Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTY9QER2FDHMEBBSWTZQ2N0

Run Details

Duration:
1m 10s
Cost:
$0.003669
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rain hammered the city, beating out a rhythm that grew louder with every step. A slick glow crawled along the pavement, neon bleeding into puddles as the streetlights hummed with fatigue. Detective Harlow Quinn moved through it with the economy of a patrol route she’d memorized a thousand times, boots eating the distance, the worn leather watch on her left wrist catching a brief flare of light every time she shifted her weight. Her breath etched fog in the air, and her brown eyes narrowed as a silhouette cut through the rain like it wasn’t there at all. “Not tonight.” The voice came from the alley rough and low, a rasp that didn’t belong to a man who slept properly. Tomás Herrera. Short curly dark brown hair glinted with rain; olive skin darkened under a thin film of rain; there was a scar running along his left forearm that looked like it had learned to bleed in the wrong directions. A Saint Christopher medallion hung at his chest, catching a stray beam of light and winking as if it could shield him from what he’d started. Tomás wasn’t running so much as sliding between the gaps people left behind in the rain. He turned a corner where the green glow of a sign peeked from above a doorway—The Raven’s Nest, Soho’s dim throat of a place people chose when they needed a story more than a drink. The place had a reputation for quiet deals and louder ambitions, the kind of gravity that pulled a person to secrets faster than to a bar’s warmth. Harlow didn’t slow. The tapping of her heel against the pavement clacked in time with her pulse, a metronome that told her this was the kind of night that asked for precision. The Nest’s green neon buzzed, a sign that was as much a lure as a warning. It flickered, steadied, and caught the corner of her eye as Tomás slipped along the building’s shadowed flank toward a doorway half-hidden by a dumpster. Rain rolled off the metal of the dumpster’s lid and hissed as it hit the ground. The back door of The Raven’s Nest opened with a sigh of old hinges. Tomás slipped inside, leaving a smear of rain on the glass and a whisper of a breath that tasted like copper and something clinical—assurances he’d packaged up years ago and tried to forget. Harlow moved in after him, the air turning cooler as the warmth of the bar faded. She pressed into the doorway and let the scene widen: the bar’s interior was a red-curtained lung, the quiet thud of a jukebox somewhere in the distance, and the bartender’s back turned to her, his jacket catching the light in a way that said he’d seen nights like this one. A pair of customers drifted away, laughter breaking like glass over the sound of rain’s percussion on the roof. Tomás paused at the edge of the room, voice low, eyes lifting toward a shelf lined with mirrors and old photographs, a hidden corner of the place that always felt like the mind of someone who knew too much. The back room’s door wasn’t in clear sight, but a bookshelf near a brick wall looked almost ordinary—until it didn’t. “Assure them you’re listening,”Tomás whispered, as if the bar itself could hear. “Listening,” came a sharp, clipped reply, carried in a tone that wasn’t amused but always in control. It wasn’t spoken aloud by Harlow; it was a rhythm that seemed to ride the rain’s tempo as she followed the echo of that voice. Harlow wasn’t a woman who believed in luck. She believed in training, in the weight of a choice, in the way a street could rearrange itself when you looked away for a heartbeat too long. Her own voice came out as a quiet surety, the sort of sound that made it clear she wasn’t asking questions so much as forcing answers to show themselves. “Not tonight,” Tomás repeated, the words hanging between them as he stepped into a beam of light that fell across the floorboards. His right hand hovered near the bag at his hip, as if a bag could hold the answers the police were seeking, as if the bag itself could confess to the sins that slept inside it. “Tonight is when we end what you started,” she said, and her jaw tightened. The line wasn’t a question; it was a map drawn in the air, a route someone would have to walk if they wanted to stay out of trouble. She kept her pace even, every muscle in her body trained for the moment when she had to decide whether chasing would pull her into something deeper, something beyond the familiar streets she’d walked since she was a rookie. Tomás moved with the kind of caged energy you see in a creature who’s been trained to calm a crowd while a blade hovers just out of sight. He pressed his palm to the bookshelf, a secret door’s hinge in disguise, and the wall gave way with a sigh of old timber. A narrow passage opened, and the dimness beyond swelled with the sour hum of conditioned air, a draft that tasted of copper and rain. The scent of something medicinal and clandestine drifted toward Quinn and traveled through her, tugging at the corners of her mind—memories of cases that hadn’t turned out cleanly, cases that teased at nerves she didn’t admit to fearing. “Move slow,” she whispered more to herself than to him, the words meant to steady her because the choice lay ahead. The passage felt wrong in the sense that it was not a street corner or a police stairwell but a corridor built for things that didn’t belong in daylight. She could feel it in the way the air changed, a pressure that came on suddenly, as if the city itself had leaned closer to listen. Tomás halted inside the passage, his breath forming short, damp ghosts in the air. The corridor twisted, and the light behind him fell away, leaving him in a tunnel’s mouth where the rain’s echo was all you heard. His voice rose, softer now, almost respectful in its warning. “Listen, Detective. This isn’t your domain.” The words landed with the careful syllables of a man who’d learned the art of being kept alive by staying in the right places at the right times. Harlow kept her own pace. Her presence filled the space, a silhouette of purpose against the corrugated walls. Her mouth pressed into a line that could’ve been carved by the edges of a cue card, and her fists pressed lightly at her sides as if she might need to strike or squeeze something out of the air at any moment. “You’re in a place you don’t understand,” she returned, the words clipped, no-nonsense. “And I’ve got questions you’ll answer.” Tomás shook his head, eyes narrow, a spark of stubborn hope in them. His tone shifted from defiance to something almost affectionate, a line he’d used with patients who thought they could bargain with fate. “Don’t pretend you chase shadows because you think you can own them.” He stepped deeper into the tunnel, the edge of his coat catching on a stray nail along the wall, tearing a small rip in the fabric that had nothing to do with the rain. The tunnel walls grew closer, the air thicker, and the soundscape changed from street rain to a muffled whisper of distant drums, the kind of sound you’d put to a heartbeat if you could hear one in a cellar. The path led downward, away from the surface, toward a place where gravity felt different, where the rules you used above ground wouldn’t necessarily apply. The Veil Market’s rumor pressed at the back of Quinn’s skull like a pressure plate: it moved every full moon, a market that appeared only when the city’s clock struck a certain hour of secrecy. The bone token Tomás held in his pocket—if he held it at all—would be the only reason to pass the gate that barred entry to that hidden place beneath Camden. The market sold enchanted goods, alchemical substances, information that wasn’t meant for headliners or politicians or cops. It sold certainty, too, perhaps, for those who needed it in a world that preferred to keep its secrets. The tunnel widened, and then the sound of a door sliding aside greeted them, a sigh of air and old hinges. The passage opened into something most people would have mistaken for a subway platform that had never learned to belong to a city’s timetable. Faint gaslights flickered along the walls, giving the space a suspended feeling, as if gravity had decided to take a nap for a moment too long. The smell of rain clung to Quinn’s coat as if the moisture wanted to remind her where she stood, as if the city itself whispered, “This isn’t your ground anymore.” Tomás pressed onward, moving with a quiet purpose that made his scars seem like badges of a war he hadn’t won. He looked into Quinn’s eyes with that old, stubborn hope that people carry when their fate isn’t yet spoken aloud. “Listen,” he said, as if music could be tuned to a more honest truth, “the Market isn’t a place you come to interrogate a suspect. It’s a place you might lose yourself in.” She paused, not out of fear but calculation. The Veil Market lay beyond a gate that asked for a token, and beyond that gate lay decisions that didn’t care about what a detective believed was right. The market would test every principle she claimed to stand for, would force her to weigh loyalty against law, risk against reason, life against the possibility of losing her way entirely. Her mouth shifted, a slight tension around the lips, and she opened her mouth as if to respond, but the words didn’t come. The moment stretched, the rain outside a distant drumbeat against stone and leather. She studied Tomás’s profile, the way the Saint Christopher medallion swung with his steps, catching the light and then dispersing it as if it didn’t want to be seen clearly. His left forearm showed the line of a scar that had learned to sting in slow, careful ways, the kind that reminded a person that life wasn’t a straight line. “Bone token,” she finally said, letting the syllables fall like stones into a still pool. “You’ve got it.” Tomás drew himself up as if an old vow tugged at him from behind. He didn’t answer with words so much as a small, almost shy tilt of the head toward a rider’s lane of the market’s entrance, a doorway that shimmered with heat and a scent that wasn’t wholly human—sugar, smoke, and something sharper, like metal binding to melon. The market’s gate came into view, a barrier of ironwork that looked as ordinary as a door but felt like something else entirely, something that could open only to the touch of truth. A seal hung in the air above it, a pale filament that hinted at a rule you could not break, a law of a place that existed beneath the law of the surface. The token wasn’t in Tomás’s pocket yet, not if he’d used it already tonight to slip through a different door. If he had, the gate would bow to him the way a flower yields before rain. “Move,” Tomás whispered, the line between them cool as a rain-washed blade. Harlow stepped closer, the warehouse-light glow catching on the edge of her jaw. The rain found her again in a new way, tapping at the laminar curl of hair that had grown too long for the guard’s strict rules, a small rebellion against the uniform she wore so well. Her hand rested near the empty holster at her hip, a habit formed from years of watching doors and ears for the kinds of noises that told her something had to be decided in a single breath. “Why tonight?” she asked, not in accusation but as a practical examination. “Why the tunnel, why the market, why the token?” Tomás’s voice softened, a tone that did not apologize but carried a tired candor. “Because the clique you’re chasing doesn’t listen to numbers or paperwork. They listen to people who can move without being seen. The market is where those people go to decide what happens next.” “And you’re not one of them,” she said, not as a challenge but as a fact she could prove. The words weren’t a claim so much as a test, a line in the rain that would either stand or wash away. Tomás offered a rueful smile, a hint of the old warmth that had seeped from him when he’d once touched the lives of others, when his hands had steadied a patient’s breath or steadied his own nerves after a call that wouldn’t leave him. “I’m not the one you want to arrest tonight,” he said, and it wasn’t defiance so much as a plea that she understand the stakes. “I’m the one who tries to keep people alive long enough to face the consequences.” Harlow’s breath came out in a short, controlled plume. She studied the token he hadn’t shown yet, the plate of the gate’s threshold, the way the corridor’s heat seemed to pool at the entrance. The decision wasn’t a single act but a moment where every path railed into a single, loud choice. “Show me why you belong in a cell,” she replied, voice steady as a line she’d drawn in the rain and was not about to erase. Tomás paused, then reached into the pocket of his coat, fingers brushing the edges of something smooth and bone-white. He pulled out a small token that looked more like a fragment of bone carved into a seal, the kind of thing you kept hidden in your palm and trusted no one to see. The bone token. The mechanism for entry into the Veil Market. The moment hung like a breath held too long. Harlow watched him lift his hand, saw the token catch a glint of the market’s heat, tasted the faint copper of fear and resolve in the air. The gate behind him—the Veil Market’s gate—seemed to pulse, as if recognizing the token’s presence, as if granting permission to cross into a realm that did not owe anyone an explanation. The rain slowed, then stopped as if a curtain had fallen over the night. The city’s noise drifted to a distant murmur. The tunnel’s air grew warmer and thick as if something else moved out there, something that did not share the surface world’s rules or speed. Harlow’s gaze shifted to the end of the tunnel, where a doorway waited, and beyond that doorway, a market that breathed differently. “Your choice,” Tomás said softly, the line between them narrowing to the width of a breath. “Tonight, you step into the old city’s heartbeat, or you turn away and pretend you never heard the sound at all.” Her jaw tightened, a familiar ache of decision. The weight of eighteen years pressed against her spine—cases that had twisted her sense of right and wrong, the partner she’d lost, the blanks that haunted her sleep whenever the world felt too quiet. She could stay above, keep chasing a phantom called justice, or she could descend into a place where rules bent, where fear wore a skin you could trade for safety if you knew the right people. Her eyes found Tomás’s scarred forearm in the dim light, the way the skin pulled taut along the line of scar tissue as he shifted his weight, the Saint Christopher medallion catching a stray beam of light and reminding her that some beliefs had their own stubborn gravity. She wasn’t sure which choice would save her future more, which choice would keep her from becoming something she didn’t want to admit she could become. But the gate, with its bone-token seal, loomed ahead like a verdict written in iron. The Nest’s doorframe hummed with electricity from the rainstorm’s still-born energy, and the green neon outside whispered through the doorway, a last attempt by the surface to hold onto its illusion of control. Harlow stepped forward, toward the token’s glow, toward the hidden passage that promised danger and answers in equal measure. Her breath steadied, and she looked into Tomás’s eyes, held there by the narrow beam of light that fell across his features. A memory of a case, of a choice, flashed across her mind—something she hadn’t allowed herself to revisit in years. Then she looked away, back toward the token, toward the threshold that would take her into a subterranean realm where the law didn’t always apply, where mercy and rage could walk side by side. She did not speak. She did not plead. She acted. The line between decision and action blurred as she stepped closer to the bone token and the gate’s hinge, closer to a door that led to a market where the world below traded in the kinds of truths people kept secret above ground. The moment she reached for the token’s edge, a choice solidified in her chest: she would follow, not out of curiosity or bravado alone, but because the night had thrown a gauntlet at her feet, and she would not walk away from it. The door’s iron bars, etched with symbols she did not recognize, seemed to quiver at her approach. Tomás’s heartbeat—measured, careful—beat through the air as if her decision would alter the rhythm of his life too. The token flashed once, twice, and then, for a heartbeat, it seemed the entire city listened. And then she spoke to the room, to the tunnel, to the market beyond. “Move,” she said, the single word carrying the weight of a decision already made. She stepped forward, not into certainty but into willingness, a willingness to walk through fear if it meant stopping what lay at the market’s heart from thriving on whatever darkness had fed it tonight. The underground awaited. The rainless air hummed with the pulse of a new, dangerous routine, a place where the clink of coins, the murmur of whispered deals, and the soft scrape of a shelf turning to reveal a hidden back room—the hidden back room of The Raven’s Nest—could become a doorway to the Veil Market’s unpredictable, shifting labyrinth. Quinn moved into the glow with the breath of the city at her back and the weight of the bone token warm in her palm, deciding, not for victory or punishment alone, but for the possibility that truth could still be found in the places people forgot to look. The passage closed softly behind her, and the tunnel’s air tasted metallic and old. The decision had been made, and now the night would answer for it.
created_at"2026-02-19T12:34:19.23Z" 2/19/2026, 12:34:19 PM
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cancelledfalse
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generation_time69338
tokens_prompt1140
tokens_completion5917
native_tokens_prompt984
native_tokens_completion9050
native_tokens_completion_images0
native_tokens_reasoning5184
native_tokens_cached0
num_media_prompt(null)
num_input_audio_prompt(null)
num_media_completion0
num_search_results(null)
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is_byokfalse
finish_reason"stop"
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provider_responses
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
33.33% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"she whispered more [more]"
1"she finally said [finally]"
2"Tomás said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences25
tagDensity0.72
leniency1
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.167
93.72% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3183
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"lightly"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count2
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"lightly"
2"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
51.30% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3183
totalAiIsms31
found
0
word"weight"
count6
1
word"etched"
count2
2
word"warmth"
count3
3
word"pulse"
count3
4
word"flickered"
count2
5
word"whisper"
count2
6
word"echo"
count2
7
word"familiar"
count2
8
word"clandestine"
count1
9
word"could feel"
count1
10
word"tension"
count1
11
word"shimmered"
count1
12
word"glint"
count1
13
word"resolve"
count1
14
word"sense of"
count1
15
word"loomed"
count1
16
word"measured"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"etched"
2"warmth"
3"pulse"
4"flickered"
5"whisper"
6"echo"
7"familiar"
8"clandestine"
9"could feel"
10"tension"
11"shimmered"
12"glint"
13"resolve"
14"sense of"
15"loomed"
16"measured"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences131
matches(empty)
55.62% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount6
narrationSentences131
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"see"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"seemed to"
2"try to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences138
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen57
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3160
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions31
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions66
wordCount2965
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.74
worstName"Tomás"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Tomás"
discoveredNames
Harlow11
Quinn6
Tomás22
Herrera1
Saint3
Christopher3
Raven3
Nest5
Soho1
Veil5
Market5
Camden1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Tomás"
3"Herrera"
4"Saint"
5"Christopher"
6"Raven"
7"Nest"
8"Market"
places
0"Soho"
1"Veil"
globalScore1
windowScore1
28.05% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences123
glossingSentenceCount6
matches
0"looked like it had learned to bleed in th"
1"tasted like copper and something clinical"
2"felt like the mind of someone who knew"
3"rhythm that seemed to ride the rain’s tempo as she followed the echo of that voice"
4"felt like something else entirely, some"
5"as if recognizing the token’s presence, as if granting permission to cross into a realm that did not owe anyone an explanation"
6"as if granting permission to cross into a realm that did not owe anyone an explanation"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches8
per1kWords2.532
wordCount3160
matches
0"not a street corner or a police stairwell but a corridor built for things"
1"not out of fear but calculation"
2"not in accusation but as a practical examination"
3"not one of them,” she said, not as a challenge but as a fact she could prove"
4"not as a challenge but as a fact she could prove"
5"not out of curiosity or bravado alone, but because the night had thrown a gauntlet at her feet"
6"not into certainty but into willingness, a willingness to walk through fear if it m"
7"not for victory or punishment alone, but for the possibility"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences138
matches(empty)
98.15% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs53
mean59.62
std29.43
cv0.494
sampleLengths
098
188
278
389
4113
578
612
742
864
958
1081
11114
1276
1348
1434
1560
1619
1735
1846
1964
20101
21101
2241
2333
2467
2596
2618
2760
28102
2912
3086
3121
3247
3341
3484
3552
3626
3764
3867
3969
4037
4178
4289
4352
4476
4510
4686
4751
4814
4914
94.55% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences131
matches
0"been trained"
1"being kept"
2"been carved"
3"been made"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs468
matches
0"wasn’t running"
1"wasn’t asking"
2"were seeking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences14
totalSentences138
ratio0.101
matches
0"Short curly dark brown hair glinted with rain; olive skin darkened under a thin film of rain; there was a scar running along his left forearm that looked like it had learned to bleed in the wrong directions."
1"He turned a corner where the green glow of a sign peeked from above a doorway—The Raven’s Nest, Soho’s dim throat of a place people chose when they needed a story more than a drink."
2"Tomás slipped inside, leaving a smear of rain on the glass and a whisper of a breath that tasted like copper and something clinical—assurances he’d packaged up years ago and tried to forget."
3"The back room’s door wasn’t in clear sight, but a bookshelf near a brick wall looked almost ordinary—until it didn’t."
4"It wasn’t spoken aloud by Harlow; it was a rhythm that seemed to ride the rain’s tempo as she followed the echo of that voice."
5"The line wasn’t a question; it was a map drawn in the air, a route someone would have to walk if they wanted to stay out of trouble."
6"The scent of something medicinal and clandestine drifted toward Quinn and traveled through her, tugging at the corners of her mind—memories of cases that hadn’t turned out cleanly, cases that teased at nerves she didn’t admit to fearing."
7"The bone token Tomás held in his pocket—if he held it at all—would be the only reason to pass the gate that barred entry to that hidden place beneath Camden."
8"He didn’t answer with words so much as a small, almost shy tilt of the head toward a rider’s lane of the market’s entrance, a doorway that shimmered with heat and a scent that wasn’t wholly human—sugar, smoke, and something sharper, like metal binding to melon."
9"The gate behind him—the Veil Market’s gate—seemed to pulse, as if recognizing the token’s presence, as if granting permission to cross into a realm that did not owe anyone an explanation."
10"The weight of eighteen years pressed against her spine—cases that had twisted her sense of right and wrong, the partner she’d lost, the blanks that haunted her sleep whenever the world felt too quiet."
11"A memory of a case, of a choice, flashed across her mind—something she hadn’t allowed herself to revisit in years."
12"Tomás’s heartbeat—measured, careful—beat through the air as if her decision would alter the rhythm of his life too."
13"The rainless air hummed with the pulse of a new, dangerous routine, a place where the clink of coins, the murmur of whispered deals, and the soft scrape of a shelf turning to reveal a hidden back room—the hidden back room of The Raven’s Nest—could become a doorway to the Veil Market’s unpredictable, shifting labyrinth."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount684
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount15
adverbRatio0.021929824561403508
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0029239766081871343
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences138
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences138
mean22.9
std11.57
cv0.505
sampleLengths
014
117
242
325
422
52
638
726
816
935
1027
113
1229
1316
1425
1516
1614
1733
1816
1950
2019
2139
2220
2312
2417
2525
268
2727
2829
2922
3036
3114
3228
3339
3428
3524
3624
3738
3821
3929
4026
4114
4224
4310
4434
455
4613
4742
4813
496
34.78% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats21
diversityRatio0.2318840579710145
totalSentences138
uniqueOpeners32
25.84% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences129
matches
0"Then she looked away, back"
ratio0.008
83.57% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount44
totalSentences129
matches
0"Her breath etched fog in"
1"He turned a corner where"
2"It flickered, steadied, and caught"
3"She pressed into the doorway"
4"It wasn’t spoken aloud by"
5"She believed in training, in"
6"Her own voice came out"
7"His right hand hovered near"
8"she said, and her jaw"
9"She kept her pace even,"
10"He pressed his palm to"
11"she whispered more to herself"
12"She could feel it in"
13"His voice rose, softer now,"
14"Her presence filled the space,"
15"Her mouth pressed into a"
16"she returned, the words clipped,"
17"His tone shifted from defiance"
18"He stepped deeper into the"
19"It sold certainty, too, perhaps,"
ratio0.341
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount121
totalSentences129
matches
0"A slick glow crawled along"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn moved through"
2"Her breath etched fog in"
3"The voice came from the"
4"A Saint Christopher medallion hung"
5"Tomás wasn’t running so much"
6"He turned a corner where"
7"The place had a reputation"
8"Harlow didn’t slow."
9"The tapping of her heel"
10"The Nest’s green neon buzzed,"
11"It flickered, steadied, and caught"
12"Rain rolled off the metal"
13"The back door of The"
14"Tomás slipped inside, leaving a"
15"Harlow moved in after him,"
16"She pressed into the doorway"
17"A pair of customers drifted"
18"Tomás paused at the edge"
19"The back room’s door wasn’t"
ratio0.938
38.76% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences129
matches
0"If he had, the gate"
ratio0.008
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences98
technicalSentenceCount27
matches
0"Short curly dark brown hair glinted with rain; olive skin darkened under a thin film of rain; there was a scar running along his left forearm that looked like i…"
1"A Saint Christopher medallion hung at his chest, catching a stray beam of light and winking as if it could shield him from what he’d started."
2"The place had a reputation for quiet deals and louder ambitions, the kind of gravity that pulled a person to secrets faster than to a bar’s warmth."
3"The tapping of her heel against the pavement clacked in time with her pulse, a metronome that told her this was the kind of night that asked for precision."
4"Tomás slipped inside, leaving a smear of rain on the glass and a whisper of a breath that tasted like copper and something clinical—assurances he’d packaged up …"
5"She pressed into the doorway and let the scene widen: the bar’s interior was a red-curtained lung, the quiet thud of a jukebox somewhere in the distance, and th…"
6"Tomás paused at the edge of the room, voice low, eyes lifting toward a shelf lined with mirrors and old photographs, a hidden corner of the place that always fe…"
7"Her own voice came out as a quiet surety, the sort of sound that made it clear she wasn’t asking questions so much as forcing answers to show themselves."
8"His right hand hovered near the bag at his hip, as if a bag could hold the answers the police were seeking, as if the bag itself could confess to the sins that …"
9"A narrow passage opened, and the dimness beyond swelled with the sour hum of conditioned air, a draft that tasted of copper and rain."
10"The scent of something medicinal and clandestine drifted toward Quinn and traveled through her, tugging at the corners of her mind—memories of cases that hadn’t…"
11"The Veil Market’s rumor pressed at the back of Quinn’s skull like a pressure plate: it moved every full moon, a market that appeared only when the city’s clock …"
12"The market sold enchanted goods, alchemical substances, information that wasn’t meant for headliners or politicians or cops."
13"Faint gaslights flickered along the walls, giving the space a suspended feeling, as if gravity had decided to take a nap for a moment too long."
14"The Veil Market lay beyond a gate that asked for a token, and beyond that gate lay decisions that didn’t care about what a detective believed was right."
15"She studied Tomás’s profile, the way the Saint Christopher medallion swung with his steps, catching the light and then dispersing it as if it didn’t want to be …"
16"He didn’t answer with words so much as a small, almost shy tilt of the head toward a rider’s lane of the market’s entrance, a doorway that shimmered with heat a…"
17"The market’s gate came into view, a barrier of ironwork that looked as ordinary as a door but felt like something else entirely, something that could open only …"
18"The rain found her again in a new way, tapping at the laminar curl of hair that had grown too long for the guard’s strict rules, a small rebellion against the u…"
19"Her hand rested near the empty holster at her hip, a habit formed from years of watching doors and ears for the kinds of noises that told her something had to b…"
20"Tomás offered a rueful smile, a hint of the old warmth that had seeped from him when he’d once touched the lives of others, when his hands had steadied a patien…"
21"He pulled out a small token that looked more like a fragment of bone carved into a seal, the kind of thing you kept hidden in your palm and trusted no one to se…"
22"The gate behind him—the Veil Market’s gate—seemed to pulse, as if recognizing the token’s presence, as if granting permission to cross into a realm that did not…"
23"The tunnel’s air grew warmer and thick as if something else moved out there, something that did not share the surface world’s rules or speed."
24"Her breath steadied, and she looked into Tomás’s eyes, held there by the narrow beam of light that fell across his features."
25"The line between decision and action blurred as she stepped closer to the bone token and the gate’s hinge, closer to a door that led to a market where the world…"
26"Tomás’s heartbeat—measured, careful—beat through the air as if her decision would alter the rhythm of his life too."
41.67% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"she returned, the words clipped, no-nonsense"
1"rain clung, as if the city itself whispered,"
2"he said, as if music could be tuned to a more honest truth,"
30.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Tomás repeated (repeat)"
1"she whispered more (whisper)"
2"Tomás whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences25
tagDensity0.48
leniency0.96
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.24
66.9779%