Run: 2026-02-20-01KHXPDXRWZZ84EEK2N9ZMZBC0

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Duration:
35.0s
Cost:
$0.004901
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The brass compass needle twitched violently, then spun counterclockwise until it pointed straight at the tiled wall. Harlow Quinn’s fingers tightened around the verdigris casing. The air smelled wrong—like burnt copper and wet newspaper, not the usual underground damp of abandoned Tube stations. She exhaled through her nose, watching her breath fog in the unnatural cold. "Bloody hell, Quinn." Detective Constable Tom Davies adjusted his gloves, his torch beam jittering across the platform. "You sure this is the right place? Looks like every other condemned station to me." It wasn’t. The Veil Market had moved on three nights prior, but its residue lingered like a bad dream. Harlow stepped over the chalk outline of a body that shouldn’t exist. No blood. No signs of struggle. Just a perfect human silhouette, as if someone had pressed a stencil against the grimy tiles and traced the absence of a man. She crouched, running her fingers along the edge. The chalk came away damp. "Victim’s name was Richard Langley," Davies said, flipping through his notebook. "Forty-two, financial analyst. Last seen leaving his Canary Wharf office at 19:47. CCTV shows him getting on the Northern Line at Bank station. Next frame, he’s gone. Poof." He snapped his fingers. "No exits, no transfers. Just... vanished." Harlow stood abruptly. "Show me the footage." Davies hesitated. "You’ll want to see this first." He led her to the far end of the platform where a single item had been bagged and tagged. Harlow didn’t need to ask what it was. The bone token’s jagged edges pressed against the evidence bag, its surface etched with the same sigils that marked her compass. She reached for it. "Don’t." Davies caught her wrist. "Forensics says it’s not human. Not animal either. Their equipment keeps glitching whenever they try to analyse it." She yanked her arm free. "Then they’re using the wrong equipment." The token was warm. Not body heat—something older, something that hummed against her fingertips like a live wire. When she turned it over, the sigils rearranged themselves. Just for a second. Just enough. "Langley wasn’t our victim," she said. Davies scoffed. "His wallet was in the outline. His Oyster card. His bloody *tie clip*, Quinn." "Convenient." She tossed the token back into the bag. "Too convenient. Look at the placement. Wallet in the left breast pocket, but the outline’s right-handed. Langley was ambidextrous—his desk setup at the office proved that. He’d carry his wallet on the right for easier access when using his left hand for the barrier card. Someone staged this." A rat scuttled across the tracks. Davies jumped. Harlow didn’t blink. "Fine." He pulled out his phone, queued up the footage. "Watch closely." The grainy CCTV showed Langley boarding the train at Bank, briefcase in hand, tie slightly askew—classic City boy after a long day. The carriage was half-empty. He took a seat by the door, glanced at his watch, then— The screen flickered. When the image stabilised, Langley was gone. No movement. No blur of motion. One frame he existed; the next he didn’t. Davies pocketed the phone. "Ghost train, eh?" Harlow’s watch band dug into her wrist. "Play the audio." "Nothing but—" "Play it." A static hiss filled the abandoned station. Then, beneath it, the faintest chime—like a shop bell ringing in reverse. Harlow’s stomach dropped. She knew that sound. Three years ago, she’d heard it in the warehouse where Morris vanished. The case file still sat in her desk drawer, stamped with enough question marks to drive a man mad. "Someone took him through a rift," she said. Davies’s laugh echoed too loud. "A *rift*? Christ, Quinn, you’ve been reading too many of Eva Kowalski’s occult papers." The name hit like a physical blow. Harlow turned slowly. "What did you say?" His smirk faltered. "The redhead. Your pet researcher. She’s been digging into this station for months. Came by the precinct last week asking about missing persons cases with ‘unusual circumstances.’" He made air quotes. "Sound familiar?" Harlow’s fingers curled into fists. Eva had promised to stay out of active investigations. After Bristol, after the mess with the inverted pentagram and the student who’d carved his own eyes out, they’d agreed: research only. No fieldwork. No *interfering*. She stormed toward the platform edge, torch beam cutting through the dark. The tiles here were wrong—too clean, the grout too white. Fresh. Someone had scrubbed this section recently. With bleach and something else. Something that made her sinuses burn. "Quinn, wait—" Her boot heel caught on a loose tile. It flipped up, revealing a symbol carved into the concrete beneath. Not Greek. Not reverse Greek. Older. The lines were too precise for amateur work, the angles mathematically perfect. A summoning circle, but not for anything she recognised. The air above it shimmered like heat haze. Davies’s radio crackled. "All units, we’ve got a 10-99 at Camden Lock. Possible homicide linked to the Langley case. Suspect in custody." Harlow didn’t move. The symbol pulsed once, faintly, like a dying heartbeat. "Quinn?" She stood abruptly, brushing concrete dust from her knees. "That suspect. Description?" "Female. Early twenties. Red hair." The world narrowed to a pinprick. Eva wouldn’t. She *couldn’t*. But the evidence was mounting like a tide, and Harlow had spent enough years in the Met to recognise a setup when she saw one. "Call it in," she said, already moving toward the exit tunnel. "Tell them to hold the suspect. I’m on my way." Davies fell into step beside her. "You know her." It wasn’t a question. Harlow’s watch face glinted in the dim light. 3:17 AM. The witching hour had come and gone, but the night’s work wasn’t finished. Not by a long shot. "Get me everything you’ve got on Langley’s last known movements," she said. "And Davies?" "Yeah?" She fixed him with a look that made younger officers flinch. "Not a word about the bone token. Not to forensics, not to the brass. Understood?" He swallowed. "Understood." Good. Because if Eva Kowalski was involved in this—and Harlow’s instincts screamed that she was—then the last thing she needed was Internal Affairs breathing down her neck before she’d had a chance to separate the lies from the truth. And God help Eva if she’d crossed the line from researcher to participant. The tunnel ahead split in two. Left led to the surface. Right led deeper into the abandoned network, toward the older lines, the ones that didn’t appear on any official map. Harlow hesitated. The compass needle spun wildly, then settled, pointing right. She turned left. Some mysteries required patience. Some required playing by the rules. This one would require both.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.289
leniency0.579
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.02% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1113
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
50.58% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1113
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"perfect"
count2
1
word"traced"
count1
2
word"etched"
count1
3
word"flickered"
count1
4
word"stomach"
count1
5
word"echoed"
count1
6
word"familiar"
count1
7
word"shimmered"
count1
8
word"pulsed"
count1
9
word"the last thing"
count1
highlights
0"perfect"
1"traced"
2"etched"
3"flickered"
4"stomach"
5"echoed"
6"familiar"
7"shimmered"
8"pulsed"
9"the last thing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
highlights
0"stomach dropped"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences106
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences106
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences133
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen50
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords5
totalWords1104
ratio0.005
matches
0"tie clip"
1"rift"
2"interfering"
3"couldn’t"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
62.94% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions47
wordCount804
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity1.74
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Davies"
discoveredNames
Quinn1
Tube1
Constable1
Tom1
Davies10
Veil1
Market1
Harlow14
Langley2
Bank1
City1
Morris1
Bristol1
Greek2
Met1
Eva4
Kowalski1
Internal1
Affairs1
God1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Constable"
2"Tom"
3"Davies"
4"Market"
5"Harlow"
6"Morris"
7"Eva"
8"Kowalski"
9"Affairs"
places
0"Langley"
1"Bank"
2"Bristol"
3"Met"
globalScore0.629
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences54
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1104
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences133
matches
0"knew that sound"
1"screamed that she"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean22.08
std18.52
cv0.839
sampleLengths
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132
273
349
47
58
652
723
811
933
106
1116
1257
1311
1412
1538
1624
177
1810
192
202
2157
228
2319
2414
2536
2640
2740
282
2954
3022
3112
321
3312
345
3535
3621
379
384
3928
4014
411
4226
433
4439
4513
4642
473
4810
495
95.33% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences106
matches
0"been bagged"
1"was gone"
2"was involved"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs151
matches
0"was mounting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences133
ratio0.06
matches
0"The air smelled wrong—like burnt copper and wet newspaper, not the usual underground damp of abandoned Tube stations."
1"Not body heat—something older, something that hummed against her fingertips like a live wire."
2"The grainy CCTV showed Langley boarding the train at Bank, briefcase in hand, tie slightly askew—classic City boy after a long day."
3"He took a seat by the door, glanced at his watch, then—"
4"One frame he existed; the next he didn’t."
5"Then, beneath it, the faintest chime—like a shop bell ringing in reverse."
6"The tiles here were wrong—too clean, the grout too white."
7"Because if Eva Kowalski was involved in this—and Harlow’s instincts screamed that she was—then the last thing she needed was Internal Affairs breathing down her neck before she’d had a chance to separate the lies from the truth."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount810
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount30
adverbRatio0.037037037037037035
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.012345679012345678
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences133
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences133
mean8.3
std7.66
cv0.922
sampleLengths
017
18
218
313
417
515
62
717
812
92
104
1123
128
135
1411
1532
166
173
184
192
206
2119
228
2321
244
255
2618
275
286
294
3014
319
324
332
346
352
3614
379
3848
396
402
413
4210
432
4422
454
4612
473
487
492
67.42% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.43609022556390975
totalSentences133
uniqueOpeners58
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences85
matches
0"Just a perfect human silhouette,"
1"Just for a second."
2"Then, beneath it, the faintest"
ratio0.035
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount20
totalSentences85
matches
0"She exhaled through her nose,"
1"She crouched, running her fingers"
2"He snapped his fingers"
3"He led her to the"
4"She reached for it."
5"She yanked her arm free."
6"She tossed the token back"
7"He pulled out his phone,"
8"He took a seat by"
9"She knew that sound."
10"His smirk faltered."
11"He made air quotes"
12"She stormed toward the platform"
13"Her boot heel caught on"
14"It flipped up, revealing a"
15"She stood abruptly, brushing concrete"
16"she said, already moving toward"
17"It wasn’t a question."
18"She fixed him with a"
19"She turned left."
ratio0.235
71.76% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount66
totalSentences85
matches
0"The brass compass needle twitched"
1"Harlow Quinn’s fingers tightened around"
2"The air smelled wrong—like burnt"
3"She exhaled through her nose,"
4"Detective Constable Tom Davies adjusted"
5"The Veil Market had moved"
6"Harlow stepped over the chalk"
7"She crouched, running her fingers"
8"The chalk came away damp."
9"Davies said, flipping through his"
10"He snapped his fingers"
11"Harlow stood abruptly."
12"He led her to the"
13"Harlow didn’t need to ask"
14"The bone token’s jagged edges"
15"She reached for it."
16"Davies caught her wrist"
17"She yanked her arm free."
18"The token was warm."
19"She tossed the token back"
ratio0.776
58.82% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences85
matches
0"Because if Eva Kowalski was"
ratio0.012
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences25
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Just a perfect human silhouette, as if someone had pressed a stencil against the grimy tiles and traced the absence of a man."
1"The bone token’s jagged edges pressed against the evidence bag, its surface etched with the same sigils that marked her compass."
2"Not body heat—something older, something that hummed against her fingertips like a live wire."
3"She fixed him with a look that made younger officers flinch."
4"Right led deeper into the abandoned network, toward the older lines, the ones that didn’t appear on any official map."
79.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Detective Constable Tom Davies adjusted, his torch beam jittering across the platform"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"He snapped (snap)"
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.158
leniency0.316
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.053
85.9140%