Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTYD2D9CJYJAFWMHD3ZBYST

Run Details

Duration:
1m 32s
Cost:
$0.091640
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The green neon of The Raven's Nest bled through the rain-slicked window and pooled on the pavement like something spilled. Rory pushed through the door with her shoulder, one hand still gripping the straps of the delivery bag she hadn't bothered to drop upstairs. The dinner rush at the Golden Empress had run late, Yu-Fei cursing at a backed-up fryer while Rory pedaled through Soho traffic with two bags of char siu balanced on her handlebars. Her jacket was damp at the shoulders. Her fingers smelled of sesame oil. The bar sat quiet for a Thursday. A couple murmured in the corner booth beneath a framed photograph of some harbor Rory had never been able to identify. Silas stood behind the bar drying a glass with the unhurried rotation of a man who had nowhere pressing to be and hadn't in years. He glanced up when the door swung shut. "You look like a cat someone tried to drown." "Cheers, Si. Lovely to see you too." She dropped the bag on the nearest stool and peeled her jacket off. Silas set a whiskey in front of her without being asked, the silver signet ring on his right hand catching the low amber light as he pushed the glass forward. Rory wrapped both hands around it but didn't drink. The warmth was enough. "Quiet night," she said. "It's the rain. Keeps the tourists in their hotels feeling sorry for themselves." Rory let her gaze wander across the old maps tacked to the walls, the yellowed edges curling like dried leaves. She'd memorized most of them in the year since she'd moved into the flat upstairs. The one nearest the door showed shipping routes through the Strait of Malacca. Another pinned behind the bar displayed pre-war Berlin in obsessive cartographic detail. She'd asked Silas about them once. He'd changed the subject with the fluid grace of a man who'd spent decades being debriefed. The door opened again. Rory didn't turn. She heard the footsteps—heavy, deliberate, the kind made by someone who'd learned to walk into rooms like they belonged there—and then the sharp intake of breath that wasn't hers. "Rory?" The voice landed in her chest before her brain caught up. She knew it the way she knew the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist: a thing so familiar it had become invisible until someone pointed at it. She turned on the stool. Niamh Gallagher stood just inside the doorway, rain beading on the shoulders of a charcoal coat that fit her like it had been cut specifically for her frame. Which, knowing the woman Niamh appeared to have become, it probably had. Her red hair, once a wild tangle she'd worn in scrunchies and elastic bands nicked from the postman, was now cropped close at the sides and swept back in a precise wave. Silver studs in both ears. A watch on her left wrist that caught the neon and threw it back in fragments. Rory's mouth opened. Closed. Opened again. "Jesus Christ. Niamh." "I thought that was you." Niamh took a step closer, then stopped, as if proximity required permission. Her eyes—the same sea-glass green Rory remembered—moved over Rory's face with the careful attention of someone cataloging damage. "I almost didn't—you cut your hair." "Two years ago." Rory touched the ends where they brushed her shoulders. "You look..." She trailed off because the word she wanted was *different*, and that felt like an accusation. Niamh filled the silence by pulling out the stool beside her and sitting down. She moved with an economy of motion Rory didn't recognize. The Niamh she'd known at Cardiff had been all angles and restlessness, knees bouncing under lecture desks, fingers drumming on table edges, a girl who couldn't sit still long enough to finish a cup of tea. This woman settled into the stool like a stone dropped into water. Silas appeared without fanfare. "What can I get you?" "Gin and tonic. Hendrick's, if you have it." He did. Rory watched him pour and watched Niamh watch him pour and felt the strange vertigo of two worlds colliding—the London life she'd built brick by careful brick, and the Cardiff life she'd fled. "How long has it been?" Niamh asked, though the tightness around her mouth suggested she already knew. "Four years. Give or take." "Four years and three months." Niamh accepted the drink from Silas with a nod. "Not that I counted." "You always counted everything. Used to drive Professor Hale spare." Something flickered across Niamh's face. Not quite a smile. The ghost of one, maybe. The place where a smile would have been if things between them hadn't calcified into whatever this was—two women on barstools performing the archaeology of a friendship. "What are you doing in London?" Rory asked. "Consulting. Financial compliance, cross-border transactions. Boring stuff." "Since when do you do boring stuff?" "Since it started paying six figures." The number sat between them, not a boast but a fact stated with the same flatness Niamh might have used to report the weather. Rory thought of her delivery bag slumped on the stool beside her, the lingering smell of char siu, the flat upstairs with its radiator that clanked like a prisoner rattling chains. She took a sip of her whiskey. "Good for you, Niamh. Genuinely." "Don't do that." "Do what?" "That thing where you congratulate someone like you're conceding a debate." Rory set her glass down. The whiskey burned a line through her chest. Behind the bar, Silas had moved to the far end, ostensibly reorganizing bottles, though Rory noticed the slight angle of his head, the way his hands slowed when the conversation got interesting. Old habits. He couldn't help it. "I'm not conceding anything. I'm happy for you." "You're deflecting. You were always brilliant at that. Change the subject, make the other person talk about themselves, never answer the actual question." "You didn't ask me a question." Niamh wrapped her fingers around her glass. Her nails were clean, filed into neat ovals. The Niamh from Cardiff had bitten hers to the quick. "Fine. Here's one. Why did you disappear?" The word *disappear* landed like a stone in still water. Rory felt the ripples move through her. She traced the rim of her glass with one finger and stared at the map of Berlin behind the bar. "I didn't disappear. I moved." "You changed your number. Deleted your socials. Eva wouldn't tell me where you'd gone—just that you were safe. *Safe.* Like you'd been in witness protection." "Eva was doing what I asked her to do." "Right. And what about what I asked? I must have sent you thirty messages before the number went dead." "Thirty-two." Niamh's jaw tightened. "So you did count." Rory turned the glass in a slow circle. The amber liquid caught the dim light and held it. "I read them all, Niamh. Every one." "And?" "And I couldn't answer. Not then." "Because of Evan." The name landed between them like a dropped blade. Rory's fingers stilled on the glass. She didn't look up. She could feel Niamh watching her, could feel the weight of all the things Niamh had probably pieced together in the years since—the cancelled plans, the bruise on Rory's collarbone she'd blamed on a door frame, the way Rory had stopped coming to pub nights and then stopped answering texts and then stopped existing in any way that could be reached. "I'm not going to talk about Evan in a bar." "Fair enough." Niamh's voice softened by a degree. Just one. "But you could have told me. You could have told me and I would have—" "Would have what?" The question came out sharper than Rory intended. It hung in the air between them, vibrating with four years of silence and thirty-two unanswered messages and the particular cruelty of watching someone you loved narrow their life down to a single suffocating room. Niamh looked at her drink. "I would have come." "I know. That's why I couldn't tell you." The logic of that seemed to stall Niamh for a moment. She frowned, working through it, and Rory recognized the expression—the same one she'd worn in the Cardiff library hunched over tax codes, worrying a problem like a dog with a knot of rope. "You didn't want help." "I didn't want to be someone who needed it. There's a difference." "Is there?" Rory exhaled through her nose. At the end of the bar, Silas picked up a glass and began his unhurried rotation again, his hazel eyes fixed on the middle distance. His limp was barely perceptible as he shifted his weight from one foot to the other—a tell Rory had learned to read in the months since she'd moved in. When the limp worsened, the weather was turning or his mood was. Tonight it was steady. He was listening, but he wasn't worried. "You look good, Rory." Niamh said it quietly, like an offering laid at the foot of something she wasn't sure she could climb. "I mean it. You look... steady." "Steady's a new one. Usually I get *you look tired* or *have you eaten.*" "Have you eaten?" "I just spent six hours delivering other people's food, so no." A sound escaped Niamh—not quite a laugh, but close. The first fracture in the polished surface she'd walked in wearing. She pressed her fingers to her mouth as though to catch it. "God, you're still—" She stopped herself. "Still what?" "Still you. Under all of it. Still you." Rory looked at her then. Really looked. Past the tailored coat and the precise hair and the watch that cost more than three months' rent on the flat upstairs. Past the composure and the corporate polish and the new way Niamh held her shoulders, squared and braced, as if the world had taught her that softness was a liability. Underneath all of it, the green eyes hadn't changed. They still carried that particular intensity—the look Niamh had given her across a crowded lecture hall the first day of Michaelmas term, half curious and half decided, as though she'd already made up her mind about something Rory hadn't yet been asked. "You're still you too," Rory said. "You just cost more now." This time the laugh broke through. Full, startled, the kind of sound that turned heads. The couple in the corner booth glanced over. Silas raised an eyebrow but said nothing. Niamh pressed her palm flat on the bar, fingers spread. "I looked for you. After you left. I drove to your parents' place in Cardiff." "You didn't." "Your mum gave me tea and told me you were finding your feet. Your dad stood in the doorway the entire time looking at me like I was a hostile witness." "That's just his face." "I know. I remembered." Niamh's hand curled on the bar, then relaxed. "I just wanted to know you were alive, Rory. That's all. That was the bare minimum." The bare minimum. Rory turned the phrase over in her mind. She thought of the months after she'd left Evan—the blank stretch of days when alive was, in fact, the bare minimum and even that had felt like too much to manage. Eva's spare room in Hackney. The slow process of rebuilding a self out of wreckage. The job at the Golden Empress, Yu-Fei pressing containers of wonton soup into her hands at the end of every shift, saying nothing, requiring nothing. Silas offering the flat upstairs at a rent that was almost certainly below market, his only condition being that she not ask questions about the bookshelf in the back room. "I'm sorry," Rory said. Two words. They came out raw, unvarnished, stripped of the defensive wit she'd used as mortar between herself and everyone who'd ever gotten close enough to matter. She watched them land. Watched Niamh receive them. Niamh picked up her gin and tonic and took a long, measured sip. Set it down. Turned to face Rory fully, one elbow on the bar, her expression open in a way that looked like it cost her something. "Don't be sorry. Just don't do it again." "I can't promise that." "I know. I'm asking anyway." They sat with that for a moment—the impossible request and the honest refusal, balanced between them like a glass on the edge of a table. The rain picked up outside, drumming against the window. The green neon sign buzzed and flickered, casting its sickly glow across the wet pavement. Silas appeared between them, unhurried, and set down two fresh drinks. Whiskey for Rory. Gin and tonic for Niamh. Neither of them had asked. "On the house," he said, and moved away before either could respond. Niamh watched him go with narrowed eyes. "Who's that?" "My landlord." "Your landlord tends bar?" "He's a man of many talents." Niamh glanced around the Nest—at the old maps, the black-and-white photographs, the dim amber light that made everything look like a memory of itself. Her gaze lingered on the photograph above the corner booth, the one of the unidentified harbor. "Interesting place." "It grows on you." "Like mold." "Like home." Rory picked up the fresh whiskey. "If you squint." Niamh studied her for a long moment. Whatever she was looking for, she seemed to find some fraction of it, because the tension in her shoulders released by a degree. She lifted her glass. "To squinting, then." Rory touched her glass to Niamh's. The clink was small, almost inaudible beneath the rain and the low hum of the bar. But she felt it in her fingers, in the crescent scar on her wrist, in the place behind her ribs where she kept the things she'd been too afraid to carry and too stubborn to set down. They drank.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences79
tagDensity0.177
leniency0.354
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
97.85% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2323
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
65.56% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2323
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"warmth"
count1
1
word"footsteps"
count1
2
word"familiar"
count1
3
word"silence"
count2
4
word"flickered"
count2
5
word"traced"
count1
6
word"could feel"
count2
7
word"weight"
count2
8
word"intensity"
count1
9
word"eyebrow"
count1
10
word"measured"
count1
11
word"tension"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"footsteps"
2"familiar"
3"silence"
4"flickered"
5"traced"
6"could feel"
7"weight"
8"intensity"
9"eyebrow"
10"measured"
11"tension"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences138
matches(empty)
91.10% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences138
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"look"
hedgeMatches
0"appeared to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences203
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen62
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans5
markdownWords9
totalWords2296
ratio0.004
matches
0"different"
1"disappear"
2"Safe."
3"you look tired"
4"have you eaten."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions24
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions102
wordCount1782
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity1.91
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest2
Golden2
Empress2
Yu-Fei2
Rory34
Soho1
Thursday1
Strait1
Malacca1
Berlin2
Silas10
Gallagher1
Niamh31
Cardiff4
London1
Past2
Michaelmas1
Evan1
Hackney1
Two1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Empress"
3"Yu-Fei"
4"Rory"
5"Silas"
6"Gallagher"
7"Niamh"
8"Evan"
9"Two"
places
0"Golden"
1"Soho"
2"Strait"
3"Malacca"
4"Berlin"
5"Cardiff"
6"London"
7"Hackney"
globalScore0.546
windowScore0.5
47.96% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences98
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"felt like an accusation"
1"not quite a laugh, but close"
2"felt like too much to manage"
3"looked like it cost her something"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.871
wordCount2296
matches
0"not a boast but a fact stated with the same flatness Niamh might have used t"
1"not quite a laugh, but close"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences203
matches
0"being that she"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs103
mean22.29
std25.27
cv1.134
sampleLengths
089
161
29
37
456
54
613
782
84
932
101
1143
1293
136
143
1541
1614
1716
1872
199
208
2135
2217
235
2418
2510
2641
278
287
297
306
3162
325
333
342
3511
3651
378
3823
396
4032
4137
425
4325
449
4519
461
477
4825
491
97.64% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences138
matches
0"being asked"
1"being debriefed"
2"been asked"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs313
matches
0"was turning"
1"was listening"
2"was looking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount14
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences203
ratio0.059
matches
0"She heard the footsteps—heavy, deliberate, the kind made by someone who'd learned to walk into rooms like they belonged there—and then the sharp intake of breath that wasn't hers."
1"Her eyes—the same sea-glass green Rory remembered—moved over Rory's face with the careful attention of someone cataloging damage."
2"Rory watched him pour and watched Niamh watch him pour and felt the strange vertigo of two worlds colliding—the London life she'd built brick by careful brick, and the Cardiff life she'd fled."
3"The place where a smile would have been if things between them hadn't calcified into whatever this was—two women on barstools performing the archaeology of a friendship."
4"She could feel Niamh watching her, could feel the weight of all the things Niamh had probably pieced together in the years since—the cancelled plans, the bruise on Rory's collarbone she'd blamed on a door frame, the way Rory had stopped coming to pub nights and then stopped answering texts and then stopped existing in any way that could be reached."
5"She frowned, working through it, and Rory recognized the expression—the same one she'd worn in the Cardiff library hunched over tax codes, worrying a problem like a dog with a knot of rope."
6"His limp was barely perceptible as he shifted his weight from one foot to the other—a tell Rory had learned to read in the months since she'd moved in."
7"A sound escaped Niamh—not quite a laugh, but close."
8"They still carried that particular intensity—the look Niamh had given her across a crowded lecture hall the first day of Michaelmas term, half curious and half decided, as though she'd already made up her mind about something Rory hadn't yet been asked."
9"She thought of the months after she'd left Evan—the blank stretch of days when alive was, in fact, the bare minimum and even that had felt like too much to manage."
10"They sat with that for a moment—the impossible request and the honest refusal, balanced between them like a glass on the edge of a table."
11"Niamh glanced around the Nest—at the old maps, the black-and-white photographs, the dim amber light that made everything look like a memory of itself."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1696
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount51
adverbRatio0.030070754716981132
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.006485849056603774
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences203
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences203
mean11.31
std9.77
cv0.863
sampleLengths
020
124
232
37
46
57
621
725
88
99
107
1113
1230
139
144
154
1613
1720
1815
1913
2012
216
2216
234
243
2529
261
2711
2827
295
3028
3112
3232
335
3416
353
361
372
383
3917
4018
416
4212
432
4416
4514
4610
4736
4812
494
52.38% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats17
diversityRatio0.3645320197044335
totalSentences203
uniqueOpeners74
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences126
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences126
matches
0"Her jacket was damp at"
1"Her fingers smelled of sesame"
2"He glanced up when the"
3"She dropped the bag on"
4"She'd memorized most of them"
5"She'd asked Silas about them"
6"He'd changed the subject with"
7"She heard the footsteps—heavy, deliberate,"
8"She knew it the way"
9"She turned on the stool."
10"Her red hair, once a"
11"Her eyes—the same sea-glass green"
12"She trailed off because the"
13"She moved with an economy"
14"She took a sip of"
15"He couldn't help it."
16"Her nails were clean, filed"
17"She traced the rim of"
18"She didn't look up."
19"She could feel Niamh watching"
ratio0.27
15.56% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount112
totalSentences126
matches
0"The green neon of The"
1"Rory pushed through the door"
2"The dinner rush at the"
3"Her jacket was damp at"
4"Her fingers smelled of sesame"
5"The bar sat quiet for"
6"A couple murmured in the"
7"Silas stood behind the bar"
8"He glanced up when the"
9"She dropped the bag on"
10"Silas set a whiskey in"
11"Rory wrapped both hands around"
12"The warmth was enough."
13"Rory let her gaze wander"
14"She'd memorized most of them"
15"The one nearest the door"
16"Another pinned behind the bar"
17"She'd asked Silas about them"
18"He'd changed the subject with"
19"The door opened again."
ratio0.889
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences126
matches(empty)
ratio0
4.61% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences62
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"Silas stood behind the bar drying a glass with the unhurried rotation of a man who had nowhere pressing to be and hadn't in years."
1"She heard the footsteps—heavy, deliberate, the kind made by someone who'd learned to walk into rooms like they belonged there—and then the sharp intake of breat…"
2"Niamh Gallagher stood just inside the doorway, rain beading on the shoulders of a charcoal coat that fit her like it had been cut specifically for her frame."
3"The Niamh she'd known at Cardiff had been all angles and restlessness, knees bouncing under lecture desks, fingers drumming on table edges, a girl who couldn't …"
4"Rory thought of her delivery bag slumped on the stool beside her, the lingering smell of char siu, the flat upstairs with its radiator that clanked like a priso…"
5"She could feel Niamh watching her, could feel the weight of all the things Niamh had probably pieced together in the years since—the cancelled plans, the bruise…"
6"She pressed her fingers to her mouth as though to catch it."
7"Past the composure and the corporate polish and the new way Niamh held her shoulders, squared and braced, as if the world had taught her that softness was a lia…"
8"They still carried that particular intensity—the look Niamh had given her across a crowded lecture hall the first day of Michaelmas term, half curious and half …"
9"Silas offering the flat upstairs at a rent that was almost certainly below market, his only condition being that she not ask questions about the bookshelf in th…"
10"They came out raw, unvarnished, stripped of the defensive wit she'd used as mortar between herself and everyone who'd ever gotten close enough to matter."
11"Niamh glanced around the Nest—at the old maps, the black-and-white photographs, the dim amber light that made everything look like a memory of itself."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences79
tagDensity0.089
leniency0.177
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
77.4215%