Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTYV9NKWDQSXYYZCF053V29

Run Details

Duration:
1m 49s
Cost:
$0.005068
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door to the flat sighed open, and the hall’s evening heat slid into the room like a warm hand. Lucien Moreau paused in the doorway, the cane in his left hand tapping a steady rhythm on the floorboards. The ivory handle gleamed a little, a thin blade hidden away, and his eyes—one amber, one black—tracked the glow from the lamp as if mapping a city he could never quite forget. Rory stood by the narrow table, papers skittering a little when the door frame framed him. Her bright blue eyes flickered; her hair hung in a straight, shoulder-length fall that looked too deliberate to be casual. The crescent scar on her left wrist caught the lamplight and glowed like a faint moon. The room had that grab-bag feel London wore after rain: a kitchen counter with a battered kettle steaming, a stack of books leaning against a wall crowded with notes, a chair pulled close to a desk cluttered with maps and transit routes and the stubborn little gadget she used to track deliveries. Rory shifted, feet finding the rhythm of the room instead of the beat of her breath. A moment stretched so thin you could hear the city through the window, and then the silence snapped. You look late, she thought, but the words stayed in her throat. Not late enough to miss the quiet between us. Her lips pressed together, slow and precise, and she stepped forward, not quite toward him but toward something she could still pretend to grasp. She kept her hands loose at her sides, the way you kept your hands when you remembered a rival you never quite trusted not to steal your future. He moved into the room with the same careful ease that always marked him—ears tuned to the kind of noise most people would miss, eyes already calculating exits, lines of tension buried beneath the surface of that impeccable charcoal suit. The cane clicked once against the floor, a small circle of sound that kept time with his measured steps. He almost smiled—a thing you could count on one hand and still have fingers left to spare—and did not quite reach it. His hair caught the lamp’s edge, a pale gleam that made the room feel smaller than it was. Rory broke the spell with a breath she hadn’t meant to release. “What are you doing here?” The sound of his voice settled like a coin dropped into a fountain, clear and cold and ready to complicate things. “I came because you’re dangerous when you pretend you’ve moved on,” he said, and let the words hang between them as if they weighed something. She did not blink. “I’m not pretending,” she answered, which was not the same as saying she was not moved. Her gaze drifted to the table where a map lay open, a pencil streaking a route across it. “We both know what happened between us wasn’t about us. It was about the job.” He stepped closer, but not close enough to breach the space she kept between them as a shield and a charm both. “That’s convenient for you,” he said, and the corner of his mouth curled, not a full smile, more like a recognition of something you can’t quite ignore anymore. “Convenient and dangerous. You’re still chasing the wrong kind of truth, Rory.” The name rolled out, almost tenderly in his mouth, and for a second the room felt magnetised by it. She pressed her knuckles together, and the scar on her wrist caught the light again, a small crescent that had learned to remind her of survival more than romance. “If you’re here to push, you’ll be disappointed,” she replied, and she did not lie about the fatigue behind the steadiness of her voice. “I’m not the girl who used to run because someone could ruin her.” Lucien’s eyes softened, if only for a breath. He did not contradict with words. Instead he set the cane down in a precise line beside the chair, as if placing a weapon where no one would mistake it for mercy. He scanned the room—the stacks of notes that smelled like old rain and old secrets, the lamp’s pale circle on the ink-stained desk, the window catching the skyline’s glimmer—then settled his gaze back on her. “You owe me an explanation,” he said, and the request sounded less like a demand than a whisper of what they owed themselves. Rory folded her arms, the movement tight with restraint. “People don’t get explanations for the hard choices,” she replied, and there was a flash of the old Rory in the line—cool, precise, a touch impatient that she could not quite shake off even when she tried to be soft. “They get consequences.” “Then I’ll take mine,” he said, and the sound of his voice drew her eyes to the line of his jaw, to the scar that ran there in a faint, almost-demon’s memory. He spoke without heat, but the words carried the cold edge of a blade just beneath the surface of his calm. The air shifted. The lamp hummed. The room, which had seemed merely a shelter, suddenly felt charged with decision. She found herself leaning on the desk, the edge of the map digging into her hip. The calm that always disguised her fear came back, neatly folded and ready to deploy. “Why are you here, Lucien? You could have called, or waited until dawn, or right where you belong—in the underworld’s quiet banking of secrets.” His smile was a thing of angles. “Because you’re in London’s quiet, Rory. And you still owe me something you promised not to forget. I came to collect.” The last line threaded through the room like a question you expected to be answered but wasn’t sure you wanted to hear. Rory’s throat cleared; she did not rise to the bait; she did not pretend. She asked with her eyes what she had already asked with too many failed attempts at honesty. The answer came not in words but in a slow, deliberate motion as she stepped back from the desk and let her hands drift along the edge of the map, tracing a path she would sooner cut than betray. There was a heartbeat of stillness, then Lucien spoke again, softer, his voice almost a caress that did not pretend to be gentle. “Do you remember the night we found the safe room under that auction house, the rain turning the bricks to coins of water?” The questions hung in the room as though the memory could be picked out of the air, a thread to tug on if either of them dared. Rory did not pretend to forget. Her eyes narrowed just enough to show she carried the past in a pocket where only she could reach it. “I remember,” she said, and the words came slow, careful, almost measured. “I remember the way you moved, as if you could calculat—” She cut herself off, but the unspoken truth hovered: she remembered how his plan always looked perfect until friction found it. He took a step closer, the cane clicking once more on the floor as if to remind them of the boundary they still pretended to respect. “Friction is how you keep a truth sharp,” he said. She let out a short, dry laugh that didn’t quite meet the tremor in her throat. “Or how you nick a finger trying to pick at it.” There was no reply, only the sound of the city outside, a distant whistle of trains and a siren then the hush of rain on glass. He did not retreat. If anything, he came nearer, and the warmth of the lamp touched his cheek, a pale glow that set his features into sharper relief. He did not touch her yet—not yet. The tension between them thrummed, a current that had never fully died even when their arguments had. “What do you want, Lucien?” she asked, almost softly now, the demand in her voice hidden within a plea she would never voice aloud. He looked at the papers on the desk, at the routes and the possible exits mapped out with her careful hand, at the small ritual she kept for herself—the way she arranged objects with neat, almost ritual precision. Then he looked back at her. “What you can’t admit to yourself,” he said, and the humor was gone from his voice, replaced by something more earnest, more dangerous. “That neither of us can pretend the distance didn’t change us.” Her breath hitched. She blinked once, a deliberate, almost clinical gesture that did not erase the tremor in her shoulders. “I changed the playoffs,” she replied, a line she had used before, a claim that might have comforted her if it weren’t so hollow now. “I learned to win without losing my head. I learned to walk away when it mattered.” “And yet you stand with your head held high,” he said, and the words came out like a challenge she could not dodge. “You’re not finished with the game we began.” She did not look away. He was not asking for her to give in; he was asking for the truth she kept tucked away in a drawer labeled do not open. The scar on her wrist caught the light again, and for a minute the room held its breath. Then she reached with the slow certainty of someone who always knew where to find a lever, and she touched the edge of a map, tracing the route she’d marked for a plan that would rescue more than one life if it held. “Sometimes the game is the only thing that keeps you in motion,” she said, and the line felt like an accusation she could not swallow. “Sometimes you play to keep the world from taking someone you care about and changing it forever.” His breath hit her chin as he leaned in, not in threat but in proximity, the kind of closeness that could erase the air between them with the simplest, smallest act. A blade-sharp tension built in the space—the scent of leather and rain, the faint metallic tang of old coins and new decisions. “Then play,” he whispered, not loud, not soft, but exactly at the right level of danger to make her heart skip a beat. “Tell me what you need, and we’ll split the risk. We always did.” Her mouth quivered, not with fear but with the ache of a choice she wasn’t ready to declare, and perhaps never would be, not aloud, not in the way lovers spoke when their bodies still remembered the old promises. She pulled her hand back from the map as if the touch itself could burn, and she stepped closer to him, the space between them narrowing to a breath, then to a touch of air that trembled between their lips. “I need a moment,” she said, and the words sounded almost like a confession, almost like an invitation. “Take it,” he replied, and this time his voice held a warmth she hadn’t expected, a thread of something almost tender that refused to be dismissed. He did not retreat, did not take the space away; instead he shifted his weight, letting the cane rest at his side, and the moment stretched, a taut line waiting to snap or to bend toward something new. Her eyes searched his, and he held her gaze with the quiet confidence that had always irritated her enough to want to prove him wrong. She could feel the pull of old edges, the way their conversations had once behaved like a storm that kept returning, never quite finished, never quite over. “I came here because you needed the right kind of leverage,” he said, the words deliberate, unhurried, as if each syllable were a bead on a thread, threaded with risk and memory. “Not to beg you to mend what broke, but to offer you a chance to control the next move.” Her jaw tightened, then softened a fraction. “Control isn’t what this is about,” she replied, and her voice lowered to a level that still carried authority. “It’s about trust. And trust… doesn’t come with a promise that nothing hurts.” A sigh moved through him, a long exhale that carried relief and longing in equal measure. He stepped closer again, and this time the distance bridged not by fear or doubt but by a shared history that had never truly disappeared, only slept. He reached out, and for a breath the room held as if it were listening to the moment when two hard, careful people might let themselves want what their bodies remembered. Rory did not pull away when his fingers brushed the back of her hand, a contact so light it might have been a mistake if not for the electric tingle that followed. Her breath hitched, not with fear but with a fierce, ancient tug of something buried that would always outlast the time between them. The crescent scar on her wrist shifted as she flexed her hand, a tiny, stubborn sign that she was still here, still standing, still fighting the pull toward him the way she had long ago. The lamp hissed once, and a draught shifted the papers on the desk, scattering a few across the floor. Lucien bent to gather them with a precise, practiced motion, as if organizing chaos had become a language he spoke fluently. He looked up, catching her gaze again, and there it was—an unspoken agreement, a willingness to test a boundary they both knew could break them in the best possible way. “Tell me to go,” he said, almost every word a careful sacrifice, a way to offer her the chance to push him away and keep the old shields intact. She did not answer with words. Instead she stepped forward, catching the edge of his sleeve with the soft, certain resolve of someone who had learned to hold on to something when the world asked her to let go. Her touch was a map of nerves and resolve, and when she spoke, the edge of her voice carried both warning and invitation. “I’m not finished with the truth you owe me,” Rory breathed, and the truth—whatever it was she refused to name aloud—hung between them and tasted like rain and risk. Lucien took a slow breath, the cane resting against the chair as if it, too, was listening. He did not pull away. He did not pretend to forget. He simply watched her, the amber and black in his eyes like a door opening somewhere he had not expected to see again. Then, for a heartbeat—a single heartbeat that felt longer than any night since they last stood this close—their faces aligned, and the air between them grew warmer, heavier. He lowered his chin, and she rose on her toes, almost a dare, almost a confession, almost the thing they never allowed themselves to speak aloud. The door, which had waited all this time with its stubborn hinge, seemed to exhale with relief as it receded into the wall, the night beyond the window listening to everything neither of them said. And in that room—where maps, memories, and the scent of rain in the city lingered—the moment turned from a confrontation into a choice. Rory stepped closer, not pushing, not pressuring, simply offering a path if he wanted to walk it with her. The space between them now felt like a current that could carry them toward something real, something that might outlast the argument and the past, something that could carry both of them into a future neither of them would admit to wanting with their mouths but both of them yearned for in the quiet, in the steadiness of a breath shared between two stubborn people who had learned to fight with their brains and love with their bodies. The moment trembled, then steadied, and for a long moment they stood there—two people who had learned to survive by thinking ahead, now choosing to stay and feel what had never left, even if the world insisted they should pretend it was gone. The door’s frame held their secret, and the lamp’s glow stretched to cradle it, not exposing it, but promising it would not vanish.
created_at"2026-02-19T12:43:54.938Z" 2/19/2026, 12:43:54 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags23
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.605
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.73% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2750
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"tenderly"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
3
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"tenderly"
1"suddenly"
2"softly"
3"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
49.09% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2750
totalAiIsms28
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"silence"
count1
2
word"calculating"
count1
3
word"tension"
count3
4
word"measured"
count2
5
word"charm"
count1
6
word"scanned"
count1
7
word"whisper"
count1
8
word"charged"
count1
9
word"tracing"
count2
10
word"unspoken"
count2
11
word"perfect"
count1
12
word"warmth"
count2
13
word"quivered"
count1
14
word"trembled"
count2
15
word"weight"
count1
16
word"could feel"
count1
17
word"electric"
count1
18
word"resolve"
count2
19
word"aligned"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"silence"
2"calculating"
3"tension"
4"measured"
5"charm"
6"scanned"
7"whisper"
8"charged"
9"tracing"
10"unspoken"
11"perfect"
12"warmth"
13"quivered"
14"trembled"
15"weight"
16"could feel"
17"electric"
18"resolve"
19"aligned"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells3
narrationSentences113
matches
0"t with fear"
1"t with fear"
2"e with relief"
29.08% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount7
narrationSentences113
filterMatches
0"look"
1"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"tend to"
1"tried to"
2"tended to"
3"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences128
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen78
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2725
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions29
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions17
wordCount2363
uniqueNames4
maxNameDensity0.42
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Moreau1
London1
Lucien5
Rory10
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Lucien"
2"Rory"
places
0"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences105
glossingSentenceCount12
matches
0"as if mapping a city he could never quite forget"
1"not quite toward him but toward something she could still pretend to grasp"
2"not quite reach it"
3"quite ignore anymore"
4"as if placing a weapon where no one would mistake it for mercy"
5"smelled like old rain and old secrets, the"
6"not quite shake off even when she tried to be soft"
7"quite meet the tremor in her throat"
8"felt like an accusation she could not s"
9"as if organizing chaos had become a language he spoke fluently"
10"tasted like rain and risk"
11"felt like a current that could carry th"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches10
per1kWords3.67
wordCount2725
matches
0"not quite toward him but toward something she could still pretend to grasp"
1"not in words but in a slow, deliberate motion as she stepped back from the de"
2"not in threat but in proximity, the kind of closeness"
3"not loud, not soft, but exactly at the right level of danger to make her heart skip"
4"not soft, but exactly at the right level of danger to make her heart skip"
5"not with fear but with the ache of a choice she wasn’t ready to declare"
6"Not to beg you to mend what broke, but to offer you a chance to control the next move"
7"not by fear or doubt but by a shared history"
8"not with fear but with a fierce, ancient tug of something buried"
9"not exposing it, but promising it would not vanish"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences128
matches(empty)
93.95% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs51
mean53.43
std25.58
cv0.479
sampleLengths
0123
186
212
39
452
599
617
746
853
962
1085
1175
1223
1352
1453
1519
1655
1728
1892
1923
2050
2170
2236
2327
2426
2552
2624
2778
2861
2931
3092
3142
3253
3336
3479
3518
3664
3752
3851
3939
4074
4190
4270
4329
4462
4529
4651
4754
4858
4997
99.05% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences113
matches
0"was gone"
1"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs402
matches
0"was asking"
1"were listening"
2"was listening"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount19
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences17
totalSentences128
ratio0.133
matches
0"The ivory handle gleamed a little, a thin blade hidden away, and his eyes—one amber, one black—tracked the glow from the lamp as if mapping a city he could never quite forget."
1"Her bright blue eyes flickered; her hair hung in a straight, shoulder-length fall that looked too deliberate to be casual."
2"He moved into the room with the same careful ease that always marked him—ears tuned to the kind of noise most people would miss, eyes already calculating exits, lines of tension buried beneath the surface of that impeccable charcoal suit."
3"He almost smiled—a thing you could count on one hand and still have fingers left to spare—and did not quite reach it."
4"He scanned the room—the stacks of notes that smelled like old rain and old secrets, the lamp’s pale circle on the ink-stained desk, the window catching the skyline’s glimmer—then settled his gaze back on her."
5"“People don’t get explanations for the hard choices,” she replied, and there was a flash of the old Rory in the line—cool, precise, a touch impatient that she could not quite shake off even when she tried to be soft."
6"Rory’s throat cleared; she did not rise to the bait; she did not pretend."
7"He did not touch her yet—not yet."
8"He looked at the papers on the desk, at the routes and the possible exits mapped out with her careful hand, at the small ritual she kept for herself—the way she arranged objects with neat, almost ritual precision."
9"He was not asking for her to give in; he was asking for the truth she kept tucked away in a drawer labeled do not open."
10"A blade-sharp tension built in the space—the scent of leather and rain, the faint metallic tang of old coins and new decisions."
11"He did not retreat, did not take the space away; instead he shifted his weight, letting the cane rest at his side, and the moment stretched, a taut line waiting to snap or to bend toward something new."
12"He looked up, catching her gaze again, and there it was—an unspoken agreement, a willingness to test a boundary they both knew could break them in the best possible way."
13"“I’m not finished with the truth you owe me,” Rory breathed, and the truth—whatever it was she refused to name aloud—hung between them and tasted like rain and risk."
14"Then, for a heartbeat—a single heartbeat that felt longer than any night since they last stood this close—their faces aligned, and the air between them grew warmer, heavier."
15"And in that room—where maps, memories, and the scent of rain in the city lingered—the moment turned from a confrontation into a choice."
16"The moment trembled, then steadied, and for a long moment they stood there—two people who had learned to survive by thinking ahead, now choosing to stay and feel what had never left, even if the world insisted they should pretend it was gone."
91.74% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2387
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount118
adverbRatio0.049434436531210726
lyAdverbCount16
lyAdverbRatio0.006702974444909929
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences128
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences128
mean21.29
std11.53
cv0.541
sampleLengths
020
119
232
316
420
516
652
716
818
912
109
1124
1228
1340
1419
1522
1618
1712
185
1921
2025
214
2216
2318
2415
2522
2628
2712
2819
2929
3024
3113
328
336
3426
3535
3623
379
3840
393
4032
4121
423
433
4413
4516
4615
4724
487
4921
40.63% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.25
totalSentences128
uniqueOpeners32
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences112
matches
0"Instead he set the cane"
1"Then he looked back at"
2"Then she reached with the"
3"Instead she stepped forward, catching"
4"Then, for a heartbeat—a single"
ratio0.045
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount64
totalSentences112
matches
0"Her bright blue eyes flickered;"
1"You look late, she thought,"
2"Her lips pressed together, slow"
3"She kept her hands loose"
4"He moved into the room"
5"He almost smiled—a thing you"
6"His hair caught the lamp’s"
7"he said, and let the"
8"She did not blink."
9"she answered, which was not"
10"Her gaze drifted to the"
11"He stepped closer, but not"
12"he said, and the corner"
13"She pressed her knuckles together,"
14"she replied, and she did"
15"He did not contradict with"
16"He scanned the room—the stacks"
17"he said, and the request"
18"she replied, and there was"
19"he said, and the sound"
ratio0.571
4.64% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount102
totalSentences112
matches
0"The door to the flat"
1"Lucien Moreau paused in the"
2"The ivory handle gleamed a"
3"Rory stood by the narrow"
4"Her bright blue eyes flickered;"
5"The crescent scar on her"
6"The room had that grab-bag"
7"Rory shifted, feet finding the"
8"A moment stretched so thin"
9"You look late, she thought,"
10"Her lips pressed together, slow"
11"She kept her hands loose"
12"He moved into the room"
13"The cane clicked once against"
14"He almost smiled—a thing you"
15"His hair caught the lamp’s"
16"Rory broke the spell with"
17"The sound of his voice"
18"he said, and let the"
19"She did not blink."
ratio0.911
44.64% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences112
matches
0"If anything, he came nearer,"
ratio0.009
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences72
technicalSentenceCount16
matches
0"Her bright blue eyes flickered; her hair hung in a straight, shoulder-length fall that looked too deliberate to be casual."
1"His hair caught the lamp’s edge, a pale gleam that made the room feel smaller than it was."
2"He scanned the room—the stacks of notes that smelled like old rain and old secrets, the lamp’s pale circle on the ink-stained desk, the window catching the skyl…"
3"There was a heartbeat of stillness, then Lucien spoke again, softer, his voice almost a caress that did not pretend to be gentle."
4"She blinked once, a deliberate, almost clinical gesture that did not erase the tremor in her shoulders."
5"His breath hit her chin as he leaned in, not in threat but in proximity, the kind of closeness that could erase the air between them with the simplest, smallest…"
6"Her eyes searched his, and he held her gaze with the quiet confidence that had always irritated her enough to want to prove him wrong."
7"She could feel the pull of old edges, the way their conversations had once behaved like a storm that kept returning, never quite finished, never quite over."
8"He reached out, and for a breath the room held as if it were listening to the moment when two hard, careful people might let themselves want what their bodies r…"
9"Lucien bent to gather them with a precise, practiced motion, as if organizing chaos had become a language he spoke fluently."
10"Instead she stepped forward, catching the edge of his sleeve with the soft, certain resolve of someone who had learned to hold on to something when the world as…"
11"Lucien took a slow breath, the cane resting against the chair as if it, too, was listening."
12"Then, for a heartbeat—a single heartbeat that felt longer than any night since they last stood this close—their faces aligned, and the air between them grew war…"
13"The door, which had waited all this time with its stubborn hinge, seemed to exhale with relief as it receded into the wall, the night beyond the window listenin…"
14"The space between them now felt like a current that could carry them toward something real, something that might outlast the argument and the past, something th…"
15"The moment trembled, then steadied, and for a long moment they stood there—two people who had learned to survive by thinking ahead, now choosing to stay and fee…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags23
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"he said, and the request sounded less like a demand than a whisper of what they owed themselves"
1"she said, and the words came slow, careful, almost measured"
2"he said, and the humor was gone from his voice, replaced by something more earnest, more dangerous"
3"he said, and the words came out like a challenge she could not dodge"
4"she said, and the line felt like an accusation she could not swallow"
5"she said, and the words sounded almost like a confession, almost like an invitation"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags21
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"he whispered (whisper)"
1"Rory breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.553
leniency1
rawRatio0.095
effectiveRatio0.095
68.1851%