Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTYAG1ZKVQVM3K8NECXHV7J

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Duration:
49.9s
Cost:
$0.039450

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The delivery bag slipped from Aurora's shoulder as she stepped between the ancient oak standing stones. Golden Empress takeaway wasn't supposed to deliver to Richmond Park after dark, but the customer had paid triple and specified this exact location. The grove beyond the stone circle. Money was money. Even if it came with cryptic instructions written on expensive letterhead. *Find the clearing where wildflowers bloom in winter. Leave the order at the centre. Do not look for me. I will find you.* She pushed through the treeline, torch beam dancing ahead of her. The trees here grew wrong, branches intertwining overhead like arthritic fingers. No streetlights penetrated this deep into the park. Just darkness and the rustle of leaves that sounded almost like whispers. The path wasn't on any map she'd checked. Hell, half the park rangers claimed this section didn't exist. But here she was, following worn earth that shouldn't lead anywhere, carrying beef and black bean sauce to someone who might not even show. The scent hit her first. Jasmine and honeysuckle, thick enough to taste. Wrong season for either. She quickened her pace, eager to drop the food and leave. The clearing opened before her like a secret. Wildflowers carpeted the ground in impossible abundance, purple and gold blooms nodding in the still air. At the centre, a ring of smooth stones formed a perfect circle. Ancient looking. Older than the city beyond. Aurora set the bag down carefully and stepped back. The flowers released more fragrance with each footfall, cloying now. Sweet enough to choke on. A branch cracked somewhere behind her. She spun round. Trees. Shadows. Nothing else. "Hello?" Her voice died quickly in the clearing, swallowed by the unnatural quiet. Even the motorway noise from the A3 had vanished. She strained to hear traffic, aircraft, anything that proved London still existed beyond these trees. Silence. The Heartstone pendant beneath her shirt grew warm against her skin. The deep crimson gem rarely reacted to anything, but now it pulsed with gentle heat. Aurora touched it through the fabric, frowning. The unknown benefactor who'd left it at her flat had never explained what it did. Just that she might need it someday. A flower moved at the edge of her vision. She turned. The purple blooms swayed gently, as if touched by wind. But the air hung perfectly still. "Right. Time to go." Aurora backed toward the treeline, keeping the clearing in sight. Something about the customer's instructions nagged at her. *Do not look for me. I will find you.* Not unusual for eccentric clients, but paired with this location... Another flower danced. Then another. A wave of movement rippled through the carpet of blooms, spreading outward from the stone circle like rings on water. The pendant grew warmer. She reached the trees and fumbled for her phone. No signal. The screen showed full bars when she'd entered the park. Now nothing. Even the time display flickered, numbers shifting between 9:47 PM and symbols she didn't recognise. A soft laugh drifted from the clearing. Aurora pressed herself against an oak trunk, heart hammering. Someone was there. Had been there all along, waiting in the flower-scented dark. The customer, presumably. Though something felt wrong about that laugh. Too musical. Too knowing. "I left your order," she called out. "Centre of the clearing, like you asked." The laughter came again, closer now. Multiple voices joining in harmony. A choir of strangers hiding among impossible flowers. The pendant burned against her chest. Aurora ran. Branches caught at her jacket as she crashed through undergrowth. The path had vanished, replaced by tangled forest that seemed to shift around her. She'd walked this route five minutes ago. Straight line from the road to the clearing. Now every direction looked the same. Behind her, footsteps followed. Light and dancing, like children playing in a garden. But the sound multiplied with each step she took. Dozens of feet padding through grass. A procession of invisible followers. She burst through a wall of bracken and stumbled. The clearing spread before her again. Impossible. She'd been running away from it. Had felt the stone circle at her back as she fled. But here it was, wildflowers nodding in greeting, takeaway bag sitting untouched at its heart. The followers had gone quiet. Aurora circled the clearing's edge, looking for the path out. Every gap between trees led deeper into forest. No way back to the road. No way back to the world that made sense. "Clever girl." The voice came from everywhere at once. Warm honey over sharp glass. "You brought exactly what I ordered." "Show yourself." Aurora's hand found the pendant through her shirt. The gem pulsed like a second heartbeat, rapid and urgent. "But I am showing myself. Can't you see?" A figure stepped from behind the standing stones. Tall and graceful, wrapped in shadows that moved independently of any light source. Where its feet touched ground, new flowers bloomed in spirals of impossible colour. "You're the customer." "Customer. Such a mundane word." It tilted its head, and starlight caught on features that weren't quite human. Too sharp. Too perfect. "I prefer patron. Benefactor. The one who provides opportunities." The thing that wasn't quite a person gestured to the takeaway bag. "Though I admit, I ordered more than food tonight." Aurora backed away, but the forest had closed ranks behind her. Trees pressed close, branches weaving together like prison bars. The clearing had become a cage lined with flowers and starlight. "The pendant suits you," her captor continued conversationally. "Heartstone from the deep places. Hardly anyone knows how to work them anymore. Such a shame." Heat flared against Aurora's chest. The pendant had gone from warm to scalding, burning through her shirt. But with the pain came something else. Clarity. The forest around her wavered, showing glimpses of something underneath. Older shapes. Crueller truths. "What do you want?" "Nothing you weren't already willing to give." It smiled with too many teeth. "You came here alone, in the dark, following instructions from a stranger. Such trust. Such beautiful, reckless trust." The wildflowers began to wilt. Purple petals turned black at the edges, curling inward like closing fists. The sweet fragrance curdled to something organic and rotten. "Though I confess, the pendant complicates things. My benefactor chose well." Aurora touched the burning gem through her shirt. "Your benefactor?" "Oh, my dear girl. Did you think this was coincidence?" The creature's laugh rang out like breaking bells. "The job posting. The mysterious customer. The address that led you here. Someone has been preparing you for this moment for months." The standing stones began to glow with pale light. Ancient symbols carved into their surfaces writhed like living things, spelling out words in languages that predated human speech. And somewhere in the brightening light, Aurora saw them. The real followers. Dozens of pale figures standing between the trees, watching with hollow eyes and patient smiles. All wearing delivery uniforms from restaurants across London. The pendant's heat peaked, then suddenly cooled to ice against her skin. In the new silence, she heard something that made her blood freeze. Her own voice, calling from somewhere deep in the woods. "Hello? Anyone there? I've got your delivery."
total_cost0.03945

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"her captor continued conversationally [conversationally]"
dialogueSentences22
tagDensity0.318
leniency0.636
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.091
79.29% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1207
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
2
adverb"gently"
count1
3
adverb"perfectly"
count1
4
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"quickly"
2"gently"
3"perfectly"
4"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
46.15% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1207
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"dancing"
count2
1
word"quickened"
count1
2
word"perfect"
count2
3
word"footfall"
count1
4
word"silence"
count2
5
word"pulsed"
count2
6
word"flickered"
count1
7
word"footsteps"
count1
8
word"wavered"
count1
highlights
0"dancing"
1"quickened"
2"perfect"
3"footfall"
4"silence"
5"pulsed"
6"flickered"
7"footsteps"
8"wavered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences131
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences131
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences146
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen24
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords32
totalWords1206
ratio0.027
matches
0"Find the clearing where wildflowers bloom in winter. Leave the order at the centre. Do not look for me. I will find you."
1"Do not look for me. I will find you."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
92.58% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions20
wordCount1045
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.15
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora12
Empress1
Richmond1
Park1
London2
Heartstone1
Tall1
Heat1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Heat"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
globalScore0.926
windowScore1
66.67% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences90
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"forest that seemed to shift around her"
1"quite human"
2"quite a person gestured to the takeaway bag"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.829
wordCount1206
matches
0"Not unusual for eccentric clients, but paired with this location"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences146
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs57
mean21.16
std14.46
cv0.683
sampleLengths
045
114
223
342
442
527
643
724
86
97
101
1136
121
1355
149
1518
164
1737
1825
194
2038
217
2236
2314
2419
256
262
2745
2833
2915
3033
315
3233
332
3418
3520
3642
373
3831
3912
409
4131
4224
4339
444
4531
4626
4711
4810
4940
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences131
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs174
matches
0"was, following"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences146
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1046
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount40
adverbRatio0.03824091778202677
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.008604206500956023
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences146
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences146
mean8.26
std4.87
cv0.59
sampleLengths
016
123
26
33
411
58
66
75
84
911
1011
118
1212
138
1410
1524
165
177
184
1911
208
2116
2212
232
245
259
2610
275
286
293
301
311
322
331
3412
359
3615
371
3811
3915
407
4115
427
439
442
4510
466
474
4810
498
68.95% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.4383561643835616
totalSentences146
uniqueOpeners64
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences113
matches
0"Just darkness and the rustle"
1"Even the motorway noise from"
2"Just that she might need"
3"Even the time display flickered,"
4"All wearing delivery uniforms from"
ratio0.044
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount16
totalSentences113
matches
0"I will find you.*"
1"She pushed through the treeline,"
2"She quickened her pace, eager"
3"She spun round."
4"Her voice died quickly in"
5"She strained to hear traffic,"
6"I will find you.* Not"
7"She reached the trees and"
8"she called out"
9"She'd walked this route five"
10"She burst through a wall"
11"She'd been running away from"
12"It tilted its head, and"
13"her captor continued conversationally"
14"It smiled with too many"
15"Her own voice, calling from"
ratio0.142
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount74
totalSentences113
matches
0"The delivery bag slipped from"
1"The grove beyond the stone"
2"Money was money."
3"I will find you.*"
4"She pushed through the treeline,"
5"The trees here grew wrong,"
6"The path wasn't on any"
7"The scent hit her first."
8"Jasmine and honeysuckle, thick enough"
9"She quickened her pace, eager"
10"The clearing opened before her"
11"Wildflowers carpeted the ground in"
12"Aurora set the bag down"
13"The flowers released more fragrance"
14"A branch cracked somewhere behind"
15"She spun round."
16"Her voice died quickly in"
17"She strained to hear traffic,"
18"The Heartstone pendant beneath her"
19"The deep crimson gem rarely"
ratio0.655
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences113
matches
0"Even if it came with"
1"Though something felt wrong about"
2"Now every direction looked the"
ratio0.027
93.02% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences43
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"But here she was, following worn earth that shouldn't lead anywhere, carrying beef and black bean sauce to someone who might not even show."
1"The unknown benefactor who'd left it at her flat had never explained what it did."
2"Tall and graceful, wrapped in shadows that moved independently of any light source."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"her captor continued conversationally (continue)"
dialogueSentences22
tagDensity0.045
leniency0.091
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.091
94.8886%