Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTYBC1HKF2BRB6PK6Y8T785

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1m 7s
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$0.003035
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OpenAI

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

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A branch whipped my ear and I rolled, boot sole skidding on damp moss as the pendant in my fist throbbed against my pulse. The Heartstone hung warm at my chest, a small warmth in a sea of cold air that smelled of pine needles and old rain. I half crouched behind the ancient oak standing stones, listening to the hush between my heartbeats and the soft, wrong quiet beyond the circle. The Fae Grove had never felt friendly, not since I learned how time pooled here like a slow, viscous liquid. Time folded in on itself inside these roots and branches; an hour inside could be minutes outside, or it could swallow a whole afternoon and spit you out somewhere you didn’t recognise. The stones around me hummed with a low, stubborn vitality, as if they were listening for something I hadn’t learned the words to say. The grove pressed in on all sides, a living boundary between Earth and the Fae realm. Wildflowers bloomed year‑round in defiance of weather, a colourless chorus against the dark, and the air tasted faintly metallic, like coins dropped into a shallow stream. I had come here for a reason I would not admit aloud even to myself. Eva’s name had never left the back of my throat since Cardiff, not even when I left Evan behind and ran for London. She’d said the Hel portal would answer if I brought the Heartstone to where the stones could hear me. The benefactor who’d handed me the pendant had vanished into the ether of memory, leaving only the warm sting of its birthmark‑like glow and a note that said, simply: Trust the pulse. I trusted the pulse because it matched the beat in my left wrist, where a small crescent scar had lain since childhood—proof that fear could cut deep without teaching you how to scream. I pressed the pendant to my sternum. The room within the circle pulsed back, a heartbeat of its own, and the stones around me glowed with a patient, pale light. The pulse from the pendant flowed through me, a soft wind inside my chest, and I found myself listening for something I hadn’t known how to listen for before. The wrongness built slow, like a creeping fog you don’t notice until your teeth ache from it. At first I heard it as a rhythm I could almost place—drip, drip—though the drip came from nowhere and everywhere at once. Then there were sounds that should not have been there: the rustle of leaves that didn’t belong to this grove, the creak of old wood that whispered my name without any mouth moving. The edge of my vision kept snagging on shapes that didn’t sit still, like a reflection in water that refused to settle. “Not yet,” the pendant seemed to murmur, barely a sigh, as if the stone were listening along with me. It warmed again, feeding a tremor in my jaw rather than my nerves. A figure flickered at the corner of my eye: nothing solid, just a pale suggestion between shadow and leaf. When I turned, it had vanished, leaving a chill that clung to the skin. I steadied my breath, finger pressing into the scar on my wrist as if the mark were a seal I could break if I pulled enough air into my lungs. The pulse in the pendant steadied, then brightened, a tiny beacon in the black of the clearing. A sound rose—soft as silk, sharp as a knife’s edge—and the grove answered in a chorus of tiny noises that felt almost deliberate. A branch snapped somewhere far away, and the echo came back through the stones as if the earth itself had cleared its throat. A moth drifted past the edge of my vision, wings catching the pale light, then dissolved into nothing when I blinked. The whispering began, not with a voice but with a collection of mouths that hadn’t been given any air to form words. “Rory,” a voice said, not mine and not fully human, a trickle of sound that sounded like rain through sand. It wasn’t clear enough to be found, yet it felt intimate enough to be heard. The word rolled around inside my skull until it landed in a place I hadn’t planned to expose. “Who’s there?” I managed, though I already knew the grove was listening to me the way a hungry animal listens for footsteps. From the half‑dark deeper inside the circle came a flicker of movement, the sort you mistrust because it’s almost too precise. Branches brushed in a way that suggested a hand, not wind. A silhouette, too deliberate to be stray, stepped between two standing stones. Not human, not animal, something in between—slender, tall, with a presence that pressed against the skin like cold water poured over your head. It did not speak aloud; it pressed a question into the space between us with eyes that glowed a soft, impossible blue. The Heartstone warmed again, as if in approval of the intruder’s timing. The glow spread along the chain and warmed the skin of my chest as if a small sun had tucked itself under my shirt. I forced my breath to stay even, to pretend this was just another unexpected guest at a place where guests never brought good news. “Rory,” the pale figure echoed, and the air rippled with that name like a thread being pulled tight across a guitar string. The voice wasn’t male or female—human understanding strained at its pitch and cadence. It wasn’t entirely here or there, a memory pretending to be a person. It stepped closer, but the space between us did not close so much as breathe. I kept my eyes on the figure and tried to read the room as one reads a contract they didn’t want to sign but had to because it had your name on it. The standing stones—rough, ancient—stood like sentinels. The ancient oak between them lowered its branches as if listening. The grove itself seemed to lean inward, as though the ground were listening too and did not approve of what was being said. “What do you want?” I asked, letting the question come out with smooth certainty, as if I’d asked it a hundred times in a hundred different places, and never for myself. The figure did not smile. It didn’t show teeth. It did not nod. It did something with the air—a tremor at the edge of perception, a perturbation in the space just beyond the edge of my sight. The scent shifted, a blend of wet bark and something metallic, and the wildflowers that had refused to die in this place trembled as if hearing a joke they didn’t understand. “Time needs a guest,” the voice said, or perhaps thought. It wasn’t easy to tell where the speech ended and the idea began. “A guest?” I asked, which was not the right question, but it was the one that slid from my tongue before I could stop it. The figure raised a hand—an elegant, pale thing with long fingers and no nails to speak of. A line appeared along its wrist, a seam that hadn’t been there before, and a chill ran up my arm as if frost had crawled up from the ground. The binding in my scar tingled, a memory pricking at the back of my skull, telling me to run, to dive into the trees and never come back. I did not move. The pendant’s warmth intensified, and the light around the circle gathered, forming a doorway of sorts in the air, a window with no glass, a portal that hummed with a pitch I could hear if I concentrated hard enough. The Hel portal. The thing—whatever it was—stood next to the doorway in a way that suggested it owned the space, not just occupied it. The edges of the world peeled back a little where it stood, and for a heartbeat the grove looked like a painting someone was rotating slowly, the colours bleeding into one another. “Not yet,” the pendant whispered again, insisting, not in words but in a sense of pressure at my sternum. The urge to reach out was overwhelming, to touch the edge of the doorway and see what it hid, but I kept my hands tight around the chain, not daring to extend my length toward whatever lay beyond. The figure moved again, a gliding opposition to gravity. It pressed its head forward, a curious tilt that suggested both interest and disapproval. The blue light in its eyes deepened, and for a moment I saw a reflection of myself inside them, a Rory with a different set of choices, a life that never left Wales, never learned London’s grit. Then the vision dissolved and was replaced by the present: the cool damp air, the hollow whisper of leaves, the damp smell of earth cracking open somewhere unseen. “Are you alone?” I asked, partly as a test, partly because it felt like the only sentence that could make sense in this place. It did not answer with words or even a thought. Instead, the figure lowered its gaze to the pendant, and the light dimmed, as if it understood a truth I kept trying to pretend I did not know. The grove exhaled, a deep, patient sigh that carried the scent of rain that would never come. I shifted my stance, feeling the ground give way ever so slightly beneath one boot, as if the earth itself were tilting toward revelation and I was not prepared to stand upright for it. “Show me,” I said, because the smallest act of forcing a thing to reveal itself often did more than a dozen questions ever could. The figure’s lips did not move, but the space between us filled with a new sound—the soft scrabble of something scraping along the stones, a whisper of cloth on stone, a soft, childlike chime that wasn’t bells and wasn’t perfectly human. A second silhouette—no, not a silhouette, but a second breath of the grove—slid into view, taller than the first, slender and motionless in the shadow between two stones. The two figures formed a loose triangle, one at each end of the glade, the third barely there, a suggestion of something that belonged to the space in between. The Heartstone’s glow intensified. The warmth at my chest flared, then steadied into a steady, insistent throb, tracking a path on my skin the way a fingerprint traces the inside of a glove. The faint edge of a scent rose again, copper and rain and something almost like lilac, and something in the back of my skull whispered that I should turn and run, that the exit lay toward the path that led back to Richmond Park, to the world that still existed outside this circle. But the rightness of the pulse kept me in place. I spoke aloud, keeping my voice even, calm, careful not to betray the tremor behind my teeth. “The reason I came here isn’t a story you want to hear,” I said to the air, to the stones, to whatever watched us from beyond the circle. “I am not your guest. I am here to stop what comes through if I fail.” The pale figure stepped closer, the blue light in its eyes boiling to a pale white, and the other silhouette bent its head as if listening to an old spine crack in its own chest. The grove did not tremble with fear; it trembled with curiosity, as if it expected something to happen and was resigned to witnessing it. From the corner of my eye, something moved again, something small and quick and wrong. A leaf fell, but the breeze did not stir the branches nearby. The stems of the wildflowers fanned outward in a slow, impossible bloom, petals opening and closing in the same moment, as if commanded by a single, unseen hand. It should have looked absurd, but it felt almost ceremonial, like a ritual performed by plants that exist only in a book of fae lore I had never finished reading. The whispering intensified, a chorus of voices that did not belong to any creature I’d seen in my life. They spoke in syllables that clicked and chimed, a language of bells and breath. The edge of my sight caught movement again—this time a figure more of suggestion than shape, a presence that did not advance so much as insinuate itself into the space between us. The standing stones glowed faintly, and the air between the stones widened as though the grove had drawn a breath. “Show me,” I repeated, not as a demand but as a hinge upon which risk could swing either way. The second silhouette raised a hand, palm open, and in that gesture I saw something I recognised from my own past—a name spoken softly to a child who slept too little. The memory rose and stung, a reminder that danger here was not loud and grotesque but patient, waiting for you to tilt your head just the wrong way. The Heartstone sighed against my chest and the warmth through the chain steadied, like a quiet hand in the dark. The portal’s hum turned into a whispering current that ran along my nerves, a sting of static that answered the pulse in my scar. Then the first figure spoke without moving its mouth, a sentence I could not quite hear but felt in the hollow of my skull: you came for a truth that does not end where you think. A sudden, sharp crack split the air—the kind of sound that makes your bones answer in fear. The grove held its breath. The two silhouettes froze, the one closest to me lowering its head as if listening to the tick of a clock I could not hear. The circle of stones brightened, then dimmed, then brightened again in a rhythm that wasn’t a beat but a warning. The ground shifted under my boots, not violently, but with enough intent to reminder that nothing here was stable. The oak’s boughs moved as if a ghost were walking their limbs in a slow dance. The Wildflowers’ petals trembled; one blossom, purple-black and almost luminescent, swiveled toward me as if it had eyes and chose to rest on my shoulder for a moment before fluttering away. A voice, thinner than a thread of silk, whispered again, this time closer to reality, almost a voice you could catch if you listened very hard. The words did not land as sentences but as shards of meaning, each a promise and a warning. They are not your own. The sentence landed in my chest like a key turning in a lock. I felt the scar on my wrist tug as if it remembered this exact door in a different life, a door I had believed sealed long ago. The pale figure stepped back, and the circle narrowed, the glow tracing their edges until they became nothing more than silhouettes stitched into shadow. The air grew heavier, as though every breath I took drew a weight I hadn’t known I carried. A sudden, desperate thought rose in me—Could I survive the Hel portal if I passed through tonight? Could I bring back something that would redeem what came next? The Heartstone pulsed again, warmer now, a little warning around the bone of my collarbone. For a moment the grove opened, not a door but a window, and beyond it I saw a thread of moving light—the Hel, a seam between two worlds, strong enough to hold a future if you believed in it, fragile enough to tear you apart if you blinked. Then the first silhouette stepped forward once more, and something moved with it—an absence, a slipping away of a presence that should have shadowed its steps but did not. The second silhouette did not move; it simply absorbed light, becoming less a shape and more a texture of the air itself. The ripple of the grove intensified. The stone circle brightened in unison, as if the entire place exhaled in a single breath. And then, from the very edge of perception, a sound grew and grew until it dominated the space—the sound of something very old waking up, something with a dozen names and no names at all. The ground beneath me thrummed, faint but undeniable, and the air tasted of iron and rain and something sweeter I could not name. The glow of the Hel doorway widened fractionally, and the silhouettes bent toward it as if drawn by gravity, by necessity, by some obligation I had no part in setting. The pulse in the pendant leapt, louder, a drumbeat against my sternum, a speed‑up in a body that had learned to survive by keeping its own tempo. I steadied my breathing and stepped a little closer to the circle’s edge, careful to keep within the circle’s protective glow. The scar on my wrist glowed faintly in return, a tiny sunburst under my skin, and I felt a strange relief that I could still feel fear. Fear meant I was alive, and alive was a thing I could fight. The grove shifted again, not with wind but with intention. The two silhouettes now stood at the portal as if guarding it, while the third, that eerie, almost not-there presence, hovered near the outer fringe of the stones, watching everything, listening to something inside the hollow of the Hel doorway. The Heartstone’s warmth braided with that other presence, and I understood—whatever came through tonight would demand a bargain. It would ask for something in return for passage, for safety, for a future I might not want to sign away. And then a sound beyond sound—a sudden, abrupt click like a lock turning, muffled by distance and age—and the Hel portal flared. Not bright, not blinding, but a doorway of compressed possibility, the old fabric between worlds thinning to reveal a corridor of pale light and shadow. The two silhouettes stepped backward as if the space itself resisted their intrusion. The third came forward more decisively, the thing that did not belong to light or shadow, something with a breath that smelled like rain and copper and old coins. The approaches of that presence blocked my breath; I felt it more than I saw it, a pressure that pressed against my lungs and whispered a single, chilling sentence into the space between my ribs: You are not ready. I did not look away. I returned to the centre of the circle, to the warm heartbeat against my chest, to the way the stones thrummed in a rhythm that matched the pulse in my scar and, for a moment, in the room behind my eyes, I saw the city of London in miniature, a map burned into memory by a fire I had not yet learned to extinguish. Then the third presence stepped closer, and the grove exhaled again as if it had been holding its breath for decades. The air grew colder, and the edge of the blue light sharpened until it felt like a blade against my thoughts. I heard a voice, not mine, a whisper brushing against my ear, a promise and a warning rolled into one. The pulse in the Heartstone surged, not violently but with assurance, and the world narrowed to a single point—the place where I stood, the stones around me, the portal that glowed with pale intent, and the figure who would decide whether I walked away with part of my soul intact. I did not blink. I did not hesitate. I felt the scar ashore with that ancient memory, felt the pendant’s glow spike in a last, bright flare, and I stepped toward the Hel doorway, toward the thing that would answer or undo the reason I had come here. The moment before I crossed, the grove stuttered—the light wavered, the petals froze mid‑bloom, and the world in that loop of time trembled with a fierce, sudden edge. Something unsaid pressed against me from the other side, a presence eager and terrible, and the air turned thick with something like velvet and rust. Then the doorway swallowed me, not with the violence of a fall but with the inevitability of a verdict. I did not scream. I did not think. I moved as if guided by a compass I never learned to read, bearing the heart within me, the breath of the grove in my lungs, and the quiet, stubborn resolve that I would not become a memory folded away in someone else’s pocket. And in the moment of crossing, the last thing I heard was the grove’s old oak creaking a reply to the Hel’s demand, a sound that might have been laughter or a hinge protesting its fate. The standing stones dimmed, the light around the circle dimmed, and for an instant I felt the weight of a future being tipped toward me like a coin held between two fingers. Then the world snapped shut behind me with a cold, final air—that moment when nothing is certain and everything is possible—and I found myself standing in something not quite real, with the Heartstone burning at my sternum and the two silhouettes of the grove receding into memory, while the third presence pressed closer, and the pulse in my scar beat louder, as if answering a question I hadn’t yet dared to ask. The horror, restraint intact, waited in the silence that followed, and the next breath would decide everything.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"the pendant whispered again [again]"
dialogueSentences13
tagDensity0.923
leniency1
rawRatio0.083
effectiveRatio0.083
90.37% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3633
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"ever so slightly"
count1
2
adverb"perfectly"
count1
3
adverb"softly"
count1
4
adverb"very"
count3
highlights
0"slowly"
1"ever so slightly"
2"perfectly"
3"softly"
4"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
29.81% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3633
totalAiIsms51
found
0
word"throbbed"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count11
2
word"warmth"
count5
3
word"pulsed"
count2
4
word"flickered"
count1
5
word"chill"
count2
6
word"beacon"
count1
7
word"silk"
count2
8
word"echo"
count1
9
word"footsteps"
count1
10
word"flicker"
count1
11
word"echoed"
count1
12
word"sentinels"
count1
13
word"trembled"
count4
14
word"sense of"
count1
15
word"whisper"
count3
16
word"throb"
count1
17
word"reminder"
count2
18
word"dance"
count1
19
word"tracing"
count1
20
word"weight"
count2
21
word"chilling"
count1
22
word"wavered"
count1
23
word"velvet"
count1
24
word"resolve"
count1
25
word"the last thing"
count1
26
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"throbbed"
1"pulse"
2"warmth"
3"pulsed"
4"flickered"
5"chill"
6"beacon"
7"silk"
8"echo"
9"footsteps"
10"flicker"
11"echoed"
12"sentinels"
13"trembled"
14"sense of"
15"whisper"
16"throb"
17"reminder"
18"dance"
19"tracing"
20"weight"
21"chilling"
22"wavered"
23"velvet"
24"resolve"
25"the last thing"
26"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences161
matches
0"e with fear"
1"r in fear"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences161
filterMatches
0"think"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences162
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen74
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3601
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions22
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions35
wordCount3518
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity0.26
worstName"Heartstone"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Fae"
discoveredNames
Heartstone9
Fae2
Grove1
Earth1
Cardiff1
Evan1
London3
Hel9
Trust1
Rory1
Wales1
Richmond1
Park1
Could2
You1
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Grove"
2"Earth"
3"Evan"
4"Rory"
5"Could"
6"You"
places
0"Fae"
1"Cardiff"
2"London"
3"Hel"
4"Wales"
5"Richmond"
6"Park"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences147
glossingSentenceCount13
matches
0"sounded like rain through sand"
1"as if listening"
2"as if hearing a joke they didn’t understand"
3"looked like a painting someone was rotati"
4"felt like the only sentence that could"
5"as if listening to an old spine crack in its own chest"
6"not quite hear but felt in the hollow of my skull: you came for a truth that does not end where you think"
7"as if listening to the tick of a clock I could not hear"
8"as if guarding it, while the third, that eerie, almost not-there presence, hovered near the outer fringe of the stones, watching everything, listening to something inside the hollow of the Hel doorway"
9"smelled like rain and copper and old coins"
10"felt like a blade against my thoughts"
11"something like velvet and rust"
12"as if answering a question I hadn’t yet dared to ask"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches15
per1kWords4.166
wordCount3601
matches
0"not with a voice but with a collection of mouths"
1"not the right question, but it was the one"
2"Not yet,” the pendant whispered again, insisting, not in words but in a sense of pressure at my sternum"
3"not in words but in a sense of pressure at my sternum"
4"not a silhouette, but a second breath of the grove"
5"not as a demand but as a hinge upon"
6"not loud and grotesque but patient, waiting for you to tilt your head just the wrong wa"
7"not quite hear but felt in the hollow of my skull: you came for a truth"
8"not violently, but with enough intent to reminder"
9"not a door but a window"
10"not with wind but with intention"
11"Not bright, not blinding, but a doorway of compressed possibility, the old fabric between"
12"not blinding, but a doorway of compressed possibility, the old fabric between"
13"not violently but with assurance"
14"not with the violence of a fall but with the inevitability of a verdict"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences162
matches
0"whispered that I run, that the"
70.17% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs59
mean61.03
std24.15
cv0.396
sampleLengths
072
1118
2122
359
494
532
680
789
853
922
1089
1160
1263
1373
1431
1568
1623
1725
1878
1995
2057
2188
2224
2338
2451
2565
2657
2786
2827
2944
3059
3185
3285
3319
3459
3544
3636
3767
3866
3944
405
4140
4270
4363
4451
4580
4657
4761
4889
4989
90.01% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount7
totalSentences161
matches
0"been given"
1"being pulled"
2"being said"
3"was—stood"
4"was replaced"
5"was resigned"
6"being tipped"
98.99% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount8
totalVerbs528
matches
0"were listening"
1"were listening"
2"was listening"
3"were listening"
4"was rotating"
5"was overwhelming"
6"were tilting"
7"were walking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount30
semicolonCount6
flaggedSentences29
totalSentences162
ratio0.179
matches
0"Time folded in on itself inside these roots and branches; an hour inside could be minutes outside, or it could swallow a whole afternoon and spit you out somewhere you didn’t recognise."
1"I trusted the pulse because it matched the beat in my left wrist, where a small crescent scar had lain since childhood—proof that fear could cut deep without teaching you how to scream."
2"At first I heard it as a rhythm I could almost place—drip, drip—though the drip came from nowhere and everywhere at once."
3"A sound rose—soft as silk, sharp as a knife’s edge—and the grove answered in a chorus of tiny noises that felt almost deliberate."
4"Not human, not animal, something in between—slender, tall, with a presence that pressed against the skin like cold water poured over your head."
5"It did not speak aloud; it pressed a question into the space between us with eyes that glowed a soft, impossible blue."
6"The voice wasn’t male or female—human understanding strained at its pitch and cadence."
7"The standing stones—rough, ancient—stood like sentinels."
8"It did something with the air—a tremor at the edge of perception, a perturbation in the space just beyond the edge of my sight."
9"The figure raised a hand—an elegant, pale thing with long fingers and no nails to speak of."
10"The thing—whatever it was—stood next to the doorway in a way that suggested it owned the space, not just occupied it."
11"The figure’s lips did not move, but the space between us filled with a new sound—the soft scrabble of something scraping along the stones, a whisper of cloth on stone, a soft, childlike chime that wasn’t bells and wasn’t perfectly human."
12"A second silhouette—no, not a silhouette, but a second breath of the grove—slid into view, taller than the first, slender and motionless in the shadow between two stones."
13"The grove did not tremble with fear; it trembled with curiosity, as if it expected something to happen and was resigned to witnessing it."
14"The edge of my sight caught movement again—this time a figure more of suggestion than shape, a presence that did not advance so much as insinuate itself into the space between us."
15"The second silhouette raised a hand, palm open, and in that gesture I saw something I recognised from my own past—a name spoken softly to a child who slept too little."
16"A sudden, sharp crack split the air—the kind of sound that makes your bones answer in fear."
17"The Wildflowers’ petals trembled; one blossom, purple-black and almost luminescent, swiveled toward me as if it had eyes and chose to rest on my shoulder for a moment before fluttering away."
18"A sudden, desperate thought rose in me—Could I survive the Hel portal if I passed through tonight?"
19"For a moment the grove opened, not a door but a window, and beyond it I saw a thread of moving light—the Hel, a seam between two worlds, strong enough to hold a future if you believed in it, fragile enough to tear you apart if you blinked."
20"Then the first silhouette stepped forward once more, and something moved with it—an absence, a slipping away of a presence that should have shadowed its steps but did not."
21"The second silhouette did not move; it simply absorbed light, becoming less a shape and more a texture of the air itself."
22"And then, from the very edge of perception, a sound grew and grew until it dominated the space—the sound of something very old waking up, something with a dozen names and no names at all."
23"The Heartstone’s warmth braided with that other presence, and I understood—whatever came through tonight would demand a bargain."
24"And then a sound beyond sound—a sudden, abrupt click like a lock turning, muffled by distance and age—and the Hel portal flared."
25"The approaches of that presence blocked my breath; I felt it more than I saw it, a pressure that pressed against my lungs and whispered a single, chilling sentence into the space between my ribs: You are not ready."
26"The pulse in the Heartstone surged, not violently but with assurance, and the world narrowed to a single point—the place where I stood, the stones around me, the portal that glowed with pale intent, and the figure who would decide whether I walked away with part of my soul intact."
27"The moment before I crossed, the grove stuttered—the light wavered, the petals froze mid‑bloom, and the world in that loop of time trembled with a fierce, sudden edge."
28"Then the world snapped shut behind me with a cold, final air—that moment when nothing is certain and everything is possible—and I found myself standing in something not quite real, with the Heartstone burning at my sternum and the two silhouettes of the grove receding into memory, while the third presence pressed closer, and the pulse in my scar beat louder, as if answering a question I hadn’t yet dared to ask."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2339
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount86
adverbRatio0.0367678495083369
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.007695596408721676
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences162
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences162
mean22.23
std11.12
cv0.5
sampleLengths
024
124
224
320
432
524
616
726
815
923
1019
1132
1233
137
1423
1529
1617
1722
1833
1922
2019
2113
2219
2314
2430
2517
2623
2723
2821
2922
3020
3115
3218
3322
3421
3511
3612
3723
3822
3912
4024
4124
4222
4313
4413
4515
4633
476
4811
4923
25.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats43
diversityRatio0.16666666666666666
totalSentences162
uniqueOpeners27
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount8
totalSentences160
matches
0"Then there were sounds that"
1"Then the vision dissolved and"
2"Instead, the figure lowered its"
3"Then the first figure spoke"
4"Then the first silhouette stepped"
5"Then the third presence stepped"
6"Then the doorway swallowed me,"
7"Then the world snapped shut"
ratio0.05
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount44
totalSentences160
matches
0"I half crouched behind the"
1"I had come here for"
2"She’d said the Hel portal"
3"I trusted the pulse because"
4"I pressed the pendant to"
5"It warmed again, feeding a"
6"I steadied my breath, finger"
7"It wasn’t clear enough to"
8"I managed, though I already"
9"It did not speak aloud;"
10"I forced my breath to"
11"It wasn’t entirely here or"
12"It stepped closer, but the"
13"I kept my eyes on"
14"I asked, letting the question"
15"It didn’t show teeth."
16"It did not nod."
17"It did something with the"
18"It wasn’t easy to tell"
19"I asked, which was not"
ratio0.275
22.50% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount140
totalSentences160
matches
0"A branch whipped my ear"
1"The Heartstone hung warm at"
2"I half crouched behind the"
3"The Fae Grove had never"
4"Time folded in on itself"
5"The stones around me hummed"
6"The grove pressed in on"
7"Wildflowers bloomed year‑round in defiance"
8"I had come here for"
9"Eva’s name had never left"
10"She’d said the Hel portal"
11"The benefactor who’d handed me"
12"I trusted the pulse because"
13"I pressed the pendant to"
14"The room within the circle"
15"The pulse from the pendant"
16"The wrongness built slow, like"
17"The edge of my vision"
18"the pendant seemed to murmur,"
19"It warmed again, feeding a"
ratio0.875
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences160
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences131
technicalSentenceCount29
matches
0"The Heartstone hung warm at my chest, a small warmth in a sea of cold air that smelled of pine needles and old rain."
1"The stones around me hummed with a low, stubborn vitality, as if they were listening for something I hadn’t learned the words to say."
2"The benefactor who’d handed me the pendant had vanished into the ether of memory, leaving only the warm sting of its birthmark‑like glow and a note that said, s…"
3"I steadied my breath, finger pressing into the scar on my wrist as if the mark were a seal I could break if I pulled enough air into my lungs."
4"A sound rose—soft as silk, sharp as a knife’s edge—and the grove answered in a chorus of tiny noises that felt almost deliberate."
5"The scent shifted, a blend of wet bark and something metallic, and the wildflowers that had refused to die in this place trembled as if hearing a joke they didn…"
6"The binding in my scar tingled, a memory pricking at the back of my skull, telling me to run, to dive into the trees and never come back."
7"The pendant’s warmth intensified, and the light around the circle gathered, forming a doorway of sorts in the air, a window with no glass, a portal that hummed …"
8"I shifted my stance, feeling the ground give way ever so slightly beneath one boot, as if the earth itself were tilting toward revelation and I was not prepared…"
9"The figure’s lips did not move, but the space between us filled with a new sound—the soft scrabble of something scraping along the stones, a whisper of cloth on…"
10"The two figures formed a loose triangle, one at each end of the glade, the third barely there, a suggestion of something that belonged to the space in between."
11"The faint edge of a scent rose again, copper and rain and something almost like lilac, and something in the back of my skull whispered that I should turn and ru…"
12"The pale figure stepped closer, the blue light in its eyes boiling to a pale white, and the other silhouette bent its head as if listening to an old spine crack…"
13"The grove did not tremble with fear; it trembled with curiosity, as if it expected something to happen and was resigned to witnessing it."
14"The stems of the wildflowers fanned outward in a slow, impossible bloom, petals opening and closing in the same moment, as if commanded by a single, unseen hand…"
15"It should have looked absurd, but it felt almost ceremonial, like a ritual performed by plants that exist only in a book of fae lore I had never finished readin…"
16"The second silhouette raised a hand, palm open, and in that gesture I saw something I recognised from my own past—a name spoken softly to a child who slept too …"
17"The two silhouettes froze, the one closest to me lowering its head as if listening to the tick of a clock I could not hear."
18"I felt the scar on my wrist tug as if it remembered this exact door in a different life, a door I had believed sealed long ago."
19"The glow of the Hel doorway widened fractionally, and the silhouettes bent toward it as if drawn by gravity, by necessity, by some obligation I had no part in s…"
20"The pulse in the pendant leapt, louder, a drumbeat against my sternum, a speed‑up in a body that had learned to survive by keeping its own tempo."
21"The two silhouettes now stood at the portal as if guarding it, while the third, that eerie, almost not-there presence, hovered near the outer fringe of the ston…"
22"The third came forward more decisively, the thing that did not belong to light or shadow, something with a breath that smelled like rain and copper and old coin…"
23"I returned to the centre of the circle, to the warm heartbeat against my chest, to the way the stones thrummed in a rhythm that matched the pulse in my scar and…"
24"The pulse in the Heartstone surged, not violently but with assurance, and the world narrowed to a single point—the place where I stood, the stones around me, th…"
25"I felt the scar ashore with that ancient memory, felt the pendant’s glow spike in a last, bright flare, and I stepped toward the Hel doorway, toward the thing t…"
26"And in the moment of crossing, the last thing I heard was the grove’s old oak creaking a reply to the Hel’s demand, a sound that might have been laughter or a h…"
27"Then the world snapped shut behind me with a cold, final air—that moment when nothing is certain and everything is possible—and I found myself standing in somet…"
28"The horror, restraint intact, waited in the silence that followed, and the next breath would decide everything."
83.33% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"the pale figure echoed, and the air rippled with that name like a thread being pulled tight across a guitar string"
38.89% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"the pendant whispered again (whisper)"
1"I repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences13
tagDensity0.692
leniency1
rawRatio0.222
effectiveRatio0.222
71.6357%