Run: 2026-02-20-01KHXPBCF13EX30AYVW55BRM06

Run Details

Duration:
33.2s
Cost:
$0.004779
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The air thickened the moment they crossed the threshold. One step, and the world *shifted*. The hum of London traffic, the distant wail of sirens, the damp press of autumn—gone. Replaced by something older, something that thrummed in the bones. Rory’s breath fogged in front of her, though the air wasn’t cold. It was *alive*, charged like the moment before a storm breaks. She flexed her fingers around the hilt of the Fae blade at her belt, the moonsilver cool even through the leather. Nyx didn’t so much as step as *unfold* from the shadows at her side, their form rippling like ink in water before solidifying into something approximating human. Violet eyes—too bright, too knowing—flickered toward her. **"You feel that?"** Their voice wasn’t sound so much as sensation, a whisper that curled into her skull. Rory didn’t answer. She didn’t need to. The grove stretched before them, a cathedral of ancient oaks so vast their branches blotted out the sky. The trunks were gnarled, twisted with age, their bark etched with symbols that weren’t quite writing but *meant* something, deep in the gut. Wildflowers carpeted the ground—bluebells, foxgloves, things with petals like spun glass—none of which should’ve been in bloom in November. The air smelled of honey and damp earth and something sharper, like ozone after lightning. Isolde was already moving ahead, her silver hair catching the strange, golden light that filtered through the canopy. She didn’t walk so much as *glide*, her bare feet never disturbing the petals beneath her. **"Come,"** she called, not looking back. **"The heart of the grove waits for no one."** Rory exchanged a glance with Nyx. The Shade’s form flickered at the edges, as if the grove itself was testing their substance. **"She’s enjoying this,"** Nyx murmured. **"Aren’t you?"** A low chuckle, like wind through dead leaves. **"I enjoy *many* things. This is merely… interesting."** They followed. The deeper they went, the more the world *warped*. Time slipped—one moment, the sun hung high and golden; the next, twilight bled purple across the clearing, only to snap back to noon in the blink of an eye. Rory’s wrist ached where the Heartstone pendant pressed against her skin, its crimson glow pulsing faintly, like a heartbeat. She tugged her sleeve down. A sound—water, but not quite. A brook maybe, if brooks could *sing*. Rory turned, catching the glint of something between the trees. A stream, its surface so clear it was invisible until you were nearly on top of it. The water ran upward, defying gravity, before arcing into a pool that hung suspended midair. Tiny silver fish darted within it, their scales flashing like mirrors. Nyx reached out. Their fingers passed *through* the water as if it were mist. **"Illusion?"** **"No,"** Isolde’s voice drifted back. **"Merely a different rule."** Rory crouched, trailing her fingers along the bank. The pebbles were smooth, warm. One shifted beneath her touch—not a stone, but a *shell*, spiralled and iridescent, humming faintly when she lifted it to her ear. She tucked it into her pocket before standing. The trees began to change. Their bark darkened, taking on a metallic sheen, like iron left too long in the rain. The symbols carved into them glowed faintly, blue as bruises. The air grew heavier, thick with the scent of crushed herbs and something metallic—blood? No. Not blood. *Magic*. The kind that stained. Nyx’s form solidified further, their edges sharpening. **"We’re getting close."** **"To what?"** **"The *why* of this place."** Ahead, the grove opened into a clearing. At its centre stood a monolith—no, not a monolith. An *arch*, twisted from blackened branches, its surface crawling with those same blue symbols. They pulsed, slow and rhythmic, like breathing. Beneath it, the ground was bare, the soil dark and rich. And *moving*. Worms. Thousands of them, blind and pale, writhing in silent industry. But not worms—*roots*. Thin, seeking, burrowing in and out of the earth in a pattern that made Rory’s eyes ache if she looked too long. Isolde stood before the arch, her hands pressed flat against the bark. **"The Veil is thin here,"** she said. **"Thinner than it’s been in centuries."** Her lavender eyes slid to Rory. **"You feel it, don’t you? The *pull*."** Rory did. A tug in her chest, like a fishhook lodged behind her ribs. The Heartstone burned. She clenched her jaw. **"What is this place?"** **"A door."** Isolde’s fingers traced the symbols. **"One that should not be opened lightly."** Nyx stepped forward, their shadow stretching unnaturally long across the clearing. **"And yet, it *has* been opened. Recently."** They pointed. The roots at the base of the arch were snapped, raw and glistening. Sap—no, not sap, something darker—beaded at the breaks. Rory’s stomach twisted. **"Someone’s been here."** **"Or something,"** Nyx corrected. A rustle. Not wind. Not animals. The roots *retreated*, slithering back into the earth like snakes fleeing a fire. The arch groaned, a sound like a dying tree splitting in half. The symbols flared blue-white. Isolde’s head snapped up. **"Run."** The ground *heaved*. Rory barely had time to curse before the earth beneath her feet *ripped* open, a jagged maw of dirt and roots yawning wide. She lunged, fingers scrabbling for purchase, but the edge crumbled— Nyx’s hand closed around her wrist, yanking her back just as the chasm sealed shut with a sound like a slamming door. The Shade’s grip was iron, their violet eyes wide. **"That was new."** Isolde wasn’t laughing. Her face was pale, her lips pressed into a thin line. **"The grove is angry."** **"Angry?"** Rory wiped dirt from her palms. **"At *us*?"** **"At the violation."** Isolde’s gaze flicked to the arch. **"Something took what wasn’t theirs to take."** Nyx crouched, brushing their fingers over the broken roots. **"And left a mess behind."** They held up their hand. Their fingertips were stained black. **"Hel-marked."** Rory’s breath hitched. **"You’re saying a *demon* was here?"** **"Or something touched by Hel."** Nyx stood, wiping their hand on their coat. The stain didn’t fade. **"Either way, we’re not the only ones who know about this place anymore."** Isolde’s voice dropped to a whisper. **"And if *they* came through, others will follow."** The arch groaned again. The symbols pulsed faster, brighter. The air smelled suddenly of burnt sugar and rot. Rory’s skin prickled. **"We need to go. Now."** Isolde didn’t argue. She turned, her silver hair whipping around her like a storm. **"Back the way we came. *Quickly*."** They ran. The grove had changed. The path twisted, the trees leaning in, their branches knitting together like fingers. The wildflowers withered as they passed, petals blackening at the edges. The stream they’d marveled at earlier now ran red, the water thick as syrup. Nyx skidded to a halt. **"Left. The boundary’s shifting."** Rory didn’t question. She veered, ducking under a low-hanging bough— —and nearly collided with the standing stones. They weren’t there before. Three of them, jagged teeth of ancient oak, their surfaces carved with warnings in a dozen languages. The air between them shimmered, the Veil’s edge like a heat haze. Isolde didn’t slow. She passed through first, her form rippling like a reflection on disturbed water. Nyx gestured Rory forward. **"After you, *darling*."** She didn’t hesitate. The moment she crossed, the world *snapped* back into place. Cold. Wet. The stink of car exhaust. The distant blare of a horn. Richmond Park spread out before them, ordinary and dull and *safe*. Rory doubled over, hands on her knees, sucking in lungfuls of air that tasted like petrol and rain. Nyx materialized beside her, their form flickering in the grey daylight. **"Welcome back."** Isolde was already walking away, her bare feet silent on the pavement. **"That was a mistake,"** she called over her shoulder. **"We won’t be returning."** Rory straightened, wiping sweat from her brow. The Heartstone had gone dark again, its glow extinguished. She rolled her shoulder, the ache lingering. **"What the hell was that place?"** Nyx’s smile was all teeth. **"A keyhole, Rory. And someone’s been *picking the lock*."**
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Isolde’s voice drifted back [back]"
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.302
leniency0.605
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.047
88.85% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1345
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"lightly"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"lightly"
1"suddenly"
2"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
36.80% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1345
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"charged"
count1
1
word"flickered"
count2
2
word"whisper"
count2
3
word"etched"
count1
4
word"glint"
count1
5
word"pulsed"
count2
6
word"rhythmic"
count1
7
word"traced"
count1
8
word"glistening"
count1
9
word"stomach"
count1
10
word"maw"
count1
11
word"flicked"
count1
12
word"marveled"
count1
13
word"shimmered"
count1
highlights
0"charged"
1"flickered"
2"whisper"
3"etched"
4"glint"
5"pulsed"
6"rhythmic"
7"traced"
8"glistening"
9"stomach"
10"maw"
11"flicked"
12"marveled"
13"shimmered"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
1
label"blink of an eye"
count1
highlights
0"clenched her jaw"
1"in the blink of an eye"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences133
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences133
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences162
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
0.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans61
markdownWords205
totalWords1331
ratio0.154
matches
0"shifted"
1"alive"
2"unfold"
3"\"You feel that?\""
4"meant"
5"glide"
6"\"Come,\""
7"\"The heart of the grove waits for no one.\""
8"\"She’s enjoying this,\""
9"\"Aren’t you?\""
10"\"I enjoy *many* things. This is merely… interesting.\""
11"warped"
12"sing"
13"through"
14"\"Illusion?\""
15"\"No,\""
16"\"Merely a different rule.\""
17"shell"
18"Magic"
19"\"We’re getting close.\""
20"\"To what?\""
21"\"The *why* of this place.\""
22"arch"
23"moving"
24"roots"
25"\"The Veil is thin here,\""
26"\"Thinner than it’s been in centuries.\""
27"\"You feel it, don’t you? The *pull*.\""
28"\"What is this place?\""
29"\"A door.\""
30"\"One that should not be opened lightly.\""
31"\"And yet, it *has* been opened. Recently.\""
32"\"Someone’s been here.\""
33"\"Or something,\""
34"retreated"
35"\"Run.\""
36"heaved"
37"ripped"
38"\"That was new.\""
39"\"The grove is angry.\""
40"\"Angry?\""
41"\"At *us*?\""
42"\"At the violation.\""
43"\"Something took what wasn’t theirs to take.\""
44"\"And left a mess behind.\""
45"\"Hel-marked.\""
46"\"You’re saying a *demon* was here?\""
47"\"Or something touched by Hel.\""
48"\"Either way, we’re not the only ones who know about this place anymore.\""
49"\"And if *they* came through, others will follow.\""
50"\"We need to go. Now.\""
51"\"Back the way we came. *Quickly*.\""
52"\"Left. The boundary’s shifting.\""
53"\"After you, *darling*.\""
54"snapped"
55"safe"
56"\"Welcome back.\""
57"\"That was a mistake,\""
58"\"We won’t be returning.\""
59"\"What the hell was that place?\""
60"\"A keyhole, Rory. And someone’s been *picking the lock*.\""
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
71.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions53
wordCount1144
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.57
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
London1
Fae1
Rory18
November1
Nyx14
Shade2
Heartstone3
Isolde11
Veil1
Park1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Nyx"
2"Shade"
3"Heartstone"
4"Isolde"
5"Veil"
places
0"London"
1"November"
2"Park"
globalScore0.713
windowScore0.833
55.06% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences79
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"quite writing but *meant* something, deep in the gut"
1"something between the trees"
2"tasted like petrol and rain"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.751
wordCount1331
matches
0"not a stone, but a *shell*, spiralled"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences162
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs60
mean22.18
std18.75
cv0.845
sampleLengths
09
175
252
37
475
549
627
72
816
92
1062
1165
1215
139
1443
155
1648
1710
182
195
2050
2136
2238
2325
2414
2520
2621
276
284
296
3029
315
323
3333
3434
3518
369
3716
3825
399
4030
4114
4218
438
4420
452
4642
479
4810
497
99.99% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences133
matches
0"were gnarled"
1"were snapped"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs210
matches
0"was testing"
1"wasn’t laughing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount16
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences162
ratio0.08
matches
0"The hum of London traffic, the distant wail of sirens, the damp press of autumn—gone."
1"Violet eyes—too bright, too knowing—flickered toward her."
2"Wildflowers carpeted the ground—bluebells, foxgloves, things with petals like spun glass—none of which should’ve been in bloom in November."
3"Time slipped—one moment, the sun hung high and golden; the next, twilight bled purple across the clearing, only to snap back to noon in the blink of an eye."
4"A sound—water, but not quite."
5"One shifted beneath her touch—not a stone, but a *shell*, spiralled and iridescent, humming faintly when she lifted it to her ear."
6"The air grew heavier, thick with the scent of crushed herbs and something metallic—blood?"
7"At its centre stood a monolith—no, not a monolith."
8"But not worms—*roots*."
9"Sap—no, not sap, something darker—beaded at the breaks."
10"She lunged, fingers scrabbling for purchase, but the edge crumbled—"
11"She veered, ducking under a low-hanging bough—"
12"—and nearly collided with the standing stones."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1158
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount39
adverbRatio0.03367875647668394
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.007772020725388601
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences162
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences162
mean8.22
std5.73
cv0.697
sampleLengths
09
16
215
310
412
511
621
727
87
918
103
114
1218
1323
1419
1515
1618
1716
186
199
206
2116
225
232
248
258
262
279
2829
2919
305
315
327
3310
3417
3515
3611
373
3811
391
405
414
428
435
4422
458
465
4716
4810
4914
48.56% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.3395061728395062
totalSentences162
uniqueOpeners55
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences116
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences116
matches
0"It was *alive*, charged like"
1"She flexed her fingers around"
2"Their voice wasn’t sound so"
3"She didn’t need to."
4"She didn’t walk so much"
5"she called, not looking back"
6"She tugged her sleeve down."
7"Their fingers passed *through* the"
8"She tucked it into her"
9"Their bark darkened, taking on"
10"They pulsed, slow and rhythmic,"
11"Her lavender eyes slid to"
12"She clenched her jaw."
13"She lunged, fingers scrabbling for"
14"Her face was pale, her"
15"They held up their hand"
16"Their fingertips were stained black."
17"She turned, her silver hair"
18"She veered, ducking under a"
19"They weren’t there before."
ratio0.207
11.72% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount104
totalSentences116
matches
0"The air thickened the moment"
1"The hum of London traffic,"
2"Rory’s breath fogged in front"
3"It was *alive*, charged like"
4"She flexed her fingers around"
5"Nyx didn’t so much as"
6"Violet eyes—too bright, too knowing—flickered"
7"Their voice wasn’t sound so"
8"Rory didn’t answer."
9"She didn’t need to."
10"The grove stretched before them,"
11"The trunks were gnarled, twisted"
12"Wildflowers carpeted the ground—bluebells, foxgloves,"
13"The air smelled of honey"
14"Isolde was already moving ahead,"
15"She didn’t walk so much"
16"she called, not looking back"
17"Rory exchanged a glance with"
18"The Shade’s form flickered at"
19"A low chuckle, like wind"
ratio0.897
43.10% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences116
matches
0"—and nearly collided with the"
ratio0.009
60.44% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences52
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"Nyx didn’t so much as step as *unfold* from the shadows at her side, their form rippling like ink in water before solidifying into something approximating human…"
1"Isolde was already moving ahead, her silver hair catching the strange, golden light that filtered through the canopy."
2"The Shade’s form flickered at the edges, as if the grove itself was testing their substance."
3"The water ran upward, defying gravity, before arcing into a pool that hung suspended midair."
4"Their fingers passed *through* the water as if it were mist."
5"Thin, seeking, burrowing in and out of the earth in a pattern that made Rory’s eyes ache if she looked too long."
86.54% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she called, not looking back"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
1"Nyx corrected (correct)"
dialogueSentences43
tagDensity0.116
leniency0.233
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.093
75.6354%