Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTZ2HQKG582QQGBD52D5DQC

Run Details

Model:
GPT-5.2
Duration:
1m 18s
Cost:
$0.048412
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rain chopped at the pavement outside The Raven’s Nest and turned the gutters into thin rivers. The green neon sign over the door flickered against wet brick, painting Quinn’s hands the colour of pond scum as she held her warrant card up to block the glare and watched the entrance through the curtain of water. A couple in soaked club wear stumbled out laughing, then disappeared into a waiting cab. A man in a blazer followed, head down, cigarette cupped, smoke torn away by the wind. Quinn kept still. Her leather watch sat heavy against her pulse. The door opened again. Tomás Herrera stepped into the rain with a canvas medic bag slung across his shoulder, the strap cutting a dark line across his chest. The Saint Christopher medallion at his throat flashed when the neon caught it. He paused on the top step and scanned the street, eyes warm and alert, like he measured where the danger came from and how fast it ran. Quinn moved off the wall. “Herrera.” He flinched, then his face hardened. Water ran off his hair in strings. His left forearm—scarred, pale against olive skin—tightened as his hand went to the bag strap. “You followed me out here,” his voice came low, Spanish edges on the consonants. “You want a drink, Detective?” Quinn kept her hands visible, shoulders squared. “I want answers.” “Ask someone who likes you.” A black cab rolled through the puddles and threw a wave of dirty water at the kerb. Quinn stepped back a fraction to avoid the splash. “You’ve been operating without a licence,” Quinn’s words cut clean through the rain. “You’ve been seen at scenes you don’t have any right to be at. People keep turning up patched together who should’ve bled out on the way to A&E. And you keep turning up near Silas’ bar.” Tomás’s gaze slid past her, down the street. His jaw worked once. “You lot always start with ‘people keep turning up’.” He lifted his chin at the door behind him. “You want to arrest me for handing someone a bandage?” “I want to know who you’ve been treating. I want to know what you’ve been buying.” His fingers twitched on the strap. “Buying? In Soho? You think I pop out for a miracle and a packet of crisps?” Quinn stepped closer until she could smell antiseptic beneath the wet wool of her coat. “You carry that bag like it’s a body.” Tomás’s eyes narrowed. “You shouldn’t be out here on your own,” he muttered. Quinn’s mouth stayed flat. “That concern won’t keep you from a cell.” A beat hung between them, thin as a wire. The bar’s door opened behind him, letting out a wedge of warm light and a breath of old spirits. Tomás’s gaze flicked to it, then back to Quinn. “You don’t know what you’re poking.” Quinn’s throat tightened. A flash of another night—blue lights on wet tarmac, her partner’s body bag zipper catching on a torn sleeve, DS Morris’s name on a tag swinging as the rain slapped it. She swallowed it down. “I know when someone runs,” Quinn answered. “And I know when someone’s hiding.” Tomás’s lips peeled back, not a smile. “Then chase.” He turned and broke into a sprint. Quinn launched after him, boots striking water from the pavement. Her coat dragged at her legs; she shrugged it off her shoulders and let it slap against her back like a sail. Tomás cut across the road between two cars, forcing a delivery driver to brake with a horn blast. Quinn followed, one hand up to shield her face from spray, the other reaching for her radio on instinct before she remembered she’d told her unit she wanted eyes only. Tomás didn’t glance back. He ran like he’d done it before, sliding around pedestrians, using bodies as shields. A group under an awning jumped as he shoved through. “Police!” Quinn’s voice ripped out. “Stop!” A man with a takeaway cup spun, then retreated into a doorway. Nobody stepped in. London kept moving. Tomás ducked into an alley between a closed record shop and a kebab place with its shutters down. Quinn followed and the world narrowed to wet brick and the harsh stink of old urine. Tomás vaulted a stack of black bags. One split as he landed, spilling wet cardboard and rotting food into the water. Quinn’s foot caught on the edge. She kicked through and kept her balance, teeth clenched. “You’re making this worse!” she shouted, breath burning. Tomás’s voice floated back, tight. “You don’t know what worse looks like.” He burst out of the alley into a wider street and cut north, away from Soho’s glow into darker stretches where the street lamps looked tired. Quinn’s lungs pulled hard. Her jaw ached from the clamp of discipline she’d carried for years. He turned into a side street where the road dipped, then into a stairwell that led down to an older part of the city—concrete steps slick with algae, the kind the council forgot existed. A rusted metal sign warned about CCTV. The camera above it hung smashed, its lens gone. Quinn hit the first step, boots skidding. She grabbed the rail and felt a film of slime under her palm. Below, Tomás’s shoes slapped wet concrete as he descended fast, using the rail for balance. The medic bag banged against his ribs. “You’re going underground,” Quinn called after him. “That won’t save you.” “It might save you,” he threw back without turning. The air changed as the steps dropped. The rain noise faded, replaced by a low hum that rose from beneath the street. Quinn’s breath fogged in front of her. At the bottom, a corridor opened—old Tube tiles stained brown, ceiling low, fluorescent lights dead. Someone had strung bare bulbs along a cable, their weak glow pulsing when water dripped onto the wire. Painted arrows on the wall pointed deeper, the paint fresh enough to shine. Tomás took the corridor at speed. Quinn followed, hand drifting to her shoulder holster under her soaked shirt. She didn’t draw. Her world had rules, even here. A figure stepped out of a recess ahead, hood up, face hidden. Quinn’s pulse spiked. The figure’s hand rose, palm out. Tomás didn’t slow. He dug into his pocket as he ran and threw something small and pale. It spun through the air and the hooded figure snatched it. The hood lifted enough to show a mouth and a nose—skin pitted, lips cracked. “Bone for bone,” the figure rasped. Tomás shoved past, shoulder brushing the figure’s chest. The hooded one didn’t fight him. The figure’s gaze snapped to Quinn and held. Quinn slowed a fraction, eyes locking on what the figure held: a token shaped like a knucklebone, drilled through and threaded on wire. It glistened wet under the bulb. “Evening,” Quinn’s voice came even, clipped. “Metropolitan Police.” The hooded figure’s laugh sounded like a cough. “Police,” it echoed, tasting the word. “No uniforms down here.” Quinn took a step forward. “Where does that corridor lead?” The figure lifted the bone token higher, like an answer and a dare. “Where you got no warrant.” Quinn’s gaze slid past, trying to catch Tomás’s shadow. He had already vanished around a bend. “Give me that token.” The hooded figure tucked it away. “Pay.” “I’m not buying access to—” “Then you stay up top with the rain and the drunks,” the figure cut in, voice rough. “Down here? You knock on the right door. You don’t kick it in.” Quinn’s fingers flexed. The corridor air smelled of damp plaster, old electricity, and something else underneath—metallic, like pennies held too long in a sweaty fist. “What’s your name?” Quinn asked. The hooded figure shifted weight and water dripped from the hem of its sleeve. “What’s yours?” Quinn didn’t give it. She lunged. The figure moved with a jerk, quick and practiced, stepping aside and letting Quinn’s momentum carry her past. A hand hooked at Quinn’s belt. Something tugged. Quinn spun and caught the figure’s wrist. The skin felt cold, dry despite the wet air. The fingers clamped hard. “Don’t,” the figure warned, a hiss between teeth. Quinn twisted the wrist, forcing the hand open. A small object dropped into her palm—bone, smooth, warm from being carried. The figure’s other hand darted toward Quinn’s throat. Quinn drove an elbow into the ribs beneath the hoodie. The figure grunted and folded. “Tell your mates,” Quinn breathed, crushing the bone token in her fist. “If they’re selling things that get people killed, I’ll find them.” The hooded figure straightened in a slow sway, head tilted. “You don’t get it,” it muttered. “If you go down there with that badge in your head, they’ll smell it.” Quinn backed away, eyes scanning for a second attacker. None came. Just the corridor, the dripping, the bulbs pulsing. She ran. The corridor widened into a disused platform. Old adverts clung to the tiled walls, their faces peeled away to leave pale ghosts of smiles. Newer signs hung crooked—hand-painted boards with symbols Quinn didn’t recognise, arrows pointing toward what looked like a service tunnel. People moved through the gloom in clusters, heads down, hoods up, bags held close. Not commuters. Not tourists. A tall man with a shaved head rolled a trolley loaded with glass jars. A woman with glittering rings on every finger leaned against a pillar and watched Quinn pass with eyes that held no question, only appraisal. A pair of youths in trainers argued in low voices over a small cage covered with cloth that shifted from the inside. Quinn’s stomach tightened. Tomás ran across the platform and shoved through a gap where a maintenance door had been propped open. Light spilled from inside—amber, smoky, alive with motion. Quinn chased him to the threshold and stopped short. Sound poured out. Not the clean echo of a station. This sounded like a market jammed into stone: voices haggling, laughter that turned sharp, the clink of glass, a distant thud that might have been music or machinery. Incense tangled with the smell of damp earth. Someone cooked meat somewhere, fat spitting into flame. Quinn leaned in and saw the world beyond the door. Stalls crowded a long tunnel, their awnings patched from velvet, tarpaulin, old flags. Lanterns hung from pipes and cables like trapped stars. Tables overflowed with items that didn’t belong in any evidence locker she’d ever signed for: vials of liquid that glowed faint blue, bundles of dried herbs tied with hair, knives etched with symbols that seemed to shift when her eyes tried to focus. A man displayed teeth on a velvet cloth as if they were pearls. A woman offered tiny bottles to a customer whose pupils looked stretched wide in the low light. Tomás’s dark head bobbed through the crowd, then vanished. Quinn stood in the doorway, rainwater dripping off her hair onto the concrete. Her hand closed around the bone token until it pressed into her skin. Her other hand hovered near her holster. A voice near her elbow cut in, flat and amused. “You lost, officer?” Quinn turned. A teenager leaned against the wall, too thin for the coat he wore. His face carried bruises in yellow stages, and his eyes held that quick, hard shine of someone who learned how to read danger before he learned how to spell. A small tattoo marked his neck: a simple line drawing of a crow. Quinn kept her stance firm. “This place has a name?” He pushed off the wall and sniffed. “You don’t know, you don’t belong.” “I asked for a name.” “The Veil Market,” he replied, like he enjoyed the taste. “You got the token. You don’t got the manners.” Quinn’s gaze returned to the tunnel. Men and women brushed past each other with the wary precision of pickpockets and prey. Nobody looked surprised to see a stranger. They looked hungry to see what she carried. A broad-shouldered bouncer stood just inside, arms crossed, face hidden behind a half-mask carved from dark wood. The mask’s mouth curled into a grin that never shifted. The bouncer’s head turned toward Quinn. Not eyes—she couldn’t see eyes—but attention landed on her like a hand on the back of her neck. The teen’s voice dropped. “Turn around,” he warned. “You can still climb the stairs and pretend you never smelled it.” Quinn’s throat tightened again, and Morris’s name flashed like a bruise. She remembered the unanswered questions, the reports that read clean while her gut rotted. She remembered the way the case had slipped through her fingers like water. Tomás’s medallion had caught the neon. Tomás’s bag had bounced heavy. Quinn lifted the token. The teen’s eyes widened. “You nicked that?” Quinn stepped over the threshold. “Police,” she called into the noise, voice steady enough to cut a line through the chatter. “Tomás Herrera. I need a word.” The market’s sound didn’t stop. It bent, shifted, watched. The wooden mask turned toward her in a slow tilt. Quinn tightened her grip on the bone token and walked down into the Veil Market.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences55
tagDensity0.345
leniency0.691
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2201
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
65.92% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2201
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"pulse"
count2
2
word"scanned"
count1
3
word"measured"
count1
4
word"flicked"
count1
5
word"echoed"
count1
6
word"weight"
count1
7
word"scanning"
count1
8
word"gloom"
count1
9
word"stomach"
count1
10
word"echo"
count1
11
word"velvet"
count2
12
word"etched"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"pulse"
2"scanned"
3"measured"
4"flicked"
5"echoed"
6"weight"
7"scanning"
8"gloom"
9"stomach"
10"echo"
11"velvet"
12"etched"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences183
matches
0"looked surprised"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences183
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences218
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2186
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions83
wordCount1859
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity2.8
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity6
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Quinn52
Herrera1
Saint1
Christopher1
Spanish1
Tomás19
Morris2
Soho1
Tube1
Veil1
Market1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Herrera"
2"Saint"
3"Christopher"
4"Spanish"
5"Tomás"
6"Morris"
7"Tube"
8"Market"
places
0"Raven"
1"Soho"
2"Veil"
globalScore0.101
windowScore0
74.81% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences133
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"sounded like a cough"
1"looked like a service tunnel"
2"sounded like a market jammed into stone: v"
3"symbols that seemed to shift when her eyes tried to focus"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2186
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences218
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs107
mean20.43
std17.54
cv0.858
sampleLengths
055
131
211
368
45
51
628
719
810
95
1026
1149
1212
1328
1416
1522
1623
173
1810
1912
2037
216
2238
2313
249
257
2680
2728
286
2918
3034
3121
3215
338
3412
3542
3650
3720
3822
3911
409
4129
4246
436
4421
4521
4628
4714
486
4922
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences183
matches
0"being carried"
1"been propped"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs362
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences218
ratio0.05
matches
0"His left forearm—scarred, pale against olive skin—tightened as his hand went to the bag strap."
1"A flash of another night—blue lights on wet tarmac, her partner’s body bag zipper catching on a torn sleeve, DS Morris’s name on a tag swinging as the rain slapped it."
2"Her coat dragged at her legs; she shrugged it off her shoulders and let it slap against her back like a sail."
3"He turned into a side street where the road dipped, then into a stairwell that led down to an older part of the city—concrete steps slick with algae, the kind the council forgot existed."
4"At the bottom, a corridor opened—old Tube tiles stained brown, ceiling low, fluorescent lights dead."
5"The hood lifted enough to show a mouth and a nose—skin pitted, lips cracked."
6"The corridor air smelled of damp plaster, old electricity, and something else underneath—metallic, like pennies held too long in a sweaty fist."
7"A small object dropped into her palm—bone, smooth, warm from being carried."
8"Newer signs hung crooked—hand-painted boards with symbols Quinn didn’t recognise, arrows pointing toward what looked like a service tunnel."
9"Light spilled from inside—amber, smoky, alive with motion."
10"Not eyes—she couldn’t see eyes—but attention landed on her like a hand on the back of her neck."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1874
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount46
adverbRatio0.02454642475987193
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0010672358591248667
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences218
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences218
mean10.03
std7.1
cv0.708
sampleLengths
016
139
215
316
43
58
64
724
813
927
105
111
126
137
1415
1514
165
177
183
195
2017
219
2213
2336
248
254
2618
2710
2816
296
3016
3115
328
333
3410
354
368
379
3819
399
406
413
4231
434
447
456
467
472
487
4910
43.12% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.26146788990825687
totalSentences218
uniqueOpeners57
19.49% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences171
matches
0"Just the corridor, the dripping,"
ratio0.006
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount36
totalSentences171
matches
0"Her leather watch sat heavy"
1"He paused on the top"
2"He flinched, then his face"
3"His left forearm—scarred, pale against"
4"his voice came low, Spanish"
5"His jaw worked once."
6"He lifted his chin at"
7"His fingers twitched on the"
8"She swallowed it down."
9"He turned and broke into"
10"Her coat dragged at her"
11"He ran like he’d done"
12"She kicked through and kept"
13"she shouted, breath burning"
14"He burst out of the"
15"Her jaw ached from the"
16"He turned into a side"
17"She grabbed the rail and"
18"he threw back without turning"
19"She didn’t draw."
ratio0.211
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount162
totalSentences171
matches
0"Rain chopped at the pavement"
1"The green neon sign over"
2"A couple in soaked club"
3"A man in a blazer"
4"Quinn kept still."
5"Her leather watch sat heavy"
6"The door opened again."
7"Tomás Herrera stepped into the"
8"The Saint Christopher medallion at"
9"He paused on the top"
10"Quinn moved off the wall."
11"He flinched, then his face"
12"Water ran off his hair"
13"His left forearm—scarred, pale against"
14"his voice came low, Spanish"
15"Quinn kept her hands visible,"
16"A black cab rolled through"
17"Quinn stepped back a fraction"
18"Quinn’s words cut clean through"
19"Tomás’s gaze slid past her,"
ratio0.947
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences171
matches(empty)
ratio0
93.25% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences72
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"A woman with glittering rings on every finger leaned against a pillar and watched Quinn pass with eyes that held no question, only appraisal."
1"This sounded like a market jammed into stone: voices haggling, laughter that turned sharp, the clink of glass, a distant thud that might have been music or mach…"
2"Tables overflowed with items that didn’t belong in any evidence locker she’d ever signed for: vials of liquid that glowed faint blue, bundles of dried herbs tie…"
3"A man displayed teeth on a velvet cloth as if they were pearls."
4"She remembered the unanswered questions, the reports that read clean while her gut rotted."
72.37% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"she shouted, breath burning"
1"she called, voice steady enough to cut a line through the chatter"
40.91% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"he muttered (mutter)"
1"she shouted (shout)"
2"the figure warned (warn)"
3"Quinn breathed (breathe)"
4"it muttered (mutter)"
5"he warned (warn)"
dialogueSentences55
tagDensity0.2
leniency0.4
rawRatio0.545
effectiveRatio0.218
76.9960%