Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTY8DH3WDP0JBQD2JJ0BYS5

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1m 8s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The scotch burned going down, but not as much as the name on the lips of the woman sliding onto the barstool beside me. "Aurora Carter." I set the glass down slowly. The voice was wrong. Too polished, too careful. But the cadence underneath, that slight catch on the 'r' in Aurora, that was pure Eva. "Nobody's called me that in years." I turned. "It's Rory now." The woman studying me bore only a ghost's resemblance to the Eva I'd left behind in Cardiff. Designer suit where thrift shop finds used to live. Manicured nails that once stayed bitten to the quick. Hair that cost more than my monthly rent straightened into submission. "Rory." She tested the name like wine she wasn't sure about. "Suits you better, actually." "Lot of things suit me better these days." Silas moved down the bar with practiced discretion, but I caught his slight nod. He'd clocked her the moment she walked into The Raven's Nest. Probably ran her face through whatever database old spies kept in their heads. "Gin and tonic," Eva ordered without looking at him. "Hendrick's, if you have it." "We have Tanqueray." "That's fine." Three years ago, Eva wouldn't have known Hendrick's from paint thinner. We'd drunk whatever was cheapest, usually something that came in plastic bottles from the corner shop near her flat. "You look..." She paused, cataloguing the changes. Delivery jacket hung over my chair. Motorcycle helmet on the bar. The slight callus on my right hand from gripping handlebars eight hours a day. "Different." "London'll do that." "London." The word carried weight. "Funny how we both ended up here." "Nothing funny about it." I took another sip. "You told me to come." Her gin arrived. She stirred it with the precision of someone who'd learned which fork went where. "I didn't think you'd actually do it." "You said, and I quote, 'Get the hell out of Cardiff before he kills you.' Pretty compelling argument." "I was being dramatic." "You were being right." She winced. Set down her drink. The movement caught the light on her wedding ring. Platinum band, princess cut diamond, the kind of ring that whispered rather than shouted its price tag. "When?" I nodded at her hand. "Last spring. You probably saw the announcement." "I don't read the society pages." "No. I suppose you wouldn't." She twisted the ring. "His name's Charles. Investment banking." "Naturally." "Don't." "Don't what?" "That thing you do. That judgment disguised as acceptance." "Learned from the best." The bar filled with the kind of silence that cost more than words. Two men at the corner table argued about football. Someone fed coins into the jukebox. Tom Waits growled about closing time. "I looked for you," Eva said finally. "After you left." "No, you didn't." "I did. Called your parents-" "Now I know you're lying. You hated my parents." "I was worried." "You were guilty." She flinched. Good. Let her wear it for a while. "That's not fair." "Fair?" I laughed. Actually laughed. Silas glanced over, surprised. I didn't laugh much these days. "You want to talk about fair? You introduced us. You said he was perfect for me. Said I needed someone stable." "You did." "I needed someone safe." "I didn't know-" "Bullshit." The word cracked like a whip. "You knew exactly what he was. Why else would you have called me that night?" "I made a mistake." "Which part? Setting me up with him? Or developing a conscience three months too late?" Eva's hand trembled on her glass. The old Eva would have fought back. Would have matched me blow for blow until we both drew blood. This version just sat there, expensive and fragile. "I dream about it sometimes." Her voice dropped. "That night. Finding you in the bathroom. All that blood." "I don't." "You don't dream about it?" "I don't dream." Another lie. I dreamed plenty. But she'd lost the right to my nightmares when she chose Cardiff society over Cardiff friendship. "I should go." She reached for her purse. Hermès. Of course. "Should and will are different words." She froze. There it was. A flash of the real Eva under all that polish. "You always were too clever for your own good." "And you always thought clever was enough." "Wasn't it?" "Ask my wrist." She looked at the scar. Small, crescent-shaped, almost delicate if you didn't know what made it. "He's still there," she said. "Evan. Still playing rugby for Cardiff. Still charming everyone." "Still hunting?" "I don't know. I don't run in those circles anymore." "No. You run in better ones now." "Different ones." "Right." The gin disappeared in one smooth swallow. Eva had learned to drink like money too. No grimace, no chaser, just efficient consumption. "I should have done more." "Yes." "I should have-" "Stop." I held up my hand. "Whatever you're about to say, stop. You don't get to apologize three years later in a Soho bar. You don't get to make this about your guilt." "Then what do I get?" "Exactly what you wanted. A life that looks perfect from the outside." "That's cruel." "That's accurate." She stood. Smoothed her skirt. Every gesture practiced, perfect, empty. "For what it's worth, I'm glad you got out." "It's worth exactly what you paid for it." "Which is?" "Nothing." She absorbed that like she'd absorbed everything else. Behind carefully constructed walls where real feelings went to die. "Take care of yourself, Rory." "Always do." She walked toward the door. Stopped. Turned back. "Do you ever think about coming home?" "This is home." "London?" "Anywhere that isn't there." The door closed. Tom Waits finished singing. Silas appeared with the bottle. "Friend of yours?" "Used to be." "Ah." He poured. "Those are the worst kind." "How's that?" "Strangers can't disappoint you. Only friends can do that." The scotch went down easier this time. Or maybe I was just getting numb. Hard to tell the difference anymore. "She seems to have done well for herself." "She married up. There's a difference." "Is there?" I thought about Eva's hands. How they used to move when she talked, wild and free, painting pictures in the air. How still they'd been tonight. Folded. Controlled. Caged. "Yeah. There is." Silas moved off to serve other customers. The couple in the corner left. The jukebox went quiet. Just me and the ghosts of who we used to be. My phone buzzed. Delivery pickup ready at Golden Empress. Back to work. Back to the life I'd built from the ashes of the one Eva had helped burn down. I left money on the bar. Grabbed my helmet. Outside, London hummed with its usual chaos. Sirens. Traffic. Life moving forward while the past tried to drag it back. Eva's perfume lingered in my nose. Something French, probably. Something chosen by someone else. The bike started on the first try. I pulled into traffic, leaving The Raven's Nest and its ghosts behind. But I knew they'd follow. They always did. Some chains you forged yourself. Others were gifts from people who claimed to love you. The light turned red at Shaftesbury Avenue. In the window of the wine bar on the corner, I saw her. Eva. Sitting alone. Staring at nothing. Wedding ring spinning round and round her finger like a shackle she'd locked herself. The light turned green. I drove on.
total_cost0.21483

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Eva said finally [finally]"
1"The word cracked like [like]"
dialogueSentences95
tagDensity0.179
leniency0.358
rawRatio0.118
effectiveRatio0.042
91.85% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1227
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
63.33% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1227
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"database"
count1
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"silence"
count1
3
word"perfect"
count3
4
word"trembled"
count1
5
word"efficient"
count1
6
word"constructed"
count1
highlights
0"database"
1"weight"
2"silence"
3"perfect"
4"trembled"
5"efficient"
6"constructed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences117
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences117
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences196
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen27
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1226
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
70.53% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions37
wordCount755
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity1.59
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Eva12
Cardiff3
Silas4
Raven2
Nest2
Three1
Hendrick1
Delivery2
Waits2
Actually1
Hermès1
Golden1
Empress1
London1
French1
Shaftesbury1
Avenue1
persons
0"Eva"
1"Silas"
2"Raven"
3"Hendrick"
4"Waits"
5"Actually"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"Golden"
2"London"
3"Shaftesbury"
4"Avenue"
globalScore0.705
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences57
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1226
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences196
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs109
mean11.25
std10.84
cv0.963
sampleLengths
024
12
230
311
446
515
68
738
814
93
102
1130
1233
133
1412
1513
1617
177
1818
194
204
2132
226
237
246
2514
261
271
282
299
304
3134
3210
333
345
359
363
373
3810
393
4036
412
424
433
4422
454
4615
4733
4818
492
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences117
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs151
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences196
ratio0
matches(empty)
96.14% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount608
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount27
adverbRatio0.044407894736842105
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.009868421052631578
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences196
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences196
mean6.26
std4.61
cv0.737
sampleLengths
024
12
26
34
44
516
68
73
817
99
109
1111
1211
134
148
1514
1611
1713
189
195
203
212
2211
2319
247
256
265
2714
281
293
305
317
328
335
343
3514
367
3718
384
394
402
414
429
4317
446
457
466
479
485
491
88.44% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.5612244897959183
totalSentences196
uniqueOpeners110
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences95
matches
0"Too polished, too careful."
1"Probably ran her face through"
2"Just me and the ghosts"
ratio0.032
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences95
matches
0"I set the glass down"
1"She tested the name like"
2"He'd clocked her the moment"
3"We'd drunk whatever was cheapest,"
4"She paused, cataloguing the changes"
5"I took another sip"
6"Her gin arrived."
7"She stirred it with the"
8"I nodded at her hand"
9"She twisted the ring"
10"I didn't laugh much these"
11"Her voice dropped"
12"I dreamed plenty."
13"She reached for her purse"
14"She looked at the scar."
15"I held up my hand"
16"She absorbed that like she'd"
17"She walked toward the door."
18"I thought about Eva's hands."
19"My phone buzzed."
ratio0.253
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount67
totalSentences95
matches
0"The scotch burned going down,"
1"I set the glass down"
2"The voice was wrong."
3"The woman studying me bore"
4"Designer suit where thrift shop"
5"Hair that cost more than"
6"She tested the name like"
7"Silas moved down the bar"
8"He'd clocked her the moment"
9"Eva ordered without looking at"
10"We'd drunk whatever was cheapest,"
11"She paused, cataloguing the changes"
12"Delivery jacket hung over my"
13"Motorcycle helmet on the bar."
14"The slight callus on my"
15"The word carried weight"
16"I took another sip"
17"Her gin arrived."
18"She stirred it with the"
19"The movement caught the light"
ratio0.705
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences95
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences25
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Platinum band, princess cut diamond, the kind of ring that whispered rather than shouted its price tag."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Eva ordered (order)"
1"I laughed (laugh)"
dialogueSentences95
tagDensity0.042
leniency0.084
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.042
93.6761%