Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTZ0RVR7DVYPTA7HXYPYPA0

Run Details

Duration:
1m 23s
Cost:
$0.075435
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The last bus from Richmond had dropped her at the edge of the park forty minutes ago. Rory walked the gravel path with her phone's torch cutting a pale wedge through the dark, the Heartstone pendant a faint coal of warmth against her sternum. She had memorized the route from the hand-drawn map Isolde had left folded inside a takeaway napkin at the Golden Empress — third oak past the Isabella Plantation fence, then due north until the ground softened. Simple enough in daylight. At half eleven on a moonless October night, every oak looked the same. She shouldn't have come alone. She knew that. Eva would have said so, loudly, with hand gestures. But the note had been specific: *Come at the dark of the moon. Come without companions. The Grove remembers debts, Aurora. It will not open for a crowd.* A branch cracked somewhere to her left. Not underfoot — further off, among the bracken. The sound was sharp, deliberate, the way a green limb sounds when something bends it past its tolerance. Rory stopped walking. She swept the torch in a slow arc. Ferns. The pale scar of a fallen birch. Nothing that moved. She counted to thirty, listening. Wind sifted through the canopy with a papery rattle, and beneath it — nothing. No foxes screaming. No owls. Richmond Park at night should have been a chorus of small, furtive lives, and instead it offered her a silence so complete she could hear the blood in her own ears. She kept moving. The pendant grew warmer with each step north, and she pressed her fingers around it through her jacket. Not hot. Not yet. Just that steady, tidal pulse, like a second heartbeat seated below her own. She had learned not to ignore it. The crimson stone had its own vocabulary — warmth for proximity, cold for danger, and a strange vibrationless hum when it wanted her attention for reasons she hadn't yet catalogued. Tonight it only pulsed. Steady. Patient. The ground softened underfoot. She felt it before she saw it — gravel giving way to loam, then to something springy and damp that swallowed the sound of her boots. Moss. She was close. Then her torch flickered. Not the low-battery stutter she'd seen a hundred times. The beam contracted to a pinprick, flared wide enough to bleach the nearest tree trunk bone-white, and died. The screen behind it went black. She thumbed the power button. Nothing. She held it up and saw her own reflection in the glass, blue eyes wide and unblinking, and behind her reflection — movement. A shape that passed between two trees, fluid and unhurried, too tall to be a deer. Rory spun around. The darkness had texture now, a granular thickness that pressed against her face like velvet. She could see nothing. She could hear her own breathing, faster than she wanted it to be, and beneath that the pendant's pulse had quickened to match. "Hello?" Her voice came back wrong. Not an echo — Richmond Park was too open for echoes — but a return, as if something had caught the word and handed it back to her with the inflection changed. The second *hello* rose where hers had fallen. A question turned into a greeting. She took a step backward. Her heel found a root and she caught herself, one hand against rough bark. Oak bark. Ancient, deeply furrowed, and warm. Not the ambient warmth of a living tree. Warm the way skin is warm. She pulled her hand away and rubbed her fingers together. Dry. No sap, no moss. Just that impossible warmth fading from her palm. The standing stones would be close now. She had read about them — or rather, she had read Isolde's oblique descriptions, scattered through three separate napkin notes like a scavenger hunt designed by someone who found clarity personally offensive. *The oaks that are not oaks. They stood before the Romans and they will stand after the last light goes out. Walk between them and the Grove will decide if you deserve entry.* Rory made herself breathe. In through the nose, out through the mouth, the way her mum had taught her before maths exams, before court visits with her father, before every small crisis that had preceded the real ones. She pressed the pendant flat against her chest. Its warmth steadied her the way a hand on the shoulder might. She walked forward. Not because she wasn't afraid. The fear sat in her stomach like a stone, dense and cold, and her body wanted nothing more than to turn south and find the gravel path and the bus stop and the fluorescent safety of the District line. She walked forward because she had promised, and because promises meant something in the places between worlds — Isolde had been very clear about that. The trees thinned. She felt the change in the air before she understood it — a dampness, floral and green, the smell of growing things in a season that should have killed them. Wildflowers. She couldn't see them but she could smell them, a sweetness so heavy it sat on her tongue. And through that sweetness, something else. Something chemical and burnt, like heated copper. The pendant flared. Not warmth now — a spike of heat so sudden she gasped and pulled the chain away from her skin. The crimson stone glowed through her jacket, a dull red heartbeat visible through two layers of fabric. She held it out by the chain and it swung, pointing left, and in the light it cast she saw the first of the standing stones. It was oak, as Isolde had said. Or had been, once. The trunk rose from the earth without roots, without taper, a column of petrified wood as wide as a doorframe and twice her height. Its surface was covered in grooves she wanted to call natural — the whorls and fissures of a tree that had grown for centuries — but they aligned too neatly, curved too deliberately. They were letters. Or something that had been letters before English, before Welsh, before anything she had a name for. She found the second stone ten paces to the right. A third beyond it. They formed a rough arc, half-swallowed by bracken and shadow, and in the red glow of the Heartstone she could count seven before the light gave out. She stopped between the first and second stones. The burnt-copper smell was stronger here. She breathed through her mouth and tasted it on the back of her teeth, metallic and old. The pendant's glow dimmed to its usual faint luminescence, a candle behind stained glass, and with it the standing stones sank back into darkness. But something had stayed in the light. Not between the stones. Behind them. In the space where the Grove should have been — that hidden clearing Isolde had described as *a breath caught between two worlds* — something stood. Rory saw it the way you see a word on the tip of your tongue: not the shape but the knowledge of the shape, the certainty that it was there. Tall. Still. Watching with an attention so focused it had weight. "Isolde?" The name fell into the dark and didn't come back. No echo. No returned greeting. Just absorption, as if the silence had opened a mouth and swallowed the sound whole. The pendant went cold. Not cool — cold, the kind of cold that burns, that makes fingers clumsy and slow. Rory wrapped her fist around it and felt frost crystallize against her palm. The crescent scar on her left wrist ached in sympathy, a phantom pain she hadn't felt since the night she'd left Cardiff. Something exhaled. She heard it — a long, measured breath released from lungs that were not hers, from a mouth she couldn't see, close enough that if there had been warmth behind it she would have felt it on her face. But there was no warmth. The exhalation carried the cold of deep earth, of cellars, of places where the sun's existence was a rumor. Rory didn't move. Every instinct she had was screaming in two directions at once — run and stay, flee and freeze — and the contradiction locked her in place as effectively as a hand on her collar. She stood between the standing stones with the dead phone in one hand and the frozen pendant in the other and stared into the dark where the shape stood and the shape stared back. It shifted. Not moved — shifted, the way a picture shifts when you adjust the angle of the frame. The dimensions of it rearranged. She caught the suggestion of limbs — too many, and too long, bending at joints that had no anatomical basis — before it settled again into that pillar of focused attention. "I came because I was asked." Her voice was smaller than she wanted. Steadier than she expected. The words hung in the air, and for a terrible, drawn-out moment she thought they too would be swallowed. Then the wildflowers at her feet began to bloom. She felt them before she saw them — soft petals brushing against her ankles, stalks rising through the moss with a sound like whispered conversation. The pendant warmed, slowly, degree by degree, as if whatever had frozen it was retreating. The red glow returned. It caught the petals closest to her boots — white bellflower, purple foxglove, flowers she couldn't name with colors she had no words for, all opening in a tide that swept outward from where she stood toward the standing stones and beyond. The shape behind the stones hadn't moved. But the Grove was opening. She could feel it — a change in pressure, like the pop of altitude in an airplane cabin, and with it a sound so faint she wasn't sure she heard it at all. A hum. Not the pendant. Not the wind. Something older, embedded in the stone and the soil and the impossible flowers, a frequency that resonated in the spaces between her ribs. Rory took a step forward. The blooming followed her. Another step. The pendant swung on its chain, pointing straight ahead through the gap between the first and second stones, and its light caught something she hadn't seen before — a path, narrow and worn, leading into the clearing. The shape was gone. Or had repositioned itself beyond the reach of the crimson glow. She couldn't tell. The feeling of being watched remained, tattooed on the back of her neck, but its quality had changed. Less predatory. More evaluative. As if whatever stood in the dark had asked her a question and was still deciding whether her answer satisfied. She walked the path. The standing stones passed on either side, their carved surfaces catching the pendant's light in fragments — a curve here, a straight line there, symbols that tugged at comprehension without granting it. The air between them was heavy and still, the way air feels before a storm, charged and expectant. Three steps past the last stone, the ground dropped away. Not physically. Her boots still found purchase. But the world tilted on an axis she couldn't name, and for a disorienting moment she stood on the skin of something vast and breathing, a landscape that was also a living thing, and the sky above her — she could see the sky now, though it held no moon and no stars she recognized — was the color of old bruises, purple-black and faintly luminous. The Fae Grove spread before her. Wildflowers in every direction, knee-high and trembling, and at the center of the clearing a single tree that was not an oak, was not any species she could name, its bark silver-white and its branches bare and its roots gripping the earth like fingers laced in prayer. The pendant pulsed once — warm, steady, almost reassuring — and went still. Rory stood at the edge of the Grove and listened. The silence here was different. Full, not empty. The silence of a held breath, of a room waiting for someone to speak first. Behind her, the standing stones had sealed the path. She felt it without looking — the closure, the quiet click of a lock turning in a door she could no longer see. Something rustled in the flowers to her right. Low and quick and gone before she could turn her head. Then again, to her left. A third time, directly ahead, between her and the silver tree, and this time she saw the flowers part and close as something moved through them — something that left no trail and cast no shadow and disturbed nothing except the blossoms it passed through. It was circling her.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags0
92.90% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2114
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"deliberately"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"deliberately"
2"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
29.04% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2114
totalAiIsms30
found
0
word"warmth"
count8
1
word"silence"
count4
2
word"pulse"
count2
3
word"pulsed"
count2
4
word"flickered"
count1
5
word"velvet"
count1
6
word"quickened"
count1
7
word"echo"
count2
8
word"echoes"
count1
9
word"furrowed"
count1
10
word"stomach"
count1
11
word"aligned"
count1
12
word"weight"
count1
13
word"measured"
count1
14
word"could feel"
count1
15
word"resonated"
count1
16
word"charged"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"silence"
2"pulse"
3"pulsed"
4"flickered"
5"velvet"
6"quickened"
7"echo"
8"echoes"
9"furrowed"
10"stomach"
11"aligned"
12"weight"
13"measured"
14"could feel"
15"resonated"
16"charged"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences175
matches
0"d in sympathy"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences175
filterMatches
0"see"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences178
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen65
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords62
totalWords2139
ratio0.029
matches
0"Come at the dark of the moon. Come without companions. The Grove remembers debts, Aurora. It will not open for a crowd."
1"hello"
2"The oaks that are not oaks. They stood before the Romans and they will stand after the last light goes out. Walk between them and the Grove will decide if you deserve entry."
3"a breath caught between two worlds"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions2
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions39
wordCount2131
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity0.42
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond3
Heartstone2
Isolde5
Golden1
Empress1
Isabella1
Plantation1
October1
Grove6
Aurora1
Park2
Romans1
Rory9
District1
English1
Welsh1
Cardiff1
Fae1
persons
0"Isolde"
1"Rory"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Golden"
2"Isabella"
3"Plantation"
4"Grove"
5"Park"
6"Cardiff"
7"Fae"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences103
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.468
wordCount2139
matches
0"not the shape but the knowledge of the shape, the certainty"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences178
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs47
mean45.51
std28.02
cv0.616
sampleLengths
097
145
255
355
43
578
634
74
878
945
101
1151
1263
1372
1458
1572
1665
1766
1888
1941
208
2147
227
2373
241
2530
2655
272
2863
2971
3055
316
3230
339
3486
357
3669
3748
3860
3954
4010
4173
4253
4313
4465
4569
464
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences175
matches
0"was covered"
1"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs305
matches
0"was screaming"
1"was retreating"
2"was opening"
3"was circling"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount34
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences27
totalSentences178
ratio0.152
matches
0"She had memorized the route from the hand-drawn map Isolde had left folded inside a takeaway napkin at the Golden Empress — third oak past the Isabella Plantation fence, then due north until the ground softened."
1"Not underfoot — further off, among the bracken."
2"Wind sifted through the canopy with a papery rattle, and beneath it — nothing."
3"The crimson stone had its own vocabulary — warmth for proximity, cold for danger, and a strange vibrationless hum when it wanted her attention for reasons she hadn't yet catalogued."
4"She felt it before she saw it — gravel giving way to loam, then to something springy and damp that swallowed the sound of her boots."
5"She held it up and saw her own reflection in the glass, blue eyes wide and unblinking, and behind her reflection — movement."
6"Not an echo — Richmond Park was too open for echoes — but a return, as if something had caught the word and handed it back to her with the inflection changed."
7"She had read about them — or rather, she had read Isolde's oblique descriptions, scattered through three separate napkin notes like a scavenger hunt designed by someone who found clarity personally offensive."
8"She walked forward because she had promised, and because promises meant something in the places between worlds — Isolde had been very clear about that."
9"She felt the change in the air before she understood it — a dampness, floral and green, the smell of growing things in a season that should have killed them."
10"Not warmth now — a spike of heat so sudden she gasped and pulled the chain away from her skin."
11"Its surface was covered in grooves she wanted to call natural — the whorls and fissures of a tree that had grown for centuries — but they aligned too neatly, curved too deliberately."
12"In the space where the Grove should have been — that hidden clearing Isolde had described as *a breath caught between two worlds* — something stood."
13"Not cool — cold, the kind of cold that burns, that makes fingers clumsy and slow."
14"She heard it — a long, measured breath released from lungs that were not hers, from a mouth she couldn't see, close enough that if there had been warmth behind it she would have felt it on her face."
15"Every instinct she had was screaming in two directions at once — run and stay, flee and freeze — and the contradiction locked her in place as effectively as a hand on her collar."
16"Not moved — shifted, the way a picture shifts when you adjust the angle of the frame."
17"She caught the suggestion of limbs — too many, and too long, bending at joints that had no anatomical basis — before it settled again into that pillar of focused attention."
18"She felt them before she saw them — soft petals brushing against her ankles, stalks rising through the moss with a sound like whispered conversation."
19"It caught the petals closest to her boots — white bellflower, purple foxglove, flowers she couldn't name with colors she had no words for, all opening in a tide that swept outward from where she stood toward the standing stones and beyond."
20"She could feel it — a change in pressure, like the pop of altitude in an airplane cabin, and with it a sound so faint she wasn't sure she heard it at all."
21"The pendant swung on its chain, pointing straight ahead through the gap between the first and second stones, and its light caught something she hadn't seen before — a path, narrow and worn, leading into the clearing."
22"The standing stones passed on either side, their carved surfaces catching the pendant's light in fragments — a curve here, a straight line there, symbols that tugged at comprehension without granting it."
23"But the world tilted on an axis she couldn't name, and for a disorienting moment she stood on the skin of something vast and breathing, a landscape that was also a living thing, and the sky above her — she could see the sky now, though it held no moon and no stars she recognized — was the color of old bruises, purple-black and faintly luminous."
24"The pendant pulsed once — warm, steady, almost reassuring — and went still."
25"She felt it without looking — the closure, the quiet click of a lock turning in a door she could no longer see."
26"A third time, directly ahead, between her and the silver tree, and this time she saw the flowers part and close as something moved through them — something that left no trail and cast no shadow and disturbed nothing except the blossoms it passed through."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2106
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount65
adverbRatio0.030864197530864196
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.0052231718898385565
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences178
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences178
mean12.02
std11.51
cv0.958
sampleLengths
017
127
236
34
413
55
63
79
813
93
105
117
127
138
1418
153
168
171
187
193
205
2114
223
232
2431
253
2618
272
282
2913
307
3130
324
331
341
354
3626
371
383
394
409
4118
426
435
441
4523
4616
473
4815
494
44.38% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.28651685393258425
totalSentences178
uniqueOpeners51
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences153
matches
0"Just that steady, tidal pulse,"
1"Then her torch flickered."
2"Just that impossible warmth fading"
3"Just absorption, as if the"
4"Then the wildflowers at her"
5"Then again, to her left."
ratio0.039
99.74% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount46
totalSentences153
matches
0"She had memorized the route"
1"She shouldn't have come alone."
2"She knew that."
3"It will not open for"
4"She swept the torch in"
5"She counted to thirty, listening."
6"She kept moving."
7"She had learned not to"
8"She felt it before she"
9"She was close."
10"She thumbed the power button."
11"She held it up and"
12"She could see nothing."
13"She could hear her own"
14"Her voice came back wrong."
15"She took a step backward."
16"Her heel found a root"
17"She pulled her hand away"
18"She had read about them"
19"They stood before the Romans"
ratio0.301
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount109
totalSentences153
matches
0"The last bus from Richmond"
1"Rory walked the gravel path"
2"She had memorized the route"
3"She shouldn't have come alone."
4"She knew that."
5"Eva would have said so,"
6"The Grove remembers debts, Aurora."
7"It will not open for"
8"A branch cracked somewhere to"
9"The sound was sharp, deliberate,"
10"Rory stopped walking."
11"She swept the torch in"
12"The pale scar of a"
13"Nothing that moved."
14"She counted to thirty, listening."
15"Wind sifted through the canopy"
16"Richmond Park at night should"
17"She kept moving."
18"The pendant grew warmer with"
19"She had learned not to"
ratio0.712
32.68% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences153
matches
0"As if whatever stood in"
ratio0.007
55.98% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences74
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"She had read about them — or rather, she had read Isolde's oblique descriptions, scattered through three separate napkin notes like a scavenger hunt designed by…"
1"She felt the change in the air before she understood it — a dampness, floral and green, the smell of growing things in a season that should have killed them."
2"Not cool — cold, the kind of cold that burns, that makes fingers clumsy and slow."
3"She caught the suggestion of limbs — too many, and too long, bending at joints that had no anatomical basis — before it settled again into that pillar of focuse…"
4"It caught the petals closest to her boots — white bellflower, purple foxglove, flowers she couldn't name with colors she had no words for, all opening in a tide…"
5"Something older, embedded in the stone and the soil and the impossible flowers, a frequency that resonated in the spaces between her ribs."
6"The standing stones passed on either side, their carved surfaces catching the pendant's light in fragments — a curve here, a straight line there, symbols that t…"
7"But the world tilted on an axis she couldn't name, and for a disorienting moment she stood on the skin of something vast and breathing, a landscape that was als…"
8"Wildflowers in every direction, knee-high and trembling, and at the center of the clearing a single tree that was not an oak, was not any species she could name…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags0
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
88.4911%