Run: 2026-02-19-01KHVPD8NT1MRMBNZM73PAYZD2

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Glass shattered in the corner booth. "Take it outside." Silas kept his voice level. His silver signet ring caught the low light overhead. He picked up another dirty pint glass. Two large dockworkers in heavy coats grumbled, pushed themselves up from the sturdy oak table, and shoved their way through the front doors. I grabbed the mop. Sour beer and fresh blood coated the floorboards. Friday nights in Soho always carried a distinct, metallic tang. "Aurora?" The wet mop handle slipped in my grip. I turned around. Eva stood near the entrance. The distinctive green neon sign outside painted her pale face in harsh strokes. She clutched a pristine small vintage boxy beige Parisian leather handbag against her chest. Her floral perfume cut straight through the scent of pine cleaner and spilled alcohol. "Nobody calls me that." I adjusted my grip on the wood. "Not anymore." "Rory. Sorry." She glanced at Silas. She looked at the peeling crimson wallpaper. She stared at the mish-mash of framed faded black-and-white photographs covering the nearest wall. Lost soldiers from forgotten wars stared back at her. "This place is..." "Closed to the public past midnight." "The door was unlocked." "A temporary oversight." Silas stepped out from behind the mahogany counter. A slight limp in his left leg dragged against the floor as he approached. He wiped his hands on a clean rag and offered Eva a sharp smile. "Silas Blackwood. You are trespassing, miss." "Eva Collins. I knew Rory... Aurora, from Cardiff. We grew up together." She stood her ground, though her hands trembled. "I need a drink." Silas looked at me. I gave a slow nod. "Booth three." Silas gestured toward the back wall. "I will fetch a gin. Seems appropriate for a shock to the system." Eva walked over. Her low-heeled boots click-clacked against the sticky floor. She slid into the scarred leather booth. I left the mop by the bar and sat across from her. Three years had passed since I packed my bags in the dead of winter. She wore the exact same pearl earrings. She still smoothed her skirt over her knees in that precise, nervous motion. "You cut your hair." Eva looked at my straight shoulder-length black strands. "Saves time." "You have flour on your cheek." "I deliver food." I rubbed my face. My fingers came away white. I pulled my bright crimson silk uniform jacket tighter around myself. The embroidered golden dragon on the chest pocket caught the ambient light. "To a pub?" "To whoever pays." Silas stepped behind the mahogany counter. He pulled a frosted bottle from the lower shelf. Crystal clinked. Clear liquid splashed over fresh ice cubes. He poured without a measuring jigger, relying on practiced instinct. He walked back and placed a heavy crystal tumbler in front of Eva and a plain glass of water in front of me. The sharp scent of crushed juniper berries wafted from Eva's glass. He patted my shoulder twice. He turned and limped away toward the large bookshelf near the back. The heavy wooden unit swung open. The dark room beyond swallowed him, and the hidden door clicked shut. Eva took a sip. Her nose crinkled. She coughed twice. "Silas doesn't believe in watering things down. Let's skip the chit-chat, Eva. What brings you to Soho?" She traced the wet rim of her glass. "My mother mentioned your parents. They lack a forward address for you." "Distance makes communication difficult." "They think you abandoned your pre-law program for a wild phase." "Good." Eva leaned forward. Her eyes locked onto my left wrist. She stared at the small crescent-shaped scar resting bare against the tabletop. I remembered the broken glass from the greenhouse accident. Our childhood felt like a distant fairy tale. "You loved Cardiff," Eva whispered. "We ate brunch at the Hayes every single Sunday. You loved those lemon tarts." "Lemon tarts disguise the taste of blood in your mouth." "You left a lucrative future. A beautiful apartment in Penylan." "A cage." "Evan faced intense pressure at his law firm. Partners demand long hours." "Evan broke three of my ribs." "He apologized." "He sent orchids to the hospital ward. I am allergic to orchids." I drank the water. It tasted flat. "You told me to run." "I told you to take time off." Eva traced the condensation trailing down her glass. "Go to a coastal spa. Not disappear into the London underworld. You owe taxes under three different names. You work for a Chinese restaurant front. You live above a dirty bar run by a man who looks capable of snapping necks." "Silas prefers intelligence work over physical labor." Eva blinked. She took a longer drink of the gin. The harsh spirit brought color back to her cheeks. "You changed." "Survival requires adaptation." Silence settled between us. The distant rumble of the underground trains rattled the floorboards under our feet. Dust motes danced in the neon glare leaking through the dirty front windows. The ice in Eva's glass popped. "He misses you," Eva said. My posture stiffened under the oversized uniform jacket. "Who." "Brendan." I relaxed my shoulders. My father. "He misses the idea of a barrister daughter. It provides excellent dinner conversation at his country club." "He wants to see you." Eva rummaged inside her beige bag. Her manicured nails scraped against leather. She pulled out a thick cream-colored envelope. She slid it across the scratched tabletop. "He gave me this. Train ticket. First-class cabin. Back to Cardiff Central." I stared at the gold foil lettering on the envelope edge. The thick paper caught the dim light. I recognized the texture. "How did you find me." "I have resources." "You teach primary school maths. You grade spelling tests." Her posture straightened. She pulled her wool coat tighter around her shoulders. "People can upgrade their lives." "They can." I picked up the envelope. Heavy cardstock. No stamps. No postmarks. "Or they can sell old friends to pay gambling debts." "Excuse me?" "You play online poker, Eva. Or at least, you chased massive losses three years ago." I tossed the thick envelope back onto the table. It landed with a heavy smack. "A first-class train ticket costs hundreds of pounds. This paper stock? Smythson. Custom ivory weave. A primary school teacher on a public salary does not purchase custom Smythson stationery." "I saved up my wages." "Evan uses Smythson." Eva dropped her gaze to the etched wood. She gripped her glass. Her knuckles turned stark white against the crystal. She shook her head. "The Golden Empress tax records you mentioned." I leaned in closer. "Aggressive private investigators dig those up. The kind Evan keeps on retainer." "He wants to talk to you, Rory." "You led him right to my doorstep." "He covered my mortgage." A tear slipped down her powdered cheek, leaving a wet trail. "The bank sent final foreclosure notices. I had nothing left. He asked for a forwarding address. He swore he wanted closure." "Men like Evan don't seek closure." I stood up. I pushed my chair back tight against the neighboring booth. Wood scraped loud against the floorboards. "They seek property. They catalog their possessions. You handed him the inventory." "Rory, please." "Leave." I pointed toward the front exit. "Now." "I can't." "Why not." "Because he drove me here." The front door hinges squealed. Cold wind rushed into the bar. The gust brought the sharp scent of damp concrete and exhaust fumes from the bustling street outside. Silas stepped out from the bookshelf room. He held a heavy black iron fire poker in his right hand. He ignored Eva. His hazel eyes locked straight onto the entrance. He braced his weight against his good leg. I turned my head. A tall man stood in the doorway. He wore an immaculate tailored navy Italian wool suit. He held a dripping black umbrella. He smiled, showing perfect white teeth. He stepped inside and let the heavy doors swing shut behind him, sealing us in. "Hello, Aurora," Evan said. "Your friend leaves an easy trail to follow."

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences73
tagDensity0.274
leniency0.548
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1350
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
44.44% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1350
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"shattered"
count1
1
word"sturdy"
count1
2
word"pristine"
count1
3
word"trembled"
count1
4
word"silk"
count1
5
word"crystal"
count3
6
word"traced"
count2
7
word"silence"
count1
8
word"etched"
count1
9
word"stark"
count1
10
word"weight"
count1
11
word"perfect"
count1
highlights
0"shattered"
1"sturdy"
2"pristine"
3"trembled"
4"silk"
5"crystal"
6"traced"
7"silence"
8"etched"
9"stark"
10"weight"
11"perfect"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences113
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences113
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences166
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen41
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1339
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
16.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions27
wordCount846
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity1.89
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Parisian1
Silas7
Eva16
Heavy1
Italian1
persons
0"Silas"
1"Eva"
places
0"Soho"
1"Heavy"
globalScore0.554
windowScore0.167
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences75
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like a distant fairy tale"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1339
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences166
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs72
mean18.6
std18.83
cv1.012
sampleLengths
06
124
245
31
411
546
613
739
86
94
1045
1124
129
1321
1464
1512
162
176
1835
193
203
21103
2210
2317
2420
254
2611
271
2839
2919
3010
3110
322
3312
346
352
3624
3756
387
3921
403
4136
425
439
441
4523
4643
4727
483
499
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences113
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs142
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences166
ratio0
matches(empty)
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount854
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
1"thick cream-colored envelope."
adverbCount9
adverbRatio0.01053864168618267
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences166
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences166
mean8.07
std5.6
cv0.694
sampleLengths
06
18
29
37
423
54
68
710
81
98
103
115
1213
1314
1414
1511
162
176
187
1914
209
213
226
234
2411
2514
2614
276
2820
294
304
315
328
3313
343
358
367
3712
3814
397
4013
4112
422
436
447
455
4611
4712
483
493
49.60% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats16
diversityRatio0.35542168674698793
totalSentences166
uniqueOpeners59
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences104
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount64
totalSentences104
matches
0"His silver signet ring caught"
1"He picked up another dirty"
2"I grabbed the mop."
3"I turned around."
4"She clutched a pristine small"
5"Her floral perfume cut straight"
6"I adjusted my grip on"
7"She glanced at Silas"
8"She looked at the peeling"
9"She stared at the mish-mash"
10"He wiped his hands on"
11"She stood her ground, though"
12"I gave a slow nod."
13"Her low-heeled boots click-clacked against"
14"She slid into the scarred"
15"I left the mop by"
16"She wore the exact same"
17"She still smoothed her skirt"
18"I rubbed my face"
19"My fingers came away white."
ratio0.615
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount97
totalSentences104
matches
0"Glass shattered in the corner"
1"Silas kept his voice level"
2"His silver signet ring caught"
3"He picked up another dirty"
4"I grabbed the mop."
5"Friday nights in Soho always"
6"The wet mop handle slipped"
7"I turned around."
8"Eva stood near the entrance."
9"The distinctive green neon sign"
10"She clutched a pristine small"
11"Her floral perfume cut straight"
12"I adjusted my grip on"
13"She glanced at Silas"
14"She looked at the peeling"
15"She stared at the mish-mash"
16"Silas stepped out from behind"
17"A slight limp in his"
18"He wiped his hands on"
19"She stood her ground, though"
ratio0.933
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences104
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences27
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"She stood, though her hands trembled"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Eva whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences73
tagDensity0.041
leniency0.082
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.027
79.9570%