Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTYA9ZFABS3GPCK1DF1ZTAT

Run Details

Model:
GPT-5
Duration:
4m 32s
Cost:
$0.068130
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The green neon from the Raven’s Nest sign puddled on the pavement and ran with the rain. Harlow hunched under the awning, cup of cold coffee sweating in her fist, leather watch strap gritting under her sleeve. Traffic hissed past on Soho’s wet arteries. The door swung, a flare of jukebox and laughter, then the suspect skimmed out into the night like he’d been birthed by the noise. He moved fast and light, hood up, shoulders tucked. A hand flicked to his throat, a reflex gesture. Something pale and small at the end of a cord knocked once against his chest and vanished under hoodie fabric. Her spine locked. "Control, Quinn outside the Raven," into the radio at her shoulder. "Got our boy. Moving." She tossed the cup. Rain ate the last of the coffee and the cardboard folded. The suspect turned his head and clocked her. His mouth curled. "No, no—" Her boots bit wet tarmac. "Police. Stop." He sprang off the curb and carved a path through the crush. She hit the crowd a breath behind. A bollard slammed her hip. A cab horn bleated. Someone swore at both of them. He slid between two tourists with sodden paper crowns and took Berwick Street in three long strides. "Stop!" Her voice snapped the air. "Hands where I can see—" A smear of his heel on a slick metal grate was all the grip he needed. He vaulted a stack of crates behind a fishmonger’s stall. Harlow landed on the same crates and splashed her shins with grey water that smelled of tide and grease. He glanced back once, eyes an echo under the hood, then cut left into an alley where bins settled like sleeping cattle. "You’re making this worse." His laugh floated, harsh and light, old iron on tongue. "Only for you." She kicked a bin that barred the alley mouth. It rolled, clanged, and spat peels and glass. He was already over a low wall at the end, up on a fire escape that rang under his trainers. She took the ladder with her palms and brought splinters into them from wood gone soft. On the second landing he dropped a metal chair. It tumbled down the steps and clashed across her shins. Her teeth clicked. She flung it aside and took the stairs two at a time. Her breath sat clean and controlled. Her calves burned. Her watch ticked, a steady animal pinned under the storm’s noise. He dropped to the street and cut out onto Oxford Street’s flood of headlights. Cars threw stuttering white across his back. He darted between them and she followed, horn-mad city screaming at both. A bus scraped by hard enough to shave the sleeve from her coat. Its diesel breath punched at her face and she ran through it. "Control, suspect on foot, heading north from Oxford Circus," into the radio. "Repeat, on foot. Need eyes at Tottenham Court Road." "Units rolling," the radio crackled with a voice that lived in another weather. He hammered down Charing Cross Road and a different sea of people broke and re-formed around him. He was a dark fish; she chased the wake of curses he left. He cut through the doors of Tottenham Court Road and into the station, shoulders first like a swimmer breaking surface. "Quinn at TCR, descending," into the radio, voice cold rice and dry. The escalators were tongues of light slicked with rain from coats. He took the left side and ran up the wrong flow, parting people, elbows, umbrellas, a cello case. She ignored the signs and followed him, boots drumming moving metal, her ribs measuring out the gap between them. He slid down the barrier at the gates instead of tapping. She slammed hers with a warrant card and drove through before it closed. A gate guard turned, mouth opening. She threw a hand at the hood that had just disappeared. "Stop him!" The guard’s hand flopped. The boy behind him with a paper hat from a chicken shop grabbed at the suspect’s sleeve and got air. The suspect bent under metal detectors no longer switched on at this hour. He ran for Northern line, Camden bound as if the word had been tattooed in the cartilage of his knee. The train doors were already yawning. He dove, and one door kissed the heels of his trainers and let go. Harlow took it at the next carriage. She slid inside as the doors shut and the train shuddered forward. Damp air pressed. People lifted their heads and then dropped back into their screens. He stood two carriages down, face turned to the dark window where the tunnel gave back a stretched ghost of him. He looked up and found her eyes across a forest of grasping poles and wet shoulders. His hood fell back. A young face with old hunger. He said nothing with his mouth. His fingers tapped his sternum, a rhythm over the hidden pale object at his throat. She lifted a palm and pointed two fingers at her own eyes, then at him. He coughed out a small bark of a laugh and mouthed, Catch me. Her radio scratched. "Quinn, units delayed. Flooding at Euston underpass. Diverting. ETA unknown." "Patch Camden Town. Platform three and any exits into service corridors." "Say again, service corridors?" "You heard me." Lights smeared past the windows. The tunnel carried water-sound that wasn’t water. The train’s voice rose on a curve and then settled. He moved towards the end door with a loose-hipped bounce. The carriage between them swelled with bodies. She went the other way, slipping hands, stepping on toes. A kid in a parka twisted away from her and laughed as her elbow knocked his headphone loose. "Sorry." The doors opened at Euston, a hush of people in, people out. The suspect stayed on and watched her from beyond two sets of glass. His fingers worried the cord at his throat. He rocked on his feet. She had the brief stupid thought that he could have been any kid on a midnight ride if not for the way his eyes measured everything like he owned it already. The train screamed into Camden Town and braked. He shot out before the doors gasped all the way. Harlow slammed through her own and charged for him. The floor tiles gathered water and threw it up until their ankles glittered. "Police. Stop." He took the escalator wrong way again, sprinting up the left while a tide poured down and opened for him in yawns and curses. An older man stuck out a hand to slow him; the suspect shouldered him and didn’t break stride. Harlow jumped steps and slipped, caught herself, ran on. Her chest burned cold. At the top he didn’t turn for the exit. He climbed the short barrier and hit a door marked AUTHORIZED PERSONNEL ONLY with the heel of his hand. It didn’t open. He didn’t even look at it. He lifted the pale object from under his hoodie, bone-white and smooth, and fit it into a round recess by the handle. The lock’s hidden tongue unlatched with a click that didn’t sound mechanical. He wrenched the door wide, threw a look back at her that carried too much light in the pupils, and slipped through. The door closed on its own weight. She put her hand on the handle. Her palm stung with an echo. The recess beside it waited, clean circular well, inside powdered with white dust. A smell leaked through the metal, dry and old, like book pages that had been buried. A sound followed it, a low hum threaded with voices that didn’t fit the timbre of city noise. A man’s laugh started, then fell silent fast. Someone had seen her and shut up. "Not that way, love." A voice off to the right, warm and tired. Harlow turned. He leaned against a brick pillar where the shadows hid two more doors and a flight of service stairs that went down into deeper dark. He wore a black hoodie and a plastic apron smeared with something that could have been mercurochrome or beet juice. A Saint Christopher medallion caught the strip lighting and threw a little coin of light against his throat when he shifted. His hair curled damp at the fingertips and his eyes were the colour of hot tea. A gurney sat behind him, blanket and a tray of needles and suture packs, and a man on the gurney held his arm pressed to his side and did his breathing through gritted teeth. "Move," Harlow didn’t take her hand off the unauthorized handle. "He went through." "The Market doesn’t love a uniform." The man hooked his thumb under the tattooed knuckles of the patient to check the colour there, then let go as if he’d thought better of showing concern in front of her. The patient didn’t look at her. He kept his eyes on the ceiling and the map of stains there, and pushed his jaw against the pain. "Open it." "You don’t have it." "What?" He jerked his chin at the recess. "Bone. No token, no door. That’s the deal." "Who are you?" "Tomás." His mouth lifted like it had learned to be polite even when it didn’t want to. "Herrera if you’re filing paperwork." "You patch up criminals in a Tube station, Herrera?" He looked at the blade of her jaw with a quick assessment that tried not to be personal. "I patch up anyone who bleeds and can’t go to A&E. I don’t ask for CVs." "Open the door." "It won’t open for me." "You’re inside." "On the skin." His finger traced a little circle on the brick, as if to explain nothing at all. "There’s Market and there’s not-Market. This is the bit where people who can’t go further wait to be told no." "Then call someone who can." "You want to bring the Met in there? In the Veil?" Her silence worked at him. He scratched the scar that ran along his left forearm. It had the white and blue of a cut that had gone deep with a bad angle and a bad night. "Listen, inspectora—" "Detective," too fast. He grunted and took it on board. "Detective, if you go through that door you don’t get to wave your badge. You bring it out in your pocket where no one can see it. You don’t get to shout stop. And you don’t get to be right. You get to be alive if you walk light. Or dead. That’s the other thing. The Market decides." From beyond the door, a flare of sound. A shout, a clang like metal on bone, a woman laughing with all her teeth on show. Harlow leaned in, ear to the seam, felt cold creep into her through the steel. "I’m in pursuit," into her radio. "Suspect entered a restricted area at Camden Town. Possible connection to black market operations." Her thumb stuck for a second on the transmit button. "Request urgent backup to service corridors at platform level." "Quinn, negative on immediate backup," the voice in her shoulder spun through static and regret. "We’ve got flood and a vehicle pile-up at Mornington Crescent. Units are stuck. Advise hold and observe." "How long." "Unknown." Tomás watched her. He took a cloth out of a tray and pressed it to the patient’s side. The man on the gurney hissed and bit a mouthful of his own lip. "Let me look at your hand," Tomás. She blinked. "What for." "You’ve torn it. On the steel. You’re bleeding." It wasn’t blood, it was rain. Then she followed his eyes and saw the thin red welts where the chair had hit, where the gate had pinched. She curled her hand into a fist and it burned up to the wrist. "Keep your eyes on your work," Harlow. "I am. You’re in the way of it." He used the tone that had made patients stop arguing for long enough to let him get a cannula in. "You’re not stupid. You know you can’t go in there like this." "Like what." "With that look on your face." She had never met him. He had somehow met eyes like hers before. "Herrera." She kept the word short. "If he goes, I lose weeks. He stepped out of a murder scene in Soho and into the void. My case drowns. No. Not tonight." "You keep chasing boys who run into holes in the city and one day the hole likes you. That’s all I’m saying." She glanced at his medallion again. It had the worn edges of a habit you didn’t break. Her own habit sat strapped to her wrist, leather that had softened to her bones, time worn smooth by a thumb she didn’t remember moving. The watch ticked under the storm. Three years ago a partner’s voice had gone off her radio as if pulled by fingers that didn't leave prints. Something about the smell behind this door called that memory out like a coin at the bottom of a pocket. A boy drifted at the far end of the corridor, a kid with wrists scribbled in ink and a hood up. He watched Harlow with the thin interest of someone checking the weather. He made a small gesture that wasn’t a wave. It was a sign. Two fingers crossed over his thumb, then a tap to the recess beside the door. Then he vanished down the stairs before she could speak. "The rule’s simple," Tomás. "Bone to get in. Bone to get out. If they like you. Price in between." Her jaw ticked. "What’s the price to you." "For what." "For a token." "Don’t do this," the patient on the gurney ground out between his teeth, first words since she’d arrived. "Don’t bring the law in. You’ll bring knives down on all our heads." "You’ve got knives already," she glanced at the saturated gauze under Tomás’s palm. The man grinned like salt. "These ones I know." Tomás lifted one shoulder, not a shrug, just breath making bone move. He pulled a small box out from under the tray with a foot. He flipped the lid with a knuckle. Nestled in black foam lay pieces of smooth white shaped by human handling. Finger bones, a knucklebone, a coin carved from something that hadn’t belonged to a pig. "No." "Then why have you got them," Harlow. "Because people drop things when they bleed. Because I get paid in all kinds of currency. Because I don’t like watching people die by committee when I can do something." His eyes lifted, held hers, made a calculation he disliked. He nudged the box toward her. "You take it, you walk in as a customer, and that makes you under their rules. You don’t take it, you wait here and go mad. I can’t open the door for you. I can only not stop you." She stared at the white nest. Bone gleamed under strip light and looked like teeth that had lined up of their own will. Her throat drew rough air. The radio whispered again at her shoulder, offering delays and caution. The hum behind the door deepened, closer. Footsteps, the patter of many people on stone older than wet London nights knew how to make. "Herrera." "Detective." "That boy through there. He put a girl in the ground tonight and walked over her like she was carpet. The case won’t wait for your Market’s timetable." "It never does." She picked the knucklebone out of the foam and felt its weight, light and heavy all at once. It warmed against her skin as if it knew what she wanted from it. Her fingers closed around it. The medallion on Tomás’s chest hung still. The patient’s breath hiccuped. "Open the door," Harlow to Tomás. "Or step aside."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"His mouth lifted like [like]"
dialogueSentences79
tagDensity0.165
leniency0.329
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.025
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2655
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
79.28% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2655
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"flicked"
count1
1
word"echo"
count2
2
word"measured"
count1
3
word"charged"
count1
4
word"mechanical"
count1
5
word"weight"
count2
6
word"traced"
count1
7
word"silence"
count1
8
word"footsteps"
count1
highlights
0"flicked"
1"echo"
2"measured"
3"charged"
4"mechanical"
5"weight"
6"traced"
7"silence"
8"footsteps"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences185
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences185
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences242
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen58
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2649
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions41
wordCount2077
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity0.58
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Tomás"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Soho1
Berwick1
Street2
Oxford1
Charing1
Cross1
Road2
Tottenham1
Court1
Northern1
Camden2
Catch1
Euston1
Town1
Saint1
Christopher1
Tomás7
Harlow12
London1
persons
0"Saint"
1"Christopher"
2"Tomás"
3"Harlow"
places
0"Raven"
1"Soho"
2"Berwick"
3"Street"
4"Oxford"
5"Charing"
6"Cross"
7"Road"
8"Tottenham"
9"Court"
10"Camden"
11"Euston"
12"Town"
13"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences148
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like teeth that had lined up of th"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2649
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences242
matches
0"thought that he"
1"called that memory"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs102
mean25.97
std25.37
cv0.977
sampleLengths
068
138
23
315
426
59
651
711
867
94
1013
1153
1254
1358
1421
1513
1650
1712
1848
1941
202
2157
2253
2368
2415
2513
2613
2711
284
293
3067
311
3269
3340
342
3555
36100
3760
3815
394
4011
41116
4213
436
4458
452
464
471
4815
493
99.57% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences185
matches
0"been birthed"
1"been tattooed"
2"been buried"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs341
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences242
ratio0.008
matches
0"He was a dark fish; she chased the wake of curses he left."
1"An older man stuck out a hand to slow him; the suspect shouldered him and didn’t break stride."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2081
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"suspect bent under metal"
adverbCount47
adverbRatio0.022585295530994715
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.0004805382027871216
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences242
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences242
mean10.95
std7.7
cv0.704
sampleLengths
017
120
27
324
49
59
620
73
811
94
104
1111
128
133
147
152
1612
177
185
194
206
2117
226
235
2416
2510
2619
2722
284
2910
303
319
328
3320
3416
359
3610
373
3812
396
403
4111
4214
437
4412
4513
4612
4712
489
4913
40.91% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats22
diversityRatio0.28512396694214875
totalSentences242
uniqueOpeners69
37.45% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences178
matches
0"Then she followed his eyes"
1"Then he vanished down the"
ratio0.011
4.27% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount96
totalSentences178
matches
0"He moved fast and light,"
1"Her spine locked."
2"She tossed the cup."
3"His mouth curled."
4"Her boots bit wet tarmac"
5"He sprang off the curb"
6"She hit the crowd a"
7"He slid between two tourists"
8"Her voice snapped the air"
9"He vaulted a stack of"
10"He glanced back once, eyes"
11"His laugh floated, harsh and"
12"She kicked a bin that"
13"It rolled, clanged, and spat"
14"He was already over a"
15"She took the ladder with"
16"It tumbled down the steps"
17"Her teeth clicked."
18"She flung it aside and"
19"Her breath sat clean and"
ratio0.539
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount164
totalSentences178
matches
0"The green neon from the"
1"Harlow hunched under the awning,"
2"Traffic hissed past on Soho’s"
3"The door swung, a flare"
4"He moved fast and light,"
5"A hand flicked to his"
6"Something pale and small at"
7"Her spine locked."
8"She tossed the cup."
9"Rain ate the last of"
10"The suspect turned his head"
11"His mouth curled."
12"Her boots bit wet tarmac"
13"He sprang off the curb"
14"She hit the crowd a"
15"A bollard slammed her hip."
16"A cab horn bleated."
17"Someone swore at both of"
18"He slid between two tourists"
19"Her voice snapped the air"
ratio0.921
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences178
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences93
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"She ignored the signs and followed him, boots drumming moving metal, her ribs measuring out the gap between them."
1"He wore a black hoodie and a plastic apron smeared with something that could have been mercurochrome or beet juice."
2"The man hooked his thumb under the tattooed knuckles of the patient to check the colour there, then let go as if he’d thought better of showing concern in front…"
3"It had the white and blue of a cut that had gone deep with a bad angle and a bad night."
4"It warmed against her skin as if it knew what she wanted from it."
86.54% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"His finger traced, as if to explain nothing at all"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Her voice snapped (snap)"
1"the radio voice (the radio voice)"
dialogueSentences79
tagDensity0.025
leniency0.051
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.051
84.7343%