Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTYFWT4YQSZGPY3M1K9TZXD

Run Details

Duration:
1m 47s
Cost:
$0.004588
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The Raven's Nest breathed with the kind of quiet that bird-watchers call a lull before a storm. Green neon washed the bar in a damp, almost medicinal glow. Maps hung like weathered banners on the walls, old photographs curled in their frames, and the shelf behind the counter hosted a treasury of bottles that never looked fully touched. A bookshelf stood at the far end, its spines dense with dust and secrets, the kind you could slide aside and reveal a hidden back room used for quiet, necessary conversations. The air smelled of old wood, lemon oil, and the faint sting of something smoky that clung to the corners. "Rory? Is that you?" The words drifted across the room first, as if someone had tapped them out on a piano, a simple, knowing question that felt dangerous and familiar all at once. "Silas," came the soft reply, but the tone trembled just enough to betray distance. The voice, when it landed, carried a calm edge that had learned how to survive without breaking. Rory slid into a chair beneath a map of the Pacific, shaking the badge of quietness from her shoulders. She wore a coat that had seen better winters, a courier’s satchel at her feet, and eyes that skipped across faces the way penguins skim ice—deliberate, measuring, almost clinical in their cool. The crescent scar on her left wrist glinted faintly in the neon, a small crescent that had learned to endure more seasons than it should. Silas stood with a bottle mug in one hand, the other resting on the bar’s polished wood. His hair wore grey like someone who had earned it, and his eyes—hazel, always watching—missed nothing. The signet ring on his right hand caught the glow and told a long silence: there was a history here, one that wasn’t finished yet. "Rory?" The name paused in the air, then settled into a soft exhale. A smile tugged at the corners of his mouth, but it didn’t reach his eyes. It never did. "Silas," she said, and named the old barkeeper as if he were a landmark beside Cardiff’s river. She kept her voice level, as if she were reading from a script she hadn’t written. He stepped closer, not quite smiling, choosing to study the room instead, as if the Nest could tell him what to do with this moment. He wore the lean of a man who had learned how to move with a past that kept its own hours. The knee still clicked when he shifted his weight, a sound only a few gently tuned people noticed. "You kept the room," she added, almost teasing, eyes wandering toward the back bookshelf that hid the secret space. "And you kept the memory," Silas replied, and if the words were a chandelier, they hung heavy enough to shake the room. He set his mug down with a deliberate care that suggested every action had a consequence. The bar’s hum pressed close—the soft clink of glass, a dry cough of a wood crack, the distant chatter of a late crowd, and the whispered breath of the back room door sliding slightly but never opening. Rory looked away from the shelf, toward the glow of the green neon, toward the quiet that hung between them like a thin thread. "You always did scout the room for danger," she said after a long breath, a line she’d learned to keep in her pocket, just in case. "And you always walked into the room as if you owned the weather," Silas answered, and even the casual drawl of his voice sounded like a lesson learned too late. She scanned the crowd with a practiced glance, noting the way a couple down the bar played with an exchange of glances that meant nothing and everything at once. People knew when you sat still in a room full of echoes. Rory had learned to listen to echoes for a living, or at least to pretend she did. The Crescent Scar on her wrist came into view as she rolled the sleeve back with a practiced courtesy—nothing dramatic, just a habit she kept in check. The scar wasn’t loud, but its shape—a small crescent—had followed her through the years like a discreet map marker, reminding her of a childhood accident that hadn’t quite left her, like a ship’s bell that never stops ringing once the harbor’s left behind. "You’re still delivering things, I hear," Silas said, voice calm enough to dull a blade. He picked up the mug again without looking at it, a man who trusted objects as much as people. "Deliveries, yes. Mostly in the daytime," Rory replied, her lips curling into something close to a smile, a bit brittle, a bit careful. "The nights… they belong to me when they have to." "And the nights here belong to me," Silas said. The bar’s quiet seemed to lean in; the green glow etched the lines of his face, the way a river carves through stone. He didn’t reach for a chair; he simply stood, as if the space between the stool and the bar would yield if he waited long enough. "You made a life out of running toward danger and calling it direction," Rory said, almost soft enough that it could have been a rhetorical memory rather than a sentence spoken aloud. He looked at her then, with the patient intensity of a man who had spent his youth mapping people’s lies and truths, whose life had become a corridor of doors that could open or stay shut with a single look. "Time doesn’t forgive what you cheat with," Silas answered, and the words tasted like a warning half-swallowed. Rory’s breath hitched a notch, then settled. She let the satchel slide from her foot to the floor, a small clack that sounded louder than it was. She hadn’t come to time's tribunal or to trade old grievances for new apologies. She’d come because the Nest always drew its own, and she hadn’t found a better place to vanish for a while. "London, then." The line came out as a question, a way to test the room’s temperature, to see where the ice lay. "London," Silas echoed, and his gaze dropped to the surface of the bar as if the word was a tool he didn’t know how to use anymore. "You learned to breathe differently there." "Cardiff taught me some things too," Rory said, and the edge came back into her voice, crisp enough to slice the smoke from the air. "The rain there was different. It carried memories in a way London rain never did." The Nest exhaled a breath around them, a collective pause that made the room feel suddenly intimate, as though the walls remembered more about them than either of them did. "Eva sends her regards," Silas finally murmured, shoulders giving a tiny, controlled shudder. A memory clung to the phrase, but he did not explain what that memory contained. Rory’s jaw tightened at the mention of Eva. She didn’t want the trap of names to pull her under. She studied the wooden counter, the way the grain ran in stubborn lines like the streets she’d driven down in a city that never slept, never forgot. She found something in the grain that looked like a river and let the image hold her a moment before letting it drift away. "Eva is not here," Rory said, and it was not a denial so much as a decision to change the subject without pretending everything was simple. Silas shifted, the limp in his leg sending a quiet, solitary reminder through the room. He wasn’t a man who apologized for the past, not in front of other people. But he kept the same soft gravity that had kept his networks intact for decades, that had earned him the name of the Spymaster even now, when the books had closed and the maps hung unvisited on the walls. "You learned how to disappear," Rory offered, a little bitter, a little grateful for the weapon that silence had become when a person needed to survive without breaking. "And you learned to arrive with a story that didn’t belong to your hands." He let the words fall, a verdict offered without a court. She met his gaze, which was not unkind, only tired in a way that suggested mornings that began with too much to do and not enough time to do it. Her eyes held the bright blue that had once taken on the color of risk. She hadn’t lost that brightness; she’d rearranged it into something sharper, something a person could rely on in a rainstorm. "Do you still keep a room behind the shelf?" she asked, softer now, almost curious. "That room hasn’t changed," Silas said, and he allowed himself the faintest of grins—the kind of smile that knows the truth inside a lie and chooses to keep it quiet. He looked at the bookshelf as if it were a door that could still be opened, if not by him then by someone who remembered the right rhythm. Rory looked at the shelf, her fingers brushing the air near the spines, as if she could sense the old mechanism even when the dust wrote its own history across the wood. She wasn’t here to claim something. She was here to measure the distance between who she had been and who she had become, to test if there was room for mercy in a space built on necessity. "You saved a place for me," she finally said, almost a whisper, a confession that felt grain-thin, like the page of a book that had survived years of handling. Silas’s eyes did not soften, but they did what they always did: they weighed. "The nests need careful birds," he said. "And you’ve always known how to perch where you can see the wind coming." The exchange hung, and for a moment the room seemed to lean closer, listening. A bartender with a chipped cup paused long enough to notice two old friends sitting with the weight of a hundred unspoken minutes between them. Rory tucked a strand of hair behind her ear—the black of it catching the green light, turning it into a ribbon of night. She cleared her throat and took a slow breath, as if each breath were a new page she hadn’t prepared to write. "Tell me about Prague," she said, letting the words fall as if she needed a hinge for the conversation to swing. "Or about the books you’ve read since you stopped traveling with people who never asked your name." Prague. The word drew a line in the air, and Silas followed it with a careful exhale. He didn’t say much, not at first. The memory was a bruise that never fully healed, one you learned to carry without flinching. "Prague taught me to lose control," he admitted, and the admission landed like a weight dropped into water. "Taught me to trust people I shouldn’t trust and to believe that a wrong move isn’t the end of the world if you have the right exit." Rory’s eyes traced the scar on her wrist again, the crescent catching the neon just enough to remind her it existed. "And you never trusted yourself since," she said, not a question, more a statement shaped by years of quiet observation. "Not always," he replied, which was his way of saying more than a simple no. He touched the silver signet ring on his right hand with a thumb as if it were a relic. The gesture wasn’t boastful; it was a reminder of the kind of leverage a man could clothe in a ring and call etiquette. "You’ve learned to keep people at a distance," Rory observed, and she didn’t bother to hide the edge of envy in her voice. Envy that a life hadn’t bent her into a caged animal, envy that a person could still move through rooms without fracturing. "And you’ve learned to wear a face you can breathe through," Silas said, and his tone softened the moment enough to make the words obviously true and achingly painful. She pressed a palm to the table, letting the cool wood settle into the nerves of her hand. "I learned to breathe under lights that don’t forgive mistakes," she said, "to trust a route that doesn’t end where I thought it would." She looked at the glass in front of her, as if the drink might reveal the years she’d spent away. The Nest’s quiet kept moving around them. A waitress changed a bottle, a couple argued softly at the end of the bar, and a man in a long coat watched too intently as if too much depended on the next choice he might make. The hidden door behind the bookshelf shimmered in the corner, a promise and a risk both. "You still walk with the shortcut you learned as a kid," Silas said quietly, as if the words were a lens focusing a blurred memory. "I kept the shortcuts," Rory returned, not defensively, but with a stubborn pride that time hadn’t managed to erase. The delivery life had taught her to cut straight through the noise, to arrive on time, to vanquish fear with a plan. She had learned to be precise, to accept that precision sometimes shaved off tenderness and sometimes found it again in the small, honest act of showing up. "Raven’s Nest is a good place to arrive," Silas mused, turning the phrase like a coin in his pocket. "You always chose places that mattered when the world told you that it didn’t." Rory’s gaze dipped to the bar top, where a smear of something amber clung to the surface as if it refused to leave. She watched it dry into an imperfect pattern, a map of imperfect choices, and she thought of Eva’s quiet instructions in the back of her mind to keep moving, never let them see you settle, never let them guess what you’re running from. "Sometimes I wonder," she began, then stopped, because she didn’t want to own the question aloud, not here. The words felt heavy on her tongue, as if she’d rehearsed them in the dark, and she wasn’t sure she wanted to pour them out into a room that already carried too many stories. "Sometimes you wonder what?" Silas pressed, choosing the edge of the stool with a careful lucidity—the way a hunter chooses his aim. "If we ever really left each other behind or if we built a door and forgot to close it properly," she admitted, almost in a voice that belonged to someone else, a younger version of herself who hadn’t learned to swallow regret with a steady breath. Silas studied her for a long moment, the face in front of him suddenly unrecognizable and entirely familiar at the same time. He did not rush to answer; he did not pretend this wasn’t the weight of years sitting in their laps. He waited for the truth to unfold of its own accord, the way fog settles when the sun finally chooses to push through. "We built doors," he finally said, "and sometimes doors became windows that let the past lean in where it shouldn’t." His tone carried the gravity of a confession without naming it as such. Rory exhaled, a long, almost theatrical release, the breath of someone who had learned to carry more than her body could contain without breaking. She pressed her fingers to the crescent scar again, as if drawing a line between what had happened and what hadn’t, between what left marks and what healed. "And what about you?" she asked, not prying but precise, the way someone asks about a map that should have faded with time. "What did Prague teach you that you didn’t want to forget?" Silas looked toward the hidden door, the one he never stepped through when the bar wasn’t fully awake. The back room waited, patient as a confidant, and he knew Rory’s presence there in a single breath of shared history might still have consequences. He could tell every story in the room; the stories would tell themselves through the way the customers shifted on their stools, the way a glass was set down a fraction too hard. "That some people aren’t saved by who they were," he said at last, slow and careful, as if every syllable could resuscitate the past even as it buried it deeper. "Some debts aren’t paid with what you know, but with what you’re willing to risk in the moment you decide to live with them." Rory lifted her gaze, capturing his face in a moment of clarity that felt almost sacramental. "I came here because you always knew how to listen without pretending you were the river," she said, and the words were honest, almost bare. "And I came here because you used to walk through doors you weren’t sure you should walk through," Silas replied, and the corners of his mouth moved in a way that was almost a concession. Their voices softened, or the room did, or both. The Nest seemed to lean closer as if listening for the faint, inevitable sound of closure or confirmation, not the kind you spell out with sentences but the kind that lands in a quiet, unspoken agreement. "Tell me what you want from this moment," Silas asked, though he knew there was a ledger in the back of his mind—entries of the people who’d passed, the lies that helped them survive, and the ones that had survived them. Rory looked at her hands, then up at the maps that crowded the walls, a world she once believed you could hold in one hand like a coin you could flip to decide your fate. She held the glass tighter, the ice muting the liquor’s burn, a small mercy against memory. "I want to keep breathing without the room turning," she said. "I want to see the door you still guard and know what it leads to, even if I don’t walk through it again." Silas nodded, slow and approving, as if the answer had arrived on its own, like night finding the city. He lifted the mug, tapped it against hers in a quiet, almost ceremonial toast—the kind of ritual that both celebrated and mourned what time had done to them. The moment stretched. Outside, the street’s rain began to tap at the window, a soft percussion against glass that matched the rhythm of two lives trying to decide which lane to travel next. The Nest’s fogged glass hummed with the sound of a quiet night, and somewhere a bookshelf sighed, almost approving of the return. Rory looked toward the back room, toward the bookcase that wasn’t a bookcase anymore, toward the quiet that waited beyond the door. She did not walk toward it. Not yet. But the impulse to step closer lived in her, a pulse beneath the quiet surface. "Sometimes I think this place is the only thing in London that still believes we can come home to something we recognise," she admitted, almost to herself, and she felt the room acknowledge her vulnerability with a careful silence. "We can’t pretend everything is the same," Silas said, and he did not pretend either. "We can only decide what the next moment means." The words hung between them, not a verdict but a shared choice. Rory’s breath slowed, and for a heartbeat the room’s noise retreated to a distant, almost harmless hum. The crescent scar winked again in the neon’s tilt—small, stubborn, a reminder that some marks do not vanish with time or courage. "Then we start from here," she said, not loud, not defiant, but steady, as if she’d finally chosen a map that could lead somewhere again. "From here," Silas echoed, and he folded his hands on the bar, the signet ring catching the light, a quiet emblem of the history that connected their fates to a room that would keep listening, no matter how far they wandered. The moment tilted. The room’s murmur rose again, a living thing that knew it was being watched by two people who had learned to measure time by the weight of a single, heavy truth. And for a long breath, neither spoke beyond the words that had just found their place in the quiet between them. The Nest observed, patient as a confidant, and Rory, with a small, almost indiscernible nod, settled back into the chair as if the old years might finally offer a new room for a new kind of honesty. The hidden door behind the bookshelf waited, patient as ever, its secret promise tucked away in shadows, ready when they were ready to walk through it.
created_at"2026-02-19T12:37:41.32Z" 2/19/2026, 12:37:41 PM
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native_tokens_reasoning7104
native_tokens_cached0
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num_input_audio_prompt(null)
num_media_completion0
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
75.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags48
adverbTagCount6
adverbTags
0"the tone trembled just [just]"
1"Silas finally murmured [finally]"
2"she finally said [finally]"
3"Silas said quietly [quietly]"
4"she began then [then]"
5"he finally said [finally]"
dialogueSentences59
tagDensity0.814
leniency1
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.125
91.40% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3490
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"gently"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count2
3
adverb"softly"
count1
4
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"gently"
1"slightly"
2"suddenly"
3"softly"
4"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
58.45% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3490
totalAiIsms29
found
0
word"familiar"
count2
1
word"trembled"
count1
2
word"silence"
count3
3
word"weight"
count5
4
word"scanned"
count1
5
word"echoes"
count2
6
word"etched"
count1
7
word"intensity"
count1
8
word"echoed"
count2
9
word"solitary"
count1
10
word"reminder"
count3
11
word"whisper"
count1
12
word"unspoken"
count2
13
word"traced"
count1
14
word"shimmered"
count1
15
word"tenderness"
count1
16
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"trembled"
2"silence"
3"weight"
4"scanned"
5"echoes"
6"etched"
7"intensity"
8"echoed"
9"solitary"
10"reminder"
11"whisper"
12"unspoken"
13"traced"
14"shimmered"
15"tenderness"
16"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences150
matches(empty)
76.19% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences150
filterMatches
0"feel"
1"see"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"managed to"
2"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences161
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen46
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3474
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions43
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions64
wordCount2942
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.78
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest8
Pacific1
Cardiff1
Silas23
Crescent1
Scar1
Rory23
Eva2
Spymaster1
Prague1
Envy1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Pacific"
3"Silas"
4"Rory"
5"Eva"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"Crescent"
2"Scar"
3"Prague"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences142
glossingSentenceCount9
matches
0"not quite smiling, choosing to study the room instead, as if the Nest could tell him what to do with this moment"
1"sounded like a lesson learned too late"
2"quite left her, like a ship’s bell that never stops ringing once the harbor’s left behind"
3"something close to a smile, a bit brittle, a bit"
4"tasted like a warning half-swallowed"
5"looked like a river and let the image hol"
6"make the words obviously true and achingly p"
7"as if drawing a line between what had happened and what hadn’t, between what left marks and what healed"
8"as if listening for the faint, inevitable sound of closure or confirmation, not the kind you spell out with sentences but the kind that lands in a quiet, unspoken agreement"
27.29% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches6
per1kWords1.727
wordCount3474
matches
0"not defensively, but with a stubborn pride"
1"not prying but precise, the way someone asks about a map"
2"not the kind you spell out with sentences but the kind"
3"not a verdict but a shared choice"
4"not loud, not defiant, but steady, as if she’d finally chosen a map"
5"not defiant, but steady, as if she’d finally chosen a map"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences161
matches
0"Envy that a"
1"accept that precision"
72.84% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs79
mean43.97
std17.81
cv0.405
sampleLengths
0109
133
231
376
458
531
633
764
819
938
1061
1126
1230
1358
1470
1534
1633
1758
1832
1940
2017
2162
2222
2333
2440
2530
2628
2770
2826
2969
3028
3125
3265
3315
3458
3569
3629
3735
3839
3945
4038
4140
4245
4341
4457
4545
4629
4762
4860
4925
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences150
matches
0"being watched"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs502
matches
0"were reading"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount6
flaggedSentences17
totalSentences161
ratio0.106
matches
0"She wore a coat that had seen better winters, a courier’s satchel at her feet, and eyes that skipped across faces the way penguins skim ice—deliberate, measuring, almost clinical in their cool."
1"His hair wore grey like someone who had earned it, and his eyes—hazel, always watching—missed nothing."
2"The bar’s hum pressed close—the soft clink of glass, a dry cough of a wood crack, the distant chatter of a late crowd, and the whispered breath of the back room door sliding slightly but never opening."
3"The Crescent Scar on her wrist came into view as she rolled the sleeve back with a practiced courtesy—nothing dramatic, just a habit she kept in check."
4"The scar wasn’t loud, but its shape—a small crescent—had followed her through the years like a discreet map marker, reminding her of a childhood accident that hadn’t quite left her, like a ship’s bell that never stops ringing once the harbor’s left behind."
5"The bar’s quiet seemed to lean in; the green glow etched the lines of his face, the way a river carves through stone."
6"He didn’t reach for a chair; he simply stood, as if the space between the stool and the bar would yield if he waited long enough."
7"She hadn’t lost that brightness; she’d rearranged it into something sharper, something a person could rely on in a rainstorm."
8"\"That room hasn’t changed,\" Silas said, and he allowed himself the faintest of grins—the kind of smile that knows the truth inside a lie and chooses to keep it quiet."
9"Rory tucked a strand of hair behind her ear—the black of it catching the green light, turning it into a ribbon of night."
10"The gesture wasn’t boastful; it was a reminder of the kind of leverage a man could clothe in a ring and call etiquette."
11"\"Sometimes you wonder what?\" Silas pressed, choosing the edge of the stool with a careful lucidity—the way a hunter chooses his aim."
12"He did not rush to answer; he did not pretend this wasn’t the weight of years sitting in their laps."
13"He could tell every story in the room; the stories would tell themselves through the way the customers shifted on their stools, the way a glass was set down a fraction too hard."
14"\"Tell me what you want from this moment,\" Silas asked, though he knew there was a ledger in the back of his mind—entries of the people who’d passed, the lies that helped them survive, and the ones that had survived them."
15"He lifted the mug, tapped it against hers in a quiet, almost ceremonial toast—the kind of ritual that both celebrated and mourned what time had done to them."
16"The crescent scar winked again in the neon’s tilt—small, stubborn, a reminder that some marks do not vanish with time or courage."
99.21% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2958
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount121
adverbRatio0.04090601757944557
lyAdverbCount26
lyAdverbRatio0.00878972278566599
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences161
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences161
mean21.58
std9.23
cv0.428
sampleLengths
017
111
230
331
420
533
614
717
819
932
1025
1117
1216
1325
1413
1515
163
1717
1816
1925
2021
2118
2219
2322
2416
2537
2624
2726
2830
2929
3012
3117
3227
3343
3415
3519
3623
3710
389
3923
4026
4132
4240
4317
447
4520
4614
4721
4822
4927
41.30% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.2422360248447205
totalSentences161
uniqueOpeners39
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences145
matches(empty)
ratio0
62.76% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount57
totalSentences145
matches
0"She wore a coat that"
1"His hair wore grey like"
2"It never did."
3"she said, and named the"
4"She kept her voice level,"
5"He stepped closer, not quite"
6"He wore the lean of"
7"she added, almost teasing, eyes"
8"He set his mug down"
9"she said after a long"
10"She scanned the crowd with"
11"He picked up the mug"
12"He didn’t reach for a"
13"He looked at her then,"
14"She let the satchel slide"
15"She hadn’t come to time's"
16"She’d come because the Nest"
17"She didn’t want the trap"
18"She studied the wooden counter,"
19"She found something in the"
ratio0.393
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount138
totalSentences145
matches
0"The Raven's Nest breathed with"
1"Maps hung like weathered banners"
2"A bookshelf stood at the"
3"The air smelled of old"
4"The words drifted across the"
5"The voice, when it landed,"
6"Rory slid into a chair"
7"She wore a coat that"
8"The crescent scar on her"
9"Silas stood with a bottle"
10"His hair wore grey like"
11"The signet ring on his"
12"The name paused in the"
13"A smile tugged at the"
14"It never did."
15"she said, and named the"
16"She kept her voice level,"
17"He stepped closer, not quite"
18"He wore the lean of"
19"The knee still clicked when"
ratio0.952
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences145
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences90
technicalSentenceCount19
matches
0"She wore a coat that had seen better winters, a courier’s satchel at her feet, and eyes that skipped across faces the way penguins skim ice—deliberate, measurin…"
1"His hair wore grey like someone who had earned it, and his eyes—hazel, always watching—missed nothing."
2"She kept her voice level, as if she were reading from a script she hadn’t written."
3"The scar wasn’t loud, but its shape—a small crescent—had followed her through the years like a discreet map marker, reminding her of a childhood accident that h…"
4"He looked at her then, with the patient intensity of a man who had spent his youth mapping people’s lies and truths, whose life had become a corridor of doors t…"
5"The Nest exhaled a breath around them, a collective pause that made the room feel suddenly intimate, as though the walls remembered more about them than either …"
6"He wasn’t a man who apologized for the past, not in front of other people."
7"But he kept the same soft gravity that had kept his networks intact for decades, that had earned him the name of the Spymaster even now, when the books had clos…"
8"She met his gaze, which was not unkind, only tired in a way that suggested mornings that began with too much to do and not enough time to do it."
9"Rory looked at the shelf, her fingers brushing the air near the spines, as if she could sense the old mechanism even when the dust wrote its own history across …"
10"He touched the silver signet ring on his right hand with a thumb as if it were a relic."
11"A waitress changed a bottle, a couple argued softly at the end of the bar, and a man in a long coat watched too intently as if too much depended on the next cho…"
12"The words felt heavy on her tongue, as if she’d rehearsed them in the dark, and she wasn’t sure she wanted to pour them out into a room that already carried too…"
13"Rory exhaled, a long, almost theatrical release, the breath of someone who had learned to carry more than her body could contain without breaking."
14"Rory lifted her gaze, capturing his face in a moment of clarity that felt almost sacramental."
15"The Nest seemed to lean closer as if listening for the faint, inevitable sound of closure or confirmation, not the kind you spell out with sentences but the kin…"
16"Silas nodded, slow and approving, as if the answer had arrived on its own, like night finding the city."
17"Outside, the street’s rain began to tap at the window, a soft percussion against glass that matched the rhythm of two lives trying to decide which lane to trave…"
18"The Nest observed, patient as a confidant, and Rory, with a small, almost indiscernible nod, settled back into the chair as if the old years might finally offer…"
31.25% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags48
uselessAdditionCount9
matches
0"The words drifted, as if someone had tapped them out on a piano, a simple, knowing question that felt dangerous and familiar all at once"
1"Silas said, voice calm enough to dull a blade"
2"Silas answered, and the words tasted like a warning half-swallowed"
3"Rory said, and the edge came back into her voice, crisp enough to slice the smoke from the air"
4"Silas finally murmured, shoulders giving a tiny, controlled shudder"
5"He let, a verdict offered without a court"
6"he admitted, and the admission landed like a weight dropped into water"
7"Silas said quietly, as if the words were a lens focusing a blurred memory"
8"she said, and the words were honest, almost bare"
55.41% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags37
fancyCount7
fancyTags
0"she added (add)"
1"Silas finally murmured (murmur)"
2"he admitted (admit)"
3"Rory observed (observe)"
4"Silas pressed (press)"
5"she admitted (admit)"
6"she admitted (admit)"
dialogueSentences59
tagDensity0.627
leniency1
rawRatio0.189
effectiveRatio0.189
66.3702%