Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTYHMN2D777JT4PN8XKBT0M

Run Details

Duration:
41.1s
Cost:
$0.044722
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The corrugated iron top of the fence bit into my palms as I vaulted over. I landed in a crouch, boots sinking into the sodden mulched earth of Richmond Park. A jagged breath escaped my lips, forming a white plume that lingered too long in the stagnant air. "Customer service," I muttered, brushing rot from my knees. "Above and beyond." The insulated delivery bag on my back weighed a ton. Yu-Fei had been specific about the contents: *Don't open it. Don't shake it. Leave it at the markers and run.* Standard instructions for the Golden Empress's "off-menu" clientele, usually, but the delivery address simply read *Isolde's Grove*. I checked my mobile. No signal. The little bars in the corner had turned into grey zeroes the moment I hopped the perimeter. I adjusted the strap across my chest. The takeaway bag felt warm, unnaturally so, radiating a heat that had nothing to do with twice-fried pork or steamed dumplings. It felt like carrying a fever. To my left, the mundane world of London persisted. I could see the ambient orange glow of streetlights filtering through the trees, distant and safe. To my right, the darkness thickened, pooling like ink around the roots of ancient oaks. The instructions were clear: *Past the erratic boulder. Through the twin oaks. Do not leave the path.* I started walking. Dry leaves crunched under my boots, breathless snaps that sounded like breaking fingers in the quiet. This part of the park usually swarmed with deer or teenagers looking for a secluded spot to fumble with zippers, but tonight, the silence was absolute. Not the silence of emptiness, but the held-breath silence of a predator waiting for movement. A sharp sting against my sternum made me winch. I fished the silver chain from beneath my jumper. The Heartstone pendant pulsed. The deep crimson gem, usually dormant and cool against my skin, now beat with a faint, rhythmic heat. *Thump. Thump.* "Brilliant," I whispered. "Just brilliant." The pendant only woke up when things were about to go sideways. It hadn’t buzzed this hard since the incident in the sewers beneath Camden. I pushed forward. The path narrowed, the manicured gravel of the public park giving way to a trail of packed dirt that smelled of ozone and crushed lavender. The transition was abrupt, like stepping through a curtain of cold water. The Fae Grove. Lore said time moved differently here. An hour inside could mean minutes or days back in the real world. Or decades. I glanced at my watch. The second hand swept backward, ticked twice, then froze. "Right then. Quick drop. No sightseeing." The canopy above blocked out the stars. In the gloom, the vegetation changed. The skeletal winter branches of the outer park vanished, replaced by lush, weeping greenery. Wildflowers bloomed in the mulch—foxgloves, monkshood, and pale white lilies that glowed with their own sickly luminescence. They shouldn't be here. It was November. A sweet, cloying scent hit me. It masked a deeper undertone, something metallic and raw. Copper. I reached the standing stones. Two massive slabs of granite, weathered and moss-slick, leaned toward each other like conspirators whispering secrets. This was the threshold. My chest burned. The Heartstone was practically vibrating now, a frantic warning against my ribs. I stepped between the stones. The air pressure dropped instantly, popping my ears. The sound of my own heartbeat filled my head, loud and wet. I stopped, scanning the clearing. It was a perfect circle of grass, untouched by the encroaching twisted roots of the forest. In the center lay a flat stone altar. "Delivery," I said. My voice didn't carry. The air swallowed the sound instantly. I unslung the bag. It hit the grass with a heavy, wet thud. My fingers fumbled with the Velcro flap. Yu-Fei said to leave it, but the bag had shifted during the hike. Something had leaked. A dark, viscous fluid stained the bottom of the thermal lining. It wasn't soy sauce. I backed away. "Enjoy your meal." A twig snapped. It didn't come from the woods behind me. It came from the trees directly ahead, the ones that looked too thick, too knotted. I froze. In the periphery of my vision, the wildflowers turned. Not with the wind—there was no wind—but with intent. The pale lilies swiveled their heads toward me like eerie little satellite dishes. *Movement.* To the left. High up. I snapped my head toward the sound. A branch swayed, settling into stillness. "Hello?" I called out. The word tasted like ash. A giggle rippled through the clearing. It wasn't the sound of a child. It was the sound of dry leaves scraping together, mimicking laughter. *Scritch-scratch-hee-hee.* I took a step back toward the standing stones. My boot hit something hard. I looked down. It was a trainers—a Nike Air Max, white, fairly new. And inside it, a foot. just a foot. Severed clean at the ankle, the bone gleaming white in the faint light of the flowers. My stomach rolled. The copper smell was overpowering now. I looked up. The standing stones were gone. Where the gateway had been, a wall of briars now stood, thick as a man's arm and bristling with thorns the size of daggers. They writhed slowly, tightening the circle. The giggle came again, louder. Closer. It came from everywhere and nowhere. *Thump. Thump. Thump.* The pendant seared my skin. "Okay," I said, my hand drifting to the knife in my belt, the cold steel handle the only real thing in a world that was rapidly turning into a nightmare. "You didn't tip last time I was here." The thermal bag in the center of the clearing moved. Not from the wind. Something *inside* it pushed against the nylon. One of the weeping trees at the edge of the clearing groaned. Bark split with the sound of tearing meat. A face, long and wooden with hollow pits for eyes, pressed outward from the trunk, stretching the wood like putty. The bag zipper hissed. Slowly. Deliberately. I wasn't the delivery girl. I kept my eyes on the bag as the flap fell open. The darkness inside the bag spilled out, darker than the night, pooling onto the grass and rising, forming a shape that had too many limbs and no face. "I'm the main course," I whispered. The briars behind me cinched tight.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences12
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
85.98% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1070
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count2
1
adverb"deliberately"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"deliberately"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
43.93% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1070
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"standard"
count1
1
word"silence"
count3
2
word"predator"
count1
3
word"pulsed"
count1
4
word"rhythmic"
count1
5
word"gloom"
count1
6
word"scanning"
count1
7
word"perfect"
count1
8
word"gleaming"
count1
9
word"stomach"
count1
highlights
0"standard"
1"silence"
2"predator"
3"pulsed"
4"rhythmic"
5"gloom"
6"scanning"
7"perfect"
8"gleaming"
9"stomach"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences125
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences125
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences130
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans8
markdownWords36
totalWords1060
ratio0.034
matches
0"Don't open it. Don't shake it. Leave it at the markers and run."
1"Isolde's Grove"
2"Past the erratic boulder. Through the twin oaks. Do not leave the path."
3"Thump. Thump."
4"Movement."
5"Scritch-scratch-hee-hee."
6"Thump. Thump. Thump."
7"inside"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions17
wordCount1027
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity0.19
worstName"Heartstone"
maxWindowNameDensity0.5
worstWindowName"Heartstone"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Standard1
Golden1
Empress1
London1
Heartstone2
Camden1
Fae1
Grove2
November1
Velcro1
Nike1
Air1
Max1
persons
0"Empress"
1"Air"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Fae"
4"Grove"
globalScore1
windowScore1
80.56% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences72
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"felt like carrying a fever"
1"sounded like breaking fingers in the quiet"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.943
wordCount1060
matches
0"Not the silence of emptiness, but the held-breath silence of a predator waiting for movement"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences130
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs57
mean18.6
std14.69
cv0.79
sampleLengths
048
112
247
323
434
540
617
73
857
99
1031
112
125
1325
1440
153
1635
176
1851
1916
2025
2115
225
2325
2424
2513
2636
2715
286
293
3023
312
3231
331
345
3513
369
3724
381
3914
403
4134
429
438
4430
4512
468
4738
4810
4911
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences125
matches
0"were gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs166
matches(empty)
76.92% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences130
ratio0.023
matches
0"Wildflowers bloomed in the mulch—foxgloves, monkshood, and pale white lilies that glowed with their own sickly luminescence."
1"Not with the wind—there was no wind—but with intent."
2"It was a trainers—a Nike Air Max, white, fairly new."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1036
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount35
adverbRatio0.033783783783783786
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.017374517374517374
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences130
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences130
mean8.15
std6.19
cv0.759
sampleLengths
015
115
218
39
43
510
610
73
824
94
102
1117
127
1321
146
159
1616
1715
188
194
205
213
2216
2326
2415
259
269
274
2818
291
301
313
322
3312
3413
353
3625
3712
383
396
4013
412
425
439
446
457
466
4714
4817
494
51.28% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.35384615384615387
totalSentences130
uniqueOpeners46
30.86% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences108
matches
0"just a foot."
ratio0.009
64.44% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount42
totalSentences108
matches
0"I landed in a crouch,"
1"I muttered, brushing rot from"
2"I checked my mobile."
3"I adjusted the strap across"
4"It felt like carrying a"
5"I could see the ambient"
6"I started walking."
7"I fished the silver chain"
8"It hadn’t buzzed this hard"
9"I pushed forward."
10"I glanced at my watch."
11"They shouldn't be here."
12"It was November."
13"It masked a deeper undertone,"
14"I reached the standing stones."
15"My chest burned."
16"I stepped between the stones."
17"I stopped, scanning the clearing."
18"It was a perfect circle"
19"My voice didn't carry."
ratio0.389
57.22% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount87
totalSentences108
matches
0"The corrugated iron top of"
1"I landed in a crouch,"
2"A jagged breath escaped my"
3"I muttered, brushing rot from"
4"The insulated delivery bag on"
5"Yu-Fei had been specific about"
6"I checked my mobile."
7"The little bars in the"
8"I adjusted the strap across"
9"The takeaway bag felt warm,"
10"It felt like carrying a"
11"I could see the ambient"
12"The instructions were clear: *Past"
13"I started walking."
14"This part of the park"
15"A sharp sting against my"
16"I fished the silver chain"
17"The Heartstone pendant pulsed."
18"The deep crimson gem, usually"
19"The pendant only woke up"
ratio0.806
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences108
matches
0"To my left, the mundane"
1"To my right, the darkness"
2"To the left."
ratio0.028
48.87% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences38
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"A jagged breath escaped my lips, forming a white plume that lingered too long in the stagnant air."
1"The takeaway bag felt warm, unnaturally so, radiating a heat that had nothing to do with twice-fried pork or steamed dumplings."
2"The path narrowed, the manicured gravel of the public park giving way to a trail of packed dirt that smelled of ozone and crushed lavender."
3"Wildflowers bloomed in the mulch—foxgloves, monkshood, and pale white lilies that glowed with their own sickly luminescence."
4"The darkness inside the bag spilled out, darker than the night, pooling onto the grass and rising, forming a shape that had too many limbs and no face."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"I muttered (mutter)"
1"I whispered (whisper)"
2"I whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences12
tagDensity0.417
leniency0.833
rawRatio0.6
effectiveRatio0.5
84.6690%