quite hold onto, phrases that sounded like a half-remembered lullaby from a childhood book left open in the rain. It wasn’t fear that settled in my chest—it was a quiet, stubborn certainty that something vital was slipping away from me, something I needed to hold onto with both hands and a clear head. “Show me you’re there,” I repeated, a thread of command weaving into the night’s fabric. The words did not have a response, but the grove did not forget to answer in its own way. A tremor ran through the ground, not violent, almost affectionate, like the earth itself was brushing against something it believed would be safer if kept distance from. The Heartstone Pendant warmed again, and a soft, almost hesitant glow hummed through the chain. I could feel the warmth seep into my fingers, then rise through my wrists, pooling in my shoulders, and finally gathering at the base of my skull where it felt like something inside me was listening for a signal it might never have received before. The pulse spoke of a door’s hinge catching in the cold, of a mechanism waking up with the slightest touch of a foreign hand. I stood and faced the old oak, not sure why I did it but unwilling to turn away. The grove pressed in closer, the space between trees growing tighter, the air narrowing to a throat’s narrowness, as if the world itself were trying to swallow a word I had not yet spoken. My breath fogged for a moment, then vanished, and with it, a fraction of the fear I tried so hard not to carry. I could hear something moving behind the trees, something large and patient, something that did not hurry and did not need to hurry. It watched, it waited, and it knew where I would go next. A figure did not step out of the brush; it arrived out of the shadow itself, a silhouette that did not obey the rules of bodies so much as exploit the gaps between them. It appeared not as a person but as a presence: broad shouldered, tall, with a silhouette that merged with the branches at its edges. It did not walk; it insinuated itself into the clearing, as if the night itself had chosen to unfold into something tangible and malevolent. The aura around it was not merely dark; it was a density, a weight that pressed against the air and made the space feel smaller, more private, more dangerous. The orchid-blue glow of the moss and fungus on the ground dimmed in its presence, and the boundary stones around me thrummed as though something inside them recognised the intruder and did not want to shout about it. The figure did not move toward me in the way a hunter stalks prey; it glided, if that word could be trusted under a sky where gravity and trust both felt optional. The thing’s head turned toward me, and I caught a glimpse of something not human in the shadow where its face should have been—a mouthless feature of bark and resin, or perhaps a mask of roots that moved on its own. It did not smile. If anything, its stillness suggested it was considering me as a problem to solve, not a person to fear. I steadied the pendant, the crimson stone within pulsing as if alive with its own conscience. The grove’s whisper rose in frequency, a chorus of leaves and names I could not place, and the air grew colder, a cool insistence that made my breath visible in slow, deliberate puffs. The figure began to speak—not with words, but with a pressure of sound that pressed against my skull and asked a question I could not ignore. “Rory,” it seemed to say in a voice that did not belong to any mouth I could see. The word did not come as language but as a recognition. The name I wore every day, the name the city knew me by, the name that belonged to something else in the night that kept its own counsel. The pendant’s warmth flared. The guilded edge of the silver chain grew hot against my skin, a reminder that I carried more than a token of a benefactor here—I carried access to a threshold I wasn’t sure I should cross. I whispered, “What do you want?” The question hung between us, not loud, not soft, simply the right level of demand. The figure did not answer with sound. Instead it stepped closer, not aggressively but inexorably, its bulk rising from the shadow as if a door opened and allowed it to walk through. The boundary stones hummed in a tone almost melodic, a warning and a promise wrapped in one. The Heartstone’s glow intensified a fraction, the red becoming a deeper, more urgent colour, a small sun trapped in a jewel. The grove exhaled again, and I felt it—what the place had been waiting for all along. A location. A purpose. A moment when someone would decide to trust what lay beyond the ordinary. I did not retreat. My feet found the rhythm of a march I kept for moments like this, a pace designed to count down fear rather than to escape it. The oak’s shadow shifted, the boundary stones brightened, and the figure’s silhouette sharpened as if the night itself was pressing closer to reveal its true shape. The World Outside was a place I understood as a series of deadlines and front doors; the World Inside The Fae Grove was a different calculus entirely, one where trust could be traded for knowledge and knowledge for a cost the body remembered long after the price was paid. The figure finally spoke—not aloud in a voice I could hear, but in a way that pressed against the edge of my thoughts, a suggestion disguised as reassurance: a line of meaning that promised I would not be forgotten, that the purpose of my presence would be satisfied if I would simply listen a little longer. I looked back at the Heartstone and met that glow with a stubborn gaze. The pendant’s pulse answered with a few careful, patient beats, each one a reminder that I was here for something, not for a show. The grove had a memory for those who stayed long enough to listen; I had a memory only for those who pressed forward. “Show me what you want,” I said, this time aloud, letting the syllables carve themselves into the night as though I had carved them into a block of stone and thrown them into a pool. The figure inclined its head—not like a nod, but like a tree bending to listen for rain, the kind of gentle, aged motion that suggested a creature with centuries behind its eyes. The air between us thickened and then thinned, a membrane parted with deliberate care, revealing a doorway no one could see until they stood on the threshold. The universe’s edge lay there, a seam that fluttered like a thread in a piece of fabric, and beyond it, something waited. Not a place or a time, but a possibility—the possibility that the world could tilt and become something else, and that I might be compelled to become part of that tilt. The boundary stones around me thrummed again, a chorus of small metal notes, and I felt the groves’ ancient patience press in with quiet insistence. The Heartstone Pendant pulsed in a rhythm that matched the pulse in my ears, a synchronized ache that told me I was close, very close, to something that could irrevocably redefine the rules I’d learned to live by. The figure took another step, not toward me but toward the oak, as if the oak itself were a gate guarded by a memory that refused to die. The edge of the glade shivered, and the whole world trembled with a breath I almost mistook for a sigh. The grasses bent toward the figure in a way that suggested it preferred to be seen in the shadow of a person’s doubt rather than in the daylight of certainty. I drew a deeper breath, feeling the scar on my left wrist catch the light and remind me of who I used to be—the girl who believed that the law and reason could solve anything, that we could keep the night at bay with a clear argument and a steady hand. I was not that girl any longer, if I ever truly had been. The night had carved new lines on me, lines I wore with a strange pride, lines that said I knew there were answers beyond the syllabus, beyond the courtroom, beyond the life I had planned. “Rory,” the word repeated in the shadow, and this time the voice—if it could be called that—had the sound of something old and patient speaking through a mouth that wasn’t human. It was listening, deciding, waiting for something I would offer, something I would give to it if I could just keep breathing long enough to understand. The Heartstone pulsed again, and for a moment I believed I understood what it wanted from me: not a payment, not a surrender, but a decision. The grove, with its time-twisted heart and the living forest around us, asked me to choose the moment when my life would turn from a straightforward path into a thread that could be pulled through a ring of distant stars, into a corridor that would lead to doors I hadn’t known existed. I could turn back. I could walk away, pretend that I had only come to deliver a package or to check on a lead that might not exist outside the groaning memory of my mother’s cautions. I could retreat to the gate, to Silas’s bar, to the little flat above it where the noise of London could drown out almost anything if I shouted loud enough. I could. I could choose that safe, crisp line of fate and let the grove keep its secrets, let the thing behind the bark keep its distance, let the night swallow me and pretend I was never here. I did not choose that. Not tonight. The figure in the shadow inhaled, a slow, deliberate motion, and the grove exhaled with it, a sound like the turning of a huge, old key. The ring of stones brightened one by one, a path lighting up as though I had finally been given a map I could trust. The Heartstone’s glow intensified in a sudden, electric flare, and the air around us became something I could wear, a cloak of quiet radiance that hummed with unspent energy. The figure stepped fully into the circle of stones, and I saw a form that seemed built from night and memory rather than flesh—broad, heavy, with a silhouette that did not terminate at shoulders and hips but continued as if it were a movement through a fog, a shape that suggested both a guardian and a gatekeeper. It did not lift a hand in greeting; it did not speak in a voice I could hear. It did something else—an act of will—by letting the space between us tighten, as if the grove itself leaned forward to listen more intently to whatever it was about to say. I steadied the pendant, its warmth now a hot thread weaving through my skin, across my chest, and into the places I kept closed when I pretended to be confident. The line of the moss under the gemstone glowed softly, then flared with the kind of brightness that would bruise if it had become a bruise at all. The air tasted of iron and rain and something like a shy, half-formed memory you’re almost sure you never had but cannot quite disbelieve. The moment hung there, suspended between the tree’s slow breath and my own quick heartbeat. Then the figure spoke—not with a voice, but with a presence that pressed against the boundary itself and demanded I acknowledge it. Rory. The syllable hung in the air, a careful coin tossed into a quiet well. The name came with a promise and a threat in equal measure, and for a heartbeat I wasn’t sure which I should fear most. The gate in the grove—if you could call the space between the grass and the boundary stones a gate—began to glow with a pale, impossible light. The light did not illuminate so much as reveal, exposing the edges of a seam in reality, a crack that ran along the ground like a fault line under a sleeping city. It widened, and the whispering voices rose into a chorus that moved with the rhythm of the pendant’s beating, a cadence that told me where this would end if I did not choose to stop it, to pull back, to reject what lay beyond the seam. But I could not. I stood taller, breathed deeper, and when I spoke again, the words came out sharper than my own fear. “Open it,” I said to the night, to the grove, to the thing that wore the bark of a human interest and the patience of a glacier. The shadow did not hesitate. It bent toward the seam, and the seam answered by widening further, as though it had waited all along for someone with a strong heart and a stubborn will to claim what lay on the other side. The Heartstone glowed brighter, and a warmth spread from it through my arms, into my chest, and outward along my nerves until it felt as if I wore a thread of flame in my own body. The grove went quiet again, the way a theatre audience holds its breath before the final act. The boundary stones thrummed a final time, a sound that felt almost like an exhale, and then the seam widened into a corridor of pale light that wasn’t light so much as intention, a path that invited the living to walk through. I stepped forward, and I did not stumble when the cool of the unseen world brushed against my skin. I did not blink when the air tasted of a different kind of memory, a memory I did not possess and yet could not dismiss. The figure watched, or perhaps waited, while the corridor opened and closed behind me with patient, inexorable speed. The moment we crossed into the other side of the seam was not dramatic, not loud, not a moment with a gasp and a scream and something irreversibly broken. It was a quiet crossing, a decision that I made with a mouthful of resolve and a heart beating in time with the Heartstone’s stubborn warmth. The grove’s scent changed, something sharp and clean cutting through the moss and wildflowers, as if the air itself had learned a new geometry. The world’s soundscape shifted—a distant, almost musical resonance that was not quite language but still spoke of intention and consequence. The corridor beyond the seam opened into a place that felt both familiar and wrong, like walking into a room you recognise but have never entered through the door you remember. The space was not a room so much as a map sketched in shadow: walls that breathed in time with your steps, a floor that seemed to tilt just enough to remind you that balance is a choice, not a given. The Heartstone pendant brightened, throwing a small, fierce halo of crimson light that made the maps and runes etched into the stone work around me glow with a life of their own. The other side of the seam housed a different sort of quiet. It wasn’t the quiet of a sleeping night but the quiet of a paused breath, as though the world itself waited for me to act. The figure lingered at the threshold, not stepping forward to confront me but staying close enough to remind me I was not alone, that the boundary I had crossed was a living thing that watched with patient eyes. It did not threaten. It simply invited, and the invitation carried a weight I could not pretend to ignore. I kept the pendant close, listening to the soft heat along the chain, listening to the subtle difference in the world’s texture when I moved. My heart kept time with the stone’s refusal to be rushed, and my mind kept its focus on the reason I had come to this place in the first place: not to claim glory or to win a prize or to prove myself, but to ensure that something dangerous did not spill out into the world as I knew it. The memory of a warning rose to the front of my thoughts, not a loud one but a persistent, useful one: this place did not exist for the sake of the living; it existed for the sake of a larger order that did not care whether I believed in it or not. If I failed to walk the line, if I faltered at the threshold, the world I knew—a city of lights and routines and small humiliations—could be rewritten in a way that would punish the unwary. I pressed forward with a slow, deliberate pace, letting the corridor guide my steps as I would have guided a patient witness through a legal argument: calmly, precisely, with no heavy-handedness. The grove kept its distance, watching, measuring, cataloguing my actions as if I were not the one with the problem but the problem itself—an entity that could alter memory and time with a single decision. And then the corridor opened into a larger space, a hall of quiet power, where the wall-of-darkness beyond the far end seemed to hold not fear but intention. The Heartstone’s glow intensified, painting the room with a harsh, red halo that made every line and contour feel like it could be manipulated, bent, broken, or frozen in a single moment of choice. In that moment, the reason for my visit sharpened into a single, clear idea: the pendant was a key, not a trophy. The room’s silence pressed against me again, but now it carried a soft, almost melancholy note—a reminder that the night was not only watching me but listening to the truth I carried and the truth I was about to reveal. The boundary stones—those old marks of a time when men and fae and something else walked the same earth—stood like listening witnesses, and I found I could not lie to them even if I wanted to. Behind me, the shapes of the grove remained, a memory of green that clung to the world’s edges. Ahead, the corridor narrowed to a single pathway. The figure’s silhouette moved with it, a shadow of raw potential that did not disintegrate but instead gathered itself, as if it were deciding how to present itself to a living being for the first time in centuries. Then, not with drama but with inevitability, the corridor opened into a final chamber. Here, the floor split into a mosaic of old symbols, and in the centre stood a small pedestal carved from a single piece of shadow, something I could not name and did not want to name. On the pedestal rested nothing but the absence of something I expected—the absence of a trap, the absence of a guard, the absence of a thing that would warn me away. Instead, there was only a place for a touch and a breath, for a decision to be made. The pendant’s warmth brightened without mercy, a bright, imperative suggestion that I take the next step. I did not flinch. I stepped forward and placed the Heartstone onto the pedestal. The room shivered with a sound like a held breath, and the crimson glow from the stone surged outward, a ribbon of heat that threaded through the air and braided itself with the hall’s own energy. The walls hummed in a low, continuous note, as if the room itself had begun to sing, and the song carried with it a sense of ancient obligation, of debts unpaid and promises kept across generations. The figure in the shadow remained still, but I knew it watched, as one would watch a door that may never be opened again once it had been opened once. The pedestal accepted the pendant with a soft click that would have been a sound of triumph in a different place and a different time. The room brightened in a way that did not hurt the eyes but demanded the body respond with careful action. The glow from the pendant pooled into a single, jagged line that traced the space directly in front of me—some kind of directive or map I could not yet read. Then came the whisper I had expected but did not want to hear, a delicate, intimate thing that brushed my ear as if the night itself were leaning in to tell me a secret I did not have permission to keep. The voice did not belong to the figure; it belonged to the place, to the seam where two worlds touched and learned each other’s names in the language of hesitation. Rory. The voice was everywhere and nowhere, the syllable pressed against the skin of my mind as if a physical touch. You came for me, it said, or perhaps for us, or perhaps for what you are becoming. The boundary’s old memory looked at me with something that might have been curiosity or might have been hunger, and I found I could not pretend it did not know my name. The grove pressed closer, the air tightening until it felt almost like a hand around my throat that did not choke but asserted itself, insisting that I acknowledge this new alignment between myself and the world I had once believed I controlled. The Heartstone’s pulse intensified to a bright, stubborn blaze that forced a new belief into my chest: I could choose to be more than a delivery girl moving from one set of doors to another; I could be a hinge upon which larger doors would turn. A sudden, violent wind rose from nowhere and everywhere, throwing at me a scent of pine and old paper, a scent I could read only as memory. The corridor’s light flared, then steadied, and the air’s taste shifted again, a jolt of something sharp and true in the back of my tongue. The field of vision ahead narrowed into a single point—a point where the gate between worlds might be answered if I kept my nerve and let my decision become final. The pace of my breath aligned with the Heartstone’s heartbeat, and I felt the moment that might split the night open or seal it shut. The grove’s whispers intensified, not loud, but concrete enough to be measured, and the figure—still there, still watching—made a small step forward as if inviting me to perform the act of crossing with it, not against it. Then the moment came where restraint and consequence stood on the same line. I drew a breath that felt like it took a year to take and released it in a measured sigh, and with that breath I made a choice. The choice was not to flee, not to negate the danger by ignoring it, but to accept the risk embedded in the door’s threshold. The Heartstone flared with a final, decisive blaze before the room seemed to collapse into the quiet of a single, overwhelming sound—the sound of old bricks moving in their sleep, the sound of a new path being laid. The corridor dimmed to a pale, answering glow, and the shadow figure stepped back, allowing the space to reveal its next truth. The grove’s boundary returned to its patient, watchful self, but the air hung with something newly tense, the sense that a line had been crossed and a consequence would certainly follow. A voice—a soft, intimate thing—drifted through the stillness, not a shout but a caress, not a demand but a quiet certainty that I would understand soon enough. The word came again, clearer this time, not a memory but a location, a name, a promise: Rory. It was me, and it was the thing I had always hesitated to become. The corridor answered with a reply I could not quite decipher, and the grove tilted, not violently, but with the careful, patient grace of something that had waited too long for this moment. The rock of time underfoot shifted as if the earth itself were adjusting its spine to bear the weight of a decision about to be taken. The Heartstone’s crimson glow sharpened into a beacon and then a blade, and I felt the space around me tighten until every thought was a thread pointing toward the same direction. The cliffhanger remained unsaid—only implied by the sudden, heavy quiet that settled upon the grove, the sense that the door wasn’t about to be closed but to be opened in a way that changed the world I walked back into. I did not turn to look at the figure in the shadow. I did not pull away from the pulse at my chest. I stepped forward, into the unknown, and the night followed me with a patient, listening patience, knowing full well that a choice had just been made and consequences would begin to unfurl in slow, careful ripples. The last breath I took that night came with the weight of a decision I could never fully explain, only enact. The room narrowed to a corridor and a doorway. The Heartstone thrummed insistently, an urgent call that would not be ignored. The grove’s boundary stones brightened once more, a final chorus of small, bright notes, as if the old world itself leaned closer to witness what would happen next. Rory. The name lingered in the air, a tender threat and a soft threat, both at once. The corridor’s light dimmed to a pale thread, and the shadow’s mouthless face finally settled into a quiet, knowing expression that wasn’t a face at all but a verdict. The night prepared to answer in a language I did not yet know. The line between fear and hope frayed, then held, then finally snapped tight as the world pressed in to see what would come when the hinge of this door was pushed a little further. Shit, I thought, and meant it in every language I could recall. Then I stepped forward again, and the night finally spoke back.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"me thrummed again [again]"
dialogueSentences10
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0.091
effectiveRatio0.091
90.22% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount6643
totalAiIsmAdverbs13
found
0
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
1
adverb"purposely"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
3
adverb"slightly"
count1
4
adverb"perfectly"
count1
5
adverb"precisely"
count2
6
adverb"suddenly"
count1
7
adverb"slowly"
count1
8
adverb"inexorably"
count1
9
adverb"very"
count1
10
adverb"truly"
count1
11
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"barely above a whisper"
1"purposely"
2"quickly"
3"slightly"
4"perfectly"
5"precisely"
6"suddenly"
7"slowly"
8"inexorably"
9"very"
10"truly"
11"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
49.57% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount6643
totalAiIsms67
found
0
word"warmth"
count10
1
word"pulsed"
count3
2
word"calculating"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count6
4
word"tracing"
count1
5
word"silence"
count2
6
word"scanned"
count1
7
word"flickered"
count1
8
word"measured"
count4
9
word"navigated"
count1
10
word"pulse"
count8
11
word"quickened"
count1
12
word"velvet"
count1
13
word"etched"
count2
14
word"echoing"
count1
15
word"sense of"
count2
16
word"could feel"
count1
17
word"tangible"
count1
18
word"weight"
count4
19
word"reminder"
count3
20
word"fluttered"
count1
21
word"synchronized"
count1
22
word"trembled"
count1
23
word"electric"
count1
24
word"resolve"
count1
25
word"resonance"
count1
26
word"familiar"
count1
27
word"ensure"
count1
28
word"potential"
count1
29
word"mosaic"
count1
30
word"traced"
count1
31
word"aligned"
count1
32
word"beacon"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"pulsed"
2"calculating"
3"whisper"
4"tracing"
5"silence"
6"scanned"
7"flickered"
8"measured"
9"navigated"
10"pulse"
11"quickened"
12"velvet"
13"etched"
14"echoing"
15"sense of"
16"could feel"
17"tangible"
18"weight"
19"reminder"
20"fluttered"
21"synchronized"
22"trembled"
23"electric"
24"resolve"
25"resonance"
26"familiar"
27"ensure"
28"potential"
29"mosaic"
30"traced"
31"aligned"
32"beacon"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences275
matches(empty)
38.96% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount5
hedgeCount15
narrationSentences275
filterMatches
0"think"
1"listen"
2"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"seemed to"
2"began to"
3"tended to"
4"tend to"
5"begin to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences275
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen61
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords6585
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions30
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"You came for me, it said, or perhaps for us, or perhaps for what you are becoming."
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions45
wordCount6548
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity0.31
worstName"Heartstone"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Heartstone"
discoveredNames
Heartstone20
Pendant4
Fae3
Grove3
Cardiff2
Hel2
World2
Silas1
London1
Rory4
Time3
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Pendant"
2"Grove"
3"Silas"
4"Rory"
places
0"Fae"
1"Cardiff"
2"World"
3"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
12.20% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences254
glossingSentenceCount14
matches
0"as if testing the night before it decided to move"
1"as if pleading to be noticed even as they grew in the shadow of a boundary nobody should cross"
2"as if listening to a different cadence inside my chest"
3"not quite place whispering a single word: Hel"
4"whisper that seemed to come from all directions at once, a conversation hidden behind the rustle of leaves"
5"not quite hold onto, phrases that sounded like a half-remembered lullaby from a childhood book left open in the rain"
6"sounded like a half-remembered lullaby fro"
7"felt like something inside me was liste"
8"seemed built from night and memory rather than flesh—broad, heavy, with a silhouette that did not terminate at shoulders and hips but continued as if it were a movement through a fog, a shape that suggested both a guardian and a gatekeeper"
9"something like a shy, half-formed memory you"
10"quite disbelieve"
11"not quite language but still spoke of intention and consequence"
12"floor that seemed to tilt just enough to remind you that balance is a choice, not a given"
13"as if inviting me to perform the act of crossing with it, not against it"
14"felt like it took a year to take and re"
15"not quite decipher, and the grove tilted, not violently, but with the careful, patient grace of something that had waited too long for this moment"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches35
per1kWords5.315
wordCount6585
matches
0"Not tonight,” I said, barely above a whisper, though I spoke to no one but the night"
1"no one but"
2"not with my ears alone but with something older, something"
3"not from wind but from intention"
4"Not but a memory,” I told the grove, though it was not addressing me"
5"not speaking to me but around me, echoing off the rough bark"
6"not loud, but invasive"
7"not sure why I did it but unwilling to turn away"
8"not as a person but as a presence: broad shouldered, tall, with a silhouette"
9"not with words, but with a pressure of sound"
10"not aggressively but inexorably, its bulk rising from the shadow as if a door ope"
11"not aloud in a voice I could hear, but in a way"
12"not like a nod, but like a tree bending to listen for rain, the kind of gentle"
13"Not a place or a time, but a possibility"
14"not toward me but toward the oak, as if the oak itself were a gate guarded by"
15"not a payment, not a surrender, but a decision"
16"not a surrender, but a decision"
17"not with a voice, but with a presence"
18"not quite language but still spoke of intention"
19"not stepping forward to confront me but staying close enough to remind me I was not alone"
20"not to claim glory or to win a prize or to prove myself, but to ensure"
21"not a loud one but a persistent, useful one: this place did not exist for the s"
22"not the one with the problem but the problem itself"
23"not fear but intention"
24"not only watching me but listening to the truth I carried"
25"not with drama but with inevitability, the corridor opened into a final chamber"
26"not choke but asserted itself, insisting"
27"not loud, but concrete enough to be measured"
28"not to flee, not to negate the danger by ignoring it, but to accept the risk embedded in the door’s threshold"
29"not to negate the danger by ignoring it, but to accept the risk embedded in the door’s threshold"
30"not a shout but a caress, not a demand but a quiet certainty"
31"not a demand but a quiet certainty"
32"not a memory but a location, a name, a promise"
33"not quite decipher, and the grove tilted, not violently, but with the careful, patient grace of something"
34"not violently, but with the careful, patient grace of something"
69.70% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount8
totalSentences275
matches
0"fear that settled"
1"forgotten, that the"
2"met that glow"
3"believed that the"
4"pretend that I"
5"ensure that something"
6"insisting that I"
7"took that night"
58.77% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs83
mean79.34
std28.22
cv0.356
sampleLengths
079
1132
275
384
4115
587
6129
734
8138
9100
1084
1190
12127
13105
1487
1554
16102
1794
1883
1980
2055
2190
2280
23106
2461
2584
26110
27111
28134
2975
3057
3161
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33105
3456
3561
3635
37112
3863
3978
4099
4157
4278
43104
447
4579
46106
4782
4837
4939
93.78% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount9
totalSentences275
matches
0"being tugged"
1"being pried"
2"was paid"
3"been given"
4"been opened"
5"being laid"
6"been crossed"
7"been made"
8"was pushed"
95.63% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount16
totalVerbs1022
matches
0"was calculating"
1"were strolling"
2"were going"
3"was listening"
4"was not addressing"
5"was addressing"
6"were taking"
7"was slipping"
8"was brushing"
9"was listening"
10"were trying"
11"was considering"
12"was listening"
13"were deciding"
14"were leaning"
15"were adjusting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount48
semicolonCount14
flaggedSentences50
totalSentences275
ratio0.182
matches
0"Wildflowers bloomed year-round in a riot of colours I shouldn’t have trusted; the scent of crushed petals carried on a draft I would have sworn wasn’t there a heartbeat ago."
1"The pendant’s glow—a faint inner glow, a warmth that hummed in the hollow of my palm—brightened a notch."
2"The grove absorbed the sound and offered nothing back except a rustle of leaves that sounded purposely casual, as if someone—or something—were strolling just beyond the edge of vision, listening for the exact moment I would blink at the wrong place."
3"The first sound came as a soft, deliberate tapping somewhere off to my right—a rhythm that did not belong to the grove’s normal chorus."
4"A shape flickered at the corner of my eye—soft, fast, here and then not here, a trick of light or something else moving at the threshold of sight."
5"I learned long ago that appearances in The Fae Grove did not always announce themselves with a shout; they preferred a patient, creeping reveal."
6"It wasn’t just warmth; it was information carried in heat."
7"Hel portals—those boundaries between earth and something else, something vast and patient—were not so easily navigated by a mind that still doubted its own questions."
8"The pendant’s pulse grew into a small, steady flare, a signal that I was close to something—the kind of proximity that demanded the breath I held in my chest be released in measured, controlled exhalations."
9"I pressed on, counting steps in a careful, almost ceremonial rhythm—the steps that would tell me whether the grove was listening or merely pretending."
10"I had a sense of observers—watchers who preferred the moment you think you are safe to slip a blade of doubt between your ribs."
11"The Fae Grove did not need to shout to make itself known; it preferred to reveal itself in the calculation of distance and perception."
12"A brilliant, precise tapping—like someone tapping a fingernail on a glass bottle—started somewhere near the old oak’s root system, right where the moss was thickest."
13"It never repeated in the same place, always sliding as if someone—or something—moved a finger along the ground in search of a tune."
14"It wasn’t fear that settled in my chest—it was a quiet, stubborn certainty that something vital was slipping away from me, something I needed to hold onto with both hands and a clear head."
15"A figure did not step out of the brush; it arrived out of the shadow itself, a silhouette that did not obey the rules of bodies so much as exploit the gaps between them."
16"It did not walk; it insinuated itself into the clearing, as if the night itself had chosen to unfold into something tangible and malevolent."
17"The aura around it was not merely dark; it was a density, a weight that pressed against the air and made the space feel smaller, more private, more dangerous."
18"The figure did not move toward me in the way a hunter stalks prey; it glided, if that word could be trusted under a sky where gravity and trust both felt optional."
19"The thing’s head turned toward me, and I caught a glimpse of something not human in the shadow where its face should have been—a mouthless feature of bark and resin, or perhaps a mask of roots that moved on its own."
20"The figure began to speak—not with words, but with a pressure of sound that pressed against my skull and asked a question I could not ignore."
21"The guilded edge of the silver chain grew hot against my skin, a reminder that I carried more than a token of a benefactor here—I carried access to a threshold I wasn’t sure I should cross."
22"The grove exhaled again, and I felt it—what the place had been waiting for all along."
23"The World Outside was a place I understood as a series of deadlines and front doors; the World Inside The Fae Grove was a different calculus entirely, one where trust could be traded for knowledge and knowledge for a cost the body remembered long after the price was paid."
24"The figure finally spoke—not aloud in a voice I could hear, but in a way that pressed against the edge of my thoughts, a suggestion disguised as reassurance: a line of meaning that promised I would not be forgotten, that the purpose of my presence would be satisfied if I would simply listen a little longer."
25"The grove had a memory for those who stayed long enough to listen; I had a memory only for those who pressed forward."
26"The figure inclined its head—not like a nod, but like a tree bending to listen for rain, the kind of gentle, aged motion that suggested a creature with centuries behind its eyes."
27"Not a place or a time, but a possibility—the possibility that the world could tilt and become something else, and that I might be compelled to become part of that tilt."
28"I drew a deeper breath, feeling the scar on my left wrist catch the light and remind me of who I used to be—the girl who believed that the law and reason could solve anything, that we could keep the night at bay with a clear argument and a steady hand."
29"“Rory,” the word repeated in the shadow, and this time the voice—if it could be called that—had the sound of something old and patient speaking through a mouth that wasn’t human."
30"The figure stepped fully into the circle of stones, and I saw a form that seemed built from night and memory rather than flesh—broad, heavy, with a silhouette that did not terminate at shoulders and hips but continued as if it were a movement through a fog, a shape that suggested both a guardian and a gatekeeper."
31"It did not lift a hand in greeting; it did not speak in a voice I could hear."
32"It did something else—an act of will—by letting the space between us tighten, as if the grove itself leaned forward to listen more intently to whatever it was about to say."
33"Then the figure spoke—not with a voice, but with a presence that pressed against the boundary itself and demanded I acknowledge it."
34"The gate in the grove—if you could call the space between the grass and the boundary stones a gate—began to glow with a pale, impossible light."
35"The world’s soundscape shifted—a distant, almost musical resonance that was not quite language but still spoke of intention and consequence."
36"The memory of a warning rose to the front of my thoughts, not a loud one but a persistent, useful one: this place did not exist for the sake of the living; it existed for the sake of a larger order that did not care whether I believed in it or not."
37"If I failed to walk the line, if I faltered at the threshold, the world I knew—a city of lights and routines and small humiliations—could be rewritten in a way that would punish the unwary."
38"The grove kept its distance, watching, measuring, cataloguing my actions as if I were not the one with the problem but the problem itself—an entity that could alter memory and time with a single decision."
39"The room’s silence pressed against me again, but now it carried a soft, almost melancholy note—a reminder that the night was not only watching me but listening to the truth I carried and the truth I was about to reveal."
40"The boundary stones—those old marks of a time when men and fae and something else walked the same earth—stood like listening witnesses, and I found I could not lie to them even if I wanted to."
41"On the pedestal rested nothing but the absence of something I expected—the absence of a trap, the absence of a guard, the absence of a thing that would warn me away."
42"The glow from the pendant pooled into a single, jagged line that traced the space directly in front of me—some kind of directive or map I could not yet read."
43"The voice did not belong to the figure; it belonged to the place, to the seam where two worlds touched and learned each other’s names in the language of hesitation."
44"The Heartstone’s pulse intensified to a bright, stubborn blaze that forced a new belief into my chest: I could choose to be more than a delivery girl moving from one set of doors to another; I could be a hinge upon which larger doors would turn."
45"The field of vision ahead narrowed into a single point—a point where the gate between worlds might be answered if I kept my nerve and let my decision become final."
46"The grove’s whispers intensified, not loud, but concrete enough to be measured, and the figure—still there, still watching—made a small step forward as if inviting me to perform the act of crossing with it, not against it."
47"The Heartstone flared with a final, decisive blaze before the room seemed to collapse into the quiet of a single, overwhelming sound—the sound of old bricks moving in their sleep, the sound of a new path being laid."
48"A voice—a soft, intimate thing—drifted through the stillness, not a shout but a caress, not a demand but a quiet certainty that I would understand soon enough."
49"The cliffhanger remained unsaid—only implied by the sudden, heavy quiet that settled upon the grove, the sense that the door wasn’t about to be closed but to be opened in a way that changed the world I walked back into."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount3394
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount112
adverbRatio0.032999410724808484
lyAdverbCount32
lyAdverbRatio0.009428403064230996
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences275
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences275
mean23.95
std11.8
cv0.493
sampleLengths
022
124
219
314
47
512
624
732
830
927
1012
1122
1218
1323
1417
1526
1641
1721
1836
1932
2026
2124
2223
2318
2422
2516
2615
2728
2837
294
305
3124
3218
3316
3432
3533
366
377
3860
3916
4010
4114
4225
4335
4410
452
4631
4741
4810
4915
25.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats96
diversityRatio0.10909090909090909
totalSentences275
uniqueOpeners30
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount9
totalSentences266
matches
0"Then I heard it."
1"Then the sounds began to"
2"Instead it stepped closer, not"
3"Then the figure spoke—not with"
4"Then, not with drama but"
5"Instead, there was only a"
6"Then came the whisper I"
7"Then the moment came where"
8"Then I stepped forward again,"
ratio0.034
87.67% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount88
totalSentences266
matches
0"It pulsed once, twice, as"
1"I had come here for"
2"I stepped forward, careful not"
3"I said, barely above a"
4"I moved closer to the"
5"It could have been a"
6"I stopped, listening not with"
7"I scanned the edge of"
8"I tried to fix my"
9"I did not blink."
10"I did not look away."
11"I learned long ago that"
12"I breathed, and the grove"
13"My mother’s voice would sometimes"
14"It didn’t help in this"
15"It multiplied, and I could"
16"It wasn’t just warmth; it"
17"I was not sure which"
18"I had learned to measure"
19"I pressed on, counting steps"
ratio0.331
1.35% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount244
totalSentences266
matches
0"Boundary stones burned my knuckles"
1"The air tasted of damp"
2"The Heartstone Pendant pressed against"
3"It pulsed once, twice, as"
4"I had come here for"
5"A reason that wouldn’t stay"
6"The grove’s clearing opened up"
7"The ancient oak stood at"
8"Wildflowers bloomed year-round in a"
9"Time behaved here like a"
10"I stepped forward, careful not"
11"The grove’s hush pressed in,"
12"The pendant’s glow—a faint inner"
13"The crimson gem caught the"
14"I said, barely above a"
15"The words rose into the"
16"The grove absorbed the sound"
17"The boundary stones glowed with"
18"I moved closer to the"
19"The Heartstone hung heavy on"
ratio0.917
37.59% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences266
matches
0"If anything, its stillness suggested"
1"If I failed to walk"
ratio0.008
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences233
technicalSentenceCount74
matches
0"The Heartstone Pendant pressed against my chest, a quiet, stubborn warmth that steadied my grip on the silver chain."
1"The grove’s clearing opened up with a hesitant sigh, as though it recognised me and was calculating whether to pretend I hadn’t found it."
2"The pendant’s glow—a faint inner glow, a warmth that hummed in the hollow of my palm—brightened a notch."
3"The crimson gem caught the moonlight in a way that didn’t look like light at all but a small, malevolent heartbeat beneath glass."
4"The grove absorbed the sound and offered nothing back except a rustle of leaves that sounded purposely casual, as if someone—or something—were strolling just be…"
5"I moved closer to the oak, tracing the line of its roots with my eyes while not touching them, as though the ground itself might wake and tell me a thing I wasn…"
6"The Heartstone hung heavy on its chain, and I felt a corresponding heaviness in my wrists, as if my limbs remembered a debt they had once owed and now wished to…"
7"The first sound came as a soft, deliberate tapping somewhere off to my right—a rhythm that did not belong to the grove’s normal chorus."
8"I stopped, listening not with my ears alone but with something older, something that lived in the bones."
9"My mother’s voice would sometimes surface there, a soft insistence that I keep my head clear and my feet planted, as if fear could be measured and weighed and t…"
10"It multiplied, and I could hear it in the creak of the oak’s limbs, in the distant clack of something moving under the fallen leaves, in the way the wildflowers…"
11"The pendant’s pulse grew into a small, steady flare, a signal that I was close to something—the kind of proximity that demanded the breath I held in my chest be…"
12"The light braided along the petals, a microcosm of the stars up there, and then the bloom closed again, leaving a faint afterimage on my retinas as if I had loo…"
13"I pressed on, counting steps in a careful, almost ceremonial rhythm—the steps that would tell me whether the grove was listening or merely pretending."
14"My mind briefly wandered to the old city markets of Cardiff, to a stall that sold trinkets and promises, to a moment when a stranger had slipped a red gem into …"
15"The Heartstone glowed faintly against the glow of the grove, answering its own questions with tiny pulses that made the chain tremble against my collar."
16"A sound that shouldn’t exist here, a whisper of something moving between the petals of a flower that didn’t belong to this world but was perfectly, horrifically…"
17"It came from everywhere and nowhere, curling around the edge of the clearing, licking at the hem of my jacket, edging along the line of my thoughts and giving e…"
18"I kept walking, and every step brought a new sensation, a new seam of wrongness that opened in the air like a seam in a piece of old leather being pried apart."
19"It was addressing something else, something that might have thought itself clever for hiding in the edge of perception."
20"The Heartstone Pendant brightened a fraction, then cooled, as if listening to a different cadence inside my chest."
21"The circular clearing opened up before me and the oak |stood| taller here, its branches stretching into a lattice that caught the stray light and rebuilt it int…"
22"The glyph resembled a cross between a spiral and a rune, something that could begin or end with the same line, depending on who looked at it."
23"The moment the crimson gem hovered over the glyph, the air tightened, a crisp line drawn across the skin of the night, and the ground under my hands tightened a…"
24"It wasn’t the name of a place, but the concept of a boundary in the wrong hands and the wrong minds, something that should have remained sealed behind time’s ba…"
25"The pendant’s warmth surged, a sudden, almost violent heartbeat, and the glyph’s glow intensified until the moss beneath the pendant smouldered with a pale blue…"
26"I had a sense of observers—watchers who preferred the moment you think you are safe to slip a blade of doubt between your ribs."
27"The grove offered nothing in return but the soft, persistent whisper that seemed to come from all directions at once, a conversation hidden behind the rustle of…"
28"The pendant’s glow tinted my hands with a faint red, and when I looked up, the space between the trees had shifted by inches, as if someone had tugged at the en…"
29"The sounds escalated only slowly, a deliberate, patient escalation that made the blood in my veins feel newly cold."
30"I could feel the warmth seep into my fingers, then rise through my wrists, pooling in my shoulders, and finally gathering at the base of my skull where it felt …"
31"The pulse spoke of a door’s hinge catching in the cold, of a mechanism waking up with the slightest touch of a foreign hand."
32"The grove pressed in closer, the space between trees growing tighter, the air narrowing to a throat’s narrowness, as if the world itself were trying to swallow …"
33"I could hear something moving behind the trees, something large and patient, something that did not hurry and did not need to hurry."
34"It appeared not as a person but as a presence: broad shouldered, tall, with a silhouette that merged with the branches at its edges."
35"It did not walk; it insinuated itself into the clearing, as if the night itself had chosen to unfold into something tangible and malevolent."
36"The orchid-blue glow of the moss and fungus on the ground dimmed in its presence, and the boundary stones around me thrummed as though something inside them rec…"
37"I steadied the pendant, the crimson stone within pulsing as if alive with its own conscience."
38"The grove’s whisper rose in frequency, a chorus of leaves and names I could not place, and the air grew colder, a cool insistence that made my breath visible in…"
39"Instead it stepped closer, not aggressively but inexorably, its bulk rising from the shadow as if a door opened and allowed it to walk through."
40"The oak’s shadow shifted, the boundary stones brightened, and the figure’s silhouette sharpened as if the night itself was pressing closer to reveal its true sh…"
41"The universe’s edge lay there, a seam that fluttered like a thread in a piece of fabric, and beyond it, something waited."
42"The Heartstone Pendant pulsed in a rhythm that matched the pulse in my ears, a synchronized ache that told me I was close, very close, to something that could i…"
43"I drew a deeper breath, feeling the scar on my left wrist catch the light and remind me of who I used to be—the girl who believed that the law and reason could …"
44"The night had carved new lines on me, lines I wore with a strange pride, lines that said I knew there were answers beyond the syllabus, beyond the courtroom, be…"
45"The grove, with its time-twisted heart and the living forest around us, asked me to choose the moment when my life would turn from a straightforward path into a…"
46"The Heartstone’s glow intensified in a sudden, electric flare, and the air around us became something I could wear, a cloak of quiet radiance that hummed with u…"
47"The figure stepped fully into the circle of stones, and I saw a form that seemed built from night and memory rather than flesh—broad, heavy, with a silhouette t…"
48"It widened, and the whispering voices rose into a chorus that moved with the rhythm of the pendant’s beating, a cadence that told me where this would end if I d…"
49"It bent toward the seam, and the seam answered by widening further, as though it had waited all along for someone with a strong heart and a stubborn will to cla…"
50"The Heartstone glowed brighter, and a warmth spread from it through my arms, into my chest, and outward along my nerves until it felt as if I wore a thread of f…"
51"The boundary stones thrummed a final time, a sound that felt almost like an exhale, and then the seam widened into a corridor of pale light that wasn’t light so…"
52"The grove’s scent changed, something sharp and clean cutting through the moss and wildflowers, as if the air itself had learned a new geometry."
53"The world’s soundscape shifted—a distant, almost musical resonance that was not quite language but still spoke of intention and consequence."
54"The corridor beyond the seam opened into a place that felt both familiar and wrong, like walking into a room you recognise but have never entered through the do…"
55"The Heartstone pendant brightened, throwing a small, fierce halo of crimson light that made the maps and runes etched into the stone work around me glow with a …"
56"The figure lingered at the threshold, not stepping forward to confront me but staying close enough to remind me I was not alone, that the boundary I had crossed…"
57"The memory of a warning rose to the front of my thoughts, not a loud one but a persistent, useful one: this place did not exist for the sake of the living; it e…"
58"If I failed to walk the line, if I faltered at the threshold, the world I knew—a city of lights and routines and small humiliations—could be rewritten in a way …"
59"The grove kept its distance, watching, measuring, cataloguing my actions as if I were not the one with the problem but the problem itself—an entity that could a…"
60"The Heartstone’s glow intensified, painting the room with a harsh, red halo that made every line and contour feel like it could be manipulated, bent, broken, or…"
61"The figure’s silhouette moved with it, a shadow of raw potential that did not disintegrate but instead gathered itself, as if it were deciding how to present it…"
62"The walls hummed in a low, continuous note, as if the room itself had begun to sing, and the song carried with it a sense of ancient obligation, of debts unpaid…"
63"The pedestal accepted the pendant with a soft click that would have been a sound of triumph in a different place and a different time."
64"The glow from the pendant pooled into a single, jagged line that traced the space directly in front of me—some kind of directive or map I could not yet read."
65"Then came the whisper I had expected but did not want to hear, a delicate, intimate thing that brushed my ear as if the night itself were leaning in to tell me …"
66"The boundary’s old memory looked at me with something that might have been curiosity or might have been hunger, and I found I could not pretend it did not know …"
67"The grove pressed closer, the air tightening until it felt almost like a hand around my throat that did not choke but asserted itself, insisting that I acknowle…"
68"The Heartstone’s pulse intensified to a bright, stubborn blaze that forced a new belief into my chest: I could choose to be more than a delivery girl moving fro…"
69"The grove’s whispers intensified, not loud, but concrete enough to be measured, and the figure—still there, still watching—made a small step forward as if invit…"
70"The corridor answered with a reply I could not quite decipher, and the grove tilted, not violently, but with the careful, patient grace of something that had wa…"
71"The cliffhanger remained unsaid—only implied by the sudden, heavy quiet that settled upon the grove, the sense that the door wasn’t about to be closed but to be…"
72"The grove’s boundary stones brightened once more, a final chorus of small, bright notes, as if the old world itself leaned closer to witness what would happen n…"
73"The corridor’s light dimmed to a pale thread, and the shadow’s mouthless face finally settled into a quiet, knowing expression that wasn’t a face at all but a v…"
34.09% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"I breathed, and the grove answered with its usual, disarming politeness: nothing at all"
1"I repeated, a thread of command weaving into the night’s fabric"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"I breathed (breathe)"
1"I whispered (whisper)"
2"I repeated (repeat)"
3"I whispered (whisper)"
4"the word repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences10
tagDensity0.9
leniency1
rawRatio0.556
effectiveRatio0.556
66.4845%