Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTYP41AV6MHK3JMMVWBRAR5

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Duration:
1m 15s
Cost:
$0.001350
Provider:
Novita

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The air in the grove smelled of damp earth and something sweet, like crushed berries and cold stone. Rory had never been to Richmond Park before, and following Isolde’s whispered directions through the mist had felt like sleepwalking. One moment she was on a muddy footpath, the next she was stepping between two moss-covered oak trunks that hadn’t been there a second ago. Nyx flowed beside her, a solid silhouette one moment, a wisp of darkness slipping through tree-shadows the next. “The boundary is old,” their voice whispered, carried on a breeze that didn’t touch the leaves. “Older than the city. Older than me.” “That’s comforting,” Rory muttered, her hand going to the Heartstone pendant beneath her jacket. It was warm, a steady pulse against her skin. The trees opened into a clearing. It wasn’t large, but it felt endless. Wildflowers in impossible colours—deep indigo, vibrant silver, a red that seemed to swallow the light—bloomed in chaotic profusion across the soft grass. In the centre stood a ring of ancient oaks, their trunks wider than cars, arranged with deliberate, geometric precision. They were the standing stones Isolde had mentioned, but living, breathing. The light here was wrong. It was the gold-tinged grey of a London twilight, yet the sky above was a clear, deep periwinkle, speckled with stars that were too bright, too close. No sun was visible. “Time moves differently here,” Nyx observed, their violet gaze scanning the treeline. “Can you feel it? The air is… thick with it.” Rory could. It was a pressure in her ears, a slight resistance against her skin as she took a step forward. Her feet sank into the mossy turf without a sound. She looked back. Her footprints were there, clear in the damp earth. She remembered Isolde left none. A shiver, unrelated to the cool air, traced her spine. “She said to wait at the stones,” Rory said, more to hear her own voice than anything. “She said many things. Most were puzzles.” Nyx glided forward, their form becoming more solid as they entered the ring of oaks. They reached out a hand of condensed shadow, but did not touch the bark. “The energy is concentrated here. A focal point.” Rory followed, the sense of otherness deepening. The sound of the city was gone. Not just muted, but erased. In its place was a low hum, a vibration she felt in her teeth rather than heard. It was joined by the gentle chime of what sounded like glass wind chimes, though there was no wind. She traced the sound to clusters of crystal-like flowers that trembled on their own. “Look at this,” she breathed, crouching down. A stream cut through the clearing, its water so clear it was nearly invisible save for the distortion of the pebbles beneath. But the pebbles themselves glowed with a soft, internal light—pale greens and blues. She dipped her fingers in. The water was bitingly cold, colder than any winter stream, and it left a faint, shimmering residue on her skin that evaporated after a second. “Don’t drink it,” Nyx whispered, suddenly right beside her. “Fae waters have memories. You might drown in one you didn’t live.” Rory pulled her hand back, wiping it on her jeans. “Right. Noted.” She stood and moved further into the grove, towards the far side where the flowers grew taller, forming a kind of natural archway. The humming grew louder. As she passed under the arch, woven from vines heavy with luminescent white berries, the atmosphere shifted again. The air grew warmer, carrying a scent like ozone after a lightning strike. The ground opened up into a smaller, secondary hollow. And here, the wonder curdled into unease. In the centre of the hollow was a pool, not of water, but of what looked like liquid mercury. Its surface was perfectly still, mirror-flat, reflecting the strange starry sky above. But the reflection was wrong. The stars in the pool were arranged in unfamiliar constellations, and they swirled with a lazy, deliberate motion. Around the pool’s edge, growing directly from the silvery soil, were fungi. They were tall, slender stalks with caps that pulsed gently with a bioluminescent purple light. Each pulse sent a corresponding ripple across the pool’s surface. “A viewing pool,” Nyx said, their voice hushed. “A scrying mirror, tied to the Veil itself. This is a rift point. A thin place.” Rory’s pendant was no longer just warm. It throbbed against her chest, a steady, insistent beat that matched the pulsing fungi. She pulled it out, letting the deep crimson gemstone rest on her palm. Its inner glow had intensified, casting a bloody light on her fingers. “It’s reacting.” “It was forged in Hel. It senses its own kind of magic.” Nyx drifted to the edge of the pool, their form blurring at the edges as they peered into the shifting silver. “This place is a window. Or a door. Left deliberately open.” “By Isolde?” “By those who came long before her. The Fae do not build doors like mortals do. They cultivate them. They grow them.” A sound echoed through the hollow—a melodic, discordant note like a plucked string on a broken instrument. It came from the pool. Rory watched, frozen, as the mercury-like substance in the centre began to swirl, not just on the surface, but churning downwards as if draining through an invisible hole. In the vortex, images flickered. A marketplace under an amber sky, crowded with figures that were too tall, too thin. The glimpse of a sprawling vineyard heavy with black fruit. A grand hall where a feast was in progress, the attendees laughing with mouths that held too many teeth. Dymas. It had to be. The vision lasted only a heartbeat before the pool smoothed over again, once more a perfect, disturbing mirror. “We should not linger,” Nyx said, their usual whisper tense. “This is not a place for casual observation. It observes back.” Rory agreed, but her feet felt rooted. The alien beauty of the grove was now undercut by a profound sense of exposure. The flowers, the crystals, the silent trees—they all felt like eyes. The wonder of the glowing stream and the chiming flowers was now inextricably linked to the unease of the scrying pool. This was a place of power, not peace. A crossroads. She turned from the pool, forcing herself to walk back towards the main clearing. As she passed under the berry-vine archway, the temperature dropped back to the cool, neutral state of the grove. The humming receded to its background level. Isolde was waiting for them by the great oak stones. She hadn’t been there a moment before. The Half-Fae seer stood perfectly still, her silver hair a waterfall in the non-existent breeze, her lavender eyes fixed on Rory. She left no imprint in the moss at her feet. “You saw the pool,” Isolde said. It wasn’t a question. “We did,” Rory replied, her voice sounding too loud in the quiet. “A door must have a key. A window, a latch.” Isolde’s gaze drifted to the Heartstone pendant, still glowing faintly in Rory’s hand. “Or a beacon.” Rory quickly tucked the pendant back under her shirt. The warmth was a comfort and a threat. “What does that mean?” Isolde smiled, an expression that held no warmth. “A light in the dark can guide a friend home. It can also draw the hungry to the feast.” She stepped forward, and from within the folds of her simple dress, she produced a long, slender object wrapped in grey cloth. “You walked the between-place. You looked into the deep water and did not jump. A gift is owed.” She offered the bundle. Rory took it, the cloth cool and smooth like silk. Unwrapping it, she caught her breath. The blade within was leaf-shaped, forged from a metal that looked like captured moonlight. Moonsilver. It was cold to the touch, so cold it almost burned, and along its length ran a tracery of fine, elegant script that glowed with a soft blue-white luminescence. It felt light as a feather, balanced perfectly in her hand. “A Fae-forged blade,” Isolde said. “It knows the taste of demon-essence. It can cut what other steel cannot. Wards, bonds, lies.” Her pale eyes met Rory’s. “Keep it close. The path ahead is not paved with petals.” Nyx observed the exchange, their violet eyes narrowed. “A generous gift, Seer. What is the price?” “All gifts have a price,” Isolde acknowledged, her gaze drifting back to the archway leading to the hollow. “The price is the path itself. The seeing is done. The walking begins.” She took a step back, and the shadows of the great oaks seemed to reach for her, weaving around her form. “The grove remembers you now, Aurora Carter. It will know your steps when you return. And you will return. The door does not close for those who hold the key.” Before Rory could ask another question, Isolde faded into the dappled light and shadow, becoming one with the grove itself. She was simply gone. The strange, starry sky above the clearing began to pale, shifting to the familiar muted grey of a London afternoon. The chiming of the crystal flowers ceased. The heavy, timeless feeling in the air lifted. Rory looked down at the blade in her hand, then at the silent, watching trees. The sense of wonder was gone, replaced by a cold, hard certainty. They had been tourists in a sacred, dangerous place. They had poked at something ancient and vast. And something had, in turn, taken notice. “We should go,” she said, her voice firm. She slid the cold dagger into her belt, the weight of it foreign and reassuring. Nyx simply nodded, their form dissolving into the lengthening shadows of the oak stones as they made their way back to the boundary, to the world where time moved in a single, relentless line. The grove, and the silver pool within it, watched them leave.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences36
tagDensity0.528
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
79.22% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1684
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"perfectly"
count3
2
adverb"gently"
count1
3
adverb"deliberately"
count1
4
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"perfectly"
2"gently"
3"deliberately"
4"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
16.86% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1684
totalAiIsms28
found
0
word"comforting"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count2
2
word"chaotic"
count1
3
word"tinged"
count1
4
word"scanning"
count1
5
word"traced"
count2
6
word"sense of"
count3
7
word"crystal"
count2
8
word"trembled"
count1
9
word"pulsed"
count1
10
word"throbbed"
count1
11
word"echoed"
count1
12
word"churning"
count1
13
word"flickered"
count1
14
word"perfect"
count1
15
word"whisper"
count1
16
word"profound"
count1
17
word"beacon"
count1
18
word"warmth"
count2
19
word"silk"
count1
20
word"familiar"
count1
21
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"comforting"
1"pulse"
2"chaotic"
3"tinged"
4"scanning"
5"traced"
6"sense of"
7"crystal"
8"trembled"
9"pulsed"
10"throbbed"
11"echoed"
12"churning"
13"flickered"
14"perfect"
15"whisper"
16"profound"
17"beacon"
18"warmth"
19"silk"
20"familiar"
21"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences116
matches
0"The sense of wonder"
93.60% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences116
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences133
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen41
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1667
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions43
wordCount1366
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.24
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Isolde10
Rory17
Heartstone2
London2
Nyx9
Half-Fae1
persons
0"Isolde"
1"Rory"
2"Nyx"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Heartstone"
3"London"
globalScore0.878
windowScore0.667
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences92
glossingSentenceCount7
matches
0"felt like sleepwalking"
1"red that seemed to swallow the light—bloomed in chaotic profusion across the soft grass"
2"sounded like glass wind chimes, though the"
3"looked like liquid mercury"
4"as if draining through an invisible hole"
5"felt like eyes"
6"looked like captured moonlight"
20.04% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.8
wordCount1667
matches
0"Not just muted, but erased"
1"not of water, but of what looked like liquid mercury"
2"not just on the surface, but churning downwards as if draining through an invisible hole"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences133
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs43
mean38.77
std25.44
cv0.656
sampleLengths
063
141
223
3101
422
558
617
744
869
97
1065
1121
1212
1358
1416
1591
1624
1748
1844
192
2022
2199
225
2318
2421
2564
2640
2748
2810
2912
3026
3121
3267
3320
3455
3537
3616
3782
3824
3935
4051
4123
4245
93.16% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences116
matches
0"was gone"
1"was joined"
2"were arranged"
3"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs213
matches
0"was stepping"
1"was waiting"
56.93% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences133
ratio0.03
matches
0"Wildflowers in impossible colours—deep indigo, vibrant silver, a red that seemed to swallow the light—bloomed in chaotic profusion across the soft grass."
1"But the pebbles themselves glowed with a soft, internal light—pale greens and blues."
2"A sound echoed through the hollow—a melodic, discordant note like a plucked string on a broken instrument."
3"The flowers, the crystals, the silent trees—they all felt like eyes."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1380
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"still, mirror-flat, reflecting"
adverbCount50
adverbRatio0.036231884057971016
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.010144927536231883
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences133
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences133
mean12.53
std7.69
cv0.613
sampleLengths
018
120
225
318
416
57
614
79
86
97
1022
1119
1211
135
1427
154
1612
1710
182
1919
2010
213
229
235
2410
2517
2622
2714
288
297
307
315
3217
3319
3414
357
3622
3713
385
3925
409
4112
4210
432
4423
454
4618
4713
489
497
41.10% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.3007518796992481
totalSentences133
uniqueOpeners40
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences110
matches(empty)
ratio0
81.82% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount38
totalSentences110
matches
0"their voice whispered, carried on"
1"It was warm, a steady"
2"It wasn’t large, but it"
3"They were the standing stones"
4"It was the gold-tinged grey"
5"It was a pressure in"
6"Her feet sank into the"
7"She looked back."
8"Her footprints were there, clear"
9"She remembered Isolde left none."
10"They reached out a hand"
11"It was joined by the"
12"She traced the sound to"
13"she breathed, crouching down"
14"She dipped her fingers in."
15"She stood and moved further"
16"Its surface was perfectly still,"
17"They were tall, slender stalks"
18"It throbbed against her chest,"
19"She pulled it out, letting"
ratio0.345
32.73% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount94
totalSentences110
matches
0"The air in the grove"
1"Rory had never been to"
2"Nyx flowed beside her, a"
3"their voice whispered, carried on"
4"Rory muttered, her hand going"
5"It was warm, a steady"
6"The trees opened into a"
7"It wasn’t large, but it"
8"Wildflowers in impossible colours—deep indigo,"
9"They were the standing stones"
10"The light here was wrong."
11"It was the gold-tinged grey"
12"Nyx observed, their violet gaze"
13"It was a pressure in"
14"Her feet sank into the"
15"She looked back."
16"Her footprints were there, clear"
17"She remembered Isolde left none."
18"A shiver, unrelated to the"
19"Rory said, more to hear"
ratio0.855
45.45% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences110
matches
0"Before Rory could ask another"
ratio0.009
40.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences56
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"One moment she was on a muddy footpath, the next she was stepping between two moss-covered oak trunks that hadn’t been there a second ago."
1"Wildflowers in impossible colours—deep indigo, vibrant silver, a red that seemed to swallow the light—bloomed in chaotic profusion across the soft grass."
2"It was the gold-tinged grey of a London twilight, yet the sky above was a clear, deep periwinkle, speckled with stars that were too bright, too close."
3"The water was bitingly cold, colder than any winter stream, and it left a faint, shimmering residue on her skin that evaporated after a second."
4"It throbbed against her chest, a steady, insistent beat that matched the pulsing fungi."
5"Rory watched, frozen, as the mercury-like substance in the centre began to swirl, not just on the surface, but churning downwards as if draining through an invi…"
6"A marketplace under an amber sky, crowded with figures that were too tall, too thin."
7"It was cold to the touch, so cold it almost burned, and along its length ran a tracery of fine, elegant script that glowed with a soft blue-white luminescence."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"Rory muttered, her hand going to the Heartstone pendant beneath her jacket"
1"Nyx observed, their violet gaze scanning the treeline"
2"Nyx said, their voice hushed"
3"Nyx said, their usual whisper tense"
4"Rory replied, her voice sounding too loud in the quiet"
5"she said, her voice firm"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"their voice whispered (whisper)"
1"Rory muttered (mutter)"
2"Nyx observed (observe)"
3"she breathed (breathe)"
4"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
5"Isolde acknowledged (acknowledge)"
dialogueSentences36
tagDensity0.361
leniency0.722
rawRatio0.462
effectiveRatio0.333
68.7464%