Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTYRHAZD27J0J6YHKDNPRC8

Run Details

Model:
GPT-5.1
Duration:
1m 32s
Cost:
$0.045672
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The abandoned platform breathed damp. Water dripped from the curved brick ceiling, each drop a hollow tap in the empty Underground station. Old posters peeled in ragged curls from the walls. A rusted sign still clung to a beam, letters half eaten by mould: HOL…BOR…N. Rory shifted the strap of her messenger bag higher on her shoulder. “The Wardens ever come down here?” Her whisper bounced off the tiles and crept back at her. A strand of Nyx’s shadow peeled from the gloom and stretched, thickening into their familiar shape beside the dead tracks. The violet glow of their eyes washed faint over the grime. “If they did, we would not be here.” “That’s a yes, then.” “Once.” Nyx glanced toward the far end of the platform. “They sealed three rifts in this line. Left that one.” Rory followed their gaze. At the far wall, behind a forest of sprayed tags and faded murals, something thinned the air. The brick wavered. Not a trick of light. A patch the size of a door shimmered, as if heat rose off invisible tarmac. The Heartstone against her chest grew warm. It beat once, a slow ember-pulse through her shirt. “Feels like standing next to an oven.” Her fingers closed around the pendant. The tiny crimson gem gave off a steady heat, not painful, just insistent. Nyx drifted closer to the wall. Their form stretched upward, taller, shoulders tapering to smoke near the ceiling. The graffiti’s colours bled in the ripple of the Veil, lines of fluorescent pink and black sliding through them. “Dymas lies behind this one.” Rory stepped up beside them, boots crunching old glass. “The gluttony place.” “Prince Belphegor’s demesne.” “So a demon prince runs a massive restaurant. Figures.” She flicked her gaze over the empty platform. “You sure your friend’s in there?” Nyx’s eyes dimmed for a heartbeat. “‘Friend’ is generous. He owes me. He works Belphegor’s kitchens. He will know who sent the pendant.” Rory tugged the Heartstone free of her shirt and held it up. The gem’s inner glow matched the shimmer in the wall. Heat rolled off it in slow waves. “How do we… open it?” “You already are.” The shimmer thickened around the pendant. The wall’s bricks bent away from the centre, not moving yet not fixed, as if something inside pushed to escape. Mortar lines swam. Rory drew the Fae-forged blade from the sheath at the small of her back. Moonlight clung to the slender leaf-shaped dagger even in the stale gloom. Cold soaked into her palm from the hilt, a fierce, clean bite that fought the Heartstone’s heat. “You sure a Hel prince won’t mind visitors with anti-demon cutlery?” Nyx watched the knife’s glow reflect in the worst of the graffiti. “Everything in Dymas cuts. Some things only cut your tongue. Some cut your name. That blade will not stand out.” “Comforting.” She lifted the dagger and touched its tip to the shimmer. The Veil gave with the soft resistance of thick skin. A pale ripple ran outward from the point of contact. The entire patch of air shuddered, then split. Sound crashed through first. Not a roar. A swell. Clatter of plates and iron on stone. A low, constant murmur of hundreds of voices overlapping, thick as surf. Above it, the sharp crackle of something frying and the wet tear of meat pulled from bone. Scent followed, thick enough to taste. Fat and sugar and wine and fruit. Smoke that held cinnamon and char. Underneath, buried like mould under icing, the sour tang of overripe grapes and old blood. The split in the air widened into an arch of hazy amber light. Beyond it, no bricks. No tunnel. Rory swallowed against the flood of scent. “Right. Well.” She slid the Fae blade back into its sheath but left her hand near. “After you.” Nyx didn’t walk. They leaned into the tear and flowed through, their edges smearing into the amber haze, then snapped back into shape on the other side. The warmth from the arch hit Rory’s face. Damp chill from the Underground faded under a sunless heat that smelled of baking bread. She stepped. The world on the other side grabbed her by the lungs. The sky hung low and wide, a constant warm amber like late afternoon trapped forever. No sun, only a diffuse glow that seeped from the air. The light gilded everything in soft gold, yet shadows clung dense and violet at the roots of things. They stood on a ridge. Below them, a valley unfurled in terraced steps. Vineyards in long tangled rows stretched out, leaves a glossy green shot through with streaks of red. Grapes swelled heavy from the vines, each one the size of her fist, skins so thin she saw seeds pulse faintly inside. Some bunches dripped juice before anyone touched them, clear streams that stained the soil rust. Rory’s boots sank into ground that felt less like dirt and more like packed sponge cake. Each step left a perfect footprint that drew in dark moisture before puffing back up. “Hel of harvest festival.” Her voice came out rough. “Dymas feeds Belphegor’s legions.” Nyx turned their face to the wind that rolled up from the valley. “And every hunger that crawled in with a human soul.” Closer now, she heard it. Not just voices. Chewing. Slurping. The quiet grind of teeth on bone. Laughter streaked through it, bright and raw. A flock of something like birds drifted above the vineyards. Not birds. Pies. Dozens of crusted circles, steam leaking from torn vents in their tops, floated on unseen currents. They trailed strips of torn parchment that fluttered behind them like tails. One pie dipped close to the ridge, its crust sagging as if it looked at them. Sugared fruit glistened in the gap. Nyx lifted a hand, fingers ghosting near it. “Do not touch the food,” Rory muttered. The pie bobbed once, disappointed, and drifted away. They started down the path carved into the ridge, a narrow track of hard white stone that gleamed as if glazed. Her toe kicked the edge. Not stone. Sugar. A shard chipped off and spun away, catching the light with a clear crystal shine before it tumbled into the vines. A hand in the vines reached for it. The hand grew from no arm. Fingers sprouted straight from a thick knot of roots, skin bark-brown and sticky with sap. It plucked up the sugar shard and shoved it into a mouth that split the vine’s bark where a trunk twisted. Teeth pushed out between leaves and chewed. Rory halted mid-step. Nyx didn’t. “The plants eat the path?” “The path eats the plants, when Belphegor walks.” Nyx’s shadow slipped longer across the sugar, licking at the edges. “Then it grows back.” “Recycling. Green credentials. Nice.” They moved on. The heat rose off the vineyards in waves that carried scent with them. Roast lamb. Poached pears in wine. Something fried in batter that crunched in her teeth without touching her tongue. Her stomach clenched. She had eaten half a cold takeaway bao in Silas’s stairwell hours ago, but this place pressed greed straight into blood. Her pendant burned against her skin. The Heartstone’s beat matched something under their feet, a deep slow thud like a distant drum. “Feel that?” Nyx tilted their head. “Dymas’s heart. Pipes. Ovens. Something always cooks.” She glanced sideways at them. “You ever… eat here?” “I do not own a mouth.” “Minor detail.” They walked along a terrace that hugged the slope. Vines lined one side, heavy and dripping. On the other, a drop of twenty feet fell to another level carpeted not with plants but with tables. Hundreds of tables stretched in ranks across the lower terrace, each set with heaped plates and bowls. Flesh in every shade from pink to indigo. Fruits with glistening skins, some furred like peaches, others slick like tongues. Breads scored with symbols that shifted if she looked too long, crusts cracking to reveal steaming insides that smiled. Most tables held diners. Some looked human. Their clothes spanned centuries. A man in a Victorian frock coat tore into a spiced haunch with perfect etiquette, knife and fork never clinking. A woman in a sequined dress from the seventies leaned over a bowl of something purple and soupy, hair stuck to her cheeks with sweat. A teenager in a hoodie sucked marrow from a twisted bone, eyes hollow and fixed on nothing. Between them slithered and trotted creatures that were not human. A cook with four arms and a pig’s bristled head refilled goblets from a cask that sweated golden drops. A tall creature with the long neck of a heron and a torso like a kitchen range slid plates onto the tables from the open ovens in its chest. No one looked up at Rory and Nyx. “They never stop?” Her voice tasted of smoke and sugar. “They asked for more.” Nyx stepped over a stray grape that crawled toward their foot like a beetle. “They received it.” Her fingers brushed the hilt at her back. Across the terrace, beyond the ocean of tables, a building rose from the vineyard floor. It didn’t climb. It oozed upward, a low sprawl of fused stone and bone that had grown into towers of stacked platters and fallen soufflés petrified mid-collapse. Windows gaped like carved bread holes. Steam poured from vents shaped like yawning mouths. “The kitchens.” Nyx’s gaze fixed on the largest vent, where a plume of scented steam climbed in a twisting pillar. “He will be there.” Rory watched a demon the size of a mastiff drag a wheeled trolley from a side door of the building, loaded with hanging carcasses. The carcasses whispered to one another as they swung, voices dry as paper. Her shoulders tightened. “How do we get down without becoming snack of the day?” Nyx’s shadow lengthened over the edge of the terrace and pooled down the wall, a dark tongue that lapped at the bottom floor. “We walk.” Rory stared. “That thirty-foot drop?” “My form links shadows. Step on mine.” “Next time, lead with that.” She moved closer to the ridge. Nyx’s shadow boiled richer, a sump of night on the sugar path. It spilled over like ink and painted a solid ramp down the wall. The already-thick light around them dimmed at the edges, as if the realm itself held its breath. Rory set her boot on the shadow. It held. Cold shot up into her calf, clean as winter on Penarth Pier. The sugar-rock beside her leg hissed, its edge frosting where the shadow brushed it. Nyx slipped down beside her, their shape stretching and compressing with the fall. Together, they descended to the lower terrace. Sound hit harder there. The wet noise of eating pressed at her ears. Cutlery. Burps. Little groans. Laughter that held no humour, only relief and panic and need. A man at the nearest table glanced up as she stepped off Nyx’s shadow and onto the spongy floor. Grease slicked his chin. His eyes darted to the Heartstone at her throat, then to Nyx, then past them as if someone called from behind. His fork kept moving. “See that?” Rory kept her voice low. “They are chained,” Nyx murmured. She looked for shackles. None. Only the chairs. Each chair’s back sprouted two small hooks that curved into the diner’s shoulders, just enough to pierce fabric and skin. Thin silver chains ran from the hooks down the legs of the chairs and vanished into the floor. Rory’s stomach lurched. “They could stand if they wanted.” “They wanted to sit. Once.” She swallowed and stepped around a discarded plate that crawled away from her boot on insect legs made of cutlery. A smear of sauce on its surface puffed like a lung. As they neared the kitchen building, smells crowded tighter. Hot sugar. Acidic wine. The sharp iron reek of blood. The stink of burned fat that clung to her nostrils. A small demon child, all eyes and teeth with a body like a satchel, lugged a sack near a side entrance. The sack whimpered as it bounced. The demon paused when Rory passed, nostrils flaring. “Fresh.” Its voice rasped, not quite words, more like the scrape of knives in a drawer. Rory kept walking. They reached the main entrance. No door, just a curtain of steam. Thick, white, and heavy as cloth, it poured from an archway carved in the shape of an open ribcage. Bones of some colossal beast framed the portal, polished to a pale gloss. Tongs, hooks, and ladles hung from the ribs like wind chimes that chimed not with sound, but with shivers that ran along her skin. Nyx paused before the arch. “The pendant will glow brighter inside.” Their eyes shone faint against the steam. “Stay near me. Do not taste anything offered unless we discuss the price first.” “You think I’ll grab the first demon canapé I see?” “In Dymas, hunger wears many mouths.” Her hand closed around the Fae blade’s hilt. Cold steadied her. The Heartstone pulsed hot under her collarbone, an eager beat that pressed toward the steam. Rory drew one breath of air that did not smell of meat. Then she stepped through the curtain.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Her fingers closed around [around]"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.314
leniency0.627
rawRatio0.063
effectiveRatio0.039
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2223
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
52.77% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2223
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"whisper"
count1
1
word"gloom"
count2
2
word"familiar"
count1
3
word"wavered"
count1
4
word"shimmered"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count2
6
word"flicked"
count1
7
word"comforting"
count1
8
word"warmth"
count1
9
word"chill"
count1
10
word"perfect"
count2
11
word"fluttered"
count1
12
word"crystal"
count1
13
word"stomach"
count2
14
word"glistening"
count1
15
word"lurched"
count1
16
word"pulsed"
count1
highlights
0"whisper"
1"gloom"
2"familiar"
3"wavered"
4"shimmered"
5"pulse"
6"flicked"
7"comforting"
8"warmth"
9"chill"
10"perfect"
11"fluttered"
12"crystal"
13"stomach"
14"glistening"
15"lurched"
16"pulsed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences194
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences194
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences229
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen29
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2214
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions62
wordCount1929
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.09
worstName"Nyx"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Nyx"
discoveredNames
Underground2
Nyx21
Rory19
Heartstone6
Veil2
Fae-forged1
Fae3
Closer1
Silas1
Victorian1
Penarth1
Pier1
Cold3
persons
0"Nyx"
1"Rory"
2"Heartstone"
3"Veil"
4"Silas"
5"Cold"
places
0"Closer"
1"Victorian"
globalScore0.956
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences137
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"something like birds drifted above the viney"
1"not quite words, more like the scrape of knives in a drawer"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.903
wordCount2214
matches
0"not with plants but with tables"
1"not with sound, but with shivers"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences229
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs115
mean19.25
std17.51
cv0.91
sampleLengths
05
140
212
317
431
58
64
720
84
940
1016
1126
1237
135
1412
153
1623
176
1817
1929
205
213
2229
2343
2411
2512
2620
271
2811
2928
304
3141
3234
3319
347
3518
3627
3723
382
3911
4044
4167
4231
439
4427
4524
4663
478
487
498
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences194
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs302
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences229
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1937
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"slender leaf-shaped dagger"
adverbCount43
adverbRatio0.02219927723283428
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.002065049044914817
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences229
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences229
mean9.67
std6.31
cv0.653
sampleLengths
05
117
29
314
412
517
620
711
88
94
1010
1110
124
1317
143
155
1615
177
189
1913
2013
216
2212
2319
245
259
263
273
2817
296
306
3117
3212
3310
347
355
363
376
3820
393
4014
4112
4217
4311
4412
4520
461
4711
4810
4910
68.12% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.44541484716157204
totalSentences229
uniqueOpeners102
38.54% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences173
matches
0"Only the chairs."
1"Then she stepped through the"
ratio0.012
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount36
totalSentences173
matches
0"Her whisper bounced off the"
1"It beat once, a slow"
2"Her fingers closed around the"
3"Their form stretched upward, taller,"
4"She flicked her gaze over"
5"She lifted the dagger and"
6"She slid the Fae blade"
7"They leaned into the tear"
8"They stood on a ridge."
9"Her voice came out rough"
10"They trailed strips of torn"
11"They started down the path"
12"Her toe kicked the edge."
13"It plucked up the sugar"
14"They moved on."
15"Her stomach clenched."
16"She had eaten half a"
17"Her pendant burned against her"
18"She glanced sideways at them."
19"They walked along a terrace"
ratio0.208
55.38% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount140
totalSentences173
matches
0"The abandoned platform breathed damp."
1"Water dripped from the curved"
2"A rusted sign still clung"
3"Rory shifted the strap of"
4"Her whisper bounced off the"
5"A strand of Nyx’s shadow"
6"The violet glow of their"
7"Nyx glanced toward the far"
8"Rory followed their gaze."
9"The brick wavered."
10"A patch the size of"
11"The Heartstone against her chest"
12"It beat once, a slow"
13"Her fingers closed around the"
14"The tiny crimson gem gave"
15"Nyx drifted closer to the"
16"Their form stretched upward, taller,"
17"The graffiti’s colours bled in"
18"Rory stepped up beside them,"
19"She flicked her gaze over"
ratio0.809
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences173
matches(empty)
ratio0
74.01% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences83
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"The wall’s bricks bent away from the centre, not moving yet not fixed, as if something inside pushed to escape."
1"Cold soaked into her palm from the hilt, a fierce, clean bite that fought the Heartstone’s heat."
2"Damp chill from the Underground faded under a sunless heat that smelled of baking bread."
3"Some bunches dripped juice before anyone touched them, clear streams that stained the soil rust."
4"Rory’s boots sank into ground that felt less like dirt and more like packed sponge cake."
5"Something fried in batter that crunched in her teeth without touching her tongue."
6"Nyx’s shadow lengthened over the edge of the terrace and pooled down the wall, a dark tongue that lapped at the bottom floor."
7"Rory drew one breath of air that did not smell of meat."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Rory muttered (mutter)"
1"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.039
leniency0.078
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.078
88.8715%