Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTYQ5K4DMH0JX3T8T4S0NTG

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1m 39s
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$0.004878
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OpenAI

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

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The Heartstone Pendant throbbed against my sternum as I forced my way through the boundary stones, grit grinding under my boots and the silver chain biting at my shirt. Gravel scuttled away, and the air tugged at my sleeves as if something unseen poured through the gap behind me. The ring of oak standing stones hummed with a tired, patient murmur, the kind a woman might hear from an old friend who refuses to die. The grove swallowed sound the moment I stepped inside, but not the sound of my own breath, which rattled in my chest like dry leaves. Time behaved here as if someone had tuned a clock to a different heartbeat. An hour inside could mean minutes, or days, or a joke played on a tired traveller. I kept the thought at bay, focused on the crimson pulse at my throat. The Heartstone pendant wasn’t merely decoration. It warmed there, a small sun pinned to my chest, and it breathed with a stubborn stubbornness that did not belong to a trinket. It belonged to whatever benefactor had slipped it into my coat pocket and told me to come here—to Isolde’s grove, to the old stones, to the place where the Fae touch the earth and tell it to listen. Wildflowers bloomed year-round, yes, and the air carried the scent of damp earth, of moss and rain that never seemed to fall. The grove held the kind of quiet that pressed at a person’s eardrums, making the tiniest sounds seem like brickwork on a distant wall. The ancient oak at the centre had its own story, a chimney of an ancient memory that the world kept trying to forget. Time moved differently within the circle, and I knew I had to tread carefully, or it would creep up behind me and change me without my noticing. A branch shifted somewhere to my left with a dry rustle, not far enough to be an animal, not far enough to be a wind. The noise existed for a fraction of a second and then dissolved into the soft rustle of leaves that wouldn’t rustle unless you listened for them. My heartbeat answered in quick, sharp drums against the inside of my ribs. The pendant’s warmth deepened, settling into a slow, even warmth that told me I was near something old and patient, something that did not want to be disturbed yet would not stay quiet for long. “Not tonight,” I whispered to myself, as if the wind might be listening and take the hint. The Grove had a reputation for listening when it felt like listening, and for ignoring when it didn’t want to hear. I kept moving, half my mind on the task, half on the way the air felt heavier with every step, as if the grove itself were drawing in a breath and holding it until curiosity and fear both found their limits. The boundary between Earth and the Fae realm lay at the far side of the clearing, where the wildflowers pressed against a ring of stones that looked ordinary enough until you touched them and found they weren’t. They hummed faintly, like a distant choir of insects rehearsing a song they didn’t quite understand. It was no different from a city street at night, really—noise folded into silence, the familiar made strange by a handful of tiny, careful cues. My fingers brushed the pendant’s silver chain; the chain felt cold for a heartbeat and then warmed again, the crimson stone’s glow turning a shade of ember as it read the room’s mood, or perhaps the room’s fear. I had come here for a reason that felt ancient and personal, even if I could not name it yet. The benefactor who had given me the pendant spoke of gates sharper than knives, of Hel portals and the way the earth remembers. The lips that had pressed the pendant into my palm said nothing more than: “Go where the heartstone tells you.” It sounded like a threat and a blessing at the same time, and I suspect that is exactly how the stranger had intended it. The wrongness began as a scent, faint and metallic, like blood that never quite dries. It lay on the back of my tongue before I recognised it as something else—an unfamiliar copper tang that clung like a second skin. The grove offered scents as a gift, and this particular one warned that I was trespassing into something older than names. And then the sounds started. Not a chorus, not a chorus of crickets or frogs, but nuisances that did not belong to night: a soft ticking, a careful skitter of claws in leaves, a sigh that did not belong to the person who exhaled it. I paused, listening, and the sense of being watched sharpened like a blade brought close to the knuckles. The edge of my vision began to play tricks: a shadow where a shadow should not be, a ripple in the air that resembled heat mirages but did not dissipate when I blinked. The wildflowers shifted with a rustle that did not come from the breeze; they moved as if the grove were a sea and the plants were seaweed, drifting with currents that had no current to ride. The Heartstone Pendant warmed more insistently, and a tremor ran along the chain as if a dragonfly were trapped within the metal, beating its wings in a desperate little storm. Not alone, I told myself, though the thought arrived with the certainty that I did not want to meet whoever—or whatever—shared this space with me. The grove’s time signatures pricked at the back of my skull, a chorus of memories that did not belong to me. My breath slowed, easing into the rhythm the pendant demanded, a careful measure of calm that would let me listen without inviting attention. Then the whisper came. A soft breath of a voice that might have belonged to a child, or to a tired grandmother who had learned to swallow fear and keep walking. The words did not carry themselves in any language I could recognise with certainty, but the cadence was there, a lilting rhythm that made sense in long-buried parts of the brain. “Waited long enough, Rory.” The nickname arrived unbidden, the way the old names do when you’ve left a life behind and a life behind still clings to you. The voice did not belong to any single person I had known, yet it sounded as if it wore the voice of someone I should recognise—if recognition were possible here, in this place where the earth kept its own hours. “Who’s there?” I said aloud, though I doubted I would get a direct answer. The sound of my own voice seemed too loud for the grove, a reminder that I was not only trespassing but trespassing inside someone else’s memory. The first shadow crossed the edge of the path—thin, almost insubstantial, like a branch that had learned to walk. It did not so much approach as glide along the perimeter of my vision, pausing at the edge where the world bends and breaks if you look too long. When I turned to face it, there were two of me in the same moment, a trick of light and leaves, a fear staring back from the surface of a moon-slick pond. The second me vanished as soon as I tried to fix it with my gaze, leaving behind a cold mood, like frost on glass after a long breath. The grove did not feel empty, just unreasonably full—like being in a room where every door leads to a different, darker room, and none of the doors would stay open for longer than a blink. The Heartstone gasped against my chest, the warmth pooling in a neat circle there as if it could protect me from the soft violence of the place. The pendant’s glow ran in small, determined strokes along the chain, a line of fire tracing my skin. “Not tonight,” I told the pendant, borrowing a line from myself in a past version of my life, the one I’d left behind when I ran from an abusive ex and a life that had grown too busy with danger to notice. The words tasted like ash on my tongue, but I meant them. I was not here to flirt with something that could swallow me whole. A soft, breathless laugh drifted through the trees, too close to be merely wind. The sound had a childish echo to it, yet the courage of a predator lay beneath it. The laugh felt like someone tapping the inside of a hollow bone to see if it would ring. The plausible danger became actual when the ring of stones around me did not merely hold the boundary but bent inward, as if the grove itself had chosen to lean closer and listen. The air thickened with the scent of damp earth and metal, the kind of scent you inhale when you stand too near an open grave that has not yet been filled. A branch brushed across the back of my hand. I flinched, instinctively pulling away, and the pendant flared a hotter red. “Rory,” the voice murmured again, not loud but insistent, as if some learned elder had stepped into the same room and learned to speak in the language of this place. It wasn’t a voice that wanted to destroy me outright, but a voice that wanted to remind me I was in someone else’s house, where the furniture moved while you slept and the door never quite fit its frame. I found myself thinking about the day I had first noticed the pendant’s warmth, the way it had felt like a link to someone else’s map, a map that led through altars and shadows to places you were not supposed to enter without a guide. The map had told me to come, but not to stay, to listen and then leave before the listening turned into listening to the last breath. It was a map written in the blood of some other traveler who never came back. The grove’s time trickled again, a series of small moments collapsing into one another. I breathed in, counted to four, then let the breath out in a long, careful exhale. The heartbeat inside my chest—my own—kept opposite time to the grove’s clock, and I kept the cadence steady by tracing the pendant’s warm glow around the edge of the delicate silver chain. A shape appeared where a patch of wildflowers refused to grow, a silhouette with no features that could be named. It appeared not with menace but with that peculiar patience of a thing that knows it can wait forever in the corner of a room you forgot existed. It stood there for a long moment, and then vanished, leaving behind a scent of rain that had not fallen. “Who invited you?” I asked, though I knew the grove would not answer in a direct way. I asked because the question was a shield, and the grove responded to shields the way waves answer a boat’s hull. The answer came not in words but in cold sensation—an icy finger tracing the nape of my neck, a whisper that crawled into my ear and seemed to hold the breath there. For a moment, I imagined another pair of eyes on me, eyes that saw through the thin veil of my own. The presence did not want to reveal itself; it wanted to insinuate itself into my narrative, to rewrite a page that already had its own ink. I shifted my weight, keeping the pendant steady, feeling a quiet resolve inside me. The Heartstone’s warmth surged, not as a flame but as a stubborn flame that clung to the wick and refused to burn out. I reminded myself, this is not a story you tell aloud; this is a place where stories sink into the soil and grow into fear. The grass around me twitched as if the ground itself breathed, listening to something just beyond the edge of sound. The grove’s memory pressed in, a slow, heavy weight that pressed into my eyes and made my vision narrow to the smallest possible field of perception. The wildflowers around me did not shudder, exactly, but their stems trembled in a tiny, almost imperceptible rhythm, as if they were doing the waltz with unseen partners. “Not tonight,” I repeated, this time a muttered oath rather than a promise. The pendant’s glow shifted from ember to a pale, nodding red, and the warmth settled again into a patient heat, as one puts a hot cup down on a saucer and leaves it there to speak for itself. The Hel portal—if there was one here in the grove, hidden and waiting—would not reveal itself to the curious or the frightened. It would show itself to the patient, the prepared, the person who could listen without leaping. In the silence that followed, something crossed the boundary of the grove’s edge with a careful, almost deliberate tread. It was not a step so much as a careful placement of weight, a motion that suggested caution rather than aggression. It paused behind a stand of ferns, the leaves trembling just enough to betray its presence to the world when they were not meant to. I did not move, not yet. I watched the shadow, or perhaps the shadow watched me. The distance between us thinned, and I could sense the shape of a figure there, a silhouette with a malevolent normalcy about it, like a receptionist who knew all the secrets of the building but pretended to be ordinary to keep the peace. A sound rose from the earth—a soft chuff, almost like a dog that knows it has done something wrong but cannot admit it. It came from beneath the path, from the dark soil where the roots of the ancient oak tangled with everything else and kept secrets better than any locked box. The sound persisted until I thought I might go mad listening to it, and then, as if a switch had been flipped, it stopped as suddenly as it began. “Do you hear us?” a voice asked, not from the shadow behind the ferns but from the space directly around me, as if the grove itself had learned to speak through the sound of the wind and the sigh of the leaves and the breath in my lungs. It sounded like a chorus of preachers who had spent centuries learning to whisper, and it asked a question that did not require an answer so much as a decision. I decided to test the boundaries of what I could touch and what I could not touch. I stepped forward, careful, measured, and the ground replied with a soft, almost unnoticeable give, like a mattress that has outlived its usefulness but refuses to betray the body resting upon it. The pendant woke a little more, burning with a white-hot core of warmth, and I felt a memory try to slip forward, something about Cardiff, about when I was younger, about holding onto a hope that never quite arrived. The wrongness sharpened, but only just enough that I could sense it but not name it. A minor tremor ran through the turf, and the wildflowers bowed toward the ground as though someone were pressing down on the sky from above. They looked up again in unison, and the motion reminded me of watchers raising their hands in unison, not in prayer but in a silent agreement to observe, to judge, to wait. “Not alone,” I heard again, this time with more clarity, though the tone remained flat and measuring. The voice did not belong to one of the many things I suspected lived here; it belonged to something older, something that had learned to be quiet for a very long time and to move when it believed it was unseen. It was the kind of presence you could feel in your bones, the sense that you were being weighed and found wanting. I widened my stance, glancing toward the stand of trees that marked the grove’s boundary, and I saw something else: a glimmer, a faint string of light that did not belong to any lantern or star. It lay along the edge of the standing stones, an almost imperceptible thread, and it tugged at something inside me, as if the pendant’s warmth had followed it there, eager to investigate whatever lay on the other side of the thread. It was not a lure but a route. A figure stepped into the circle of light thrown by the Heartstone’s pale glow, not a man or a woman as I knew them, but something that wore a silhouette like a coat of many futures. It paused within the circle and regarded me with an intent gaze that gave nothing away and asked everything at the same time. Its features were indistinct, the kind of face that becomes clear only when you stare at it long enough and forget what you were looking for in the first place. “Rory,” it whispered, the sound like two stones rubbing together, deliberate and cold and aware. The voice did not know my name as a person does, but as a function within a system that had learned to recognise me by the pattern of my footsteps, by the time I reached the grove, by the exact temperature of the air at this moment. It called me by something I recognised—by a version of myself that believed in a different future. “Not tonight,” I said, not to the figure but to the situation, to the moment when the grove would decide whether to keep me or to swallow me whole. The words tasted like iron and rain on my tongue, and I swallowed them to keep my mouth from betraying what I wanted most: to leave this place with my heartbeat intact, with my head unbroken, with the pendant still warm against my chest and the edge of tears not yet climbing my eyes. The figure stepped closer, not quickly but with a slow, inexorable gravity that suggested it had learned to walk through walls and memories, to make itself present without disturbing the room it inhabited. It spoke again, clearly, a voice that carried the ache of old stone and new hunger. “Your purpose sits within reach, if you choose to listen rather than run. The Hel gate hums beneath the earth and remembers you. It remembers all who came before who asked for a door and a key.” I did not answer with a plan or a promise. I kept silent and measured my next move, letting the pendant guide me through the tangle of fear and curiosity that built up inside me like a tower of smoke. The grove would not yield its secrets easily, not to someone who ran as fast as I did in the daylight, not to someone who believed the world could be neatly severed into before and after. But it would yield to someone who could wait, who could breathe and listen and not mistake every creak of a branch for a hand reaching for their throat. Behind the figure, the tree line seemed to bend once more, as if the grove itself was adjusting the geometry of space to accommodate an intruder—me, perhaps, or the figure, or some combination of both. The Heartstone’s glow drifted toward the edge of the circle, and then stopped, curiously anchored by the weight of the presence. The pendant’s warmth intensified, a pulse that sank into my shoulder and spread down my arm to the fingertips. It made the skin tingle and the muscles tighten, and with that came a memory I did not think I possessed and a fear I did not know I could feel. “Keep your heart steady,” a distant part of me whispered, as if someone else stood with me, a partner who could see through the heavy fog of terror. If I were lucky, the gate would reveal itself without my having to beg it open. If I were unlucky, the gate would decide to reveal me to whatever waited behind it. The voice—the presence—stretched into a long moment of silence that felt like a held breath. Then, suddenly, the grove seemed to lean in again, listening with the same patient, inexorable appetite. The tree line blurred, not as a vision, but as a weakening of the boundary between worlds. A sound rose beneath that; not a noise but a sensation, a soft pressure pushing against the skin of my ears, as if you could hear the bones speak when the body could not. And then I saw it, not with my eyes alone but with a reckoning of every nerve in my body. A line of light—thin, pale, almost invisible—snaked along the base of the standing stones and pooled in a small circle at their core. It did not look like a portal. It looked like a wound, a tiny seam where a too-bright seam of something living and old had split the world and was trying to mend itself with reluctance. The Heartstone Pendant hummed with a deeper, steadier warmth. It felt as if the piece of Dymas’ crimson stone in my hand, the little shard of a lost realm, wanted to drink the light from that seam and make it a doorway again—make it a way home for something that once belonged to it. The glow of the pendant intensified to a soft, dangerous red, and I could feel a pull that wasn’t mine, a gravity that pressed my bones toward the seam as if the entire grove were a mouth and I was a coin ready to be swallowed. “Wait,” I said, though I was not sure who would hear the order—the grove, the seam, or the two versions of myself that lived within these boundaries. The seam pulsed. The silhouette behind me shifted, the way a memory might rearrange itself when you’re not looking. It stepped closer and then paused, hovering, as if the floor had suddenly become a mirror and the figure stood behind me, looking at its own reflection in the glass. The sense of a gaze became a pressure against the back of my neck, and I could feel the hairs on my skin rise as though a thousand tiny bees crawled beneath the surface. “Not alone,” the whisper returned, this time closer, a breath at the side of my ear that did not belong to me or to the figure in the tree line, but to something older, something patient, something hungry for a door and the promise of a memory left behind. I touched the pendant with the edge of my fingertips, letting the warmth transfer into my palm, the heat travelling along my arm until it settled at my elbow. The ring of stones hummed again, slower this time, as if the grove itself had decided to test me with a final question. The Hel portal’s pull tugged at something inside me, a faint insistence that this world would never be enough on its own, that there was always another gate somewhere, waiting. The sound of your name on a tongue that is not yours is a strange thing to hear. It is the echo of a life you used to pretend you had left behind. It was in that moment that I understood the nature of the wrongness here: I wasn’t alone with a memory. I was standing at the threshold of someone else’s memory, someone who had walked through this very place with a different motive and a different fear, someone who may still be listening. The grove’s breathing grew heavier, the leaves clutched at the air as if trying to hold on to a promise that was slipping away. The seam throbbed once, then twice, with a cautionary pulse that suggested caution more than threat. I braced myself, feeling the pendant warm anew, and the world’s edges began to sharpen, as if the grove itself had decided to put me through a test. Then the ground sighed, a low sound that travelled from roots to canopy, and the seam opened a fraction more, revealing a pale, misty light that did not belong to any earthly glow. It did not illuminate so much as it exhaled a memory. And in that memory, I glimpsed a figure I knew, one of those nearly-forgotten faces that drifted at the corners of a life you meant to leave behind, wearing an expression of resignation and hunger that the living should never have to bear. I did not know what that memory was trying to tell me, but I knew enough to understand that I stood not simply at the edge of a boundary but within a negotiation that spanned the centuries, one in which my choices mattered more than my fear. The Hel gate did not force itself into this world with a loud crash; it slid in, slow and patient, a thread pulled at the very edge of reality until it became a seam through which a different night might slip in. “Stay,” I whispered to myself, a vow rather than a plan. The stage was set, and the players had begun to murmur their lines behind the stage curtained by fern and shadow. The wearing of time in this place pressed in tight, almost suffocating, but I stood straight, letting the Heartstone’s warmth steady me, letting it tell me what to do next without my needing to name the words. The first sensation of danger came as a whisper of air along the nape of my neck, followed by a cool kiss of air across my wrists that told me I had once more forgotten how to breathe. The weight of the pendant grew heavier, or perhaps it was simply that every heartbeat was a small, desperate drum in the quiet. Something broad and dark pressed at the far edge of the circle, gathering in the periphery, a presence that did not want to be seen but wanted to remind me that this was its place and I had trespassed. And then, without ceremony, the shadow moved in a way that told me I had not imagined it: a figure stepped from the edge of a fern, not with the strangled slowness of a dream but with the precise, practiced ease of a hunter who had learned all the angles of a forest and never forgot. The figure did not reveal itself fully, but the outline was enough to make the breath catch in my throat. The silhouette wore a cloak that did not rustle so much as sigh around it, the fabric dark and velvet-like, swallowing light rather than reflecting it. Its face remained hidden beneath the hood, but I felt eyes on me—curious, patient, calculating. The boundary’s hum deepened, a bass note that seemed to resonate in the space between my ribs. The Heartstone Pendant pulsed again, the crimson glow flaring briefly in a way that suggested something in the world beyond was hungry for it, keen to pull it through and into itself. My hand rose to the pendant again, fingers moving almost of their own accord, drawing the chain to cradle the stone as I stepped a cautious inch backward, away from the seam, toward the old oak’s gnarled trunk. “Not tonight,” I told the figure, softer than before but no less clear. The discarded phrase gathered weight, a shield erected against whatever this place might offer next. The figure stopped its advance, and for a moment the space between us stretched into a long, thin line of tension that felt as fragile as a thread of glass. “Not tonight, maybe,” the figure said, the words slow and measured, almost a caress and a threat in equal measure. Then the voice—my own memory’s echo or its other half’s—gave a quiet, level chuckle, hollow and knowing. The grove kept the sound for itself, as if aching to hold onto every syllable and every syllable’s consequence. The heart of the grove seemed to glow with a deeper light, pale and otherworldly, and the edge of the standing stones exhaled a sigh that smelled of rain and old copper coins. The seam pulsed in a slower rhythm, as if it had learned to keep time with two clocks that refused to agree. I could feel the hair on my arms rise in anticipation, feel the breath come a fraction sooner than I would expect, feel the weight of a decision pressing on my chest. If I turned toward the memory-gate, if I stepped closer to the line that split this world from the next, what would I find? A door? A trap? The proof that I was not who I thought I was? The possibility tugged at me with a cold, careful touch, and I resisted with everything I had—by standing still, by not moving toward the seam, by keeping my eyes trained on the figure and my breath even. The figure shifted again, not stepping closer but presenting a new figure—one that had not appeared before, a secondary silhouette behind the first, melding with it in a way that suggested there was more than one presence occupying this same space and time, all of them waiting for something to tip the balance. “Listen,” the first voice said, though it did not demand obedience so much as offer a lure. “The heart knows its door.” I did not answer with words or promises. I stood and watched, letting the moment crystallise into something I could carry away if I managed to leave this place with my mind intact. The Heartstone warmed, not with the blunt force of fear but with the quiet insistence of a stubborn compass needle, keening toward a destination I did not yet know how to name. The old oak’s trunk pressed against my shoulder as if it understood my need to hide there for a breath, to disappear behind the rough bark and wait for the right breath to push me back into the world. The edge of the world—the seam—gave just enough for me to glimpse a memory: a corridor of stone and light, a cold corridor that led somewhere I could not safely recall. The glimpsed memory was not mine but it belonged to the grove, to the memory of the old gatekeepers who had learned to live between things, to survive by offering warnings in the form of whispers and slipshod paths that could lead a traveller awry or home. I spoke then, not to the two silhouettes or to the memory behind them, but to the pendant itself, as if it were a living thing with its own conscience and its own voice. “Show me what I’m here to find,” I murmured, the words not loud but deliberate, a request rather than a demand, a plea that did not break the moment’s spell but asked it to bend. The glow of the Heartstone intensified in direct proportion to the narrowing seam, and the two shapes—their outlines coalescing into something more definite—shifted their stance, as if listening to something beyond the circle. The grove itself answered in a low, soft rang, like distant bells struck by wind, a sound that did not resolve into any known note or key. The memory of a door opened, flashed in the spaces between the leaves; the door did not stand in front of me, but behind the world’s skin, a thin line of light that promised a way out of the fear that pressed against my lungs. And then came a moment of sudden, stark clarity: I understood why I had come here and why the wrongness felt like a teaching rather than a trap. The Hel portal—if the seam was the gate’s first breath—was not a thing to be faced with bravado or cunning. It demanded a patient respect for its power and a willingness to pass if the world allowed it, and only if I bore the mark in me that could carry the gate’s memory back across the threshold into the life I kept trying to live outside of danger. The two silhouettes wavered, as if the air between them were a screen catching a fever dream. The softer presence—perhaps more cunning and older—spoke again in that odd, delicate cadence. “You carry a memory you did not choose,” it said, almost in apology. “It calls you to return what was borrowed, and to take what is owed.” The words did not threaten so much as recount a debt long overdue. I touched the pendant again, the silver chain cool under my fingers, and answered with the only thing I could: a decision made in the marrow of my bones. The decision was not a guarantee of safety, nor a promise of reunion with a future that felt unearned. It was simply a refusal to surrender to fear’s inevitable claim. In the smallest possible instant, events moved. The grove exhaled a long, slow breath, the kind you release after a storm that never truly ends. The seam widened again, not violently, but with a certainty that could have been a guiding hand rather than an assault. The silhouettes grew brighter, their edges sharpening as if a painter had finally decided to finish the portrait they began many summers ago. A figure stepped forward—a taller form, hooded but not entirely hidden, whose presence carried the scent of rain and old, damp earth. The Heartstone brightened to a fierce crimson, not radiating heat so much as demanding attention, insisting that every memory in the grove belonged to this moment and no other. The air grew thinner, the breath more precious. Something in me loosened, a thread I hadn’t known I was holding, and I felt the gravity of the gate pull at my chest with a dangerous tenderness. And then the first crack appeared in the boundary not as a break but as a kiss, a soft contact that promised both peril and passage. The seam’s light flared, becoming a corridor of pale, shifting colour—like moonlight poured through a broken glass bottle. It did not cast simple illumination; it altered perception, tinting shapes and distances, bending the sense of gravity so that objects seemed to slide rather than stand still. The two silhouettes stepped closer; the older one reached out with a gloved hand, a glove that did not conceal a living stigma but made the living thing behind it seem more real, more dangerous. “Not tonight,” I breathed again, but the phrase this time carried the weight of a pact, a line drawn in soil that could not be washed away. The door, if such it was, hovered at the edge of my vision, a thing I could almost reach with a single outstretched finger, if only I believed the world to be honest for a moment more. The first touch came then—not a grip, not a grab, but a press of air against my cheek, as if a hand had been laid on me and then slid away. It was a warning and a pledge, all at once: ask what you need, and you will be granted a doorway, but you will pay the price in fear. The pendant flared again, stronger than before, and the two silhouettes paused, their forms solidifying into something that might have made sense in a dream. I did not run. I did not retreat. I stood steady, eyes fixed on the seam and the figures that hovered on its edge, listening to the grove’s ancient breath as if it might whisper a name, a word that would unlock something buried in the soil. My wrist tingled where the crescent-shaped scar rested, a reminder of what fear can do to a person who refuses to look away. The little scar caught the light of the pendant, a tiny crescent of pale white that glinted against the dark. The gate, which had waited so long to be unbound, pressed closer, and the room between here and there became a thin, humming corridor of possibility. The Heartstone’s warmth gathered at the place where the seam and the memory met, and I felt a quiet certainty that I would know the next moment when it came—whether I would step through or be forced to stay on this side, watching the others pass into a future that I could not predict. A final hush fell over the grove, deeper and older than the night ever pretended to be. The two silhouettes finally spoke in unison, a low, almost musical murmur that threaded through my nerves and stitched a glimmer of resolve into my chest. “Choose, Rory.” Not a demand, but a summons. And in that word, I heard all the costs and all the reasons for coming here in the first place. The heartstone answered with a willing spark, and the light around the seam brightened to a nearly blinding white, then cooled to a pale, dangerous glow. The figure behind the two silhouettes stepped into the light, so close that I could catch a scent of rain and something darker, something not quite elemental and not quite animal—a presence that felt like a page torn from an older book and still smelling of ink and damp stone. The moment stretched into something heavier, more final, and I realised I was no longer merely observing a boundary but standing on the brink of a choice that would change what I believed about myself and perhaps about the world I walked through every day. My breath came in shallow, careful gasps, and the pendant’s warmth spread beyond my chest, down my arm, reaching my fingers as if the stone had learned to cradle my fear and reframe it as courage. Then, exactly at the edge where fear should have won, I made my decision. It did not require words. It did not require a dramatic exit or a display of strength. It required a single, quiet act—lifting my chin, letting the seam glow with its own stubborn light, and stepping forward, a fraction, a breath at a time, toward the gate that promised something more than safety. The grove did not resist. It exhaled in one long sigh that shook the leaves and sent a drift of pollen into my eyes. The seam’s light pulsed, and I felt the tug of the Hel gate like a hand on my shoulder, a gentle insistence that this was the moment to move from one world to the next, to honour the debt owed to the memory behind the door, and to find the way home through the door that the heartstone had prepared for me. And then, in a heartbeat that seemed to stretch into an eternity, the ground gave a soft, decisive sigh and opened beneath me, not violently, but as if the earth itself had decided this was the place to widen for a passage. The seam flared into a corridor of light, and I saw a thin thread of something—call it memory, call it power—pull away from the circle toward a destination I could not name. The two silhouettes blurred into shapes of living intent as the corridor’s brightness grew, and I felt the grip of gravity loosen, then lift. For the merest moment I heard a single, haunting word flutter through the air, not spoken aloud but carried by the pulse of the pendant and the breath of the grove: Go. I did not hesitate. The Heartstone thrummed, fierce and bright, as I stepped fully forward into the light that wrapped around me like a foreign, warm rain. The world became a tunnel of silvery-milk, the noises behind me fading into a soft, far-off tremor, the edges of the grove receding into mere memory as if I were being drawn through a thread toward something both dangerous and crucial. Then the horror—still restrained, still patient—snarled at the edge of comprehension: a sound behind the gate that did not belong to the night, which did not belong to fear or courage. Something old and watching and hungry pressed its attention against the barrier, trying to reach through the light, to touch me with its cold, careful hands. The memory of the room I had left behind pressed on my tongue, a silence that waited for a voice to break it. I swallowed, steadying myself, and pressed on. The corridor narrowed to a point, the light gleaming in a narrow line that promised a door, a gate, a way home or a way further into trouble. I reached out with my free hand—the one not clutching the pendant—and touched the light, feeling it respond as if to a second heartbeat, a second breath. And then, just as I thought I would be swallowed by brightness and the door behind me would close forever, a cry—soft, human, not entirely human—broke through the tunnel. It did not come from the realm I left, nor from the figure that followed me through the boundary. It came from inside me, or perhaps from the space where memory and fear and hope had learned to argue with one another for control. The corridor stretched, extended, and then there was the sensation of falling, not downward but inward, as if I had stepped through to a hidden basement of a house I had never known existed. The light steadied, and the cold dropped away, replaced by a warmth that was both unfamiliar and intimate. I landed on something soft, not soil but a kind of living carpet of warmth and scent that did not belong to the grove nor to any room I had ever entered. The world reassembled around me in a rush of fresh air, a chorus of sounds I could not yet name, and the heavy, damp memory of old stone pressing into my back. The Hel gate had shown me its memory and offered me a path. The pendant lay against my chest, almost politely now, as if it understood that I was not yet ready to call this a victory. The room I stood in wasn’t a room at all, but a space between spaces, a waystation that seemed to exist only because I had chosen to walk through the seam. The shadows moved with the kind of patience I knew too well, the patience of a predator that has learned to wait for the precise moment it needs to act. I rose, careful not to disturb the delicate balance of this place. The memory behind me pressed against my thoughts with the force of a whisper, begging me to recognise the debt I owed to those who came before me, to the earth that held me, to the heart that beat with a stubborn rhythm that refused to go away. The wrongness remained, but with it came a glimmer of purpose. The path ahead would not be easy, and I did not know what awaited me on the other side of that pale corridor. Yet I suspected the answer lay not in cunning or bravado but in listening, in accepting that the grove may take more than it gives and that sometimes the way home is to walk through the gate and carry the gate’s memory with you. I did not look back once as the passage widened again and then narrowed, as if something in the world had decided to tighten around a thread. The Heartstone’s warmth steadied at my chest, a quiet, constant flame that claimed no glory and asked for nothing beyond a quiet commitment to stay true to what lay beyond the glow. The last thing I felt before the tunnel closed behind me was the soft brush of air on my cheek and the memory of the grove’s patient breath, as if it had exhaled a warning to remember: If you come here again, you bring more than yourself with you. And I understood that the chapter I had entered would not close with a neat bow or a promise of relief. It would close with the next breath, and a memory that would insist on becoming part of me, whether I wished it or not.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
26.09% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags23
adverbTagCount4
adverbTags
0"I said aloud [aloud]"
1"the voice murmured again [again]"
2"I heard again [again]"
3"I breathed again [again]"
dialogueSentences26
tagDensity0.885
leniency1
rawRatio0.174
effectiveRatio0.174
93.30% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount7459
totalAiIsmAdverbs10
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count3
3
adverb"very"
count3
4
adverb"quickly"
count1
5
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"really"
2"suddenly"
3"very"
4"quickly"
5"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
40.34% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount7459
totalAiIsms89
found
0
word"throbbed"
count2
1
word"pulse"
count4
2
word"warmth"
count17
3
word"silence"
count4
4
word"familiar"
count1
5
word"sense of"
count3
6
word"whisper"
count7
7
word"reminder"
count2
8
word"determined"
count1
9
word"tracing"
count3
10
word"echo"
count3
11
word"predator"
count2
12
word"grave"
count1
13
word"weight"
count7
14
word"resolve"
count3
15
word"trembled"
count1
16
word"normalcy"
count1
17
word"measured"
count3
18
word"could feel"
count5
19
word"footsteps"
count1
20
word"pulsed"
count4
21
word"practiced ease"
count1
22
word"velvet"
count1
23
word"calculating"
count1
24
word"tension"
count1
25
word"otherworldly"
count1
26
word"anticipation"
count1
27
word"stark"
count1
28
word"wavered"
count1
29
word"tenderness"
count1
30
word"peril"
count1
31
word"carried the weight"
count1
32
word"restrained"
count1
33
word"gleaming"
count1
34
word"the last thing"
count1
highlights
0"throbbed"
1"pulse"
2"warmth"
3"silence"
4"familiar"
5"sense of"
6"whisper"
7"reminder"
8"determined"
9"tracing"
10"echo"
11"predator"
12"grave"
13"weight"
14"resolve"
15"trembled"
16"normalcy"
17"measured"
18"could feel"
19"footsteps"
20"pulsed"
21"practiced ease"
22"velvet"
23"calculating"
24"tension"
25"otherworldly"
26"anticipation"
27"stark"
28"wavered"
29"tenderness"
30"peril"
31"carried the weight"
32"restrained"
33"gleaming"
34"the last thing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells3
narrationSentences289
matches
0"e in anticipation"
1"e in fear"
2"felt the tug"
43.99% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount17
narrationSentences289
filterMatches
0"listen"
1"look"
2"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
2"tried to"
3"tended to"
4"try to"
5"managed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences293
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen62
ratio0.003
matches
0"Then the voice—my own memory’s echo or its other half’s—gave a quiet, level chuckle, hollow and knowing."
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords7402
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions36
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Not alone, I told myself, though the thought arrived with the certainty that I did not want to meet whoever—or whatever—…"
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions34
wordCount7244
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity0.22
worstName"Heartstone"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Heartstone"
discoveredNames
Heartstone16
Pendant4
Isolde1
Fae2
Grove1
Earth1
Hel7
Cardiff1
Go1
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Pendant"
2"Fae"
3"Grove"
places
0"Isolde"
1"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences278
glossingSentenceCount18
matches
0"felt like listening, and for ignoring w"
1"quite understand"
2"sounded like a threat and a blessing at th"
3"tasted like ash on my tongue, but I meant"
4"felt like someone tapping the inside of"
5"felt like a link to someone else’s map"
6"sounded like a chorus of preachers who had"
7"tasted like iron and rain on my tongue, a"
8"felt like a held breath"
9"looked like a wound, a tiny seam where a"
10"as if trying to hold on to a promise that was slipping away"
11"note that seemed to resonate in the space between my ribs"
12"as if aching to hold onto every syllable and every syllable’s consequence"
13"as if listening to something beyond the circle"
14"felt like a teaching rather than a trap"
15"not quite elemental and not quite animal—a presence that felt like a page torn from an older book and still smelling of ink and damp stone"
16"not quite animal—a presence that felt like a page torn from an older book and still smelling of ink and damp stone"
17"heartbeat that seemed to stretch into an eternity, the ground gave a soft, decisive sigh and opened beneath me, not violently, but as if the earth itself had decided this was the place to widen for a passage"
18"waystation that seemed to exist only because I had chosen to walk through the seam"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches37
per1kWords4.999
wordCount7402
matches
0"Not a chorus, not a chorus of crickets or frogs, but nuisances"
1"not a chorus of crickets or frogs, but nuisances"
2"not only trespassing but trespassing inside someone else’s memory"
3"not merely hold the boundary but bent inward, as if the grove itself had chosen to lean close"
4"not loud but insistent, as if some learned elder had stepped into the sam"
5"not with menace but with"
6"not in words but in cold sensation"
7"not as a flame but as a stubborn flame"
8"not shudder, exactly, but their stems trembled in a tiny, almost imperceptible rhythm"
9"not from the shadow behind the ferns but from the space directly around me, as if the grove itself ha"
10"not in prayer but in a silent agreement to observe, to judge, to wait"
11"not a lure but a route"
12"not a man or a woman as I knew them, but something"
13"Not tonight,” I said, not to the figure but to the situation, to the moment"
14"not to the figure but to the situation, to the moment"
15"not quickly but with a slow, inexorable gravity"
16"not as a vision, but as a weakening of the boundary between worlds"
17"not a noise but a sensation, a soft pressure pushing against the skin of my"
18"not with my eyes alone but with a reckoning of every nerve in my body"
19"not simply at the edge of a boundary but within a negotiation"
20"not with the strangled slowness of a dream but with the precise, practiced ease of a hunter who had learned"
21"Not tonight,” I told the figure, softer than before but no less clear"
22"not stepping closer but presenting a new figure"
23"not with the blunt force of fear but with the quiet insistence of a stubborn compass needle, keen"
24"not to the two silhouettes or to the memory behind them, but to the pendant itself, as if it were a living thing with its"
25"not loud but deliberate, a request rather than a demand, a plea"
26"not violently, but with a certainty"
27"not as a break but as a kiss, a soft contact"
28"Not tonight,” I breathed again, but the phrase this time carried the weight of a pact, a line dr"
29"not a grip, not a grab, but a press of air against my cheek, as if a hand had been laid"
30"not a grab, but a press of air against my cheek, as if a hand had been laid"
31"Not a demand, but a summons"
32"not violently, but as if the earth itself had decided this was the place to wid"
33"not spoken aloud but carried by the pulse of the pendant"
34"not downward but inward, as if I had stepped through to a hidden basement of"
35"not soil but a kind of living carpet of warmth"
36"not in cunning or bravado but in listening, in accepting"
98.41% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount6
totalSentences293
matches
0"warned that I"
1"understand that I"
2"insisting that every"
3"understood that I"
4"accepting that the"
5"understood that the"
47.23% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs96
mean77.1
std24.31
cv0.315
sampleLengths
0100
1112
296
399
479
5116
687
7105
8117
969
1062
114
1264
1340
14108
1580
1667
1749
1885
1969
2087
2162
2268
2338
2479
2562
2674
2789
2865
2959
3081
3178
3288
3373
3480
3585
3689
3779
3883
3949
4037
41105
42106
4360
4482
4579
46100
4730
4880
4949
97.98% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount6
totalSentences289
matches
0"been filled"
1"been flipped"
2"being weighed"
3"was, hovered"
4"been laid"
5"being drawn"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount11
totalVerbs1119
matches
0"were drawing"
1"was trespassing"
2"were doing"
3"were pressing"
4"were looking"
5"was adjusting"
6"was trying"
7"was standing"
8"was slipping"
9"was trying"
10"was holding"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount48
semicolonCount10
flaggedSentences44
totalSentences293
ratio0.15
matches
0"It belonged to whatever benefactor had slipped it into my coat pocket and told me to come here—to Isolde’s grove, to the old stones, to the place where the Fae touch the earth and tell it to listen."
1"It was no different from a city street at night, really—noise folded into silence, the familiar made strange by a handful of tiny, careful cues."
2"My fingers brushed the pendant’s silver chain; the chain felt cold for a heartbeat and then warmed again, the crimson stone’s glow turning a shade of ember as it read the room’s mood, or perhaps the room’s fear."
3"It lay on the back of my tongue before I recognised it as something else—an unfamiliar copper tang that clung like a second skin."
4"The wildflowers shifted with a rustle that did not come from the breeze; they moved as if the grove were a sea and the plants were seaweed, drifting with currents that had no current to ride."
5"Not alone, I told myself, though the thought arrived with the certainty that I did not want to meet whoever—or whatever—shared this space with me."
6"The voice did not belong to any single person I had known, yet it sounded as if it wore the voice of someone I should recognise—if recognition were possible here, in this place where the earth kept its own hours."
7"The first shadow crossed the edge of the path—thin, almost insubstantial, like a branch that had learned to walk."
8"The grove did not feel empty, just unreasonably full—like being in a room where every door leads to a different, darker room, and none of the doors would stay open for longer than a blink."
9"The heartbeat inside my chest—my own—kept opposite time to the grove’s clock, and I kept the cadence steady by tracing the pendant’s warm glow around the edge of the delicate silver chain."
10"The answer came not in words but in cold sensation—an icy finger tracing the nape of my neck, a whisper that crawled into my ear and seemed to hold the breath there."
11"The presence did not want to reveal itself; it wanted to insinuate itself into my narrative, to rewrite a page that already had its own ink."
12"I reminded myself, this is not a story you tell aloud; this is a place where stories sink into the soil and grow into fear."
13"The Hel portal—if there was one here in the grove, hidden and waiting—would not reveal itself to the curious or the frightened."
14"A sound rose from the earth—a soft chuff, almost like a dog that knows it has done something wrong but cannot admit it."
15"The voice did not belong to one of the many things I suspected lived here; it belonged to something older, something that had learned to be quiet for a very long time and to move when it believed it was unseen."
16"It called me by something I recognised—by a version of myself that believed in a different future."
17"Behind the figure, the tree line seemed to bend once more, as if the grove itself was adjusting the geometry of space to accommodate an intruder—me, perhaps, or the figure, or some combination of both."
18"The voice—the presence—stretched into a long moment of silence that felt like a held breath."
19"A sound rose beneath that; not a noise but a sensation, a soft pressure pushing against the skin of my ears, as if you could hear the bones speak when the body could not."
20"A line of light—thin, pale, almost invisible—snaked along the base of the standing stones and pooled in a small circle at their core."
21"“Wait,” I said, though I was not sure who would hear the order—the grove, the seam, or the two versions of myself that lived within these boundaries."
22"The Hel gate did not force itself into this world with a loud crash; it slid in, slow and patient, a thread pulled at the very edge of reality until it became a seam through which a different night might slip in."
23"Its face remained hidden beneath the hood, but I felt eyes on me—curious, patient, calculating."
24"Then the voice—my own memory’s echo or its other half’s—gave a quiet, level chuckle, hollow and knowing."
25"The possibility tugged at me with a cold, careful touch, and I resisted with everything I had—by standing still, by not moving toward the seam, by keeping my eyes trained on the figure and my breath even."
26"The figure shifted again, not stepping closer but presenting a new figure—one that had not appeared before, a secondary silhouette behind the first, melding with it in a way that suggested there was more than one presence occupying this same space and time, all of them waiting for something to tip the balance."
27"The edge of the world—the seam—gave just enough for me to glimpse a memory: a corridor of stone and light, a cold corridor that led somewhere I could not safely recall."
28"The glow of the Heartstone intensified in direct proportion to the narrowing seam, and the two shapes—their outlines coalescing into something more definite—shifted their stance, as if listening to something beyond the circle."
29"The memory of a door opened, flashed in the spaces between the leaves; the door did not stand in front of me, but behind the world’s skin, a thin line of light that promised a way out of the fear that pressed against my lungs."
30"The Hel portal—if the seam was the gate’s first breath—was not a thing to be faced with bravado or cunning."
31"The softer presence—perhaps more cunning and older—spoke again in that odd, delicate cadence."
32"A figure stepped forward—a taller form, hooded but not entirely hidden, whose presence carried the scent of rain and old, damp earth."
33"The seam’s light flared, becoming a corridor of pale, shifting colour—like moonlight poured through a broken glass bottle."
34"It did not cast simple illumination; it altered perception, tinting shapes and distances, bending the sense of gravity so that objects seemed to slide rather than stand still."
35"The two silhouettes stepped closer; the older one reached out with a gloved hand, a glove that did not conceal a living stigma but made the living thing behind it seem more real, more dangerous."
36"The first touch came then—not a grip, not a grab, but a press of air against my cheek, as if a hand had been laid on me and then slid away."
37"The Heartstone’s warmth gathered at the place where the seam and the memory met, and I felt a quiet certainty that I would know the next moment when it came—whether I would step through or be forced to stay on this side, watching the others pass into a future that I could not predict."
38"The figure behind the two silhouettes stepped into the light, so close that I could catch a scent of rain and something darker, something not quite elemental and not quite animal—a presence that felt like a page torn from an older book and still smelling of ink and damp stone."
39"It required a single, quiet act—lifting my chin, letting the seam glow with its own stubborn light, and stepping forward, a fraction, a breath at a time, toward the gate that promised something more than safety."
40"The seam flared into a corridor of light, and I saw a thin thread of something—call it memory, call it power—pull away from the circle toward a destination I could not name."
41"Then the horror—still restrained, still patient—snarled at the edge of comprehension: a sound behind the gate that did not belong to the night, which did not belong to fear or courage."
42"I reached out with my free hand—the one not clutching the pendant—and touched the light, feeling it respond as if to a second heartbeat, a second breath."
43"And then, just as I thought I would be swallowed by brightness and the door behind me would close forever, a cry—soft, human, not entirely human—broke through the tunnel."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount3540
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount109
adverbRatio0.030790960451977403
lyAdverbCount24
lyAdverbRatio0.006779661016949152
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences293
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences293
mean25.26
std11.4
cv0.451
sampleLengths
029
120
226
325
414
516
614
76
824
938
1022
1124
1223
1327
1425
1526
1613
1735
1817
1921
2041
2137
2216
2325
2438
2520
2623
2744
2815
2924
3021
315
3240
3318
3433
3536
3630
3725
3821
3923
404
4127
4231
434
4424
4540
4614
4726
4819
4929
25.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats75
diversityRatio0.11604095563139932
totalSentences293
uniqueOpeners34
69.69% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences287
matches
0"Then the whisper came."
1"Then, suddenly, the grove seemed"
2"Then the ground sighed, a"
3"Then the voice—my own memory’s"
4"Then, exactly at the edge"
5"Then the horror—still restrained, still"
ratio0.021
82.02% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount99
totalSentences287
matches
0"I kept the thought at"
1"It warmed there, a small"
2"It belonged to whatever benefactor"
3"My heartbeat answered in quick,"
4"I whispered to myself, as"
5"I kept moving, half my"
6"They hummed faintly, like a"
7"It was no different from"
8"My fingers brushed the pendant’s"
9"I had come here for"
10"It lay on the back"
11"I paused, listening, and the"
12"My breath slowed, easing into"
13"I said aloud, though I"
14"It did not so much"
15"I told the pendant, borrowing"
16"I was not here to"
17"I flinched, instinctively pulling away,"
18"It wasn’t a voice that"
19"I found myself thinking about"
ratio0.345
12.26% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount257
totalSentences287
matches
0"The Heartstone Pendant throbbed against"
1"Gravel scuttled away, and the"
2"The ring of oak standing"
3"The grove swallowed sound the"
4"Time behaved here as if"
5"An hour inside could mean"
6"I kept the thought at"
7"The Heartstone pendant wasn’t merely"
8"It warmed there, a small"
9"It belonged to whatever benefactor"
10"Wildflowers bloomed year-round, yes, and"
11"The grove held the kind"
12"The ancient oak at the"
13"Time moved differently within the"
14"A branch shifted somewhere to"
15"The noise existed for a"
16"My heartbeat answered in quick,"
17"The pendant’s warmth deepened, settling"
18"I whispered to myself, as"
19"The Grove had a reputation"
ratio0.895
52.26% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences287
matches
0"If I were lucky, the"
1"If I were unlucky, the"
2"If I turned toward the"
ratio0.01
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences245
technicalSentenceCount75
matches
0"The grove swallowed sound the moment I stepped inside, but not the sound of my own breath, which rattled in my chest like dry leaves."
1"The pendant’s warmth deepened, settling into a slow, even warmth that told me I was near something old and patient, something that did not want to be disturbed …"
2"I kept moving, half my mind on the task, half on the way the air felt heavier with every step, as if the grove itself were drawing in a breath and holding it un…"
3"The boundary between Earth and the Fae realm lay at the far side of the clearing, where the wildflowers pressed against a ring of stones that looked ordinary en…"
4"It lay on the back of my tongue before I recognised it as something else—an unfamiliar copper tang that clung like a second skin."
5"Not a chorus, not a chorus of crickets or frogs, but nuisances that did not belong to night: a soft ticking, a careful skitter of claws in leaves, a sigh that d…"
6"The Heartstone Pendant warmed more insistently, and a tremor ran along the chain as if a dragonfly were trapped within the metal, beating its wings in a despera…"
7"The grove’s time signatures pricked at the back of my skull, a chorus of memories that did not belong to me."
8"A soft breath of a voice that might have belonged to a child, or to a tired grandmother who had learned to swallow fear and keep walking."
9"The words did not carry themselves in any language I could recognise with certainty, but the cadence was there, a lilting rhythm that made sense in long-buried …"
10"The voice did not belong to any single person I had known, yet it sounded as if it wore the voice of someone I should recognise—if recognition were possible her…"
11"The Heartstone gasped against my chest, the warmth pooling in a neat circle there as if it could protect me from the soft violence of the place."
12"The plausible danger became actual when the ring of stones around me did not merely hold the boundary but bent inward, as if the grove itself had chosen to lean…"
13"The air thickened with the scent of damp earth and metal, the kind of scent you inhale when you stand too near an open grave that has not yet been filled."
14"The answer came not in words but in cold sensation—an icy finger tracing the nape of my neck, a whisper that crawled into my ear and seemed to hold the breath t…"
15"The grass around me twitched as if the ground itself breathed, listening to something just beyond the edge of sound."
16"The grove’s memory pressed in, a slow, heavy weight that pressed into my eyes and made my vision narrow to the smallest possible field of perception."
17"The wildflowers around me did not shudder, exactly, but their stems trembled in a tiny, almost imperceptible rhythm, as if they were doing the waltz with unseen…"
18"In the silence that followed, something crossed the boundary of the grove’s edge with a careful, almost deliberate tread."
19"The distance between us thinned, and I could sense the shape of a figure there, a silhouette with a malevolent normalcy about it, like a receptionist who knew a…"
20"A sound rose from the earth—a soft chuff, almost like a dog that knows it has done something wrong but cannot admit it."
21"The sound persisted until I thought I might go mad listening to it, and then, as if a switch had been flipped, it stopped as suddenly as it began."
22"I stepped forward, careful, measured, and the ground replied with a soft, almost unnoticeable give, like a mattress that has outlived its usefulness but refuses…"
23"A minor tremor ran through the turf, and the wildflowers bowed toward the ground as though someone were pressing down on the sky from above."
24"The voice did not belong to one of the many things I suspected lived here; it belonged to something older, something that had learned to be quiet for a very lon…"
25"I widened my stance, glancing toward the stand of trees that marked the grove’s boundary, and I saw something else: a glimmer, a faint string of light that did …"
26"It lay along the edge of the standing stones, an almost imperceptible thread, and it tugged at something inside me, as if the pendant’s warmth had followed it t…"
27"A figure stepped into the circle of light thrown by the Heartstone’s pale glow, not a man or a woman as I knew them, but something that wore a silhouette like a…"
28"Its features were indistinct, the kind of face that becomes clear only when you stare at it long enough and forget what you were looking for in the first place."
29"The voice did not know my name as a person does, but as a function within a system that had learned to recognise me by the pattern of my footsteps, by the time …"
30"It called me by something I recognised—by a version of myself that believed in a different future."
31"Behind the figure, the tree line seemed to bend once more, as if the grove itself was adjusting the geometry of space to accommodate an intruder—me, perhaps, or…"
32"The pendant’s warmth intensified, a pulse that sank into my shoulder and spread down my arm to the fingertips."
33"A sound rose beneath that; not a noise but a sensation, a soft pressure pushing against the skin of my ears, as if you could hear the bones speak when the body …"
34"The glow of the pendant intensified to a soft, dangerous red, and I could feel a pull that wasn’t mine, a gravity that pressed my bones toward the seam as if th…"
35"It stepped closer and then paused, hovering, as if the floor had suddenly become a mirror and the figure stood behind me, looking at its own reflection in the g…"
36"I was standing at the threshold of someone else’s memory, someone who had walked through this very place with a different motive and a different fear, someone w…"
37"The grove’s breathing grew heavier, the leaves clutched at the air as if trying to hold on to a promise that was slipping away."
38"Then the ground sighed, a low sound that travelled from roots to canopy, and the seam opened a fraction more, revealing a pale, misty light that did not belong …"
39"And in that memory, I glimpsed a figure I knew, one of those nearly-forgotten faces that drifted at the corners of a life you meant to leave behind, wearing an …"
40"I did not know what that memory was trying to tell me, but I knew enough to understand that I stood not simply at the edge of a boundary but within a negotiatio…"
41"The first sensation of danger came as a whisper of air along the nape of my neck, followed by a cool kiss of air across my wrists that told me I had once more f…"
42"Something broad and dark pressed at the far edge of the circle, gathering in the periphery, a presence that did not want to be seen but wanted to remind me that…"
43"The silhouette wore a cloak that did not rustle so much as sigh around it, the fabric dark and velvet-like, swallowing light rather than reflecting it."
44"The figure stopped its advance, and for a moment the space between us stretched into a long, thin line of tension that felt as fragile as a thread of glass."
45"The heart of the grove seemed to glow with a deeper light, pale and otherworldly, and the edge of the standing stones exhaled a sigh that smelled of rain and ol…"
46"The old oak’s trunk pressed against my shoulder as if it understood my need to hide there for a breath, to disappear behind the rough bark and wait for the righ…"
47"The edge of the world—the seam—gave just enough for me to glimpse a memory: a corridor of stone and light, a cold corridor that led somewhere I could not safely…"
48"The glimpsed memory was not mine but it belonged to the grove, to the memory of the old gatekeepers who had learned to live between things, to survive by offeri…"
49"I spoke then, not to the two silhouettes or to the memory behind them, but to the pendant itself, as if it were a living thing with its own conscience and its o…"
50"The glow of the Heartstone intensified in direct proportion to the narrowing seam, and the two shapes—their outlines coalescing into something more definite—shi…"
51"The grove itself answered in a low, soft rang, like distant bells struck by wind, a sound that did not resolve into any known note or key."
52"The memory of a door opened, flashed in the spaces between the leaves; the door did not stand in front of me, but behind the world’s skin, a thin line of light …"
53"It demanded a patient respect for its power and a willingness to pass if the world allowed it, and only if I bore the mark in me that could carry the gate’s mem…"
54"The decision was not a guarantee of safety, nor a promise of reunion with a future that felt unearned."
55"The silhouettes grew brighter, their edges sharpening as if a painter had finally decided to finish the portrait they began many summers ago."
56"The two silhouettes stepped closer; the older one reached out with a gloved hand, a glove that did not conceal a living stigma but made the living thing behind …"
57"The pendant flared again, stronger than before, and the two silhouettes paused, their forms solidifying into something that might have made sense in a dream."
58"I stood steady, eyes fixed on the seam and the figures that hovered on its edge, listening to the grove’s ancient breath as if it might whisper a name, a word t…"
59"The gate, which had waited so long to be unbound, pressed closer, and the room between here and there became a thin, humming corridor of possibility."
60"The figure behind the two silhouettes stepped into the light, so close that I could catch a scent of rain and something darker, something not quite elemental an…"
61"The moment stretched into something heavier, more final, and I realised I was no longer merely observing a boundary but standing on the brink of a choice that w…"
62"My breath came in shallow, careful gasps, and the pendant’s warmth spread beyond my chest, down my arm, reaching my fingers as if the stone had learned to cradl…"
63"It required a single, quiet act—lifting my chin, letting the seam glow with its own stubborn light, and stepping forward, a fraction, a breath at a time, toward…"
64"And then, in a heartbeat that seemed to stretch into an eternity, the ground gave a soft, decisive sigh and opened beneath me, not violently, but as if the eart…"
65"The Heartstone thrummed, fierce and bright, as I stepped fully forward into the light that wrapped around me like a foreign, warm rain."
66"The world became a tunnel of silvery-milk, the noises behind me fading into a soft, far-off tremor, the edges of the grove receding into mere memory as if I wer…"
67"Then the horror—still restrained, still patient—snarled at the edge of comprehension: a sound behind the gate that did not belong to the night, which did not be…"
68"I reached out with my free hand—the one not clutching the pendant—and touched the light, feeling it respond as if to a second heartbeat, a second breath."
69"The corridor stretched, extended, and then there was the sensation of falling, not downward but inward, as if I had stepped through to a hidden basement of a ho…"
70"The light steadied, and the cold dropped away, replaced by a warmth that was both unfamiliar and intimate."
71"The pendant lay against my chest, almost politely now, as if it understood that I was not yet ready to call this a victory."
72"The memory behind me pressed against my thoughts with the force of a whisper, begging me to recognise the debt I owed to those who came before me, to the earth …"
73"The Heartstone’s warmth steadied at my chest, a quiet, constant flame that claimed no glory and asked for nothing beyond a quiet commitment to stay true to what…"
74"The last thing I felt before the tunnel closed behind me was the soft brush of air on my cheek and the memory of the grove’s patient breath, as if it had exhale…"
59.78% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags23
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"I whispered, as if the wind might be listening and take the hint"
1"me whispered, as if someone else stood with me, a partner who could see through the heavy fog of terror"
2"I whispered, a vow rather than a plan"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags19
fancyCount8
fancyTags
0"I whispered (whisper)"
1"the voice murmured again (murmur)"
2"I repeated (repeat)"
3"it whispered (whisper)"
4"me whispered (whisper)"
5"I whispered (whisper)"
6"I murmured (murmur)"
7"I breathed again (breathe)"
dialogueSentences26
tagDensity0.731
leniency1
rawRatio0.421
effectiveRatio0.421
64.9452%