Run: 2026-02-19-01KHV72HMMDY50E0V9QMEDQG6F

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The knock came at half past nine, sharp and deliberate, nothing like Eva's frantic rap-rap-rap-rap-pause-rap. Rory set down her fork, rice still steaming in its container, and crossed the cramped flat in three steps. Ptolemy lifted his tabby head from the pile of scrolls he'd flattened, tracking her with the mild suspicion of a cat who'd seen too much. She checked the peephole. The breath left her. Lucien Moreau stood in the hallway, immaculate as ever in his charcoal suit, ivory cane hooked over one forearm. He'd tilted his chin up slightly, as though he knew she was looking. The amber eye and the black one both aimed straight at the door. She undid two of the three deadbolts, left the last one, and opened the door to the length of the chain. "Eva's not here." "I know. I came for you." The chain scraped against its housing as she considered him. A faint trace of cigarette smoke and something warmer, cedar or vetiver, drifted through the gap. His platinum hair was slicked back with its usual severity. Not a strand out of place. "How did you get the address?" "I'm an information broker, Rory." The faintest flicker at the corner of his mouth. "It would be embarrassing if I couldn't find a woman who delivers takeaway." She unlatched the chain. He moved into the flat with the unhurried economy of a man accustomed to rooms that weren't his, pausing just inside the doorway to take in the familiar chaos. Books stacked in towers that obeyed no architectural logic. Scrolls unrolled across every flat surface, held open at their corners by mugs and mismatched salt shakers. The takeaway container she'd abandoned on the coffee table, chopsticks still upright in the rice. "Eva will be thrilled to know you've preserved her system," he said. "What do you want, Lucien." Not a question, the way she said it. A door, left slightly ajar. He turned from his survey of the room and found her. She'd crossed her arms, one thumb pressed to the crescent scar on her left wrist, a habit he'd noticed months ago and never mentioned. Her black hair fell to her jaw, slightly damp on one side, like she'd washed her face not long ago. The bright blue eyes gave nothing away. He'd always admired that about her. Infuriating as it was. "The Aldgate job," he said. "Wrapped. Three weeks ago." "The aftermath of the Aldgate job, then." He moved a sheaf of papers aside, checked the chair beneath for anything catastrophic, and sat. Unhurried. Ptolemy dropped from the scrolls and padded toward him with the obscene friendliness cats reserve exclusively for people who don't want them. "Someone's been asking questions. Specifically about you. By name." Something shifted behind her eyes. Not fear. Rory didn't do fear like that, out in the open where you could see it. It went inward, turned into something tight and practical. "Which name." He looked at her. "Laila," he said. The word landed between them like a coin dropped on stone. She uncrossed her arms. Laila was the name she'd used during the Aldgate job, a three-week excavation into a trafficking network that had folded itself inside a legitimate import firm. Rory had gone in as a low-level administrative contact. Lucien had been her handler, in the loosest possible sense, the two of them meeting in car parks and the back rooms of pubs to exchange information and argue about methodology. There'd been one night in particular, a rain-soaked Tuesday in a Whitechapel pub, when the arguing had stopped. She still wasn't sure which of them had been responsible for that. She'd left before he woke. He'd sent precisely one message afterward. *You forgot your jacket.* No punctuation. She'd left him on read for eleven days before responding. *Keep it,* she'd written, and that had been the last of it. "Who's asking," she said. "A man called Prentiss. Mid-level, Avaros-adjacent, which is why I have the pleasure of knowing his name at all." He scratched Ptolemy behind one ear, apparently on autopilot, the cat going boneless with satisfaction against his knee. "He showed your description to two separate contacts of mine. Not your face. Your description." "So he doesn't have eyes on me." "Not yet." "Avaros-adjacent means demon-adjacent." She moved to the coffee table, crouched and rifled through the papers underneath. "Which connects it back to the network." "Presumably someone left standing who didn't appreciate the disruption." She straightened with a battered London A-Z in hand, irrelevant, but her hands needed something. She set it down again. "Why come yourself." Her voice stayed level, but the question underneath it was a different one entirely, and they both knew it. Lucien looked up from the cat. The amber eye and the black one had always disconcerted people, she knew. She'd watched it happen. That instinctive flinch, the rapid recalibration. She'd stopped flinching at them months ago, somewhere between the second and third week of the Aldgate job. Now they just looked like his eyes. "I could have sent a message," he said. "You could have." "I didn't." He lifted Ptolemy off his knee with the careful, slightly reluctant manner of a man who hadn't intended to enjoy that at all, and stood. "The people asking for you aren't amateurs, Rory. Prentiss has a handler above him and that handler has resources. You need to move flats by the end of the week." "I live above a supernatural bar." "Which is excellent for minor hexes and pub quizzes. Less so for organised demonic retaliation." He crossed toward her, two steps, and stopped close enough that she had to tip her chin up slightly to hold his gaze. The cedar-vetiver smell was stronger. "There are safe houses I can arrange." "I'm not going to one of your safe houses." "Why not." She held his gaze and didn't answer. His jaw tightened, a small movement, a muscle working once. His free hand, the one not wrapped around the ivory cane, shifted fractionally toward her and then did not move. "You left," he said quietly. "I know I did." "Without a word." "You got a word. Two, actually." "*Keep it,*" he said, the faint Marseille edge sharpening the vowels in a way it only did when his composure was costing him something, "is not a conversation." "No," she agreed. "It isn't." The A-Z sat between them on the coffee table, the radiator clicked, and Ptolemy wound a figure-of-eight between Lucien's ankles with the smug indifference of a cat who'd already picked a side. Lucien looked down at the cat, then back at her. "You should have called," he said. "So should you." His mouth opened. Closed. The amber eye caught the lamplight and held it, and she watched him reassemble whatever he'd been about to say into something harder and more useful. "Pack a bag," he said. "Prentiss has a contact in Shoreditch. If he has the address by morning, I'd rather not find out what he does with it." Rory picked up the takeaway container, looked at the cold rice, put it down again. "One bag." "One bag." "And I'm not staying anywhere that smells like a hotel." The corner of his mouth moved. "I'll see what I can do." She turned toward the bedroom to pack, and from the doorway she heard the quiet, deliberate sound of him latching all three deadbolts behind her, like he already knew the shape of the threat coming and meant to hold it off for however long he could. Her chest did something inconvenient. She packed faster.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"he said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.348
leniency0.696
rawRatio0.063
effectiveRatio0.043
76.60% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1282
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count5
1
adverb"precisely"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"precisely"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
88.30% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1282
totalAiIsms3
found
0
word"flicker"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count1
2
word"aftermath"
count1
highlights
0"flicker"
1"familiar"
2"aftermath"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences84
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences84
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tended to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences113
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen46
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords8
totalWords1267
ratio0.006
matches
0"You forgot your jacket."
1"Keep it,"
2"Keep it,"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions23
wordCount969
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity0.52
worstName"Ptolemy"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Ptolemy"
discoveredNames
Eva1
Moreau1
Unhurried1
Aldgate2
Tuesday1
Whitechapel1
Ptolemy5
London1
Lucien5
Marseille1
Rory4
persons
0"Eva"
1"Moreau"
2"Ptolemy"
3"Lucien"
4"Rory"
places
0"Whitechapel"
1"London"
2"Marseille"
globalScore1
windowScore1
62.28% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences57
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"ehind one ear, apparently on autopilot, the c"
1"looked like his eyes"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1267
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences113
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs69
mean18.36
std18.56
cv1.011
sampleLengths
015
144
24
34
445
521
63
76
842
96
1027
114
1270
1312
145
1513
1662
1710
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194
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222
234
243
2515
2666
2730
285
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327
332
3423
359
3620
3722
386
3948
408
413
4257
436
4450
459
462
477
4830
495
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences84
matches
0"was slicked"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs169
matches
0"was looking"
1"was costing"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences113
ratio0
matches(empty)
99.29% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount980
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount40
adverbRatio0.04081632653061224
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.012244897959183673
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences113
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences113
mean11.21
std9.09
cv0.811
sampleLengths
015
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225
34
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1310
146
156
1614
1713
184
1929
209
2117
2215
2312
245
258
265
2711
2824
2920
307
316
324
335
344
3523
361
3722
389
395
402
4115
429
432
444
453
4611
474
4826
499
56.93% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.36283185840707965
totalSentences113
uniqueOpeners41
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences73
matches(empty)
ratio0
17.26% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount37
totalSentences73
matches
0"She checked the peephole."
1"He'd tilted his chin up"
2"She undid two of the"
3"His platinum hair was slicked"
4"She unlatched the chain."
5"He moved into the flat"
6"He turned from his survey"
7"She'd crossed her arms, one"
8"Her black hair fell to"
9"He'd always admired that about"
10"He moved a sheaf of"
11"It went inward, turned into"
12"He looked at her."
13"She uncrossed her arms."
14"She still wasn't sure which"
15"She'd left before he woke."
16"He'd sent precisely one message"
17"*You forgot your jacket.* No"
18"She'd left him on read"
19"He scratched Ptolemy behind one"
ratio0.507
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount68
totalSentences73
matches
0"The knock came at half"
1"Rory set down her fork,"
2"Ptolemy lifted his tabby head"
3"She checked the peephole."
4"The breath left her."
5"Lucien Moreau stood in the"
6"He'd tilted his chin up"
7"The amber eye and the"
8"She undid two of the"
9"The chain scraped against its"
10"A faint trace of cigarette"
11"His platinum hair was slicked"
12"The faintest flicker at the"
13"She unlatched the chain."
14"He moved into the flat"
15"Books stacked in towers that"
16"Scrolls unrolled across every flat"
17"The takeaway container she'd abandoned"
18"A door, left slightly ajar."
19"He turned from his survey"
ratio0.932
68.49% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences73
matches
0"Now they just looked like"
ratio0.014
63.49% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences36
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Ptolemy lifted his tabby head from the pile of scrolls he'd flattened, tracking her with the mild suspicion of a cat who'd seen too much."
1"He moved into the flat with the unhurried economy of a man accustomed to rooms that weren't his, pausing just inside the doorway to take in the familiar chaos."
2"Laila was the name she'd used during the Aldgate job, a three-week excavation into a trafficking network that had folded itself inside a legitimate import firm."
3"The A-Z sat between them on the coffee table, the radiator clicked, and Ptolemy wound a figure-of-eight between Lucien's ankles with the smug indifference of a …"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she agreed (agree)"
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.217
leniency0.435
rawRatio0.1
effectiveRatio0.043
84.4214%