Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTZ1RPEFMXTVF8K931PYF7V

Run Details

Duration:
1m 1s
Cost:
$0.053594
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The transition tore the air apart with the sound of tearing canvas. Aurora stumbled, the damp chill of a London midnight replaced instantly by a wall of suffocating heat. She dropped to one knee, gasping, her lungs seizing against the sudden density of the atmosphere. It didn’t smell like air. It smelled like a bakery burning down inside a winery—yeast, charred sugar, and the thick, dizzying fumes of alcohol. She choked, wiping watering eyes with the back of her hand. The concrete she expected to scrape her palms was gone. Instead, her fingers sank into moss that felt unnervingly like velvet, warm and pulsing with a faint, rhythmic thrum. A shadow elongated across the vibrant green turf, stretching out until it detached itself from the ground. It rose, twisting and knitting together until it formed a towering, roughly humanoid silhouette. Two violet lights ignited within the darkness of the face, burning with a cold, spectral intensity. "Breathe shallowly, Aurora." Nyx’s voice did not come from a mouth but seemed to rustle through the strange, heavy leaves surrounding them, a whisper carried on a wind that wasn’t blowing. " The air here is rich. Too rich for mortal lungs to process all at once." Aurora forced herself to take small, measured sips of the atmosphere. She stood, blinking rapidly. "You could have mentioned the atmosphere is essentially edible before we jumped." "And spoil the surprise?" The shadow shifted, looking less like a solid figure and more like a hole punched in the fabric of the world. "Welcome to Dymas. The Garden of Excess." She finally looked up. The sky was the wrong color. No sun hung overhead, yet the world was bathed in a perpetual, golden-hour glow. The heavens were a swirling expanse of warm amber, streaked with veins of bruised purple clouds that looked heavy enough to bruise the earth if they fell. It was beautiful, in the way a storm front is beautiful right before it destroys a house. Aurora brushed a strand of black hair from her face, her bright blue eyes scanning the perimeter. "It looks... peaceful. I expected fire and brimstone. Or at least cages." "Hel is rarely what mortals expect. Punishment here is not always inflicted with whips." Nyx glided forward, their feet making no sound on the lush ground. "Come. Standing still attracts the flora." Aurora checked her belt. The Fae-forged blade Isolde had given her sat snug in its sheath, the moonsilver hilt cool against her hip. It was the only thing in this sweltering heat that didn't feel feverish. Against her chest, hidden beneath her shirt, the Heartstone pendant hammered a slow, heavy rhythm against her sternum, syncing with the strange pulse of the ground. She followed the shade. They weren't in a wasteland; they were in a vineyard. But the scale was monstrous. Grapevines as thick as ancient oaks twisted into natural archways overhead, their bark glistening with a sticky, golden resin. The leaves were the size of dinner tables, casting dappled, amber shadows over the path. Hanging from the twisted wood were clusters of grapes, each heavy, dark orb the size of a human head. They shone with a luster that looked almost plastic, too perfect to be real. A single droplet of juice fell from a cluster high above, splashing onto a flat stone near Aurora’s boot. It sizzled, eating into the rock with a hiss. "Acid?" Aurora stepped wide around the splatter, her boots sinking into the unnervingly soft soil. "Concentrated nectar," Nyx corrected, drifting through a patch of tall, fern-like plants that recoiled from their shadowy form. "Intoxicating enough to stop a human heart in minutes. Do not eat anything. Do not drink anything. If you feel thirst, bite your tongue." "Noted." She rubbed the crescent-shaped scar on her wrist, a nervous habit she hadn't managed to shake since childhood. The path wound deeper into the overgrowth. The silence here was heavy, lacking the ambient noise of insects or birds. Instead, there was a wet, squelching sound coming from the roots of the massive vines, like boots stuck in mud, repeated a thousand times over. "What is that noise?" Nyx paused, their form flickering at the edges as if the amber light was trying to digest them. "The roots feeding. The soil in Dymas is... enriched." Aurora looked down. The moss gave way to dark, rich earth. She kicked a clump aside. Beneath the top layer, something white gleamed. She squinted, crouching for a closer look. It wasn't stone. It was smooth, curved, and unmistakably bone. A rib, perhaps. A chill that had nothing to do with temperature spiked down her spine. "Nyx." "I know." The Shade didn't turn back. "The orchards of Gluttony require potent fertilizer. Those who succumb to the feasts of Prince Belphegor eventually serve the realm in other ways." Aurora straightened, wiping her boot vigorously on a patch of grass. The beauty of the amber sky suddenly felt nauseating. The sweet smell of the air curdled in her throat. She gripped the hilt of the leaf-shaped dagger tighter. "We need to find the rift point. The Veil is weak here, right? That’s what the readings said." "The Veil is thin, yes. But the geography of Dymas is fluid. It shifts based on desire." Nyx pointed a long, shadowy finger deeper into the grove. The path opened up into a clearing dominated by a single, colossal tree. Its leaves were gold, and it bore fruits that looked like pomegranates, but their skin was translucent, revealing swirling crimson light inside. "That way. The Heartstone. What does it tell you?" Aurora pulled the pendant from her shirt. The gemstone, roughly the size of her thumbnail, was glowing with a deep, violent red light. It felt hot, almost burning her skin. "It’s pulling," she said, holding the silver chain so the stone dangled freely. It swung abruptly toward the golden tree, straining against gravity. "Toward the tree." "The Tree of Bounty," Nyx whispered, their voice sharpening. "A trap. But also a landmark. Stay close to my shadow, Aurora. The air grows heavier here." As they approached the tree, the sensory assault intensified. The scent of roasting meat became overpowering, making Aurora’s stomach growl with a ferocity that hurt. Saliva flooded her mouth. The rational part of her brain screamed that she wasn't hungry—she’d eaten a sandwich before leaving the flat above Silas’ bar—but her body was reacting to a primal, supernatural signal. "I’m starving," she muttered, the words thick. "It is not real hunger," Nyx murmured, sliding between her and the tree. The violet eyes narrowed. "Focus on the cold of the blade. Focus on the scar on your wrist. Anchor yourself." Aurora clenched her left hand, digging her nails into the old injury until the sharp sting cut through the haze of appetite. The tree loomed over them, its branches bowing low, offering the crimson glowing fruit. Underneath the tree, the ground was littered with what looked like statues at first glance. Aurora stepped closer, squinting through the golden haze. They weren't statues. They were figures, seated or lying in varying states of repose, overgrown with vines and moss. She approached the nearest one—a man in clothes that looked centuries out of date, ruffles and velvet now stained green. His mouth was open, jaw unhinged, stuffed with the golden moss. His eyes were wide, glassy, and fixed on the fruit hanging above him. "Is he..." Aurora trailed off, realizing the man’s chest was moving. It was a shallow, pathetic rattle of breath. Vines had grown into his skin, weaving through his clothes, anchoring him to the earth. He was being digested, very slowly, while the tree kept him alive. "A guest that never left," Nyx said, their form growing taller, spiking with agitation. "Do not touch him. You cannot help him. He is part of the architecture now." Aurora backed away, bile rising in her throat. The horror of the place wasn't violence; it was stagnation. It was consumption without end. The beautiful amber light caught the gloss of the trapped man's eyes, making them twinkle as if he were crying. "We need to move," Aurora said, her voice shaking but firm. She turned her back on the tree and the living statues. "The pendant is pulling past the tree. Through the roots." She scrambled over the massive, knotted root system, the wood feeling slick and oily under her hands. Nyx floated beside her, slashing at encroaching vines with shadowy tendrils that solidified into razors for split seconds. Beyond the tree, the terrain dropped sharply. A valley sprawled out below them, bathed in the same oppressive gold light. But here, the vineyards gave way to architecture. Great banqueting halls with no roofs stood amidst the orchards, long tables stretching for miles, piled high with mounds of food that steamed and rotted in the heat. Tiny figures—demons, or perhaps the helbound chefs Isolde had warned of—scuttled around the tables. Even from this distance, the clatter of silverware and the roar of a thousand conversations drifted up like the hum of a disturbed hornet nest. "The kitchens of Belphegor," Nyx hissed, the sound like steam escaping a pipe. "We are too close to the center. The Veil tear won't be in the heart of the realm; it will be on the frayed edges." Aurora held up the pendant again. It was pulsing frantically now, the red light casting harsh shadows on her face. It didn't point toward the banquet halls. It pointed down, directly into the ravine below the cliff they stood on, into a thick, swirling mist that smelled of vinegar and old wine. "Down," Aurora said, peering over the edge. The drop was substantial, disappearing into the fog. "Into the fog." "The dregs," Nyx noted, drifting over the precipice to look down. "Where the waste flows. Disgusting, but logical. The Veil is often weakest where reality wears thin." Aurora took a breath, holding the poisonous air in her lungs for a second before exhaling. She drew the Fae blade, the moonsilver gleaming with a pure, white light that cut through the amber haze. "Well," she said, looking for a handhold on the oily rocks leading down. "At least it doesn't smell like roast chicken anymore." "Careful, Aurora," Nyx warned, dissolving into a cloud of smoke to scout the descent. "In Dymas, even the rocks are hungry." She lowered herself over the edge, her boots scraping against stone that felt shivering warm, and began the climb into the dark.
created_at"2026-02-19T12:47:26.931Z" 2/19/2026, 12:47:26 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
88.64% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1761
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
3
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"very"
2"slowly"
3"sharply"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
40.37% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1761
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"chill"
count2
1
word"velvet"
count2
2
word"rhythmic"
count1
3
word"spectral"
count1
4
word"intensity"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count1
6
word"measured"
count1
7
word"scanning"
count1
8
word"pulse"
count1
9
word"glistening"
count1
10
word"perfect"
count1
11
word"silence"
count1
12
word"down her spine"
count1
13
word"desire"
count1
14
word"stomach"
count1
15
word"loomed"
count1
16
word"oppressive"
count1
17
word"amidst"
count1
18
word"gleaming"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"velvet"
2"rhythmic"
3"spectral"
4"intensity"
5"whisper"
6"measured"
7"scanning"
8"pulse"
9"glistening"
10"perfect"
11"silence"
12"down her spine"
13"desire"
14"stomach"
15"loomed"
16"oppressive"
17"amidst"
18"gleaming"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences113
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences113
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"managed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences135
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1752
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
85.76% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions38
wordCount1401
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.28
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
London1
Aurora18
Fae-forged1
Isolde2
Heartstone1
Nyx12
Shade1
Fae2
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Isolde"
2"Nyx"
3"Shade"
places
0"London"
globalScore0.858
windowScore1
71.88% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences96
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"smelled like a bakery burning down inside"
1"looked like pomegranates, but their skin"
2"looked like statues at first glance"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1752
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences135
matches
0"screamed that she"
72.79% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs45
mean38.93
std15.76
cv0.405
sampleLengths
069
140
247
347
427
532
668
729
832
962
1053
1161
1215
1342
1468
1527
1643
1714
1830
1957
2071
2130
2226
2326
2459
257
2633
2736
2842
2944
3046
3129
3243
3332
3435
3556
3639
3738
3852
3918
4027
4135
4222
4321
4422
92.84% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences113
matches
0"was gone"
1"was bathed"
2"was littered"
3"being digested"
64.50% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs246
matches
0"wasn’t blowing"
1"was trying"
2"was glowing"
3"were crying"
4"was pulsing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences135
ratio0.052
matches
0"It smelled like a bakery burning down inside a winery—yeast, charred sugar, and the thick, dizzying fumes of alcohol."
1"They weren't in a wasteland; they were in a vineyard."
2"The rational part of her brain screamed that she wasn't hungry—she’d eaten a sandwich before leaving the flat above Silas’ bar—but her body was reacting to a primal, supernatural signal."
3"She approached the nearest one—a man in clothes that looked centuries out of date, ruffles and velvet now stained green."
4"The horror of the place wasn't violence; it was stagnation."
5"Tiny figures—demons, or perhaps the helbound chefs Isolde had warned of—scuttled around the tables."
6"\"We are too close to the center. The Veil tear won't be in the heart of the realm; it will be on the frayed edges.\""
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount954
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"deep, violent red light."
adverbCount37
adverbRatio0.03878406708595388
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.013626834381551363
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences135
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences135
mean12.98
std6.66
cv0.513
sampleLengths
012
117
216
35
419
511
610
719
817
914
1016
1131
1216
1311
144
1512
1625
177
184
196
2014
2127
2217
2317
2412
2526
266
274
2819
2913
3026
314
3210
335
3419
3515
3619
3714
3819
399
4015
4118
4224
4319
447
4513
4625
474
4818
499
54.07% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.37777777777777777
totalSentences135
uniqueOpeners51
59.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences113
matches
0"Instead, her fingers sank into"
1"Instead, there was a wet,"
ratio0.018
78.41% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount40
totalSentences113
matches
0"She dropped to one knee,"
1"It didn’t smell like air."
2"It smelled like a bakery"
3"She choked, wiping watering eyes"
4"It rose, twisting and knitting"
5"She stood, blinking rapidly."
6"She finally looked up."
7"It was beautiful, in the"
8"It was the only thing"
9"She followed the shade."
10"They weren't in a wasteland;"
11"They shone with a luster"
12"It sizzled, eating into the"
13"She rubbed the crescent-shaped scar"
14"She kicked a clump aside."
15"She squinted, crouching for a"
16"It wasn't stone."
17"It was smooth, curved, and"
18"She gripped the hilt of"
19"Its leaves were gold, and"
ratio0.354
26.37% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount98
totalSentences113
matches
0"The transition tore the air"
1"Aurora stumbled, the damp chill"
2"She dropped to one knee,"
3"It didn’t smell like air."
4"It smelled like a bakery"
5"She choked, wiping watering eyes"
6"The concrete she expected to"
7"A shadow elongated across the"
8"It rose, twisting and knitting"
9"Nyx’s voice did not come"
10"Aurora forced herself to take"
11"She stood, blinking rapidly."
12"The shadow shifted, looking less"
13"She finally looked up."
14"The sky was the wrong"
15"The heavens were a swirling"
16"It was beautiful, in the"
17"Aurora brushed a strand of"
18"Nyx glided forward, their feet"
19"Aurora checked her belt."
ratio0.867
44.25% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences113
matches
0"Even from this distance, the"
ratio0.009
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences59
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"She dropped to one knee, gasping, her lungs seizing against the sudden density of the atmosphere."
1"Instead, her fingers sank into moss that felt unnervingly like velvet, warm and pulsing with a faint, rhythmic thrum."
2"The heavens were a swirling expanse of warm amber, streaked with veins of bruised purple clouds that looked heavy enough to bruise the earth if they fell."
3"Nyx paused, their form flickering at the edges as if the amber light was trying to digest them."
4"Its leaves were gold, and it bore fruits that looked like pomegranates, but their skin was translucent, revealing swirling crimson light inside."
5"The scent of roasting meat became overpowering, making Aurora’s stomach growl with a ferocity that hurt."
6"The tree loomed over them, its branches bowing low, offering the crimson glowing fruit."
7"She approached the nearest one—a man in clothes that looked centuries out of date, ruffles and velvet now stained green."
8"Vines had grown into his skin, weaving through his clothes, anchoring him to the earth."
9"The beautiful amber light caught the gloss of the trapped man's eyes, making them twinkle as if he were crying."
10"Nyx floated beside her, slashing at encroaching vines with shadowy tendrils that solidified into razors for split seconds."
11"Great banqueting halls with no roofs stood amidst the orchards, long tables stretching for miles, piled high with mounds of food that steamed and rotted in the …"
12"She lowered herself over the edge, her boots scraping against stone that felt shivering warm, and began the climb into the dark."
5.95% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"Nyx glided, their feet making no sound on the lush ground"
1"Aurora stepped, her boots sinking into the unnervingly soft soil"
2"Nyx whispered, their voice sharpening"
3"Nyx said, their form growing taller, spiking with agitation"
4"Aurora said, her voice shaking but firm"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount8
fancyTags
0"Nyx corrected (correct)"
1"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
2"her brain screamed (scream)"
3"she muttered (mutter)"
4"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
5"Nyx hissed (hiss)"
6"Nyx noted (note)"
7"Nyx warned (warn)"
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.31
leniency0.619
rawRatio0.615
effectiveRatio0.381
72.6277%