Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTYAPAD1SDSDSHEBP9VBYJG

Run Details

Duration:
1m 22s
Cost:
$0.003518
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rain hammered the avenue, turning pavement into glass that reflected the city’s restless glow. Harlow Quinn moved through it like a clockwork shadow, coat cuff catching on a breeze she baited into her lungs. The neon sign above The Raven’s Nest flickered a green that wasn’t friendly, as if the city itself wanted to spit her out. The suspect hauled into the open, a figure too thin to be comfortable in this weather, racing fingers tucked into the pockets of a rain-soaked jacket. Quinn kept him in her sight by inches, the left wrist wearing the worn leather watch that had counted more hours than she cared to admit. The street emptied around them as the chase tightened, traffic a rumble beneath their boots. The neon above the Nest did more than illuminate. It framed the chase in a long, arterial glow, guiding their path toward the stairwell that led to the secret room she’d learned about only through hushed whispers and the occasional slip of a tongue from colleagues who’d seen too much. The alley narrowed, the suspect ducked into a doorway that smelled of damp concrete and something nearer to fear than rain. A railing bit into Harlow’s fingertips as she followed, senses sharpened to a blade’s edge. The door gave a stubborn sigh when she shoulder-rammed it, and the stairwell swallowed them in a hollow sigh of echoing feet and dripping pipes. The smell changed here—dust and ink and old wood, a library’s memory trapped in a basement. Maps hung crooked against the walls, photographs in black-and-white staring as if they’d never blinked, and the tick of a distant clock kept the time with her own heartbeat. The suspect paused beside a bookshelf. She watched him touch a few spines as if weighing them, then shove his shoulder against a panel that shouldn’t have moved. The shelf shuddered and swung inward, revealing a narrow passage lit by a sickly green glow. He slipped inside; a breath later, she followed. The secret back room looked nothing like a bar’s after-hours room should. It was a map of the city’s quieter sins: a long table lacquered with grease and oil, seats arranged like conspirators in a ring, and a wall of jars that held things too careful to name. On the table lay a small pile of tokens—bone tokens, each carved with a sign that hadn’t bothered to vanish with daylight. The suspect stopped and watched her step into the room, the door sliding shut behind him with a soft, certain click. A whisper of rain found a creak in the boarded window, and the room’s neon hint—green, again—made the air feel slick. The suspect lifted a hand, and a breath of fear escaped him, like he’d become aware of a spectator he hadn’t expected. "Not today, Quinn," he rasped, eyes narrowing as he backed toward a shadowed corner. "You’ve no idea what you’re stepping into." Quinn’s eyes didn’t waver. She moved with the ease of years spent chasing both truth and trouble. The metal of her watch pressed cold against her wrist, a reminder of the partner she’d lost three years ago, the case that had started this descent into places where the living walked around the dead and pretended not to hear the whispers. The suspect reached for a bundle of papers, sliding a hand along their edges as if tasting their secrets. He spoke again, quieter this time, almost careful. "I’m not your thing, detective. Go back to the Nest." The line was a blend of bravado and fear, a whisper that carried with it the weight of someone who understood the cracks in the world better than most. "Then tell me why you’re running," Harlow said, her voice even, a blade she kept sheathed until she needed to draw it. The suspect shrugged, shoulders tight, the rain outside a distant drum. He moved one step closer to the table and flicked a finger toward the bone tokens. "That market," he hissed, voice dropping to a rasp. "The Veil Market’s got doors you don’t walk through twice. You’ll lose yourself in there, Quinn. You’ll forget the streets you know, forget your badge, forget your partner—" "Tell me why you’re here," she cut in, stepping closer, the scent of rain and something sour clinging to the air between them. The suspect flashed a look toward the wall where the shelf had concealed a narrow opening. His mouth pressed into a hard line. "Information. Deals. Some things aren’t meant to stay secret." "And you think I’m going to believe you?" she asked, half curious, half sick of the games people played when the city got thirsty for power. The suspect glanced at the tokens again, then spat a dry laugh that had no humour in it. "That token you found outside—the bone token—it's not just an entry key. It’s a promise to the market’s keepers. You don’t want to owe them a favour." A spark—dangerous, bright—lit her eyes. The token in the suspect’s hand looked dull now, almost ordinary beside the room’s other relics. She wanted the truth more than the token’s origin. She wanted to know the clique’s fingerprints on this night, on the lives not yet broken. "Where did you get that token?" she asked, not taking her gaze off him. "From a friend," he said, voice tight, the word tasting like rust on his tongue. "From someone who knows the way down, who knows what you’ll face if you follow me into the dark." She didn’t blink. The partner she’d lost whispered in the back of her mind, a voice she hadn’t heard clearly since that case had first tasted supernatural. She shoved the memory aside, found her footing, and stepped forward. The suspect’s next moves were predictable in a game played too often in rooms like this. The suspect lunged toward the door, catching at the handle with a hand that shook. Quinn moved with the economy of someone who’d learned to cut to the chase without wasting a breath. She closed the gap, hand out, and in a single breath sieved the room’s last bit of air into something close to truth. A heavy door into the wall—unseen until it wasn’t—slid open with a grudge of hinges. The tunnel beyond lay dark as a memory. The Veil Market, by its own rules and timetable, slept beneath Camden in the way a city slept in its sleepiest alleyways: unseen, unbidden, dangerous when eyes turned away. "Here," the suspect whispered, almost as if sharing a dirty secret. "This is where the answers live." "Not your answers," she replied, voice low, careful, eyes scanning every shadow that stretched across the old stone. "Mine." The tunnel widened just enough to reveal a sliver of the market’s glow beyond, a patch of light that looked like a heartbeat in water. The ribbed metal of ventilation pipes creaked overhead. The rain noise faded as if the space absorbed sounds, and then grew again as the doorway trembled with a distant footfall from the market’s other inhabitants—buyers, sellers, perhaps watchers. The suspect stepped into the threshold, then hesitated, the bone token swinging from his fingers like a pendulum counting down a life he was leaving behind. He looked back at Quinn, a quick, almost alien expression crossing his face, and then he spoke with a trembling honesty. "They’ll want you down there. They’ll want you in deeper than your badge ever allowed you to go." The comment hit the air between them like a strike, and for a long, breath-held moment the room felt both too small to contain them and too wide to hold its own secrets. "Or maybe they’ll want me back up here," she said, testing the edge of that possibility with a quiet, confident tone. "Maybe they don’t like where I’ve been, but they’ll learn where I’m headed." The suspect shrugged again, then moved toward the doorway that opened into the subterranean world. A shadow detached itself from a corner of the room, a figure whose movements were too smooth to be mere luck. The figure stepped into the glow, revealing a familiar silhouette: a man with warm brown eyes, short curly dark brown hair, olive skin, and a Saint Christopher medallion resting on his chest. Tomás Herrera. Tomás offered a small, crooked smile that didn’t quite reach his eyes. The look of a man who’d learned to weigh lives carefully, who’d learned not to trust the wrong doors or the wrong conversations. He wore a coat that looked like it had weathered more nights than most people’s nerves could bear. "Detective," Tomás said, voice careful, as if he wasn’t sure if he should be pleased to see her, or relieved that trouble had finally decided to show itself in a familiar face. "Tomás," she replied, steady as a stone in a stream. "You’ve got a way with doors. This one opened for you?" "It opened for someone who understands what the market is," he answered. "And someone who understands what happens when we forget that some doors aren’t doors at all." The suspect trembled, the token swinging from his fingers, catching the green glow in a dozen tiny shards. He swallowed, eyes flicking between Quinn and Tomás as if he’d never decide which side to prefer. "Mind your step," Tomás added softly, as if the path ahead were a patient with a broken leg and a stubborn will to heal. "The market isn’t a place you stroll into and stroll out of." Quinn’s gaze sharpened. She didn’t blink at the word “market.” The Veil Market had its own gravity, its own rules, and its own prices. It wasn’t simply a place to chase a suspect; it was a doorway into a system functioning beyond the city’s blue lights and police radios. The suspect backed away, glancing at the tokens again, weighing his options, counting the possible futures that witness could grant or deny. The market felt heavier with the promise of what lies beyond doors one should never have opened. "Why am I here?" Quinn asked, not expecting an answer so much as laying bare the question that gnawed at her on nights when she replayed the Morris case in her sleep. "You’re here because you want the truth that can’t be spoken in a courtroom," Tomás said, stepping closer until his breath fogged in the cold air. "Or because you’re frightened of what third hand truths will do to you. Either way, you’re a problem for the market, Detective." The suspect raised his hands a fraction, as if surrendering to something he didn’t believe in anymore. He pressed his back to the doorframe and looked from Quinn to Tomás, then back again. "Go ahead, then," he said to Tomás. "Tell her what you know. Tell her what the bones say." His voice cracked on the last word, an edge of fear catching at the syllables. "Bone tokens aren’t just keys," Tomás said, voice low, the words crisp as gravel. "They’re syllables spoken by the old city. They bind what you think you know to what you don’t want to admit exists." Quinn let that settle, its weight pressing on her chest rather than the air. She didn’t reach for the token in the suspect’s hand; she stood, hands loose at her sides, and studied the room—the market already stirring with a life of its own. The market’s rhythm changed as if a second heartbeat woke beneath Camden’s concrete bones. A bell chimed somewhere, and voices rose in a chorus of accents and intentions. The glow grew warmer, more intimate, a scent that suggested secrets and bargains and the sort of truths you only learned when you’d traded something you could never reclaim. "Do you want me to take you down there?" Tomás asked, not stepping too close, like he was watching a patient’s pulse—needing a rhythm to keep himself from slipping into something reckless. Quinn looked at the bone token again, then to the market’s door that wasn’t a door and to the stairs beyond the corridor that would take her into a world where the city’s rules bent and clicked in strange ways. The decision pressure built in her chest, but her voice stayed even. "I’m not following for the thrill," she said, a quiet edge to her tone that kept the room from misreading her resolve. "I’m following to get a thread I can pull. If the clique’s involved in whatever this is, I need to pull it apart, not pretend I can seal it with a lineup and a morning report." Tomás inclined his head once, almost as if acknowledging a prayer spoken aloud by a man who’d once saved a life and would again if the city asked him to. His eyes held a calm that felt out of place in such a volatile space. "Then you’ll need a map, and you’ll need company who knows the maps aren’t clean," he said softly. "I can get you the latter. The map remains dangerous, but you already know that." The suspect shifted again, eyes flitting toward that narrow doorway into the deeper dark that promised the Veil Market’s underbelly. The tokens on the table clinked softly, almost like small bells in a room that forgot the sound of normal life. "Where’s your map?" Quinn asked, not hurried, letting the question hang like a line dropped into a stream to see what would bite. The suspect hesitated, and in that hesitation the market’s life spooled out before them in a dozen quick, shimmering threads. Vendors—some human, some not—moved through the stalls, their voices a tapestry of languages and old promises. The air held a tang of iron and jasmine, a strange juxtaposition that might have been beautiful if it hadn’t suggested debt owed to things unseen. Tomás stepped closer, his medallion catching the green light, casting a brief halo of warmth around him. The saint’s emblem felt oddly like a talisman against the night’s enchantments, though the world hummed with things that believed in more than saints or badges. The suspect looked from Quinn to Tomás, then to the tokens again, weighing the risk of continuing versus the risk of staying. The decision, when it came, wasn’t dramatic. It settled in a breath, a small exhale that betrayed more hunger than fear. "Go with him," the suspect said, the words barely audible over the market’s murmur. "If you want the truth that won’t survive a courtroom, you’ll need eyes you can trust down there more than you trust your own badge." Quinn nodded once, not at the man but at the decision she’d made inside. The Veil Market wasn’t just an echo chamber for criminals; it was a system, a living thing that fed on fear and secrets and the bright, stubborn courage of people who refused to walk away when the city asked them to. "Show me the way," she said, her voice steady, the hint of something steely settling in. Tomás offered a small nod, then stepped closer to the suspect, touching the hinge of the old door as if to remind it that gravity still had weight. He spoke to the man in a low tone, words too intimate to be heard clearly and too casual to be trusted completely. The man’s shoulders sagged, and he looked toward the passage that would take them into the city’s subterranean heart. Quinn felt the weight of the moment press on her—rain, secrets, and a decision that would thread together the city’s most dangerous corners. She didn’t glance back at the room’s shadows or the tokens that lay inert on the table. She focused on the door that wasn’t a door, on the descent that would carry her into a world where rules bent and where she, a detective with eighteen years of decorated service, would be tested not by a suspect’s bravado but by a market’s cold arithmetic. The glow intensified, and the air thickened with possibilities. Her breath fogged, then cleared. Her eyes met Tomás’s, and in them she read a promise—if she chose to walk down, he would walk with her as far as he could, until the market’s edge texture finally wore him down or proved him useful enough to stay. The decision solidified in her chest as a quiet, stubborn thing. Her mouth pressed into a line, and she nodded, almost imperceptibly, to the room’s doorway that led to the stair and the long, hidden world below. "We move," she said, barely above a whisper, a commitment she would honour regardless of what followed. The moment broke into a silence that felt like rain on stone, and then she stepped toward the door’s threshold, the market’s glow washing over her face in a fevered green. She didn’t look back at the Nest or the back room’s cramped secrets. She looked forward, into the tunnel and beyond, toward the Veil Market’s unpredictable heartbeat. With a quiet, reckless resolve, she began to descend. The stairs lowered into darkness, and the world narrowed to the damp air and the sound of two people following a suspect into a space where the city’s ordinary rules didn’t apply. The market’s breath rose up around them, a living thing that would decide how far Quinn could push, how far she’d be permitted to push, and what truths would finally surface when the rain finally stopped. She did not hurry. She did not stall. She moved as she always moved—direct, purposeful, and ready to pay whatever price the night required. And as the stairway widened into a passage that stretched toward the Veil Market’s underbelly, she felt the city’s pulse quicken, felt its secrets ready to spill. The decision had been made. They walked into the shadowed stair, the weight of the tokens in the stranger’s pocket, the Saint Christopher medallion glinting briefly in the green glow, and the rain outside continuing its relentless, patient rain.
created_at"2026-02-19T12:34:50.836Z" 2/19/2026, 12:34:50 PM
model"openai/gpt-5-nano-2025-08-07"
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cancelledfalse
latency7580
moderation_latency(null)
generation_time81096
tokens_prompt1140
tokens_completion5712
native_tokens_prompt984
native_tokens_completion8672
native_tokens_completion_images0
native_tokens_reasoning4928
native_tokens_cached0
num_media_prompt(null)
num_input_audio_prompt(null)
num_media_completion0
num_search_results(null)
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is_byokfalse
finish_reason"stop"
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router(null)
provider_responses
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags27
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Tomás added softly [softly]"
1"he said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences45
tagDensity0.6
leniency1
rawRatio0.074
effectiveRatio0.074
90.05% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3015
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count3
2
adverb"completely"
count1
3
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"softly"
2"completely"
3"barely above a whisper"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
50.25% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3015
totalAiIsms30
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"comfortable"
count1
2
word"racing"
count1
3
word"echoing"
count1
4
word"whisper"
count3
5
word"reminder"
count1
6
word"weight"
count5
7
word"flicked"
count1
8
word"predictable"
count1
9
word"scanning"
count1
10
word"trembled"
count2
11
word"footfall"
count1
12
word"familiar"
count2
13
word"pulse"
count2
14
word"resolve"
count2
15
word"tapestry"
count1
16
word"warmth"
count1
17
word"echo"
count1
18
word"silence"
count1
19
word"glinting"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"comfortable"
2"racing"
3"echoing"
4"whisper"
5"reminder"
6"weight"
7"flicked"
8"predictable"
9"scanning"
10"trembled"
11"footfall"
12"familiar"
13"pulse"
14"resolve"
15"tapestry"
16"warmth"
17"echo"
18"silence"
19"glinting"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"weight of words/silence"
count1
highlights
0"the weight of the moment"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences140
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences140
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences157
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen47
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2992
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions31
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions58
wordCount2555
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.63
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Tomás"
discoveredNames
Quinn16
Raven1
Nest3
Harlow3
Veil6
Market6
Camden2
Saint2
Christopher2
Herrera1
Tomás15
Morris1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Raven"
2"Nest"
3"Harlow"
4"Market"
5"Camden"
6"Saint"
7"Christopher"
8"Herrera"
9"Tomás"
10"Morris"
places
0"Veil"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences128
glossingSentenceCount10
matches
0"as if weighing them, then shove his shoulder against a panel that shouldn’t have moved"
1"as if tasting their secrets"
2"something close to truth"
3"as if sharing a dirty secret"
4"looked like a heartbeat in water"
5"quite reach his eyes"
6"looked like it had weathered more nights"
7"as if surrendering to something he didn’t believe in anymore"
8"as if acknowledging a prayer spoken aloud by a man who’d once saved a life and would again if the city asked him to"
9"felt like rain on stone, and then she s"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.668
wordCount2992
matches
0"not at the man but at the decision she’d made inside"
1"not by a suspect’s bravado but by a market’s cold arithmetic"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences157
matches
0"relieved that trouble"
1"let that settle"
73.92% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs69
mean43.36
std17.72
cv0.409
sampleLengths
057
167
271
385
452
591
643
721
860
927
1039
1122
1227
1337
1423
1532
1626
1745
1846
1914
2034
2154
2256
2352
2417
2519
2663
2747
2818
2933
3034
3170
3253
3332
3421
3528
3635
3736
3849
3939
4032
4148
4233
4333
4436
4544
4657
4732
4852
4958
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences140
matches
0"been made"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs433
matches
0"was leaving"
1"was watching"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount16
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences15
totalSentences157
ratio0.096
matches
0"The smell changed here—dust and ink and old wood, a library’s memory trapped in a basement."
1"He slipped inside; a breath later, she followed."
2"On the table lay a small pile of tokens—bone tokens, each carved with a sign that hadn’t bothered to vanish with daylight."
3"A whisper of rain found a creak in the boarded window, and the room’s neon hint—green, again—made the air feel slick."
4"A spark—dangerous, bright—lit her eyes."
5"A heavy door into the wall—unseen until it wasn’t—slid open with a grudge of hinges."
6"The rain noise faded as if the space absorbed sounds, and then grew again as the doorway trembled with a distant footfall from the market’s other inhabitants—buyers, sellers, perhaps watchers."
7"It wasn’t simply a place to chase a suspect; it was a doorway into a system functioning beyond the city’s blue lights and police radios."
8"She didn’t reach for the token in the suspect’s hand; she stood, hands loose at her sides, and studied the room—the market already stirring with a life of its own."
9"\"Do you want me to take you down there?\" Tomás asked, not stepping too close, like he was watching a patient’s pulse—needing a rhythm to keep himself from slipping into something reckless."
10"Vendors—some human, some not—moved through the stalls, their voices a tapestry of languages and old promises."
11"The Veil Market wasn’t just an echo chamber for criminals; it was a system, a living thing that fed on fear and secrets and the bright, stubborn courage of people who refused to walk away when the city asked them to."
12"Quinn felt the weight of the moment press on her—rain, secrets, and a decision that would thread together the city’s most dangerous corners."
13"Her eyes met Tomás’s, and in them she read a promise—if she chose to walk down, he would walk with her as far as he could, until the market’s edge texture finally wore him down or proved him useful enough to stay."
14"She moved as she always moved—direct, purposeful, and ready to pay whatever price the night required."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2576
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"long, breath-held moment"
adverbCount102
adverbRatio0.039596273291925464
lyAdverbCount26
lyAdverbRatio0.010093167701863354
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences157
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences157
mean19.06
std9.26
cv0.486
sampleLengths
014
120
223
326
426
515
69
741
821
915
1025
1116
1229
136
1422
1516
168
1712
1836
1922
2021
2121
2222
2314
247
254
2613
2743
2819
298
3039
3122
3211
3316
349
3528
3623
3716
387
399
4026
4118
4227
435
4416
459
4616
4714
4815
4919
35.35% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats23
diversityRatio0.25477707006369427
totalSentences157
uniqueOpeners40
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences138
matches(empty)
ratio0
77.97% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount49
totalSentences138
matches
0"It framed the chase in"
1"She watched him touch a"
2"He slipped inside; a breath"
3"It was a map of"
4"he rasped, eyes narrowing as"
5"She moved with the ease"
6"He spoke again, quieter this"
7"He moved one step closer"
8"he hissed, voice dropping to"
9"she cut in, stepping closer,"
10"His mouth pressed into a"
11"she asked, half curious, half"
12"She wanted the truth more"
13"She wanted to know the"
14"she asked, not taking her"
15"he said, voice tight, the"
16"She didn’t blink."
17"She shoved the memory aside,"
18"She closed the gap, hand"
19"she replied, voice low, careful,"
ratio0.355
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount134
totalSentences138
matches
0"Harlow Quinn moved through it"
1"The neon sign above The"
2"The suspect hauled into the"
3"Quinn kept him in her"
4"The street emptied around them"
5"The neon above the Nest"
6"It framed the chase in"
7"The alley narrowed, the suspect"
8"A railing bit into Harlow’s"
9"The door gave a stubborn"
10"The smell changed here—dust and"
11"Maps hung crooked against the"
12"The suspect paused beside a"
13"She watched him touch a"
14"The shelf shuddered and swung"
15"He slipped inside; a breath"
16"The secret back room looked"
17"It was a map of"
18"The suspect stopped and watched"
19"A whisper of rain found"
ratio0.971
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences138
matches(empty)
ratio0
18.63% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences92
technicalSentenceCount16
matches
0"Quinn kept him in her sight by inches, the left wrist wearing the worn leather watch that had counted more hours than she cared to admit."
1"It framed the chase in a long, arterial glow, guiding their path toward the stairwell that led to the secret room she’d learned about only through hushed whispe…"
2"The alley narrowed, the suspect ducked into a doorway that smelled of damp concrete and something nearer to fear than rain."
3"Maps hung crooked against the walls, photographs in black-and-white staring as if they’d never blinked, and the tick of a distant clock kept the time with her o…"
4"It was a map of the city’s quieter sins: a long table lacquered with grease and oil, seats arranged like conspirators in a ring, and a wall of jars that held th…"
5"The metal of her watch pressed cold against her wrist, a reminder of the partner she’d lost three years ago, the case that had started this descent into places …"
6"The look of a man who’d learned to weigh lives carefully, who’d learned not to trust the wrong doors or the wrong conversations."
7"The suspect trembled, the token swinging from his fingers, catching the green glow in a dozen tiny shards."
8"The suspect backed away, glancing at the tokens again, weighing his options, counting the possible futures that witness could grant or deny."
9"The suspect raised his hands a fraction, as if surrendering to something he didn’t believe in anymore."
10"The suspect shifted again, eyes flitting toward that narrow doorway into the deeper dark that promised the Veil Market’s underbelly."
11"The air held a tang of iron and jasmine, a strange juxtaposition that might have been beautiful if it hadn’t suggested debt owed to things unseen."
12"Tomás offered a small nod, then stepped closer to the suspect, touching the hinge of the old door as if to remind it that gravity still had weight."
13"The man’s shoulders sagged, and he looked toward the passage that would take them into the city’s subterranean heart."
14"She focused on the door that wasn’t a door, on the descent that would carry her into a world where rules bent and where she, a detective with eighteen years of …"
15"The market’s breath rose up around them, a living thing that would decide how far Quinn could push, how far she’d be permitted to push, and what truths would fi…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags27
uselessAdditionCount9
matches
0"he rasped, eyes narrowing as he backed toward a shadowed corner"
1"he hissed, voice dropping to a rasp"
2"she asked, not taking her gaze off him"
3"he said, voice tight, the word tasting like rust on his tongue"
4"Tomás added softly, as if the path ahead were a patient with a broken leg and a stubborn will to heal"
5"His voice cracked on, an edge of fear catching at the syllables"
6"Tomás said, voice low, the words crisp as gravel"
7"the suspect said, the words barely audible over the market’s murmur"
8"she said, her voice steady, the hint of something steely settling in"
84.78% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags23
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"he hissed (hiss)"
1"the suspect whispered (whisper)"
2"Tomás added softly (add)"
dialogueSentences45
tagDensity0.511
leniency1
rawRatio0.13
effectiveRatio0.13
70.2762%