Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTYCQPDAE6KYMF9W35HTCCA

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The deadbolts clicked one by one, each tumbler falling like a countdown to something inevitable. Eva's voice carried through the door, muffled by three inches of reinforced wood. "Rory? Did you forget your keys again?" The door swung open. Lucien stood in the cramped hallway, his platinum hair catching the harsh fluorescent light. The ivory-handled cane rested against his shoulder like a gentleman's walking stick, but Aurora knew the blade hidden inside. His mismatched eyes—amber and black—swept over her with the precision of a man cataloguing weaknesses. "Bonsoir, Aurora." The French rolled off his tongue like smoke. She'd forgotten how he said her full name, how it sounded like a promise and a threat wrapped in silk. "Eva's not here." "I know." He stepped forward. Not inside, not yet, but close enough that she caught his scent. Expensive cologne layered over something darker. Something that reminded her of burnt offerings and old churches. "May I?" "That depends." "On what?" "Whether you're here to help or to collect." His smile was knife-thin. "Can't it be both?" Ptolemy appeared from the depths of the flat, winding between Lucien's legs with the casual affection of an old friend. The tabby cat had always been a poor judge of character. "Traitor," Aurora muttered. She stepped aside. Lucien moved through Eva's flat like he owned it, cane tapping against the hardwood floors. Books cascaded from every surface—grimoires bound in cracked leather, university texts on comparative mythology, takeaway menus written in languages that predated Christ. He picked up a scroll from the coffee table, unrolled it with one finger. "Binding rituals. How very Eva." He set it down carefully. "She's trying to contain something, isn't she?" "You'd have to ask her." "I'm asking you." Aurora crossed her arms. The movement pulled her delivery uniform tight across her chest, and she caught Lucien's gaze flicker downward before returning to her face. Three months. Three months since she'd seen him, and her body still responded like a tuning fork struck against stone. "Why are you here, Luc?" "Your friend has been asking dangerous questions. About dangerous people." "Eva's always asking questions. It's what she does." "Not about the Blackwood family." The name landed between them like a bomb with a slow fuse. Aurora felt the blood drain from her face. "What about the Blackwoods?" Lucien moved to the window, pushed aside the heavy curtains. The curry house below cast golden light across his sharp features. "Someone's been digging into their financial records. Corporate holdings. Shell companies. The kind of investigation that gets people disappeared." "Eva's writing her dissertation on—" "Corporate witchcraft, yes. I know." He turned back to her. "The Blackwoods aren't just another magical dynasty, chérie. They're old money. Old power. Old enough to remember when London was Londinium and the Thames ran red with more than just rust." Aurora's left wrist throbbed. The small crescent-shaped scar always ached when she was stressed, a childhood accident that had never properly healed. "How old?" "Pre-Roman." "Shit." "Precisely." Lucien tapped his cane against the floor. "Your flatmate has stumbled onto something that could reshape our understanding of British magical history. Unfortunately, she's also stumbled onto something that could get her killed." "So warn her." "I'm warning you." "I'm not Eva." "No." His amber eye caught the light. "You're the one who lives above Silas's bar. You're the one who delivers takeaway to half the supernatural community in East London. You're the one who disappeared from Cardiff with no forwarding address and a black eye that took three weeks to fade." Aurora's breath caught. "How do you—" "I make it my business to know things, Aurora. Especially about people who matter." The words hung in the air between them. *People who matter.* Three months ago, she'd mattered enough for late-night conversations in languages she didn't speak. Long enough for his hands to map every inch of her skin like he was memorising a prayer. Long enough for him to disappear the morning she'd told him about Evan. "Don't." "Don't what?" "Don't pretend you care. Not after—" "After what?" He stepped closer. "After you told me about your ex-boyfriend and I had to leave London for six weeks?" "You left because you couldn't handle my baggage." "I left because I killed him." The confession hit her like cold water. Aurora staggered backward, her hip catching the edge of Eva's kitchen counter. "What?" "Evan Pritchard. Twenty-six years old. Law student at Cardiff University. Fond of using his fists to make points during arguments." Lucien's voice was steady, clinical. "Found dead in his flat three days after you fled to London. Apparent heart attack, though the coroner noted some unusual scarring around his chest. Looked almost like burn marks." "You're lying." "I don't lie about murder, chérie. It's unprofessional." Aurora's knees gave out. She slid down the kitchen cabinet until she was sitting on Eva's linoleum floor, staring up at the man she'd thought she knew. "Why?" "You had a handprint bruise around your throat. Fingermarks on your wrists that matched defensive wounds. A medical report from A&E that listed three separate incidents of 'accidental' injury over eighteen months." Lucien crouched in front of her, his cane balanced across his knees. "He hurt you. I removed the problem." "That wasn't your choice to make." "Wasn't it?" The question lingered between them. Outside, the evening rush hour continued—buses grinding through gears, tourists laughing their way toward pubs, the eternal symphony of London after dark. Inside Eva's flat, the silence stretched taut as piano wire. "The Blackwoods," Aurora said finally. "What do they want with Eva?" "Her research threatens their carefully constructed history. They've spent centuries burying certain truths about their rise to power. About what they sacrificed to become what they are." He reached out, almost touched her cheek, then let his hand fall. "They'll kill her to keep their secrets buried." "Then we stop them." "We?" Aurora pushed herself to her feet. The movement brought her close enough to see the flecks of gold in his amber eye, close enough to remember what his mouth tasted like at three in the morning. "You came here for a reason, Lucien. Not just to warn me. You need something." His smile was sharp as winter. "Eva has something they want. A document. Something she found in the British Library's restricted archives that proves the Blackwoods aren't what they claim to be." "What are they?" "Thieves. Murderers. Usurpers who killed the real Blackwood line in 1666 and took their place." His cane clicked against the floor. "The document proves it. Names, dates, witnesses. Enough to destroy them." "So we give them what they want." "And let them bury the truth again?" Aurora moved closer. She could see her reflection in the black pupil of his inhuman eye, could smell the sulfur that clung to his clothes like expensive aftershave. "What do you want, Luc? Really?" "I want them destroyed." "Why?" "Because they killed my mother." The confession cracked something open between them. Three months of silence, of hurt feelings and abandoned conversations, and it came down to this—two broken people standing in a cluttered flat above a curry house, talking about murder like other people discussed the weather. "The document," Aurora said. "Where is it?" "Eva hid it. Smart girl. But they'll find it eventually. They have resources. Connections. Time." He paused. "We don't." "How long?" "Days. Maybe hours." Aurora looked around Eva's flat—at the books and scrolls and carefully organised chaos of a brilliant mind trying to make sense of an impossible world. Her friend was out there somewhere, probably in another library or archive, chasing down footnotes and cross-references, completely unaware that she'd painted a target on her back. "We need to find her first." "Yes." "And then?" Lucien's smile was all teeth and shadows. "Then we give the Blackwoods exactly what they deserve." The front door's deadbolts clicked again. Once. Twice. The third lock stuck, and Eva's voice carried through the wood. "Bloody hell. Rory, did you break my door again?" Aurora looked at Lucien. He straightened his tie, adjusted his cane, became the perfect picture of continental sophistication in under three seconds. "Show time," he murmured. The door swung open, and Eva stepped inside with her arms full of library books and her mobile pressed to her ear. She took in the scene—Aurora pressed against the kitchen counter, Lucien standing by the window like he owned the place, Ptolemy purring at his feet. "I'll call you back," she said into the phone, then hung up and stared at them both. "Well. This is unexpected."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"He turned back [back]"
1"Aurora said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences83
tagDensity0.181
leniency0.361
rawRatio0.133
effectiveRatio0.048
75.80% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1446
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"carefully"
count3
2
adverb"precisely"
count1
3
adverb"really"
count1
4
adverb"completely"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"carefully"
2"precisely"
3"really"
4"completely"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Blackwood"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
61.96% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1446
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"silk"
count1
1
word"depths"
count1
2
word"affection"
count1
3
word"flicker"
count1
4
word"throbbed"
count1
5
word"symphony"
count1
6
word"silence"
count2
7
word"constructed"
count1
8
word"sense of"
count1
9
word"perfect"
count1
highlights
0"silk"
1"depths"
2"affection"
3"flicker"
4"throbbed"
5"symphony"
6"silence"
7"constructed"
8"sense of"
9"perfect"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences74
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences74
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences141
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen44
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords3
totalWords1432
ratio0.002
matches
0"People who matter."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions23
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
58.98% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions44
wordCount824
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.82
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora15
French1
Lucien11
Eva8
Christ1
Three4
Evan1
London1
Ptolemy2
persons
0"Aurora"
1"French"
2"Lucien"
3"Eva"
4"Evan"
5"Ptolemy"
places
0"Three"
1"London"
globalScore0.59
windowScore0.833
51.96% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences51
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"sounded like a promise and a threat wrappe"
1"tasted like at three in the morning"
60.34% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.397
wordCount1432
matches
0"Not inside, not yet, but close enough"
1"not yet, but close enough"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences141
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs91
mean15.74
std16.46
cv1.046
sampleLengths
028
17
24
348
42
528
63
735
82
92
108
118
1231
133
143
1551
1617
175
183
1946
205
2110
228
235
2420
254
2640
275
2841
2922
302
311
321
3334
343
353
363
3750
386
3914
4056
411
422
436
4421
458
466
4719
481
4955
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences74
matches
0"was stressed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs144
matches
0"was memorising"
1"was sitting"
21.28% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences141
ratio0.043
matches
0"His mismatched eyes—amber and black—swept over her with the precision of a man cataloguing weaknesses."
1"Books cascaded from every surface—grimoires bound in cracked leather, university texts on comparative mythology, takeaway menus written in languages that predated Christ."
2"Outside, the evening rush hour continued—buses grinding through gears, tourists laughing their way toward pubs, the eternal symphony of London after dark."
3"Three months of silence, of hurt feelings and abandoned conversations, and it came down to this—two broken people standing in a cluttered flat above a curry house, talking about murder like other people discussed the weather."
4"Aurora looked around Eva's flat—at the books and scrolls and carefully organised chaos of a brilliant mind trying to make sense of an impossible world."
5"She took in the scene—Aurora pressed against the kitchen counter, Lucien standing by the window like he owned the place, Ptolemy purring at his feet."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount836
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount32
adverbRatio0.03827751196172249
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.007177033492822967
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences141
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences141
mean10.16
std9.12
cv0.898
sampleLengths
015
113
27
34
414
519
615
72
88
920
103
115
1212
136
1410
152
162
172
188
194
204
2120
2211
233
243
2515
2622
2714
2810
297
305
313
324
3322
342
3518
365
3710
388
395
4012
418
424
4310
4411
4519
465
4710
4831
494
65.48% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.41843971631205673
totalSentences141
uniqueOpeners59
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences67
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount19
totalSentences67
matches
0"His mismatched eyes—amber and black—swept"
1"She'd forgotten how he said"
2"He stepped forward"
3"His smile was knife-thin."
4"She stepped aside."
5"He picked up a scroll"
6"He set it down carefully"
7"He turned back to her"
8"His amber eye caught the"
9"He stepped closer"
10"She slid down the kitchen"
11"He reached out, almost touched"
12"His smile was sharp as"
13"His cane clicked against the"
14"She could see her reflection"
15"Her friend was out there"
16"He straightened his tie, adjusted"
17"She took in the scene—Aurora"
18"she said into the phone,"
ratio0.284
19.70% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount59
totalSentences67
matches
0"The deadbolts clicked one by"
1"Eva's voice carried through the"
2"The door swung open."
3"Lucien stood in the cramped"
4"The ivory-handled cane rested against"
5"His mismatched eyes—amber and black—swept"
6"The French rolled off his"
7"She'd forgotten how he said"
8"He stepped forward"
9"Something that reminded her of"
10"His smile was knife-thin."
11"Ptolemy appeared from the depths"
12"The tabby cat had always"
13"She stepped aside."
14"Lucien moved through Eva's flat"
15"Books cascaded from every surface—grimoires"
16"He picked up a scroll"
17"He set it down carefully"
18"Aurora crossed her arms."
19"The movement pulled her delivery"
ratio0.881
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences67
matches(empty)
ratio0
61.22% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences35
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Something that reminded her of burnt offerings and old churches."
1"The small crescent-shaped scar always ached when she was stressed, a childhood accident that had never properly healed."
2"*People who matter.* Three months ago, she'd mattered enough for late-night conversations in languages she didn't speak."
3"She could see her reflection in the black pupil of his inhuman eye, could smell the sulfur that clung to his clothes like expensive aftershave."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Aurora muttered (mutter)"
1"he murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences83
tagDensity0.06
leniency0.12
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.048
78.3574%