Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTYP3R6QJ4DD75FD5XMDPWV

Run Details

Duration:
1m 22s
Cost:
$0.079030
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The rain came down in sheets across Soho, turning the pavement into a mirror of neon and brake lights. Detective Harlow Quinn pressed her back against the wet brick of a building on Dean Street, her breath fogging in short bursts. Thirty meters ahead, Tomás Herrera walked fast—not running, not yet—threading between pub-goers who stumbled out of doorways with pints still in hand. He hadn't spotted her. She was almost certain. She pushed off the wall and followed, her coat soaked through, the worn leather watch on her left wrist heavy with water. Her shoes found the gaps between puddles out of instinct. Eighteen years of this. Her body knew the geometry of pursuit better than it knew rest. Herrera turned left onto Bateman Street. Quick. Deliberate. Quinn's jaw tightened. He knew the neighborhood. She'd been surveilling him for six weeks—tailing his movements from a rented flat in Bermondsey to a string of private addresses where people went in injured and came out bandaged. Off-the-books medical care. That alone was enough to bring him in. But Herrera was a thread, and she needed to see where the thread led. She rounded the corner. The street narrowed, emptied. A fox darted from behind a bin and vanished beneath a parked van. Herrera's silhouette flickered between the orange cones of streetlight a block ahead, and then he did something unexpected. He stopped. Quinn pressed herself into a doorway. Watched. He stood beneath the green neon sign of a bar—the Raven's Nest, the letters buzzing with the faint electrical hum of old wiring. He looked left. Looked right. Not the casual glance of a man checking for traffic. This was a scan. Practiced. His hand went to his chest, fingers closing around something beneath his shirt collar. Then he moved past the bar's entrance entirely and ducked into the alley beside it. She counted to five. Stepped out. Crossed. The alley smelled of cooking oil and wet cardboard. A single bulb above a service door threw a weak circle of amber onto the ground. No Herrera. The alley dead-ended at a chain-link fence topped with razor wire, and beyond that, the back wall of another building. No doors on either side. No fire escapes low enough to reach. Gone. Quinn stood in the rain and let it hit her face. She turned a slow circle. The service door was locked—she'd checked it twice now, rattling the handle. The chain-link showed no signs of being climbed; the razor wire coils sat undisturbed, beaded with rain. She ran her palm along the left wall, brick by rough brick, and found nothing. Then the right wall. Her fingers caught an edge. A seam in the brickwork that shouldn't have been there, running vertically from waist height to just above her head. She pushed. Nothing. Pulled. Nothing. She flattened her palm against it and slid it sideways, and the section of wall moved—not like a door, but like a panel on a track, grinding against grit and revealing a staircase descending into darkness. The smell that rose from below was complex. Old stone and machine grease and something else, something organic and sharp, like dried herbs set on fire. A faint sound reached her—voices, many of them, layered over each other the way a crowded market sounds from a distance. Quinn stared down the steps. Water dripped from her coat onto the first one, and the droplet rolled down into the black. She pulled her phone from her jacket pocket. No signal. Of course. She thumbed the torch on and aimed it down. The stairs were stone, worn smooth at their centers by what looked like years of foot traffic. The walls on either side were tiled—white ceramic with a green trim she recognized. London Underground standard. She was looking at an old Tube passage. This wasn't in any case file. Wasn't on any map she'd studied. And Herrera had walked into it like a man walking into his kitchen. She thought about DS Morris. Three years cold in the ground, and the official report still read like someone had redacted every other sentence. Cardiac event during pursuit of suspect—that was the line. But Quinn had been there. She'd seen the look on his face before he dropped. Not pain. Terror. And the suspect they'd been chasing had simply ceased to exist. No trace. No name in any database. As if the person had been a rumor that evaporated. She'd spent three years pulling that thread and finding nothing. Now here was a staircase that shouldn't exist, leading to a place she couldn't explain, and the man she'd been tailing had just walked into it. Quinn switched off the torch. Pocketed the phone. Drew her service weapon from the holster beneath her left arm and held it low against her thigh. She took the first step down. The panel ground shut behind her. She didn't flinch. Didn't turn back. The darkness was total for three seconds, four, five—then a pale luminescence emerged along the walls, not from any fixture she could identify but from the tiles themselves, as if they'd absorbed decades of fluorescent light and were slowly releasing it. The green trim lines ran along both sides of the passage like a guide rail, and she followed them down. The staircase bottomed out into a corridor. The ceiling was low—she could have touched it without fully extending her arm. Pipes ran along the upper walls, sweating condensation. Beneath her feet, the ground shifted from stone to platform concrete, and she could see the faded ghost of a roundel painted on the far wall: the station name scrubbed away, leaving only the red circle and blue bar, empty of text. The noise was louder here. Not just voices. Clinking glass. Haggling. A low rhythmic drumming that could have been music or machinery. And cutting through all of it, a smell that built in layers the further she walked—incense, then copper, then something chemical she couldn't name, then woodsmoke, then river mud. The corridor opened. Quinn stopped at the threshold and gripped her weapon tighter. The abandoned station platform had been transformed. Stalls lined both sides of the tracks, built from scrap wood and corrugated metal and old signage, their fronts draped with cloth in deep reds and blues and blacks. Lanterns hung from wires strung between the stalls—not electric, but flame, actual flame, burning in colors that ranged from warm amber to a cold violet that cast no shadows. Dozens of people moved between the stalls. Hundreds, maybe. The platform stretched further than it should have, bending away from her line of sight in a curve that defied the architecture above. She'd found the Market. The word surfaced from an informant's whisper six months ago—a reference she'd dismissed as street mythology. An underground market that moved with the moon. Supernatural. The informant had laughed when she pressed for details, and the laughter had an edge to it, the kind that said you don't want this, detective. Quinn scanned the crowd from the threshold. Most of the people looked ordinary enough—coats, scarves, the usual London uniform against the cold—but her eye caught the exceptions. A woman at the nearest stall whose hands had too many fingers. A man in a long coat whose reflection in a puddle on the platform floor didn't match his posture. A child sitting on the edge of the platform with legs dangling over the tracks, reading a book in a language Quinn couldn't identify, the pages giving off their own thin light. She spotted Herrera. Sixty meters down the platform, moving with purpose through the crowd. His olive skin caught the lantern light, and the Saint Christopher medallion now hung outside his shirt, visible, as if it served as some kind of credential here. He carried a small leather bag she hadn't seen before—picked up from somewhere in the passage, perhaps, or produced from beneath his jacket. He stopped at a stall hung with glass vials in every shade of amber and began speaking to the vendor, a heavyset man in a leather apron whose eyes reflected the vial-light like a cat's. Quinn pressed her back against the corridor wall. She holstered her weapon. Slowly. Whatever this place was, pulling a firearm in a crowd this size was a good way to start something she couldn't finish. She needed to think. She was off comms. Off grid. No backup. No jurisdiction—not that she could imagine what jurisdiction would apply here. Every protocol she'd been trained on told her to withdraw, report, return with support. But return to what? A sliding wall panel that she might never find again? A market that moved every full moon? She thought about the case board in her flat. The photographs pinned with colored string. Herrera's face in the center, connected by red thread to six other faces, all of them tied to incidents her colleagues had written off. Unexplained injuries. Missing persons who reappeared with no memory. Evidence that degraded in storage as if eaten by something invisible. And at the edges of the board, always at the edges, the cold empty space where DS Morris should have been. Herrera was here. Herrera was buying something—or selling something—in a place that operated outside every system she understood. If she left now, she'd lose him. Worse, she'd lose the thread. Quinn unbuttoned her coat. Pulled it off, reversed it so the dark lining faced out instead of the wet grey exterior, and shrugged it back on. She ran her fingers through her salt-and-pepper hair, slicking the rain back. Loosened her posture. Dropped the military carriage from her spine and adopted the ambling gait of someone browsing. She'd done undercover stints before. The body remembered. She stepped onto the platform. The air changed immediately. Warmer. Denser. The sounds closed around her like water. A vendor to her left held up a bone—an animal bone, she hoped—carved into the shape of a key and called out in a language she didn't recognize. To her right, a woman sold maps drawn on what looked like skin, each one showing streets and alleys that shifted and rearranged as Quinn watched. She kept Herrera in her peripheral vision and drifted toward him through the crowd. A man bumped her shoulder, muttered an apology in an accent she couldn't place, and pressed on. She caught a flash of something in his hand—a token of some kind, pale and smooth. Bone. The entry requirement. She didn't have one. She'd walked straight in through the wall. That thought settled in her stomach like cold water. Fifty meters from Herrera. Forty. She paused at a stall selling watches—dozens of them, analog, digital, pocket watches, wristwatches—and every single one showed a different time. The vendor, a thin woman with close-set eyes and ink-stained fingers, watched Quinn with an expression that held neither welcome nor hostility. Calculation. "You're new." Quinn picked up a pocket watch, turned it over. The back was engraved with symbols she didn't know. "First time." "You don't have a token." Quinn set the watch down. Met the woman's eyes. "Someone let me borrow theirs." The vendor's mouth twitched. She said nothing. Quinn moved on. Thirty meters. Herrera was still at the vial stall, now examining something the vendor had produced from beneath the counter—a glass container the size of a fist, filled with liquid that gave off its own faint luminescence, pale gold. He held it up to the light with the careful reverence of a man handling nitroglycerin. His fingers were steady. Paramedic's hands. Quinn positioned herself behind a column—an old station support pillar, now painted black and hung with wind chimes made from what looked like teeth. She watched Herrera hand over a fold of cash and something else, something small that she couldn't see clearly. The vendor counted the money, inspected the second item, nodded. The vial changed hands. Herrera slid it into his leather bag with both hands, zipped the bag shut, and turned. He looked directly at her. His warm brown eyes locked onto hers across twenty meters of crowded platform, and his face did something complicated—recognition, then fear, then a hard mask that dropped over both like a shutter. The scar along his left forearm caught the lantern light as his hand moved toward his jacket. Quinn held her ground. She didn't reach for her weapon. Didn't move at all. The crowd flowed between them, oblivious, and for three long seconds they stood like that—detective and suspect, each measuring the other in a place where the rules they understood no longer applied. Herrera's hand stopped. He lowered it. And then he did the last thing she expected. He walked toward her.
created_at"2026-02-19T12:41:05.046Z" 2/19/2026, 12:41:05 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags0
95.37% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2162
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count2
highlights
0"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
76.87% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2162
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"complex"
count1
2
word"standard"
count1
3
word"database"
count1
4
word"rhythmic"
count1
5
word"electric"
count1
6
word"whisper"
count1
7
word"scanned"
count1
8
word"stomach"
count1
9
word"the last thing"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"complex"
2"standard"
3"database"
4"rhythmic"
5"electric"
6"whisper"
7"scanned"
8"stomach"
9"the last thing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences206
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences206
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences210
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2122
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions54
wordCount2108
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity0.9
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Harlow1
Quinn19
Dean1
Street2
Tomás1
Herrera16
Bateman1
Bermondsey1
Raven1
Nest1
Underground1
Tube1
Morris2
Market1
London2
Saint1
Christopher1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Tomás"
3"Herrera"
4"Raven"
5"Morris"
6"Market"
7"Saint"
8"Christopher"
places
0"Soho"
1"Dean"
2"Street"
3"Bateman"
4"Bermondsey"
5"London"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
84.78% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences115
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"looked like years of foot traffic"
1"looked like skin, each one showing street"
2"looked like teeth"
11.50% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords1.885
wordCount2122
matches
0"not like a door, but like a panel on a track, grinding against grit"
1"not from any fixture she could identify but from the tiles themselves, as if they'd absorbed decades of"
2"not electric, but flame, actual flame, burning in colors"
3"neither welcome nor"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences210
matches
0"pulling that thread"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs54
mean39.3
std28.9
cv0.736
sampleLengths
071
148
270
341
47
572
67
759
81
964
1066
1147
1222
1363
1425
1579
1636
1732
186
1967
2070
2151
223
2310
2497
254
2651
2790
28100
2939
3054
3180
3230
3364
345
3567
3662
379
3849
392
4018
412
425
439
445
4510
4661
4757
4816
495
95.04% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount6
totalSentences206
matches
0"was locked"
1"being climbed"
2"were tiled"
3"been transformed"
4"been trained"
5"was engraved"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs365
matches
0"was looking"
1"was, pulling"
2"was buying"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount29
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences25
totalSentences210
ratio0.119
matches
0"Thirty meters ahead, Tomás Herrera walked fast—not running, not yet—threading between pub-goers who stumbled out of doorways with pints still in hand."
1"She'd been surveilling him for six weeks—tailing his movements from a rented flat in Bermondsey to a string of private addresses where people went in injured and came out bandaged."
2"He stood beneath the green neon sign of a bar—the Raven's Nest, the letters buzzing with the faint electrical hum of old wiring."
3"The service door was locked—she'd checked it twice now, rattling the handle."
4"The chain-link showed no signs of being climbed; the razor wire coils sat undisturbed, beaded with rain."
5"She flattened her palm against it and slid it sideways, and the section of wall moved—not like a door, but like a panel on a track, grinding against grit and revealing a staircase descending into darkness."
6"A faint sound reached her—voices, many of them, layered over each other the way a crowded market sounds from a distance."
7"The walls on either side were tiled—white ceramic with a green trim she recognized."
8"Cardiac event during pursuit of suspect—that was the line."
9"The darkness was total for three seconds, four, five—then a pale luminescence emerged along the walls, not from any fixture she could identify but from the tiles themselves, as if they'd absorbed decades of fluorescent light and were slowly releasing it."
10"The ceiling was low—she could have touched it without fully extending her arm."
11"And cutting through all of it, a smell that built in layers the further she walked—incense, then copper, then something chemical she couldn't name, then woodsmoke, then river mud."
12"Lanterns hung from wires strung between the stalls—not electric, but flame, actual flame, burning in colors that ranged from warm amber to a cold violet that cast no shadows."
13"The word surfaced from an informant's whisper six months ago—a reference she'd dismissed as street mythology."
14"Most of the people looked ordinary enough—coats, scarves, the usual London uniform against the cold—but her eye caught the exceptions."
15"He carried a small leather bag she hadn't seen before—picked up from somewhere in the passage, perhaps, or produced from beneath his jacket."
16"No jurisdiction—not that she could imagine what jurisdiction would apply here."
17"Herrera was buying something—or selling something—in a place that operated outside every system she understood."
18"A vendor to her left held up a bone—an animal bone, she hoped—carved into the shape of a key and called out in a language she didn't recognize."
19"She caught a flash of something in his hand—a token of some kind, pale and smooth."
20"She paused at a stall selling watches—dozens of them, analog, digital, pocket watches, wristwatches—and every single one showed a different time."
21"Herrera was still at the vial stall, now examining something the vendor had produced from beneath the counter—a glass container the size of a fist, filled with liquid that gave off its own faint luminescence, pale gold."
22"Quinn positioned herself behind a column—an old station support pillar, now painted black and hung with wind chimes made from what looked like teeth."
23"His warm brown eyes locked onto hers across twenty meters of crowded platform, and his face did something complicated—recognition, then fear, then a hard mask that dropped over both like a shutter."
24"The crowd flowed between them, oblivious, and for three long seconds they stood like that—detective and suspect, each measuring the other in a place where the rules they understood no longer applied."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2148
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount57
adverbRatio0.02653631284916201
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.005121042830540037
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences210
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences210
mean10.1
std9.03
cv0.893
sampleLengths
019
122
222
34
44
522
610
74
812
96
101
111
123
134
1430
153
168
1714
184
194
2013
2118
222
236
241
2523
263
272
2810
294
301
3114
3215
334
342
351
369
3716
382
3920
405
417
421
4311
445
4512
4617
4715
484
495
51.75% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats18
diversityRatio0.3619047619047619
totalSentences210
uniqueOpeners76
38.76% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences172
matches
0"Then he moved past the"
1"Then the right wall."
ratio0.012
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount50
totalSentences172
matches
0"He hadn't spotted her."
1"She was almost certain."
2"She pushed off the wall"
3"Her shoes found the gaps"
4"Her body knew the geometry"
5"He knew the neighborhood."
6"She'd been surveilling him for"
7"She rounded the corner."
8"He stood beneath the green"
9"He looked left."
10"His hand went to his"
11"She counted to five."
12"She turned a slow circle."
13"She ran her palm along"
14"Her fingers caught an edge."
15"She flattened her palm against"
16"She pulled her phone from"
17"She thumbed the torch on"
18"She was looking at an"
19"She thought about DS Morris."
ratio0.291
79.19% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount131
totalSentences172
matches
0"The rain came down in"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn pressed her"
2"He hadn't spotted her."
3"She was almost certain."
4"She pushed off the wall"
5"Her shoes found the gaps"
6"Her body knew the geometry"
7"Herrera turned left onto Bateman"
8"Quinn's jaw tightened."
9"He knew the neighborhood."
10"She'd been surveilling him for"
11"That alone was enough to"
12"She rounded the corner."
13"The street narrowed, emptied."
14"A fox darted from behind"
15"Herrera's silhouette flickered between the"
16"Quinn pressed herself into a"
17"He stood beneath the green"
18"He looked left."
19"This was a scan."
ratio0.762
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount4
totalSentences172
matches
0"As if the person had"
1"Now here was a staircase"
2"If she left now, she'd"
3"To her right, a woman"
ratio0.023
39.59% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences83
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn pressed her back against the wet brick of a building on Dean Street, her breath fogging in short bursts."
1"Thirty meters ahead, Tomás Herrera walked fast—not running, not yet—threading between pub-goers who stumbled out of doorways with pints still in hand."
2"A seam in the brickwork that shouldn't have been there, running vertically from waist height to just above her head."
3"Now here was a staircase that shouldn't exist, leading to a place she couldn't explain, and the man she'd been tailing had just walked into it."
4"The darkness was total for three seconds, four, five—then a pale luminescence emerged along the walls, not from any fixture she could identify but from the tile…"
5"And cutting through all of it, a smell that built in layers the further she walked—incense, then copper, then something chemical she couldn't name, then woodsmo…"
6"Lanterns hung from wires strung between the stalls—not electric, but flame, actual flame, burning in colors that ranged from warm amber to a cold violet that ca…"
7"The platform stretched further than it should have, bending away from her line of sight in a curve that defied the architecture above."
8"His olive skin caught the lantern light, and the Saint Christopher medallion now hung outside his shirt, visible, as if it served as some kind of credential her…"
9"Herrera was buying something—or selling something—in a place that operated outside every system she understood."
10"The vendor, a thin woman with close-set eyes and ink-stained fingers, watched Quinn with an expression that held neither welcome nor hostility."
11"His warm brown eyes locked onto hers across twenty meters of crowded platform, and his face did something complicated—recognition, then fear, then a hard mask t…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
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100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
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