Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTYHJ4MZCVBEW4Z6TWV2P33

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Duration:
50.3s
Cost:
$0.003407
Provider:
Together

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The headlights died before she found the parking spot. Aurora sat in the sudden darkness, fingers still wrapped around the key in the ignition. The engine ticked as it cooled. Through the windscreen, Richmond Park stretched black and featureless, the kind of darkness that city eyes weren't built for. She'd come here for a reason. That much felt important to remember. The pendant pressed cold against her sternum through her t-shirt. She'd worn it for three weeks now, ever since the woman in the静脉 clinic handed it to her without explanation. Just: "When it pulls, follow." Like that was normal. Like that was something a person said. The pull had started at half nine. A faint warmth, spreading from the pendant like a bloodstain through fabric. North. Always north. Now she was here. Aurora grabbed her phone. No signal, obviously. She'd known that before she'd left, checked the map at the edge of the city where the bars still functioned. The Grove was marked on those old files Eva had sent her years ago, back when they were still talking about things likeescapism and fairy rings and how the world was bigger than it looked. A pocket. A fold. A place where the wall between worlds wore thin. She'd thought it was a joke. Late-night wine theories. Nothing that warranted a drive into the darkness. Her phone's torch cut a pale wound in the dark. She stepped out of the car and locked it behind her, though she wasn't sure why. Habit, probably. The desperate human need to maintain rituals when everything else was falling apart. The fence was lower than she expected. She remembered Richmond Park having proper barriers, the kind that said keep out without bothering with words. This was just wooden posts, old and grey, the wire between them rusted to something that felt more like decoration than defence. She pushed through a gap where two posts had rotted at the base and onto the grass beyond. The path existed only in her memory of Eva's directions. Turn left at the oak with the lightning scar. Follow the deer trail until the ground changes. Don't stop until you see the flowers. She didn't see flowers. She saw darkness, thick as velvet, the kind that had weight and intention. But she kept walking. The ground changed beneath her trainers. Soft at first, then springier, like walking on moss that had never known drought. The air smelled different too. Not unpleasant, just... more. More green. More life. A sweetness underneath that reminded her of her mother's garden in Cardiff, before everything, before she'd stopped calling home. The pendant pulsed warmer. She stopped. Listened. Nothing. The silence was absolute, the kind that didn't exist in London, where there was always a car alarm or a drunk or the distant hum of the underground. Here, the quiet felt manufactured. Curated. A sound, then. Or almost a sound. Like someone breathing just out of range, a rhythm too slow to be wind through leaves. She turned, torch sweeping the darkness. Nothing. The oak stood in front of her now, she realized. Lightning scar running up its trunk like a burnmark, the bark twisted around it like something had tried to heal and given up. This was the marker. The start. She walked past it. The deer trail led her deeper, past the point where she could see her car, past where the city noise should have been but wasn't. The torch began to flicker. She shook it, tapped it against her palm, but the light kept dying in small increments until she was walking in a bubble of near-darkness and the glow from the pendant was stronger than her phone. Flowers. She saw them then. They shouldn't have been visible. The moon was hidden, the torch was barely functioning, but they glowed faintly in blues and purples, clustered in a clearing that hadn't been there a moment before. Wildflowers, Eva had said. Blooming year-round. The Fae Grove. Aurora stepped into the clearing and felt the wrongness immediately. It crawled up her spine like cold water, a certainty that had nothing to do with logic. The kind of feeling she'd learned to trust in the flat with Evan, when his moods shifted and she could feel the air thicken before the shouting started. She wasn't alone. The pendant pulsed brighter. Not warm now—hot, almost painful, pressed against her skin like a brand. She pulled out the chain, looked at the stone. The deep crimson had gone luminous, a light growing from inside like something waking up. Something was here. She turned slowly, giving herself time to think. The standing stones were visible now, ancient oaks grown into shapes that hurt the eye if she looked too long. Their shadows moved independently of the faint light, stretching and contracting like they were breathing. A sound behind her. Soft. The weight of a footstep on moss. She spun. Raised her phone. Nothing. But the air felt different now. Thinner. The sweetness from before had gone sour, turned into something metallic that coated the back of her throat. "I know you're here." Her voice sounded small. The words vanished into the dark like they'd never existed. The flowers closest to her trembled. Not from wind—there was no wind—but something had passed through them. Something low and fast, moving parallel to the ground. Her hand found the pendant again, clutching it like a talisman. The heat was almost unbearable now, burning her fingers, but she couldn't let go. The stone pulled toward the centre of the clearing, toward a spot where the shadows gathered too thick, where the darkness seemed to pool and breathe. The ground shook. Barely. A vibration more felt than heard, like something massive shifting in its sleep. She should leave. Every rational part of her brain screamed it—turn around, find the car, drive until the city swallowed her again. But her feet wouldn't move. The pendant held her in place, burning, pulling, insisting. The shadows coalesced. They took shape slowly, like water settling into a form. Tall. Thin. Featureless except for the suggestion of a face that wasn't quite a face, angles that shouldn't be angles, a silhouette that her eyes refused to process. The pendant went silent. The heat died. Everything went still. Then the figure spoke, and its voice was the sound of every door she'd ever heard close in her life. "You came." She couldn't answer. Couldn't breathe. The flowers around her feet began to die.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags0
90.85% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1093
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count2
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
54.25% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1093
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"warmth"
count1
1
word"velvet"
count1
2
word"weight"
count2
3
word"pulsed"
count2
4
word"silence"
count1
5
word"flicker"
count1
6
word"could feel"
count1
7
word"trembled"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"velvet"
2"weight"
3"pulsed"
4"silence"
5"flicker"
6"could feel"
7"trembled"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences123
matches(empty)
84.79% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences123
filterMatches
0"see"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"began to"
2"seemed to"
97.93% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences125
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0.008
matches
0"She'd worn it for three weeks now, ever since the woman in the静脉 clinic handed it to her without explanation."
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1086
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions19
wordCount1076
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity0.28
worstName"Like"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Like"
discoveredNames
Richmond2
Park2
Like3
Grove2
Eva3
Cardiff1
London1
Fae1
Evan1
Aurora3
persons
0"Eva"
1"Evan"
2"Aurora"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Grove"
3"Cardiff"
4"London"
5"Fae"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences65
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"quite a face, angles that shouldn't be angles, a silhouette that her eyes refused to process"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1086
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences125
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs46
mean23.61
std20.14
cv0.853
sampleLengths
09
140
212
346
422
54
675
717
841
964
1034
1117
124
1352
144
153
1635
1729
181
1939
204
2166
225
2339
243
2555
263
2740
283
2943
3012
315
3226
334
3414
3526
3651
3717
3836
393
4038
4110
4220
432
445
458
99.56% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences123
matches
0"was marked"
1"was hidden"
99.50% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs199
matches
0"was falling"
1"was walking"
2"were breathing"
74.29% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences125
ratio0.024
matches
0"Not warm now—hot, almost painful, pressed against her skin like a brand."
1"Not from wind—there was no wind—but something had passed through them."
2"Every rational part of her brain screamed it—turn around, find the car, drive until the city swallowed her again."
92.64% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1083
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"painful, pressed against her"
adverbCount45
adverbRatio0.04155124653739612
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.009233610341643583
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences125
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences125
mean8.69
std7.78
cv0.895
sampleLengths
09
115
26
319
46
56
610
720
89
97
107
1112
121
132
144
154
163
1720
1835
192
202
219
226
233
248
2510
2616
272
2813
297
3017
3122
3218
3310
349
358
367
374
3813
394
406
4114
425
433
441
452
462
4719
484
492
54.40% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.384
totalSentences125
uniqueOpeners48
33.67% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences99
matches
0"Then the figure spoke, and"
ratio0.01
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences99
matches
0"She'd come here for a"
1"She'd worn it for three"
2"She'd known that before she'd"
3"She'd thought it was a"
4"Her phone's torch cut a"
5"She stepped out of the"
6"She remembered Richmond Park having"
7"She pushed through a gap"
8"She didn't see flowers."
9"She saw darkness, thick as"
10"She turned, torch sweeping the"
11"She walked past it."
12"She shook it, tapped it"
13"She saw them then."
14"They shouldn't have been visible."
15"It crawled up her spine"
16"She wasn't alone."
17"She pulled out the chain,"
18"She turned slowly, giving herself"
19"Their shadows moved independently of"
ratio0.253
66.06% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount78
totalSentences99
matches
0"The headlights died before she"
1"Aurora sat in the sudden"
2"The engine ticked as it"
3"She'd come here for a"
4"That much felt important to"
5"The pendant pressed cold against"
6"She'd worn it for three"
7"The pull had started at"
8"A faint warmth, spreading from"
9"Aurora grabbed her phone."
10"She'd known that before she'd"
11"The Grove was marked on"
12"A place where the wall"
13"She'd thought it was a"
14"Nothing that warranted a drive"
15"Her phone's torch cut a"
16"She stepped out of the"
17"The desperate human need to"
18"The fence was lower than"
19"She remembered Richmond Park having"
ratio0.788
50.51% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences99
matches
0"Now she was here."
ratio0.01
23.81% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences42
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"She remembered Richmond Park having proper barriers, the kind that said keep out without bothering with words."
1"This was just wooden posts, old and grey, the wire between them rusted to something that felt more like decoration than defence."
2"She saw darkness, thick as velvet, the kind that had weight and intention."
3"Soft at first, then springier, like walking on moss that had never known drought."
4"The silence was absolute, the kind that didn't exist in London, where there was always a car alarm or a drunk or the distant hum of the underground."
5"The standing stones were visible now, ancient oaks grown into shapes that hurt the eye if she looked too long."
6"Featureless except for the suggestion of a face that wasn't quite a face, angles that shouldn't be angles, a silhouette that her eyes refused to process."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags0
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
87.4083%