Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTYSSTVJ5F0D1X8JZ3Z8EZE

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Duration:
1m 12s
Cost:
$0.054081

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The bottle shattered against the brick wall behind the bar, amber whiskey streaming down mortar and stone like liquid amber tears. "Right, that's enough." Silas Blackwood's voice cut through the sudden silence. The silver signet ring on his right hand caught the dim light as he reached beneath the bar. "You lot can finish this discussion elsewhere." The two men who'd been trading increasingly creative insults about each other's mothers slouched toward the door, muttering apologies. Tuesday nights at The Raven's Nest usually meant quiet conversations and the soft clink of glasses, not flying bottles and threats of violence. The green neon sign outside flickered once, as if commenting on the evening's entertainment. Rory Carter looked up from her pint of bitter, watching Silas sweep glass fragments into a dustpan with practiced efficiency. The old maps and black-and-white photographs on the walls seemed to observe the cleanup with silent approval, veterans of a thousand similar scenes. "Occupational hazard?" "Something like that." Silas dropped the glass into a bin behind the bar. "Though usually they wait until closing time for the dramatics." The door chimed again. Rory glanced toward the entrance, expecting another regular looking for their usual corner and their usual drink. Instead, a figure in an expensive charcoal wool coat stepped into the amber light, shaking rain from dark hair. Time stuttered. Evan Caldwell scanned the room with the same methodical precision he'd once used to catalogue her faults, her failures, her insufficient devotion to his vision of their future. His gaze swept past the occupied tables, past the photographs of long-dead spies and politicians, past Silas polishing glasses with mechanical rhythm. Past her. Rory's fingers found the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, tracing the old mark through habit more than memory. Three years. Three years of London fog and Golden Empress deliveries and learning to sleep without checking the locks twice. Three years of building something that felt like peace. Evan's second sweep caught her blue eyes across the dim room. Recognition hit his face like a physical blow. "Christ." He moved toward her table with the same confident stride that had once made her stomach flutter with anticipation. Now it just made her stomach clench. "Rory? What are the bloody odds?" "Higher than you'd think, apparently." He slid into the chair across from her without invitation, the same presumption that had characterized their entire relationship now dressed up in better tailoring and cologne that probably cost more than her monthly rent. "You look..." He paused, studying her face with the intensity of someone trying to solve a particularly complex equation. "Different." "Three years will do that." "Good different. Healthier." His smile had new edges, sharper corners that hadn't been there when she'd known him. "London suits you." She took a sip of her bitter, letting the silence stretch between them like a taut wire. Behind the bar, Silas had stopped polishing glasses and started arranging bottles with the focused attention of someone definitely not eavesdropping. "Drink?" Evan gestured toward the bar. "My shout. We should catch up properly." "I'm fine with this." "Come on, Ror. When's the last time we had a proper conversation?" The nickname hit like a slap. She'd forgotten how he used to shorten her name, how he'd made even that small intimacy feel like ownership rather than affection. "I think our last proper conversation involved you explaining why I was emotionally unavailable and mentally unstable. Quite thoroughly, as I recall." His laugh sounded different too. More practiced, like he'd perfected it in boardrooms and client meetings. "We were kids. University students with no bloody idea what we were doing." He leaned back in his chair, spreading his hands in a gesture of magnanimous forgiveness. "I've done a lot of growing up since then." "Have you?" "Corporate law. Based in Edinburgh now, but I'm down here twice a month for meetings. Partnership track at Morrison Blackwell." Pride colored his voice, the same satisfaction he'd once taken in explaining why her career ambitions were unrealistic. "Finally found my calling, you could say." She nodded politely, the way she'd learned to nod when Golden Empress customers told her about their dietary restrictions or their theories about proper delivery etiquette. "What about you? Last I heard from your mother, you'd dropped out of law school. Caused quite a stir back home." "I imagine it did." "She mentioned you'd run off to London with some friend. Eva something?" His tone carried just enough disapproval to make it clear what he thought of that decision. "Bit dramatic, don't you think?" The familiar weight settled across her shoulders, the old sensation of being slowly compressed until she fit into whatever box he'd prepared for her. She'd forgotten how he did that, how he could make her life choices sound like character flaws simply by adjusting his inflection. "Worked out well enough." "What are you doing now? Career-wise, I mean." She considered several answers. The truth felt too vulnerable, too open to his particular brand of concerned condescension. Lies felt too much effort. "Delivery work. Part-time." His face cycled through expressions like slides in a presentation. Surprise, concern, barely concealed disappointment. The same look he'd given her when she'd mentioned wanting to travel before settling into legal practice. "Right. Well, that's... temporary, I'm sure. Gap year sort of thing?" "Something like that." Silas appeared at their table with the subtle timing of someone who'd spent decades reading social situations for professional survival. "Another round?" Evan looked up with the automatic charm he'd always deployed on service staff and potential romantic rivals. "Two whiskeys. Something decent. Your best single malt." "I'm fine with the bitter." "Don't be ridiculous. This is a celebration. Old friends reuniting." Evan's smile widened, showing teeth that looked whiter and straighter than she remembered. "Make it a double." Silas caught her eye for just a moment, the question clear in his hazel gaze. She gave an almost imperceptible shake of her head. "One whiskey. One bitter." When Silas returned to the bar, Evan leaned forward conspiratorially. "Interesting place. Very atmospheric. Though I would've expected you to frequent somewhere a bit more... I don't know. Lively?" "I like it here." "Of course you do. You always preferred quiet corners to proper socializing." His laugh suggested this was charming rather than antisocial. "Some things never change." She watched him fidget with his cufflinks, solid gold where they'd once been cheap silver. His hands looked softer, manicured. The kind of hands that signed contracts rather than carried boxes of takeaway containers through London rain. "You've done well for yourself." "Can't complain. The flat in Edinburgh's got a view of Arthur's Seat. Company car, expense account, all the bells and whistles." He glanced around The Raven's Nest with barely concealed disdain. "Different world from university bedsits and instant noodles." "Must be nice." "It is. Though I'll admit, success feels a bit hollow when you don't have someone special to share it with." His smile turned rueful, practiced. "Never did find anyone who understood me the way you did." The words landed between them like stones dropped into still water, sending ripples across the surface of their careful conversation. "Funny. I remember you explaining quite clearly that I didn't understand you at all." "We were fighting. People say things they don't mean when they're angry." "Do they?" Silas returned with their drinks, setting them down with the careful precision of someone avoiding accidental contact. The whiskey caught the amber light, golden and inviting. The bitter looked darker by comparison, earthier. Evan raised his glass. "To old friends. And second chances." She didn't lift her drink. "What do you want, Evan?" The question hung in the air like smoke from an extinguished candle. His smile faltered for just a moment, revealing something hungry underneath the polished surface. "Can't a man want to reconnect with someone who mattered to him?" "You could. But you never did before." "I told you, I've grown up. Learned from my mistakes." He leaned forward again, close enough that she could smell his expensive cologne mixing with the whiskey on his breath. "I know I hurt you. I was young and stupid and scared of how much I cared about you." The lie tasted bitter even secondhand. "You weren't scared. You were angry that I wouldn't be what you wanted me to be." "I wanted you to reach your potential. To be the brilliant woman I knew you could become." His voice carried the same tone he'd once used to explain why her dreams were impractical. "Maybe I went about it the wrong way, but the intention was good." She traced the rim of her glass with one finger, feeling the smooth edge against her skin. "You wanted me to disappear. To become some shadow version of myself that would never inconvenience you or challenge your plans or take up too much space in your perfectly ordered life." "That's not true." "Isn't it?" The silence stretched between them again, filled with the distant sound of traffic and rain against windows and the low murmur of other conversations. Silas moved behind the bar with careful efficiency, polishing the same glass for the third time while keeping one ear tuned to their table. Evan's expression shifted, hardening into something more familiar. "You always did have a flair for the dramatic. Making everything into some grand tragedy instead of just accepting that relationships require compromise." There it was. The edge beneath the charm, sharp and cutting as ever. "Compromise. Is that what you called it?" "What would you call it?" She looked at him across the table, this man who'd once convinced her that her instincts were unreliable, her emotions were excessive, her very existence was somehow too much for the world to bear. He looked successful now, polished and confident and utterly convinced of his own righteousness. He looked exactly the same. "I'd call it lucky. That I left when I did." His face flushed, the careful composure cracking just enough to reveal the familiar anger underneath. "Right. Lucky to be delivering Chinese food in a council flat above a dodgy pub." The insult landed with practiced precision, designed to find every weakness he'd once catalogued and exploited. Three years ago, it would have worked. Three years ago, she would have crumpled under the weight of his disappointment. Instead, she stood up. "Enjoy your whiskey, Evan." She was halfway to the door when his voice caught her. "This is what you want? This half-life? Hiding in London like some wounded animal?" She turned back to face him, this man who'd once made her doubt her own memory, her own worth, her own right to exist without his permission. "No. This is who I am when I'm not afraid of you anymore." The door chimed behind her as she stepped into the London rain, leaving him alone with his expensive whiskey and his unchanged soul. Behind the bar, Silas Blackwood watched the young man stare at the door for a long moment before downing his drink in one harsh swallow. Then he reached for his mobile phone, fingers moving with urgent precision. Some people, Silas reflected, never learned when to let sleeping dogs lie.
total_cost0.054081

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"He leaned back [back]"
1"His tone carried just [just]"
2"He glanced around [around]"
dialogueSentences71
tagDensity0.197
leniency0.394
rawRatio0.214
effectiveRatio0.085
86.70% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1880
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count2
2
adverb"perfectly"
count1
3
adverb"utterly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"very"
2"perfectly"
3"utterly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
30.85% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1880
totalAiIsms26
found
0
word"shattered"
count1
1
word"streaming"
count1
2
word"silence"
count3
3
word"flickered"
count1
4
word"scanned"
count1
5
word"methodical"
count1
6
word"mechanical"
count1
7
word"tracing"
count1
8
word"stomach"
count2
9
word"anticipation"
count1
10
word"intensity"
count1
11
word"complex"
count1
12
word"affection"
count1
13
word"familiar"
count3
14
word"weight"
count2
15
word"charm"
count2
16
word"potential"
count2
17
word"traced"
count1
highlights
0"shattered"
1"streaming"
2"silence"
3"flickered"
4"scanned"
5"methodical"
6"mechanical"
7"tracing"
8"stomach"
9"anticipation"
10"intensity"
11"complex"
12"affection"
13"familiar"
14"weight"
15"charm"
16"potential"
17"traced"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences89
matches
0"r with anticipation"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences89
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences145
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1873
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions44
wordCount1253
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity0.96
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Blackwood2
Raven2
Nest2
Carter1
Silas12
Caldwell1
London3
Golden2
Empress2
Pride1
Evan8
Rory3
Three5
persons
0"Blackwood"
1"Raven"
2"Nest"
3"Carter"
4"Silas"
5"Caldwell"
6"Pride"
7"Evan"
8"Rory"
places
0"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
81.51% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences73
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as if commenting on the evening's entertainment"
1"felt like peace"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1873
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences145
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs99
mean18.92
std14.73
cv0.779
sampleLengths
021
136
256
343
42
523
640
72
850
92
1049
1111
128
1333
145
1535
1620
175
1821
1938
2013
214
2212
2328
2422
2516
2637
272
2845
2926
3021
314
3233
3346
344
358
3623
373
3832
3911
403
4120
422
4317
448
455
4627
4724
484
4910
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences89
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs204
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences145
ratio0
matches(empty)
87.23% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1257
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount60
adverbRatio0.0477326968973747
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.011137629276054098
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences145
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences145
mean12.92
std8.57
cv0.664
sampleLengths
021
111
218
37
419
523
614
720
823
92
1013
1110
124
1317
1419
152
1628
1722
182
1920
202
2118
229
2311
248
2520
267
276
285
2935
3019
311
325
3318
343
3517
3621
376
387
394
4012
416
4222
4322
445
4511
4628
479
482
4938
70.57% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.4482758620689655
totalSentences145
uniqueOpeners65
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences86
matches
0"Instead, a figure in an"
1"More practiced, like he'd perfected"
2"Instead, she stood up."
3"Then he reached for his"
ratio0.047
75.81% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount31
totalSentences86
matches
0"His gaze swept past the"
1"He moved toward her table"
2"He slid into the chair"
3"He paused, studying her face"
4"His smile had new edges,"
5"She took a sip of"
6"She'd forgotten how he used"
7"His laugh sounded different too."
8"He leaned back in his"
9"She nodded politely, the way"
10"His tone carried just enough"
11"She'd forgotten how he did"
12"She considered several answers."
13"His face cycled through expressions"
14"She gave an almost imperceptible"
15"His laugh suggested this was"
16"She watched him fidget with"
17"His hands looked softer, manicured."
18"He glanced around The Raven's"
19"His smile turned rueful, practiced"
ratio0.36
47.21% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount71
totalSentences86
matches
0"The bottle shattered against the"
1"Silas Blackwood's voice cut through"
2"The silver signet ring on"
3"The two men who'd been"
4"Tuesday nights at The Raven's"
5"The green neon sign outside"
6"Rory Carter looked up from"
7"The old maps and black-and-white"
8"Silas dropped the glass into"
9"The door chimed again."
10"Rory glanced toward the entrance,"
11"Evan Caldwell scanned the room"
12"His gaze swept past the"
13"Rory's fingers found the small"
14"Evan's second sweep caught her"
15"Recognition hit his face like"
16"He moved toward her table"
17"He slid into the chair"
18"He paused, studying her face"
19"His smile had new edges,"
ratio0.826
58.14% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences86
matches
0"Now it just made her"
ratio0.012
28.57% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences50
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"The two men who'd been trading increasingly creative insults about each other's mothers slouched toward the door, muttering apologies."
1"The green neon sign outside flickered once, as if commenting on the evening's entertainment."
2"He slid into the chair across from her without invitation, the same presumption that had characterized their entire relationship now dressed up in better tailor…"
3"Silas appeared at their table with the subtle timing of someone who'd spent decades reading social situations for professional survival."
4"The kind of hands that signed contracts rather than carried boxes of takeaway containers through London rain."
5"Silas returned with their drinks, setting them down with the careful precision of someone avoiding accidental contact."
6"She looked at him across the table, this man who'd once convinced her that her instincts were unreliable, her emotions were excessive, her very existence was so…"
7"She turned back to face him, this man who'd once made her doubt her own memory, her own worth, her own right to exist without his permission."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"His laugh suggested (suggest)"
dialogueSentences71
tagDensity0.014
leniency0.028
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.028
88.8868%