Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTY81QB8VMNY2VJWZ23HRG7

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1m 54s
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$0.004997
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OpenAI

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Shattering glass stabbed the air as I hit the cool tile behind a stall selling cured meats. The Veil Compass leapt from my grip and skittered under a crate, its brass face catching the stray green glow that crawled along the wall. “Keep low,” came a low, clipped command, almost a bark. I rolled, listening to boots slam the floor above and the whisper of a curtain being ripped aside. The market’s murmur swelled, a thousand voices pressed into a single, tense knot. The abandoned Tube tunnel beneath Camden breathed with a strange, oily quiet, something like a heartbeat under the concrete. Stalls stood like scarecrows—colour dulled, trinkets dulling to dust, a scent of wax and damp velvet hanging in the air. The place moved, not physically, but spiritually; a shifting map that only the fools refused to read. Beneath us, the tunnel forked into a throat of darkness where a rope of pale light dangled from an overhead bulb, swinging with someone’s uneven breath. I rolled to my feet, steadied by the weight of a worn leather belt and the cold pressure of a badge in the small of my back. The bone token I kept tucked in my left inner pocket felt heavier than metal, heavier than the ordinary risk of a late-night call. The token’s bone-white surface carried tiny etched sigils of a language I still could not name without the weight of a book and a night spent listening to the dead talk back. A voice cut through the murk, sharp as a blade drawn across silk. “You’re in over your head, Quinn.” Colleague? Enemy? The words stung with implications. I angled toward the sound, where a stall of moth-eaten velvet and jars of bubbling tinctures faced me with a languid, mocking smile. Eva Kowalski stepped from behind a display of brass-and-glass occult bottles, her curly red hair escaping the confinement of a faded scarf, green eyes narrowed in the way they did when she’d found a new lane of mystery to ram through. Her satchel slapped against her hip with the casual authority of someone who had studied corners people forgot to search. The glow around her felt almost sacramental here, a sort of academic glow in contrast to the market’s brutal improvisation. “Shadows move differently here, Harlow,” she said, brushing a strand of hair behind her ear in that nervous tick of hers. “They coil, then snap. You’re looking for footprints that don’t exist. You should be looking for patterns that do.” “You brought a pattern?” I asked, keeping my voice even, letting the edge show in how I tensed the muscles along my ribs. She stepped closer, her satchel swinging, the clink of glass bottles a quiet percussion to the market’s clatter. “I brought questions. Not patterns. We should not confuse the two.” She crouched, studied the ground near the stall’s base where something—perhaps a drip of blood that never appeared—had left a faint, irregular stain, a line that didn’t feel natural. Her eyes lifted to the Veil Compass, still under the crate, its brass rim catching the corridor light. The needle lay still for a heartbeat, then shifted, a hair’s breadth, toward a closed door that blended into the wall, as if unwilling to be noticed. “Your compass knows what the city forgets,” Eva murmured, almost reverent. “It points to the rift, not the evidence.” I pulled the crate aside with a snap of my elbow joints and found the same thing we’d expected and hadn’t—markets did not keep their secrets in clean squares. The floor here was uneven, patched with a patchwork of tiles that didn’t match, as if someone had laid a new floor over an old one, leaving a seam that ran in a perfect circle beneath a stall of obscure trinkets. The circle wasn’t decorative; it wasn’t ritual; it was a map, a street plan drawn in a language the dead could understand. The body was gone. That fact hung over the scene like a hanging sign you were not meant to ignore. A body didn’t vanish in a place where there were witnesses, not when the ground around bore the memory of a scuffle and the smell of copper that clung to the air like painting on a frame. “Nothing here fits,” I said, half to Eva, half to the empty room. Eva straightened, tapping a finger against the edge of her cheek as she spoke with that soft, almost academic precision of hers. “Look at the ledger under the counter,” she suggested, nodding toward a stall where a vendor kept a ledger—pages yellowed to the point of flaking. “If this is staged, someone would be controlling the scene, not letting it slip into chaos. The entry times aren’t random. Someone curated who saw what and when.” I picked up a folded piece of paper from the ledger’s edge, the sort of thing a vendor would slide toward a potential buyer to show a page’s worth of prices. The ink had smudged, but the words remained legible: “Moon gate, row B, token 53.” The pair of words hit me in the chest, as if someone pressed a cold palm against my sternum and whispered a cruel reminder. “Moon gate,” I echoed, tasting the phrase the way you taste a coin you’re about to flip. “Not only a doorway. An invitation.” I pressed the token in my pocket and kept moving, not trusting the ground to stay honest with us. Eva followed, her breath steady, her eyes scanning every edge and seam as if the market itself might have teeth and lips and a secret to tell if she listened long enough. She spoke again, low, the words almost muffled by the market’s constant susurrus. “This is a staging of a ritual, not a crime,” she said. “The discourse of the room is ritualistic, not procedural. The symbols drawn in ash near the stall’s back wall aren’t vandalism; they’re a script.” “Who would script a crime here?” I asked, though the question felt clumsy, as if I were asking a riddle without the answer written on the rim of the last page. Her eyes met mine. “People who want to summon something. Or fear that it already came and needs a door to return.” She took out a small, worn notebook from her satchel and pressed it into my hand. “Notes from the restricted archives. It’s not much, but it’s enough to give you a starting line.” I flipped the pages with a practiced efficiency and found a page marked with a small, neat doodle—the shape of a circle with a dot in the middle, a sigil repeated in a pattern. The handwriting was hers, I knew the loop-and-dot style well enough to feel the tremor run through me. Eva had a way of turning the world into a map of signs, a language even a hardened police brain could not ignore. The Veil Compass’s needle flicked once, then steadied toward a narrow doorway that had been sealed with a heavy drawstring curtain, like a throat refusing to speak. The door wasn’t locked; it wasn’t sealed; it simply existed, a barrier between this floor and what lay beyond it. The door had been opened recently, perhaps minutes before we arrived, though the dust remained undisturbed, save for the muddled prints of someone who had moved quickly in a soft-soled shoe. “Someone unlocked this and walked through,” Eva said, whispering now, the kind of whisper used to avoid drawing attention, the whisper that carried danger like a scent one could not quite identify. “The prints are fresh. The market’s watchers would’ve seen someone go through if they weren’t in on it.” I let a gloved finger trace the seam where wall met wall, listening to the faintest of echoes return to me, echoes that suggested a hollow behind the plaster, a hidden corridor. The Veil Compass quivered, the needle jittering toward that same seam, as if the energy of whatever lay beyond wanted to reveal itself to us. “Quinn.” Eva’s voice sharpened with a scientist’s urgency. “If someone wanted to stage a disappearance here, they’d need a reason to lure witnesses away, a way to keep them quiet. The missing person—if you’re thinking it’s a victim—would have left traces of a struggle. The opposite is true: there is little to no blood, a lack of force, and a circle drawn in ash that’s too precise to be hurried vandalism.” The line of terms twined in my head: Moon gate, token, rift, circle in ash. The phrase returned, a memory I had spent three years trying not to let creep into conscious thought: supernatural origins. The partner I had lost, DS Morris, hadn’t died the way the files described. It had been something I could not explain at all, a moment when the world had tilted and everything I believed to be secure proved to be a lie. I flicked a glance toward Eva. She kept her gaze fixed on the door, but the furrow between her brows showed she was listening to more than the market’s sounds. In her line of work, a place like this wasn’t simply a crime scene; it was a doorstop to every dangerous idea she’d hunted for years. “Explain to me why a missing person would leave the ledger untouched, but an entire floor of a tunnel would be rearranged to obscure a path,” I said, the words coming out slower than I would have liked, as if I needed to feel them land in the air before I believed them. “Because,” Eva said, and paused to adjust her glasses, the round ones that made her look more scholarly than she really was, “the money kept here is a lure, not a motive. The victims here aren’t killed for cash; they’re used as a living sigil, a means to seed a doorway.” Her words hit me with the force of a thin blade through the chest. The Veil Market’s existence was not simply a market; it was a mechanism for something else to move through, something older than the city, older than the police force and the cliques we both suspected, older than the stories of the supernatural that thrummed beneath London’s skin. “An unsealed doorway,” I muttered, trying to keep my voice level. “To what?” Eva’s mouth moved without making a sound for a moment as she considered the question and then answered with a quiet certainty. “To the other side of the Moon Gate illusion that some cultures fear and some crave. It’s a myth, and yet myths have a way of becoming practice in places like this. The tokens are not merely keys; they are markers, invitations, and warnings.” The Veil Compass hummed, a faint, almost inaudible vibration that ran through my bones. The needle hovered near the door, as if daring us to test it. A distant sound rose from the tunnel, like a cough from the throat of a great animal, muffled by old stone and dust. Someone was approaching, footsteps gently in the dust, then a small burst of laughter, a sound not cruel but too knowing, as if the speaker understood something the world preferred to forget. The door opened a fraction, enough for a silhouette to appear, then vanish. The laughter followed, along with a rustle of cloth, a curious rustle of a cloak that didn’t belong in a market built on smoky, yesterdays. Quinn moved, a tight coil of muscles in her shoulders, the kind that always said she’d found something worth fighting for. She wasn’t the hero here; she was the hunter, the one who would trap you by turning your own instincts against you. “Someone’s watching us,” she said, her tone clipped, almost bored, as if the danger were a familiar companion. “Watch the door. Don’t let the watchers determine our path.” Eva glanced at me, a flicker of something like relief crossing her features. She didn’t need permission to be brave, she simply was. The ground gave a soft, almost polite tremor, as if the tunnel itself had decided to respond to the conversation’s gravity. A trapdoor in the floor, long hidden, clattered upward with a jittering metallic scream. A stair led downward into a shorter corridor, darker than a cave. The air grew cooler, damper, as if we’d stepped into a different climate, the space between worlds. Through the opening stepped a man in a long coat, the kind of coat that had survived too many nights spent in smoky rooms of power and influence. He paused on the threshold, a calm smile tugging at the corners of his mouth, eyes gleaming with something clinical and cruel. “Detectives,” he said, not greeting us with warmth but the cold calculus of someone who knew he’d placed us in a corner. “And you, Doctor Kowalski. You’ve found us again.” The man’s voice drew out the syllables with the patience of a game master, but the words carried a menace that hummed in the air long after he finished speaking. Quinn stepped forward, body and mind aligned, her leather-strap watch catching a fragment of light and sending it across the scene like a sigil. “Who are you?” she demanded, though the question wasn’t aimed at a name so much as an intent, a direction in which the conversation would proceed. The man’s smile widened, not in warmth but in a calculation of how far he could push us before we snapped back. “Names aren’t important,” he said. “What is important is what you choose to believe about this place.” He looked at Eva with a slow, almost courteous curiosity. “You always believed the stories, Eva. The archives tell you what to think, but not what to see.” Eva lifted her chin. “The archives do not tell me what to see. They tell me what’s hidden in plain sight. And you, sir, are not simply hiding a crime—” she paused, glancing at me for a moment, then back to him, “—you’re hiding your own ritual.” The man’s eyes flicked toward the door—the doorway to the unknown—and he inclined his head, acknowledging the truth in Eva’s statement without conceding any of his own guilt. “You mistake the situation. We simply prepared a demonstration for a select audience, to show what the Market can do for the willing.” He turned his body so a portion of the cloak fell away, revealing a talisman tucked inside his coat, a little circle with a dot in the middle—the sigil Eva’s notes had highlighted. “Don’t pretend you didn’t come here with intent,” I said, stepping forward more firmly, my boots echoing in the tunnel. “If you planned a ritual, you’ve just performed it. And we’ve just walked into it.” The man shrugged, almost bored. “We perform only what is necessary to remind people that power refuses to be seen. The Market is not a place for the ordinary to step through. It is a doorway for those who know how to walk it.” He looked to the door as if expecting something to appear there, a second doorway perhaps, a second audience. The Veil Compass in my hand vibrated, a delicate tremor that ran up my arm as if answering a call of a half-remembered language that only the device could translate. A hush fell over the scene, as if the market itself held its breath in anticipation of the moment when the boy and the girl in the cloak would reveal what they had summoned. The man’s lips moved in a whisper, a phrase spoken to himself, to the room, to the energy that glowed faintly near the back of the corridor. “Show them,” he whispered, and the word seemed to pull the air from the walls. From the darkness stepped a figure I had believed to be a mere legend—someone you would never mistake for anything but danger, the sort of person who wore intent like a second skin. The figure moved with a measured grace, as if dancing to a music only the chosen could hear. The room’s shadows rearranged themselves to accommodate the visitor, the ambience thickening with the sudden presence of a thing I could not name. The body—if it could be called that—glowed softly, the glow tracing the edges of a voice that did not belong to a human throat. A rational part of me told me to reach for the pistol tucked into the small of my back, to form a plan, to call for back-up, to do all the things that kept a detective’s nerves from snapping. But my instincts, the part of me that had learned to read the world in signs and whispers, proposed a different hypothesis: this was not a man committing a crime; this was a doorway opening and a ritual not yet finished. The new arrival extended a hand, the palm facing downward as if offering something, perhaps a token, perhaps power. The crowd—if we could call the others in the Market a crowd—held its breath as the figure moved closer to the circle drawn on the floor, the ash lines that Eva had identified as a script, the script that could bend a door, bend a night into daylight, bend a city’s reality just enough for something to slip through. The figure spoke again, the voice layered and strange, as if several voices had learned to share one mouth. “You’ve been waiting for this, haven’t you, Detective? You’ve hunted a crime that cannot exist under laws and rules, a crime that demands a ritual more than a hospital bed and a jail cell.” Quinn didn’t flinch. She pressed the Veil Compass to her lips, tasting coppery air and the salt of old fear. Her eyes, that brown, unyielding gaze, measured the space the doorway occupied and the space she intended to take for herself. “Show me the evidence,” she said, though the words sounded like a challenge more than a request, like a soldier demanding a map when the enemy refuses to reveal the terrain. The other man—if he truly belonged to a legal world at all—smirked. “The evidence lies in what you cannot see. The body is elsewhere. The marks are here. The tokens you carry are not keys but signatures. They announce who you are, what you believe, and what you fear.” The circle on the floor brightened faintly with heat, a heat not born of flame but something older, something that fed on human attention and the idea of a portal. The door behind us, the one Eva had pointed to earlier, pulsed with an almost organic rhythm, as if the entire tunnel were a living creature whose nerves had learned to respond to human intention. “Quinn,” Eva whispered, stepping to my side. The whisper carried a note of urgency I hadn’t heard in her voice before. “If what we’re seeing is real, we’re not dealing with a simple abduction. We’re dealing with a doorway that opened and decided to keep something behind it. The token you carry could be a last proof of a contract.” A sharp crack of energy split the air, and the crowd’s murmur rose into a chorus of fear and fascination. The door’s edge blazed with light, the kind of light that hurts your eyes as it performs a promise you’ve always suspected but never dared to test. The cultist’s cloak fell away for a moment as the figure behind him moved, and a strangled choked breath escaped from me as I saw the tattoo on the back of the figure’s neck—the same sigil that had been etched on the Veil Compass’s face, the sigil that meant a Shade artisan had touched this place, possibly in search of a new apprentice, or perhaps a new doorway to step through. “Do not fight the story,” the cultist said, his voice lowering to caress the air. “If you fight the story, you fight yourselves.” The ground shivered again, and the ash signs flared, signaling a portal that wasn’t a doorway to another location so much as a doorway to another time. A low, whispering wind rose from the corridor, a wind that carried the faint scents Eva had described—old parchment, rain-soaked stone, a sting of something metallic and bitter. The Veil Compass vibrated in my palm, and in a sudden, sharp motion I twisted it, listening as it hummed to itself, then settled toward the rift with a click that sounded like a decision being made. “Quinn,” Eva said, voice low but urgent, “whatever you think this is, it isn’t a normal crime. The papers you’ve studied, the cases you’ve closed, the nerves you’ve kept steady—all of them won’t help you here. If you push this door, you’ll be crossing into something you cannot come back from.” I did not answer with words, only with a step forward, my left hand closing around the pocket with the bone token and, beneath the token, the faint pulse of the city’s secret. The crowd’s breathing sharpened into a chorus of fear, awe, and a fearsome possibility—perhaps the Market truly was a living thing, the lung of London, the thing that breathed in the old stories and exhaled new ones at a rate even a detective could not predict. “Show me,” I said, not to the crowd or to the cultist, but to the doorway itself, to the thing that had decided that this night would have a different shape than the others. The circle brightened, the sigils glowing with a pale, almost blue light. The air snapped once, twice, and the space between us and the doorway filled with a silence so complete you could hear a whisper of a breath from across the cavernous tunnel. Then, without a sound, a figure stepped through. It wasn’t human. Not entirely. The room seemed to exhale as the shape settled into the space, a silhouette with edges that blurred and sharpened alternately, as if the thing was trying to take form in a world that refused to keep form for long. The crowd pressed in, a living wall of bodies and breath, and Eva’s hand found mine, gripping with her usual mixture of fear and fierce curiosity. The new arrival stared at us with eyes that did not reflect light so much as consume it, a quiet authority that said this was not a person you argued with. The figure opened its mouth and a sound came out that was not a sound at all but a suggestion of meaning, a message delivered with the suggestion of a smile. “Detective Quinn,” it spoke, and the name felt heavy on the air, loaded with all the power and threat that had ever existed in this city—an entity that wore a face, but that face belonged to no single human you could pin down. A bullet of cold awareness ran through me. This was the moment everything changed. The evidence didn’t add up, the crime didn’t fit a pattern, and now a doorway to somewhere else wasn’t merely a doorway but a statement. The Vault Market’s lights flickered again, stuttering, then steadied. The creature across the room—no, the entity—tilted its head as if listening for something we could not hear, and the floor beneath us offered up a single, brutal truth: the game had moved beyond humans, beyond their laws, beyond the police’s jurisdiction. The city would not be the same after this night. The partner I had lost, the partner I had tried not to remember, pressed at the edge of my thoughts with a sting—supernatural origins, indeed. The fog in my chest thickened, and for a moment I could almost hear DS Morris whispering through the ether, a memory flipping like a coin in a graveyard wind. The shadowed figure stepped closer, and the crowd drew back instinctively as if they could sense the boundaries of their own world slipping. Eva whispered a prayer her grandmother might have spoken in another life and then steadied her notebook against her chest, as if she needed to hold on to something concrete while the air turned to something else entirely. Quinn’s jaw tightened, her military precision reasserting itself in the face of danger. The Veil Compass gave a final, decisive click and faced the entity head-on, its needle pointing directly at the shift between rooms, between worlds. The crime might have been staged, but the doorway—and the danger it represented—was unambiguous. Then came the moment when the market itself decided to act. A low thrumming rose from the floor, a sound like a sleeping dragon exhaling through a tunnel that had never learned to breathe in peace. The ash sigils brightened, and the edges of the doorway’s glow sharpened into a blade of light that arced across the room toward the cultist, toward us, toward the marks on the floor that would, in seconds, carve a different path for the living and the dead alike. “Stand back,” I found myself saying, not to Eva but to the space around us, as if the world itself would appreciate a boundary more than we did. The creature—that doorway made flesh—raised a hand, and a cold wind swept through the tunnel, snatching at the token in my pocket. The bone-token glowed faintly under the light, as if it had become a true key, a talisman that even the city’s oldest fears could not ignore. It was time to decide whether we would sink into this new reality or fight to keep the old one intact. The cultist raised his arms and cried out something I couldn’t translate, something the crowd could not understand, and the air answered in a chorus of small sounds—the sound of a lock turning, the creak of a door, a whisper of a name we all recognised but none dared call aloud. Then the door beyond the circle—our doorway—began to tear into itself, the light from within blooming into a white fire that stung the eyes with its brightness. The shadowy figure stepped forward, the crowd fell still, a single breath ticked to silence, and the city held its breath as if waiting for someone to decide what to do with the moment when the world tilted, again, toward something unspoken. Shouts rose from the tunnel mouth, then a hard, metallic clang as a secondary barrier slammed into place, sealing off the corridor from the rest of the Market, trapping us in a pocket of air and spectacle. The creature—if creature it was—lifted its chin as if considering us with the patience of an ancient judge, and the glint of the sigil on the talisman flashed once, twice, and then held firm. The scent of old parchment, rain, and iron thickened the air. Eva stepped forward, her voice steady despite the tremor in her hands. “We need to close the circle,” she said. “If we can reverse the sigil, we might push the entity back through the Moon Gate where it belongs.” Her eyes met mine, seeking permission to act, to risk everything, to choose the right path even if it meant breaking every rule in a book she might never finish. Quinn did not blink. She moved with the economy of a weapon, her glove catching the edge of the Veil Compass, her breath measured, her body poised to strike or retreat or do both in the same breath. “Then we close it,” she said. “Now. We don’t have the luxury of a perfect plan. We have a doorway that cannot be allowed to stay open.” The scene narrowed to a single moment: the compass in my hand, the sigils burning, Eva’s careful handwriting in the light, the Market listening as if the walls themselves waited for the next word spoken aloud. The two of us—one trained to hunt criminals, the other trained to study signs—made a choice in unison, a choice born of fear and stubborn hope. The symbol on the talisman glowed again, and with it the room leaned toward us, as if the Market itself was about to tilt back into something recognisable. A dozen voices rose in fear and awe, but Quinn cut through them with a single, clear command. “Form a perimeter. Eva, you stay with me. We’ll reverse the sigil, push it back through the circle, and seal the gateway from our side.” The words left her mouth with a measured certainty that would have impressed even a room full of seasoned officers. The crowd moved, not with obedience but with the kind of hurried obedience that follows a signal in a crowded room. Eva opened her notebook, reciting phrases in a language that wasn’t a language, but a set of symbols you translate with your breath and your hands. I positioned myself so the doorway would be between me and the entity, the circle between it and the rest of the Market, as if to say, This far, no farther. The Veil Compass’s needle pulsed, a living heartbeat now connected not just to a rift, but to a decision. We spoke in quick, clipped phrases, the dialogue of people who knew this is not a test but a turning point. “Reverse the sigil,” Eva instructed, her voice rich with a scholar’s insistence and a survivor’s caution. Quinn’s mouth moved with the pace of a pistol being loaded. “We don’t have the time for a dissertation. We do what works.” We moved in a tight formation, Eva guiding the process with her ink-stained fingers and the notebook’s pages turning as if the wind itself urged us to act. I held the token in my other hand, the bone surface smooth against my skin, a reminder of old cases that refused to stay buried and of partners who had died for a truth the city did not want to face. The sigil’s glow thinned, then waned, the light withdrawing like a tide retreating from a familiar shore. The circle dimmed, the air grew heavier and closer, and the entity’s edges softened, as if the doorway were winning a slow, stubborn battle against the world’s stubborn torque. We pressed forward, the ritualists’ rhythm broken by necessity rather than ceremony. The doorway’s light receded a fraction more, and the market exhaled. The room’s edges blurred, then clarified, the ceiling returning to its factory-grey some distance away, the walls no longer shifting their bones in mischief. The portal collapsed with a puff of heat and a flare of stinging light, like turning a page too quickly and catching the faint afterimage of every word you didn’t quite read. Silence followed, dense and heavy, as if the city itself had grown a new ear and was listening for what we’d decide next. Eva exhaled, her shoulders sagging with relief and fatigue. The Veil Compass lay quiet in my hand, the verdigris patina darkening as if it had just consumed a new piece of truth. The crowd’s murmur drifted into a hum that sounded almost reverent. The market’s furniture—tattered velvet, jars, and trinkets—stood as if still in a pose of witness, the kind of witness that did not speak but remembered. The body was still missing, the evidence still odd, but the doorway—our doorway—had closed, and with it a piece of the mystery most people would have preferred to pretend wasn’t real. Quinn stepped closer to the centre of the circle, her sharp jaw still set in that iron line she wore when the game shifted. She looked at Eva, then to me, and said nothing at first, letting the moment settle, letting the weight of what we’d done sink in. The city would not forget this; the Market would not return to the same stillness again. “Two things,” she finally said, the tone carefully controlled. “We found something worth telling a higher authority, but we’ll need to decide who has the right to tell it. We’ll have to choose whether to keep this quiet until we can build a proper case, or publish the truth and let the public decide how to live with it.” Eva glanced toward the hidden doorway, the door that had trembled with our actions. “The truth will out,” she said softly. “But there are truths best left asleep, at least for a while, until we’ve learned how to breathe again in its shadow.” “I know what you’re saying,” I said, though I did not voice the fear that gnawed at me. The partner I’d lost would have said: move carefully, but never surrender. The city would demand either a new kind of justice or a new kind of nightmare; perhaps both at once. A sound, small and awful, then broke the silence: a cracking sound from a hidden corner, a scream muffled by cloth that didn’t belong in a market that sold alchemical wonders and haunted stories. Someone—no, something— stepped from behind a display, a figure that wore a mask of ordinary face while hiding something ancient and dangerous behind it. The crowd gasped, not in shock alone but in recognition of a thing they knew existed in London’s breath but not in its daylight. The new figure moved with startling speed, and the veils between worlds trembled once more as if an unspoken dare had reached its end. Shouts turned to a chorus of panic. The figure—human, perhaps, or something far older—charged forward, lashed toward us with a crazy, wrong wind, and in that charged moment, I realised the case would not end with a neat confession or a neat arrest. It would end with a choice, one made with a blade of light and a circle of ash, a door we could close or let remain ajar. The city pressed in around us, the Veil Market’s heartbeat quickened, and the night prepared to reveal what it had kept buried for longer than any ledger could record. We stood at the edge of a cliff that loomed in a world where the edge moved when you blinked. The door had closed, the ritual had ended, and the real work was only beginning. And then, as if in answer to a dare we had not yet learned to refuse, the unseen thing beyond the doorway—whatever it was—sighed, and the chamber trembled again, faster this time, a warning, a threat, a promise. The kind of thing that left you no choice but to move or be moved. Shouting erupted—someone’s voice, someone’s plan, someone’s risk. I caught Eva’s face in a flash of movement, saw the determination there—the careful, stubborn, brilliant resolve of a woman who would not surrender the dead to the living, nor the living to the dead. I tightened my grip on the bone token and stepped toward the edge of the circle, where the light still lingered and the city’s new truth waited for us to decide what to do with it. The night broke open with a sound that was not a sound, a moment that was not merely a moment. The Veil Market seemed to lean toward us as if listening, as if a crowd of witnesses had finally understood that their stories were not finished but only begun. And at the very edge of that moment, when the decision would shape what London would become, something moved at the threshold of the door again, something which would force us to choose not by law, but by the more terrible, more precarious thing—truth, and the cost of keeping it quiet. The scene hung in a taut, ready breath, the kind that makes your blood thicken and your nerves hum. Then the snarl of a latch, a clatter of steps, and the night exploded with the unexpected, the violent, the utterly real. The moment when everything changed was here, and we stood in it, listening for the next thing the Market would demand of us.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags41
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"she finally said [finally]"
1"she said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences65
tagDensity0.631
leniency1
rawRatio0.049
effectiveRatio0.049
90.06% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount6034
totalAiIsmAdverbs12
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count2
1
adverb"really"
count1
2
adverb"gently"
count1
3
adverb"softly"
count2
4
adverb"truly"
count2
5
adverb"carefully"
count2
6
adverb"very"
count1
7
adverb"utterly"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"really"
2"gently"
3"softly"
4"truly"
5"carefully"
6"very"
7"utterly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
44.48% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount6034
totalAiIsms67
found
0
word"whisper"
count7
1
word"velvet"
count3
2
word"weight"
count3
3
word"etched"
count2
4
word"silk"
count1
5
word"perfect"
count2
6
word"potential"
count1
7
word"reminder"
count2
8
word"echoed"
count1
9
word"scanning"
count1
10
word"flicked"
count3
11
word"echoes"
count2
12
word"quivered"
count1
13
word"footsteps"
count1
14
word"familiar"
count2
15
word"flicker"
count1
16
word"gleaming"
count1
17
word"warmth"
count2
18
word"aligned"
count1
19
word"firmly"
count1
20
word"echoing"
count1
21
word"vibrated"
count2
22
word"anticipation"
count1
23
word"measured"
count4
24
word"dancing"
count1
25
word"tracing"
count1
26
word"pulsed"
count2
27
word"pulse"
count1
28
word"silence"
count4
29
word"flickered"
count1
30
word"unspoken"
count2
31
word"glint"
count1
32
word"trembled"
count3
33
word"charged"
count2
34
word"quickened"
count1
35
word"loomed"
count1
36
word"resolve"
count1
highlights
0"whisper"
1"velvet"
2"weight"
3"etched"
4"silk"
5"perfect"
6"potential"
7"reminder"
8"echoed"
9"scanning"
10"flicked"
11"echoes"
12"quivered"
13"footsteps"
14"familiar"
15"flicker"
16"gleaming"
17"warmth"
18"aligned"
19"firmly"
20"echoing"
21"vibrated"
22"anticipation"
23"measured"
24"dancing"
25"tracing"
26"pulsed"
27"pulse"
28"silence"
29"flickered"
30"unspoken"
31"glint"
32"trembled"
33"charged"
34"quickened"
35"loomed"
36"resolve"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells5
narrationSentences231
matches
0"s with warmth"
1"t in warmth"
2"h in anticipation"
3"e in fear"
4"g with relief"
99.57% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences231
filterMatches
0"look"
1"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tended to"
2"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences255
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen72
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords5970
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions66
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions94
wordCount5052
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity0.65
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Veil16
Compass13
Tube1
Camden1
Kowalski1
Eva33
Moon1
Morris2
Market12
London4
Shade1
Vault1
Quinn8
persons
0"Compass"
1"Camden"
2"Kowalski"
3"Eva"
4"Morris"
5"Market"
6"Quinn"
places
0"Veil"
1"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences213
glossingSentenceCount16
matches
0"something like a heartbeat under the concret"
1"as if unwilling to be noticed"
2"not quite identify"
3"as if daring us to test it"
4"something like relief crossing her features"
5"as if expecting something to appear there, a second doorway perhaps, a second audience"
6"as if answering a call of a half-remembered language that only the device could translate"
7"as if dancing to a music only the chosen could hear"
8"as if offering something, perhaps a token, perhaps power"
9"sounded like a challenge more than a reque"
10"sounded like a decision being made"
11"as if listening for something we could not hear, and the floor beneath us offered up a single, brutal truth: the game had moved beyond humans, beyond their laws, beyond the police’s jurisdiction"
12"as if waiting for someone to decide what to do with the moment when the world tilted, again, toward something unspoken"
13"as if considering us with the patience of an ancient judge, and the glint of the sigil on the talisman flashed once, twice, and then held firm"
14"quite read"
15"as if listening as if a crowd of witnesses had finally understood that their stories were not finished but only begun"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches17
per1kWords2.848
wordCount5970
matches
0"not physically, but spiritually"
1"not much, but it’s enough to give you a starting line"
2"not cruel but too knowing, as if the speaker understood something the worl"
3"not greeting us with warmth but the cold calculus of someone who knew he’d placed us in a co"
4"not in warmth but in a calculation of how far he could push us before we snapp"
5"not keys but signatures"
6"not born of flame but something older, something"
7"not to the crowd or to the cultist, but to the doorway itself, to the thing"
8"not a sound at all but a suggestion of meaning, a message delivered with the sugges"
9"not to Eva but to the space around us, as if the world itself would appreci"
10"not with obedience but with the kind of hurried obedience"
11"not just to a rift, but to a decision"
12"not a test but a turning point"
13"not in shock alone but in recognition of a thing they knew existed in London’s brea"
14"no choice but"
15"not finished but only begun"
16"not by law, but by the more terrible, more precarious thing"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount3
totalSentences255
matches
0"lines that Eva"
1"decided that this"
2"understood that their"
71.23% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs116
mean51.47
std20.55
cv0.399
sampleLengths
042
141
282
383
419
530
681
740
823
958
1045
1119
1292
1357
1413
1575
1670
1742
1845
1936
2031
2155
2275
2378
2450
2557
2671
2778
2856
2953
3051
3161
3213
3366
3427
3555
3638
3743
3828
3923
4064
4150
4230
4330
4450
4539
4628
4747
4884
4935
91.59% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount9
totalSentences231
matches
0"being ripped"
1"was gone"
2"been sealed"
3"been opened"
4"been etched"
5"being made"
6"been staged"
7"was—lifted"
8"was—sighed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount6
totalVerbs796
matches
0"were asking"
1"was listening"
2"was approaching"
3"was trying"
4"were winning"
5"was listening"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount47
semicolonCount14
flaggedSentences43
totalSentences255
ratio0.169
matches
0"Stalls stood like scarecrows—colour dulled, trinkets dulling to dust, a scent of wax and damp velvet hanging in the air."
1"The place moved, not physically, but spiritually; a shifting map that only the fools refused to read."
2"“I brought questions. Not patterns. We should not confuse the two.” She crouched, studied the ground near the stall’s base where something—perhaps a drip of blood that never appeared—had left a faint, irregular stain, a line that didn’t feel natural."
3"I pulled the crate aside with a snap of my elbow joints and found the same thing we’d expected and hadn’t—markets did not keep their secrets in clean squares."
4"The circle wasn’t decorative; it wasn’t ritual; it was a map, a street plan drawn in a language the dead could understand."
5"“Look at the ledger under the counter,” she suggested, nodding toward a stall where a vendor kept a ledger—pages yellowed to the point of flaking."
6"“The discourse of the room is ritualistic, not procedural. The symbols drawn in ash near the stall’s back wall aren’t vandalism; they’re a script.”"
7"I flipped the pages with a practiced efficiency and found a page marked with a small, neat doodle—the shape of a circle with a dot in the middle, a sigil repeated in a pattern."
8"The door wasn’t locked; it wasn’t sealed; it simply existed, a barrier between this floor and what lay beyond it."
9"In her line of work, a place like this wasn’t simply a crime scene; it was a doorstop to every dangerous idea she’d hunted for years."
10"“Because,” Eva said, and paused to adjust her glasses, the round ones that made her look more scholarly than she really was, “the money kept here is a lure, not a motive. The victims here aren’t killed for cash; they’re used as a living sigil, a means to seed a doorway.”"
11"The Veil Market’s existence was not simply a market; it was a mechanism for something else to move through, something older than the city, older than the police force and the cliques we both suspected, older than the stories of the supernatural that thrummed beneath London’s skin."
12"“To the other side of the Moon Gate illusion that some cultures fear and some crave. It’s a myth, and yet myths have a way of becoming practice in places like this. The tokens are not merely keys; they are markers, invitations, and warnings.”"
13"She wasn’t the hero here; she was the hunter, the one who would trap you by turning your own instincts against you."
14"The man’s eyes flicked toward the door—the doorway to the unknown—and he inclined his head, acknowledging the truth in Eva’s statement without conceding any of his own guilt."
15"“You mistake the situation. We simply prepared a demonstration for a select audience, to show what the Market can do for the willing.” He turned his body so a portion of the cloak fell away, revealing a talisman tucked inside his coat, a little circle with a dot in the middle—the sigil Eva’s notes had highlighted."
16"From the darkness stepped a figure I had believed to be a mere legend—someone you would never mistake for anything but danger, the sort of person who wore intent like a second skin."
17"The body—if it could be called that—glowed softly, the glow tracing the edges of a voice that did not belong to a human throat."
18"But my instincts, the part of me that had learned to read the world in signs and whispers, proposed a different hypothesis: this was not a man committing a crime; this was a doorway opening and a ritual not yet finished."
19"The crowd—if we could call the others in the Market a crowd—held its breath as the figure moved closer to the circle drawn on the floor, the ash lines that Eva had identified as a script, the script that could bend a door, bend a night into daylight, bend a city’s reality just enough for something to slip through."
20"The other man—if he truly belonged to a legal world at all—smirked."
21"The cultist’s cloak fell away for a moment as the figure behind him moved, and a strangled choked breath escaped from me as I saw the tattoo on the back of the figure’s neck—the same sigil that had been etched on the Veil Compass’s face, the sigil that meant a Shade artisan had touched this place, possibly in search of a new apprentice, or perhaps a new doorway to step through."
22"A low, whispering wind rose from the corridor, a wind that carried the faint scents Eva had described—old parchment, rain-soaked stone, a sting of something metallic and bitter."
23"The crowd’s breathing sharpened into a chorus of fear, awe, and a fearsome possibility—perhaps the Market truly was a living thing, the lung of London, the thing that breathed in the old stories and exhaled new ones at a rate even a detective could not predict."
24"“Detective Quinn,” it spoke, and the name felt heavy on the air, loaded with all the power and threat that had ever existed in this city—an entity that wore a face, but that face belonged to no single human you could pin down."
25"The creature across the room—no, the entity—tilted its head as if listening for something we could not hear, and the floor beneath us offered up a single, brutal truth: the game had moved beyond humans, beyond their laws, beyond the police’s jurisdiction."
26"The partner I had lost, the partner I had tried not to remember, pressed at the edge of my thoughts with a sting—supernatural origins, indeed."
27"The crime might have been staged, but the doorway—and the danger it represented—was unambiguous."
28"The creature—that doorway made flesh—raised a hand, and a cold wind swept through the tunnel, snatching at the token in my pocket."
29"The cultist raised his arms and cried out something I couldn’t translate, something the crowd could not understand, and the air answered in a chorus of small sounds—the sound of a lock turning, the creak of a door, a whisper of a name we all recognised but none dared call aloud."
30"Then the door beyond the circle—our doorway—began to tear into itself, the light from within blooming into a white fire that stung the eyes with its brightness."
31"The creature—if creature it was—lifted its chin as if considering us with the patience of an ancient judge, and the glint of the sigil on the talisman flashed once, twice, and then held firm."
32"The two of us—one trained to hunt criminals, the other trained to study signs—made a choice in unison, a choice born of fear and stubborn hope."
33"The market’s furniture—tattered velvet, jars, and trinkets—stood as if still in a pose of witness, the kind of witness that did not speak but remembered."
34"The body was still missing, the evidence still odd, but the doorway—our doorway—had closed, and with it a piece of the mystery most people would have preferred to pretend wasn’t real."
35"The city would not forget this; the Market would not return to the same stillness again."
36"The city would demand either a new kind of justice or a new kind of nightmare; perhaps both at once."
37"Someone—no, something— stepped from behind a display, a figure that wore a mask of ordinary face while hiding something ancient and dangerous behind it."
38"The figure—human, perhaps, or something far older—charged forward, lashed toward us with a crazy, wrong wind, and in that charged moment, I realised the case would not end with a neat confession or a neat arrest."
39"And then, as if in answer to a dare we had not yet learned to refuse, the unseen thing beyond the doorway—whatever it was—sighed, and the chamber trembled again, faster this time, a warning, a threat, a promise."
40"Shouting erupted—someone’s voice, someone’s plan, someone’s risk."
41"I caught Eva’s face in a flash of movement, saw the determination there—the careful, stubborn, brilliant resolve of a woman who would not surrender the dead to the living, nor the living to the dead."
42"And at the very edge of that moment, when the decision would shape what London would become, something moved at the threshold of the door again, something which would force us to choose not by law, but by the more terrible, more precarious thing—truth, and the cost of keeping it quiet."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount4315
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"strange, oily quiet, something"
adverbCount131
adverbRatio0.030359212050984935
lyAdverbCount31
lyAdverbRatio0.007184241019698725
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences255
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences255
mean23.41
std12.34
cv0.527
sampleLengths
017
125
210
318
413
519
620
717
826
927
1024
1132
1213
136
141
151
165
1723
1841
1920
2020
2121
2219
2323
2418
2540
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3029
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3537
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3722
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4831
494
31.96% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats46
diversityRatio0.2235294117647059
totalSentences255
uniqueOpeners57
59.52% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences224
matches
0"Then, without a sound, a"
1"Then came the moment when"
2"Then the door beyond the"
3"Then the snarl of a"
ratio0.018
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount63
totalSentences224
matches
0"I rolled, listening to boots"
1"I rolled to my feet,"
2"I angled toward the sound,"
3"Her satchel slapped against her"
4"she said, brushing a strand"
5"I asked, keeping my voice"
6"She stepped closer, her satchel"
7"She crouched, studied the ground"
8"Her eyes lifted to the"
9"I pulled the crate aside"
10"I said, half to Eva,"
11"she suggested, nodding toward a"
12"I picked up a folded"
13"I echoed, tasting the phrase"
14"I pressed the token in"
15"She spoke again, low, the"
16"I asked, though the question"
17"Her eyes met mine."
18"She took out a small,"
19"I flipped the pages with"
ratio0.281
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount209
totalSentences224
matches
0"The Veil Compass leapt from"
1"I rolled, listening to boots"
2"The market’s murmur swelled, a"
3"The abandoned Tube tunnel beneath"
4"Stalls stood like scarecrows—colour dulled,"
5"The place moved, not physically,"
6"I rolled to my feet,"
7"The bone token I kept"
8"The token’s bone-white surface carried"
9"A voice cut through the"
10"The words stung with implications."
11"I angled toward the sound,"
12"Eva Kowalski stepped from behind"
13"Her satchel slapped against her"
14"The glow around her felt"
15"she said, brushing a strand"
16"I asked, keeping my voice"
17"She stepped closer, her satchel"
18"She crouched, studied the ground"
19"Her eyes lifted to the"
ratio0.933
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences224
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences170
technicalSentenceCount44
matches
0"The Veil Compass leapt from my grip and skittered under a crate, its brass face catching the stray green glow that crawled along the wall."
1"The needle lay still for a heartbeat, then shifted, a hair’s breadth, toward a closed door that blended into the wall, as if unwilling to be noticed."
2"The floor here was uneven, patched with a patchwork of tiles that didn’t match, as if someone had laid a new floor over an old one, leaving a seam that ran in a…"
3"The Veil Compass’s needle flicked once, then steadied toward a narrow doorway that had been sealed with a heavy drawstring curtain, like a throat refusing to sp…"
4"The door had been opened recently, perhaps minutes before we arrived, though the dust remained undisturbed, save for the muddled prints of someone who had moved…"
5"The Veil Compass quivered, the needle jittering toward that same seam, as if the energy of whatever lay beyond wanted to reveal itself to us."
6"The Veil Market’s existence was not simply a market; it was a mechanism for something else to move through, something older than the city, older than the police…"
7"Someone was approaching, footsteps gently in the dust, then a small burst of laughter, a sound not cruel but too knowing, as if the speaker understood something…"
8"The air grew cooler, damper, as if we’d stepped into a different climate, the space between worlds."
9"Through the opening stepped a man in a long coat, the kind of coat that had survived too many nights spent in smoky rooms of power and influence."
10"The man’s eyes flicked toward the door—the doorway to the unknown—and he inclined his head, acknowledging the truth in Eva’s statement without conceding any of …"
11"The Veil Compass in my hand vibrated, a delicate tremor that ran up my arm as if answering a call of a half-remembered language that only the device could trans…"
12"A rational part of me told me to reach for the pistol tucked into the small of my back, to form a plan, to call for back-up, to do all the things that kept a de…"
13"But my instincts, the part of me that had learned to read the world in signs and whispers, proposed a different hypothesis: this was not a man committing a crim…"
14"The new arrival extended a hand, the palm facing downward as if offering something, perhaps a token, perhaps power."
15"The crowd—if we could call the others in the Market a crowd—held its breath as the figure moved closer to the circle drawn on the floor, the ash lines that Eva …"
16"The door behind us, the one Eva had pointed to earlier, pulsed with an almost organic rhythm, as if the entire tunnel were a living creature whose nerves had le…"
17"The cultist’s cloak fell away for a moment as the figure behind him moved, and a strangled choked breath escaped from me as I saw the tattoo on the back of the …"
18"A low, whispering wind rose from the corridor, a wind that carried the faint scents Eva had described—old parchment, rain-soaked stone, a sting of something met…"
19"The crowd’s breathing sharpened into a chorus of fear, awe, and a fearsome possibility—perhaps the Market truly was a living thing, the lung of London, the thin…"
20"The room seemed to exhale as the shape settled into the space, a silhouette with edges that blurred and sharpened alternately, as if the thing was trying to tak…"
21"The creature across the room—no, the entity—tilted its head as if listening for something we could not hear, and the floor beneath us offered up a single, bruta…"
22"The shadowed figure stepped closer, and the crowd drew back instinctively as if they could sense the boundaries of their own world slipping."
23"Eva whispered a prayer her grandmother might have spoken in another life and then steadied her notebook against her chest, as if she needed to hold on to someth…"
24"The ash sigils brightened, and the edges of the doorway’s glow sharpened into a blade of light that arced across the room toward the cultist, toward us, toward …"
25"The bone-token glowed faintly under the light, as if it had become a true key, a talisman that even the city’s oldest fears could not ignore."
26"Then the door beyond the circle—our doorway—began to tear into itself, the light from within blooming into a white fire that stung the eyes with its brightness."
27"The shadowy figure stepped forward, the crowd fell still, a single breath ticked to silence, and the city held its breath as if waiting for someone to decide wh…"
28"The creature—if creature it was—lifted its chin as if considering us with the patience of an ancient judge, and the glint of the sigil on the talisman flashed o…"
29"The scene narrowed to a single moment: the compass in my hand, the sigils burning, Eva’s careful handwriting in the light, the Market listening as if the walls …"
30"Eva opened her notebook, reciting phrases in a language that wasn’t a language, but a set of symbols you translate with your breath and your hands."
31"We moved in a tight formation, Eva guiding the process with her ink-stained fingers and the notebook’s pages turning as if the wind itself urged us to act."
32"I held the token in my other hand, the bone surface smooth against my skin, a reminder of old cases that refused to stay buried and of partners who had died for…"
33"The circle dimmed, the air grew heavier and closer, and the entity’s edges softened, as if the doorway were winning a slow, stubborn battle against the world’s …"
34"Silence followed, dense and heavy, as if the city itself had grown a new ear and was listening for what we’d decide next."
35"The Veil Compass lay quiet in my hand, the verdigris patina darkening as if it had just consumed a new piece of truth."
36"The market’s furniture—tattered velvet, jars, and trinkets—stood as if still in a pose of witness, the kind of witness that did not speak but remembered."
37"A sound, small and awful, then broke the silence: a cracking sound from a hidden corner, a scream muffled by cloth that didn’t belong in a market that sold alch…"
38"Someone—no, something— stepped from behind a display, a figure that wore a mask of ordinary face while hiding something ancient and dangerous behind it."
39"The new figure moved with startling speed, and the veils between worlds trembled once more as if an unspoken dare had reached its end."
40"I caught Eva’s face in a flash of movement, saw the determination there—the careful, stubborn, brilliant resolve of a woman who would not surrender the dead to …"
41"The Veil Market seemed to lean toward us as if listening, as if a crowd of witnesses had finally understood that their stories were not finished but only begun."
42"And at the very edge of that moment, when the decision would shape what London would become, something moved at the threshold of the door again, something which…"
43"The scene hung in a taut, ready breath, the kind that makes your blood thicken and your nerves hum."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags41
uselessAdditionCount11
matches
0"The ink had, but the words remained legible:"
1"I pressed, not trusting the ground to stay honest with us"
2"I asked, though the question felt clumsy, as if I were asking a riddle without the answer written on the rim of the last page"
3"I muttered, trying to keep my voice level"
4"she demanded, though the question wasn’t aimed at a name so much as an intent, a direction in which the conversation would proceed"
5"he whispered, and the word seemed to pull the air from the walls"
6"she said, though the words sounded like a challenge more than a request, like a soldier demanding a map when the enemy refuses to reveal the terrain"
7"the cultist said, his voice lowering to caress the air"
8"Eva said, voice low but urgent,"
9"it spoke, and the name felt heavy on the air, loaded with all the power and threat that had ever existed in this city—an entity that wore a face, but that face belonged to no single human you could pin down"
10"she finally said, the tone carefully controlled"
11.54% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags30
fancyCount9
fancyTags
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1"she suggested (suggest)"
2"I pressed (press)"
3"I muttered (mutter)"
4"she demanded (demand)"
5"he whispered (whisper)"
6"Eva whispered (whisper)"
7"it spoke (speak)"
8"We pressed (press)"
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leniency0.923
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