Run: 2026-02-19-01KHVPHNKHPABTYDXAN4PNJRV6

Run Details

Duration:
1m 14s
Cost:
$0.077442
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The biting December wind of Richmond Park whipped Aurora’s straight, black hair across her face, but she barely felt the chill. Her bright blue eyes were fixed on the rough-hewn oak standing stones jutting from the frost-bitten bracken. To a casual dog-walker or a jogger, they were just ancient timber monuments, rotting quietly on the edge of the woods. But to anyone who knew how to look, the air between the massive oaks hummed. It was a rift in the Veil. Rory could see it now—a faint, shimmering distortion in the atmosphere, like heat haze rising over summer tarmac, entirely out of place in the London winter. The winter solstice was mere days away, wearing the metaphysical barrier down to a frayed thread. Rory rubbed her left wrist, her thumb tracing the small, crescent-shaped scar there. It was a nervous habit left over from childhood, a grounding mechanism when her pragmatic, Pre-Law brain failed to categorize the impossible. Beside her, Nyx didn’t disturb the frost at all. The Shade stood a looming six-foot-two, a solid humanoid silhouette woven entirely of living, plunging darkness. The faint, glowing violet of Nyx’s eyes was the only anchor point in the shifting mass of their shadow. "Do we just walk in?" Rory asked, her breath pluming in the icy air. "Or is there a passcode? A toll?" *"The Grove asks only for curiosity, Aurora,"* Nyx replied. Their voice had no origin point; it simply drifted into Rory’s ears, sounding exactly like a harsh whisper carried on a distant wind. *"But do not mistake its hospitality for safety. Step through."* Rory took a steadying breath. She felt the heavy silver chain around her neck, anchoring the thumbnail-sized crimson Heartstone against her sternum. It remained stubbornly cold. It only pulsed with warmth near a portal to Hel. Wherever they were going, Prince Belphegor and the gluttonous amber skies of Dymas had no hold over it. Taking a step forward, the delivery girl left London behind. Passing between the oak stones felt like pushing through a membrane of electrified water. A sudden pressure seized her lungs, popping her ears, and the biting wind abruptly vanished. Rory stumbled forward, her boots sinking not into frosted dead grass, but into thick, loamy earth practically vibrating with life. The shock of the transition nearly knocked her off balance. Above her, the gray, overcast sky of London had been replaced by an endless, impossible expanse of twilight—a seamless canopy of deep violet and indigo, speckled with stationary, brilliant stars that cast a silvery twilight over the clearing. "Whoa," she breathed, the word hanging in the profoundly still air. The Fae Grove was a chaotic, fragrant explosion of flora. It was winter outside, but here in this pocket dimension, wildflowers bloomed in a staggering, year-round mosaic. Bluebells clustered wildly at the roots of massive, ancient trees, competing for space with towering spires of foxgloves and patches of brilliant yellow winter aconite. The air was suffocatingly sweet, thick with the scent of blooming jasmine, crushed mint, and ozone. Rory instinctively reached for her watch. The second hand was sweeping entirely backward in a smooth, rapid circle. She tapped the glass, but the mechanism just kept whirring. *An hour inside can be minutes outside,* Eva had once warned her. *Or days.* Her pulse ticked up in a brief spike of unease. *"Fascinating,"* Nyx murmured. The Shade drifted past her, their incorporeal edges curling like smoke. In the perpetual twilight of the Fae pocket, Nyx’s shadow-form seemed to anchor itself more solidly, drinking in the ambient dimness. They reached out a pitch-black hand to brush a cluster of foxgloves. As their shadowy fingers passed through the petals, Nyx shifted rapidly between solid and incorporeal, a reflex born of existing between realms. *"I have not drawn breath in a Fae-touched place since I bore the name Aldric. It tastes... heavier. Older."* "Keep your guard up," Rory warned, forcing her analytical mind to take over. She cataloged the angles of the trees, the dense underbrush, looking for a path. "There’s no trail. How are we supposed to find her?" *"The Oracle will find us if she wishes to be found,"* Nyx said, their violet eyes scanning the thicket. *"Walk."* They ventured deeper into the Grove. Every step felt like pushing through static electricity. The silence was absolute, save for the crunch of Rory's boots on the damp earth and the unnatural, whispering sigh of Nyx's movement. Rory felt a creeping paranoia. The trees seemed to lean inward, their massive boughs curving like the ribs of a leviathan. Glowing moss crawled up their trunks, casting faint bioluminescent green shadows across the forest floor. It was beautiful, but terrifying in its utter alienness. It didn't belong to the mortal world. Suddenly, Nyx stopped, their shadow elongating sharply. Rory froze, her hands clenching into fists. A woman was standing in the center of a small, perfectly circular clearing just ahead of them. She hadn't walked there; the stillness of the air hadn't broken to allow her entry. She was simply present. Rory felt her breath catch. The woman was barely five-foot-five, but her presence commanded the vastness of the ancient grove. She was undeniably, painfully beautiful—ethereal and ageless, possessing a strange, crystalline perfection that made Rory’s eyes ache to look at directly. Silver hair cascaded like a waterfall of liquid moonlight down to her waist. When the woman turned her head, pale lavender eyes locked instantly onto Rory’s. "Isolde," Rory said softly, recognizing the Half-Fae seer from the rumors whispered in Silas’ bar. Isolde took a step forward. Rory’s sharp eyes darted down, immediately noticing the impossibility of her movement. The lush green grass did not bend beneath the seer's bare feet. She left absolutely no footprints in the soft loam. "The shadow that remembers mortality walks alongside the mortal who courts shadows," Isolde spoke. Her voice was pure and melodic, like chiming glass, yet steeped in profound melancholy. It commanded instant attention. Her lavender gaze flicked to Nyx, then settled heavily on Rory. "You seek answers, Aurora Carter, but you are not yet asking the right questions." Rory squared her shoulders, suppressing a shiver. "I didn't come to play word games. I need to know about the rift points." A faint, sad smile graced the Half-Fae’s lips. Exiled from the Fae Courts, forced to dwell in this in-between space for the crime of sharing her visions, Isolde was bound by the compulsions of her bloodline: she could never speak a direct lie, but her truths were rarely straightforward. "The Veil frays at the edges of winter," Isolde said, taking another floating step closer. She raised a delicate hand, pointing toward Rory’s chest. "The crimson sleeps today, for there is no gluttony in my garden. But the amber sky of Dymas is bleeding into the edges of the world. Belphegor’s chefs sharpen their knives." Rory instinctively touched her sternum, right where the Heartstone lay hidden beneath her shirt. A cold knot formed in her stomach. Dymas. If the gluttony demons were looking for a way onto Earth, she needed more than her quick wits. "If the Veil is tearing," Rory said, keeping her voice level, steady. "How do I cut the threads?" Isolde’s lavender eyes flashed with startling approval. She slowly turned her hand over. A sudden swirl of cold air gathered in her palm, rapidly solidifying into an object of sleek, deadly beauty. It was a slender, leaf-shaped dagger. The metal was moonsilver, so bright it seemed to draw in the very starlight of the Grove. "To sever what is unseen, one must wield what was never forged in fire," Isolde told her, offering the hilt. Rory reached out. The moment her fingers closed around the grip, a shock of biting cold shot up her arm, settling deep into her bones. The Fae-Forged blade was practically freezing to the touch, yet it hummed with a strange, magnetic energy. In the eternal twilight of the Grove, the edges of the blade glowed with a faint, ghostly luminescence. "It will bite through magical wards as easily as it bites through flesh," Isolde warned, her voice dropping to an intimate whisper. "And it drinks the life of demons. A necessary edge for the delivery girl from Cardiff, when she finally knocks on the doors of Hel." Rory stared down at the blade. It was perfectly balanced, feather-light despite the biting cold radiating from it. She slid her thumb carefully along the flat of the moonsilver leaf, feeling the ancient, hostile magic woven into the metal. The sheer weight of the impending danger pressed down on her, heavier than the unnatural gravity of the Fae pocket. *"A royal gift,"* Nyx whispered softly from the shadows to her right. *"The Courts wage wars over such steel."* "Why give it to me?" Rory asked, looking back up, but the words died in her throat. The clearing was empty. There was no rustle of leaves, no fading mist, and certainly no footprints leading away from where the oracle had stood seconds before. Isolde Varga was simply gone, leaving Rory alone with the Shade and a glowing dagger that hummed with a terrifying, beautiful promise. Rory took a slow breath, letting the icy sting of the Fae blade sharpen her focus to a razor edge. She looked at Nyx, her blue eyes reflecting the faint, silvery light of the weapon. "Come on," Rory said, turning back toward the invisible tear in the woods. "We have a lot of work to do before the solstice."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
66.67% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Rory said softly [softly]"
1"Nyx whispered softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.556
leniency1
rawRatio0.133
effectiveRatio0.133
72.03% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1609
totalAiIsmAdverbs9
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"sharply"
count1
2
adverb"perfectly"
count2
3
adverb"softly"
count2
4
adverb"slowly"
count1
5
adverb"very"
count1
6
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"sharply"
2"perfectly"
3"softly"
4"slowly"
5"very"
6"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
31.63% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1609
totalAiIsms22
found
0
word"chill"
count1
1
word"tracing"
count1
2
word"looming"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count2
4
word"pulsed"
count1
5
word"warmth"
count1
6
word"chaotic"
count1
7
word"mosaic"
count1
8
word"pulse"
count1
9
word"fascinating"
count1
10
word"cataloged"
count1
11
word"scanning"
count1
12
word"silence"
count1
13
word"clenching"
count1
14
word"crystalline"
count1
15
word"absolutely"
count1
16
word"profound"
count1
17
word"flicked"
count1
18
word"stomach"
count1
19
word"magnetic"
count1
20
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"tracing"
2"looming"
3"whisper"
4"pulsed"
5"warmth"
6"chaotic"
7"mosaic"
8"pulse"
9"fascinating"
10"cataloged"
11"scanning"
12"silence"
13"clenching"
14"crystalline"
15"absolutely"
16"profound"
17"flicked"
18"stomach"
19"magnetic"
20"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences104
matches
0"felt the chill"
1"d with warmth"
87.91% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences104
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences116
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans10
markdownWords68
totalWords1587
ratio0.043
matches
0"\"The Grove asks only for curiosity, Aurora,\""
1"\"But do not mistake its hospitality for safety. Step through.\""
2"An hour inside can be minutes outside,"
3"Or days."
4"\"Fascinating,\""
5"\"I have not drawn breath in a Fae-touched place since I bore the name Aldric. It tastes... heavier. Older.\""
6"\"The Oracle will find us if she wishes to be found,\""
7"\"Walk.\""
8"\"A royal gift,\""
9"\"The Courts wage wars over such steel.\""
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions85
wordCount1337
uniqueNames24
maxNameDensity2.02
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
December1
Richmond1
Park1
Aurora1
Veil1
London3
Pre-Law1
Nyx12
Shade3
Rory27
Heartstone2
Hel1
Prince1
Belphegor1
Dymas2
Fae8
Grove4
Eva1
Half-Fae2
Isolde8
Courts1
Earth1
Fae-Forged1
Varga1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Nyx"
2"Shade"
3"Rory"
4"Prince"
5"Belphegor"
6"Dymas"
7"Eva"
8"Half-Fae"
9"Isolde"
10"Courts"
11"Earth"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Veil"
3"London"
4"Hel"
5"Fae"
6"Grove"
globalScore0.49
windowScore0.333
95.05% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences91
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"felt like pushing through a membrane of"
1"felt like pushing through static electr"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.63
wordCount1587
matches
0"not into frosted dead grass, but into thick, loamy earth practically vibrating with life"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences116
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs37
mean42.89
std21.76
cv0.507
sampleLengths
074
149
279
321
442
564
629
768
811
968
1052
1188
1237
1320
1489
1514
1636
1767
1815
1938
2057
2122
2249
2355
2440
2518
2632
2723
2820
2960
3047
3159
3219
3317
3449
3535
3624
95.14% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences104
matches
0"were fixed"
1"been replaced"
2"was bound"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs207
matches
0"were going"
1"was standing"
2"were looking"
19.70% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences116
ratio0.043
matches
0"Rory could see it now—a faint, shimmering distortion in the atmosphere, like heat haze rising over summer tarmac, entirely out of place in the London winter."
1"Their voice had no origin point; it simply drifted into Rory’s ears, sounding exactly like a harsh whisper carried on a distant wind."
2"Above her, the gray, overcast sky of London had been replaced by an endless, impossible expanse of twilight—a seamless canopy of deep violet and indigo, speckled with stationary, brilliant stars that cast a silvery twilight over the clearing."
3"She hadn't walked there; the stillness of the air hadn't broken to allow her entry."
4"She was undeniably, painfully beautiful—ethereal and ageless, possessing a strange, crystalline perfection that made Rory’s eyes ache to look at directly."
85.72% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1002
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount46
adverbRatio0.04590818363273453
lyAdverbCount31
lyAdverbRatio0.03093812375249501
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences116
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences116
mean13.68
std6.99
cv0.511
sampleLengths
021
117
221
315
47
526
616
713
822
99
1016
1119
1214
137
149
1523
1610
175
1817
194
2010
2118
2210
2314
2415
2520
2610
2738
2811
2910
3017
3125
3216
336
3412
3510
3612
3712
383
3911
4021
4112
4222
4319
4413
4514
4610
4719
481
496
54.31% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.3620689655172414
totalSentences116
uniqueOpeners42
33.33% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences100
matches
0"Suddenly, Nyx stopped, their shadow"
ratio0.01
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount28
totalSentences100
matches
0"Her bright blue eyes were"
1"It was a rift in"
2"It was a nervous habit"
3"Their voice had no origin"
4"She felt the heavy silver"
5"It remained stubbornly cold."
6"It only pulsed with warmth"
7"she breathed, the word hanging"
8"It was winter outside, but"
9"She tapped the glass, but"
10"They reached out a pitch-black"
11"She cataloged the angles of"
12"They ventured deeper into the"
13"It was beautiful, but terrifying"
14"It didn't belong to the"
15"She hadn't walked there; the"
16"She was simply present."
17"She was undeniably, painfully beautiful—ethereal"
18"She left absolutely no footprints"
19"Her voice was pure and"
ratio0.28
50.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount82
totalSentences100
matches
0"The biting December wind of"
1"Her bright blue eyes were"
2"It was a rift in"
3"Rory could see it now—a"
4"The winter solstice was mere"
5"Rory rubbed her left wrist,"
6"It was a nervous habit"
7"The Shade stood a looming"
8"The faint, glowing violet of"
9"Rory asked, her breath pluming"
10"Their voice had no origin"
11"Rory took a steadying breath."
12"She felt the heavy silver"
13"It remained stubbornly cold."
14"It only pulsed with warmth"
15"A sudden pressure seized her"
16"Rory stumbled forward, her boots"
17"The shock of the transition"
18"she breathed, the word hanging"
19"The Fae Grove was a"
ratio0.82
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount4
totalSentences100
matches
0"To a casual dog-walker or"
1"Wherever they were going, Prince"
2"*Or days.* Her pulse ticked"
3"If the gluttony demons were"
ratio0.04
84.31% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences61
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Rory stumbled forward, her boots sinking not into frosted dead grass, but into thick, loamy earth practically vibrating with life."
1"Above her, the gray, overcast sky of London had been replaced by an endless, impossible expanse of twilight—a seamless canopy of deep violet and indigo, speckle…"
2"Glowing moss crawled up their trunks, casting faint bioluminescent green shadows across the forest floor."
3"She was undeniably, painfully beautiful—ethereal and ageless, possessing a strange, crystalline perfection that made Rory’s eyes ache to look at directly."
4"Isolde Varga was simply gone, leaving Rory alone with the Shade and a glowing dagger that hummed with a terrifying, beautiful promise."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Rory asked, her breath pluming in the icy air"
1"she breathed, the word hanging in the profoundly still air"
2"Nyx said, their violet eyes scanning the thicket"
3"Isolde warned, her voice dropping to an intimate whisper"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"she breathed (breathe)"
1"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
2"Rory warned (warn)"
3"Isolde spoke (speak)"
4"Isolde warned (warn)"
5"Nyx whispered softly (whisper)"
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.556
leniency1
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.4
76.9716%