Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTYZYHC979NTKCDR5CR0BSJ

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Duration:
19.4s
Cost:
$0.005747
Provider:
Alibaba

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Three deadbolts slid back in rapid succession, the metallic clacks echoing like gunshots in the narrow hallway. Rory yanked the door open, ready to scream at whatever delivery driver had ignored the 'leave at door' sign, but the shout died in her throat. Lucien Moreau stood on the worn doormat, rain dripping from the brim of a black umbrella he held with gloved precision. He looked entirely out of place against the peeling yellow paint of Eva's corridor and the smell of stale curry that seeped through the floorboards. His charcoal suit remained crisp despite the London downpour, not a single thread out of alignment. He did not wait for an invitation. Lucien stepped forward, forcing Rory to stumble backward into the cramped flat. He closed the door behind him with a soft click, engaging the top lock before she could protest. Ptolemy, the tabby cat, hissed from atop a stack of leather-bound grimoires and scattered across the coffee table. Lucien ignored the animal, his heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one void-black—scanning the room before settling on her. You look terrible, Rory. Rory crossed her arms over her chest, her fingers instinctively tracing the small crescent scar on her left wrist. The familiar motion grounded her, a barrier against the sudden spike of heat flooding her cheeks. She refused to let him see her shake. Get out. We need to talk. We needed to talk six months ago. Right now, you are trespassing. Eva will be home in an hour, and she does not take kindly to uninvited guests, especially those who smell of brimstone and expensive cologne. Eva is currently detained by a rather tedious warding circle in Shoreditch. She will not be returning anytime soon. Lucien leaned his ivory-handled cane against the wall, the thin blade inside clicking softly against the wood. He moved further into the room, navigating the maze of books and scrolls with an elegance that made Rory's cluttered sanctuary feel even more chaotic. Your friend is safe. I ensured it. That does not give you the right to break into my home. Rory stepped between him and the kitchenette, grabbing a heavy brass candlestick from the counter. It felt flimsy in her grip, useless against a half-demon, but she held it anyway. Why are you here, Lucien? Did your father send you? Is this about Avaros? Always so quick to assume the worst. A faint smile touched his lips, devoid of warmth. I came because the threads are unraveling, and you are standing directly in the knot. I left that life. I deliver noodles in Soho. I study law during the day. I am not part of your underworld anymore. You cannot unring a bell, Aurora. He used her full name, the sound of it rolling off his tongue with a French precision that made her stomach twist. You carry the mark whether you acknowledge it or not. The air in the flat grew heavy, the pressure dropping until Rory's ears popped. The books on the table rustled although no wind blew. You think hiding above a curry house protects you? The shadows in this city have long memories. Rory tightened her grip on the candlestick. Get to the point or leave. Someone is hunting the bloodline. Not just any bloodline. Yours. Lucien took another step, closing the distance between them. The scent of him filled her senses now, overpowering the smell of old paper and cat fur. Sandalwood, ozone, and something deeper, darker, like earth after a storm. They know what you are. They know what you can do. I am human. My father was a barrister, my mother a teacher. I have no powers. I have no lineage. Do not lie to me. Not after everything. His voice dropped to a whisper, rough with an emotion he usually kept buried. I smelled the magic on you the moment you opened the door. It smells like fear and old fire. Just like the night you ran. Rory flinched as if he had struck her. The memory hit her with physical force: the rain-slicked alley in Cardiff, the way Evan's hands had felt like iron bands around her wrists, and the sudden, terrifying burst of blue flame that had erupted from her palms to save her. She had never told Lucien the whole truth about that night. She had only told him she was leaving. I ran because I was scared. Not because of magic. Because of him. And yet, you ran to London. To me. Or rather, to the city where I operate. Coincidence is a luxury we cannot afford. Lucien reached out, his gloved hand hovering near her face. She did not pull away, though every instinct screamed at her to flee. His thumb brushed her cheekbone, the leather cool against her burning skin. You have been dreaming of the red sky again. Have you not? Rory swallowed the lump in her throat. How did you know? Because I dream it too. His amber eye seemed to glow in the dim light of the flat. The barrier between worlds is thinning. Avaros is bleeding through, and your father's lineage is the key that unlocks the gate. Brendan Carter was not just a barrister, Rory. He was a warden. And he hid the truth from you to keep you safe. He told me nothing. Because he knew men like my father would come for you. Lucien's hand dropped to his side, clenching into a fist. And now they have. Three of my informants vanished tonight. All of them had connections to your family name. They are coming for you, Aurora. Tonight. A crash from the street below shattered the tension. Glass smashed against the pavement, followed by the distinct sound of growling that no ordinary dog could produce. Rory moved to the window, peering through the gap in the curtains. Below, in the wet glow of the streetlamp, three figures stood looking up at the building. They wore long coats, but their faces were obscured by hoods, and their shadows stretched unnaturally long against the brickwork. They found me. I told you. Lucien retrieved his cane, twisting the handle until the thin blade slid free with a sharp hiss of metal. He positioned himself between Rory and the door, his posture shifting from relaxed to lethal in a heartbeat. Stay behind me. I can fight. Not like this. Not without training. His voice brooked no argument. When they breach the door, you run to the back exit. Do not stop. Do not look back. Go to the Golden Empress. Yu-Fei knows the protocols. I am not leaving you here alone. Lucien turned his head slightly, the black eye catching the light. A dark, predatory grin spread across his face, transforming his handsome features into something terrifyingly ancient. Oh, my dear Rory. I am never alone. The shadows in the corner of the room began to writhe, detaching themselves from the walls to coil around his legs like loyal hounds. Besides, I have been waiting for an excuse to stretch my legs. The front door shuddered under a violent impact. The wood groaned, splinters flying from the frame as something massive slammed against it from the outside. The three deadbolts held for a second, then the top one snapped with a loud ping, spinning onto the floor. Rory gripped the candlestick until her knuckles turned white. Another crash. The middle bolt bent. Lucien raised his blade, the steel humming with a low, vibrating energy. Ready? The door exploded inward, showering the hallway in a cloud of wood chips and dust. A figure lunged through the breach, claws extended, eyes glowing a sickly green. Lucien moved.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags1
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences0
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.23% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1287
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
45.61% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1287
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"echoing"
count1
1
word"scanning"
count1
2
word"tracing"
count1
3
word"familiar"
count1
4
word"navigating"
count1
5
word"sanctuary"
count1
6
word"chaotic"
count1
7
word"warmth"
count1
8
word"unraveling"
count1
9
word"stomach"
count1
10
word"whisper"
count1
11
word"clenching"
count1
12
word"shattered"
count1
13
word"tension"
count1
highlights
0"echoing"
1"scanning"
2"tracing"
3"familiar"
4"navigating"
5"sanctuary"
6"chaotic"
7"warmth"
8"unraveling"
9"stomach"
10"whisper"
11"clenching"
12"shattered"
13"tension"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"knuckles turned white"
count1
highlights
0"knuckles turned white"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences135
matches
0"was scared"
47.62% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount7
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences135
filterMatches
0"look"
1"see"
2"feel"
3"think"
4"know"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences135
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1279
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions1
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
90.85% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions54
wordCount1268
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity1.18
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Lucien13
Moreau1
Eva3
London2
Rory15
Shoreditch1
Avaros2
Soho1
Aurora2
French1
Cardiff1
Evan1
Carter1
Golden1
Empress1
You5
Do3
persons
0"Lucien"
1"Moreau"
2"Eva"
3"Rory"
4"Evan"
5"Carter"
6"You"
places
0"London"
1"Shoreditch"
2"Soho"
3"Cardiff"
4"Golden"
globalScore0.909
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences88
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like iron bands around her wrists"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1279
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences135
matches
0"left that life"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean32.79
std24.88
cv0.759
sampleLengths
043
162
237
334
44
543
62
74
837
968
1056
1131
1223
1379
1413
1558
1620
1747
1868
1913
2070
2111
2262
234
2447
2575
263
2743
283
2938
307
3171
3245
339
346
3512
361
3728
382
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences135
matches
0"were obscured"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs214
matches
0"was leaving"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences135
ratio0.007
matches
0"Lucien ignored the animal, his heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one void-black—scanning the room before settling on her."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount32
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount1
adverbRatio0.03125
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences135
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences135
mean9.47
std6.55
cv0.692
sampleLengths
017
126
221
325
416
57
612
718
818
916
104
1119
1216
138
142
154
167
175
1825
1912
207
2117
2225
234
243
2512
2615
2715
285
295
304
317
329
3315
344
355
366
378
386
3922
4010
4114
4210
439
448
457
466
475
484
491
51.85% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.37777777777777777
totalSentences135
uniqueOpeners51
52.08% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences128
matches
0"Always so quick to assume"
1"Just like the night you"
ratio0.016
66.88% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount49
totalSentences128
matches
0"He looked entirely out of"
1"His charcoal suit remained crisp"
2"He did not wait for"
3"He closed the door behind"
4"You look terrible, Rory."
5"She refused to let him"
6"We need to talk."
7"We needed to talk six"
8"She will not be returning"
9"He moved further into the"
10"Your friend is safe."
11"I ensured it."
12"It felt flimsy in her"
13"I came because the threads"
14"I left that life."
15"I deliver noodles in Soho."
16"I study law during the"
17"I am not part of"
18"You cannot unring a bell,"
19"He used her full name,"
ratio0.383
88.91% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount95
totalSentences128
matches
0"Rory yanked the door open,"
1"Lucien Moreau stood on the"
2"He looked entirely out of"
3"His charcoal suit remained crisp"
4"He did not wait for"
5"Lucien stepped forward, forcing Rory"
6"He closed the door behind"
7"Ptolemy, the tabby cat, hissed"
8"Lucien ignored the animal, his"
9"You look terrible, Rory."
10"Rory crossed her arms over"
11"The familiar motion grounded her,"
12"She refused to let him"
13"We need to talk."
14"We needed to talk six"
15"Eva will be home in"
16"Eva is currently detained by"
17"She will not be returning"
18"Lucien leaned his ivory-handled cane"
19"He moved further into the"
ratio0.742
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences128
matches
0"Because of him."
1"Because I dream it too."
2"Because he knew men like"
ratio0.023
87.91% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences52
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"He looked entirely out of place against the peeling yellow paint of Eva's corridor and the smell of stale curry that seeped through the floorboards."
1"He moved further into the room, navigating the maze of books and scrolls with an elegance that made Rory's cluttered sanctuary feel even more chaotic."
2"He used her full name, the sound of it rolling off his tongue with a French precision that made her stomach twist."
3"The memory hit her with physical force: the rain-slicked alley in Cardiff, the way Evan's hands had felt like iron bands around her wrists, and the sudden, terr…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags1
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
90.7980%