Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTYJ51MD0N4JTCYW81A1SCA

Run Details

Duration:
1m 52s
Cost:
$0.005516
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Three deadbolts clacked in the frame, the sound brittle as dry leaves in a stairwell, and the door slid inward with a sigh that felt like a held breath finally releasing. The hallway light teased a silhouette, tall and stubborn, narrowing into the living room where heat from Brick Lane tinged the air with cumin and something darker, something more intimate. Lucien Moreau stepped inside, the ivory handle of a cane catching the lamplight, a crease of charcoal suit still sharp at the shoulders. Ptolemy the tabby flicked his tail from beneath the sofa and watched the stranger with the measured disdain only a cat could muster. The scent of old books thickened the room, a library that learned you before you learned it. Rory Carter stood by the kitchen counter, a stack of parchment and notes fanning out in her wake. Her hair, straight and black, rode a couple of inches past her shoulders; the blue of her eyes truncated pain with calculation. She wore a sweater the colour of rain-soaked slate and jeans that had seen a dozen deliveries in a single week. The crescent scar on her left wrist glinted when she moved her hand, a small moon carved by luck and childhood accidents. She studied him in that quiet way people kept when they wanted to pretend a storm wasn’t brewing. Lucien hovered in the doorway for a heartbeat longer, then folded the door shut with a careful hand that never trembled. The sound of the latch clicked, a reminder that the world could still be ordered, even if not the way you wanted. Rory: “Lucien. You weren’t invited.” Lucien: “That’s never stopped me before.” He stepped inside, the cane tapping a measured tempo on the floorboards, the blade within the ivory grip catching stray light and turning it into a dangerous-looking promise. “You still have the three deadbolts, then?” Rory’s mouth tightened, but she didn’t blink. She moved closer, enough to feel the room breathe with her. The lamp threw gold at the edge of her lashes. The cat watched from a distance, the way cats watch when the world tilts and won’t stay upright. Rory: “That’s not your business,” she said, a tone that wasn’t a denial so much as a shield. Lucien: “It became my business the moment you slid into a city that doesn’t sleep.” He shifted, letting his cane swing once in a lazy arc, and then tucked the tip beneath his arm. “You’re alone, Rory. I can hear the risers creak in the floor above you. You’re borrowed time.” Rory studied the blade’s glint on the cane, then looked him in the eyes—the bright blue of hers meeting the amber and black of his. The words came slow, but the truth leaped ahead of them, uninvited. Rory: “Don’t pretend you came for anything but a question you can’t answer with quiet words.” Lucien: “I came because you asked for a way out, and I know you won’t take it unless it’s offered with a knife behind it.” He pressed a palm to the cane, then slid it away, almost reverently. “We’ve danced around this long enough. There are rules we both used to follow. They’re breaking.” Rory’s gaze wandered to the stacks of notes; their edges were frayed where she’d thumbed through them late at night, chasing leads that might never bloom. The scent of ink, old parchment, and something sweet from the curry downstairs wound through the room and settled in the corners. The cat’s ears twitched; the animal gave Rory a look that said, very plainly, behave. Rory: “Rules aren’t what kept us alive last winter. It was timing, and fear, and the little lies we told ourselves to keep from breaking.” She stepped closer, the distance closing with a careful, almost tender purpose. “What do you want, Lucien? If you came for a fight, you’re late.” Lucien: “You think I want a fight?” He took a slow breath that kept his chest steady. “I want a conversation that doesn’t end with one of us walking out of the door and pretending we never knew what the other looked like when they were scared.” He set the cane against the wall, the blade hidden from view beneath the ivory handle, and let the weight of his age-old calm settle into the room. “We owe a reckoning.” Rory’s fingers drummed on the table, pausing only to slip the scar’s memory away from view. She glanced at her clock, then away, as if checking the time not of the city but of their own stubborn hearts. Rory: “We owe reckoning to no one but ourselves—and to the risks we’ve taken that we both pretended weren’t leaps we’d regret later.” Lucien stepped nearer, the distance between them shrinking until the soft rasp of his coat against the chair’s wooden arm could be heard. He measured her with eyes that had learned to read danger as if it wore a familiar face. Lucien: “We’ve run out of excuses that don’t bite back.” He let a small, rueful smile show, the kind that never reached his eyes but teased them into warmth anyway. “You remember the winter we spoke in silences larger than our mouths?” Rory’s breath caught, quickly replaced by a steadier resolve. She didn’t retreat. She pressed a forearm against the table, the scar tugging a little at the memory. The room held them both—cat, lamp, smell of old paper, the faint sour tang of fear that clung to both of them whenever they stood too close to something they could not name. Rory: “We weren’t fools back then. Not about what would happen if we stayed.” She paused, letting that truth stand between them like a drawn blade. “But we’re not those two people anymore. You know what happened after.” Lucien’s gaze softened in a way that didn’t soften much at all. He tilted his head, the platinum blond hair catching the lamp’s glow and turning it to a halo that didn’t belong to him. The undercurrent in his voice wasn’t anger; it was a careful reckoning. Lucien: “No. We aren’t.” He took the cane in his hand and leaned on it, but not for support. For theatre, to remind the world that he could still command a room with one look and a quiet word. “But the mission hasn’t changed, Rory. And neither have some of the pieces we set down in a past life. They’re still moving.” Ptolemy shifted on the rug, the plant beside the reading chair catching a fringe of light. The cat’s pupils widened, then narrowed, watching both of them as if weighing whether to intervene in a duel or merely to observe a rare and dangerous bloom. Rory: “If you think I’m going to trade a future I can touch for a past I’ve buried, you’re wasting air.” She stepped closer, letting him feel the heat of her body a breath away, enough to be real but not enough to erase the space between them. “I’m not your backup plan, Lucien.” Lucien’s mouth curved in something that wasn’t a smile. He looked at her the way someone looks at a storm they once rode out and never forgot—the wary respect, the tremor just beneath the surface that told you the storm could ride you as well as you could ride it. Lucien: “You’re not. And you never were. The past is a map, Rory. It guides us back toward a place we pretend we’ve outgrown, but we haven’t.” He paused, letting the cadence of his words fall like a measured step on a stair. “The thing I came for isn’t a confession. It’s a warning. If you’re here for maps and scrolls and quiet nights spent with numbers and notes, you’re in the wrong city. If you’re here for the truth, you’re closer than you think.” Rory’s lips pressed into a thin line. She moved a step closer to the lamp, swiping a lock of hair from her face with a casual gesture that didn’t disguise the tremor in her wrist. The crescent scar glittered again as she flexed her fingers, a small, stubborn reminder of what she’d survived. Rory: “Truth has never been kind to either of us. It’s a blade that doesn’t know mercy.” She spoke softly now, not to him but to the space between their histories that dared them to come closer or walk away. “What is it you want, really? Not what your network told you to say.” Lucien inhaled. The room’s scent sharpened—the musk of leather from his suit, the slight tang of his cologne, the faint warmth that came from having someone you’d trusted for years. He reached for an answer that sounded almost intimate, the kind of truth someone would whisper in a locked room, not shout across a kitchen table. Lucien: “I want to stop pretending your exit wasn’t a wound. I want to know if you still bleed for what you believed then, or if you’ve learned to live with the scar.” He shifted, and the cane dusted the wood as if he’d scratched an old memory free from rust. “There’s a thing moving beneath the city, Rory. It grows when we ignore it. If we pretend we’re finished, it wins.” The room’s silence thickened, pages in Rory’s mind turning at the sound of his voice. The words unlocked something that had stayed closed for months, a hinge she hadn’t dared touch since the night the air between them had become a threat to everything she’d built since. Rory: “And if I tell you I’m not finished with the life I built, would you listen anyway, or is this just another ploy to pull me loose from the roots I’ve planted?” Lucien’s eyes flicked to the scar on her wrist, a private map of pain and perseverance. He took a breath, letting the truth ride on it, a dangerous current that could sweep them both away. Lucien: “I’ll listen.” The word hovered between them, honest and heavy. “If you want a reason to walk away again, I’ll give you one. But if you want a reason to stay, I’ll give you that, too.” The cat rose, stretching languorously before vaulting onto the chair, then leaping down to pad toward them with that disarming audacity only feline ambassadors possessed. Ptolemy pressed a warm paw against Rory’s ankle, and she looked down as if the cat had offered a lifeline she could not refuse. Rory: “You think I’m a map you can fold back into place whenever it suits?” She teased, the tremor in her wrist fading into something lighter, almost a smile that didn’t reach her eyes but softened the corners of her mouth. “If you’ve got a reason for staying, you’ll need more than a pretty speech to persuade me. You’ll need a plan.” Lucien’s lips quirked again, this time with a touch of admiration. He met her gaze with a steadiness that had helped him survive more dangerous rooms than this one ever would. He took the cane and set it down with deliberate care, then put his hands into his pockets, the jacket’s fabric catching the lamp’s glow. Lucien: “A plan, then. Since you asked for it.” He paused, letting the moment stretch until the silence became a pressure they both endured. “There’s a network piece—the thing you’ve been chasing for weeks. It’s not a person, not a place, but a pattern that repeats whenever there’s a breach in the city’s fragile umbrella of order. If we pull at the thread, the whole thing frays.” Rory’s eyes narrowed. She didn’t rush to skepticism; she tested the statement with a careful tilt of her head, the blade of a mind cutting through fog. Rory: “Which thread? The one in the old archives under the curry house’s kitchen, or the one that drifts through the Substation, where the demons, the real ones, come to drink their fill?” Lucien: “The Substation.” He spoke with a quiet certainty that carried the weight of someone who’d hunted through neon-lit corridors and shadowed rooms for days and nights that felt like one long breath held in. “It’s where the city reaches for more air than it deserves, and where we’ll find the breach’s source if we’re patient enough to watch.” The cat circled Rory’s feet, the soft pads a counterpoint to the hard edges of their exchanged words. Rory bent slightly to reach for Ptolemy’s head, scratching the cat behind the ears with a tenderness that made her look suddenly younger, the years of fights and flights washing back with gentle gravity. Rory: “People aren’t plans, Lucien. They’re weather. They change, they threaten to break us, they offer us a day we didn’t expect.” Her voice softened without losing its edge. “If you want me back in your fight, you’ll need more than weather talk.” Lucien’s eyes, the amber and the black, softened just a fraction, enough to reveal the man behind the fixer’s mask. He stepped closer, not close enough to invade her space more than the memory allowed, but close enough that his breath warmed the line of her jaw. Lucien: “Then give me a threshold.” He spoke low, a dare wrapped in courtesy. “You decide how far this goes. We test one night, one lead, one truth. If it burns, we walk away again. If it glows, we keep walking until we find what’s breaking the city.” Rory let out a slow breath, her shoulder dropping as if being relieved of a burden she hadn’t realised she was carrying. She looked past him to the stacks of notes—the maps of a life she’d built around solving puzzles that refused to stay solved. Rory: “You want a night. A single test. Fine.” She stepped back, gesturing toward the chair by the table where a lamp threw a circle of warmth across the parchment. “We start with questions you’ve kept to the edge of your tongue. If you lie, if you dodge, we stop.” Lucien inclined his head, a small act of surrender that felt like a beginning rather than an end. He took the first space offered, his movement deliberate, the cane resting against the chair’s leg as if it belonged there more than in his grip. Lucien: “Name the risk that scares you the most right now.” Rory’s eyes narrowed, but not with fear—she weighed not just the risk but what lay beneath it. The room’s quiet pressed in, a living thing, and she let the truth rise, not loud but certain. Rory: “The risk of becoming desperate.” She found the courage to whisper it, the confession leaving her like smoke that wouldn’t quite clear. “Desperation makes miracles possible, but the miracles leave you hollow.” Lucien’s face didn’t register surprise, only a measured acceptance that echoed in the steadiness of his voice. Lucien: “Then we won’t be desperate. Not tonight.” He paused, then added in a softer tone, almost like a note of reassurance he seldom offered: “We’ll be careful. We stay in the outline of the plan you already drew, and we add a line that makes sense to both of us.” Rory’s breath eased into a slower rhythm. The lamp’s glow touched her face, tracing the lines of fatigue that time hadn’t managed to erase entirely. The scar on her wrist shifted with the gesture of her hand, and she brushed a lock of hair behind her ear in a small, almost shy motion that surprised her as much as it did him. Rory: “Careful can be a weapon if you wield it right.” She didn’t smile, not yet, but the edges of her mouth softened again. “Show me your plan.” Lucien looked down at the notes scattered across the table—the maps, the coordinates, the dates she’d circle and re-circle with a hunter’s patience. He gathered a couple of sheets with the ease of someone who had learned which threads to pull without tangling himself in them. Lucien: “First, we stake out the Substation for a night. We observe, we pull no triggers, we learn how the breach travels from the shadows into the daylight. Second, we intercept the pattern at its source, a cluster of people and places that keep feeding on fear. Third, we decide what you deserve to do with a future you’ve fought your way toward.” He looked up, meeting her gaze again with a composed challenge. “And you deserve truth, Rory. Even if the truth isn’t pretty.” Ptolemy, perched on the back of a chair, hummed a quiet baritone of disapproval and hopped down to rub against Rory’s leg. The touch of the cat’s warmth against her skin trembled through Rory’s chest, a small but undeniable reminder of softer days—the days when the world hadn’t demanded so much from her. Rory closed her eyes just a moment, listening to the cat’s purr, the distant bass of Silas’ bar downstairs seeping through the walls, the systemic breath of the building itself. Then she opened them again, sharp and defiant as ever, yet carrying something like a vow in their bright blue depth. Rory: “I didn’t build a future to be dictated by fear.” The words came out with a clear steadiness that surprised even her. “If we do this, we do it on our terms. If we fail, we fail with our eyes open and our backs to the wall.” Lucien offered a brief, almost boyish smile that held years of cunning behind it. He nodded, acknowledging the agreement, not as an overt fledgling of trust but as the first honest step toward it. Lucien: “Then we begin now, not later. We learn what we can from the Substation and we walk through the door when it’s ready to open for us.” The air between them shifted, a subtle ease threading through the tension they’d lived with for months, a thread that remained taut but not broken. Rory felt the room narrow to the two of them, the cat’s soft exhale at her ankle a small counterpoint to the dangerous pulse beating in her own ribs. She looked toward the window, where Brick Lane’s neon bled into the glass in a ribbon of red and blue, and thought of all the nights she’d spent chasing shadows, of all the mornings when the city woke up a little slower because of them. Rory: “We’ll start in the Substation tonight, then. No illusions, no pretenses. We move as one, or we don’t move at all.” Lucien lifted his chin just enough to acknowledge the determination she wore like a weapon, a shield, and a lifeline all at once. He pushed the chair a fraction closer to the table, an unspoken promise that he wouldn’t leave her to face the night alone. Lucien: “One night, Rory. That’s all I’m asking for—the stretch of a single night to see if the old map still points true.” Rory’s voice lowered, not in fear but in the intimate honesty she rarely allowed in daylight. She reached for a parchment, her fingers tracing the ink as if it could speak back to her’s tremor with a more precise answer. Rory: “One night, and then we decide. You bring your plan, I bring my spine, and we see where the road ends.” She looked him squarely in the amber-black gaze that held a thousand decisions, and a dozen regrets she was not yet willing to utter aloud. Lucien stepped back just enough to study the space between them—the edge of the table, the glow of the lamp, the way the cat’s tail flicked with bored impatience against the wooden chair. He met her eyes with a solemn, almost reverent calm. Lucien: “We won’t pretend the past didn’t happen. But if the future holds a different possibility, I’ll meet you there.” The room hummed with a quiet electricity, the kind that makes the hair rise on the nape of the neck and the heart race without needing a baton to strike it. Rory allowed a slow exhale to escape, watched the smoke of that breath drift toward the ceiling, and breathed again, letting the tension ease just enough for something else to take its place—the possibility of something fragile and real. Rory: “Then we start now.” She stepped back, giving the edge of the table a tap with the back of her knuckles, a small, almost mischievous nod toward the map spread out before them. “We don’t speak of danger as if it’s a distant storm. We talk through it, and we move through it.” Lucien inclined his head again, a gesture that was almost a bow and almost nothing but a hinge of propriety. He bent with it toward the table’s surface, his fingers brushing a line of ink as if he could pull a thread from it and reveal the path beneath. Lucien: “Then let’s begin.” The cat gave a soft mewl, as if approving the plan, then settled onto the corner of a chair, watching them with the patient certainty of a veteran strategist. The lamp threw a pool of amber light across the parchment, turning Rory’s blue eyes into a bright pool that seemed to drink in every decision they made. The room felt smaller and larger at once—the us-versus-the-night feeling of two people who had learned to count on each other in moments of danger, and who now stood at the edge of something tender and uncertain, the kind of thing that could heal or ruin in the space of a single breath. Outside, the city’s late night breathed in and out, the curry house below turning the sounds of plates and simmering spices into a perfumed, living chorus. The night pressed close, the Substation waiting with its own secrets, and Rory and Lucien faced it together, not as they had once faced the world with every option closed and every line drawn sharply, but as two people who had learned to hold a conversation with fear and find a way to keep talking when the lights go out. A soft, near-silent moment hung between them—the moment of choosing to be on the same side again, even if they could not promise forever, even if the future remained a question mark with no answer yet. The room slowed for a breath, and then another, and then the world beyond the door pushed, insisting they step forward, step through, step into a night where the truth might finally find a place to rest. The door remained closed behind them, not slammed shut, not gently closed, but left as a silent invitation to return if needed, a boundary that could be crossed or respected as the night chose. The cat blinked once, deeply, and settled into its watch, a quiet sentinel in a room that had just found its edge again—but this time, the edge wasn’t a cliff. It was a doorway, and the city lay beyond it, waiting.
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native_tokens_reasoning8832
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num_input_audio_prompt(null)
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
73.02% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags29
adverbTagCount4
adverbTags
0"She spoke softly [softly]"
1"She stepped back [back]"
2"He paused then [then]"
3"She stepped back [back]"
dialogueSentences63
tagDensity0.46
leniency0.921
rawRatio0.138
effectiveRatio0.127
89.61% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3849
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
3
adverb"really"
count1
4
adverb"slightly"
count1
5
adverb"suddenly"
count1
6
adverb"sharply"
count1
7
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"quickly"
2"softly"
3"really"
4"slightly"
5"suddenly"
6"sharply"
7"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
50.64% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3849
totalAiIsms38
found
0
word"tinged"
count1
1
word"flicked"
count3
2
word"measured"
count5
3
word"trembled"
count2
4
word"reminder"
count3
5
word"glint"
count1
6
word"weight"
count1
7
word"familiar"
count1
8
word"warmth"
count4
9
word"resolve"
count1
10
word"whisper"
count2
11
word"silence"
count2
12
word"carried the weight"
count1
13
word"tenderness"
count1
14
word"echoed"
count1
15
word"tracing"
count2
16
word"tension"
count2
17
word"pulse"
count1
18
word"unspoken"
count1
19
word"race"
count1
20
word"simmering"
count1
21
word"sentinel"
count1
highlights
0"tinged"
1"flicked"
2"measured"
3"trembled"
4"reminder"
5"glint"
6"weight"
7"familiar"
8"warmth"
9"resolve"
10"whisper"
11"silence"
12"carried the weight"
13"tenderness"
14"echoed"
15"tracing"
16"tension"
17"pulse"
18"unspoken"
19"race"
20"simmering"
21"sentinel"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells3
narrationSentences138
matches
0"t with fear"
1"t in fear"
2"n with fear"
80.75% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences138
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"feel"
2"look"
hedgeMatches
0"managed to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences162
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen74
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3824
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions34
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions91
wordCount2733
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.57
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Brick2
Lane2
Moreau1
Carter1
Lucien36
Rory43
Ptolemy5
Substation1
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Carter"
2"Lucien"
3"Rory"
4"Ptolemy"
places
0"Brick"
1"Lane"
globalScore0.713
windowScore0.5
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences124
glossingSentenceCount9
matches
0"felt like a held breath finally releasi"
1"as if checking the time not of the city but of their own stubborn hearts"
2"as if weighing whether to intervene in a duel or merely to observe a rare and dangerous bloom"
3"felt like one long breath held in"
4"felt like a beginning rather than an en"
5"quite clear"
6"something like a vow in their bright blue de"
7"as if approving the plan, then settled onto the corner of a chair, watching them with the patient certainty of a veteran strategist"
8"pool that seemed to drink in every decision they made"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches14
per1kWords3.661
wordCount3824
matches
0"not of the city but of their own stubborn hearts"
1"no one but"
2"not to him but to the space between their histories"
3"not a person, not a place, but a pattern"
4"not a place, but a pattern"
5"not close enough to invade her space more than the memory allowed, but close enough"
6"not with fear—she weighed not just the risk but what lay beneath it"
7"not just the risk but what lay beneath it"
8"not loud but certain"
9"not yet, but the edges of her mouth softened again"
10"not as an overt fledgling of trust but as the first honest step toward it"
11"not in fear but in the intimate honesty she rarely allowed in daylight"
12"not slammed shut, not gently closed, but left as a silent invitation to return if needed, a boundary"
13"not gently closed, but left as a silent invitation to return if needed, a boundary"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences162
matches
0"letting that truth"
86.27% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs78
mean49.03
std22.16
cv0.452
sampleLengths
0124
1101
243
35
441
546
618
751
837
916
1054
1163
1250
1379
1438
1523
1641
1742
1860
1938
2047
2162
2244
2354
2450
2585
2653
2754
2856
2972
3047
3133
3235
3337
3449
3562
3656
3767
3827
3933
4059
4152
4243
4347
4448
4545
4650
4744
4811
4935
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences138
matches
0"were frayed"
1"being relieved"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs416
matches
0"wasn’t brewing"
1"was carrying"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences18
totalSentences162
ratio0.111
matches
0"Her hair, straight and black, rode a couple of inches past her shoulders; the blue of her eyes truncated pain with calculation."
1"Rory studied the blade’s glint on the cane, then looked him in the eyes—the bright blue of hers meeting the amber and black of his."
2"Rory’s gaze wandered to the stacks of notes; their edges were frayed where she’d thumbed through them late at night, chasing leads that might never bloom."
3"The cat’s ears twitched; the animal gave Rory a look that said, very plainly, behave."
4"The room held them both—cat, lamp, smell of old paper, the faint sour tang of fear that clung to both of them whenever they stood too close to something they could not name."
5"The undercurrent in his voice wasn’t anger; it was a careful reckoning."
6"He looked at her the way someone looks at a storm they once rode out and never forgot—the wary respect, the tremor just beneath the surface that told you the storm could ride you as well as you could ride it."
7"The room’s scent sharpened—the musk of leather from his suit, the slight tang of his cologne, the faint warmth that came from having someone you’d trusted for years."
8"She didn’t rush to skepticism; she tested the statement with a careful tilt of her head, the blade of a mind cutting through fog."
9"She looked past him to the stacks of notes—the maps of a life she’d built around solving puzzles that refused to stay solved."
10"Rory’s eyes narrowed, but not with fear—she weighed not just the risk but what lay beneath it."
11"Lucien looked down at the notes scattered across the table—the maps, the coordinates, the dates she’d circle and re-circle with a hunter’s patience."
12"The touch of the cat’s warmth against her skin trembled through Rory’s chest, a small but undeniable reminder of softer days—the days when the world hadn’t demanded so much from her."
13"Lucien stepped back just enough to study the space between them—the edge of the table, the glow of the lamp, the way the cat’s tail flicked with bored impatience against the wooden chair."
14"Rory allowed a slow exhale to escape, watched the smoke of that breath drift toward the ceiling, and breathed again, letting the tension ease just enough for something else to take its place—the possibility of something fragile and real."
15"The room felt smaller and larger at once—the us-versus-the-night feeling of two people who had learned to count on each other in moments of danger, and who now stood at the edge of something tender and uncertain, the kind of thing that could heal or ruin in the space of a single breath."
16"A soft, near-silent moment hung between them—the moment of choosing to be on the same side again, even if they could not promise forever, even if the future remained a question mark with no answer yet."
17"The cat blinked once, deeply, and settled into its watch, a quiet sentinel in a room that had just found its edge again—but this time, the edge wasn’t a cliff."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2078
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"age-old calm settle"
adverbCount74
adverbRatio0.0356111645813282
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.006737247353224254
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences162
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences162
mean23.6
std11.81
cv0.5
sampleLengths
031
130
223
323
417
518
622
721
822
918
1021
1122
125
1334
147
157
1611
1710
1818
1918
2034
2117
2225
2312
2416
2538
2616
2726
2822
2915
3037
3113
3217
3358
344
3516
3622
3723
3823
3918
4030
4112
429
433
4415
4533
4626
4712
4812
4923
41.98% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.1419753086419753
totalSentences162
uniqueOpeners23
26.46% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences126
matches
0"Then she opened them again,"
ratio0.008
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount28
totalSentences126
matches
0"Her hair, straight and black,"
1"She wore a sweater the"
2"She studied him in that"
3"She moved closer, enough to"
4"He set the cane against"
5"She glanced at her clock,"
6"He measured her with eyes"
7"She didn’t retreat."
8"She pressed a forearm against"
9"He tilted his head, the"
10"He looked at her the"
11"She moved a step closer"
12"He reached for an answer"
13"He took a breath, letting"
14"He met her gaze with"
15"He took the cane and"
16"She didn’t rush to skepticism;"
17"He stepped closer, not close"
18"She looked past him to"
19"He took the first space"
ratio0.222
83.02% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount95
totalSentences126
matches
0"The hallway light teased a"
1"Lucien Moreau stepped inside, the"
2"Ptolemy the tabby flicked his"
3"The scent of old books"
4"Rory Carter stood by the"
5"Her hair, straight and black,"
6"She wore a sweater the"
7"The crescent scar on her"
8"She studied him in that"
9"Lucien hovered in the doorway"
10"The sound of the latch"
11"Rory’s mouth tightened, but she"
12"She moved closer, enough to"
13"The lamp threw gold at"
14"The cat watched from a"
15"Rory studied the blade’s glint"
16"The words came slow, but"
17"Rory’s gaze wandered to the"
18"The scent of ink, old"
19"The cat’s ears twitched; the"
ratio0.754
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences126
matches(empty)
ratio0
7.94% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences90
technicalSentenceCount17
matches
0"Three deadbolts clacked in the frame, the sound brittle as dry leaves in a stairwell, and the door slid inward with a sigh that felt like a held breath finally …"
1"She wore a sweater the colour of rain-soaked slate and jeans that had seen a dozen deliveries in a single week."
2"The room held them both—cat, lamp, smell of old paper, the faint sour tang of fear that clung to both of them whenever they stood too close to something they co…"
3"He tilted his head, the platinum blond hair catching the lamp’s glow and turning it to a halo that didn’t belong to him."
4"The cat’s pupils widened, then narrowed, watching both of them as if weighing whether to intervene in a duel or merely to observe a rare and dangerous bloom."
5"The room’s scent sharpened—the musk of leather from his suit, the slight tang of his cologne, the faint warmth that came from having someone you’d trusted for y…"
6"Rory bent slightly to reach for Ptolemy’s head, scratching the cat behind the ears with a tenderness that made her look suddenly younger, the years of fights an…"
7"Rory let out a slow breath, her shoulder dropping as if being relieved of a burden she hadn’t realised she was carrying."
8"He took the first space offered, his movement deliberate, the cane resting against the chair’s leg as if it belonged there more than in his grip."
9"The scar on her wrist shifted with the gesture of her hand, and she brushed a lock of hair behind her ear in a small, almost shy motion that surprised her as mu…"
10"He gathered a couple of sheets with the ease of someone who had learned which threads to pull without tangling himself in them."
11"The air between them shifted, a subtle ease threading through the tension they’d lived with for months, a thread that remained taut but not broken."
12"The cat gave a soft mewl, as if approving the plan, then settled onto the corner of a chair, watching them with the patient certainty of a veteran strategist."
13"The lamp threw a pool of amber light across the parchment, turning Rory’s blue eyes into a bright pool that seemed to drink in every decision they made."
14"The room felt smaller and larger at once—the us-versus-the-night feeling of two people who had learned to count on each other in moments of danger, and who now …"
15"The night pressed close, the Substation waiting with its own secrets, and Rory and Lucien faced it together, not as they had once faced the world with every opt…"
16"The door remained closed behind them, not slammed shut, not gently closed, but left as a silent invitation to return if needed, a boundary that could be crossed…"
73.28% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags29
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"She stepped, the distance closing with a careful, almost tender purpose"
1"He shifted, and the cane dusted the wood as if he’d scratched an old memory free from rust"
2"He spoke, a dare wrapped in courtesy"
54.76% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"He pressed (press)"
1"She spoke softly (speak)"
2"She teased (tease)"
3"He spoke (speak)"
4"He spoke (speak)"
5"She found (find)"
dialogueSentences63
tagDensity0.111
leniency0.222
rawRatio0.857
effectiveRatio0.19
69.2788%