Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTYA62FC0PMVFVGEN65G76S

Run Details

Duration:
1m 31s
Cost:
$0.004107
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Night pressed over Richmond Park like a damp shawl, and beyond the fringe of trees lay The Fae Grove, a hidden place that wore night differently. The boundary stones—the ancient oaks that had learned to listen—stood in a ragged arc, their roots gripping the earth as if to keep a secret from crawling out into the world. Wildflowers bloomed in steady hush, white and pale as porcelain, trapped in perpetual dusk. The air smelled of rain and something old, a memory of pollen and midnight, and the faint, coppery edge of something not quite right. I came here for the pendant. "I came here for the pendant." The words rose from the throat as a single, stubborn note, and the night did not swallow them. The Heartstone hung at her throat, crimson and patient, a rough-cut gem that hummed with warmth against the silver chain. It pulsed softly, like a heartbeat pressed into stone, and for a moment Rory felt the world tilt toward it—toward something she had chosen to carry, or to bear. The scar on her left wrist prickled, a crescent-shaped memory in ink and skin, and she pressed her wrist against the fabric to hide the motion from anyone who might be watching. The grove did not welcome visitors with a shout or a flare of light. It welcomed with silence pressed tight against the ears, as if the night had learned to stop listening for a moment so the wrong thing could slip through. A branch rustled, or so she told herself, and the rustle came again, closer, though the branches did not move. The time inside the grove had a way of bending, and Rory remembered Eva’s warnings about the place: inside, an hour could become minutes or days outside, depending on the mood of the trees and the strangers who wandered in with a date with destiny or danger. Show me what you want, she thought, though no one asked for permission to exist here, not even the wind. The first sound was not a sound so much as a sensation—the curious, exhale-like sigh that slid along the skin at the back of her neck. The kind of breath you felt more than heard, a whispering that scraped along the nerves with a velvet touch. Rory didn’t flinch, not yet. She stood between two standing stones and watched the glimmer along the pendant deepen, as if a tiny flame had found a new wick. The wildflowers along the path trembled in a way that suggested fear or delight, or perhaps both, and the petals bumped against one another as though sharing a secret they shouldn’t. I’ve got you, she whispered inwardly, though of course there was no one to whisper back. The grove kept its own counsel, and the counsel did not like interruptions. Show me where this goes. The phrase cut the still air, and the trees seemed to lean closer, listening, as if the grove had finally decided to weigh in on the matter of her entrance. Moonlight fractured through the branches in abrupt, jagged shards, and a shadow crawled along the edge of her vision—just at the corner of sight, where things went to hide if they did not want to be noticed. The Heartstone’s glow intensified for a heartbeat, a soft, living ember that warmed the skin just above the collarbone where the pendant lay. The warmth was not a comfort so much as a dare. The wrongness began in the periphery: a rustle that did not belong to any known creature, a footfall that did not align with the spacing of branches and leaves, a shape that did not quite conform to the world Rory had learned to measure with her eyes. Not alone, a voice said, not aloud but not quiet enough to be a trick of the wind. The speaker did not name itself, and Rory did not pretend she hadn’t heard. The grove spoke in the way a door speaks when it’s asked for entry, a slow, patient creak that hints at locks you never meant to touch. "I came for the pendant," Rory said aloud, because saying the truth aloud sometimes kept fear from walking in through the mouth. The words sounded steadier than she felt inside her chest. The pendant trembled against her skin, a thin, anxious pulse, and the glow deepened as if answering a long-forgotten call. The stones behind her remained motionless, but the air shifted—the way heat does when a train crawls past in the night and carries with it a draft you feel in your bones. The grove did not reveal its secrets all at once; it preferred the slow burn, a creeping sensation that a thing was watching you back even when there was nothing there but trees and shadows and the memory of footsteps that never quite belonged to any human. The boundary stones were supposed to mark a boundary, and Rory felt those boundaries fray, as if the grove insisted on knowing whether she belonged to this place or only passed through, like a gust of wind across a field. The flowers’ scent sharpened, turning from sweet to almost metallic, and a distant bell-like note echoed through the trees, far away yet close enough to feel like a bruise on the ear. I’m not here to steal, she told the air, not for a bargain or a threat. I’m here to— to what? To understand, maybe, or to hold something against the dark long enough to see what stares back. The whispering in the undergrowth grew bolder, a chorus of leaves brushing against leaves in a conversation Rory could not follow. The grove had a language all its own, and she stood in the middle of it, listening for a syllable she could pronounce, a phrase that would let her step back from the boundary she was approaching with the pendant held close. The Heartstone’s pulse synchronized with her breath, and the rhythm told a story she could not read from memory: a history of places where the earth had buckled to keep something from crossing, a history of bargains struck between soil and shadow, a history in which the one who carried the pendant carried not a choice but a debt. Show me what you want, she repeated, though it felt more like an invitation extended to a stranger than a demand. The grove did not answer with a word, but a change in the air: the hush between the trees thickened, and the edges of her vision began to misalign with reality, as if the scene had been painted on a canvas that kept nudging its own border. The time inside the grove began to flex again, as if the clock on the outer world wore a heavy boot and the inner clock wore a thin, wary smile. An hour could pass here and a minute there, and the thought of outside life—work, meals, texts—slipped from her memory like a thread pulled loose from a garment. The Heartstone warmed more insistently, and the color of the gem darkened to a deeper crimson, as if the inside of the stone contained a place where light never reached. Not alone, the night seemed to murmur, softer than the first breath, and Rory’s eyes traced the line where the wildflowers met the shadow under the nearest standing stone. The edge of vision snagged on something—the suggestion of a silhouette that wasn’t a tree, wasn’t a person, wasn’t a trick of light. It sat at the limit between sight and not-sight, and every time she tried to fix it, it slid away, dissolving into the crops of darkness that grew along the bark and the moss. I didn’t come for a game, she thought, and then, because it felt safer to address the thing that might be listening, I came for a boundary. If there was a boundary that could hold something back, I wanted to stand on it. "Thank you," a breath seemed to say, as if the grove heard the thanks and decided to answer with a test. I don’t owe you thanks, she thought back, but she did owe something—the truth, perhaps. The truth was simple: she had wandered into the grove with a pendant that did not belong to her, worn by a benefactor she had never seen. The pendant’s warmth was a map, a map to something she could not yet name. The truth was a knot at the base of her throat, tugging, tugging. Show me your boundary, she whispered to the dark, to the space where the world thinned and the other side pressed in. A new sound came then, a soft, creaking exhale that came from the oak stones themselves. The sound traveled along the air, a sound you felt rather than heard, like a door toppling just enough to let the faint scent of rain escape. The roar of the city seemed a distant memory, replaced by the scent of damp leaves and the taste of old rain on the tongue. The boundary stones—those ancient trees pretending to forget their age—were supposed to keep things out. But Rory was learning that boundaries could be negotiated, even by those who preferred to pretend they didn’t exist. The grove’s silence held its breath, waiting for a response that did not come in words but in a change in the glow of the Heartstone. The gem’s crimson deepened, then dulled, then flared again with a pulse that wasn’t hers. The wrongness did not arrive as a storm; it arrived as a patient, persistent insinuation—the sense that the grove had been watching from the very beginning, that it had watched everyone come and go and kept the stories of all those who crossed its threshold in a hidden ledger only the stones could read. The ledger’s pages whispered across the bark when the wind hit the right angle, and Rory began to hear not a single voice but many, speaking in a chorus that did not care for order or clarity. Show me, she whispered inside her own mind, and the words did not need to be spoken aloud to carry the weight of intent. The grove heard. The Heartstone answered. The atmosphere shifted again, not with loud noise but with an almost tactile pressure—the kind you felt in the bones when a door you did not know existed nudges between you and the world you thought you understood. The wildflowers around her leaned closer, their petals opening as if to catch a scent that wasn’t theirs to possess. The air grew thicker, and the boundary stones—ancient oak standing stones—seemed to lean in as if listening to a private whisper between two conspirators. The grove’s time stretched, then snapped back, and Rory found herself counting in her head, a stubborn clock insisting on its own rhythm, a rhythm that did not match the watch she wore or the phone she had left back in the flat above Silas’ bar. I am not what you want to trap, she told the night, though the line sounded braver than she felt. The pendant’s glow steadied, a vigilant ember against her sternum. The scar on her wrist prickled again, a reminder of past bargains made in places not meant for memory, of consequences that followed bodies like moths to a flame. Move out of the corner of my eye, a voice whispered, or move into it. The words did not rhyme and did not form a sentence she could translate, but they carried a certainty, the certainty that something watched her move, and that whatever watched wanted more than a glimpse. “I’ve come here to close the door,” Rory said, though she knew the grove didn’t deal in doors and hinges but in thresholds—the kind you crossed only if it chose to let you cross. The sentence felt heavy, like a stone dropped in water, sending ripples through the air, through the ground, through the breath in her lungs. The grove did not respond with a name or a laugh. It offered, instead, a corridor of shadow that stretched between two bark-covered trunks, a corridor that curved away toward the far edge of the clearing where the smallest flowers pressed against the dirt as if begging to understand something they shouldn’t. A single blade of grass moved in that corridor without a breeze, and Rory watched with a quiet, stubborn focus, as if patience could coax a confession from a plant. The Heartstone glowed with a warmer light, not bright, but insistently present, and Rory realized that the pendant’s warmth was not simply a sensor—it was a beacon. A beacon toward something she would later understand if she survived the night, if she found the nerve to walk further into the space where the world thinned and began anew. Show me where this ends, she breathed, not aloud, not a challenge but a question, and she allowed her voice to drift into the space between the trees, where the fog thickened and the light refused to be pinned down. A branch cracked somewhere off to the left, not loudly but with a certainty that suggested a doorway opening somewhere behind the trees, a doorway that had waited long enough for someone to ask a question worth answering. The crude sound of wood against wood, followed by a slower, more careful rustle, told Rory that something else might be listening—something with a patience that rivaled the grove’s own, something that preferred to watch a person’s resolve wane before presenting its face. I came for answers, not surrender, she warned into the dark, though the words returned like echoes in a stone corridor: the grove did not bend to human boasts, it only measured them against the old ledger. I will stand here, then, until the ledger speaks, if it wants to talk to me at all. The words hung in the air, and for a long minute the grove held its breath as if waiting for the old oak to cough up the next syllable. Then the boundary itself shifted, not violently, but with a careful, almost affectionate pressure, as though the land beneath Rory’s boots had decided to test her hull, to see whether she would buckle or endure. The Heartstone’s glow steadied again, the crimson gem flickering, a small star trapped beneath glass. The grove exhaled, a long, slow breath through the branches, and the world tilted just enough for Rory to glimpse a shape at the far edge of the clearing. It was not a person; it was not an animal; it was a movement, a thing made of shadows and leaf-smoke, something that allowed itself to be seen only when the eye trusted what it did not understand. The thing did not walk, exactly. It glided along the ground, over roots and through grasses, as if it were a hole in the night that had learned to pretend to be a creature. The sight did not last, but the impression stayed, etched into the retinas. The grove remained quiet again, but Rory felt the air tighten, the way a string tightens when a note is about to be played. The wrongness had an outline now, a shape that boxed the space around her, the way a fugitive can see the walls closing in of a room they cannot leave. The scent of rain redoubled, and the petals along the path turned from their usual pale whiteness to something richer, more vital, almost suffocated in beauty. You came for a boundary, whispered the night into her ear, a voice that seemed to travel along the bones, not along the air. You will leave by that boundary if you choose to cross, but you must decide what you carry with you when you go. The invitation was not loud; it was a patient ache, a thing that had waited years for a traveler who could listen. The pendant’s weight settled into her chest as if a small door had clicked shut somewhere inside her. The warmth grew—they might call it fear or courage, or a blend of both—until it felt like the pendant was not merely a spy on her skin but a living compass, guiding her toward whatever lay beyond this hazy line of light and shadow. Show me your boundary, Rory thought again, not to command but to learn. The grove did not answer with a voice in the wind. It answered with a change in the air: a shift that pressed the skin with cold, followed by a warmer draft that traveled from the direction of the stones toward her heart. The place marked by the oak standing stones did not merely guard a path; it offered a choice, and Rory’s choice was to wait, to listen, to watch the glow of the Heartstone pulse with a careful patient rhythm. Time stretched, then snapped back, and the world outside felt suddenly far away—the city lights of London, the hum of the restaurant kitchens, the constant, stubborn ache of a day’s weariness all reduced to a small, distant echo. In here, the grove chose rhythm and you either kept pace or fell out of step. The petals around the path pressed closer, as if to provide a soft audience to the moment when a person would either step into the unknown or retreat to the known. I did not come all this way to retreat, she told the night without saying it aloud, though the sound of her own voice, when it emerged in breath, didn’t quite reach the edge of the clearing. The Heartstone breathed with her. The wrongness breathed back, a lullaby that wasn’t one. A second shape appeared, not in full form but in the way a shadow becomes a person only when caught by a beam of light. It did not walk, but it moved, the way a memory slides forward when you’re not ready for it—subtle, almost like a whisper that had learned to pose as a figure. It hovered at the very edge of what Rory could call sight, and she could feel the hairs on the back of her neck lift themselves as if they’d been coaxed by a ghost string into a state of alert. The wrongness grew from something long-sleeping, something fed by waiting and watching and years of crossing thresholds. It wanted the Heartstone, she suspected, or perhaps something she carried more quietly—a truth about who she was, where she came from, and what, if anything, she would become when pushed into a boundary she hadn’t chosen to cross. I will not be afraid, she thought, a stubborn line inside her that refused to break even as a seed of fear took root and started to bloom. The pendant’s glow grew stronger, a beacon, a map, a promise that whatever lay beyond this grove would need more than bravado to face. The night pressed closer, and in the distance beyond the nearest standing stone, a single child’s laugh rang out—not cruel or mocking, but unreal, as if borrowed from a dream just before you woke. It moved through the space, tangled with the scent of rain and wildflowers, then faded, leaving a hollow echo that seemed to come from everywhere at once and nowhere at all. And then the wrongness changed again, not into something terrible but into something patient, waiting for a moment when Rory would stop listening and begin acting. The grove did not demand a price; it offered a choice. The Heartstone pulsed, steady now, and a path that hadn’t existed before in the core of her perception opened a slit of light between two stones, the faintest whisper of a corridor that could have a hinge, could have a doorway, could have a moment of truth. "I came here for the pendant," Rory said, almost to herself, and the line was true enough to feel heavier than a falsehood could ever feel. The grove did not interrupt with laughter or a scream; it leaned closer, listening, waiting, and in the silence there was a wordless acknowledgment: she was not alone, not entirely, not forever, and the boundary was listening. The Heartstone’s glow shifted to a cooler red, a color suggestive of ember-cooled glass. The corridor of light widened by a fraction, just enough for a step to become possible, just enough to reveal that the path was there at all. If she stepped through, she might cross into a memory of the grove long thought to be a myth; if she remained, the night would press harder until the wrongness found another way in. In that moment Rory understood what Eva had meant by bargaining with night: you could ask for something, you could bargain for safety, but the night would always require a price, and the price often looked like yourself, given over in a form you would only recognize after the fact. The pendant warmed again, warmer than before, and the boundary between the earth and the other world thinned like coloring that had not yet dried on a page. The choice hovered, not a scream but a breath that refused to break. Rory felt the hair on her arms rise as if summoned by a distant finger, and in the next instant, she simply chose. She did not leap or stumble; she walked forward, a careful, unhurried step into the faint corridor of light the stones were offering, into the space where time braided and refused to lie still, into the unknown that the Heartstone had long prepared her for. The moment she crossed the threshold, the grove exhaled as if relieved that a traveler had finally chosen to stay, and the night settled around her again, denser, more intimate, more true. The wall of the grove—air, shadow, history, all of it—folded closed behind her, and she found herself not in a place of escape but of witness. The Heartstone welcomed the new chamber, and the cold edge of fear softened into a quiet resolve she hadn’t known she possessed. She did not know what waited beyond the corridor, but she knew this much: the wrongness did not vanish, it merely adjusted to the new position of her body, the pulse of the pendant against her skin, the boundary’s new mercy or new demand. The grove remained forever quiet, but now it listened with a patient, almost satisfied stillness, as if it had finally found a listener who would stay long enough to hear the rest of its story. And Rory walked on, the Heartstone beating in time with her steps, a quiet vow wrapped around her throat like the silver chain. She did not hurry. She did not break. She walked deeper into the night and deeper into the place where the world softened and the edges grew sharp as glass, until the grove itself—Isolde’s grove, the hidden clearing between Earth and the Fae realm—began to hold its breath for a moment longer, waiting to see who would emerge from its dusk with a decision intact. The night did not end. The grove did not release its secret. The Heartstone hummed a low warmth, and Rory moved, a single figure in a world that refused to stay still. The edge of vision settled again, a familiar glow flickering at the corner of the eye, and the boundary stones stood with their quiet, patient testimony: the wrongness was real, and so was she. Neither would vanish that night. Neither would be defeated by silence or fear. They would simply endure, and face whatever came when the corridor’s light finally chose to fade or to widen again.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Rory said aloud [aloud]"
1"The grove’s time stretched then [then]"
dialogueSentences5
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.333
94.98% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3985
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count2
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"very"
2"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
42.28% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3985
totalAiIsms46
found
0
word"porcelain"
count1
1
word"warmth"
count6
2
word"pulsed"
count2
3
word"silence"
count4
4
word"velvet"
count1
5
word"trembled"
count2
6
word"whisper"
count4
7
word"fractured"
count1
8
word"footfall"
count1
9
word"pulse"
count5
10
word"footsteps"
count1
11
word"echoed"
count1
12
word"synchronized"
count1
13
word"traced"
count1
14
word"weight"
count2
15
word"reminder"
count1
16
word"beacon"
count3
17
word"resolve"
count2
18
word"echoes"
count1
19
word"measured"
count1
20
word"etched"
count1
21
word"echo"
count2
22
word"could feel"
count1
23
word"familiar"
count1
highlights
0"porcelain"
1"warmth"
2"pulsed"
3"silence"
4"velvet"
5"trembled"
6"whisper"
7"fractured"
8"footfall"
9"pulse"
10"footsteps"
11"echoed"
12"synchronized"
13"traced"
14"weight"
15"reminder"
16"beacon"
17"resolve"
18"echoes"
19"measured"
20"etched"
21"echo"
22"could feel"
23"familiar"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences156
matches
0"d with warmth"
5.49% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount14
narrationSentences156
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tended to"
2"began to"
3"tried to"
4"tend to"
5"started to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences156
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen59
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3949
ratio0
matches(empty)
70.65% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions23
unquotedAttributions5
matches
0"Show me your boundary, she whispered to the dark, to the space where the world thinned and the other side pressed in."
1"Show me, she whispered inside her own mind, and the words did not need to be spoken aloud to carry the weight of intent."
2"I am not what you want to trap, she told the night, though the line sounded braver than she felt."
3"Show me where this ends, she breathed, not aloud, not a challenge but a question, and she allowed her voice to drift int…"
4"I came for answers, not surrender, she warned into the dark, though the words returned like echoes in a stone corridor: …"
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions62
wordCount3890
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity0.72
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Heartstone"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Fae2
Grove1
Heartstone17
Rory28
Eva2
London1
Isolde1
Earth1
Show7
persons
0"Grove"
1"Heartstone"
2"Rory"
3"Eva"
4"Isolde"
5"Earth"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Fae"
3"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences145
glossingSentenceCount12
matches
0"not quite right"
1"as though sharing a secret they shouldn’t"
2"not quite conform to the world Rory had learned to measure with her eyes"
3"as if answering a long-forgotten call"
4"as if listening to a private whisper between two conspirators"
5"as if begging to understand something they shouldn’t"
6"as if waiting for the old oak to cough up the next syllable"
7"voice that seemed to travel along the bones, not along the air"
8"felt like the pendant was not merely a"
9"quite reach the edge of the clearing"
10"echo that seemed to come from everywhere at once and nowhere at all"
11"looked like yourself, given over in a for"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches19
per1kWords4.811
wordCount3949
matches
0"Not alone, a voice said, not aloud but not quiet enough to be a trick of the wind"
1"not aloud but not quiet enough to be a trick of the wind"
2"not a choice but a debt"
3"not a single voice but many, speaking in a chorus"
4"not with loud noise but with an almost tactile pressure"
5"not rhyme and did not form a sentence she could translate, but they carried a certainty, the certainty"
6"not bright, but insistently present"
7"not aloud, not a challenge but a question"
8"not a challenge but a question"
9"not loudly but with a certainty"
10"not violently, but with a careful, almost affectionate pressure, as though the"
11"not last, but the impression stayed, etched into the retinas"
12"not merely a spy on her skin but a living compass, guiding her toward whatever lay beyond thi"
13"not to command but to learn"
14"not in full form but in the way a shadow becomes a person only"
15"not cruel or mocking, but unreal, as if borrowed from a dream just before you woke"
16"not into something terrible but into something patient, waiting for a moment"
17"not a scream but a breath"
18"not in a place of escape but of witness"
59.83% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount5
totalSentences156
matches
0"learning that boundaries"
1"realized that the"
2"reveal that the"
3"relieved that a"
4"vanish that night"
74.86% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs60
mean65.82
std27.12
cv0.412
sampleLengths
095
16
224
381
4109
520
6106
729
85
967
1081
1159
1252
1379
1472
1538
1663
1759
1868
1988
2086
2143
2221
2370
2422
2568
2675
2791
2830
29128
3059
3150
3258
3382
3458
3540
3681
3737
3818
3964
40129
4180
4269
4362
4495
4585
4651
4796
4856
4952
94.02% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences156
matches
0"asked"
1"were supposed"
2"been painted"
3"were supposed"
4"been coaxed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs652
matches
0"was watching"
1"was approaching"
2"was learning"
3"was listening"
4"were offering"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount30
semicolonCount10
flaggedSentences31
totalSentences156
ratio0.199
matches
0"The boundary stones—the ancient oaks that had learned to listen—stood in a ragged arc, their roots gripping the earth as if to keep a secret from crawling out into the world."
1"It pulsed softly, like a heartbeat pressed into stone, and for a moment Rory felt the world tilt toward it—toward something she had chosen to carry, or to bear."
2"The first sound was not a sound so much as a sensation—the curious, exhale-like sigh that slid along the skin at the back of her neck."
3"Moonlight fractured through the branches in abrupt, jagged shards, and a shadow crawled along the edge of her vision—just at the corner of sight, where things went to hide if they did not want to be noticed."
4"The stones behind her remained motionless, but the air shifted—the way heat does when a train crawls past in the night and carries with it a draft you feel in your bones."
5"The grove did not reveal its secrets all at once; it preferred the slow burn, a creeping sensation that a thing was watching you back even when there was nothing there but trees and shadows and the memory of footsteps that never quite belonged to any human."
6"I’m here to— to what?"
7"An hour could pass here and a minute there, and the thought of outside life—work, meals, texts—slipped from her memory like a thread pulled loose from a garment."
8"The edge of vision snagged on something—the suggestion of a silhouette that wasn’t a tree, wasn’t a person, wasn’t a trick of light."
9"I don’t owe you thanks, she thought back, but she did owe something—the truth, perhaps."
10"The boundary stones—those ancient trees pretending to forget their age—were supposed to keep things out."
11"The wrongness did not arrive as a storm; it arrived as a patient, persistent insinuation—the sense that the grove had been watching from the very beginning, that it had watched everyone come and go and kept the stories of all those who crossed its threshold in a hidden ledger only the stones could read."
12"The atmosphere shifted again, not with loud noise but with an almost tactile pressure—the kind you felt in the bones when a door you did not know existed nudges between you and the world you thought you understood."
13"The air grew thicker, and the boundary stones—ancient oak standing stones—seemed to lean in as if listening to a private whisper between two conspirators."
14"“I’ve come here to close the door,” Rory said, though she knew the grove didn’t deal in doors and hinges but in thresholds—the kind you crossed only if it chose to let you cross."
15"The Heartstone glowed with a warmer light, not bright, but insistently present, and Rory realized that the pendant’s warmth was not simply a sensor—it was a beacon."
16"The crude sound of wood against wood, followed by a slower, more careful rustle, told Rory that something else might be listening—something with a patience that rivaled the grove’s own, something that preferred to watch a person’s resolve wane before presenting its face."
17"It was not a person; it was not an animal; it was a movement, a thing made of shadows and leaf-smoke, something that allowed itself to be seen only when the eye trusted what it did not understand."
18"The invitation was not loud; it was a patient ache, a thing that had waited years for a traveler who could listen."
19"The warmth grew—they might call it fear or courage, or a blend of both—until it felt like the pendant was not merely a spy on her skin but a living compass, guiding her toward whatever lay beyond this hazy line of light and shadow."
20"The place marked by the oak standing stones did not merely guard a path; it offered a choice, and Rory’s choice was to wait, to listen, to watch the glow of the Heartstone pulse with a careful patient rhythm."
21"Time stretched, then snapped back, and the world outside felt suddenly far away—the city lights of London, the hum of the restaurant kitchens, the constant, stubborn ache of a day’s weariness all reduced to a small, distant echo."
22"It did not walk, but it moved, the way a memory slides forward when you’re not ready for it—subtle, almost like a whisper that had learned to pose as a figure."
23"It wanted the Heartstone, she suspected, or perhaps something she carried more quietly—a truth about who she was, where she came from, and what, if anything, she would become when pushed into a boundary she hadn’t chosen to cross."
24"The night pressed closer, and in the distance beyond the nearest standing stone, a single child’s laugh rang out—not cruel or mocking, but unreal, as if borrowed from a dream just before you woke."
25"The grove did not demand a price; it offered a choice."
26"The grove did not interrupt with laughter or a scream; it leaned closer, listening, waiting, and in the silence there was a wordless acknowledgment: she was not alone, not entirely, not forever, and the boundary was listening."
27"If she stepped through, she might cross into a memory of the grove long thought to be a myth; if she remained, the night would press harder until the wrongness found another way in."
28"She did not leap or stumble; she walked forward, a careful, unhurried step into the faint corridor of light the stones were offering, into the space where time braided and refused to lie still, into the unknown that the Heartstone had long prepared her for."
29"The wall of the grove—air, shadow, history, all of it—folded closed behind her, and she found herself not in a place of escape but of witness."
30"She walked deeper into the night and deeper into the place where the world softened and the edges grew sharp as glass, until the grove itself—Isolde’s grove, the hidden clearing between Earth and the Fae realm—began to hold its breath for a moment longer, waiting to see who would emerge from its dusk with a decision intact."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount861
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount27
adverbRatio0.0313588850174216
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.005807200929152149
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences156
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences156
mean25.31
std11.96
cv0.473
sampleLengths
026
131
214
324
46
524
620
729
832
914
1028
1120
1247
1320
1426
1520
165
1724
1831
1916
2013
215
2230
2337
2423
2511
2647
2718
2814
2927
3022
3110
3220
3332
3447
3540
3632
3716
385
3917
4021
4142
4259
4321
4447
4530
4628
4730
4829
4923
25.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats52
diversityRatio0.15384615384615385
totalSentences156
uniqueOpeners24
21.51% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences155
matches
0"Then the boundary itself shifted,"
ratio0.006
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount31
totalSentences155
matches
0"I came here for the"
1"It pulsed softly, like a"
2"It welcomed with silence pressed"
3"She stood between two standing"
4"I’ve got you, she whispered"
5"I’m not here to steal,"
6"I’m here to— to what?"
7"It sat at the limit"
8"I didn’t come for a"
9"I don’t owe you thanks,"
10"I am not what you"
11"It offered, instead, a corridor"
12"I came for answers, not"
13"I will stand here, then,"
14"It was not a person;"
15"It glided along the ground,"
16"You came for a boundary,"
17"You will leave by that"
18"It answered with a change"
19"I did not come all"
ratio0.2
21.29% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount136
totalSentences155
matches
0"Night pressed over Richmond Park"
1"The boundary stones—the ancient oaks"
2"Wildflowers bloomed in steady hush,"
3"The air smelled of rain"
4"I came here for the"
5"The words rose from the"
6"The Heartstone hung at her"
7"It pulsed softly, like a"
8"The scar on her left"
9"The grove did not welcome"
10"It welcomed with silence pressed"
11"A branch rustled, or so"
12"The time inside the grove"
13"The first sound was not"
14"The kind of breath you"
15"Rory didn’t flinch, not yet."
16"She stood between two standing"
17"The wildflowers along the path"
18"I’ve got you, she whispered"
19"The grove kept its own"
ratio0.877
96.77% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences155
matches
0"To understand, maybe, or to"
1"If there was a boundary"
2"If she stepped through, she"
ratio0.019
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences134
technicalSentenceCount33
matches
0"Night pressed over Richmond Park like a damp shawl, and beyond the fringe of trees lay The Fae Grove, a hidden place that wore night differently."
1"The boundary stones—the ancient oaks that had learned to listen—stood in a ragged arc, their roots gripping the earth as if to keep a secret from crawling out i…"
2"The Heartstone hung at her throat, crimson and patient, a rough-cut gem that hummed with warmth against the silver chain."
3"The scar on her left wrist prickled, a crescent-shaped memory in ink and skin, and she pressed her wrist against the fabric to hide the motion from anyone who m…"
4"It welcomed with silence pressed tight against the ears, as if the night had learned to stop listening for a moment so the wrong thing could slip through."
5"The time inside the grove had a way of bending, and Rory remembered Eva’s warnings about the place: inside, an hour could become minutes or days outside, depend…"
6"The first sound was not a sound so much as a sensation—the curious, exhale-like sigh that slid along the skin at the back of her neck."
7"The wildflowers along the path trembled in a way that suggested fear or delight, or perhaps both, and the petals bumped against one another as though sharing a …"
8"The Heartstone’s glow intensified for a heartbeat, a soft, living ember that warmed the skin just above the collarbone where the pendant lay."
9"The pendant trembled against her skin, a thin, anxious pulse, and the glow deepened as if answering a long-forgotten call."
10"The grove had a language all its own, and she stood in the middle of it, listening for a syllable she could pronounce, a phrase that would let her step back fro…"
11"The time inside the grove began to flex again, as if the clock on the outer world wore a heavy boot and the inner clock wore a thin, wary smile."
12"The Heartstone warmed more insistently, and the color of the gem darkened to a deeper crimson, as if the inside of the stone contained a place where light never…"
13"The edge of vision snagged on something—the suggestion of a silhouette that wasn’t a tree, wasn’t a person, wasn’t a trick of light."
14"It sat at the limit between sight and not-sight, and every time she tried to fix it, it slid away, dissolving into the crops of darkness that grew along the bar…"
15"The truth was a knot at the base of her throat, tugging, tugging."
16"The ledger’s pages whispered across the bark when the wind hit the right angle, and Rory began to hear not a single voice but many, speaking in a chorus that di…"
17"The air grew thicker, and the boundary stones—ancient oak standing stones—seemed to lean in as if listening to a private whisper between two conspirators."
18"It offered, instead, a corridor of shadow that stretched between two bark-covered trunks, a corridor that curved away toward the far edge of the clearing where …"
19"A single blade of grass moved in that corridor without a breeze, and Rory watched with a quiet, stubborn focus, as if patience could coax a confession from a pl…"
20"A branch cracked somewhere off to the left, not loudly but with a certainty that suggested a doorway opening somewhere behind the trees, a doorway that had wait…"
21"The crude sound of wood against wood, followed by a slower, more careful rustle, told Rory that something else might be listening—something with a patience that…"
22"The words hung in the air, and for a long minute the grove held its breath as if waiting for the old oak to cough up the next syllable."
23"Then the boundary itself shifted, not violently, but with a careful, almost affectionate pressure, as though the land beneath Rory’s boots had decided to test h…"
24"It was not a person; it was not an animal; it was a movement, a thing made of shadows and leaf-smoke, something that allowed itself to be seen only when the eye…"
25"The pendant’s weight settled into her chest as if a small door had clicked shut somewhere inside her."
26"It hovered at the very edge of what Rory could call sight, and she could feel the hairs on the back of her neck lift themselves as if they’d been coaxed by a gh…"
27"The night pressed closer, and in the distance beyond the nearest standing stone, a single child’s laugh rang out—not cruel or mocking, but unreal, as if borrowe…"
28"It moved through the space, tangled with the scent of rain and wildflowers, then faded, leaving a hollow echo that seemed to come from everywhere at once and no…"
29"The Heartstone pulsed, steady now, and a path that hadn’t existed before in the core of her perception opened a slit of light between two stones, the faintest w…"
30"The moment she crossed the threshold, the grove exhaled as if relieved that a traveler had finally chosen to stay, and the night settled around her again, dense…"
31"The grove remained forever quiet, but now it listened with a patient, almost satisfied stillness, as if it had finally found a listener who would stay long enou…"
32"The Heartstone hummed a low warmth, and Rory moved, a single figure in a world that refused to stay still."
41.67% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"a breath seemed, as if the grove heard the thanks and decided to answer with a test"
25.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"a breath seemed (seem)"
dialogueSentences5
tagDensity0.8
leniency1
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.25
62.4451%