Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTYQ9B2MA7J4JYV9H3DBKTE

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The knock echoed through the flat, sharp and deliberate. Three raps, spaced with unnerving precision. Not the hurried patter of the delivery girl from the Golden Empress, nor the familiar, slightly frantic rhythm of Eva forgetting her keys for the tenth time. This was a knock that demanded an answer. I stared at the three deadbolts on the front door, a security measure that now felt flimsy, like paper against a stone. No one should know I was here. Eva knew better than to give out this address, not after everything. I pulled the chain free and turned the heavy brass locks, one by one. The door swung open with a low groan, revealing a figure that seemed carved from the shadows of the cramped Brick Lane staircase. Lucien Moreau. He stood in the dingy hallway, a stark portrait in charcoal and platinum. His suit was immaculate, the fabric a dark slate that drank the weak light from the single bare bulb overhead. Slicked-back blond hair caught the light, and his eyes—one a warm, predatory amber, the other a void of absolute black—fixed on me. "Aurora." My name was a soft, dangerous caress on his tongue. He didn't smile. He never smiled. "What are you doing here, Lucien?" I kept my voice level, my body blocking the entrance to the flat. The cluttered sanctuary of books and scrolls behind me felt like a fragile shield. "A door with three locks merely invites curiosity." He gestured with the ivory handle of his cane, a motion as fluid and graceful as a predator's stretch. "You left without saying goodbye. That's rather rude." "I didn't think you cared for pleasantries." I didn't move. "How did you find me?" He tilted his head, a flicker of amusement in his mismatched eyes. "You deliver food for a living, Aurora. You leave a trail of grease-stained paper and grateful customers across half of London. You are not a ghost. You are simply... hiding in plain sight." Before I could reply, he moved, stepping past me into the flat. The scent of his cologne, something like old leather and cold rain, invaded the space, clashing with the smell of old paper and the faint, spicy aroma of the curry house below. Ptolemy, Eva's fat tabby cat, who had been dozing on a stack of ancient-looking maps, arched his back, his fur bristling into a ridge. A low hiss vibrated from his chest, a sound of pure instinct. Lucien ignored the cat. His gaze swept over the room, taking in the towering stacks of books, the scrolls unfurled across every available surface, the mugs of cold tea left to grow their own ecosystems. He ran a gloved finger along the spine of a leather-bound tome, leaving a clean streak in the dust. "Cozy," he said, the word dripping with a sarcasm so refined it was almost elegant. "Still playing the academic?" "What do you want?" I crossed my arms, a flimsy barrier. My heart hammered against my ribs, a frantic drumbeat I hoped he couldn't hear. "I don't have any information for you. I don't need a fixer. I don't need you." He turned from the bookshelf, his attention fully on me once more. The sheer force of it was a physical pressure. "Your past has a habit of resurfacing, Aurora. It leaves a stain. And some things are drawn to stains." I felt a cold dread creep up my spine. "I don't know what you're talking about." "Don't you?" He took a step closer, the tip of his cane tapping softly on the worn floorboards. "Evan." The name was a slap. The air left my lungs in a sharp, silent rush. Evan. My abusive ex, the reason I had fled Cardiff, the reason I was hiding in this cramped, borrowed life. I had not heard that name spoken aloud in months. It had become a ghost, a whisper in my nightmares. "He's looking for you," Lucien continued, his voice dropping to a low, confidential tone. "But it's not just him anymore. He's been busy. Desperate men do foolish things. They make promises they can't keep to things they don't understand." My mind raced, piecing together the implications. Evan had always been drawn to the fringe, to cheap esoteric shops and online forums about power and influence. I'd dismissed it as pathetic posturing. "What has he done?" "He made a deal." Lucien's amber eye seemed to glow in the dim light. "For power. For influence. For the means to find you and make you regret leaving. A classic, pathetic tale. He offered something he didn't own as collateral." A knot of ice formed in my stomach. "Me." "A crude bargain, but a binding one in certain circles." Lucien's gaze dropped to my left wrist, to the small, crescent-shaped scar I'd carried since childhood. "He offered a piece of your life. Your happiness. Your future. The creature that accepted the deal doesn't care about the specifics. It only cares about the debt. And the debt is due." "That's insane," I whispered, the words tasting like ash. "It's not real." "Isn't it?" He stepped closer still, close enough that I could feel the cool, unnatural air that seemed to surround him. "The signs are already there. Whispers on the wind, shadows that move without a source. The cat can feel it. Can't you, Ptolemy?" The cat yowled, a sound of pure distress, and bolted from the room, disappearing into Eva's bedroom. "I don't need your help," I said, my voice shaking with a defiance I no longer felt. "I can handle him." "You 'handled' him so well the first time," Lucien countered, his tone soft but the barb sharp as glass. "This is not Evan, Aurora. This is the collector. And it does not negotiate. It simply takes." The room felt suddenly smaller, the walls pressing in. The scent of rain and leather was stronger now, tinged with something else, something metallic and ancient, like ozone after a lightning strike. A low scratching sound came from the window, the one overlooking the grimy Brick Lane street below. It was a dry, scraping noise, like claws on glass. Lucien didn't flinch. His black eye, the void, seemed to widen. He knew. I turned slowly, my gaze locked on the windowpane. The scratching grew louder, more frantic. A long, thin crack appeared in the glass, spiderwebbing outwards from a central point. "It found you," Lucien said, his voice utterly calm. "They always do." The crack splintered with a deafening report. The window exploded inwards, showering the floor in a glittering rain of shattered glass as something dark and impossibly fast lunged into the room.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences33
tagDensity0.424
leniency0.848
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
77.66% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1119
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
4
adverb"utterly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"softly"
2"suddenly"
3"slowly"
4"utterly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
41.91% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1119
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"echoed"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count1
2
word"stark"
count1
3
word"sanctuary"
count1
4
word"predator"
count1
5
word"flicker"
count1
6
word"vibrated"
count1
7
word"whisper"
count1
8
word"raced"
count1
9
word"stomach"
count1
10
word"could feel"
count1
11
word"tinged"
count1
12
word"shattered"
count1
highlights
0"echoed"
1"familiar"
2"stark"
3"sanctuary"
4"predator"
5"flicker"
6"vibrated"
7"whisper"
8"raced"
9"stomach"
10"could feel"
11"tinged"
12"shattered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"flicker of emotion"
count1
highlights
0"a flicker of amusement"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences66
matches(empty)
77.92% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences66
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences84
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1112
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions20
wordCount812
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.99
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Golden1
Empress1
Eva4
Brick2
Lane2
Moreau1
Cardiff1
Lucien8
persons
0"Eva"
1"Moreau"
2"Lucien"
places
0"Golden"
1"Brick"
2"Lane"
3"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences57
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"seemed carved from the shadows of the cramped Brick Lane staircase"
1"felt like a fragile shield"
2"something like old leather and cold rain, in"
3"air that seemed to surround him"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1112
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences84
matches
0"heard that name"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs30
mean37.07
std22.45
cv0.606
sampleLengths
091
194
217
333
435
515
645
780
854
919
1041
1140
1216
1319
1455
1539
1636
1741
189
1959
2012
2144
2217
2321
2436
2559
2613
2729
2812
2931
99.95% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences66
matches
0"been drawn"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs122
matches
0"was hiding"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences84
ratio0.012
matches
0"Slicked-back blond hair caught the light, and his eyes—one a warm, predatory amber, the other a void of absolute black—fixed on me."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount818
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.029339853300733496
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.009779951100244499
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences84
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences84
mean13.24
std8.24
cv0.623
sampleLengths
09
16
227
38
422
57
612
714
823
92
1013
1120
1222
1311
143
153
1619
1714
1827
198
2010
215
2212
2333
2412
2532
2624
2712
284
2931
3019
3115
324
3311
3414
3516
3612
379
3819
399
407
4118
421
435
4410
451
4619
4710
4810
4914
53.17% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.36904761904761907
totalSentences84
uniqueOpeners31
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences63
matches(empty)
ratio0
29.52% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences63
matches
0"I stared at the three"
1"I pulled the chain free"
2"He stood in the dingy"
3"His suit was immaculate, the"
4"My name was a soft,"
5"He didn't smile."
6"He never smiled."
7"I kept my voice level,"
8"He gestured with the ivory"
9"I didn't move"
10"He tilted his head, a"
11"His gaze swept over the"
12"He ran a gloved finger"
13"he said, the word dripping"
14"I crossed my arms, a"
15"My heart hammered against my"
16"He turned from the bookshelf,"
17"I felt a cold dread"
18"He took a step closer,"
19"My abusive ex, the reason"
ratio0.476
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount58
totalSentences63
matches
0"The knock echoed through the"
1"This was a knock that"
2"I stared at the three"
3"Eva knew better than to"
4"I pulled the chain free"
5"The door swung open with"
6"He stood in the dingy"
7"His suit was immaculate, the"
8"My name was a soft,"
9"He didn't smile."
10"He never smiled."
11"I kept my voice level,"
12"The cluttered sanctuary of books"
13"He gestured with the ivory"
14"I didn't move"
15"He tilted his head, a"
16"The scent of his cologne,"
17"Ptolemy, Eva's fat tabby cat,"
18"A low hiss vibrated from"
19"Lucien ignored the cat."
ratio0.921
79.37% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences63
matches
0"Before I could reply, he"
ratio0.016
93.60% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences29
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The door swung open with a low groan, revealing a figure that seemed carved from the shadows of the cramped Brick Lane staircase."
1"Ptolemy, Eva's fat tabby cat, who had been dozing on a stack of ancient-looking maps, arched his back, his fur bristling into a ridge."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"I kept, my body blocking the entrance to the flat"
1"Lucien continued, his voice dropping to a low, confidential tone"
2"I said, my voice shaking with a defiance I no longer felt"
3"Lucien countered, his tone soft but the barb sharp as glass"
4"Lucien said, his voice utterly calm"
89.39% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Lucien continued (continue)"
1"I whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences33
tagDensity0.152
leniency0.303
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.121
78.0831%