Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTYJHD2YBX0WCQNB5XJQ01Z

Run Details

Duration:
1m 10s
Cost:
$0.003465
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Night pressed against the oak standing stones, quiet as a held breath. The Fae Grove opened its mouth with a scent of damp earth and wildflowers that refused to fade with the hour. The air smelled of something ancient and patient, as if the grass itself had listened to centuries of secrets and decided to keep them for a little longer. Aurora Carter moved between the stones, boots quiet on the carpet of fallen leaves. The Heartstone Pendant pummelled faint warmth against her sternum, a tiny, stubborn beacon in a dark place. The crimson gem in the pendant pulsed once, twice, then steadied as if resetting its heartbeat to hers. She tucked the pendant closer under her coat, where the silver chain felt cool against her fingers. The chain had become a way to tether herself to some sense of a path, some line she could follow when the world around seemed to tilt. The grove breathed around her, and for a long moment, she stood without moving, listening not with her ears but with something else—an awareness that prickled the skin along her wrists, where the crescent scar rested like a small, stubborn souvenir from a childhood accident. She didn’t press for answers. She pressed for time, which didn’t behave here, not at all. Time moved differently inside the Grove. An hour inside could be minutes or days outside. She’d learned to count on what her body remembered, not what the clock claimed. The border stones hummed beneath her palms, a muted chorus that felt like old teeth grinding in a mouth full of secrets. The air carried a soft tremor, not quite wind, almost a feeling that the world had decided to lean a little closer, listening. She came here for a reason. The reason mattered more than the nerves that crawled along her spine, more than the fear that hid behind her ribs like a girl who had learned not to trust the dark. The unknown benefactor who had handed her the Heartstone Pendant wouldn’t have asked for nothing, would never have risked giving her something so personal if there hadn’t been something at stake she hadn’t understood yet. The grove was a door, and doors, once opened, didn’t always close quietly. A branch rattled somewhere far to her left. Small enough not to be a branch at all, just a twitch of air, but enough to make her body tighten. The pendant’s warmth prickled, a flutter on the edge of perception, like someone had drawn a finger along a cusp between two rooms. “Not alone, are you?” a voice whispered, but she knew better than to trust a single whisper. Voices here weren’t simple, not in a place like this. She stepped deeper, and the clearing opened to a pool that reflected a sky no longer bound to the night. The water lay still, a mirror that refused to tell more than it remembered. The flowers still bloomed—as they did year-round—little bursts of colour in the dim, self-contained light of the grove. The boundary stones formed a rough circle around the clearing, their runic glyphs something she’d never quite deciphered, not yet. They watched. They waited. They did not forget. “Who’s here?” She asked aloud, though she knew better than to expect a straightforward answer from the dark. The answer came without a voice in the ordinary sense. The air around her trembled as if someone had exhaled a breath that wasn’t their own, a wind that carried the scent of rain and something sweeter and older, a suggestion of honey and moss and distant thunder. The Heartstone Pendant warmed decisively, a pulse that mimicked the beat of a heart tucked behind a ribcage. “Not a you,” the grove seemed to say, in the way the leaves answered the wind with a murmured susurrus. She let out a slow breath, fingers curling around the pendant’s chain until the metal bit cool into her palm. The edges of shadow gathered at the edge of her vision, moving with a deliberate, patient slowness. Shapes weren’t there, and then they were—just enough to catch the corner of her eye, the kind of thing you blink at and the world has changed shape when you look again. A line of movement, nothing more; a shift between branches that suggested someone, or something, might be watching from behind bark that wore the marks of time like wrinkles on an old face. “Show me,” she whispered, though she did not expect obedience. She expected the opposite, that the grove would test her, that the night would not yield a single vowel of truth without a price. The first sound she heard was not a sound you could name: a soft creak, a sigh of air through a hollowed trunk, a rustle that could have been a bird’s wing or a piece of fabric brushing against stone. Then a voice, low and unplaceable, as if spoken through the rustle of leaves rather than from a throat. The cadence indicated something ancient and amused, something that had learned to wait for the right moment. “Too late to turn back,” it offered, not as a warning but as a fact, a statement of what was already written in the air. She didn’t reply to that and didn’t step back. She kept moving, not walking but gliding along the edge of the pool, careful not to disturb the surface and draw attention to herself as one might do in a home that wasn’t theirs to enter. The grove responded to her tension with small perturbations—the way a field of grass shivers when a cow wanders through, careful to leave no obvious path. The pace of her thoughts slowed, then sharpened. The aura around the Heartstone intensified whenever she neared a particular thicket near the grove’s heart, where the trees leaned in like conspirators and the air thickened with the scent of damp earth and something metallic. It reminded her of a moment from years ago, a time she’d sworn she’d never return to, and yet here she stood, returning anyway. The first true flash of something not quite human appeared at the edge of her vision—a figure formed from shadow and breath, nothing more than a suggestion, a silhouette that did not quite align with the trunk it clung to. It did not step forward. It didn’t need eyes to study her; the space between their breaths conveyed more than sight could. She spoke, by instinct, not out of bravado. “I’m not here to take what isn’t mine to demand.” The shadow moved, a slender elongation that didn’t quite reach for her but hovered near enough to feel the air change, as if a corner of the grove had exhibited a hesitation before making a decision. The Head of the Grove—if one could call it that in a way that human language could understand—said nothing, but the question that followed arrived as a palpable weight, pressing on her cheeks and the line of her jaw. “Why do you wear a beacon that requires a path you refuse to name?” The question sat in the air, a challenge without malice, a puzzle that required more than courage to solve. She pressed the pendant closer, feeling the deep crimson glow deepen and dim with the tempo of her own breath. “I came for a reason you’ll understand once we’ve spoken,” she said, choosing to trust that a conversation, at least, could happen without the need for violence or fear to decide the terms. A soft laugh—no more than a sigh, but somehow thick with permission—rippled through the space between her and the shadow. The figure stepped back a fraction, and the grove’s trees gave a creak, as if listening to the exchange with the same careful attention she used when navigating a crowded street at night. “What is the reason?” the voice asked, this time lifting into a tone that suggested it expected results, not questions. She found herself answering before she could stop herself, a habit from nights spent weighing every step before stepping into a room. “To fix something I didn’t break alone,” she admitted, the words tasting strange as they left her mouth. The leaf-laden air grew heavier, and the glow of the Heartstone brightened further, as if the pendant itself approved of the honesty. It pulsed with warmth that spread through her chest, a small, confident flame refusing to be snuffed. “Then come closer,” the voice said, almost coaxing, and the invitation carried a restraint that felt more like mercy than temptation. She did not hesitate. She moved toward the source of the warmth, toward the heart of the grove where the pool lay like a black glass, reflecting not the sky but an alternate, narrower slice of night. The edge of her vision caught another movement, a second shadow flickering along the bark of a tree as if a second someone had decided to reveal themselves, then remembered the rules of the place and retreated. “Close enough to listen, but not close enough to touch,” the grove seemed to imply, and Rory obeyed in part, letting her fingers tingle at the edge of the pendant chain, letting the memories of all the nights she’d spent staring at unseen distances come back in a single breath. “Your beacon,” the voice said finally, not a voice but a procession of sounds that sounded like wind breaking into a chant, “is not for you alone to carry. There are debts owed in a language older than yours and mine. You came for a reason, yes, but not to leave with nothing in your pocket.” The words settled onto her skin like frost. Her breath fogged the air again, and she asked a question without asking it aloud, because the moment demanded directness rather than a ritual of questions and answers. “What debt? What did I take or promise?” The decision to speak was hers alone, a small, stubborn refusal to become quiet. The reply came as a single, shared breath, a chorus of wind through leaves that might have said, We know your name and the path you took to leave Cardiff and London and all the safe choices you wore like a shield. “You came for Eva,” the grove suggested, or maybe the grove suggested nothing and she only imagined it, hungry for a different kind of truth than the one she’d found in her own shadowed memory. Her throat tightened at the name, a name that could be a memory or a lure, a memory of a friend who had vanished into the night, or a friend who had sent her to a place she didn’t know she needed. She did not deny or confirm; she kept walking, letting the energy of the pendant guide her toward the pool’s edge, where the surface held a stillness that wasn’t calm, only paused. The edge of the water showed a flicker—no, a recognition—an image that did not belong to the surface of the pool but to the truth beyond it. A face—faint, blurred, not quite human—stared back at her, a face that might have belonged to Eva, or to another you could mistake for Eva if you squinted against the night and believed in the possibility of meetings that did not require daylight. “Eva doesn’t wander here,” the voice from the grove suggested, lightly and with a shadow of a smile, as if amused by the simplicity of the thought. “I know she doesn’t,” Rory murmured, thinking aloud more than for anyone else’s benefit, “but I came here to find something she left me, or something she forgot she left me.” The water’s surface rippled with no wind, and the ripples left rings that drifted slowly outward, as if time itself had decided to map a new way to move. The grove’s atmosphere thickened, a velvet darkness that pressed against her senses without being cruel, like a hand resting on her shoulder in the dark of a stairwell, guiding but not forcing. “Your path is not finished,” the grove whispered, a phrase that sounded like the rustling of a thousand dry leaves in a cathedral, a reminder that some journeys did not end when you reached the end of the road. Rory’s thoughts skated across the memory of Eva, of London, of the ex named Evan who had made her doubt a future she’d once believed possible. She paused, then spoke again, not to the voice in the trees but to herself, a voice she had learned to trust when nothing else would. “I won’t break what I’ve learned to protect, not again,” she said, though the echo of the forest didn’t respond with reassurance so much as a recognition that she had named a line that would not be crossed. The Heartstone Pendant brightened, sending a soft, almost shy glow through the fabric of her coat, casting her features in a pale red halo. She pressed a finger to her scar, the crescent curving under her skin as if it remembered the old pain better than she did. The grove shifted somewhere behind her—a subtle, almost invisible alteration as if the forest owed a debt to a memory that had not yet been paid in full. A sound came then, not loud but precise, a tapping that drew her attention to the trunk of a tree nearest the edge of the pool. It wasn’t a natural sound; it wasn’t the crack of wood or the branch falling. It was deliberate, a pattern formed by someone who had learned to touch the world with intention. The tree’s bark appeared to ripple, a seam opening along its grain, and within that seam a pale, pale light seeped through, not unlike the first glint of dawn smeared across a midnight sky. The light did not reach out to her so much as it invited her to step closer, to accept the doorway that the tree offered. She did not think twice. She stepped forward, letting the grove’s gravity tug at her feet, letting the pendant’s warmth spread through her like a measured flame. “Are you ready to see what you came for?” the grove asked, not in a voice but as a condition, as a moment when the world’s edges will reassemble on a different axis and you’ll walk toward the thing you couldn’t name without trembling. She did not shy away. She held her breath and stepped into the tree’s opening, felt the world tilt, then right itself as if the grove itself decided to tilt toward truth rather than away. The sound of leaves, the scent of earth, the feel of a night that never fully ends pressed in on her from all sides as she moved through the door. The passage opened into a corridor of roots and light, a tunnel that looked carved by hands older than cities, older than even the memory of a girl who fled from an abusive ex toward a promise she hoped would stay intact. The corridor narrowed, then opened into a chamber lit by a soft, pearlescent glow not from any lamp she could name. The light didn’t burn; it warmed. The air didn’t feel humid; it felt like it carried a living memory. She stood in the middle of the chamber and realized she had entered something not quite human—something like a room in a house that existed in a dream people only barely remembered when they woke. The Heartstone Pendant’s glow intensified, the crimson gem bright enough to light her face with a feverish glow. The chamber’s walls bore the etched remnants of the standing stones’ sigils, now swirling and rearranging themselves in a language she could not decipher with reason or logic, but could sense with a different kind of knowing. A whisper rose from the walls, not a voice so much as the sensation of hearing a memory you did not know you had. It spoke of debts and promises, of danger borne for a future you couldn’t yet touch. It spoke of a time when a girl from Cardiff would be asked to decide whether to keep walking or to stay, even when all the doors pointed in the opposite direction. The whispering sounds paused as something moved at the far end of the chamber. A figure stepped from the shadow, not stepping into the light so much as letting the light step into them. It wore a silhouette that could have been a woman if the world had not shown it to be something else entirely—an outline of limbs and a face that blurred at the edges, as though it existed because someone believed in it more than it existed in the real world. It spoke, and the sound came through the pendant and the walls, a soft, old language that did not demand translation so much as a surrender to its cadence. The words pooled in the chamber, gathering in the space around Rory, and she listened without a reaction she could name other than the way her breath slowed, how her shoulders lowered a fraction, how the muscles along her spine loosened as if she’d finally found a place where fear had no further power to push. “You came for Eva’s shadow,” the voice from the chamber admitted in a way that felt more like acknowledgment than accusation. “You came for a memory you thought you could retrieve with a heart you touch only with caution.” “I came for a life I thought I could still influence,” Rory admitted, not raising her chin to meet the figure’s gaze but letting the words hang in the air between them, weighted with unspoken consequences. The figure stepped a little closer, the light bending around its form in a way that kept its true shape just beyond comprehension. The pendant’s warmth rose, a steady pulse that reminded her she wasn’t alone in this motion through the unknown. “Paths bend,” the figure whispered, or perhaps the walls did, or perhaps it was the heartstone that insisted on the truth: a path she must travel to find out what is owed, what is forgiven, what might still be lost if she chooses to leave with what she has now. She opened her mouth to respond, but the chamber answered first, the room answering for her, answering with the cadence of rain on a slate roof and the memory of a door opening slowly to admit someone who had been waiting. “Then name the debt. Name the responsibility you choose to carry when you walk back through the other side, when you walk back to a life you sometimes fear you ruined.” Her eyes locked on the figure for a long heartbeat that seemed to last an hour—she wasn’t certain how long it actually lasted here. The face remained indistinct enough that she could project onto it whatever she most needed to see. Eva, perhaps. Or someone she would come to meet in a future that had not yet learned to stand still. “I won’t betray what I’ve learned,” she said, the words catching in her throat but coming out clear enough to be heard. “Not while there’s a chance to repair what I broke and leave a better mark on the people I care about.” The chamber exhaled in a whisper of cool air, and the figure’s silhouette softened into a form that had a human touch but belonged to something greater, something older, something that fit inside a story you told yourself at night when you were trying not to hear the world. “Then you are not here to steal,” the figure said. “You are here to decide if you will become part of what remains when the door closes.” The door—no, the chamber—seemed to tilt again, and the walls began to drift with a slow motion that felt almost ceremonial. The Heartstone Pendant’s glow surged with a bright, relentless warmth, and Rory felt a curious strength rise in her chest, as if a fresh thread of resolve had been spun there by the old, patient hands that shaped the grove’s boundaries. “I’m listening,” she whispered, though the words were not a demand but a promise she would keep and a risk she would accept. The figure stepped closer still, the glow of the chamber painting their features in soft, shifting light. It wasn’t a face she could read, not with certainty, but its expression carried a certain tenderness, as though it understood that fear was a currency one could spend and still walk away with something earned. “The debt is not yours alone to bear,” the figure said, not in the way a doctor explains a prescription but as a confidant speaks to a patient who finally accepts help. “Eva’s shadow is not a thing to possess but a map you must follow when you’re ready to follow it.” Rory felt the tremor in her hands loosen, the way a storm breaks and leaves behind a ruined shoreline and a stubborn, clear sky beyond. The grove’s time and the outside world pressed together in a single, fragile moment, offering her a choice and a consequence, equally heavy, equally true. Then a sudden quiet fell, so complete it seemed almost sacramental, and in that quiet, she heard a new sound—other than the whispering leaves or the water, something like the soft clink of metal on wood, as if someone had placed a small, deliberate weight upon a stone. The Heartstone Pendant pulsed once, a deeper, steadier beat that asked for attention, asked for a decision, asked for a promise to keep moving even when the path would demand a different kind of courage than she’d shown so far. “Your choice will ripple,” the chamber warned in a tone that felt less like speech and more like a consequence already written into the world’s fabric. “Then I’ll choose to walk,” she said, her voice firming through resolve she hadn’t thought she possessed, a quiet determination that did not pretend the night would vanish or the grove would suddenly forget what it had just learned about her. The figure inclined its head a fraction, a skeptical, almost affectionate nod that said this was the moment the grove had waited for, the moment Rory had found the nerve to choose a path that did not promise safety or certainty but offered a chance to carve a future out of the bones of a memory. The door of the chamber did not slam shut or close with abrupt finality. It simply began to settle, as if the grove itself decided to return to stillness, letting the night settle in again. The light dimmed but did not vanish; the shadows receded to their natural places, leaving a serene, not-quite-empty space that felt both dangerous and protective in the same breath. Rory stepped back toward the entrance to the corridor, her heart still beating in that heavy, determined rhythm. The pendant’s warmth softened, waiting for her to acknowledge it again, to acknowledge that this was not the end but a pivot, a turning of the wheel toward a future she could not name but would fight to shape. Outside, the night remained as it had always been—dark, quiet, full of unspoken promises. The grove’s boundary stones hummed softly with a sound she could feel in her teeth, a whisper that suggested the world was listening, waiting for the decision she had just started to make. She found the path back to the entry of the grove, the way that would lead her back toward the world she knew or toward a world that would demand a different kind of courage from her. The pool’s surface returned to its still, glassy calm, reflecting not the sky but the possibility of what lay beyond it—the possibility of Eva’s shadow becoming a map again, a route she could travel if she learned to trust the next moment as carefully as she trusted the last. The Heartstone Pendant glowed with a steady warmth, a quiet, stubborn flame against a night that did not want to be dispelled. She pressed the chain to her chest, letting the warmth travel through her, a tether and a compass and a warning all at once. She didn’t look back toward the grove as she step by step, careful as a person who has learned that the most important truth hides inside the steps you take rather than in the things you shout. The boundary stones faded behind her as she left, their hum easing into a faint, almost sleepy murmur. The night around The Fae Grove breathed again, and the world seemed to tilt back toward an ordinary hour, as if nothing had happened at all. But the pulse of the pendant remained, a quiet insistence that something had changed, that the road ahead would not be the same twice she crossed it. And then, as the path wound toward the edge of the Richmond Park dark, a shadow in the trees shifted in a way that did not belong to any creature Rory had ever met, and a single line of speech drifted through the air, not loud, not bright, but perfectly clear in its distance and its intent: You found the doorway, Rory. The hour is late. The door will stay open, if you choose to keep walking.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags28
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"She asked aloud [aloud]"
1"the voice said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.824
leniency1
rawRatio0.071
effectiveRatio0.071
91.78% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount4260
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"lightly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count2
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
3
adverb"softly"
count1
4
adverb"carefully"
count1
5
adverb"perfectly"
count1
highlights
0"lightly"
1"slowly"
2"suddenly"
3"softly"
4"carefully"
5"perfectly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
47.18% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount4260
totalAiIsms45
found
0
word"warmth"
count10
1
word"beacon"
count3
2
word"pulsed"
count3
3
word"sense of"
count1
4
word"whisper"
count4
5
word"trembled"
count1
6
word"pulse"
count3
7
word"tension"
count1
8
word"palpable"
count1
9
word"weight"
count2
10
word"navigating"
count1
11
word"shared breath"
count1
12
word"flicker"
count1
13
word"velvet"
count1
14
word"reminder"
count1
15
word"echo"
count1
16
word"glint"
count1
17
word"measured"
count1
18
word"etched"
count1
19
word"unspoken"
count2
20
word"resolve"
count2
21
word"tenderness"
count1
22
word"determined"
count1
23
word"could feel"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"beacon"
2"pulsed"
3"sense of"
4"whisper"
5"trembled"
6"pulse"
7"tension"
8"palpable"
9"weight"
10"navigating"
11"shared breath"
12"flicker"
13"velvet"
14"reminder"
15"echo"
16"glint"
17"measured"
18"etched"
19"unspoken"
20"resolve"
21"tenderness"
22"determined"
23"could feel"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences166
matches
0"d with warmth"
1"felt the tremor"
39.59% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount10
narrationSentences166
filterMatches
0"look"
1"know"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"appeared to"
2"began to"
3"started to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences173
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen57
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords4232
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions39
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions51
wordCount3877
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity0.28
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Fae2
Grove4
Carter1
Heartstone10
Pendant8
Voices1
Head1
Rory11
Cardiff2
London2
Eva5
Evan1
Richmond1
Park1
You1
persons
0"Grove"
1"Carter"
2"Heartstone"
3"Pendant"
4"Rory"
5"Eva"
6"Evan"
7"You"
places
0"Fae"
1"Cardiff"
2"London"
3"Richmond"
4"Park"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences154
glossingSentenceCount14
matches
0"as if resetting its heartbeat to hers"
1"felt like old teeth grinding in a mouth"
2"not quite wind, almost a feeling that the world had decided to lean a little closer, listening"
3"not quite human appeared at the edge of her vision—a figure formed from shadow and breath, nothing more than a suggestion, a silhouette that did not quite align with the trunk it clung to"
4"not quite align with the trunk it clung to"
5"quite reach for her but hovered near enough to feel the air change, as if a corner of the grove had exhibited a hesitation before making a decision"
6"as if listening to the exchange with the same careful attention she used when navigating a crowded street at night"
7"sounded like wind breaking into a chant"
8"not quite human—stared back at her, a face that might have belonged to Eva, or to another you could mistake for Eva if you squinted against the night and believed in the possibility of meetings that did not require daylight"
9"sounded like the rustling of a thousand dr"
10"felt like it carried a living memory"
11"something like a room in a house that existe"
12"not quite human—something like a room in a house that existed in a dream people only barely remembered when they woke"
13"heartbeat that seemed to last an hour—she wasn’t certain how long it actually lasted here"
14"something like the soft clink of metal on wo"
15"seemed almost sacramental and in that quiet, she heard a new sound—other than the whispering leaves or the water, something like the soft clink of metal on wood, as if someone had placed a small, deliberate weight upon a stone"
16"not-quite empty space that felt both dangerous and protective in the same breath"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches18
per1kWords4.253
wordCount4232
matches
0"not with her ears but with something else"
1"not to be a branch at all, just a twitch of air, but enough to make her body tighten"
2"not as a warning but as a fact, a statement of what was already written in the ai"
3"not walking but gliding along the edge of the pool, careful not to disturb t"
4"not the sky but an alternate, narrower slice of night"
5"not a voice but a procession of sounds"
6"not to the voice in the trees but to herself, a voice she had learned to trust"
7"not loud but precise, a tapping"
8"not in a voice but as a condition, as a moment"
9"not raising her chin to meet the figure’s gaze but letting the words hang in the air between them, weighted wit"
10"not a demand but a promise she would keep"
11"not with certainty, but its expression carried a certain tenderness, as though it un"
12"not in the way a doctor explains a prescription but as a confidant speaks to a patient who finally accepts help"
13"not a thing to possess but a map you must follow"
14"not the end but a pivot, a turning of the wheel toward a future she could no"
15"not the sky but the possibility of what lay beyond it"
16"not loud, not bright, but perfectly clear in its distance"
17"not bright, but perfectly clear in its distance"
31.79% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount7
totalSentences173
matches
0"feeling that the"
1"trust that a"
2"tapping that drew"
3"understood that fear"
4"acknowledge that this"
5"learned that the"
6"changed, that the"
74.38% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs81
mean52.25
std21.44
cv0.41
sampleLengths
061
193
261
374
486
552
627
780
818
966
1020
11102
1234
1376
1425
1571
1668
1762
1818
1975
2014
2139
2233
2353
2420
2540
2639
2721
2874
2950
3056
3136
3222
3342
3435
3574
3670
3727
3831
3961
4039
4152
4238
4376
4492
4552
4644
4765
4882
4990
98.92% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences166
matches
0"been paid"
1"is owed"
2"is forgiven"
3"been spun"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs611
matches
0"were trying"
1"was listening"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount22
semicolonCount7
flaggedSentences24
totalSentences173
ratio0.139
matches
0"The grove breathed around her, and for a long moment, she stood without moving, listening not with her ears but with something else—an awareness that prickled the skin along her wrists, where the crescent scar rested like a small, stubborn souvenir from a childhood accident."
1"The flowers still bloomed—as they did year-round—little bursts of colour in the dim, self-contained light of the grove."
2"Shapes weren’t there, and then they were—just enough to catch the corner of her eye, the kind of thing you blink at and the world has changed shape when you look again."
3"A line of movement, nothing more; a shift between branches that suggested someone, or something, might be watching from behind bark that wore the marks of time like wrinkles on an old face."
4"The grove responded to her tension with small perturbations—the way a field of grass shivers when a cow wanders through, careful to leave no obvious path."
5"The first true flash of something not quite human appeared at the edge of her vision—a figure formed from shadow and breath, nothing more than a suggestion, a silhouette that did not quite align with the trunk it clung to."
6"It didn’t need eyes to study her; the space between their breaths conveyed more than sight could."
7"The Head of the Grove—if one could call it that in a way that human language could understand—said nothing, but the question that followed arrived as a palpable weight, pressing on her cheeks and the line of her jaw."
8"A soft laugh—no more than a sigh, but somehow thick with permission—rippled through the space between her and the shadow."
9"She did not deny or confirm; she kept walking, letting the energy of the pendant guide her toward the pool’s edge, where the surface held a stillness that wasn’t calm, only paused."
10"The edge of the water showed a flicker—no, a recognition—an image that did not belong to the surface of the pool but to the truth beyond it."
11"A face—faint, blurred, not quite human—stared back at her, a face that might have belonged to Eva, or to another you could mistake for Eva if you squinted against the night and believed in the possibility of meetings that did not require daylight."
12"The grove shifted somewhere behind her—a subtle, almost invisible alteration as if the forest owed a debt to a memory that had not yet been paid in full."
13"It wasn’t a natural sound; it wasn’t the crack of wood or the branch falling."
14"The light didn’t burn; it warmed."
15"The air didn’t feel humid; it felt like it carried a living memory."
16"She stood in the middle of the chamber and realized she had entered something not quite human—something like a room in a house that existed in a dream people only barely remembered when they woke."
17"It wore a silhouette that could have been a woman if the world had not shown it to be something else entirely—an outline of limbs and a face that blurred at the edges, as though it existed because someone believed in it more than it existed in the real world."
18"Her eyes locked on the figure for a long heartbeat that seemed to last an hour—she wasn’t certain how long it actually lasted here."
19"The door—no, the chamber—seemed to tilt again, and the walls began to drift with a slow motion that felt almost ceremonial."
20"Then a sudden quiet fell, so complete it seemed almost sacramental, and in that quiet, she heard a new sound—other than the whispering leaves or the water, something like the soft clink of metal on wood, as if someone had placed a small, deliberate weight upon a stone."
21"The light dimmed but did not vanish; the shadows receded to their natural places, leaving a serene, not-quite-empty space that felt both dangerous and protective in the same breath."
22"Outside, the night remained as it had always been—dark, quiet, full of unspoken promises."
23"The pool’s surface returned to its still, glassy calm, reflecting not the sky but the possibility of what lay beyond it—the possibility of Eva’s shadow becoming a map again, a route she could travel if she learned to trust the next moment as carefully as she trusted the last."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2586
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"dim, self-contained light"
adverbCount97
adverbRatio0.03750966744006187
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.00580046403712297
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences173
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences173
mean24.46
std12.38
cv0.506
sampleLengths
012
121
228
314
417
518
617
727
845
95
1011
116
129
1314
1422
1523
166
1732
1835
1913
208
2121
2223
2317
2410
2520
2614
2718
2820
292
302
314
3218
3310
3438
3518
3620
3720
3817
3932
4033
4110
4224
4340
4419
4517
4625
479
4836
4926
27.46% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats39
diversityRatio0.1907514450867052
totalSentences173
uniqueOpeners33
40.90% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences163
matches
0"Then a voice, low and"
1"Then a sudden quiet fell,"
ratio0.012
89.94% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount53
totalSentences163
matches
0"She tucked the pendant closer"
1"She didn’t press for answers."
2"She pressed for time, which"
3"She’d learned to count on"
4"She came here for a"
5"She stepped deeper, and the"
6"They did not forget."
7"She asked aloud, though she"
8"She let out a slow"
9"she whispered, though she did"
10"She expected the opposite, that"
11"it offered, not as a"
12"She didn’t reply to that"
13"She kept moving, not walking"
14"It reminded her of a"
15"It did not step forward."
16"It didn’t need eyes to"
17"She spoke, by instinct, not"
18"She pressed the pendant closer,"
19"she said, choosing to trust"
ratio0.325
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount156
totalSentences163
matches
0"Night pressed against the oak"
1"The Fae Grove opened its"
2"The air smelled of something"
3"Aurora Carter moved between the"
4"The Heartstone Pendant pummelled faint"
5"The crimson gem in the"
6"She tucked the pendant closer"
7"The chain had become a"
8"The grove breathed around her,"
9"She didn’t press for answers."
10"She pressed for time, which"
11"Time moved differently inside the"
12"An hour inside could be"
13"She’d learned to count on"
14"The border stones hummed beneath"
15"The air carried a soft"
16"She came here for a"
17"The reason mattered more than"
18"The unknown benefactor who had"
19"The grove was a door,"
ratio0.957
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences163
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences118
technicalSentenceCount36
matches
0"The air smelled of something ancient and patient, as if the grass itself had listened to centuries of secrets and decided to keep them for a little longer."
1"The grove breathed around her, and for a long moment, she stood without moving, listening not with her ears but with something else—an awareness that prickled t…"
2"The border stones hummed beneath her palms, a muted chorus that felt like old teeth grinding in a mouth full of secrets."
3"The unknown benefactor who had handed her the Heartstone Pendant wouldn’t have asked for nothing, would never have risked giving her something so personal if th…"
4"The air around her trembled as if someone had exhaled a breath that wasn’t their own, a wind that carried the scent of rain and something sweeter and older, a s…"
5"A line of movement, nothing more; a shift between branches that suggested someone, or something, might be watching from behind bark that wore the marks of time …"
6"The first sound she heard was not a sound you could name: a soft creak, a sigh of air through a hollowed trunk, a rustle that could have been a bird’s wing or a…"
7"The cadence indicated something ancient and amused, something that had learned to wait for the right moment."
8"She kept moving, not walking but gliding along the edge of the pool, careful not to disturb the surface and draw attention to herself as one might do in a home …"
9"The first true flash of something not quite human appeared at the edge of her vision—a figure formed from shadow and breath, nothing more than a suggestion, a s…"
10"The shadow moved, a slender elongation that didn’t quite reach for her but hovered near enough to feel the air change, as if a corner of the grove had exhibited…"
11"The figure stepped back a fraction, and the grove’s trees gave a creak, as if listening to the exchange with the same careful attention she used when navigating…"
12"The leaf-laden air grew heavier, and the glow of the Heartstone brightened further, as if the pendant itself approved of the honesty."
13"The edge of her vision caught another movement, a second shadow flickering along the bark of a tree as if a second someone had decided to reveal themselves, the…"
14"The Heartstone Pendant brightened, sending a soft, almost shy glow through the fabric of her coat, casting her features in a pale red halo."
15"She pressed a finger to her scar, the crescent curving under her skin as if it remembered the old pain better than she did."
16"The grove shifted somewhere behind her—a subtle, almost invisible alteration as if the forest owed a debt to a memory that had not yet been paid in full."
17"She stepped forward, letting the grove’s gravity tug at her feet, letting the pendant’s warmth spread through her like a measured flame."
18"The passage opened into a corridor of roots and light, a tunnel that looked carved by hands older than cities, older than even the memory of a girl who fled fro…"
19"It spoke, and the sound came through the pendant and the walls, a soft, old language that did not demand translation so much as a surrender to its cadence."
20"The words pooled in the chamber, gathering in the space around Rory, and she listened without a reaction she could name other than the way her breath slowed, ho…"
21"The figure stepped a little closer, the light bending around its form in a way that kept its true shape just beyond comprehension."
22"The pendant’s warmth rose, a steady pulse that reminded her she wasn’t alone in this motion through the unknown."
23"She opened her mouth to respond, but the chamber answered first, the room answering for her, answering with the cadence of rain on a slate roof and the memory o…"
24"Her eyes locked on the figure for a long heartbeat that seemed to last an hour—she wasn’t certain how long it actually lasted here."
25"The chamber exhaled in a whisper of cool air, and the figure’s silhouette softened into a form that had a human touch but belonged to something greater, somethi…"
26"The Heartstone Pendant’s glow surged with a bright, relentless warmth, and Rory felt a curious strength rise in her chest, as if a fresh thread of resolve had b…"
27"It wasn’t a face she could read, not with certainty, but its expression carried a certain tenderness, as though it understood that fear was a currency one could…"
28"Then a sudden quiet fell, so complete it seemed almost sacramental, and in that quiet, she heard a new sound—other than the whispering leaves or the water, some…"
29"The Heartstone Pendant pulsed once, a deeper, steadier beat that asked for attention, asked for a decision, asked for a promise to keep moving even when the pat…"
30"The figure inclined its head a fraction, a skeptical, almost affectionate nod that said this was the moment the grove had waited for, the moment Rory had found …"
31"The light dimmed but did not vanish; the shadows receded to their natural places, leaving a serene, not-quite-empty space that felt both dangerous and protectiv…"
32"The grove’s boundary stones hummed softly with a sound she could feel in her teeth, a whisper that suggested the world was listening, waiting for the decision s…"
33"The Heartstone Pendant glowed with a steady warmth, a quiet, stubborn flame against a night that did not want to be dispelled."
34"She didn’t look back toward the grove as she step by step, careful as a person who has learned that the most important truth hides inside the steps you take rat…"
35"And then, as the path wound toward the edge of the Richmond Park dark, a shadow in the trees shifted in a way that did not belong to any creature Rory had ever …"
89.29% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags28
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"she admitted, the words tasting strange as they left her mouth"
1"she whispered, though the words were not a demand but a promise she would keep and a risk she would accept"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags25
fancyCount14
fancyTags
0"a voice whispered (whisper)"
1"the grove seemed (seem)"
2"she whispered (whisper)"
3"she admitted (admit)"
4"The decision to speak was hers alone (speak be)"
5"the grove suggested (suggest)"
6"the grove suggested (suggest)"
7"Rory murmured (murmur)"
8"the grove whispered (whisper)"
9"the chamber admitted (admit)"
10"Rory admitted (admit)"
11"the figure whispered (whisper)"
12"she whispered (whisper)"
13"the chamber warned (warn)"
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.735
leniency1
rawRatio0.56
effectiveRatio0.56
64.1743%