Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTYEYYV8ZHK8WE0CKM8CV1Q

Run Details

Duration:
1m 50s
Cost:
$0.004147
Provider:
Together

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The taxi had dropped her at the Richmond Park gate, and Aurora had paid the driver in cash without explaining why she needed to be let out at this hour. The man had looked at her strangely in the rearview mirror before pulling away, the taillights disappearing down the dark road like the eyes of some large animal blinking shut. She hadn't minded. She had other things on her mind. The Heartstone Pendant hung cold against her chest. It had been cold for three days now—ever since she'd found the note tucked into her flat door, a single sheet of paper in handwriting she didn't recognize. The message had been simple: *The Grove. Tonight. Come alone. Ask for Isolde.* She didn't know who Isolde was. She didn't know who had left the note or how they'd gotten into the building. Silas, her landlord, kept the front door locked, and Rory had checked the lock herself after finding the paper. The deadbolt had been secure. Nothing else had been disturbed—nothing taken, nothing moved. Just the note, left like a challenge or a summons. She had come anyway. That was what she did. When something was wrong, she walked toward it, not away. Eva called it stubbornness. Her mother called it reckless. Rory called it the only way she knew how to live. The path into the park was overgrown, though she found it easily enough. Her phone's flashlight cut a pale wound through the darkness, illuminating twisted oak branches that seemed to reach toward her like grasping fingers. The air smelled different here—thicker, heavier, layered with something floral she couldn't name. Wildflowers, she remembered. The note had mentioned wildflowers. She found the standing stones within twenty minutes, though she hadn't expected to find them so quickly. According to the maps she'd studied, this area should have been dense woodland, impenetrable at night. Instead, she stood at the edge of a clearing, and the clearing opened before her like a held breath finally released. The oak stones rose eight feet tall, arranged in a rough circle that caught the moonlight and threw it back in fragments. Between them, the grass grew waist-high and silver-touched, moving in a breeze she couldn't feel. At the center of the clearing stood a tree—a single ash, massive and ancient, its trunk scarred with symbols she didn't recognize. The pendant pulsed warm against her skin. Rory stopped at the edge of the stones. The warmth was faint, barely there, but it was the first change in three days. She pressed her palm flat against the pendant, feeling its faint heartbeat like a second pulse layered beneath her own. "I'm here," she said. Her voice came out steady, though the words fell into the darkness and vanished without echo. "I don't know who you are, but I came. So show yourself." Silence answered her. Not the silence of an empty place—it was too total, too heavy. It was the silence of somewhere listening. She stepped between the standing stones. The moment she crossed the boundary, the quality of the air changed. The floral scent intensified, nearly choking, and then faded into something else—something older, deeper, like the smell of rain on stone that had been dry for centuries. The moonlight shifted, brightening though clouds obscured the sky. The grass around her had begun to move, but not with the wind. It rippled in patterns, slow and deliberate, like something passing beneath the surface. The ash tree at the center of the clearing was covered in blossoms. She hadn't noticed them from outside—white flowers that gleamed with a faint luminescence, each one glowing softly like a small held breath. They hadn't been blooming when she'd first looked. She was certain of that. She had been looking right at the tree, and there had been no flowers. Now they covered every branch, every twig, a weight of petals that seemed ready to fall but never did. "Hello?" She kept her voice level. Speaking aloud felt important somehow—a way of claiming space in whatever this was. "I was told to come here. There's a woman named Isolde. I need to speak with her." The flowers on the ash tree trembled. Not from wind. From something else. Rory waited. The pendant pulsed warmth in slow, rhythmic intervals, and she counted the beats without meaning to. Seven seconds between each one. Seven seconds exactly, like a clock that had found its own rhythm. Then she heard the sound. It came from behind her—a soft sound, barely there, like a footstep in dry grass. She turned, shining her phone's flashlight toward the darkness between the standing stones. Nothing. The oak pillars stood in their ancient circle, unmoving, unchanged. She turned back to the clearing. The ash tree was closer. Not closer in distance—she hadn't moved, and neither had the tree. But it filled more of her vision now, dominated more of the space. The blossoms seemed larger. The trunk seemed wider. The symbols carved into the bark had changed; they hadn't been there before, or she hadn't seen them, but now they wound upward in spiraling patterns that made her eyes ache if she looked too long. The pendant pulsed faster. Six seconds now between beats. Rory took a step backward. The grass resisted her foot, not like mud but like something alive, something that didn't want her to leave. She pushed through it anyway, her ankle catching on something she couldn't see. She stumbled, caught herself, and when she looked down, the grass was at her chest. It hadn't been that tall before. She was certain of that. She was five-foot-six, and the grass had been at her waist. Something creaked behind her. A sound like wood bending under weight, slow and deliberate. She spun around, phone raised, and the flashlight swept across the standing stones. They had moved. They hadn't been in that arrangement before—she had walked between them, she remembered the path clearly, but now they stood at different angles, their positions shifted like the points of a compass spinning slowly out of alignment. The flowers on the ash tree had begun to fall. They drifted downward in slow motion, each petal catching the moonlight, each one landing without sound. But there were so many of them, a cascading waterfall of white, and they didn't scatter. They accumulated, forming patterns on the ground, patterns that looked almost like— Rory's breath caught. They looked like footprints. Leading from the ash tree toward where she stood. And then beyond her, toward the gap between the standing stones where she had entered. The clearing was not empty. She had known that already—had felt it the moment she crossed between the stones, had heard the silence that was too complete to be anything but listening. But knowing it and seeing evidence of it were different things. The patterns made by the fallen petals were not random. They were too regular, too deliberate. Each one shaped like the print of a bare foot, heel to toe, the curve of an arch, the individual marks of toes. They started at the tree. They ended at the edge of where she stood. And then they started again. Past her. Toward the stones. Something was circling her. "Show yourself." Her voice cracked on the second word. She steadied it, forced it back under control. "I didn't come here to play games. If you want to talk, then talk." The ash tree groaned. The sound was deep, vibrational, felt more than heard, and the trunk had begun to twist. Not with wind—there was no wind—but with something internal, something that turned the wood like muscle flexing. The symbols carved into the bark shifted, rearranged themselves, and then resolved into something she could read. *YOU ARE NOT EXPECTED.* The letters glowed faintly, then faded. Rory's hand found the pendant. It pulsed quickly now—three seconds between beats, maybe less—and the warmth had intensified, burning almost. She thought of the note, the simple instruction. *Ask for Isolde.* "Isolde," she said. "I asked for Isolde." The flowers stopped falling. The clearing went silent—not listening silence this time, but waiting silence, the kind that precedes a question about to be answered. And then she heard it. Breathing. Not her own. Not the sound of the trees or the grass or the distant noise of the city beyond the park. Breathing. Slow and deep and close, closer than the ash tree, closer than the standing stones. Breathing that matched the pulse of the pendant, three seconds between each inhale and exhale. Something exhaled, and she felt it on the back of her neck. Rory did not turn around. Every instinct screamed at her to turn around, to face whatever was behind her, but she held still. Her fingers tightened on the pendant. The warmth surged, and the breathing paused—interrupted, as if the thing behind her had noticed the change. "You came to the Grove," a voice said. It came from everywhere and nowhere, from the ash tree and the standing stones and the space directly behind her. It was not a human voice. It was layered, harmonic, like several voices speaking in unison with slightly different tones. "You came because you were called." "Yes." The word came out as a whisper. "You were not supposed to come." The voice held something like wonder, or perhaps amusement. "The one who called you does not know what lives here. What has always lived here. In the space between." Rory's jaw tightened. She thought of Evan—thought of the three years she'd spent with a man who had made her feel small and afraid, thought of the night she'd finally left, sneaking out while he slept with a bag she hadn't fully packed and a phone she'd turned off. She thought of the fear that had lived in her chest for years, the fear that told her she couldn't do things, couldn't go places, couldn't be safe. She was not afraid of this. Whatever this was. "I came anyway," she said. "So either talk to me or let me leave. I'm not interested in being circled." The breathing resumed. But it was different now—not behind her but all around her, shifting position with each exhale. And then, gradually, it began to move toward the ash tree. Toward the center of the clearing. The petals that had fallen began to stir. They lifted, one by one, each one rising from the ground as if caught in a gentle updraft. They formed a shape—a woman's shape, tall and slender, made entirely of white flowers. The face was blank, featureless, but it turned toward her with the slow intention of something aware. "The pendant," the voice said, and now it came from the flower-figure, from the petals that formed its lips. "You carry the Heartstone." "It was given to me." "By whom?" Rory shook her head. She didn't know. She had never known. The note had come with the pendant, left on her doorstep three weeks before the note about the Grove. A gift, the card had said. *For what comes next.* No name, no explanation, no return address. "I don't know," she said. The flower-figure tilted its head. The blank face couldn't express emotion, but something in the angle of it suggested curiosity. Or hunger. "It pulses for the Grove," the figure said. "It knows this place. It knows what lives in the space between. But you, Aurora Carter—you do not know. You came anyway." "I came because I was asked." "You came because you are curious. Because you are brave. Because you have never been afraid of the dark." The figure took a step forward. The petals that formed its feet did not make a sound. "But this is not the dark you know. This is older. This is the dark that existed before humanity, before the first fire, before the first word for fear." Rory's hand stayed on the pendant. It burned now, really burned, but she didn't let go. The warmth traveled up her arm, into her chest, and she felt it settle somewhere behind her ribs like a second heart beginning to beat. "What do you want?" she asked. The flower-figure stopped. The breathing that surrounded her stopped with it. The silence was absolute, total, a silence so complete it felt like pressure against her eardrums. "What do any of us want," the voice said slowly, "who live in the space between?" And then the figure moved—not toward her but past her, through her, and Rory felt the brush of something impossible. Not cold, not warm. Not solid, not insubstantial. Something that existed in between, that passed through her like light through glass, and when it was done, when the flower-figure had moved past her and taken its place at the edge of the clearing, Rory found that she could move again. She turned. The figure stood at the gap between the standing stones, blocking the way out. "You carry something that belongs here," the voice said. "You cannot leave until you understand what it is. What it means. What you have been called to become." Rory looked at the pendant. It pulsed steadily now, the warmth steady, the beat matching her own heart. "Tell me," she said. The flower-figure raised one hand—a gesture made of drifting petals, unstable, constantly falling apart and reforming. "Ask for Isolde," it said. "I am Isolde. And I have been waiting for you since before you were born." The flowers on the ash tree began to fall again. The standing stones shifted behind her, the gap closing, and Rory understood then that she had not been given a choice. She had been given a direction. She had walked into the space between, and now she would have to see it through. The pendant burned. The darkness waited. And somewhere in the Grove—in the space between, in the ancient roots of the ash tree, in the silence that had learned her name—something that had been waiting finally began to move.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"the voice said slowly [slowly]"
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.531
leniency1
rawRatio0.059
effectiveRatio0.059
85.24% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2372
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count2
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count2
3
adverb"slightly"
count1
4
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"softly"
2"slowly"
3"slightly"
4"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
36.76% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2372
totalAiIsms30
found
0
word"pulsed"
count5
1
word"warmth"
count6
2
word"pulse"
count2
3
word"echo"
count1
4
word"silence"
count9
5
word"weight"
count2
6
word"trembled"
count1
7
word"rhythmic"
count1
8
word"cascading"
count1
9
word"resolved"
count1
10
word"whisper"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"warmth"
2"pulse"
3"echo"
4"silence"
5"weight"
6"trembled"
7"rhythmic"
8"cascading"
9"resolved"
10"whisper"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences197
matches(empty)
99.35% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences197
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences212
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen47
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords19
totalWords2337
ratio0.008
matches
0"The Grove. Tonight. Come alone. Ask for Isolde."
1"YOU ARE NOT EXPECTED."
2"Ask for Isolde."
3"For what comes next."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions31
wordCount2070
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity0.72
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Aurora1
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Grove3
Isolde3
Rory15
Speaking1
Evan1
Breathing3
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Pendant"
2"Rory"
3"Speaking"
4"Evan"
5"Breathing"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Grove"
globalScore1
windowScore1
89.52% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences124
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"seemed ready to fall but never did"
1"something like wonder, or perhaps amusement"
2"felt like pressure against her eardrums"
28.84% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords1.712
wordCount2337
matches
0"not like mud but like something alive, something"
1"not listening silence this time, but waiting silence, the kind"
2"not behind her but all around her, shifting position with each exhale"
3"not toward her but past her, through her"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences212
matches
0"found that she"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs78
mean29.96
std22.99
cv0.767
sampleLengths
070
149
263
339
457
554
659
77
843
932
1022
116
1274
1362
1419
1536
1613
1735
185
1939
206
215
2268
239
2452
2522
2667
2710
2844
293
3028
315
3291
3310
344
3531
3654
374
386
3931
407
4125
425
431
4453
4512
4646
4754
488
4935
96.36% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences197
matches
0"been disturbed"
1"was covered"
2"was layered"
3"been given"
4"been given"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs391
matches
0"was circling"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount26
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences24
totalSentences212
ratio0.113
matches
0"It had been cold for three days now—ever since she'd found the note tucked into her flat door, a single sheet of paper in handwriting she didn't recognize."
1"Nothing else had been disturbed—nothing taken, nothing moved."
2"The air smelled different here—thicker, heavier, layered with something floral she couldn't name."
3"At the center of the clearing stood a tree—a single ash, massive and ancient, its trunk scarred with symbols she didn't recognize."
4"Not the silence of an empty place—it was too total, too heavy."
5"The floral scent intensified, nearly choking, and then faded into something else—something older, deeper, like the smell of rain on stone that had been dry for centuries."
6"She hadn't noticed them from outside—white flowers that gleamed with a faint luminescence, each one glowing softly like a small held breath."
7"Speaking aloud felt important somehow—a way of claiming space in whatever this was."
8"It came from behind her—a soft sound, barely there, like a footstep in dry grass."
9"Not closer in distance—she hadn't moved, and neither had the tree."
10"The symbols carved into the bark had changed; they hadn't been there before, or she hadn't seen them, but now they wound upward in spiraling patterns that made her eyes ache if she looked too long."
11"They hadn't been in that arrangement before—she had walked between them, she remembered the path clearly, but now they stood at different angles, their positions shifted like the points of a compass spinning slowly out of alignment."
12"They accumulated, forming patterns on the ground, patterns that looked almost like—"
13"She had known that already—had felt it the moment she crossed between the stones, had heard the silence that was too complete to be anything but listening."
14"Not with wind—there was no wind—but with something internal, something that turned the wood like muscle flexing."
15"It pulsed quickly now—three seconds between beats, maybe less—and the warmth had intensified, burning almost."
16"The clearing went silent—not listening silence this time, but waiting silence, the kind that precedes a question about to be answered."
17"The warmth surged, and the breathing paused—interrupted, as if the thing behind her had noticed the change."
18"She thought of Evan—thought of the three years she'd spent with a man who had made her feel small and afraid, thought of the night she'd finally left, sneaking out while he slept with a bag she hadn't fully packed and a phone she'd turned off."
19"But it was different now—not behind her but all around her, shifting position with each exhale."
20"They formed a shape—a woman's shape, tall and slender, made entirely of white flowers."
21"And then the figure moved—not toward her but past her, through her, and Rory felt the brush of something impossible."
22"The flower-figure raised one hand—a gesture made of drifting petals, unstable, constantly falling apart and reforming."
23"And somewhere in the Grove—in the space between, in the ancient roots of the ash tree, in the silence that had learned her name—something that had been waiting finally began to move."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2104
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount82
adverbRatio0.03897338403041825
lyAdverbCount25
lyAdverbRatio0.01188212927756654
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences212
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences212
mean11.02
std8.03
cv0.729
sampleLengths
030
130
23
37
48
528
67
71
82
93
106
1115
1219
135
148
1510
164
175
1810
194
205
2111
2213
2323
2413
253
265
2717
2816
2921
3022
3115
3222
337
348
3515
3620
374
3816
3912
403
4112
427
436
4412
4527
469
4713
4813
4913
33.96% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats34
diversityRatio0.24528301886792453
totalSentences212
uniqueOpeners52
55.25% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences181
matches
0"Just the note, left like"
1"Instead, she stood at the"
2"Then she heard the sound."
ratio0.017
94.03% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount57
totalSentences181
matches
0"She hadn't minded."
1"She had other things on"
2"It had been cold for"
3"She didn't know who Isolde"
4"She didn't know who had"
5"She had come anyway."
6"Her mother called it reckless."
7"Her phone's flashlight cut a"
8"She found the standing stones"
9"She pressed her palm flat"
10"Her voice came out steady,"
11"It was the silence of"
12"She stepped between the standing"
13"It rippled in patterns, slow"
14"She hadn't noticed them from"
15"They hadn't been blooming when"
16"She was certain of that."
17"She had been looking right"
18"She kept her voice level"
19"It came from behind her—a"
ratio0.315
67.73% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount142
totalSentences181
matches
0"The taxi had dropped her"
1"The man had looked at"
2"She hadn't minded."
3"She had other things on"
4"The Heartstone Pendant hung cold"
5"It had been cold for"
6"The message had been simple:"
7"She didn't know who Isolde"
8"She didn't know who had"
9"Silas, her landlord, kept the"
10"The deadbolt had been secure."
11"Nothing else had been disturbed—nothing"
12"She had come anyway."
13"That was what she did."
14"Eva called it stubbornness."
15"Her mother called it reckless."
16"Rory called it the only"
17"The path into the park"
18"Her phone's flashlight cut a"
19"The air smelled different here—thicker,"
ratio0.785
55.25% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences181
matches
0"When something was wrong, she"
1"Now they covered every branch,"
ratio0.011
87.30% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences90
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"The oak stones rose eight feet tall, arranged in a rough circle that caught the moonlight and threw it back in fragments."
1"The floral scent intensified, nearly choking, and then faded into something else—something older, deeper, like the smell of rain on stone that had been dry for …"
2"She hadn't noticed them from outside—white flowers that gleamed with a faint luminescence, each one glowing softly like a small held breath."
3"Not with wind—there was no wind—but with something internal, something that turned the wood like muscle flexing."
4"The clearing went silent—not listening silence this time, but waiting silence, the kind that precedes a question about to be answered."
5"Something that existed in between, that passed through her like light through glass, and when it was done, when the flower-figure had moved past her and taken i…"
6"And somewhere in the Grove—in the space between, in the ancient roots of the ash tree, in the silence that had learned her name—something that had been waiting …"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.375
leniency0.75
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
84.3199%